yanaginagi - Tokohana

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Topic Starter
Rtyzen
This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on Friday, 17 October, 2014 at 10:53:05 PM

Artist: yanaginagi
Title: Tokohana
Source: ブラック・ブレット
Tags: Black Bullet Kisara Tendou Satomi Rentarou Aihara Enju Kuro no Juudan ending Everflower TV Size
BPM: 150
Filesize: 10387kb
Play Time: 01:26
Difficulties Available:
  1. Hard (3.02 stars, 198 notes)
  2. Insane (4.36 stars, 305 notes)
  3. Normal (1.86 stars, 120 notes)


Download: yanaginagi - Tokohana
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FIRST RANK HYPE :D


PLEASE REDOWNLOAD IF YOU DOWNLOADED BEFORE 15/9/14
Yes, yes, another Tokohana XD
1st on 30/8/14 by Flower
1st on 13/9/14
2nd on 14/10/14 by wcx19911123
1st on 17/10/14 by IamKwaN
mp3 (and video) from xChippy's mapset since 15/9/14 due to timing issues (Thank you ><)
http://yanaginagi.net/

ChiLynn, Estellia-, CelsiusLK, Z3R0Xx, xLoupGarou, Regraz, Gray Veyron, Haneure, _Stan, neonat, IamKwaN, [-Sophie-], Lasoki, Gaia, [-MrSergio-],MisakiYuri,Moo-chan,xxdeathx, eINess, LizeKotze, Kinshara,handsome,[ Shimakaze ],Hollow Wings,-Chata-,Miramono,skinnyjimmy,Xinely,streeteelf,Celizavia,SeNoZinD,trammiexo,Nekomata,Luckino,RandomEffect,Yauxo,FlobuFlobs,Alex Li,GanMineTMPL,xChippy,Flower, Xellie,Yuzu-,Desperate-kun, Cosmolade,Don,Andrea,wcx19911123

Thanks to Ringating for the new bg!
Poynting
Testplay





I tried
Topic Starter
Rtyzen

TopazSeth wrote:

Testplay





I tried
You tried. hard.
Edit: oops image died
Luccyous
Hi, from my Queue ~

[General]
Decrease the volumes, too loud.

You should remove the slider slide's sound (the sss thing on slider), it's pretty annoying. Find a silent .wav file, or download here. Copy to your Map folder, (If you don't know where, it's on your osu! folder > Songs > Your map name) then rename it.

with: *-sliderslide
Change * with: Normal, Soft, or Drum.

then, on your time Timing Panel check this.

[Normal]
00:30:989 (1) - Wrong placement.
00:44:178 (5) - Fix the blanket.
01:05:835 (5) - New Combo.
00:55:539 - Don't lower the volume on this one.
01:13:290 (6) - New Combo.

[Hard]
00:13:425 (1,1,1) - Change the sampleset and the volume with Soft and 5 %.
01:14:533 (6) - New Combo.

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I like the way you map your hard and insane. :D
Good luck!
Topic Starter
Rtyzen
Thanks for the mod :)

ChiLynn wrote:

Hi, from my Queue ~

[General]
Decrease the volumes, too loud. Decreased everything by 30%. Should be ok

You should remove the slider slide's sound (the sss thing on slider), it's pretty annoying. Find a silent .wav file, or download here. Copy to your Map folder, (If you don't know where, it's on your osu! folder > Songs > Your map name) then rename it.

with: *-sliderslide
Change * with: Normal, Soft, or Drum.

then, on your time Timing Panel check this.Done :)

[Normal]
00:30:989 (1) - Wrong placement.Done
00:44:178 (5) - Fix the blanket.Done
01:05:835 (5) - New Combo.Done
00:55:539 - Don't lower the volume on this one.Done
01:13:290 (6) - New Combo.Done

[Hard]
00:13:425 (1,1,1) - Change the sampleset and the volume with Soft and 5 %.Not quite sure exactly what you mean but I think done (?)edit: nvm I got it
01:14:533 (6) - New Combo.Done

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I like the way you map your hard and insane. :DThanks
Good luck!
Emilia
Okay Go!

00:00:825 (1,2,3) - Instead of http://puu.sh/9DF26/bbefa98fd5.jpg, I'd suggest this: http://puu.sh/9DF62/ca4399eadb.jpg
00:02:825 (5,6,1) - If you do follow this^, then make note 5 blanket note 4 better, and shift note 6 away from note 1.
00:04:025 (1,2,3) - Shift note 2 away from note 1, distance snapping is important. Also, make note 3 a reverse of note 2. Looks better that way.
00:07:225 (1,2,3,4) - Make note 1 '\' instead of '/'. Also, why would you keep note 1 to note 2 together if note 2 isn't together with note 3? Make note 3 directly after note 2. Also, shift note 4 further away from note 3. Distance snapping is important.
00:10:025 (2) - Curving note 2 makes flow better.
00:10:825 (4) - Instead of using a reverse slider and break after, I suggest something like that: http://puu.sh/9DFoT/713d35eb3e.jpg
00:19:335 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,6) - Distance snaps are very unnatural. Make sure they are similar to the front part. Especially note 3 and note 4 in the first combo, slightly confusing for normal players. I'd suggest you make the combos more natural as well, make sure it adheres to the song, eg. 1,2,3,4,5,1 instead of 1,2,3,4,1,2.
00:26:790 (4,5,6,7) - Unnatural distance snap again.
00:37:441 (2,3) - May be slightly confusing.
00:40:637 (8) - Dear lord, I've taught you how to make a good ~ slider. Please refer: http://puu.sh/9DFIs/2ec142ed6f.jpg
00:42:412 (1) - I suggest you add a note before this note.
00:44:187 (5,6) - I told you times before, you never use this pattern when they are one beat apart, only half a beat. Fix up. Also, combo problems.
00:48:092 (1) - A note before this maybe?
00:49:157 (3,4) - Normal player confusion. Fix up if you want.
00:55:903 (1,2,3,1,2,3,4,5) - Note 3 first combo ~ slider problem. Also, if you do wanna slow down note 3, please just slow down this entire part. Also, make note 3 a tad longer.
01:15:784 (1) - Add a note before this?
01:16:849 (3) - Make this note a tad longer, and shift it back in time.
01:21:820 (1,2) - Distance.
01:24:660 (5) - New combo here?
01:26:790 (7) - Maybe end with a spinner?
If you do use all my suggestions, there may be some flow problems. You can fix those yourself, since you don't want me to edit your map manually.
00:00:825 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6) - Flow here is weird, but I can't put my finger to it. Combo problems. Note 6 2nd combo, fix the loose blanketting. Note 3 1st combo, bring it out a little.
00:11:625 (4) - Flip this slider horizontally and re-position sliders before as well. Flow will be better. (Circular motion)
00:13:425 (1,1,1) - No man, just, PLEASE.
00:22:530 (2,3) - If you do wanna keep note 3 centered, then shift note 2 back.
00:25:725 (3,4,1) - Don't force the pattern upon the map if sliders don't make it happen. You can keep it, but its confusing.
00:29:275 (1,2,3,4) - A little awkward. Make the sliders all similar rotated a ~30 deg each. Keeps its flow better.
00:32:471 (4,5) - You can add a note upon note 4 in this one, sounds better and fits well for a Hard diff.
00:35:311 (4,5,6,7) - It feels better like that: http://puu.sh/9DIRk/06901c8302.jpg
00:37:264 (2,3) - Flows better if note 2 is reversed. Fix up flow if needed.
00:40:636 (7) - ~ slider problem.
00:45:252 (1,2,3,4) - You can add a note between notes 1 and 2. Also, flow from note 2 - 4 is slightly messy and confusing.
00:49:867 (5,6) - Curve note 5 for better flow.
00:51:997 (2,3) - Don't put these together.
01:00:163 (1) - Put something in place. Slow everything before in the slow part.
01:05:844 (5) - The note is too far from 4 to put together.
01:10:459 (2,3,1) - Same distance, different timing? Fix it up.
01:14:542 (6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13,14,15,16) - These things don't even exist in Hard Diffs. Stop.
01:16:672 (3) - This thing can afford to be a tad longer. Or use a note before this.
01:21:642 (1) - Distance.
01:21:642 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - Abnormal appearance of triplets. Fix up if you want to.
01:24:660 (5) - Its ugly, but its ok.
01:25:725 (6) - New combo here.
01:27:145 (8) - Same as Normal, you can end with a spinner.
00:02:425 (5) - Out of place. Fix up.
00:00:825 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5) - Combo placement.
00:05:225 (4,5) - Sliders a bit to short, may be confusing.
00:07:225 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5,6) - Refer to this bit for the Combo placement from before.
00:10:825 (4) - Shift this note further up along itself.
00:13:425 (1,1,1) - MATE.
00:29:630 (2) - Make this slider the same as the one before with a ~45 deg turn, better flow that way.
00:31:761 (4) - Make this same as slider 1 in same combo, but Ctrl-G and re-position.
00:33:358 (7,8,9) - Hitsounds a little too distracting for a triplet for the back. Its a recurring problem.
00:40:636 (6,7) - You can afford to make them further apart, they don't have to blanket.
00:47:559 (1) - This should be part of the combo before.
00:55:903 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,1,2) - I especially love this part. Keep this mapping style up.
01:03:891 (2,3) - Shifting these two sliders one beat before will make the flow exceptionally better than before.
01:06:554 (1,2,3) - Wouldn't suggest a triplet beat here. It sounds kinda awkward.
01:09:394 (6,7,8) - Here as well.
01:10:459 (2,3) - Make this part just one slider, like this: http://puu.sh/9DKFQ/06a80c1820.jpg
01:18:625 (5,6,7,8,9) - Make this another combo. Adjust combos after it.
01:26:790 (7) - You can make this the same as slider 5 in its same combo, but flipped 180 deg. Or you can end of with a spinner.


Sorry if I seemed too obsessed with spinners. Your mapping style is generally crappy and lazy, (Crappy as in beat placement, patterns and flow. Lazy as in Lazy blankets and flow) but certain accents make it a promising one. Accept more comments about your map and you will get better. I've modded a lot on your map as well, so if you don't wanna take my criticism, its fine. I get that. But do take note of your beat placements and patterns.

PS: Sorry for huge pictures. It brings my point across better.
PS.S: No more pics.
Topic Starter
Rtyzen
Thanks for the mod~ :) Updated!
Changed - Changed to the best of my ability - Thinking on whether or not to change - Don't think I need to change

Estellia- wrote:

Okay Go!

00:00:825 (1,2,3) - Instead of http://puu.sh/9DF26/bbefa98fd5.jpg, I'd suggest this: http://puu.sh/9DF62/ca4399eadb.jpg Done
00:02:825 (5,6,1) - If you do follow this^, then make note 5 blanket note 4 better, and shift note 6 away from note 1. Done
00:04:025 (1,2,3) - Shift note 2 away from note 1, distance snapping is important. Also, make note 3 a reverse of note 2. Looks better that way. Note 3 is a whole white tick away from note 2 so I cant reverse it, but I did what I can to fix it
00:07:225 (1,2,3,4) - Make note 1 '\' instead of '/'. Also, why would you keep note 1 to note 2 together if note 2 isn't together with note 3? Make note 3 directly after note 2.Both changed
Also, shift note 4 further away from note 3. Distance snapping is important.Distance snapping is correct.(0.80x)
00:10:025 (2) - Curving note 2 makes flow better.Done
00:10:825 (4) - Instead of using a reverse slider and break after, I suggest something like that: http://puu.sh/9DFoT/713d35eb3e.jpg Done
00:19:335 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,6) - Distance snaps are very unnatural. Make sure they are similar to the front part. Especially note 3 and note 4 in the first combo, slightly confusing for normal players.The distance snap may look unnatural, but it is actually all 0.80x, so they are actually all correct. That being said I did my best trying to make it appear more natural
I'd suggest you make the combos more natural as well, make sure it adheres to the song, eg. 1,2,3,4,5,1 instead of 1,2,3,4,1,2. Done
00:26:790 (4,5,6,7) - Unnatural distance snap again. This one is off. Fixed it
00:37:441 (2,3) - May be slightly confusing. Tried my best to change it
00:40:637 (8) - Dear lord, I've taught you how to make a good ~ slider. Please refer: http://puu.sh/9DFIs/2ec142ed6f.jpg I don't know how to change this. Maybe you should have included the white dots
00:42:412 (1) - I suggest you add a note before this note. Done
00:44:187 (5,6) - I told you times before, you never use this pattern when they are one beat apart, only half a beat. Fix up. As this is a normal diff, I don't see the need to change this. If more people suggest to change this I will
Also, combo problems.Done
00:48:092 (1) - A note before this maybe? Done
00:49:157 (3,4) - Normal player confusion. Fix up if you want. This one I think is unnecessary
00:55:903 (1,2,3,1,2,3,4,5) - Note 3 first combo ~ slider problem. Also, if you do wanna slow down note 3, please just slow down this entire part. Also, make note 3 a tad longer. Did my best to fix it
01:15:784 (1) - Add a note before this? Don't think it's neccessary
01:16:849 (3) - Make this note a tad longer, and shift it back in time. I think this is fine too
01:21:820 (1,2) - Distance. Done
01:24:660 (5) - New combo here? Done
01:26:790 (7) - Maybe end with a spinner? Don't like ending with a spinner, seems abit lazy to me. If more people ask me to change this I might
If you do use all my suggestions, there may be some flow problems. You can fix those yourself, since you don't want me to edit your map manually.
00:00:825 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6) - Flow here is weird, but I can't put my finger to it. I can't either
Combo problems.
Note 6 2nd combo, fix the loose blanketting.I think I fixed it? not sure
Note 3 1st combo, bring it out a little.I think I fixed it? not sure
00:11:625 (4) - Flip this slider horizontally and re-position sliders before as well. Flow will be better. (Circular motion) Fixed. Good suggestion :)
00:13:425 (1,1,1) - No man, just, PLEASE. Yes man, just, YES
00:22:530 (2,3) - If you do wanna keep note 3 centered, then shift note 2 back. Done
00:25:725 (3,4,1) - Don't force the pattern upon the map if sliders don't make it happen. You can keep it, but its confusing. I think I fixed it
00:29:275 (1,2,3,4) - A little awkward. Make the sliders all similar rotated a ~30 deg each. Keeps its flow better. Done. Good suggestion :)
00:32:471 (4,5) - You can add a note upon note 4 in this one, sounds better and fits well for a Hard diff. Done
00:35:311 (4,5,6,7) - It feels better like that: http://puu.sh/9DIRk/06901c8302.jpg Done
00:37:264 (2,3) - Flows better if note 2 is reversed. Fix up flow if needed. Done
00:40:636 (7) - ~ slider problem. Ignoring this
00:45:252 (1,2,3,4) - You can add a note between notes 1 and 2. Also, flow from note 2 - 4 is slightly messy and confusing. Done
00:49:867 (5,6) - Curve note 5 for better flow. Done
00:51:997 (2,3) - Don't put these together.Done
01:00:163 (1) - Put something in place. Slow everything before in the slow part. Not sure what you mean
01:05:844 (5) - The note is too far from 4 to put together. Done
01:10:459 (2,3,1) - Same distance, different timing? Fix it up. Done
01:14:542 (6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13,14,15,16) - These things don't even exist in Hard Diffs. Stop. I'll change it if more people ask to. A single 169 BPM stream in hard should be fine. Also it just fits too well :P
01:16:672 (3) - This thing can afford to be a tad longer. Or use a note before this. Done
01:21:642 (1) - Distance. I'm gonna leave this for now
01:21:642 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - Abnormal appearance of triplets. Fix up if you want to.No need. Sounds good
01:24:660 (5) - Its ugly, but its ok.Flows quite well IMO. still kinda ugly :P
01:25:725 (6) - New combo here. Done
01:27:145 (8) - Same as Normal, you can end with a spinner.Same as before
00:02:425 (5) - Out of place. Fix up. If you mean slightly off of the square, then yeah fixed.
00:00:825 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5) - Combo placement. Done
00:05:225 (4,5) - Sliders a bit to short, may be confusing. Shifted
00:07:225 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5,6) - Refer to this bit for the Combo placement from before. Done
00:10:825 (4) - Shift this note further up along itself. Done
00:13:425 (1,1,1) - MATE. M9
00:29:630 (2) - Make this slider the same as the one before with a ~45 deg turn, better flow that way. Done
00:31:761 (4) - Make this same as slider 1 in same combo, but Ctrl-G and re-position. Yeah that would work
00:33:358 (7,8,9) - Hitsounds a little too distracting for a triplet for the back. Its a recurring problem. Maybe your finish hitsound is too loud? I map in default skin and it sounds ok. It's mainly to keep the finish hitsound pattern in the mapset
00:40:636 (6,7) - You can afford to make them further apart, they don't have to blanket. I think it looks better with them together but I shifted them abit
00:47:559 (1) - This should be part of the combo before.
00:55:903 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,1,2) - I especially love this part. Keep this mapping style up. It's cuz there are more sliders than hitcircles. :P Generally makes it look cleaner. Thanks
01:03:891 (2,3) - Shifting these two sliders one beat before will make the flow exceptionally better than before. Do you mean before or after? cuz if it's before I need to shift the 1st hitcircle as well and I don't think it sounds as good
01:06:554 (1,2,3) - Wouldn't suggest a triplet beat here. It sounds kinda awkward. I feel this one and the next are like part of the pattern. I'm goingg to leave them for now
01:09:394 (6,7,8) - Here as well. ^
01:10:459 (2,3) - Make this part just one slider, like this: http://puu.sh/9DKFQ/06a80c1820.jpg Done
01:18:625 (5,6,7,8,9) - Make this another combo. Adjust combos after it. Done
01:26:790 (7) - You can make this the same as slider 5 in its same combo, but flipped 180 deg. Or you can end of with a spinner.Flipped the slider.


Sorry if I seemed too obsessed with spinners. Your mapping style is generally crappy and lazy, (Crappy as in beat placement, patterns and flow. Lazy as in Lazy blankets and flow) but certain accents make it a promising one. Accept more comments about your map and you will get better. I've modded a lot on your map as well, so if you don't wanna take my criticism, its fine. I get that. But do take note of your beat placements and patterns.

PS: Sorry for huge pictures. It brings my point across better.
PS.S: No more pics.
Emilia
Quick note on the 'yanaginagi' thing.

It could be due to the fact that people got lazy to pronounce Yanagi *pause* Nagi, it just went to Yanaginagi. Another source could be her page is named yanaginagi.net, and on her page, やなぎなぎ is used more often than やなぎ なぎ. So it doesn't really matter whatever you call her, be it Yanagi Nagi or yanaginagi.
Topic Starter
Rtyzen

Estellia- wrote:

Quick note on the 'yanaginagi' thing.

It could be due to the fact that people got lazy to pronounce Yanagi *pause* Nagi, it just went to Yanaginagi. Another source could be her page is named yanaginagi.net, and on her page, やなぎなぎ is used more often than やなぎ なぎ. So it doesn't really matter whatever you call her, be it Yanagi Nagi or yanaginagi.
To my knowledge, every ranked map on osu by yanaginagi has the artist listed as yanaginagi and not Yanagi Nagi, which leads me to believe it will not be ranked if you list it as Yanagi Nagi. So there is probably a greater reason as to why they do that, or perhaps it's a tradition or something
Ringating
from my bg improvement queue:

I went ahead and downloaded a HQ version of the show's outro and just grabbed a new, higher res screenshot of it. I then upped the contrast and altered the color curves a bit to give the image a bit more life. It has fewer background particles floating around than before, but oh well. Here you go:


also, I noticed your video still has audio on it, which is unnecessary since osu doesn't even take the video's audio track into consideration. Here is a new video file with no audio track (right click > save link as).

no kudosu
Topic Starter
Rtyzen

Ringating wrote:

from my bg improvement queue:

I went ahead and downloaded a HQ version of the show's outro and just grabbed a new, higher res screenshot of it. I then upped the contrast and altered the color curves a bit to give the image a bit more life. It has fewer background particles floating around than before, but oh well. Here you go:


also, I noticed your video still has audio on it, which is unnecessary since osu doesn't even take the video's audio track into consideration. Here is a new video file with no audio track (right click > save link as).

no kudosu wish I could give though :(
Thanks alot! Appreciate the help
CelsiusLK
Hello there from my queue

[General]
I recommend to use custom combo colour because using a default osu! combo colour may make the map look unfinish
Uncheck enable countdown
Uncheck widescreen support (You don't have SB)
Uncheck letter box during breaks (You don't have break time)

[Insane]
HP+1 ?
00:02:425 (1,2) - I suggest don't stack it cause stack it make flow look awkward
00:04:025 (1) - Make it repeat once that make it goes with the vocal and also delete 00:04:425 (2) -
00:27:855 (1,2,3) - Better triangle
00:29:275 (1,2) - Bad spacing
00:29:985 (3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11) - Recommend to put it continue with the end of 00:29:630 (2) -
00:33:891 (1,2) - Bad spacing
00:37:619 (4) - Move to x=352 y=256 for better flow
00:39:749 (2,3) - Suggest don't stack
00:40:459 (5,6) - Blanket?
00:43:832 (5,6) - Bad overlap
00:45:252 (1,2) - Better blanket?
00:50:222 (5) - Move to x=240 y=48
00:53:772 - to 00:55:548 - feel empty suggest to put some notes ( the instrument still play but it sound very soft )
00:55:903 - Suggest rhythm http://puu.sh/9HZUA/eec9849df0.jpg
00:55:903 - to 00:58:033 - I suggest to lower SV( Slider Velocity )
01:01:051 (8) - Delete it don't go with the song
01:01:583 (1,2) - Suggest change to slider
01:02:293 - to 01:02:293 - Add some notes
01:03:713 - Suggest rhythm http://puu.sh/9I0au/fdfb86443c.jpg
01:11:524 (5) - NC (New Combo)
01:13:477 (4,5,6,7,8,9) - Better pattern it's confusing for me
01:21:820 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,1,2,3,4,5) - Overuse hitsounds aren't good it make the player can't hear music

[Hard]
HP+1 ?
00:00:825 (1,2) - Better blanket
00:01:225 (2,3,4) - I suggest to use distance snap x1.2 here
00:02:025 (4) - NC
00:02:025 (4,6) - Bad overlap
00:04:825 (4) - Change to one repeat slider
00:05:225 (5) - Delete
00:10:625 (1,2,3) - Better blanket
00:25:548 (2,3) - A bit nazi, use distance snap x1.2 here
00:26:258 (4) - NC
00:32:648 (5) - Delete it don't go with the song
00:39:216 (3) - NC
00:40:636 (7) - For a easy wave slider make slider dot look like Z pic: http://puu.sh/9I3Kk/a09df77d50.jpg
00:53:772 - to 00:55:548 - Same as insane
01:02:293 - to 01:02:293 - ^
01:04:778 (3) - NC
01:14:542 (6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13,14,15,16) - I think stream is not good to put in hard diff
01:16:672 (3,4) - Bad overlap
Make sure spacing not too much or too low or it will not a hard diff

[Normal]
CS-1
Suggest to make all notes DS=x1.00
00:00:825 - Suggest rhythm http://puu.sh/9I30O/1ba2de3eed.jpg
00:07:225 (1,2) - Bad overlap
00:08:225 (3) - Move to x=320 y=64
00:09:625 - Suggest rhythm http://puu.sh/9I4eh/00bc1d658f.jpg
00:10:825 (4) - NC
00:20:400 (3,4) - Bad overlap
00:27:855 (1) - NC
00:28:920 - Delete NC
00:46:672 (3,1,2) - Blanket?
00:49:157 (4,5) - Bad overlap
00:53:772 - to 00:55:548 - Same as insane
01:02:293 - to 01:02:293 - ^

[Overall]
Better slider dots , bad slider dots can make slider look awful,Make the end dot stay at the end of slider
You can organize hitsounds more to make this map looks more fun
This map need more mods

Feel free to call me when this map is polished ;)
Good luck

I love this song <3
Topic Starter
Rtyzen
Thanks! EDIT: Applied all changes

CelsiusLK wrote:

Hello there from my queue

[General]
I recommend to use custom combo colour because using a default osu! combo colour may make the map look unfinish Oh yeah forgot about those. Fixed
Uncheck enable countdown Fixed
Uncheck widescreen support (You don't have SB) Fixed
Uncheck letter box during breaks (You don't have break time) Fixed

[Insane]
HP+1 ? Hmm maybe. Still deciding
00:02:425 (1,2) - I suggest don't stack it cause stack it make flow look awkward Fixed
00:04:025 (1) - Make it repeat once that make it goes with the vocal and also delete 00:04:425 (2) - I feel one reverse will make this part too slow
00:27:855 (1,2,3) - Better triangle lol not meant to be a triangle but ok fixed
00:29:275 (1,2) - Bad spacing Fixed I think
00:29:985 (3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11) - Recommend to put it continue with the end of 00:29:630 (2) - Ok I did it but I'm not sure if that would cause people to click too early because there is still one red tick in between 2 and 3
00:33:891 (1,2) - Bad spacing Fixed
00:37:619 (4) - Move to x=352 y=256 for better flow Fixed
00:39:749 (2,3) - Suggest don't stack Tried to fix
00:40:459 (5,6) - Blanket? I think it's fine
00:43:832 (5,6) - Bad overlap Fixed
00:45:252 (1,2) - Better blanket? Fixed
00:50:222 (5) - Move to x=240 y=48 Done
00:53:772 - to 00:55:548 - feel empty suggest to put some notes ( the instrument still play but it sound very soft ) I can't find anything to put in there that doesn't look unnatural
00:55:903 - Suggest rhythm http://puu.sh/9HZUA/eec9849df0.jpg I'll try it. Seems abit slow for insane though
00:55:903 - to 00:58:033 - I suggest to lower SV( Slider Velocity ) OK
01:01:051 (8) - Delete it don't go with the song Doesn't matter I changed the whole part from ^
01:01:583 (1,2) - Suggest change to slider No thanks
01:02:293 - to 01:02:293 - Add some notes I think it's fine. Not too long
01:03:713 - Suggest rhythm http://puu.sh/9I0au/fdfb86443c.jpg I did this but kept 2 and 3 as sliders instead of circles
01:11:524 (5) - NC (New Combo) Done
01:13:477 (4,5,6,7,8,9) - Better pattern it's confusing for me Made 7,8,9 Simpler
01:21:820 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,1,2,3,4,5) - Overuse hitsounds aren't good it make the player can't hear music Halved the volume. Should help

[Hard]
HP+1 ? OK
00:00:825 (1,2) - Better blanket Fixed
00:01:225 (2,3,4) - I suggest to use distance snap x1.2 here OK
00:02:025 (4) - NC OK
00:02:025 (4,6) - Bad overlap Fixed I think
00:04:825 (4) - Change to one repeat slider I think it's fine
00:05:225 (5) - Delete ^
00:10:625 (1,2,3) - Better blanket Tried my best to fix
00:25:548 (2,3) - A bit nazi, use distance snap x1.2 here Done
00:26:258 (4) - NC OK
00:32:648 (5) - Delete it don't go with the song Done
00:39:216 (3) - NC OK
00:40:636 (7) - For a easy wave slider make slider dot look like Z pic: http://puu.sh/9I3Kk/a09df77d50.jpg Fixed abit
00:53:772 - to 00:55:548 - Same as insane I think it's fine
01:02:293 - to 01:02:293 - ^ ^
01:04:778 (3) - NC That would look wweird IMO
01:14:542 (6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13,14,15,16) - I think stream is not good to put in hard diff Yea ok I got enough opinion to change it. Just long slider for now
01:16:672 (3,4) - Bad overlap Fixed. I don't know why it became like that
Make sure spacing not too much or too low or it will not a hard diff OK will run through again

[Normal]
CS-1
Suggest to make all notes DS=x1.00 OK changed everything to 1.00x
00:00:825 - Suggest rhythm http://puu.sh/9I30O/1ba2de3eed.jpg OK
00:07:225 (1,2) - Bad overlap ?? They are not overlapping?
00:08:225 (3) - Move to x=320 y=64 OK
00:09:625 - Suggest rhythm http://puu.sh/9I4eh/00bc1d658f.jpg OK
00:10:825 (4) - NC Yea ok
00:20:400 (3,4) - Bad overlap Fixed
00:27:855 (1) - NC OK
00:28:920 - Delete NC ^
00:46:672 (3,1,2) - Blanket? Tried my best
00:49:157 (4,5) - Bad overlap Fixed
00:53:772 - to 00:55:548 - Same as insane ^
01:02:293 - to 01:02:293 - ^ ^

[Overall]
Better slider dots , bad slider dots can make slider look awful,Make the end dot stay at the end of slider OK note taken
You can organize hitsounds more to make this map looks more fun I tried my best so far
This map need more mods Yeah duh

Feel free to call me when this map is polished ;)
Good luck Thanks

I love this song <3 Me too :)
[ Nyx ]
Hi Hi! Random mod :D because I love Black Bullet and I love it's ending!

Anyways just going to mod your normal difficulty.

So uh here ya go!

Note: These are suggestions feel free to change what you thinks should be changed. (Estellia- seems to have picked out many problems already haha...)

[Normal]

You may want to change your distance spacing to 1.0x, 1.1x or 1.2x in the beginning just so your notes don't over lap too much. You can change it back to 0.8x after the first spinner.

00:08:225 (3) - This note feels really out of place, flow wise. Move it over 3 grids to the right.
00:19:335 (1,2,3,4,5) - These notes are kinda iffy on flow.
^Maybe try this: http://puu.sh/9Irbt/57b9d9203d.jpg --> http://puu.sh/9Irdv/1a5a377ec2.jpg - Fix the spacing if you need to.
00:31:051 (1) - Move this note a little to the right. People may mistake it for being half a beat after the previous one. (I did when I played on DT T^T)
00:38:861 (4) - Move this over 1 grid right, so it's straight with (3) You can move the other notes over if you feel the spacing is awkward.
00:56:258 (2,3) - (2) doesn't flow nicely to (3) Unless this was intended and the flow you were going for was this: http://puu.sh/9ItIs/3f1642c55a.jpg If not you can change it to this so it flows better: http://puu.sh/9ItM1/79692dc3d5.jpg
00:59:098 (2,3) - these don't flow much, but there's really not much you can do, unless you want to re-map the slider(s) a bit.
01:20:400 (4) - This slider here you can move up 1-2 grid(s) if you'd like.

That seems to be it, flow wise anyways. I really like this map and ill keep a close eye on it and maybe mod the other 2 difficulties later if I have the chance. Sorry if this is all on flow,I really like it when things flow nicely.

Good Luck with your map and hope to see it ranked in the future!

Oh and if you have any questions feel free to PM me or Message me in game!
KittyAdventure
No Kudosu~

Tittle is Tokohana (TV Size) (You don't have space)
Mafumafu
Hi!
From the queue!
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[General]
1.Avoid using same SV in every diff.
Suggested SV(According to your BPM)
Normal:1.1-1.2x
Hard:1.6-1.7x
Insane:1.8-1.9x
2.You need more hitsounds!
You can try 24 clap ,which is a basic rhythm.
3.Use a space between Tokohana and (TV Size)
[Normal]
OD-1,because it is already very hard now.
In Normal Diff, You must obey the distance snap, in most cases,as ranking creteria says. I'd recommend enable Distance Snap.
A hitsounds suggestion: 00:00:825 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - use soft-whistle at the start of00:01:225 (2,4,6,) and (7)

Also the NC pattern suggestion: As to 00:00:825 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3) - I'd recommend NC at 00:02:025 (4) - and 00:03:625 (7) -

About blanket: You can use blanket to create beautiful ptterns:
For example: 00:25:370 (2,3) - You can do like this: http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1751260
1.00:07:025 (1) - 1/2 earlier.
2.00:49:157 (4,5) - Why not blanket here?
Overall, rhythm is fine. But why so many finish? You can also use clap or whistle.
[Hard]
00:10:825 (2,4) - For example this: You can use blanket to avoid this kind of overlap,also you can make this part very neat.
01:05:311 - Add a note here to make rhythm coherent.
01:05:666 ^
01:21:820 (2,3,4) - Dont spam Finish.
01:22:530 (6,7,8) - ^
01:27:145 (3) - This clap seems inappriopriate
01:27:145 (3) - Move to 256|194 to stack prefectly.
[Insane]
00:08:224 (4) - Unsnapped end, unrankable.
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00:06:925 (12,13) - remove. Streams ends at whiteline.
00:10:025 (5,2) - This blanket can be improved.
Dont spam Finish,use whistle instead.
00:48:092 (1,2,3,4,5) - Why not create a regular pentagon?
00:51:997 (4) - 337|110. The position now can cause misunderstanding.
01:14:542 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11) - Do not use too much Finish.

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Good Luck! :)
Topic Starter
Rtyzen
Thanks for your mod!

Z3R0Xx wrote:

Hi Hi! Random mod :D because I love Black Bullet and I love it's ending! Thanks~ You came abit early cuz I haven't finished the mod from the post before you so maybe some of these may be fixed already :P

Anyways just going to mod your normal difficulty.

So uh here ya go!

Note: These are suggestions feel free to change what you thinks should be changed. (Estellia- seems to have picked out many problems already haha...)

[Normal]

You may want to change your distance spacing to 1.0x, 1.1x or 1.2x in the beginning just so your notes don't over lap too much. You can change it back to 0.8x after the first spinner. Ended up changing all to 1.0x

00:08:225 (3) - This note feels really out of place, flow wise. Move it over 3 grids to the right. Fixed in previous mod
00:19:335 (1,2,3,4,5) - These notes are kinda iffy on flow. Blanketed abit better Still fixed the flow abit
^Maybe try this: http://puu.sh/9Irbt/57b9d9203d.jpg --> http://puu.sh/9Irdv/1a5a377ec2.jpg - Fix the spacing if you need to. OK followed this abit
00:31:051 (1) - Move this note a little to the right. People may mistake it for being half a beat after the previous one. (I did when I played on DT T^T) Fixed in previous mod
00:38:861 (4) - Move this over 1 grid right, so it's straight with (3) You can move the other notes over if you feel the spacing is awkward. OK
00:56:258 (2,3) - (2) doesn't flow nicely to (3) Unless this was intended and the flow you were going for was this: http://puu.sh/9ItIs/3f1642c55a.jpg If not you can change it to this so it flows better: http://puu.sh/9ItM1/79692dc3d5.jpg OK Fixed
00:59:098 (2,3) - these don't flow much, but there's really not much you can do, unless you want to re-map the slider(s) a bit. Remapped abit. Thinking about changing this whole part cuz the last 2 hitcircles don't haave anywhere to go that flows well :(
01:20:400 (4) - This slider here you can move up 1-2 grid(s) if you'd like. Changed in previous mod

That seems to be it, flow wise anyways. I really like this map and ill keep a close eye on it and maybe mod the other 2 difficulties later if I have the chance. Sorry if this is all on flow,I really like it when things flow nicely. Nah it's fine flow is important

Good Luck with your map and hope to see it ranked in the future! Thanks for modding~

Oh and if you have any questions feel free to PM me or Message me in game!

gokugohan12468 wrote:

No Kudosu~

Tittle is Tokohana (TV Size) (You don't have space) OK Changed! Thanks~
Regraz: I'll make changes from your mod when you're done~ I changed quite alot to normal since you started so you may want to look at the diff from the start again Sorry about that
KittyAdventure
I forget!

You need Easy Diff~
Topic Starter
Rtyzen

gokugohan12468 wrote:

I forget!

You need Easy Diff~
But this is an NHI spread?
Edit: Must have one Easy/Normal. I have one normal so it should be okay?
KittyAdventure
No Normal but Easy (this map is no BPM Slower)
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