1. Marathon (4.97 stars, 1436 notes)

Zero__wind wrote:

yes yes nice job~

regenz wrote:

http://osu.ppy.sh/u/204190 ทำลิ้งไปหน้านี้ด้วย mp3 Edit + merge by regenz

1. You should add all songs titles to tags.
2. Remove "Shana" from tags - its already part of your title
3. Some titles in your Creator's Words spelled wrong:
   
   
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   Check this please:
   http://www.kotoko.asia/disco/
   http://www.ivesound.jp/music/
   
   Blaze -> BLAZE
   Yoake umarekuru shoujo -> Yoake Umarekuru Shoujo
   Sociemetry -> Sociometry
   Hishoku no sora -> Hishoku no Sora
   Light my fire -> Light My Fire
4. 07:03:049 - set preview point here for more epicness
5. Will you add kiai time?
6. You must add reversearrow to complete your skin
7. particle100.png, particle300.png, particle50.png, snow.png seems codeless, remove them
8. Timing feels off. You should catch someone who really good at it.

1. This part sounds better with normal sampleset
2. 00:20:419 (6) - NC follow new part of music
3. 00:35:041 (1) - Add finish for consistency?
4. 00:38:949 (4,5) - This is kinda hard to hit those notes, i suggest you make slider instead or add 2 reverses at 00:38:697 (3) -

1. This part sounds better with normal sampleset
2. 00:50:928 (1,2,3) - Please keep consistent spacing between those notes
3. 00:53:389 (1) - Add whistle follow vocals
4. 00:53:858 (2) - ^
5. 00:53:858 (2,3) - I wold recomment you change them to slider to follow vocals better
6. 00:55:967 (6,7) - Shorter (6) by 1 tick and begin (7) at this point to follow vocals better:
   
   
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7. 00:56:787 (8) - it sounds kinda weird, how about add note at 00:56:670?
8. 01:08:741 (12,13) - Please keep consistent spacing here, it very hard to catch (13)
9. 01:12:608 (11) - Finish at tail

1. 01:48:642 (4,5,6) - I prefer perfect stack instead of manual one, it doesnt looks good here
2. 01:54:385 (5,6) - Thats kinda boring. How about change those 2 notes to slider?
   
   
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3. 01:54:736 (7) - That finish is unneeded imo. If you want to have it to emphazire vocals reduse volume at it a bit
4. 01:55:674 (3) - ^
5. 01:56:611 (5) - And you can add here one to emphazire vocals

1. 02:17:753 (4) - NC to make this stack more readable
2. 02:22:525 (6) - NC
3. 02:35:252 (5) - Please dont use normal-sampleset here, it doesnt fit IMO

1. 02:56:914 (2,3) - Dont really like how they flows, mirrored sliders imp doesnt fit. Try something like this instead?
   
   
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1. 03:12:189 (1,2,3) - same as 01:54:385 - that would make your placement more variable here!
2. 03:25:709 (1,2,3) - That part is kinda hard to hit: make spacing consistent maybe?
3. 03:28:667 (5) - Ctrl+G?
4. 03:30:780 (5,6,1) - Pretty much same as above, that's really uncomfortable to play at this part. Keep consistent spacing.
5. 03:40:498 (1,2,3) - I dont see any reason to keep single notes here. Dont ignore cool drum rhythm, make stream here instead ;p

1. 03:45:991 - 03:47:259 - add spinner here
2. 03:50:216 (4,5) - Merge them to one slider to follow vocals better here
   
   
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3. 03:52:751 (1,2) - Remove (2), make (1) one tick longer - for better rhythm
4. 04:00:885 - Add note please, there is no reason to random break stream here
5. 04:05:744 (2,3) - Revert them to slider
6. 04:18:103 (6) - why normal-sampleset here?

1. 04:28:556 (4,5) - Raise DS to 0.80 for better playability
2. 04:29:569 (1,3) - Hitnormals sounds kinda random here... If you're following drums then why you ignored another one? At least reduse volume here please
3. 04:31:191 (1) - Remove finish from slider
4. 04:35:448 (8) - Missed finish at the beginning/list]
   
   <Sense>
   
   
   1. Normal-sampleset works better at this part
   2. 05:04:232 (6) - Ctrl+G?
   3. 05:10:303 (5) - NC follow pattern
   4. 05:11:017 (9,1) - this pattern looks kinda confusing, stack them perfectly please
   5. 05:21:374 (6) - NC follow pattern
   6. 05:27:089 (6) - same ^
   7. 05:31:017 (6) - Remove useless clap
   <Hishoku no Sora>
   
   all good but why you spamming with normal-finishes with normal-sampleset while using soft sample in a whole part? change to soft please or use normal-sampleset at this part
   
   <Joint>
   
   
   1. 06:20:740 (8) - it plays kinda weird, can you please keep DS consistent? Jump to next note feels more natural
   2. 06:22:240 (1) - Missed finish at the beginning
   3. 06:25:407 (2) - ^
   this part needs more whistles...
   
   <U/n>
   
   
   1. Normal sampleset feels better at this part
   2. 06:42:913 (5,6,1) - Spacing issue. Also i'd suggest you revert (5) and (6) to slider to follow rhythm better
   3. 06:54:326 (2,3) - Re-arrage them like this?
      
      
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   <Light My Fire>
   
   
   1. Normal sampleset works better at this part
   2. 07:12:403 (5,6,7) - Keep consistent spacing please
   3. 07:23:049 (5,6,1) - There are tiny stacking issure
   <Serment>
   
   
   1. 07:58:356 (1,2) - try this:
      
      
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Gloria Guard wrote:

Hi.

[General]

This is map different part offset a little slow or fast, You check this map all part offset.
You change source Shakugan_No_Shana -> Shakugan No Shana (remove _ <-)
This is map offset issue, You'll change this part offset.

Offset change list

00:06:806 change -> 6780 or 6790
01:28:721 change -> 88750
02:06:162 change -> 126150 and I'm sure 02:13:434 this point is different bpm offset here.
02:42:355 change -> 162370 or 162380
03:12:189 change -> 192200
04:24:705 change -> 264710
06:35:740 change -> 395710
07:03:049 change -> 423060 or 423070
07:33:720 change -> 453720

all fixed

[Shana]

01:42:080 (2) This is slider direction a little up is better flow imo. hmm, i think its ok

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04:11:107 (6) Umm, This is note stack by (4) note?, I think more clean pattern imo. like this is better flow imo.
04:57:982 (7) Why this note spacing is small?, it's a little confuse, well I suggestion different pattern ok

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06:54:653 (3) I'm understand this pattern intended but i don't like this pattern flow If you change Ctrl+G is better flowok
07:13:855 Why you don't add this point, You know this point hear drum sound also you don't add this point I think players really confuse.ok
07:15:145 (5,7) This is (5) slider end add clap and (7) slider add clap is good sound here. ok
07:21:113 (3,4,5,6) I don't understand this rhythm, because a little awkward, I suggestion you put the lyrcis rhythm is better rhythm. I think the current one is more fit.

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07:27:210 (6) Here, there is no reason to put New combo. Remove NC ok

GitahMuttan wrote:

I think it should be "Various Artists" on the title, right?

Anyway, epic map.

captin1 wrote:

owo

[Timing]

Checkin all timings, cause that's what I do :3

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Offset: 6,784ms	BPM: 119.00

Offset: 46,823ms	BPM: 128.00

Offset: 88,746ms	BPM: 128.00

Offset: 126,148ms	BPM: 132.00

Offset: 162,380ms	BPM: 136.00

Offset: 192,196ms	BPM: 142.00

Offset: 227,681ms	BPM: 142.00

Offset: 264,710ms	BPM: 148.00

Offset: 296,730ms	BPM: 168.00

Offset: 336,693ms	BPM: 169.00

Offset: 367,584ms	BPM: 180.00

Offset: 395,716ms	BPM: 184.00

Offset: 423,082ms	BPM: 186.00

Offset: 453,716ms	BPM: 212.00

^ all fixed

[Shana]

you saw me play it heh, it's quite nice, just gonna be picky with flow/rhythm

00:11:075 (2) - I think this feels better raised up above (1), instead of below it, since this feels more natural into the next notes ok

01:32:031 (5,6,7,8) - I think you should unstack these just a bit and have them lead to the next part, so the player can keep at least a little motion going through these doubles, like as if they were a 1/4 slider ok

01:50:429 (4,5) - I think these two are a bit too close together, since the player will move a bit quicker coming off of this slider. I would suggest moving 4 to the right and up some, so the distance between it and 3 is about the same but between 4 and 5 is larger I think the current one is fine

01:52:421 (5,6) - this seems a bit odd, since the vocal is 1/2 before the circle here, I would remove this repeat and have at least some sort of click on this vocal note 01:52:890 - here ok

01:56:171 (4) - along the same lines as ^, would change this to two circles so there are clicks on the strong notes nah, not for this. I think the current one is more flow.

03:04:438 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - move this stream to the right a bit? more slider leniency/moving faster off of it yada yada stuff, it just feels better :3 ok

03:14:523 (2,3,4) - I think making this triple unstacked, but in a line with the slider would be cool, and a bit smoother ok

03:20:016 (2,3,4) - ^ ok

04:08:807 (3) - I think this should have a ctrl+ g on it, for nicer flow (moving the notes right after, of course :3). The triple 04:09:441 (6,7,1) - here may become an issue because of this, so unstacking it I think would help with that yes you're right but I still don't have other idea (flow note) for this now so i will keep it in mind.

04:36:264 (1,2,3,1,2,3) - For these, I think you should reverse 2 and 3, so the triangle goes counter clockwise instead of clockwise. Reason for this is how it moves into the next part, it feels odd going into 04:37:480 (4,5,1) - after as it is. Having the 3 far to the right sets up this stream much more easily the 3 (second triangle)'s distance will far form 1 too much imo so don't change.

05:13:517 (6) - (nazi) This slider would look better a bit higher up, so it keeps with the visual flow of the sliders around it owo ok

06:55:764 (3,4) - ctrl + g on these perhaps? the square jump pattern would feel cool here ok

07:07:263 (7) - this note feels a bit too out of place among all the cool flow things you do, maybe you can grab both 07:07:263 (7,8) - and move them towards the top left corner? change a bit different.

07:45:889 (3,4) - this is similar to ^, but perhaps to a lesser degree, due to the difference in bpm it feels a bit better, but feel free to change in a similar way if you agreed with the one before no for this

officially a big fan of your style, it looks quite nice and plays great, so props to you (which comes in the form of stars ) thanks so much captin ><
P A N next elite mapper :3

good luck!

Unsfamiliar wrote:

Hii Pan :3

m4m (If you think this is ok)

Starto~

Shana

1. 00:31:742 (4) - Try new combo. I wouldn't say it was hard to read before, but with new combo it is easier to read the double 00:31:742 (4,5) because of the overlap.
2. 00:37:288 (2) - Move this to x:152 y:244. The angle created with 00:37:540 (3) previously felt strange for me. I think you should either move (2) like I said or rotate (3) a bit to create more circular flow.
3. 01:07:682 (9) - New combo to break out of the previous pattern; easier to read and looks neater.
4. 01:32:144 (6,7) - I think it works better if you add a slider from 01:32:144 to 01:32:378 instead of the two doubles. A slider is justified by the lyric and is more comfortable to play.
   
   Like this

   
5. 02:19:670 (4,5) - ^ Actually you could do the same as above. It maintains the same rhythm you have but also makes use of the lyric
6. 02:58:482 (1,2,3,4) - This part seems a bit strange to me. I think you should match the lyrics better by trying something like:
   
   this

   
7. 05:30:569 (4) - I think this 1/8 slider should actually start at 05:30:480. You can then extend it to 05:30:658. This matches the song and is also easier to hit since it is not on the blue tick.
   
   Try

   
8. 06:35:716 - Seems like the volume got really loud form here. Or is it just me?
9. 07:03:082 - Ok, this song is definitely louder. Is this intentional?
10. 08:14:329 - Not sure if this is how the song actually ends, but I'm not a fan of the sudden cut off. It feels kind of anticlimactic in my opinion

Ok sorry for poor mod, this map is too good! Love the hit sounds; thanks for sharing some Shana with us

Star and good luck!

Giralda wrote:

omg Shana <3333

1. add some silence slider-slide.wav files? there are a custom hitsounds a lot. but silence slider-slide.wav is only one.

1. 00:47:760 (4,5,6) - not good rhythm for me. because this notes is not match of the vocal. so like this?
   
   
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2. 01:20:338 (1) - it is hard that stream start is blue line. so remove one repeat and add note 01:20:573 - ?
   
   
3. 01:29:683 (4,5) - like this? (same rhythm at 01:33:433 (2,3) - 01:37:183 (3,4) - etc)
   
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4. 01:58:746 (5) - add NC? seems good for me.
5. 02:06:148 - probably, BPM is not correct. it sounds like a bit late. but sorry, i can't suggest correct.
6. 02:58:482 (1,2,3) - sounds weird.... mapping is possible this part...? i felt that is hard for me.
7. 03:36:913 (3,4,5) - like this rhythm?
   
   
8. 04:25:318 (3) - add whistle of the slider end.
9. 04:28:764 (5) - ^
10. 04:32:007 (3) - ^
11. 04:33:426 (8) - add whistle instead of clap.
12. 04:38:493 (3) - add whistle of the slider end.
13. 05:07:444 (10) - add clap of the slider start. it is really match the note for me.
14. 06:18:749 (2) - add finish of the silder start? exist cymbal sound here. or just add clap.
15. 06:20:083 (6) - you forgot clap here? ofc slider start.
16. 06:45:743 (1) - hard to read this slider. so like this?
    

1. 00:09:935 (6,7) - fix distance snap (looks ugly)
2. 00:19:641 (3,4,1) - 0,8x DS?
3. 00:30:229 (7) - Just saying that here you can put 1/4 stream, but up to you
4. 01:16:471 - 01:16:823 - 1/4 stream here?
5. 01:32:730 (9) - move it further? (for example 48 272)
6. 01:39:996 (10) - that 1/4 slider doesnt fit overall, I suggest to put circle here
7. 01:46:324 (3,4,5) - fix DS
8. 02:07:057 (3,4,5) - ^ and maybe 5-circle few grids up?
9. 02:17:512 (3,1,2) - unstack 3-circle?
10. 02:20:238 (7) - make something like this? better flow http://puu.sh/4UMo3.jpg
11. 02:58:482 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3) - In my opinion that part shouldnt be mapped (little break), it confuses rhythm a lot and putting circles just for vocal is meh
12. 03:22:125 (8) - move it further? (example 48 220)
13. 03:24:871 (1) - I suggest to make it more visible (delete overlap)
14. 03:28:674 (5) - Make something like this? To accent beats http://puu.sh/4UN9G.jpg
15. 03:31:843 (2) - I suggest to delete that circle
16. 03:35:435 (9) - http://puu.sh/4UNja.jpg?
17. 04:14:934 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - Im not fan of that kind of patterns, maybe repeat 1/4 slider on 5-circle or just unstack all triplets? Up to you.
18. 04:31:196 (1) - try this rhythm?
    
19. 04:38:493 (3) - http://puu.sh/4URuQ.jpg ?
20. 04:47:007 (6) - I suggest to move it further, example http://puu.sh/4URCu.jpg
21. 05:01:908 (7,8,9,1) - Always when I play this pattern, my cursor always want to go down after 9-circle, In my opinion it will have better flow if u do atleast ctrl+g on 1-slider
22. 05:47:344 (6) - That section can be improved a lot, try this rhythm
    
23. 06:09:916 (8) - ctrl+g?
24. 06:39:139 (6) - ^
25. 06:51:205 - add circle for more variety in that section?

1. Probably the suggestion I have repeated the most throughout all my mods: Reduce the BG's filesize from 674 KB to somewhere around 200 to decrease the size of the mapset's package? Only gives a 400 KB difference though, but I think you should try it.
2. Eight minutes without an SB or anything? This will make the play really monotonous and boring. At least try to find someone to make a simple SB, like showing the title of the song that is currently playing.
3. Akai Namida where (Yeah, still feeling that disappointed about it, especially because it can be a good beginning to the compilation, and because this compilation is technically incomplete lol. Seriously, still; the song has a lot of 1/4s and some 1/8 triplets, so it will still feel like a 172 BPM map. Feel free to ignore this one anyway; I can feel how hard it is to remake the mp3, retime the song, map it, and then upload the new mp3...)

1. 00:20:145 (1,2) - Combine them into a slider to follow the vocal between them? It feels more accurate that way, IMO.
2. 00:20:649 (3,4,5) - I think there shouldn't be a jump between (4,5), but between (3,4) instead to follow the vocal pitch.
3. 00:36:027 - The vocal is stronger here, compared to 00:35:901. Either add a circle here or end the 00:35:523 (3) slider here. Just saying; it's awkward to see the strong vocal unmapped here.
4. 00:38:170 (1,2) - Remove (2), add a circle at 00:38:548, and add a repeat at (1)? The instrument at 00:38:170 - 00:38:422 is far weaker than the one at 00:38:548, and starting a slider on a blue tick (where the instrument is weak) and ending it on a red/white tick (where the instrument is usually weaker) will be a bad choice as players will have a hard time trying to follow the instruments. By changing the rhythm to that, the stronger instrument will be emphasized better and more correctly.
5. 00:51:510 (4,5,6) - It's hard to read this as a series of 1/4s because of the spacing. The flow is weird too, anyway, because of the direction and angle of the movement you need. Try making a short 1/4 stream instead?
6. 01:18:463 (1,2) - Swap NC? I think the reason is already obvious, but if it's not, it's to follow the stanza.03:39:237 (1,2,3,4) -
7. 01:57:808 (1,1) - The two NCs here are unnecessary. Why should they be here if there isn't any spacing change or just anything that can justify them?
8. 02:10:693 - There is a strong vocal here, and it's not good to leave it unmapped. Try to test the map here and you'll know why. Try to map this tick?
9. 02:11:148 (8,1) - Ctrl+G for the rhythm, so the slider will be placed before the circle? Goes alongside the vocal far better than what you have now, IMO.
10. 02:14:329 - There is a strong vocal here. Why did you leave it unmapped? Change 02:14:216 (5,6) to this instead? (The new (5) starts at 02:14:329.)
11. 02:17:739 (1) - Remove the NC here? I mean, why do you add one here... I just can't see the reason why.
12. 02:17:966 - Same as 02:14:329.
13. 02:33:420 (6,1) - Swap NC? Well, do I need to say the reason?
14. 02:42:380 - 03:05:321 - The claps are almost inaudible here.
15. 02:53:629 (2,3) - Remove (3), add a circle at 02:54:071, and add a repeat for (2) to follow the song better?
16. 03:24:449 (3) - I think this really needs a clap to keep the hitsound consistent, even if this is intentional.
17. 03:30:787 (5,1) - Swap NC please~
18. 03:39:237 (1,2,3,4) - The flow will be better if you made a jump from 03:39:026 (5) to this pattern.
19. 03:40:505 (1,2,3) - And try to make a triangle jump to emphasize the instrument at the end of the song?
20. 03:50:216 (4,5,6) - No, don't do this please. The flow of 03:49:371 (1,2,3) makes the sliders' change of spacing hard to read.
21. 04:05:427 (1,5) - Also swap NC?
22. 04:17:047 (3,4,5) - I find the three notes making a weird flow if spaced normally. Try to make a square jump by moving these circles around? It should improve the flow.
23. 04:34:642 (2) - There is a cymbal's sound from the song, so add a finish to follow it?
24. 04:36:264 (1,2,3,1,2,3) - According to the instruments, (1,2,3,1,2) should have been a star (or just make a pattern with those five circles), and the second (3) shouldn't be a part of a pattern with (1,2,3,1,2) anymore because the lyric is being sung already there. Just saying.
25. 04:41:939 (1,2,3,4,5,1) - The inversion of the problem above. This one will fit the song better if they were two triangles instead of a star with a circle in the center of them.
26. 04:43:561 (5,1,2) - It would be better to make a jump between (5,1) instead of (1,2) to emphasize that cymbal at the end of (1).
27. 04:46:804 (5,6,1) - I'd like to see two jumps here to, again, emphasize the cymbals, just like 04:45:182 (5,6,1).
28. 05:30:301 (3,4) - Make a jump between these two objects, please. Having to hold a slider while the spacing is consistent... doesn't make the flow quite right here.
29. 05:41:663 (1,3) - Swap NC?
30. 05:47:521 - Use S:C1 sampleset for the finish here? I think it's obvious why...?
31. 05:58:882 - ^
32. 06:15:083 (1,2) - Swap NC, again?
33. 06:16:916 (6,1) - ^
34. 06:20:416 (7,8,1) - Umm, according to the instruments (again), it should be (8,1) that has a bigger distance than (7,8), not the inversion.
35. 06:23:583 (5,1) - Swap NC to follow the change of the instruments' rhythm here?
36. 06:26:249 (5,1) - ^
37. 06:42:563 (4,5,6) - Feels awkward to play because of the intensity from the previous patterns. Make the spacing bigger here so it will be more intuitive?
38. 06:45:987 (10,11,1) - Spacing error?
39. 06:55:281 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1) - I just want to say that the rhythm here is extremely inaccurate and will cause a big confusion to the players because they are just not actually following anything. Remove 06:55:933 (4) because the instrument is too subtle compared to the vocal around it, then combine 06:55:770 (3,5) into a 1/1 slider, change the hitsound at 06:55:607 (2) from finish to whistle because the instrument here isn't that loud, then remove 06:56:422 (1), add a circle at 06:56:422, and add a 1/2 slider that begins from 06:56:585 to follow the instrument there. This is just a suggestion on how to improve the rhythm, though; the point is, this part feels really uncomfortable to play.
40. 06:56:911 (2,1) - Make the spacing bigger, if possible? Syncopated beats (beats that are off from the usual rhythm) can be made to work better in terms of flowing along with the notes before and after it if you make the spacing of the objects between those that represent the syncopated beats and the ones that are on the usual rhythm bigger.
41. 07:03:082 (1,2) - Just wanna say that these might be mistaken as being spaced by 1/2 beats instead of 1/1 because of how they are placed. Place them so they actually look far away from each other?
42. 07:06:469 (5,6) - I'd like to see a jump here to emphasize the cymbal at the beginning of (6), actually, but it's fine as is, so I don't really care. However, I think (6) needs to be NC'd to, again, emphasize the cymbal (that symbolizes the starting of a new rhythm pattern, just like the beginning of a new stanza).
43. 07:03:082 (1,2) - Also add an NC here for the same reason as the suggestion above?
44. 07:12:114 (4) - ^
45. 07:17:114 (5) - ^
46. 07:21:146 (6,1) - Swap the NC here to follow how the stanza works?
47. 07:28:243 (6) - Remove the repeat and then add a circle at 07:28:888 (coordinate: 484,32 / DS: 1,99x) to emphasize the cymbal at 07:28:888 better? Using the end of a slider doesn't really do well to accompany the instrument there.
48. 07:41:074 (2) - Move this to 07:40:932 to follow the vocal? The vocal is stronger than the instrument here, thus skipping the vocal will cause confusion while playing through this pattern.
49. 08:00:885 (5,1) - At this point, I have realized that you're following the lyrics most of the time, but it just won't work sometimes, like this one. Swap the NC here?
50. 08:02:866 (3,4,1,2,1,2) - Well, I think the jumps are supposed to be made between (3,4), (1,2), and (1,2), not (4,1) and (2,1). The cymbals are far less emphasized with the current pattern, and will make the players feel that the flow here is so forced.
51. 08:05:838 - Add a circle here to follow the instrument and to mirror 08:05:414 (1,2)'s pattern, similar to 08:10:366 (3,4,5,6), so it will be more intuitive?
52. 08:12:206 (1,2,3) - I don't think players will read these sliders as being spaced by only 1/4 beats apart, looking at how you placed them. This pattern doesn't seem like it's going to work well, in my opinion, because it's easy to misread it...