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Tatsh feat. Sariyajin - ALIVE ~Itsuwari no Nai Sekai~

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Mortem
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Mortem
This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on 20. srpna 2015 at 11:05:29

Artist: Tatsh feat. Sariyajin
Title: ALIVE ~Itsuwari no Nai Sekai~
Tags: 清水達也 福山沙織 Tatsuya Shimizu Saori Fukuyama material limit black cd ash tatshmusiccircle c79 wafu pjecoo
BPM: 74
Filesize: 16311kb
Play Time: 06:56
Difficulties Available:
  1. Fake World (4 stars, 851 notes)
Download: Tatsh feat. Sariyajin - ALIVE ~Itsuwari no Nai Sekai~
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#10


Storyboard contains sometimes disturbing scenery.
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Mapset
Fake World - Mortem

Storyboard - Wafu
Last edited by Mortem , edited 33 times in total.
Shiranai
2,186 posts
Joined August 2012
Shiranai
1st
Hellooo M4M here~

[General]
  1. Add custom combo colors
  2. The timing kinda odd, well the odd one is on break time though. Maybe better if someone recheck the timing
[StoryBoard]
  1. Move that three sakura flower http://puu.sh/dKSz8/5014e3aa67.jpg to the left below near the flower? Something like this http://puu.sh/dKSK9/bb0d31e393.jpg may look nicer and can you re-scale it a bit smaller may also looks nicer? because I think the curent is kinda out of place imo when the flower is overlaping the girl's hair
  2. Maybe you can add circle riples or flash effect here 01:00:245 - to sign when the intro stop and begin the vocal section, I think it'll fit perfectly since the sakura effect is fade away
  3. The lyric effect kinda boring to me, how about make it move a bit left or right to each lyric?
  4. And again those circle flowers http://puu.sh/dKT0K/c097a16f7b.jpg is kinda out of place not fit imo, make it falldown petal-by-petal instead? you can see, there's also some petals on the background http://puu.sh/dKT8E/d5843952dd.jpg , well take a look at this map for sb flower's petal refrences https://osu.ppy.sh/s/71345
  5. I think there's better to fade out the sb from here 02:08:354 - and insert new background instead after 02:11:597 - because bg3.jpg is play too long and too static might make players bored
  6. Same cases as above, better fade out the sb from here 03:56:191 - and insert new background instead after 03:59:434 - because bg5.jpg is play too long and too static might make players bored
  7. That bg6.jpg is better have fade out start from here 05:04:294 - to give more impact on the next flash efect before last kiai
  8. That bg8.jpg loooks very static it's like no additional effect on it, add firefly or something or make it move left/right or zoom in/zoom out, it's kinda boring imo if static like that while bg8.jpg is play long until the song ended
  9. That thanks.png time and transition is way too odd, I barely saw the that because the mapper put spinner start 06:50:206 - until 06:56:591 - So I sugest to move that thanks.png here 06:57:808 - or semewhere else after the last spinner end then do the transisition fade-in fade-out
  10. That pjeco.png time and transition appear very odd, that should be appear at here 05:38:348 - After the spinner ended and don't forget adjust the time and transition of wafu.png and add fade out while wafu.png leaving the playfield

    Sorry I can't provide you with the sb code, to lazy doing sb. I hope you understand my explaination, if any question catch me in-game~
[Fake World]
  1. 00:01:057 (1) - To emphize the bgm, add some green lines add adjust the volume and make it like the volume is keep rising from quite to loud, then make it quite again until here 00:07:543 -
  2. 00:08:354 (1) - Same as above
  3. 00:18:084 (2) - 00:21:327 (2) - Add finish on tail
  4. 00:30:854 (4) - Add finish
  5. 00:35:516 (2,3,4) - Stack (2,3) on (4)'s head? kinda odd when play
  6. 00:43:827 (3,4) - Change into slider instead and add green line on 00:44:029 - and set the volume 10~20%
  7. 00:47:273 (1,2,3) - Improve blanket, there's more find it yourself
  8. 00:59:435 (1,2,3,4) - Make (1,2,3) triangle jump? and stack (4) where the (3) is end
  9. 01:01:867 (3) - Better use small grid and make that neater curve
  10. 01:03:489 (1,2,3,4) - To fit more with the vocal, how about use this rhythm instead? http://puu.sh/dKWIb/b0d992d7df.jpg
  11. 01:14:029 (2) - Ctrl+J and move to x:256 y:328 for better flow
  12. 01:16:462 (2) - It's a bit odd if you not map this strong vocal 01:16:867 - Use rhythm like this http://puu.sh/dKWym/15147f2e67.jpg or something else
  13. 01:19:300 (1,2,3,4,5) - That (3) should be use 1/1 slider instead for better rhythm, so something like this http://puu.sh/dKWQD/d08fa452cb.jpg
  14. 01:47:678 (1,2,3) - I think it's better to stack them together something like this 02:01:056 (2,3,4) -
  15. 02:01:462 (4) - Make it curve and blanket it with 02:01:867 (1) -
  16. 02:06:935 (1,2,3,4) - Make triangel jump from that? or something else
  17. 02:18:691 - Add note to emphize piano sound
  18. 02:19:300 (3,4,5,6,7) - Spread it more? looks too rounded
  19. 02:41:597 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - Better use DS or make it jump, star jump or anything looks fine, but instead put those on anti jump players might consider that as stream because the previous spacing like that is stream
  20. 02:58:420 (4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5) - Same as above
  21. 03:04:096 (1,2) - Stack them together
  22. 03:32:677 (3) - Make it 1/2 slider instead? you miss to map 03:32:880 - That drum sound prety strong if I say, follow that drum set instead the vocal
  23. 03:33:488 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - Pleas bad overlap and flow, consider to change that
  24. 03:39:974 (1,3) - The overlaping betwen them looks bad, on (3) set the red node on x:264 y:128 and last node on x:188 y:120 http://puu.sh/dKXJu/92336c641a.jpg and make the blanket neater
  25. 04:00:954 (2) - Delete? kinda overmaping
  26. 04:05:919 (3) - NC, the SV diffrent is over 0.20 so better to have one
  27. 04:10:378 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Not looking so good when you actualy play the map, the overlaping bacause stacking so distracting, so consider to spread it off something like 04:07:135 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) -
  28. 04:13:925 (2) - Delete? kinda overmaping
  29. 04:15:243 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - Rearrange that clap so distracting
  30. 04:17:675 (3,4) - Use this rhythm instead for better rhythm http://puu.sh/dKYam/ada407630f.jpg
  31. 04:19:297 (2) - Change that into 1/2 slider or two circles? You miss strong piano sound here 04:19:500 -
  32. 04:20:108 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Hitsound odd imo
  33. 04:22:337 (3,4,5,6,7) - Make the star neater
  34. 04:23:655 (2) - Kinda overmap
  35. Add some green lines start from 04:26:189 - and addjust the volume to emphize piano sound
  36. 04:40:376 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Spread it more, looks bad when play
  37. 05:07:740 (1) - Spinner start from here 05:07:537 -
  38. 05:30:443 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Make those circle completely http://puu.sh/dKYxz/7548cf7e8d.jpg

    Hitsound and NC still not consistent and can be improve more
[]
Goodluck on the way~
Mortem
694 posts
Joined July 2013
Topic Starter
Mortem

Mako Sakata wrote:

1st
Hellooo M4M here~

[General]
  1. Add custom combo colors - Added.
  2. The timing kinda odd, well the odd one is on break time though. Maybe better if someone recheck the timing
[Fake World]
  1. 00:01:057 (1) - To emphize the bgm, add some green lines add adjust the volume and make it like the volume is keep rising from quite to loud, then make it quite again until here 00:07:543 - - Okay. Fixed.
  2. 00:08:354 (1) - Same as above - ^
  3. 00:18:084 (2) - 00:21:327 (2) - Add finish on tail - Added.
  4. 00:30:854 (4) - Add finish - Added.
  5. 00:35:516 (2,3,4) - Stack (2,3) on (4)'s head? kinda odd when play - I think it's okay..
  6. 00:43:827 (3,4) - Change into slider instead and add green line on 00:44:029 - and set the volume 10~20% - I'll leave it like it is. (for now)
  7. 00:47:273 (1,2,3) - Improve blanket, there's more find it yourself - Okay. Fixed.
  8. 00:59:435 (1,2,3,4) - Make (1,2,3) triangle jump? and stack (4) where the (3) is end - Nope.
  9. 01:01:867 (3) - Better use small grid and make that neater curve - Okay. Fixed.
  10. 01:03:489 (1,2,3,4) - To fit more with the vocal, how about use this rhythm instead? http://puu.sh/dKWIb/b0d992d7df.jpg - I'll leave it like it is.
  11. 01:14:029 (2) - Ctrl+J and move to x:256 y:328 for better flow - Sure. Fixed.
  12. 01:16:462 (2) - It's a bit odd if you not map this strong vocal 01:16:867 - Use rhythm like this http://puu.sh/dKWym/15147f2e67.jpg or something else - Fixed.
  13. 01:19:300 (1,2,3,4,5) - That (3) should be use 1/1 slider instead for better rhythm, so something like this http://puu.sh/dKWQD/d08fa452cb.jpg - Fixed.
  14. 01:47:678 (1,2,3) - I think it's better to stack them together something like this 02:01:056 (2,3,4) - - I think not. sry ._.
  15. 02:01:462 (4) - Make it curve and blanket it with 02:01:867 (1) - - Leaving like it is..I like this pattern.
  16. 02:06:935 (1,2,3,4) - Make triangel jump from that? or something else - Same as above w/ triangle jump.
  17. 02:18:691 - Add note to emphize piano sound - Added.
  18. 02:19:300 (3,4,5,6,7) - Spread it more? looks too rounded - what?
  19. 02:41:597 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - Better use DS or make it jump, star jump or anything looks fine, but instead put those on anti jump players might consider that as stream because the previous spacing like that is stream - I reduced DS to 0.2x
  20. 02:58:420 (4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5) - Same as above - Fixed.
  21. 03:04:096 (1,2) - Stack them together - I don't want to have stereotype stacks. So for now, i'm leaving like it is.
  22. 03:32:677 (3) - Make it 1/2 slider instead? you miss to map 03:32:880 - That drum sound prety strong if I say, follow that drum set instead the vocal - Fixed.
  23. 03:33:488 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - Pleas bad overlap and flow, consider to change that - Fixed.
  24. 03:39:974 (1,3) - The overlaping betwen them looks bad, on (3) set the red node on x:264 y:128 and last node on x:188 y:120 http://puu.sh/dKXJu/92336c641a.jpg and make the blanket neater - Fixed.
  25. 04:00:954 (2) - Delete? kinda overmaping
  26. 04:05:919 (3) - NC, the SV diffrent is over 0.20 so better to have one
  27. 04:10:378 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Not looking so good when you actualy play the map, the overlaping bacause stacking so distracting, so consider to spread it off something like 04:07:135 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) -
  28. 04:13:925 (2) - Delete? kinda overmaping - Nope. It fits.
  29. 04:15:243 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - Rearrange that clap so distracting - No need.
  30. 04:17:675 (3,4) - Use this rhythm instead for better rhythm http://puu.sh/dKYam/ada407630f.jpg - Fixed.
  31. 04:19:297 (2) - Change that into 1/2 slider or two circles? You miss strong piano sound here 04:19:500 - - no need.
  32. 04:20:108 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Hitsound odd imo - not by me.
  33. 04:22:337 (3,4,5,6,7) - Make the star neater - Fixed.
  34. 04:23:655 (2) - Kinda overmap - I don't think so...
  35. Add some green lines start from 04:26:189 - and addjust the volume to emphize piano sound - Fixed.
  36. 04:40:376 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Spread it more, looks bad when play - Uhm..I think it's okay. I saw this pattern on lot of maps and they didn't need to change it, so for now, I'll leave it like it is...
  37. 05:07:740 (1) - Spinner start from here 05:07:537 - - Fixed.
  38. 05:30:443 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Make those circle completely http://puu.sh/dKYxz/7548cf7e8d.jpg - I'll leave it like it is (for now).

    Hitsound and NC still not consistent and can be improve more
[]
Goodluck on the way~ -Thanks c:
TicClick
Global Moderator
4,422 posts
Joined February 2011
TicClick
copy and paste this
131587,405.405405405405,4,2,2,50,1,0
283111,405.405405405405,4,2,1,60,1,0
284428,405.405405405405,4,2,1,60,1,0
284936,405.405405405405,4,2,1,60,1,0
307537,405.405405405405,4,2,1,60,1,0

remove these offsets, they're unnecessary
  1. 04:29:026
  2. 04:29:634
  3. 04:30:242
  4. 04:31:052
  5. 04:33:079
  6. 04:34:295
  7. 04:41:592
Mortem
694 posts
Joined July 2013
Topic Starter
Mortem

TicClick wrote:

copy and paste this
131587,405.405405405405,4,2,2,50,1,0
283111,405.405405405405,4,2,1,60,1,0
284428,405.405405405405,4,2,1,60,1,0
284936,405.405405405405,4,2,1,60,1,0
307537,405.405405405405,4,2,1,60,1,0

remove these offsets, they're unnecessary
  1. 04:29:026
  2. 04:29:634
  3. 04:30:242
  4. 04:31:052
  5. 04:33:079
  6. 04:34:295
  7. 04:41:592
    - Removed & Fixed. Thank you c:
fergas
769 posts
Joined August 2013
fergas
Right!

genreal
  1. i heard offster 1053 for firrst section. o/ idk what to do, maybe ask ticckie one more little time ;s
Map
  1. 00:08:354 (1) - start at 00:07:948 - sounds better
  2. 00:13:016 (3) - unncesary note imho, till no soudns from song. MAybe make them in one slider 00:12:813 (2,3) - ? adn etc for similar beats
  3. 00:25:584 (5,6,7) - the way how you emphasized piano looks great, but i think you also need to make osmething with 00:24:367 (3) - where piano sound start. Try to unstack them with 00:23:962 (1,2) - .
    Also 00:22:948 (6,1) - jump looks too big
  4. 00:35:719 (3) - already said but in case if you didnt removed it b4 here one is 100% should be delated
  5. 00:36:935 (1,2) - suggest you to use one 1/4 reverrse sldier here. 00:37:340 (2) - in line with 00:37:340 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - looks strange and inappropriate.
  6. 00:39:773 (2) - i think this note can be dealted
  7. 00:44:029 (4) - same here - no sund from song
  8. Some words about intro:
    i dont like the way you building rhythm. Exp: 00:11:597 (3,1) - you are ignoring strong beat at 00:12:205 - finishing sound on same strength 00:12:408 - and start stream with 00:12:611 (1) - where beat is lower than slider's end. Such rhythms still playable but bnormally people paasing them with face "i didnt understand how i tap that". Be more polite for players, OR it's just my point of view on rhythm and i am trying force my point of view, in this case forgive me and dont mind about this words.
  9. 00:50:516 (1,2) - maybe blanket them? or try something like this one.
  10. 00:51:935 (4,5) - prefer to see them here unstackable till you used same patter b4 00:51:124 (2,3) - but there was no such strong beats. And after stack 00:52:745 (6,7) -
  11. 00:53:962 (2) - this note dont follow ppiano, maybe delate it? Also look at 00:56:597 (1,2) - here one you missed note but hat on red tick 00:56:800 - is stronger than on 00:53:962 (2) -
  12. 00:54:975 (6,7) - i told about such rhtythm b4. Slider's end got realy huge beat but this note on red tick actually dont have support from music(on 100% speed this hat wont be listenable). Focus on delating 00:55:583 (7) -
  13. 01:01:056 (1) - try here this rhythm. Reasons that on 01:01:462 (2) - starts new syllable\word and note 01:01:664 (2) - dont support vocal or music.
  14. 01:04:908 (3,4) - maybe one lsider like 01:07:948 (4,5) -
  15. 01:10:989 - and etc... personaly i guess adding notes here would be better for map, till you like to support piano before. Also 01:15:245 (3,4,5,1,2) - also reason to add notes here
  16. 01:34:097 (9) - suggest to separate to 2 notes
  17. 01:40:887 (1) - maybe use 40% volume at the end of spinner. That whistle sounds too sharp
  18. 02:01:056 (2,3,4) - maybe i didbt see before. Run throught the diff and fix all this unstacks if find somewhere
  19. 02:03:489 (5,6,7) - maybe make flow for a liiiitle [url=v]comfortable.[/url]
  20. 02:04:908 (8) - just i got feeling likke this. Can explain why personal view. Like: 02:04:705 - AAAA- 02:04:908 - IIII sounds like in one syllable and separeate them with slider-note sounds a bit strange. One more variant is 02:04:300 (7) - make rerverse and start spinner on 02:05:313 -
  21. 02:08:354 (1) - prefer to see it stacked with 02:07:137 (2) - for better readable
  22. 02:16:462 (5,6,7,8) - you can replace them with 2 sliders till this high sound on 02:16:462 (5,7) -
  23. 02:18:083 (1,2,3,4) - you know this ds is absolutely unreadable. This jump is too damn big. Beore you use stram like 02:15:245 (1,2,3,4) - 02:16:462 (5,6,7,8) - and here one is just big jump with no reason :?
  24. 02:29:029 (2,3,4,5,6) - also this is unexecpted 1/4 snapping cause b4 you use 02:16:462 (5,6,7,8) - same distance. 100% everyone whoi play this map like first time will take fails here. Use ds like here 02:33:894 (2,3,4,5,6) -
  25. 02:34:300 (6,7,8) - imho such pattern too hard for such song. suggest to remove during all diff
  26. 02:36:327 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - in my opinins this stream better replace with kick sliders till it sounds a bit strange when next 1/4 snapping basing on drums 02:37:340 (1,2,3) -
  27. 02:38:860 (2) - try to thinka boitu delating this note
  28. 02:41:597 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - like before newbie people can fail reading distance here and play it like 1/4 snapping cause of 02:38:759 (1,2,3,4,5) -
  29. 03:04:097 (1,2) - suggest to remove overlap to make next pattern 03:05:111 (3,4,5) - more readable
  30. 03:10:988 - i guess you need note here
  31. 04:04:703 (1,2) - imho 1.3 speed would be better and softer to play
  32. 04:22:337 (3,4,5,6,7) - draw them woth polygon tool pls ;z also, imo, jump 04:22:945 (6,7) - even in pentagon hard to read casue of song. mayne make something like slider?
  33. 04:26:189 (1) - alls tream is unrakable cause of volume. Better use 30-40% and delate this note 04:27:506 (14) - and stack 04:27:608 (15,16,1) - 04:31:864 (4,5,6,7,8,9) - dont understnd why for some object you use drum sampleset. Remove it plox ;s Aleight maybe i didint see this and previous parts but later you usee them a lot. If you think its ok, ok, use. But still i dont understadn reason to use them and suggest to remove.
  34. 04:32:269 (5,6,7,8,9) - i suggest you to dleate 04:32:370 (6,9) - or only 04:32:674 (9) - if you want leave 04:32:370 (6) - . But still suggesdt you to dealte them both
  35. 04:35:613 (6) - ^, btw make this stream 04:35:512 (5,6,7,8,1) - more carefully, if you want remove this note
  36. 04:36:120 - i guess this beat should be supported ny object at least by reverse arrow
  37. 04:40:884 (6) - delate like before
  38. 04:40:985 (7,1) - deafult drum claps ;s and default finish here 04:41:593 (3) - . Would be great if add them
  39. 05:14:225 (2) - no need in this note
  40. suggest you delate 05:47:772 (2) - or even all 05:47:772 (2,3,4) -
  41. 06:15:644 (3,4,5,1) - softer flow
  42. 06:47:468 (3) - rey 1/8 at the end. soudns better imo.
  43. 06:50:205 (1) - idk i feel like her should be circle adn onlty after it spinner can start. think about this.
Sry for this mod. Too much shit words like "remove", "delate", "replace" etc... I dont like such things :( But.
But map with itself got a lot of troubles with diffuclt. There clear and good part like kiai but at after them going some strange patters with hard readable or overmap, sometiems undermap with hard readable. This is unbalance and will haraas player especialy newbies. Song with hard rhythm but its clear and dont change mood system during all lenght but your map jump form easy thing to chaotic hard, in my point of view. Maybe i am wrong but i still think so.
You need to focus on rhythm hardly.
Flow is really good and there is nothign to say about it.

All the best with map!!
Mortem
694 posts
Joined July 2013
Topic Starter
Mortem

fergas wrote:

Right!

genreal
  1. i heard offster 1053 for firrst section. o/ idk what to do, maybe ask ticckie one more little time ;s
Map
  1. 00:08:354 (1) - start at 00:07:948 - sounds better - Mm-hmm. Fixed.
  2. 00:13:016 (3) - unncesary note imho, till no soudns from song. MAybe make them in one slider 00:12:813 (2,3) - ? adn etc for similar beats - Removed. I just removed the (3) & move the slider further. Also fixed in 00:22:948 (5) -
  3. 00:25:584 (5,6,7) - the way how you emphasized piano looks great, but i think you also need to make osmething with 00:24:367 (3) - where piano sound start. Try to unstack them with 00:23:962 (1,2) - .
    Also 00:22:948 (6,1) - jump looks too big
  4. 00:35:719 (3) - already said but in case if you didnt removed it b4 here one is 100% should be delated
  5. 00:36:935 (1,2) - suggest you to use one 1/4 reverrse sldier here. 00:37:340 (2) - in line with 00:37:340 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - looks strange and inappropriate.
  6. 00:39:773 (2) - i think this note can be dealted - The note is there 2x so I will leave it like it is.
  7. 00:44:029 (4) - same here - no sund from song
  8. Some words about intro:
    i dont like the way you building rhythm. Exp: 00:11:597 (3,1) - you are ignoring strong beat at 00:12:205 - finishing sound on same strength 00:12:408 - and start stream with 00:12:611 (1) - where beat is lower than slider's end. Such rhythms still playable but bnormally people paasing them with face "i didnt understand how i tap that". Be more polite for players, OR it's just my point of view on rhythm and i am trying force my point of view, in this case forgive me and dont mind about this words.
  9. 00:50:516 (1,2) - maybe blanket them? or try something like this one. - Fixed.
  10. 00:51:935 (4,5) - prefer to see them here unstackable till you used same patter b4 00:51:124 (2,3) - but there was no such strong beats. And after stack 00:52:745 (6,7) - - Leaving like it is.
  11. 00:53:962 (2) - this note dont follow ppiano, maybe delate it? Also look at 00:56:597 (1,2) - here one you missed note but hat on red tick 00:56:800 - is stronger than on 00:53:962 (2) - - Fixed.
  12. 00:54:975 (6,7) - i told about such rhtythm b4. Slider's end got realy huge beat but this note on red tick actually dont have support from music(on 100% speed this hat wont be listenable). Focus on delating 00:55:583 (7) - - Deleted.
  13. 01:01:056 (1) - try here this rhythm. Reasons that on 01:01:462 (2) - starts new syllable\word and note 01:01:664 (2) - dont support vocal or music. - Fixed.
  14. 01:04:908 (3,4) - maybe one lsider like 01:07:948 (4,5) - - um nope.
  15. 01:10:989 - and etc... personaly i guess adding notes here would be better for map, till you like to support piano before. Also 01:15:245 (3,4,5,1,2) - also reason to add notes here
  16. 01:34:097 (9) - suggest to separate to 2 notes - leaving like it is.
  17. 01:40:887 (1) - maybe use 40% volume at the end of spinner. That whistle sounds too sharp - fixed.
  18. 02:01:056 (2,3,4) - maybe i didbt see before. Run throught the diff and fix all this unstacks if find somewhere - oops, fixed.
  19. 02:03:489 (5,6,7) - maybe make flow for a liiiitle [url=v]comfortable.[/url] - img not found.
  20. 02:04:908 (8) - just i got feeling likke this. Can explain why personal view. Like: 02:04:705 - AAAA- 02:04:908 - IIII sounds like in one syllable and separeate them with slider-note sounds a bit strange. One more variant is 02:04:300 (7) - make rerverse and start spinner on 02:05:313 - - sounds better, thx. fixed.
  21. 02:08:354 (1) - prefer to see it stacked with 02:07:137 (2) - for better readable - gdit, stacks ._. | fixed.
  22. 02:16:462 (5,6,7,8) - you can replace them with 2 sliders till this high sound on 02:16:462 (5,7) - - Replaced.
  23. 02:18:083 (1,2,3,4) - you know this ds is absolutely unreadable. This jump is too damn big. Beore you use stram like 02:15:245 (1,2,3,4) - 02:16:462 (5,6,7,8) - and here one is just big jump with no reason :? - leaving like it is for now.
  24. 02:29:029 (2,3,4,5,6) - also this is unexecpted 1/4 snapping cause b4 you use 02:16:462 (5,6,7,8) - same distance. 100% everyone whoi play this map like first time will take fails here. Use ds like here 02:33:894 (2,3,4,5,6) - - Fixed.
  25. 02:34:300 (6,7,8) - imho such pattern too hard for such song. suggest to remove during all diff - I think it's okay.
  26. 02:36:327 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - in my opinins this stream better replace with kick sliders till it sounds a bit strange when next 1/4 snapping basing on drums 02:37:340 (1,2,3) - - leaving like it is for now.
  27. 02:38:860 (2) - try to thinka boitu delating this note - nope, sry.
  28. 02:41:597 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - like before newbie people can fail reading distance here and play it like 1/4 snapping cause of 02:38:759 (1,2,3,4,5) - - Fixed
  29. 03:04:097 (1,2) - suggest to remove overlap to make next pattern 03:05:111 (3,4,5) - more readable - fixed.
  30. 03:10:988 - i guess you need note here - i guess not.
  31. 04:04:703 (1,2) - imho 1.3 speed would be better and softer to play - leaving like it is for now.
  32. 04:22:337 (3,4,5,6,7) - draw them woth polygon tool pls ;z also, imo, jump 04:22:945 (6,7) - even in pentagon hard to read casue of song. mayne make something like slider? - i think it's okay. it's grid snapped and it is correctly placed.
  33. 04:26:189 (1) - alls tream is unrakable cause of volume. Better use 30-40% and delate this note 04:27:506 (14) - and stack 04:27:608 (15,16,1) - 04:31:864 (4,5,6,7,8,9) - dont understnd why for some object you use drum sampleset. Remove it plox ;s Aleight maybe i didint see this and previous parts but later you usee them a lot. If you think its ok, ok, use. But still i dont understadn reason to use them and suggest to remove. - Fixed.
  34. 04:32:269 (5,6,7,8,9) - i suggest you to dleate 04:32:370 (6,9) - or only 04:32:674 (9) - if you want leave 04:32:370 (6) - . But still suggesdt you to dealte them both - Removed.
  35. 04:35:613 (6) - ^, btw make this stream 04:35:512 (5,6,7,8,1) - more carefully, if you want remove this note - Fixed.
  36. 04:36:120 - i guess this beat should be supported ny object at least by reverse arrow - leaving like it is for now.
  37. 04:40:884 (6) - delate like before - Fixed.
  38. 04:40:985 (7,1) - deafult drum claps ;s and default finish here 04:41:593 (3) - . Would be great if add them - leaving like it is.
  39. 05:14:225 (2) - no need in this note - Removed.
  40. suggest you delate 05:47:772 (2) - or even all 05:47:772 (2,3,4) - - nope, sry.
  41. 06:15:644 (3,4,5,1) - softer flow - fixed.
  42. 06:47:468 (3) - rey 1/8 at the end. soudns better imo. - fixed.
  43. 06:50:205 (1) - idk i feel like her should be circle adn onlty after it spinner can start. think about this. - added
Sry for this mod. Too much shit words like "remove", "delate", "replace" etc... I dont like such things :( But.
But map with itself got a lot of troubles with diffuclt. There clear and good part like kiai but at after them going some strange patters with hard readable or overmap, sometiems undermap with hard readable. This is unbalance and will haraas player especialy newbies. Song with hard rhythm but its clear and dont change mood system during all lenght but your map jump form easy thing to chaotic hard, in my point of view. Maybe i am wrong but i still think so.
You need to focus on rhythm hardly.
Flow is really good and there is nothign to say about it.

All the best with map!! - Thanks c:
-Nanaka-
815 posts
Joined July 2013
-Nanaka-
hi :)
from My Modding Queues　M4M


red: unrankable issue.
blue: maybe unrankable issue,Highly recommended.
bold: should fix.

General

  1. Unsnapped Gleen　line
    04:05:718 - snap to 04:05:716
    04:31:056 - snap to 04:31:053
    04:35:110 - snap to 04:35:107
    06:39:975 - snap to 06:39:969

Fake World

  1. 00:24:570 (4,5,6,7) - Followed the same rhythm.Here want to take the piano
  2. 00:44:029 (4) - Remove Note,Here the sound is not
    00:43:421 (1,2,3) - gradually reduce the volume dawn?
  3. 00:59:840 (3) - or 01:00:246 (4) - add whistle
    00:59:435 (1,2,3,4) - I want to jump placement
  4. 01:05:110 - Finish
  5. 01:21:327 - add whistle
  6. 01:33:692 (8) - meke to anti jump?
    SPOILER
  7. 01:57:611 (7,8) - My favorite flow
    SPOILER
  8. 02:08:455 - Kiai Time, I think that there is no need
  9. 02:16:462 - add Finish & whistle
  10. 02:16:867 - 02:17:678 - whistle
  11. 02:29:435 (6,7,8) - your often use but Hard difficult play
    02:39:165 (5,1,2) - I can understand it if this
  12. 02:41:597 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - It would be wrong because it is the same shape as the Stream 02:36:327 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) -
  13. 02:44:232 (3) - Remove Clap
  14. 02:44:840 - add Drum?
  15. 03:32:272 (1,2,3,4,5) - 03:32:475 (2) - 03:32:880 - Rem Clap 03:33:082 (4,5) - add Clap
  16. 03:36:732 (4,1) - nazi stack
  17. 03:37:137 (1,2) - too close.....
  18. 03:39:975 (1,3) - This stack also anxious
  19. 03:52:947 - kiai off? 03:56:292 - same as
  20. 04:21:527 (1) - Stack
  21. 04:27:101 (10,11,12,13,14,15,16) - I think that it can be beautiful
    SPOILER
  22. 04:29:431 (5) - 04:29:634 - This sound must not be ignored
  23. 04:32:370 (5,6) - Click here for the natural
    SPOILER
  24. 04:33:688 (2,3) - try Ctrl+G rhythm
  25. 05:22:131 (1) - hmmm....05:22:131 - add note...same as 03:56:192 (8,1) -
    SPOILER
  26. 05:44:833 (1,1) - It is difficult to this sense of distance to understand....
  27. 05:31:658 (7,1) - ^
  28. 06:13:212 (3,4,5) - nazi blanket

There is a place where hard to understand
02:43:827 (1,2,3,4) - 02:46:259 (1,2,3) - etc.... :?

anyway, NiceSB & Map
gl


mod time: 2hour
emilia
893 posts
Joined October 2012
emilia
Yay 3rd approved modding today~

00:01:057 (1,1) - Suggest you to have just 1 spinner, it works well too
00:19:705 (6) - Shift 3rd point to: 199|77 for nicer shape
00:21:327 (2) - 3rd point to: 384|127 and 4th point to: 427|154 for nicer shape
00:23:962 (1,2,3,4) - Very intrusive, consider making a new slider that doesn't abruptly cut into the hitcircles
00:24:570 (4) - Piano starts on 1st blue line of this slider, so you could scrap the slider to create rhythm for the piano instead
00:25:584 (5,6,7,8) - Consider going for a polygon shape
00:28:016 (2,1,2,3) - Fix stack
00:33:489 (5) - 3rd point to: 325|141 for nicer shape
00:35:921 (4,1) - Slider transition is very awkward, consider curving slider 1 (?)
00:36:935 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Not sure if its a polygon, but you should make it to be so
00:48:894 (6,8) - Maybe consider blanket
00:51:327 (3,5) - ^
00:54:164 (2,3,4,5) - The rhythm here doesn't work, maybe map against the drums in the background
00:56:597 (1,2,3,4) - Transition of the hitcircles are very awkward, maybe you want to make them occur in a row instead of having them stack
01:05:111 (4,3) - Blanket?
01:06:732 (3,5) - ^
01:14:029 (2) - Slider shape is too squashed to give it the desired effect, change it to something simpler
01:19:300 (1,2,3) - Pretty sure this doesn't follow anything exactly in the music, suggest changing the rhythm
01:28:624 (3,5) - Fix blanket?
01:29:435 (5,7) - ^
01:31:057 (1,2) - ^
01:31:867 (3,5) - ^
01:33:489 (7,8,9) - Shift notes on the timeline to 8,9,7 instead
01:35:921 (3,5) - Fix blanket
01:36:732 (5,7) - ^
01:48:894 (2,4) - ^
01:49:705 (4,2) - ^
01:50:516 (2,4) - ^
01:57:002 (6,8) - ^
02:02:678 (3,4,5,6) - ^
02:07:543 (4) - Remove the reverse on this, there's nothing obviously audible that lands on it
02:16:462 (5) - NC
02:18:084 (1,2) - Distance between 1-2 is very irregular compared to the rest of the map, shift 1 in towards 2
02:22:138 (2) - Too short of a slider to achieve desired effect, simplify
02:24:975 (5,6) - Fix blanket
02:29:029 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Too easy to miss, shift 7 and 8 further away
02:33:894 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - ^
02:34:705 (8,9) - Fix blanket
03:14:029 (1,2,4,5) - ^
03:18:894 (3,5) - ^
03:23:759 (2,4) - ^
03:39:975 (1,2,3) - Very hard to read, not sure if rankable
03:46:462 (1,3) - Fix blanket
03:48:894 (1,3,2) - ^
03:50:111 (2,4) - ^
04:00:246 (3,3) - ^
04:01:055 (3) - I believe this slider has an error, please redo!~
04:05:919 (3) - NC for SV change
04:09:162 (3,7) - Fix blanket
04:14:027 (3,5) - ^
04:23:756 (3,5) - ^
04:24:567 (5,9) - ^
04:27:810 (1,2) - ^
04:33:080 (1,3) - ^
04:34:701 (3,4) - Suggest blanket
04:35:917 (1,3) - Fix blanket
04:39:161 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - Why not have a more regular polygon star?
04:40:377 (1,2,3,4,5) - This stream may be too close to itself
(Maybe I'll stop pointing out the blankets here)
05:24:563 (2,3,4) - Making this more circular would be nice
06:46:860 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,1) - Suggest you change this bit to have more sliders, so its easier for players to follow, also add red lines there, don't depend on the 1/8 snap divisor.

Overall, a basic map. Its very long, but its essentially fine. Just a lot of blankets that need fixing I guess x.x
Mortem
694 posts
Joined July 2013
Topic Starter
Mortem

-Nanaka- wrote:

Fake World

  1. 00:24:570 (4,5,6,7) - Followed the same rhythm.Here want to take the piano - Fixed.
  2. 00:44:029 (4) - Remove Note,Here the sound is not - Removed.
    00:43:421 (1,2,3) - gradually reduce the volume dawn? - I'll keep it in mind.
  3. 00:59:840 (3) - or 01:00:246 (4) - add whistle - There is a finish already. (01:00:246 (4) - )
    00:59:435 (1,2,3,4) - I want to jump placement - I think it's okay.
  4. 01:05:110 - Finish - Fixed.
  5. 01:21:327 - add whistle - Fixed.
  6. 02:08:455 - Kiai Time, I think that there is no need - Leaving like it is.
  7. 02:16:462 - add Finish & whistle - Fixed.
  8. 02:16:867 - 02:17:678 - whistle - Fixed.
  9. 02:29:435 (6,7,8) - your often use but Hard difficult play
    02:39:165 (5,1,2) - I can understand it if this
  10. 02:41:597 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - It would be wrong because it is the same shape as the Stream 02:36:327 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - - I should leave the shape as it is.
  11. 02:44:232 (3) - Remove Clap - No.
  12. 02:44:840 - add Drum? - There's already finish.
  13. 03:32:272 (1,2,3,4,5) - 03:32:475 (2) - 03:32:880 - Rem Clap 03:33:082 (4,5) - add Clap - Fixed.
  14. 03:36:732 (4,1) - nazi stack - Fixed.
  15. 03:37:137 (1,2) - too close..... - Leaving like it is..
  16. 03:39:975 (1,3) - This stack also anxious - Fixed
  17. 03:52:947 - kiai off? 03:56:292 - same as -It's on purposed. For accentuation.
  18. 04:21:527 (1) - Stack
  19. 04:27:101 (10,11,12,13,14,15,16) - I think that it can be beautiful - Fixed.
    SPOILER
  20. 06:13:212 (3,4,5) - nazi blanket - Fixed.

- Thank you for the mod. (Other unmentioned things were not fixed.
anyway, NiceSB & Map
gl


mod time: 2hour

Estellia- wrote:

Yay 3rd approved modding today~

00:01:057 (1,1) - Suggest you to have just 1 spinner, it works well too -Mmm...no, leaving like it is.
00:19:705 (6) - Shift 3rd point to: 199|77 for nicer shape - Fixed.
00:21:327 (2) - 3rd point to: 384|127 and 4th point to: 427|154 for nicer shape - Fixed.
00:23:962 (1,2,3,4) - Very intrusive, consider making a new slider that doesn't abruptly cut into the hitcircles
00:24:570 (4) - Piano starts on 1st blue line of this slider, so you could scrap the slider to create rhythm for the piano instead
00:25:584 (5,6,7,8) - Consider going for a polygon shape - Fixed in the past mod.
00:28:016 (2,1,2,3) - Fix stack - Fixed.
00:33:489 (5) - 3rd point to: 325|141 for nicer shape - Fixed.
00:35:921 (4,1) - Slider transition is very awkward, consider curving slider 1 (?) - Leaving like it is.
00:36:935 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Not sure if its a polygon, but you should make it to be so - Rearranged.
00:48:894 (6,8) - Maybe consider blanket - Leaving like it is.
00:51:327 (3,5) - ^ - ^
00:54:164 (2,3,4,5) - The rhythm here doesn't work, maybe map against the drums in the background - It's mapped on piano.
00:56:597 (1,2,3,4) - Transition of the hitcircles are very awkward, maybe you want to make them occur in a row instead of having them stack - Nope, leaving like it is.
01:05:111 (4,3) - Blanket?
01:06:732 (3,5) - ^ - Leaving like it is.
01:14:029 (2) - Slider shape is too squashed to give it the desired effect, change it to something simpler - Leaving like it is.
01:19:300 (1,2,3) - Pretty sure this doesn't follow anything exactly in the music, suggest changing the rhythm - It follows one part of vocal + the piano
01:28:624 (3,5) - Fix blanket?
01:29:435 (5,7) - ^
01:31:057 (1,2) - ^
01:31:867 (3,5) - ^ - Sure, fixed.
01:33:489 (7,8,9) - Shift notes on the timeline to 8,9,7 instead - I kinda don't understand what you mean.
01:35:921 (3,5) - Fix blanket
01:36:732 (5,7) - ^
01:48:894 (2,4) - ^
01:49:705 (4,2) - ^
01:50:516 (2,4) - ^
01:57:002 (6,8) - ^
02:02:678 (3,4,5,6) - ^ - Fixed.
02:07:543 (4) - Remove the reverse on this, there's nothing obviously audible that lands on it - Nope.
02:16:462 (5) - NC - Fixed.
02:18:084 (1,2) - Distance between 1-2 is very irregular compared to the rest of the map, shift 1 in towards 2 - Leaving like it is, but I'll keep it in mind.
02:22:138 (2) - Too short of a slider to achieve desired effect, simplify - Leaving like it is.
02:24:975 (5,6) - Fix blanket - Fixed.
02:29:029 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Too easy to miss, shift 7 and 8 further away
02:33:894 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - ^ - Leaving like it is for now.
02:34:705 (8,9) - Fix blanket
03:14:029 (1,2,4,5) - ^
03:18:894 (3,5) - ^
03:23:759 (2,4) - ^ - Fixed.
03:39:975 (1,2,3) - Very hard to read, not sure if rankable - I guess it is. Fixed in the past mod.
03:46:462 (1,3) - Fix blanket
03:48:894 (1,3,2) - ^
03:50:111 (2,4) - ^
04:00:246 (3,3) - ^ - Fixed.
04:01:055 (3) - I believe this slider has an error, please redo!~ - It doesn't have an error. It's just typical slider.
04:05:919 (3) - NC for SV change - Nope.
04:09:162 (3,7) - Fix blanket
04:14:027 (3,5) - ^
04:23:756 (3,5) - ^
04:24:567 (5,9) - ^
04:27:810 (1,2) - ^
04:33:080 (1,3) - ^ - Fixed.
04:34:701 (3,4) - Suggest blanket - Fixed.
04:35:917 (1,3) - Fix blanket - Fixed.
04:39:161 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - Why not have a more regular polygon star? - One is enough for this part i guess.
04:40:377 (1,2,3,4,5) - This stream may be too close to itself - Leaving like it is.
(Maybe I'll stop pointing out the blankets here)
05:24:563 (2,3,4) - Making this more circular would be nice - Fixed.
06:46:860 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,1) - Suggest you change this bit to have more sliders, so its easier for players to follow, also add red lines there, don't depend on the 1/8 snap divisor. - Leaving like it is.

Overall, a basic map. Its very long, but its essentially fine. Just a lot of blankets that need fixing I guess x.x - Thank you for your time & mod.
haha5957
1,433 posts
Joined July 2010
haha5957
[Fake World]

nazi means they look little ugly by about 1~2 grid (you will notice them)

00:21:327 (2,3) - nazi
01:17:881 (5,6) - start the slider from 5 and delete 6?
01:39:266 (1,1) - this spinner part (even later on, like 03:27:002 (1,1) - ) can be mapped in very interesting way that consists some jump in my opinion..
01:47:678 (1,2,3) - nazi
02:29:638 (7,8) - the stack honestly plays bad for me and i see you used it on other parts too but..uh.
03:04:097 (1,2) - stack or split? this kind of pattern never appeared in other part of map..
04:09:162 (3,1,2,3,4,5) - the overlap here looks bit ugly
04:20:716 (7,8) - even if you decided not to unstack 02:29:638 (7,8) - , this here is even worse tbh, please unstack this
04:28:620 (2) - this going through previous stream feels little meh imo
05:19:090 (4) - move it to somewhere around x155 y176?
05:30:441 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - just have them be some kind of flowing-type pattern? something like http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/2975827


nice map & music imo ouo

good luck!
Mortem
694 posts
Joined July 2013
Topic Starter
Mortem

haha5957 wrote:

[Fake World]

nazi means they look little ugly by about 1~2 grid (you will notice them) - 'kay.

00:21:327 (2,3) - nazi - Fixed.
01:17:881 (5,6) - start the slider from 5 and delete 6? - Fixed.
01:39:266 (1,1) - this spinner part (even later on, like 03:27:002 (1,1) - ) can be mapped in very interesting way that consists some jump in my opinion.. - I will leave it like it is.
01:47:678 (1,2,3) - nazi - Fixed.
02:29:638 (7,8) - the stack honestly plays bad for me and i see you used it on other parts too but..uh. - I don't have better idea how to map it...:/
03:04:097 (1,2) - stack or split? this kind of pattern never appeared in other part of map..- Split.
04:09:162 (3,1,2,3,4,5) - the overlap here looks bit ugly- Fixed.
04:20:716 (7,8) - even if you decided not to unstack 02:29:638 (7,8) - , this here is even worse tbh, please unstack this - Unstacked.
04:28:620 (2) - this going through previous stream feels little meh imo - Hm...leaving like it is.
05:19:090 (4) - move it to somewhere around x155 y176? - Ok.
05:30:441 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - just have them be some kind of flowing-type pattern? something like http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/2975827 - Pattern looks great, but I will leave it like it is.


nice map & music imo ouo

good luck!- thank you so much!
P A N
2,354 posts
Joined December 2011
P A N
  1. 00:51:327 (3) - this can replace with circle and 1/2 on 00:51:529 to emphasis piano.
  2. 00:53:759 (1) - this can replace with 1/1 slider and add two 1/2 gap circles on 00:54:367 it's more fit, or if you want to keep 00:53:759 (1) as a circle, you can ctrl+g 00:54:165 (2,3) instead, 00:54:570 need to be clickable because it's strong beat.
  3. 00:57:002 (3) - this is strong beat but you stack it which I don't think it's fit. try unstack with some pattern or stack it with 00:57:205 (4)
  4. 01:08:354 - would be more fit if you replace (5) with circle and add 2/1 slider here. to emphasis piano sound.
  5. 01:17:881 (5) - same as above.
  6. 02:17:273 (3) - keep consistent spacing like this
  7. 02:18:084 (1,2,3) - compared to the spacing you used before or next, this spacing is really unexpected. player might confused.
  8. 02:29:029 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - confusing, add NC on 6?
  9. 02:33:894 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - same as above.
  10. 03:33:082 (4,5) - make them like this is more beautiful imo.
  11. 04:05:919 (3) - add NC, changing SV
  12. your NC is still inconsistent imo, please adjust them.
Good Luck! :3
Mortem
694 posts
Joined July 2013
Topic Starter
Mortem

P A N wrote:

  1. 00:51:327 (3) - this can replace with circle and 1/2 on 00:51:529 to emphasis piano. - Fixed.
  2. 00:53:759 (1) - this can replace with 1/1 slider and add two 1/2 gap circles on 00:54:367 it's more fit, or if you want to keep 00:53:759 (1) as a circle, you can ctrl+g 00:54:165 (2,3) instead, 00:54:570 need to be clickable because it's strong beat. - I used the second option.
  3. 00:57:002 (3) - this is strong beat but you stack it which I don't think it's fit. try unstack with some pattern or stack it with 00:57:205 (4) - leaving like it is.
  4. 01:08:354 - would be more fit if you replace (5) with circle and add 2/1 slider here. to emphasis piano sound. - Fixed.
  5. 01:17:881 (5) - same as above. I'll leave this one like it is, 'cause of vocal.
  6. 02:17:273 (3) - keep consistent spacing like this - Fixed.
  7. 02:18:084 (1,2,3) - compared to the spacing you used before or next, this spacing is really unexpected. player might confused. - Fixed.
  8. 02:29:029 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - confusing, add NC on 6? - Fixed.
  9. 02:33:894 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - same as above. - Fixed.
  10. 03:33:082 (4,5) - make them like this is more beautiful imo. - Fixed.
  11. 04:05:919 (3) - add NC, changing SV - Leaving like it is.
  12. your NC is still inconsistent imo, please adjust them. - Going to fix later.
Good Luck! :3 - Thank you!!
riffy
osu! Alumni
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Joined December 2010
riffy
We did an IRC check with the mapper. Mainly appearance/downbeats were fixed.
Peachtrees
815 posts
Joined May 2013
Peachtrees
M4M

c:

00:11:597 (3,4) - are you sure about the rythm that is currently being used? something like https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/3377830 would alllow for the sound on the blue tick to be mapped to, which I think feels a lot nicer. Note that the pattern above is only one example as this would apply to multple patterns during the beginning

00:27:002 (1,2,3,4) - could try https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/3377871 this rythm. It feels like this follows the piano more accurately, which is what feels dominant in the song

00:54:569 (3,4,5) - is stacking here really the best option? I mean there is a noticeable build-up in the song, and I feel like just stacking the notes is ignoring this :/

01:11:192 (4,5,6,7) - honestly this whole part feels rather fast, so I don't really think that reducing the note density here is the right thing to do. If anything, I think this calls for more 1/2 when compared to previous patterns. I mean..there are very noticeable piano sounds on the red ticks :/

01:27:408 (4) - Could move this up a little for a nice curvy movement to slightly improve the flow like http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/3377902

01:47:070 (6) - probably a very petty complaint, but I think that is is kinda weird that both the tail and the head use a finish here. I mean there is something on both the head and the tail in the song, but these sounds are so very very different, it makes using the same sound for both of them weird to me

02:04:300 (7) - missing hitsound on the tail here?

02:16:462 (1,2,3) - just for the looks: See if you can make these overlap in the same way? err I mean have 2 and 3 overlap as much as 1 and 2...you get the idea ><

02:18:692 (2,3) - I don't really like stacking these. 3 feels noticeable stronger than 2 to me, so stacking it below two doesn't do the song justice to me

02:52:543 (2) - are you sure about putting this downbeat on a tail? I'd honestly just put a circle on the head and the tail of the slider and then get rid of the sldier itself. Honestly, I don't really see what the slider is currently following :/ (might be following vocals I guess, but I even if this one is supposed to follow vocals, then I don't think it is doing a good job at it :c)

02:59:232 (8,1) - mentioned something similar above, but using the same hitsound for both the dull sound in the background and the high pitched piano just feels a bit odd to me :/ idk my ears are being retarded I guess

03:09:975 (7,8,9) - I don't think this rythm emphasizes the song properly, since both sounds dominant in the song 03:10:785 (7) - and 03:11:596 (8) - are put on slidertails

03:16:055 (1,2) - any special reason why this uses 1.0 spacing instead of 1.2?

03:40:786 (3) - slider honestly looks a bit jagged :/ I know you probably don't care about this as much as I do, but I just felt obligated to point this one out ><

03:50:819 (4) - missing a note here? there is noticeable 1/4 here :c

03:54:773 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1) - just saying that this would be very neat if is was symmetric ><

04:16:054 (7) - not sure if ignoring the peak at 04:16:256 (7) - is a good thing to do

04:19:297 (3) - ^

04:27:810 (1,2) - not sure if you can be bothered, but this blanket actually does look pretty sloppy

05:30:441 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - why not to something like https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/3378095? symmetry is VERY VERY off, but you get the idea

05:42:806 (5,6,7) - again, I don't think that stacking here does the song justice, as I feel like there is a noticeable build-up :c

05:54:563 (1) - could possible move this down a bit for a less wiggly movement within the pattern for a slightly smoother flow

06:25:779 (3) - these is a VERY noticeable piano sound on the red tick here, I'm not sure if ignoring this is a good idea. You didn't map it previously for 06:24:158 (6) - but I think that one is ok if you don't want the rythm to be to dense. Though..I'm honestly not too sure about this one either, it's just that the piano feels to strong to simply be ignored, especially when using 1/2 wouldnt hurt

06:26:590 (5) - could curve this a little more for a nicer blanket

My mods for you usually end up sucking balls :c

Good Luck anyways~
Mortem
694 posts
Joined July 2013
Topic Starter
Mortem

Peachtrees wrote:

My mods for you usually end up sucking balls :c
Actually it helped. Thanks~.
Nozhomi
Global Moderator
4,569 posts
Joined May 2013
Nozhomi
Hi~ M4M request from in-game.
Wafu loli hunter confirmed :3

- General :

  1. There is two SB on folder. Remove the bad one.
  2. Background should be 1366*768 minimum for 16/9 resolution, or 1024*768 for 4/3.
  3. Timing points at 04:00:650 - / 04:01:055 - / 04:04:703 - / 04:05:919 - are useless imo. Just use them to make a big tic on them is not a enough reason to place them. I suggest you to remove minimum these 4 red lines.

- Fake World :

  1. Diring first section (00:10:786 - to 00:23:759 - ), I find it weird than you start to map instrument like 00:10:786 (1) - , and just after forget it with a long slider who don't fit engough rhythm. You should stop 00:11:597 (3) - at 00:12:002 - and map like you did with 00:10:786 (1) - imo. Same for the rest of this section.
  2. Since I'm at this part, one of the weird things is to waste strong beat like 00:14:029 - by making them passive at the end of a slider. A strong like this one should be clicked to have a better emphasis with the song.
  3. 00:17:475 (1) - I think if you move it like that -> http://puu.sh/iWS96/fda2645641.jpg this pattern would have a better flow, instead of doing a forced movement to the left.
  4. 01:12:002 (6) - To catch more the movement from 01:11:192 (4,5) - , I suggest you to rotate it by 20° and move it to 472:192.
  5. 01:17:273 (3,4,5) - It feels weird to have a stack with a 1/1 and 1/2 on the same spot due to slow BPM. Keep only one of them stack.
  6. 01:28:624 (3,4) - Check blanket (check them all).
  7. 01:47:678 (1,2,3) - I don't really get it why you use a different spacing here when a 1.20x would fit perfectly.
  8. 01:58:624 (1) - This spinner looks like it was out from nowhere. I would see more a sliderart here, just because you miss vocal from here 02:04:908 - and make a strong beat passive at 02:05:110 - & 02:06:732 - .
  9. 02:41:597 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - Looks like 1/4 when it's 1/2. You should up spacing here.
  10. 02:51:327 (1,2) - There is no reason to reduce spacing here, and you don't do it again on this section so looks just out from nowhere and inconsistent. Stack it or use your 1.20x spacing like all other.
  11. 03:04:097 (1,2) - Why not stack them like all other in this section ?
  12. 03:53:050 (1) - Same as 01:58:624 (1) - .
  13. 03:54:773 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Pattern looks great, but 03:55:178 (3,4,5,6,7,8) - don't fit at all vocal imo. Using more slider would follow so much better voice here than circles.
  14. 04:02:676 (9,10) - Stacking after the end of the stream fix the play when you want to move away due to the movement of the stream. I suggest you to unstack here.
  15. 04:05:919 (3) - NC for the SV change.
  16. 04:20:614 (6) - This circle is overmapped right ? There is nothing enough loud to map here.
  17. 04:32:269 - Add a circle here, feel like something is missing.
  18. 05:28:718 (1) - Like 01:58:624 (1) - .
  19. 05:44:834 - to 05:54:564 - wth happend to combo here ? This is sooooo inconsistent here. I suggest you to rethink about this part, or I don't get your logic here.
  20. 06:49:698 (3,4,1) - Volume is too high. Something like 40% is much better.

That's all.
Mukyu~
Bara-
11,978 posts
Joined April 2013
Bara-
M4M request from you (in-game)

[General]
Increase quality of the BG, you should ask good old Ringating for this
Also, I'm quite sure BPM is 74 constantly, it's very calm. Set it all to 74, and change SV to 2,8 so it still feels the same. Don't forget to do a 0.5 at the start of the map so it doesn't go faster.
Why is it all 74? For the same reason some maps are 300+ BPM. The claps; Claps should go at every other beat (2nd and 4th) That is not the case here, it's every 3rd beat. Halve the BPM to fix this. If the claps would have fallen on all red ticks, BPM should be doubled
Rest seems fine

[Fake World]
  1. 00:12:813 (2,3) - Distance between them is very high, as it's all incredibly slow and low spaced
  2. 00:22:543 (4,5) - ^^
  3. 00:27:002 (1) - I think you're better off folwwing the piano here, as you do it in the previous part as well (Use 1/4)
  4. 00:37:340 (2) - Why is this evenly spaced with the rest as it's much calmer then the rest? Please space (1,2,3) a little less so there is more emphasis on the other (strong) notes
  5. 00:59:435 (1,2,3,4) - I'm no fan of this pattern. I think a triangle for (1,2,3) would work better. Then space (3,4), cause a stack is a little awkward IMO
  6. 01:01:462 (2) - Why not follow the vocals here? A 2/1 slider feels a little undermapped here. Make (1) a 1/1 slider, and then let (2) start where the rest of the vocals are
  7. 01:14:029 (2) - I'm no fan of such sliders, as the curve is too big and the sldier is relatively small. Please make it a straight slider, or decrease the curve of it
  8. 01:28:624 (3) - Starting from here, I think you should add more claps. Think about 01:30:246 (7) - (start), 01:33:489 (7) - etc.
    Do you see the pattern? A clap at every 3rd beat, it feels much better.
  9. 01:47:678 (1,2,3) - Either space them a little or stack them, this way it feels as 1/4, and it feels weird the DS is low, comparing to the previous part, as the DS there is quite high (1.2)
  10. 01:57:002 (6,7) - Improve the blanket, this looks a little weird imo
  11. 01:58:624 - Add a circle here, and make the spinner start 1/4 later, as the start of a slider has no emphasis (you've done it correctly at 01:39:165 (3) -
  12. 02:07:543 (4,1) - The low spacing is fairly awkward, as the previous part is all 1/2, this has same distance and it has 1/1
  13. 02:14:029 (1) - Starting from here, again, the claps. Do them at every 3rd beat, it fits more
  14. 02:32:475 (2,3,4) - This should be snapped to 1/6, not 1/4
  15. 02:41:597 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - Such low spacing here, up it a little. It looks a lot like a previous pattern, which was 1/4
  16. 02:51:327 (1,2) - Again, really low spacing
  17. 02:54:570 (2) - Why not follow the vocals more? It seems fairly undermapped
  18. 03:05:719 (4) - Move to 191:169, feels much better (still has 2.14 ds, but it's almost the same for the next note, which looks better)
  19. 03:32:273 (1,2,3,4,5) - Low distance and that slider makes it fairly confusing. Up the spacing, it'll also feel better as it's the build up for the kiai part
  20. 04:02:676 (9,10) - This is really hard to play, as you tap the stream, but you still see an other note, thus you click again, 1/4 early, resulting in a sliderbreak
  21. 04:05:919 (3) - Nc this, SV change
  22. 04:09:162 (3,1,2,3,4,5) - While this may look good in the editor, it does not when playing. Why? stacked notes like this do onot appear this way when , move all circles down/right a little to fix it (or make a custom stack). It's recommended to turn on Stacking in options so you know when it stacks
  23. 04:13:824 (1,2,3) - This should be snapped to 1/6, not 1/4
  24. 04:22:337 (3,4,5,6,7) - This star looks really squished. Please redo it, and either use the Create Polygonal circles tool (Offset=18, #objects is 5, DS is 1.3) Then Ctrl Shift S (enter 2) and Ctrl J, then make them flow good or put a note, and rotate by 144 degrees (repeat 4 times)
  25. 04:27:709 (16,1) - Decrease DS to make the stream look nicer (1.2/1.5=0.8DS)
  26. 04:32:370 (5,6,7) - Move back 1/4?
  27. 04:39:161 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - Refer to 04:22:337 (3,4,5,6,7), with 1.5-1.6 spacing
  28. 04:40:377 (1,2,3,4,5) - Why not make this go in s atraight line, it look really sloppy now as some objects are at 252,other at 250, other at 253, make it all the same X-coordinate. 04:40:985 (6,1) - Make these follow it as well
  29. 04:43:114 - 04:44:428 - Are these necessary? They feel really weird The 3rd one is fine, as it changes the real beat, but these 2 feel bad
Rest of the diff seems fine (except those things Nozhomi pointed out)

Good luck!
Mortem
694 posts
Joined July 2013
Topic Starter
Mortem
@baraatje123 - Fixed timing and some mentioned thigs.
@Nozhomi - Also fixed some placement / cosmetical issues.

Thank you both of you.
Updated.
Wafu
1,703 posts
Joined June 2011
Wafu
I'll fix the storyboard resolutions soon.
-Sh1n1-
3,404 posts
Joined September 2012
-Sh1n1-
Hi~~ M4M from your queue~~

Fake World



  1. 00:47:273 (1,2) - this blanquet can be improving
  2. 00:48:084 (3) - will be good is this slider is looking to the next note 00:48:489 (4) -
  3. 01:07:948 (4,5,1) - move to x:136 y:44 to add more quality.
  4. 01:14:029 (2) - highly overdone imo
  5. 02:34:705 (3,4) - mmm this blanquet can be improved :3
  6. 02:41:597 (1,2) - are you sure about the spacing?
  7. 03:18:894 (3,5) - spacing is different on each blanquet
  8. 04:00:246 (3,1) - It looks unsightly
  9. 05:40:779 (6) - ^ same as above

Best of Luck
Mortem
694 posts
Joined July 2013
Topic Starter
Mortem
@-Sh1n1- Fixed everything! Thank you.
Mortem
694 posts
Joined July 2013
Topic Starter
Mortem
Updated with Wafu's fixed storyboard.
YellowManul
429 posts
Joined December 2010
YellowManul
useful blanket irc mod by pro modder&mapper&lover - me
http://puu.sh/jlgWd/abfac75945.txt
meii18
3,577 posts
Joined October 2013
meii18
We made IRC

o3o
14:43 Mortem: I thought you are going to mod this through IRC... .-.
14:43 ByBy13: I check it now
14:44 Mortem: I see it.
14:46 ByBy13: add Pjecoo to tags
14:46 *ByBy13 is editing [http://osu.ppy.sh/b/565448 Tatsh feat. Sariyajin - ALIVE ~Itsuwari no Nai Sekai~ [Fake World]]
14:48 Mortem: ok
15:02 Mortem: Did laptop froze or what is happening?
15:02 ByBy13: sorry I have a chat but I check the mapset
15:02 Mortem: ok
15:04 ByBy13: 00:16:259 (3)- you can delete this note because I don't hear a beat here
15:05 Mortem: If i will delete it, there will be inconsistency with these: 00:17:475 (1,3,4,5) -
15:05 ByBy13: don't worry wait to mention
15:10 ByBy13: 00:17:475 (1)- As above on blue tick I don't hear any beats so maybe delete the repeat
15:10 Mortem: On blue tick
15:10 Mortem: there is a sound actually
15:11 ByBy13: ahh okay
15:12 ByBy13: 00:22:746 (5)- this note can be deleted I don't hear beats and the sounds suddenly stops at the previous tick
15:13 Mortem: there isn't such a note but ok.
15:13 Mortem: it's not there.
15:13 ByBy13: ok
15:20 ByBy13: 00:29:840 (1)- The NC should be here because there's no any reset of the vocals so remove the NC here.The NC should be on 00:30:246 (3)- where you clearly hear the reset of the vocals and there the piano became a bit louder
15:21 Mortem: ok
15:27 ByBy13: 00:37:340 (2,3,4,5,6)- why you not use the same spacing as you did at 00:25:381 (6,7,8.9)- ? There's the same intensify of the music as I can hear
15:28 Mortem: Fixed.
15:28 ByBy13: ok
15:30 ByBy13: 00:52:948 (8)- move the middle anchor of the slider to 58|188 to improve the flow between this slider and the next note
15:33 Mortem: Fixed.
15:33 Mortem: http://puu.sh/jpxI9.jpg
15:34 ByBy13: ok.
15:35 ByBy13: 01:06:327 (1)- The NC shouldn't be here since there's the same vocals.Remove this NC place the NC on 01:06:732 (7)- where I hear very clearly the reset of the vocals
15:36 Mortem: ok
15:41 ByBy13: 01:08:354 (1)- Remove the NC
15:42 Mortem: Done
15:43 ByBy13: 01:09:570 (1)- ^ and add the NC on 01:09:975 (3)-
15:43 Mortem: ok
15:44 ByBy13: 01:27:002 (3)- Missing clap on head ?
15:45 Mortem: nope
15:45 ByBy13: 01:16:462 (2)- I think this whistle placed on tail doesn't fit at all.Remove the whistle here and add the whistle on 01:17:273 (3)-
15:45 Mortem: or maybe
15:46 ByBy13: I think yes
15:46 Mortem: oh no, not missing.
15:46 Mortem: 01:33:489 (7,8) -
15:46 ByBy13: ok understood
15:52 Mortem: Um...you know what...
15:53 Mortem: Would you please post an IRC into thread + mod it like a thread, I actually felt asleep now.
15:53 ByBy13: yes ?
15:53 Mortem: And I have a job tommorow.
15:53 Mortem: *tomorrow.
15:53 ByBy13: ooh
15:53 Mortem: Or I'll do it like this
15:53 ByBy13: I can post the IRC
15:53 Mortem: I'll update the map as we did changes.
15:53 ByBy13: okay
15:53 Mortem: And you can continue with mod or check
15:53 ByBy13: okay
15:53 ByBy13: but not now
15:53 Mortem: ok

I'll continue the mod tomorrow night on another post

We had another IRC

12:58 ByBy13: hellpo
12:58 ByBy13: *hello
12:58 Mortem: hi
12:58 ByBy13: so you will gave kds to IRC post or mod/check ?
12:59 Mortem: I thought after you will make another post or something as you wrote there.
13:00 Mortem: But if you want to have it now...
13:00 ByBy13: welp ok
13:00 Mortem: Ok, no problem.
13:00 Mortem: CG, you earned a kudosu.
13:00 Mortem: Will you continue today?
13:01 ByBy13: sure
13:01 Mortem: Tell me, when you'll be ready.
13:01 ByBy13: ok
13:02 Mortem: I would like to finish it today if so...
13:02 Mortem: :x
13:02 ByBy13: ok
13:03 ByBy13: after I will play some maps
13:04 Mortem: ok
13:27 Mortem: Wouldn't you mind to start checking it please and then playing...Please ;_; - I won't disturb you any longer if we have it done.
13:27 Mortem: *Finished
13:27 ByBy13: welp ok
13:30 ByBy13: 01:35:921 (3,4)- blanket is off
13:30 Mortem: Fixed.
13:32 ByBy13: 01:45:651 (1,2)- just move 2 a bit to make the blanket perfect.The blanket seems off to me
13:32 Mortem: Fixed.
13:32 ByBy13: ok.
13:34 ByBy13: 01:48:084 (3)- you can try this [https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/3492166 shape] for a better flow
13:35 Mortem: I didn't put the red square in the middle.
13:35 Mortem: I made it more curvy.
13:35 ByBy13: okay
13:37 ByBy13: 02:17:273 (7)- you can move the middle anchor to 268|302 for a better flow
13:38 Mortem: Fixed.
13:38 ByBy13: ok
13:41 ByBy13: 02:24:975 (5,6)- you re-adjust the blanket like [https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/3492194 here]
13:42 Mortem: Fixed.
13:42 ByBy13: ok
13:46 ByBy13: 02:29:638 (1,2)- suggesting to use the spacing as you did at 02:34:502 (2,3)- because here the music seems to be intense
13:47 Mortem: Fixed.
13:47 ByBy13: good.
13:48 ByBy13: 02:30:448 (3,4)- why you don't mind to decrease the spacing a bit ? it feels forced to play in my opinion
13:49 Mortem: I think it's okay.
13:50 Mortem: Maybe I'll move it little bit closer.
13:50 ByBy13: okay
13:50 Mortem: Done
13:50 ByBy13: ok
13:54 ByBy13: 02:49:299 (3,4)- I hear a beat on 02:50:515 - so would you mind to use this [https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/3492249 rhythm] ? a note would follow the beat more better instead ignoring it with a slider
13:56 Mortem: Fixed
13:56 ByBy13: ok
13:59 ByBy13: 03:14:029 (1,2)- and 03:15:043 (4,5)- blankets are off
14:00 Mortem: fixed
14:01 ByBy13: ok
14:03 ByBy13: 03:18:488 (1,2,3)- you can add notes on 03:18:589 - and on 03:18:792 - since there's violin
14:03 Mortem: Leaving like it is.
14:04 ByBy13: okay
14:04 Mortem: It's a calm part.
14:04 ByBy13: ok.
14:04 Mortem: I don't see a reason to overmap it.
14:04 ByBy13: hmm ok
14:06 ByBy13: 04:00:246 (3,1,2,3)- off blanket
14:07 Mortem: Fixed.
14:07 ByBy13: ok
14:09 ByBy13: 04:20:412 (4,5,6,7)- why you don't remove drum sampleset here ? it sounds weird to me
14:10 Mortem: I'm leaving hitsounds like they are because they were really pain in the ass, especially these.
14:10 ByBy13: ok
14:12 ByBy13: 04:27:810 (1)- move the last anchor of the slider to 336|226 for a better blanket
14:13 Mortem: ok
14:13 ByBy13: 04:35:917 (1,2,3)- blanket is off
14:15 Mortem: fixed
14:17 ByBy13: 05:26:185 (7)- you can curve it a bit more like 05:25:374 (5)-
14:17 Mortem: Fixed
14:17 ByBy13: ok
14:18 ByBy13: 05:39:158 (2,3,4)- off blanket =w=
14:19 Mortem: Fixed
14:20 ByBy13: 05:52:131 (3,4,5)- blanket is off again
14:21 ByBy13: 05:55:374 (3,4,5) - ^
14:22 Mortem: Fixed
14:22 ByBy13: both >
14:22 ByBy13: ?
14:22 Mortem: yea
14:22 ByBy13: ok
14:23 ByBy13: 05:59:833 (3,4,5)- The blanket is off here as well
14:23 Mortem: Leaving this like it is because of flow.
14:23 ByBy13: ok
14:24 ByBy13: 06:13:212 (3,4,5)- this double blanket can be improved
14:25 Mortem: Fixed
14:25 ByBy13: ok
14:26 ByBy13: 06:17:874 (2,3,4)- again the blanket
14:26 Mortem: Fixed.
14:27 ByBy13: ok
14:27 ByBy13: 06:18:077 (3,4,5)- the next blanket is off aswell
14:28 Mortem: Leaving like it is.
14:28 ByBy13: ok
14:29 ByBy13: 06:26:590 (5,6,7) - off blanket
14:30 Mortem: fixed
14:30 ByBy13: ok
14:31 ByBy13: 06:39:563 (5,6)- you can make those notes symetrical
14:32 Mortem: fixed
14:32 ByBy13: ok
14:33 ByBy13: 06:49:698 (3,4,1)- you can make like [https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/3492395 this] to be more aesthetic and more neat
14:35 Mortem: I will leave it like it is.
14:35 ByBy13: ok
14:35 Mortem: After you click on 06:50:205 (1) - You will have cursor in the middle.
14:35 ByBy13: ahh ok
14:35 Mortem: And also this flow is ok.
14:35 ByBy13: ok
14:35 Mortem: As it is now.
14:35 ByBy13: okay
14:35 Mortem: Everything?
14:35 ByBy13: and...that's all
14:36 ByBy13: you can update for now
14:38 Mortem: Updated
14:39 ByBy13: ok
14:40 ByBy13: welp I will go to edit the post
14:41 Mortem: ok

I will leave a star for now. Just get 2-3 mods and get me back.
Hiyori
151 posts
Joined May 2015
Hiyori


Hello there Mortem! M4M req. Don't forget to vote on my poll. Thank you!


Fake World:
  1. 00:57:002 (1,4) - minor overlap issue (just to make it cleaner)
  2. 01:52:948 (4) - curve this to emphasize the vocals
  3. 01:55:381 - try this?
  4. 03:05:921 (5) - curve
    06:50:306 (1) - end spinner here instead? - 06:56:184

I'm not really good at modding Insanes but I hope this helps. Lovely map and amazing storyboard! Goodluck with ranking!
Mortem
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@Hiyori - Fixed most from your suggestions. Thanks.
Lasse
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Fake World
00:24:570 (4,5) - sth like this might play al little better
00:26:192 (10,1) - blanket maybe? or maybe make 00:27:002 (1) - straight?
00:35:921 (4) - might be better it this was rounder and blanketing 2
00:38:354 (1,2,3,4) - move the end of 1 down a bso it leads directly to the others. With these slow sliders players are very likely to completely hit the slider (instead of letting go a bit early) so it would fell smother
00:44:029 i'd recommend to either inster break time here or lower the drain to ~6.5
00:48:894 (6,8) - blanklet is minimally off
00:54:975 (5) - rotate end a bit upwards
00:55:786 (6) -rotate end little bit to the left, transition to 7 doesn't feel fitting
01:01:057 (1,3) - blanket is very minimally off
01:06:732 (1,2) - blanket?
03:01:462 (2,3) - blanket or move 3 up
03:50:111 (2,3) - fix blanket
04:05:311 (2,1) - move red point of 1 a bit right => better blanket
04:33:080 (1,3) - change 3 a bit to make this blanket look better
04:35:917 (1,2) - fix blanket
06:28:617 (4) - move a bit right (and eventually rotate and a bit) for better transition from 3
06:50:306 (1) - spinner hsould probably end a bit earlier
Mortem
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Updated. Thank you Lasse.
meii18
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meii18
Ok recheck

  • Fake World
  1. 00:52:746(7,8)- You made a jump here but I don't see any intensify of the music so you can decrease the spacing to 1.5 for example as you did at 00:48:084(3,4)-
  2. 01:02:678(4)- Missing whistle
  3. 01:56:800(5,6)- Here you can increase the spacing because as I can hear,the vocal becomes more stronger and increasing the spacing here it will emphasize the stronger vocal
  4. 03:22:948(1)- An ctrl+J here wouldn't hurt at all because it will give a better flow and cursor movement during gameplay
  5. 04:34:499(1,2)- I don't think the doublets will work here because sounds weird to me and I don't hear doublets hear.I suggest to remove 04:34:600(2)- and keeping 04:34:499(1)- for a better rhythm in my opinion
  6. 06:03:685(1)- This NC should be on 06:04:293(2)- because there's the reset of the instruments while on 06:03:685(1)- is not so considering removing the NC from this note and applying the NC on 06:04:293(2)- where is the reset of the instruments
  7. 06:05:915(1)- This slider can be rotated to 1 degress like here :arrow: http://puu.sh/jBOnv/7d51d7388b.jpg.Also you can rotate 06:07:131(3)- to 4 degress and then moving the last anchor of the slider to 247|73 like if you want an neat and aesthetic pattern like here :arrow: http://puu.sh/jBOzp/fce692ac1c.jpg
  8. 06:09:766(2,3)- If you want to make them symmetrical,move 06:10:171(3)- to 197|334 like in this picture :arrow: http://puu.sh/jBOI9/e31e943824.jpg
  9. 06:14:833(1)- As I can hear,the reset of the instruments are on 06:14:022(5)- so considering removing the NC from 06:14:833(1)- and applying the NC on 06:14:022(5)- where's clearly the reset of the instruments
  10. 06:15:442- A note placed here will works perfectly since there's still sound

That's all from now. Call me back

and no kds :D
Mortem
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Updated.
meii18
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We rechecked the mapset through IRC. Now looks fine and...Bubble #1

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Nyquill
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Krfawy
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Krfawy
Masz tutaj drugą chmurkę! :3 #2
Mortem
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Krfawy wrote:

Masz tutaj drugą chmurkę! :3 #2
Dziękuję bardzo za chmure. :3
Shiranai
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We did irc
Log
14:37 Mortem: Ah.
14:37 Mortem: I know why
14:37 Mako Sakata: What's that?
14:37 Mako Sakata: Been update my osu, but still have the old diff
14:38 Mortem: I accidentaly uploaded it with the old version.
14:39 Mortem: I mean...
14:39 Mortem: Yea, because the old osu file is there.
14:39 Mortem: I will remove it and update.
14:39 Mortem: So sorry...My fault, I didn't see that.
14:39 Mortem: Ok Updating.
14:39 Mortem: So sorry...
14:39 Mako Sakata: Okay
14:44 Mortem: It's because I have a new laptop and I moved all my files from the another one and there was some old files too, so this happened.
14:44 Mortem: Updated.
14:44 Mortem: It should be ok now.
14:47 Mako Sakata: Okay check now
14:47 Mortem: ok
15:01 *Mako Sakata is editing [http://osu.ppy.sh/b/565448 Tatsh feat. Sariyajin - ALIVE ~Itsuwari no Nai Sekai~ [Fake World]]
15:01 Mortem: mmhmm
15:01 Mako Sakata: How about stack this 00:57:002 (1) - above 00:57:205 (2) - ? following the harp may flows better there imo
15:02 Mortem: Ok.
15:02 Mortem: Fixed.
15:04 Mako Sakata: How about lower the jumps a bit on 01:09:975 (1,2) - ? I don't hear significant change on song imo, put a big jump like that kinda hard to follow
15:06 Mortem: Ok..fixed.
15:06 Mako Sakata: Make this 02:16:462 (5,6,7) - not overlapping might looks good too
15:07 Mortem: Fixed.
15:08 Mako Sakata: Delete finish on this 03:27:002 (1) - ?
15:09 Mortem: There is a finish here: 01:39:266 (1) -
15:09 Mortem: So I guess i will leave it like it is.
15:09 Mako Sakata: Okay
15:09 Mortem: Due to consistency.
15:12 Mako Sakata: Finish on this 01:58:624 (1) - might good imo, to make it same as 02:08:354 (1) - 
15:13 Mortem: Ok.
15:13 Mortem: Fixed.
15:13 Mako Sakata: 02:46:462 (7) - sv change on a slowdown, nc?
15:14 Mortem: Ok.
15:14 Mortem: Fixed.
15:16 Mako Sakata: 03:32:475 (2) - how about clap instead, then this 03:32:880 - finish sound?
15:16 Mortem: Ok. Fixed.
15:18 Mako Sakata: Tbh a complete stacked slider like 03:40:786 (3) - with 03:39:975 (1) - is hard to read imo, may mislead the player when playing
15:19 Mortem: It's not that hard to read.
15:19 Mortem: It may look like in editor, but no one hadn't problem with it.
15:19 Mortem: While testplaying.
15:19 Mortem: So I'm leaving it like it is.
15:19 Mako Sakata: You think so, okay theen
15:20 Mortem: If this will be the case of DQ, I wouldn't blame you, I would blame myself.
15:21 Mortem: Just sayin'.
15:24 Mako Sakata: For me it's no prob if get dqed, just need to reset the icon after
15:24 Mortem: Yea.
15:25 Mako Sakata: Maybe move this 03:44:839 (2) - somewhere else? so reverse on this 03:45:246 (3) - more visible
15:26 Mortem: Well, yea, but I have no idea where. :D
15:27 Mortem: Sorry to ask you, but do you have any suggestions?
15:29 Mako Sakata: Well if you ask me
15:29 Mako Sakata: Maybe stack above this 03:46:462 (1) - might good, so no need change the overall pattern
15:29 Mako Sakata: Then blanket on 03:45:246 (3,1) - can be improve more
15:29 Mortem: And also...during the gameplay, the 03:45:246 (3) - is normally visible.
15:30 Mako Sakata: I see during the play too, but to make it more visible is also good
15:31 Mortem: Yea. Looks 10% less shitier.
15:31 Mortem: Thanks.
15:31 Mortem: Fixed.
15:36 Mako Sakata: 05:28:719 (1) - A finish on that also might good, so the drum sequence sounds nicer
15:37 Mortem: Fixed.
15:38 Mako Sakata: Maybe improve the blanket here 06:07:942 (2,3) - 
15:38 Mako Sakata: I think that's all
15:38 Mortem: Ok. Going to update.
15:39 Mortem: And I'm not fixing that blanket issue.
15:39 Mortem: DS.
15:39 Mortem: I want to keep it constant there.
15:39 Mako Sakata: Suree
15:40 Mako Sakata: Btw can I have the metadata source? want to ask double check
15:40 Mortem: Sure.
15:40 Mortem: Hold on, let me find it.
15:41 Mortem: [http://vgmdb.net/album/25738 Here]
15:42 Mortem: Also, the song is in the "MATERIAL" album.
15:42 Mortem: So that's why there is Material in the tags.
15:42 Mortem: If there's anything that I forgot to add into tags, tell me.
15:45 Mortem: Anyways, it's updated.
15:45 Mortem: So you can double check it.
15:45 Mako Sakata: Okay prety dependable source at least
15:45 Mako Sakata: Suree
15:46 Mako Sakata: Let me redownload
15:58 Mako Sakata: Maybe you should fix this http://puu.sh/jHWcK/0b36b227b5.png, because may give effect on gameplay
15:58 Mako Sakata: http://puu.sh/jHWcK/0b36b227b5.png
16:00 Mako Sakata: The rest good to go
16:03 Mortem: Ok
16:03 Mortem: I fix it
What we fix:
1. Improve pattern and flow here and there
2. Improve hitsound
3. Etc

Metadata doubled check with Satellite, so let's give it a try :)
Shiranai
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Shiranai
Qualified!
meii18
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meii18
Yay c:
Rapthorn
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Rapthorn
Very relaxing, grats ^^
Bara-
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Bara-
Congratz!
Natsu
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Natsu
spacing like 06:18:887 (5,1) - is kinda uncomfortable to play (there are other similars) not a big deal though.
Harbyter
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Harbyter
just asking, is this sb accettable o,o
Shiranai
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Shiranai
As far as I can see it still aceptable and all the imagery file still can be categorized as PG, furthermore it's already well written on the description box about that. By the way it reminds me about a map with NSFW lyric https://osu.ppy.sh/s/244929 and yet it still can pass the qualified week with explaination on its description box
Garven
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Garven
So I'm kind of confused while reviewing this map. You skip parts of possible streamable parts which is fine normally like 05:46:557 - but then you keep going when the stream stops in the song at 05:47:671 (1,2,3,4) - and then use a long slider when the piano picks up again at 05:48:077 (5) -

Then you have a couple streams where there's just an extra note thrown in like 04:20:614 (6) - and 04:27:506 (14) -

Were these intentional design decisions? Please reply soon as the deadline is coming up and we will err on the side of caution with regards to this type of issue.
Mortem
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Mortem

Garven wrote:

So I'm kind of confused while reviewing this map. You skip parts of possible streamable parts which is fine normally like 05:46:557 - but then you keep going when the stream stops in the song at 05:47:671 (1,2,3,4) - and then use a long slider when the piano picks up again at 05:48:077 (5) -

Then you have a couple streams where there's just an extra note thrown in like 04:20:614 (6) - and 04:27:506 (14) -

Were these intentional design decisions? Please reply soon as the deadline is coming up and we will err on the side of caution with regards to this type of issue.
Yes, they are intentional. Because the stream 05:45:239 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - is normally following the piano part and I decided to put after stream a slider, that would follow a beat. I didn't want to put a stream there because there isn't any piano in the background during the slider. About the circles like these 04:27:608 (15,16) - or 05:47:671 (1,2,3,4) - They are basically follow the beat too, but I didn't find any other way, how to properly use/place them. If there is any other major issue in this beatmap and by anyone's opinion needs to be fixed, then I guess it'll be time for disqualification.
Garven
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Thanks for the quick reply. We'll take it into consideration.
Eni
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https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/10927157

Although this map is certainly playable, I wish there was a bit more consistency in the spacing and patterns.

That aside, grats on the rank!
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