moonlightleaf wrote:

[Treasure]

00:09:777 - note……因为人声有蓝线所以从头到尾都没跟

00:20:687 扔3连?……放连打就没有干净的感觉了……

00:31:937 (1) - 漏了00:32:959 很难受……因为口琴有蓝线所以从头到尾都没跟

02:25:118 (5,6) - 没平行好难受 …… 唔……

04:42:138 (4) - ctrl+h的样子……因为是finish所以和正常的地方不一样……

05:46:513 - 3连?……为何……

摸不出啥...太水了orz

1. All clear.

1. 01:30:573 (3,4,5,6,1) - This star pattern's movement can catch player's off-guard, due to the first one having a different kind of movement(by first one I mean 01:08:755 (3,4,5,6,1) - ). And on top of that, I do not really like the movement of this pattern when looked over it individually, as the movement between the notes are getting suddenly bigger then smaller then bigger etc., personally I like the movement in the first star pattern than this.
2. 01:41:482 (3,4,5) - This is my personal opinion, but reducing the distance on (5) that much when (3) and (4) were basically 'far' jumps may have a negative effect on the movements of the player. Yes, this breaks off the consistency, but it reflects the instrument's 'mood' in this part when (5) is moved a bit more far apart.
3. 02:25:459 (6) - You might as well give a little bit more spacing on this note, as this is having the same cymbals like 02:24:437 (3) - . It feels a little bit weird to have the same distance like 02:25:800 (7) - this did, as in the other parts, 02:25:800 (7) - this note had a lower distance than any other notes in the same type of rhythm.
4. 02:41:482 (3) - Any reason why is there a normal addition on the head of this slider? I mean, there wasn't any in the other parts, but I don't see a specific reason for this to be here.
5. 05:41:025 (4,5) - Something similar like the movement point made above, this doesn't necessarily have to be under 05:39:695 (6) - , it just doesn't really reflect the mood of the song in this part(the stanza being the most intense one here). Instead, you could blanket 05:39:695 (6) - this note instead with these notes, which may give a better emphasis to the song's mood.

[Sc4v4ng3r] wrote:

Heya! Mod as requested in-game~

• Unrankable issues

1. My opinion which I highly recommend changing it
2. Small suggestions/nazi

[General]

1. All clear.

[Treasure]

1. 01:30:573 (3,4,5,6,1) - This star pattern's movement can catch player's off-guard, due to the first one having a different kind of movement(by first one I mean 01:08:755 (3,4,5,6,1) - ). And on top of that, I do not really like the movement of this pattern when looked over it individually, as the movement between the notes are getting suddenly bigger then smaller then bigger etc., personally I like the movement in the first star pattern than this.
   
   ……it‘s mean all star pattern like 01:08:755 (3,4,5,6,1) - ?? i prefer random jump , reasonably ≈ dull imo
2. 01:41:482 (3,4,5) - This is my personal opinion, but reducing the distance on (5) that much when (3) and (4) were basically 'far' jumps may have a negative effect on the movements of the player. Yes, this breaks off the consistency, but it reflects the instrument's 'mood' in this part when (5) is moved a bit more far apart.
   
   …… same as above , random jump have fun XD , i prefer to do lively not logic
3. 02:25:459 (6) - You might as well give a little bit more spacing on this note, as this is having the same cymbals like 02:24:437 (3) - . It feels a little bit weird to have the same distance like 02:25:800 (7) - this did, as in the other parts, 02:25:800 (7) - this note had a lower distance than any other notes in the same type of rhythm.
   ……ok,
4. 02:41:482 (3) - Any reason why is there a normal addition on the head of this slider? I mean, there wasn't any in the other parts, but I don't see a specific reason for this to be here.
   
   add jump when download ?? maybe it's a bit different with others ……
5. 05:41:025 (4,5) - Something similar like the movement point made above, this doesn't necessarily have to be under 05:39:695 (6) - , it just doesn't really reflect the mood of the song in this part(the stanza being the most intense one here). Instead, you could blanket 05:39:695 (6) - this note instead with these notes, which may give a better emphasis to the song's mood.
   
   ……e .. you are right , but looks very complicated ...

Overall a really good map, with great song and hitsounds. They are beautiful
GL!

XiMerx wrote:

Hello c: From PM owo

It seems that your mapping style don't blanket very often? Blanketing makes things very pretty ww

Treasure

1. 00:26:482 (1,2) - Because of where (1) slider end is facing, (2) should be in front of (1), not behind.…… 的確我有點看不懂 ;w;
2. 01:06:027 (3,4,1) - You should emphasise on (1), not (4). …… 對
3. 01:31:255 (5,6) - Ctrl+G so that 01:31:937 (1) will be emphasised …… 這個反過來的話……後面那個就有點奇怪
4. 01:33:300 (3,4,1) - They should have same DS because (3) and (1) have the same sound on start. (1) should not have lesser DS.……ok
5. 01:37:391 (1,2) - You should blanket them…… 包好的話滑條就太彎了Orz
6. 01:39:437 (4,1) - ^
7. 01:51:027 (1,2) - Because of where (1) slider end is facing, (2) should be in front of (1), not behind.
8. 02:21:027 (1,2) - Blanket?
9. 03:15:573 (1) - More DS? ??
10. 05:14:021 (2) - This should be in front of the slider (1) because of its direction. This creates more flow.……ok
    
    Example

    

Sorry for bad mod. PM me 如果你不明白一些提示。

Evil_Twilight wrote:

[Treasure]
00:23:755 (1) - NC移到00:25:118 (2) - 去突顯這一段的結束 …… 原來如此lol ,看來刻板的人是我
01:08:755 (3) - 我會在這放NC
01:33:300 (3) - 擺在x:224 y:316 好看一些……好
01:57:846 (3) - 跟上面一樣頭壓尾不太好看……後面都是圈有點難動……
02:19:664 (4) - 試試 http://puu.sh/lDXXz/836392093f.png ……好

還是這種小清心的圖好
就是速度有點慢了…… 之前我做成4.6星，AR9 OD8……最後還是放棄了 ah

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pieguyn wrote:

[Treasure]
00:52:391 (3) - maybe curve might flow better? https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4069149 …… ok
00:55:118 (3) - i'd prefer a position more like this... https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4068913 i don't get the reason behind jump at 00:53:755 (1,2) - only …… e, i prefer own

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00:57:846 (3,4,1) - i don't think this spacing really fit well. there's no emphasis on drums at 00:58:527 (4) - but emphasis on drums at 00:57:846 (3) - and vocal, it feels random to play for me. mb try a position more like this? https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4069048 …… no jump emphasis next jump more ?
01:00:232 (2) - maybe try a position more like x388 y248?…… ok
01:06:027 (3,4) - any reason this isn't blanket? seems u use a lot of blankets here but this one isn't…… random blanket XD
01:17:618 (4) - make it symmetric to 01:16:937 (3) - imo…… ok
01:41:823 (4,5) - imo spacing here doesn't fit emphasis from drum well. how about pattern like this instead... https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4069136 ? if u accept, maybe rearrange the other notes a bit so spacing isn't as high……it's too hard lol
02:18:300 - imo this rhythm would fit vocal a lot better http://puu.sh/lIFVj/af6d299813.jpg……never follow vocal XD , random rhythm……
02:46:937 - maybe pattern like this could fit emphasis from drum better? https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4069124 ……ok
03:06:027 (3) - if "random jump" is what u prefer i think a jump like this https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4069077 would be good……ok

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03:17:618 (4,1) - seem odd for me there's no jump here bc it's in the middle of a jump pattern. how about position like this to keep spacing up? https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4069082……
03:47:959 (4,1) - jump here (1.6x DS)? seem to fit rest of the vocal in this area……ok
03:52:732 (4) - x80 y344?
04:35:666 (2) - i think i get how u placed most of the jumps but i don't get this one. it's not a blanket and doesn't seem follow anything. imo move to x316 y300 and make jump between 04:35:666 (2,3) - fits better
05:40:360 (2,3) - 1/2 slider here? spacing at 05:40:692 (3,4) - doesn't seem to emphasize vocal well enough imo……i want to add more note …… get PP ?

all suggestions
first mod in 10 months, sorry in advance if it's not helpful
i like the hitsounds a lot ~
gl ~

your mod all very pertinent about jump…… but if i jump all drum and downbeat …… the layout will be formalization…… i remove many jump because i want to make a easy and relax map Orz

1. 01:01:596 (5) - You can maybe move it to x:127 y:339 because it's doing an overlap with 01:00:573 (3) - at the moment and you could improve the jump here
2. 01:18:641 (2) - I think you can move that note aswell to x:99 y:41 to get a flawless cursor's movement when playing these : 01:17:618 (4,1,2,3) -
3. 01:23:073 (4,5) - You can try to rearrange the spacing here to get another flow and avoid some overlaps :
   
   example

   
4. 02:13:868 (4,5,6) - I was a little bit confused by this placement ; it sounded a bit random imo owo Maybe you can rearrange the placement here?
5. 02:23:755 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - This is nice! Good job ♥
6. 03:34:664 (1) - I'd Ctrl+G that note in order to make an awesome flow with 03:35:687 (2,3) - ( it improve the jump here!)
7. 04:30:552 (3,4) - Your pattern could be more energic , try it like that :
   
   example2

   

Secretpipe wrote:

Very solid map here in general! Throwing some suggestions and we're good to go !

[Treasure]

1. 01:01:596 (5) - You can maybe move it to x:127 y:339 because it's doing an overlap with 01:00:573 (3) - at the moment and you could improve the jump here …… the overlap is my wish , like random and spontaneous , but too many people think it's bad Orz , i move too 144|344
2. 01:18:641 (2) - I think you can move that note aswell to x:99 y:41 to get a flawless cursor's movement when playing these : 01:17:618 (4,1,2,3) - ……ok
3. 01:23:073 (4,5) - You can try to rearrange the spacing here to get another flow and avoid some overlaps : …… the jump too big Orz
   
   example

   
4. 02:13:868 (4,5,6) - I was a little bit confused by this placement ; it sounded a bit random imo owo Maybe you can rearrange the placement here? …… random is romantic ! , i dont know how to change Orz
5. 02:23:755 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - This is nice! Good job ♥ …… naya ~
6. 03:34:664 (1) - I'd Ctrl+G that note in order to make an awesome flow with 03:35:687 (2,3) - ( it improve the jump here!) …… ok
7. 04:30:552 (3,4) - Your pattern could be more energic , try it like that :……ok
   
   example2

   

Alright , once you applied those, call me bac for a recheck!

Natsu wrote:

hey from x'mas queue, you have BN for this? if not pm in game !

ZZHBOY wrote:

timing is fine for me, approved~!

SPOILER

ByBy13 wrote:

Let's see what will happen.

Okoratu wrote:

02:45:554 (1) - 03:40:094 (1) - 03:51:001 (1,2) - although technically fine they don't seem to fit the overall concept of your map before the break

otherwise a map like this is quite refreshing, thank you for making it

Okoratu wrote:

02:45:554 (1) - 03:40:094 (1) - 03:51:001 (1,2) - although technically fine they don't seem to fit the overall concept of your map before the break

otherwise a map like this is quite refreshing, thank you for making it

Minakami Yuki wrote:

ByBy13 wrote:

Let's see what will happen.

Do reply the mod then I may help it back after my exam finished.

ByBy13 wrote:

Congratulation on qualify Narcissu! But I want to mention something about what I've found on this mapset

Treasure:
04:08:045(2,3)- The vocal are intensive and stronger as I can see but the spacing was decreased here if I'm not wrong which means that they doesn't emphasize the stronger vocals here.For emphasizing the vocals' intesify,you have to increase the spacing here as you did at 04:13:499(3,4)- for example
04:27:475(2,3)- A jump would be better here in my opinion because on 04:27:815(3)- the flute is going to be intensive here and also the other instruments as I can see and they need some emphasis having a little jump here
04:28:497(4,1)- The instruments are going to be intensive here especially the flute but I don't see any little jump here to emphasize the stronger and intensive instruments so to emphasize them I mean their intensify you have to increase the spacing I mean to have a little jump instead using an antijump which doesn't emphasize the stronger instruments
04:35:655(2,3)- On 04:35:996(3)- , the cymbals(the drums) are going to intensify here but comparing with other patterns like which have jump I mean which emphasize the stronger cymbals(drums) , on this pattern you didn't increase the spacing here to emphasize the stronger cymbals.Increasing the spacing here and having a little jump for emphasizing the stronger cymbals I mean drums wouldn't hurt at all
05:40:692(3,4,5)- The vocals are intensive here but I see that you used an antijump which doesn't emphasize the stronger vocals and their intensify at all.For emphasizing the vocals' intensify,you have to increase the spacing here so you will have a jump instead of antijump which doesn't emphasize the stronger vocals

Just throwing my opinion here about what I've found on this mapset.Let's see what will happen.
Gratz again anyway

Narcissu wrote:

i will reply even if i I don't want to

Narcissu wrote:

i use bad flow emphasize the some beat and syncopated , dotted rhythms .

i plant narcissus on it , you turn it into a factory

Minakami Yuki wrote:

a beautiful song doesnt need such emphasis on vocals or beats, just follow it, and just enjoy.
if you keep your mind on "putting jumps on strong beat" blablabla, most of the maps should be remapped lol

Bakari wrote:

Narcissu wrote:

i will reply even if i I don't want to

The modder took their time to look through your set and give some ideas on how to make the map better. Why don't you take the opportunity to make the set better instead of replying in such a way?

Because his mod indicate he is a new mapper and modder , if you are a DS mapper , other say “you should add random jump here , because the music is lovely and light” and DQ you map , are you willing reply his mod ? modder should be understand mapper‘s idea , respect mapper‘s way , its requires no illustration. his mod cant help me upgrade anything , only remap my map follow his mind

Hope thins makes our concerns more understandable.

ah …… my english very bad , I hope you can understand

ByBy13 wrote:

I want to point out about 05:40:692(3,4,5)-.If you can see in this last kiai the same pattern but using jump,this pattern don't use any jump even if the vocal gets intensive.Having consistency on jumps in this kiai,you have to increase the spacing a little and also you will emphasize the instensify of the vocals in my opinion.
Also for other points for example 04:08:045(2,3)-,if you can take a look at 04:11:113(2,3)- and 04:13:499(3,4)- you've used jumps here I mean you've increased
the spacing but here you didn't and here you can notice that the vocals are intensive and they need some emphasize as you did at the points which I mentioned earlier so it wouldn't hurt if you will increase the spacing here a bit to give some emphasis to the intensify of the vocals.
The points which I've mentioned in my last mod were some inconsistency in jumps.It is a low song but it have some stronger beats as I can see.Just pointing out what I've mentioned last time

you mod is right like “people will put on a Christmas hat at Christmas ” , i have to say again “ you mod make my map dull ” . the song refrain * N , you can ctrl+C+V+H+J 4bar again and again , map done and it's right in your opinion . my english bad , if you are chinese , i can try to explain it all use readily understood and agreed

Okoratu wrote:

seems like no one cares about the answer my points were given so.
02:45:554 (1) - Ok why is this one extended, I don't really understand it because nothing really hints at it and instruments would be better off with 1/2 sliders

03:40:094 (1) - 03:51:001 (1,2) - were probably done for vocals

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It doesn't really fit into a concept to have 3 extended sliders in a total of 5 minutes of playtime.
They look really really random and i don't think they work that well, especially the first one.
Your rhythms are really simple, focused on instruments mostly.

so I believe your map is better off with these 3/4 sliders being simplified.

Kotek0_0 wrote:

Is that hard one?
I can't belive.
2 slow... and this empty moment at the last 1 min( i think 1 min) of the map.
I'm so sorry but u must correct this mapy
now its like 50/1oo ducks
~Cya ^^