1. Hanashi (5 stars, 1982 notes)

Nephroid wrote:

Still new to modding. ~

The combo colors look dull, and the green doesn't really match the background. Try this:

SPOILER

Combo1 : 128,128,128
Combo2 : 0,128,255
Combo3 : 0,64,128
Combo4 : 248,7,109
Combo5 : 128,0,64
Combo6 : 192,192,192

No i prefer my colors

01:19:315 (4,5) - The start of the sliders don't have hitsounds, which feels weird when playing. I know but i like it

01:20:798 (1) - The syncopation is a little awkward. Maybe add a circle at 01:20:633. Yes

01:22:611 (3,4) - The rhythm here is actually triplets, but you have sixteenth notes. Should be like this. No

01:27:556 (6,7,1,2,3,4) - The new combo seems to start too early. (Maybe have it start at the stream.) Yes

01:26:402 (1) - Consider increasing the speed of the slider here. Also 01:31:677 (1) - 01:42:227 (1) - 01:44:864 (1) - 01:47:501 (1) - 02:13:875 (1) - etc. (Essentially whenever you hear that stronger beat.) Nope

01:28:216 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - Try removing the circle at 01:28:793. Nope but i've fixed the shape of stream

01:38:765 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - The stream should start at 01:39:095. (Replace the slider in the beginning with 2 eigth notes.) No

01:44:864 (1) - The shape looks weird. I like it ^^

01:48:820 (7,8,9,1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Should start the new combo at 01:48:820 (7). Yes

02:20:963 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - I think these circles look better like this. I like disorder in jumps

02:53:600 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - Consider making this section slower. Or maybe the previous section faster. No

03:00:194 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - The big jumps don't really match this slow section, based on the jumps in the previous, more energetic section. I prefer big jump with slow slider in this section

03:03:161 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12) - Move 03:03:902 (10,11,12) to improve the shape. Like this. Ok

03:04:149 (1) - Seems like a good place to put kiai. uhm ok

03:05:468 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - This arrangement seems better. Ok

03:17:337 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Make the sliders progressively faster (maybe 1.2x, 1.3x, 1.4x) so that there's some transition to the 1.5x in the kiai. Ok i like this think

03:19:974 (1,2,3,4) - The sliders in this kiai section have weirdly placed hitsounds. When you're listening to it, the hitsounds just seem to come later than they should. Uhm?

03:28:216 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - This shape seems better. Too big

03:48:655 (3,4,5) - These seem misplaced. A slider that goes with the voice seems to match the rest of the section better.

04:07:446 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - The two sliders should be replaced with circles that jump. 3 and 5 should be removed. Here's a reference.

04:12:721 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5) - Jumpy circles that go with the melody might be better here. Otherwise, the triple circles you have all start one sixteenth note too early. This rhythm goes with the drum in the background. No

04:27:391 - Seems like something's missing. Fixed

04:35:798 - Consider putting four circles here that lead into the next slider. Ok

04:48:326 (1) - Increasing the slider speed during kiai would probably make the map more interesting. Done

04:58:546 (9,10,1) - A good place for a small stream to lead into that slider. nope

05:12:062 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Try gradually increasing the jump distance and slider speed in order to match the progression in the music. No

05:17:337 (1,2,3,4) - Some syncopation here would be nice. Try this. No, low speed now is bad :<

05:31:677 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5) - The rhythm here is weird; definitely not just straight sixteenths though. This rhythm sounds a bit better. (Yeah, it's a bit weird...) The rest of the streams in this section is also weird... I went through it at 25% speed and these parts don't really match that well: 05:37:776 (5,6,7,8,9,10) - 05:38:930 (4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - 05:40:084 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - 05:42:062 (5,6,7,8) - 05:42:391 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - 05:43:710 (5,6) - 05:44:205 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - 05:45:029 (3,4,5,6,7) - 05:46:348 (3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - 05:47:172 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - 05:47:666 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - 05:48:490 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - 05:49:727 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8). Okay, that was a lot more than I expected... maybe I'm just too picky. (I don't know how to put those time things in a list with commas between them, so I'm using dashes instead.)

05:51:622 - Should stop kiai. Ok

06:01:183 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12) - The stream shouldn't start until 06:01:306, and it should be faster than sixteenths. I know but is unrankable with your speed, i prefer to use 1/4

06:16:512 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - Shape can be improved. How?

06:41:732 - Fantasie Impromptu is such a good place for a stream. (It starts with 2 measures of triplets, then the rest is sixteenths.) Though it would be pretty exhausting... I do not know how to create streams

06:54:919 - Good place to start a gigantic stream too. And this one would be straight sixteenths. Nope

07:22:282 - For some reason, I was expecting a stream here. 1/6 nope.

07:28:710 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Shouldn't really start until 3. I prefer in this way

07:33:985 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Try turning 7 into a slider. I don't like it

07:35:139 (1,2,3) - I don't understand these. Should be at 07:35:304, 07:35:633, and 07:35:963? Piano part

08:00:853 (1,1,1) - I don't think anyone likes consecutive spinners. 1 spinner is boring and i prefer follow voice

08:16:677 - It feels like there's a measure missing. I know, i did it on purpose

08:23:930 (1,2) - Sliders with weird hitsounds again. ^

08:32:832 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - The stream should start and end a beat earlier.

09:14:699 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - These circles sound weird. (Need hitsounds.) ?? they have hitsounds

09:22:611 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - The stream starts half a beat early. Also, rearrange 09:23:105 (7,8) to improve shape. Ok

09:33:161 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - Half a beat early.

09:48:985 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Seems half a beat early again. Or maybe 09:48:820 (5) is placed in an awkward position.

09:50:304 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - The stream seems a bit unnecessary. (There's always that Fantasie Impromptu part that's great for streams...)

Well, that took a long time. I think some of the formatting broke too...

Sephibro wrote:

owowowowo

01:43:710 (1,2) - fai in modo che abbiano la stessa forma o una piu' simile Ok
01:55:908 (5) - *te le segnalero' tutte perche' le odio, ti daro' consigli su come cambiarle solo per quelle che secondo me vanno tolte per forza Ok
02:03:820 (2) - * No
02:10:084 (5,6,7) - * ^
03:00:194 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - secondo me e' meglio se lasci il 5 in modo che la stella rimanga intatta, il 6 lo puoi lasciare dov'e'. cosi' sembra una stella mancamentata Ok
03:34:315 (1) - io sposterei lo slider in avanti in modo che starti sul bianco e sul rosso metterei un cerchio http://puu.sh/42Ns8.jpg OK ma in modo un po diverso
03:39:260 (4) - ^ No
da 04:12:721 (1) fino a 04:15:194 (5) - sostituirei prima e ultima oppure seconda e quarta con uno slider corto con reverseNo
04:24:342 (5) - eviterei di farlo partire sul blu Fixato
04:24:919 (1) - * qua puoi cambiare in http://puu.sh/42NHt.jpg No
04:36:128 (1) - parte un po' improvviso, lo accompagnerei da un trillo http://puu.sh/42NOc No
06:03:161 (4) - questi stream a 1/3 sono assolutamente troppo spaziati (lo spacing di questi e' almeno 1.10x, contro il 1.00x degli altri, comunque secondo me anche 0.90 non guasterebbe) Non tutti ho solo corretto un errore di spacing
06:15:606 (5) - questo lo toglierei No
06:16:512 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - questi mi piacciono molto, ma li metterei proprio overlappati in orizzontale e simmetrici rispetto all'asse y Sarebbero troppo distanti e no nsarebbe bello da vedere :\
06:32:007 (4,5,6) - http://puu.sh/42Owg.jpg o qualcosa del genere Grazie va bene ^^
06:35:798 (7,8,9) - avvicina entrambi gli slider al cerchio, pure qua porterei il distance snap da entrambi a 1.00x Ok
06:37:446 (5,6,7,8) - trovo quella croce un po' storta fuorviante, meglio un arco cosi': http://puu.sh/42OMi.jpg Mi piace più la croce veloce con minijump ma la sistemo meglio
06:41:732 - dio ti punira' per aver messo la pausa sulla fantasia improvviso Non so se riempirla e come
06:54:754 (2) - il salto e' abbastanza grande, anche qualcosa di questo tipo non verrebbe male http://puu.sh/42P1Q.jpg Ho solo otlto la tripletta
08:43:051 (6,7,8) - * le tre sviolinate durato esattamente un mezzo ciascuna, a differenza degli altri casi, stavolta usare questo pattern e' una forzatura. Preferisco cosìporterei questi 3 slider ad un mezzo e li vedrei bene disposti a triangolo e che vanno verso l'esterno, qualcosa di questo tipo http://puu.sh/42PkX.jpg
09:03:326 (3,4) - mi inganna ogni volta e premo (4) in anticipo, probabilmente e' un problema mio, ma NC (4) per sicurezza Ok
09:41:567 (8,9,10) - si legge male per via del 9 nascosto e dello spacing strano.. forse http://puu.sh/42PVs.jpg x:256 y:180 Spostato

ts8zs wrote:

One reason:I feel this playing better
[._.]
01:19:315 (4,5) - don't do this Ok
01:24:589 (4) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/934315 Ok
02:08:435 (9) - Ctrl+G Ok
>02:09:095 (1) - Ctrl+G Ok
02:17:337 (4) - not fit 3 well,move last point Ok
02:19:150 (1,2,3) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/934319 Ok
>02:20:304 (4,5) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/934320 Ok
02:27:886 (3,4,5) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/934321 Ok
03:34:644 (2,3,4,5) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/934327 Ok
03:52:941 (6,7) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/934412 With some changes
03:57:886 (4,5) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/934416 Ok
04:00:029 (3) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/934417 Ok
04:27:556 (5) - make this bow angle less Ok
04:40:743 (6,7,8,9) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/934422 Ok
05:01:512 (1) - This can blanket more fits Ok
05:11:732 (7) - Ctrl+G Ok
05:33:161 (1) - 2nd point 340,240 No
06:25:908 (1) - move to cent er Ok
Beethoven & miku makes me...lol xD
08:16:677 (8) - put at 7 No hard to read
08:23:930 (1,3) - I dont think bats will approve this._. :<
I think some sliders angel is too high,don't make sliders like 09:40:084 (2) - this, It is ugly XD

Pagno wrote:

If it were me I'd rank it just because of the storyboard o/
And, nice job with hitsounds!

02:00:688 (6) - It's hard to get the tempo at this note, maybe try making it New Combo Ok

02:55:578 (9) - I'll point out this one for the whole map: generally I feel uncomfortable with streams right after a slider if the slider ends on the white tick, if it were me I'd make every slider end on the blue tick and make the stream start on the white tick. However this is just my mapping style, feel free to ignore this Uhm no i prefer this

05:31:842 (3,1) - Just a suggestion, wouldn't it be better to make these sliders "follow" the stream instead of pointing at the top? Oh thanks

I've looked through the whole map and actually I couldn't find more things to fix, it looks a good mapped Marathon!
Good luck!

luxoDeh wrote:

Ciao! ecco il mod

MARATHON

01:52:941 (3,4) - prova a fare un blancket migliore con questi due Ok

02:36:952 (7,8) - secondo me dovresti eliminare la nota ed allungare lo slider fino a 02:37:282 - così il ritmo sarà uguale a quello che hai usato prima ed inoltre penso che suoni anche meglio Ok

02:47:501 (6) - non mi piace molto la forma di questo slider, io ti consiglierei di farla più in questo modo se ti va Ok

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03:07:611 (4,5,1,2,3,4,5) - quello che penserei di fare in questo punto è dare una forma più definita al tutto... potresti spostare questi 2 03:07:611 (4,3) - a x:340-y:312 (non penso sia un problema visto che lo spacing non viene rispettato, come è giusto che sia) in più poi spostando anche 03:08:765 (5) - a x:200 - y:312 si verrà a formare una forma a M ben definita tra tutti 03:07:611 (4,5,1,2,3,4,5) - Ok

04:02:172 (4) - la forma di questo slider non è proprio il massimo, potresti provare a farla più simmetrica, magari ruotala temporaneamente al dritto così puoi capire bene che forma viene fuori. Ok

04:52:117 (5) - forse è meglio se copi/incolli lo slider precedente così viene qualcosa di più simmetrico Ok

06:36:128 (8,9) - hm... non mi convince molto come viene il ritmo qui... penso che il giusto ritmo verrebbe se cancelli questi due e metti al loro posto uno slider che va da 06:36:128 - a 06:36:457 - ... comunque penso che va bene anche così, perchè la pattern è buona, anche se il ritmo continua a suonarmi un po' strano... Seguo la batteria preferisco farlo in 1/3

08:36:128 (7) - secondo me è meglio se lo muovi una grid in basso Ok

09:06:457 (6,7) - forse è meglio se c'è prima la note e poi lo slider... secondo me per il ritmo viene meglio Preferisco finire con la nota

09:44:864 (1,3) - forse potresti evitare di farli toccare Ok

oook! è tutto! la map è ben fatta, ed è anche epica direi! visto che non sono molto bravo con le insane mi sono concentrato più sul ritmo o sull'estetica, trascurando la giocabilità. comunque buona mappa! e buona fortuna per l'approval!

bigfrog wrote:

hi~ m4m
your mod is faster than mine x_x

[Marathon]
01:20:798(1) this

01:22:611(3,4) same angle?
02:43:710(3) not surround (2) perfect
03:17:337(1,3,5) yeah i like these :3
03:53:435(7) try to same as (6)

03:54:754(2) x308 y144 looks neat
04:15:853(3) less bending
04:25:249(2) this..? looks better i think

05:05:963(6) red point two grid right
05:34:397(5) i do not know why this note is not the same as the distance with other o.o
05:51:952(1) less bending?
06:09:095(2) 30 degrees counter-clockwise
07:37:776(4) do you like this ?

09:29:534(2) what about..

09:52:941(9) straight line plz

wow,what a long song :O
awesome map~! i only can give some suggestions

GL for ranking >w<

Puncia wrote:

omg ~o.o~ I think is better now ^^ thanks

YunoFanatic wrote:

[Marathon]

for preventing my very loong mod consider fixing most of the jumps it makes weird if its too far its too weird if its too close so youll have to focus where you should place it correctly

01:18:655 make this slider into this http://puu.sh/47YK1.pngthis looks good better than the b4 slider besides this is making blanket Ok
01:28:216 compress this slider or remapped the notes make new pattern this pattern is bad very, Ok
01:39:754 place this (1) somewhere else because this note started the nc and it might feel weird for players Ok
02:11:073 nc then delete nc on 02:11:402 Ok
02:11:732 then nc on this Ok
02:54:260 not very fond of this slider bend this more so it can blanket 02:54:754 No
04:56:238 isnt there are more good sliders than this? No
04:59:864 move to x:428 y:20 to get blanket Ok
07:33:161 move to x:208 Y:96 cuz of blanket again Ok
07:38:095 nc to remove the 10 and 11 and 12 Ok
07:57:721 follow this picture correctly your placing in here is bad http://puu.sh/47Zr7.png Ok
08:15:194 no more sliders like this plz replace this Ok

dun i like the streams only the jumps pls fix them imo.... you should not mapped itself you should perform collab with people this such good song..

kelvinli wrote:

Ciao~ M4M via. pm request!

[General]
Capitalize uta --> Uta

[Marathon]
Try OD-1? Since that's a marathon, OD8 might be too harsh or players would just simply rage at dis map Furthermore there are some short spinners, so OD7 would be good Ok thanks ^^
01:23:435 (6) - It might be too far. I did not expect it to be 1/2 No
01:34:315 (1) - I would move the second red point somewhere to the right to create notable difference with the upcoming note Yes

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01:41:073 (1) - I suggest you to make this mirrored from the previous slider, it'll look better Yes

SPOILER

01:46:183 (5) - space this farther so it wouldn't break the flow Yes
01:51:293 (3) - try reversing its direction of curve: Yes

SPOILER

01:58:710 (5) - ^ Yes

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02:15:359 (5) - it collides with other sliders. Move it further or make a new shape Yes
02:20:304 (4,5) - I don't like this flow. Copy (2) and (3) and put it in the midway? No
02:24:260 (9) - add a whistle sound at its tail? No
02:47:996 (7) - put it like this for cursor flow: Yes

SPOILER

02:50:633 (6) - love these two :3 :D
03:07:117 (2) - instead of putting it behind (1), you could just put it next to (1), better flow I suppose Yes

SPOILER

04:20:633 (1) - Ctrl+G for this one for flow? No
04:47:666 (5,6) - I would make them straight instead, since the vocals is quite agitated Yes
05:19:974 - add a note here? No
06:17:996 (1) - add a whistle sound on every upbeat here, it sounds too bland currently Yes Thanks
06:37:446 (5,6) - this spacing is not really doable I know but it's a minijump
08:38:271 (6) - move the second anchor point to make a nice blanket with (5) Yes
08:44:864 (3) - space farther for consistency No
08:54:342 (6,7) - don't make this turn, it is too hard to follow Yes
09:50:963 (2) - Ctrl+G. hardly catch from previous slider imo No
09:52:941 (9) - remove the finish. the "AHHH" starts at 09:52:776 (7) - so add a finish on it instead No
^ also NC this for consistency Yes
09:55:578 (1) - ^ No


Good work on hitsounds, SB and combo colours. Pretty nice map too.
Deserves a star~good luck!

giO- wrote:

M4M richiesta tramite PM.

[Marathon]

01:22:446 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - Dato che nelle parti in cui l'SB è senza colori usi la combo grigia, perchè non la usi pure qui? E parte a colori da 01:23:765 (1) -

Consiglio per gli slider; quando fai qualsiasi tipo di slider fai in modo che l'ultimo punto finisce al centro http://puu.sh/4awUR.jpg , cosi la forma viene precisa e soprattutto ti viene più semplice fare degli slider in successione simili o uguali come in questo caso: 01:42:721 (2,3) - N.B: è solo un consiglio, per rendere tutto più consistente.
Nell'esempio che ti ho linkato sopra dovresti solo sistemare il (2).

01:43:710 (1,2) - Sposta il (2) con DS 1.6x in modo da eliminare l'overlap http://puu.sh/4ax7B.jpg - http://puu.sh/4ax7b.jpg

01:55:908 (4) - Farei finire questo slider su 01:56:073 - , a te la scelta. No seguo il vocal ^^
02:03:820 (2) - Stessa cosa qui, 02:04:150 (3) - , non mi suona tanto bene con la fine sul tick blue. ^
02:22:776 (4) - Elimina l'overlap http://puu.sh/4axg4.jpg - http://puu.sh/4axgA.jpg
02:25:249 (2) - Anche qui come per gli altri due slider che finiscono sul tick blue, lo farei finire su 02:25:413 - ^
02:32:501 (1,2) - Non sono tanto belli da vedere messi cosi , decidi tu se tenerli o cambiare disposizione.
03:52:611 (4) - Spostalo su x:304 y:112 cosi la distanza è uguale agli altri seguenti: 03:52:776 (5) - 03:53:930 (8) -

08:33:573 (4) - Non so se sia voluto (ma non credo), sistemerei lo spacing esattamente come il resto dello stream, quindi sposta direttamente 08:33:573 (4,5,6,7) - con 1.0x DS http://puu.sh/4awsX.jpg

GL

Panino103 wrote:

[Marathon]

_ 01:22:529 (2) - Lo sposterei verso> x:296 y:296
_ 01:22:611 (3) - ^> x:340 y:304
_ 01:28:216 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - Non so se per te sembra meglio, ma secondo me mettere [9] finire dove c'era [1] è meglio Rovinerei il flow se lo faccio, lo stream deve partire dal basso
_ 01:53:765 (6) - Lo sposterei verso> x:476 y:284

_ 02:44:699 (6) - ^ Più o meno> x:52 y:112
_ 02:49:150 (2) - ^> x:476 y:164

_ 03:48:655 (3) - ^> x:188 y:224
_ 03:52:941 (6) - Forse è meglio se lo capovolgi questo slider, capisco il jump, ma il flow ne risente troppo.

_ 05:00:194 (5) - Toglierei questo slider perchè non rappresenta una nota nella canzone Segue il violino
_ 05:38:023 (8,9,10,11,12) - Perchè qui cambi lo Spacing? Perchè sono uno scemo

_ 06:08:435 (6) - Non sento tanta differenza nella musica tra questo e 06:08:765 (1) questo, quindi perchè lo devi fare 1/8? Segue la chitarra ma forse può confondere, per ora lo lascio così
_ 07:10:578 (3) - Perchè qui cambi lo Spacing?

_ 09:50:304 (1,2) - Avvicinerei i due slider siccome fanno parte della stessa stream. Uguale per 09:52:941 (1,2) and 09:55:578 (1,2) e 09:58:216 (1,2)

1. Please, use a Slider Tick Rate of 2 in order to show better the change of SV in place like 03:17:337 (1,3,5).

1. HP drain rate of 5? I understand it's a marathon but i think you can raise it to 6~7.

1. 02:42:227 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - I don't really understand these 1/4 because i hear
   
2. 05:36:128 (3) - Why does this slider is longer than the other? It's 1/3 when other are 1/4, that's weird. They are normal at 05:37:117 (1,2,3,4).

1. 01:19:974 (5) - CTRL+G? In order to keep the symmetry of 01:19:315 (4,5,1).
2. 01:25:249 (6) - Move it to x=440 y=192 for the symmetry with 01:23:765 (1). It will complete the symmetry of 01:24:260 (3,4,5).
3. 01:26:402 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Here, the music is more and more intense so i think it would fits better if your jump were harder and harder. Currently
4. 01:27:062 (3,4) is x2.13 01:27:391 (5,6) is x3.17 and 01:27:391 (5,6) is x2.41 so maybe you should try to make the jump 01:27:721 (7,8) harder than
5. 01:27:391 (5,6).
6. 01:49:315 (2,3,4,5) - Maybe you should rotate it a little bit more because this square is nearly straight and i think it will look beter if it's more inclined. Currently, the nearly symmetry make it looks like a broken pattern compared to the neat symmetry of the other pattern.
7. 02:03:326 (10) - Move it to x=156 y=212 for a perfect square with 02:02:666 (8,9,10,1).
8. 02:17:337 (4) - CTRL+G for a better flow?
   
9. 02:21:293 (3,4) - Not exactly symmetrical.
10. 02:30:688 (4) - It will look much better imo if you would put it at the center of 02:30:194 (1,2,3). I think it's x=116 y=232.
11. 02:31:677 (8) - CTRL+G?
12. 02:38:106 (1,2,3) - Since you're 3 sliders why rotating them by 90°? Why not 120°? It would look better imo.
    
13. 02:59:370 (3) - Move it to x=344 y=216 for the parallelogram with 02:59:040 (1,2,3,4)?
14. 03:03:408 (4,5) - The spacing here is WTF! I'm pretty sure it's UNRANKABLE!
15. 03:22:117 (4,5) - CTRL+G? Because this part is supposed to be intense!
16. 04:42:886 (5) - Move it to x=328 y=216 You'll have small symmetry with 04:42:391 (3,4,5) and 04:42:886 (5) will be less stuck to 04:43:381 (7).
17. 05:17:337 (1,2,3,4) - Dafuq? During all the kiai you have only proper neat symetrical pattern and then at the end you have.... This..... I don't get it.
18. 06:22:611 (4,1) - Try avoiding this overlap.
19. 07:00:194 (1) - CTRL+G for a better flow? (And then CTRL+G on 07:00:523 (2))
20. 07:20:139 (3,4,5) - This pattern is maybe a little bit hard considering we are in a "gray part" where the map is supposed to be "relatively" easy. Besides,
21. 07:20:139 (3,5) isn't symetrical.
22. 07:28:710 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Lower the spacing of this stream because this part isn't supposed to be difficult.
23. 08:10:743 (1,2,3) - I think you overuse this pattern a little bit. With three notes tou can do well, three notes, slider+note,note+slider, slider with arrow. You always choose the 3 notes and always in triangle. Seeing how often this pattern is used here maybe you should try more diversity.
24. 08:28:051 (2,3) - Bad stack.
25. 08:37:117 (2) - CTRL+G?
26. 08:56:238 (5,6,7,8) - Maybe you could avoid the overlap.
27. 09:15:194 (3,4,5,6,7) - It looks like a broken star XD Maybe you didn't intend to do one but since it look like one why not doing a proper one?

1. 02:11:073 (1,2,3,4,5) - I would suggest to remove the NC at 02:11:073 (1) and put it on 02:11:402 (5) at the end of the stream. It fits much better imo.
2. 03:17:996 (3,5) - NC here to show the change of SV.
3. 03:46:018 (6) - NC?
4. 07:13:381 (1,2,1,2,1,2) - NC everywhere? Like you did for 07:17:337 (1,1). It will compensate the loose of life.
5. 08:27:062 (1) - The song start being intene here so why is it still grey? You should use your dark green combo i think.
6. 08:28:381 (3) - NC?
7. 09:08:765 (3,5) - Same as 03:17:996 (3,5).
8. 09:11:402 (3,5) - ^

1. 01:12:062 (1) - Actually, a finish here seems to fit the song better than a clap imo.
2. 03:24:589 (3) - Why is there a finish at the end of the slider? I think it will fit much better if it is at the beggining.
3. 03:35:139 (5) - ^
4. 04:26:238 (1) - The finish here seems a little bit out of place.
5. 05:31:677 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5,1) - Why the whistle here hasn't the same regularity as the one in the following death stream? (which start at
6. 05:35:798 (1))
7. 06:37:859 (1) - Whistle?
8. 07:39:672 (1) - ^
9. 10:00:935 (1) - Add a finish?

rezoons wrote:

Hi ,

M4M from my queue:
06:17:996 (1) - WTF bethoveen is doing here? xD

[General]

1. Please, use a Slider Tick Rate of 2 in order to show better the change of SV in place like 03:17:337 (1,3,5).

Difficulty

1. HP drain rate of 5? I understand it's a marathon but i think you can raise it to 6~7.

[Novice]

1. 02:42:227 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - I don't really understand these 1/4 because i hear
   
2. 05:36:128 (3) - Why does this slider is longer than the other? It's 1/3 when other are 1/4, that's weird. They are normal at 05:37:117 (1,2,3,4).

Placement/Aesthetic

1. 01:19:974 (5) - CTRL+G? In order to keep the symmetry of 01:19:315 (4,5,1).
2. 01:25:249 (6) - Move it to x=440 y=192 for the symmetry with 01:23:765 (1). It will complete the symmetry of 01:24:260 (3,4,5).
3. 01:26:402 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Here, the music is more and more intense so i think it would fits better if your jump were harder and harder. Currently
4. 01:27:062 (3,4) is x2.13 01:27:391 (5,6) is x3.17 and 01:27:391 (5,6) is x2.41 so maybe you should try to make the jump 01:27:721 (7,8) harder than
5. 01:27:391 (5,6).
6. 01:49:315 (2,3,4,5) - Maybe you should rotate it a little bit more because this square is nearly straight and i think it will look beter if it's more inclined. Currently, the nearly symmetry make it looks like a broken pattern compared to the neat symmetry of the other pattern.
7. 02:03:326 (10) - Move it to x=156 y=212 for a perfect square with 02:02:666 (8,9,10,1).
8. 02:17:337 (4) - CTRL+G for a better flow?
   
9. 02:21:293 (3,4) - Not exactly symmetrical.
10. 02:30:688 (4) - It will look much better imo if you would put it at the center of 02:30:194 (1,2,3). I think it's x=116 y=232.
11. 02:31:677 (8) - CTRL+G?
12. 02:38:106 (1,2,3) - Since you're 3 sliders why rotating them by 90°? Why not 120°? It would look better imo.
    
13. 02:59:370 (3) - Move it to x=344 y=216 for the parallelogram with 02:59:040 (1,2,3,4)?
14. 03:03:408 (4,5) - The spacing here is WTF! I'm pretty sure it's UNRANKABLE!
15. 03:22:117 (4,5) - CTRL+G? Because this part is supposed to be intense!
16. 04:42:886 (5) - Move it to x=328 y=216 You'll have small symmetry with 04:42:391 (3,4,5) and 04:42:886 (5) will be less stuck to 04:43:381 (7).
17. 05:17:337 (1,2,3,4) - Dafuq? During all the kiai you have only proper neat symetrical pattern and then at the end you have.... This..... I don't get it.
18. 06:22:611 (4,1) - Try avoiding this overlap.
19. 07:00:194 (1) - CTRL+G for a better flow? (And then CTRL+G on 07:00:523 (2))
20. 07:20:139 (3,4,5) - This pattern is maybe a little bit hard considering we are in a "gray part" where the map is supposed to be "relatively" easy. Besides, No, The voice like dark xD
21. 07:20:139 (3,5) isn't symetrical.
22. 07:28:710 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Lower the spacing of this stream because this part isn't supposed to be difficult.
23. 08:10:743 (1,2,3) - I think you overuse this pattern a little bit. With three notes tou can do well, three notes, slider+note,note+slider, slider with arrow. You always choose the 3 notes and always in triangle. Seeing how often this pattern is used here maybe you should try more diversity.
24. 08:28:051 (2,3) - Bad stack.
25. 08:37:117 (2) - CTRL+G?
26. 08:56:238 (5,6,7,8) - Maybe you could avoid the overlap.
27. 09:15:194 (3,4,5,6,7) - It looks like a broken star XD Maybe you didn't intend to do one but since it look like one why not doing a proper one?

NC

1. 02:11:073 (1,2,3,4,5) - I would suggest to remove the NC at 02:11:073 (1) and put it on 02:11:402 (5) at the end of the stream. It fits much better imo.
2. 03:17:996 (3,5) - NC here to show the change of SV.
3. 03:46:018 (6) - NC?
4. 07:13:381 (1,2,1,2,1,2) - NC everywhere? Like you did for 07:17:337 (1,1). It will compensate the loose of life.
5. 08:27:062 (1) - The song start being intene here so why is it still grey? You should use your dark green combo i think.
6. 08:28:381 (3) - NC? No
7. 09:08:765 (3,5) - Same as 03:17:996 (3,5).
8. 09:11:402 (3,5) - ^

Hitsound

1. 01:12:062 (1) - Actually, a finish here seems to fit the song better than a clap imo. No Finish
2. 03:24:589 (3) - Why is there a finish at the end of the slider? I think it will fit much better if it is at the beggining. No
3. 03:35:139 (5) - ^
4. 04:26:238 (1) - The finish here seems a little bit out of place. No
5. 05:31:677 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5,1) - Why the whistle here hasn't the same regularity as the one in the following death stream? (which start at
6. 05:35:798 (1)) No I prefert 1/2 rithm of whistle
7. 06:37:859 (1) - Whistle?
8. 07:39:672 (1) - ^
9. 10:00:935 (1) - Add a finish? No

Whoah, i didn't thought that modding approval whas that exhausting! Hoenstly i can't judge the diff because i don't really know the approval criteria. All i can say is that it's fun to play even if the flow feels weird sometimes.
~Good Luck~

HabiHolic wrote:

Hi Pizza Kun~



[Hanashi]

01:43:051 (3) - Ctrl + g? Yes
01:44:864 (1) - Looks strange to look a little differently, we need to fix this Yes
01:49:974 (6,7,8) - Personal suggestion is too far, but there is a sense of a little jump of reducing doing?
01:51:952 (5) - spacing Yes
01:53:765 (6) - ^ Yes
02:31:677 (8) - suggestion Ctrl + g
02:34:809 (8) - Finish at the end Why do not you put a hit sound?
04:05:633 (3) - suggestion Ctrl + g Yes
04:08:765 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - hmm.. Seems to put too selfish to jump right to the jump we need to rectify this
04:31:677 (2) - spacing Yes
04:37:776 (6) - NC Here Yes
06:29:205 (2) - suggestion Ctrl + g Yes
06:54:919 (1) - Hey! spacing please!! xD ok

Nice Map~! Star! gogo!

Asphyxia wrote:

M4M as you requested

Nice marathon

General thoughts: Atleast add ''Marathon'' to tags!

Hanashi>
+1 OD, I think OD7 is too easy for this even tho it's a marathon.
01:19:974 (5) - I actually like this if you CTRL + J it, plays better imo' Uhm
01:43:051 (3) - CTRL + H? (if you do this, remember to change the spacing little so it wont overlap with 01:43:381 (4) - ) Oh is good ^^
02:18:820 (9) - 02:19:974 (3) - Not stacked perfectly. Ok fixed
02:27:227 (1,2) - I don't like this little ''overlap'', I wont say this again because it might be your style so, change if you want to. I want this
02:32:007 (1) - 02:32:831 (2) - Not stacked perfectly. Fixed
03:39:095 (3) - 03:38:765 (2) - Might overlap, not 100% sure >: Yes it's a bit overlap
04:26:897 (3) - 04:26:238 (1) - Not stacked perfectly, 04:26:897 (3) - 1 grid off Thanks
04:59:534 (3) - 05:00:523 (6) - Not stacked perfectly (?) Yes fixed
06:11:650 (2,3) - 06:12:721 (1) - Not stacked perfectly. Ok
08:38:765 (7) - 08:40:249 (4) - Not stacked perfectly if that was your meaning. Fixed
09:15:194 (3) - 09:16:677 (3) - Not stacked perfectly but this might be unnecessary. Fixed anyway

Nothing else, seems nice

GL with the mapset

Inyuschan wrote:

01:20:798 (1) - Remove NC, I think it's not necessary. o3o Ok

02:00:853 (1) - Add reverse selection Flow better without

02:17:337 (4) - Same Yes

02:24:260 (9) - Same No

02:31:677 (8) - Same No

02:33:820 (5) - Same No

03:15:523 (4) - Same maybe. D: No

04:20:633 (1) - Same No

04:31:183 (1) - Same and maybe this http://puu.sh/4mdQg.png Position yes but not ctrl+g

~~~~~~

I'll mod the rest later or tomorrow, promise.
And, all suggestions. ><

Xebo wrote:

Heyn
[Hanashi Difficult]

01:48:161 (3) Move to X:76 // (4) Move to X:80 No
01:48:820 (7) Move to X:472//(8) Move to X:468 No

02:56:402 (1) New Combo Yes
02:56:897 (1) New Combo - 02:57:556 (1) Delte New Combo Yes

03:36:787 (5) Move to X:320 Y:304 // (6) Move to X:200 Y:304 Yes
03:37:611 (3) Move to Y:306 // 03:38:271 (6) Move to Y:164 Yes

04:21:457 (4) Move to X:256 Y:232 Yes

08:23:106 (1) Move to Y:328 // (2) Move to Y:320 No

09:40:496 (4) Move to Y:240 //(5) Move to Y:232 No

Maybe it helps you

sjoy wrote:

Hi from my queue
01:23:435 (6) - i think a little far how about 3.0 space?
01:25:249 (6,7) - add whis on the head
01:29:864 (4,5) - ctrl+g?
01:33:326 (2,3) - ^ no
01:55:249 (1) - NO NC
01:55:578 (3) - NC
01:59:370 (8,1,2,3) - conbine into 2 1/2 sliders? No
02:02:007 (6) - NC
02:04:809 (6) - ^
02:07:446 (6) - ^
02:10:084 (5) - ^
02:25:908 (4) - ^ No
02:28:710 (6) - ^
02:51:128 (7) - ^
02:52:611 (2) - move to 148 336?
02:57:391 (2,4) - stack? No
03:21:622 (2) - move to 52 ,312?
03:25:249 (1) - ctrl+g? No
03:25:578 (2) - ^ No
03:29:534 (2) - move to 456,192?
04:02:172 (4) - NC
04:03:490 (8) - ^
04:07:446 (1,2) - conbine into 1/2 slider?
04:21:622 (5) - NC
04:42:721 (4) - move to 186,160? Nope
04:43:216 (6) - NC
05:03:161 (5) - NC
05:13:051 (7,8) - ctrl+g? No
05:37:776 (5) - NC
07:56:897 (6) - NC
08:07:446 (6) - ^
08:19:315 (5) - ^
08:29:864 (7) - ^
08:50:963 (5) - ^
08:58:875 (5) - ^
09:01:677 (6) - move to 140,268?
09:41:073 (7) - NC
09:43:710 (6) - ^
09:46:348 (5) - ^
it's crazy for jumping and steams
good luck for rank

[ Sana ] wrote:

Hi sorry i'm late



04:48:326 - preview time at here uhm ok!

01:42:227 (1) - make it perfect semmetry Yes

01:43:710 (1,2) - same shape with 1 Yes

01:51:293 (3) - more straight Yes

03:54:260 (1) - Yes

i'm in school exam and so busy..i'll write some and add more mod soon! sorry < I'll wait, kudosu but finish mod

Hello
Well, let's begin !

1. 01:20:798 (6) - make something like this ? it gives less a "surprising" feeling due to the more curvy slider.
   
   SPOILER

   
2. 01:40:413 (3,4) - Use 2,0x spacing for this, it's better for playing imo. If you do it, you will have to stack this too 01:41:402 (2)
3. 01:42:721 (2,3) - These slider are not the same as 01:43:710 (1,2), i mean the curve.
   Consider using the same curve is more esthetic imo.
4. 01:51:293 (3) - Maybe do this ? :
   SPOILER

   
5. 02:11:567 (2) - Move this note further than 02:11:402 (1,3) to make it easier to read imo.
6. 02:31:183 (6,8) - Its better to make these sliders symmetrical for estheticism imo.
7. 03:24:589 (3,4) - Make these slider symmetrical for estheticism like this :
   SPOILER

   
8. 04:37:117 (4) - Move the red and the last point 1 grid right.
   
9. 04:39:095 (1) - Add finish at the beginning of the slider, you hear something here...
10. 04:40:249 (1) - ^ at the beginning.
    05:06:457 (7) - ^
11. 05:07:611 (3) - ^ at the beginning.
12. 05:12:062 (1) - ^
13. 05:14:699 (1) - ^ at the beginning.
14. 05:17:337 (1) - ^
15. 06:23:271 (1) - ^ at the beginning.
    06:28:545 (1) - ^ at the beginning.
16. 06:28:216 - add a note here.
17. 07:06:787 (5,6) - Make the symmetry better. i mean the "V" slider.
18. 07:08:435 (2,3) - ^
19. 07:35:798 (3) - add soft whistle at the beginning.
20. 07:36:457 (4) - add finish at the beginning.
21. 08:19:974 (3,4,5,6,1) - Make a better square.
22. 09:04:150 (3) - Add finish at the beginning.
23. 09:05:468 (3) - ^ at the beginning.
24. 09:15:359 (4,6) - I really suggest you to add finish here to give a better feeling when you are playing.
25. 09:25:908 (3,5) - ^

That map is nice and funny, but need more improvement at hitsounding and estheticism imo. I hope that was useful !
My noob testplaying : http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/981705

Good luck !

Cherry Blossom wrote:

Hello
Well, let's begin !

[Hanashi]

1. 01:20:798 (6) - make something like this ? it gives less a "surprising" feeling due to the more curvy slider.
   
   SPOILER

   
2. 01:40:413 (3,4) - Use 2,0x spacing for this, it's better for playing imo. If you do it, you will have to stack this too 01:41:402 (2)
3. 01:42:721 (2,3) - These slider are not the same as 01:43:710 (1,2), i mean the curve.
   Consider using the same curve is more esthetic imo.
4. 01:51:293 (3) - Maybe do this ? :
   SPOILER

   
5. 02:11:567 (2) - Move this note further than 02:11:402 (1,3) to make it easier to read imo. No
6. 02:31:183 (6,8) - Its better to make these sliders symmetrical for estheticism imo.
7. 03:24:589 (3,4) - Make these slider symmetrical for estheticism like this :
   SPOILER

   
8. 04:37:117 (4) - Move the red and the last point 1 grid right.
   
9. 04:39:095 (1) - Add finish at the beginning of the slider, you hear something here...
10. 04:40:249 (1) - ^ at the beginning.
    05:06:457 (7) - ^
11. 05:07:611 (3) - ^ at the beginning.
12. 05:12:062 (1) - ^ No
13. 05:14:699 (1) - ^ at the beginning.
14. 05:17:337 (1) - ^ No
15. 06:23:271 (1) - ^ at the beginning.
    06:28:545 (1) - ^ at the beginning.
16. 06:28:216 - add a note here. No
17. 07:06:787 (5,6) - Make the symmetry better. i mean the "V" slider.
18. 07:08:435 (2,3) - ^
19. 07:35:798 (3) - add soft whistle at the beginning.
20. 07:36:457 (4) - add finish at the beginning. No
21. 08:19:974 (3,4,5,6,1) - Make a better square.
22. 09:04:150 (3) - Add finish at the beginning.
23. 09:05:468 (3) - ^ at the beginning.
24. 09:15:359 (4,6) - I really suggest you to add finish here to give a better feeling when you are playing. No
25. 09:25:908 (3,5) - ^ No

That map is nice and funny, but need more improvement at hitsounding and estheticism imo. I hope that was useful !
My noob testplaying : http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/981705

Good luck !

• 1. I think combo color 5 and 6 is similar. I feel confusing ;w;
     01:22:611 (3,4) - distance is too far.
     01:28:216 (1,9) - overlapping or relocation
     02:24:260 (9) - opposite slider. i think it look like better ~
     02:51:293 (2,3) - overlapping ?
     02:54:754 (4) - NC and 02:54:754 (4,5,6,7,8) - please be placed further
     02:57:391 (2,4) - overlapping
     03:03:655 (7) - NC
     03:11:238 (7) - try make to another shape
     03:27:886 (1) - remove NC and 03:28:216 (2) - NC
     03:57:886 (4,5) - try make to same slider shape
     04:09:919 (8) - please be placed further
     04:35:798 - add circle
     04:58:051 (6) - NC
     05:17:337 (1,2,3,4) - a little strange. try another pattern ;w;
     05:40:743 (1) - SV is too big. it is too sudden
     06:01:348 (1) - remove whistle
     06:01:841 (4) - ^
     06:02:006 (6) - ^
     from 06:15:359 - to 06:39:095 - wow, nice ! i like it >w<
     08:34:150 (1,3) - avoid overlapping. i feel confuse
     09:15:853 (7,1) - distance ?
  
  Nice song !

-Srui- wrote:

M4M :3

[Hanashi]

• 1. I think combo color 5 and 6 is similar. I feel confusing ;w;
     01:22:611 (3,4) - distance is too far.
     01:28:216 (1,9) - overlapping or relocation - Overlapping
     02:24:260 (9) - opposite slider. i think it look like better ~
     02:51:293 (2,3) - overlapping ?
     02:54:754 (4) - NC and 02:54:754 (4,5,6,7,8) - please be placed further Uhm no
     02:57:391 (2,4) - overlapping No
     03:03:655 (7) - NC
     03:11:238 (7) - try make to another shape I like this shape
     03:27:886 (1) - remove NC and 03:28:216 (2) - NC
     03:57:886 (4,5) - try make to same slider shape I prefer this
     04:09:919 (8) - please be placed further No
     04:35:798 - add circle No
     04:58:051 (6) - NC
     05:17:337 (1,2,3,4) - a little strange. try another pattern ;w;
     05:40:743 (1) - SV is too big. it is too sudden
     06:01:348 (1) - remove whistle Sounds better with whistle
     06:01:841 (4) - ^ ^
     06:02:006 (6) - ^ ^
     from 06:15:359 - to 06:39:095 - wow, nice ! i like it >w< （・∀・） thanks!
     08:34:150 (1,3) - avoid overlapping. i feel confuse
     09:15:853 (7,1) - distance ?
  
  Nice song !

1. please add http://puu.sh/4qXMf.wav to your map, its very fit in some part like 01:50:633

1. 01:24:260 (3,4,5) - add clap or whistle that i give on head for all.
2. try to find a way to NC 01:40:084 (2)? I think NC would fit with the storyboard well.
3. add soft custom 2 whistle on kick sound part example, 01:51:128 , 01:51:622 , 01:52:117
4. 02:55:990 (1) - swap NC with 02:56:238 (4)
5. 03:49:974 (3) - move tail 1 grid right for more blanket.
6. 04:12:721 - I think all of this triangle look random, try to compose them. if you need example you can ask me later.
7. 05:01:512 (1) - move tail 1 grid right for better blanket
8. 09:10:249 (2,3,4) - move to 320|264 , 232|236 , 240|148 for star symmetry.
9. 09:15:688 (5,6,7) - move to 408|24 , 308|48 , 284|148 for star symmetry.
10. 09:26:073 (4,5,6,1) - move to 424|156 , 484|72 , 412|0 , 320|36 for star symmetry.

P A N wrote:

m4m from pm

[General]

1. please add http://puu.sh/4qXMf.wav to your map, its very fit in some part like 01:50:633

Ok fixed in all song, i've used in some parts of song

[Hanashi]

1. 01:24:260 (3,4,5) - add clap or whistle that i give on head for all.
2. try to find a way to NC 01:40:084 (2)? I think NC would fit with the storyboard well.
3. add soft custom 2 whistle on kick sound part example, 01:51:128 , 01:51:622 , 01:52:117
4. 02:55:990 (1) - swap NC with 02:56:238 (4)
5. 03:49:974 (3) - move tail 1 grid right for more blanket.
6. 04:12:721 - I think all of this triangle look random, try to compose them. if you need example you can ask me later. It's a perfect triangle but 3 triangles rotated of 10°
7. 05:01:512 (1) - move tail 1 grid right for better blanket
8. 09:10:249 (2,3,4) - move to 320|264 , 232|236 , 240|148 for star symmetry.
9. 09:15:688 (5,6,7) - move to 408|24 , 308|48 , 284|148 for star symmetry.
10. 09:26:073 (4,5,6,1) - move to 424|156 , 484|72 , 412|0 , 320|36 for star symmetry.

good luck :3 nice song

1. Offset 853
2. You dont need "marathon" in tags, just remove it
3. Add "German" to tags
4. Why "linked horizon" tagged here?
5. You can add silent sliderside here - it will works good at calm parts
6. I'd suggest you use tickrate 1 since you have 1/6 parts - tickrate 2 sounds very wrong on them since it always snaps by 1/4

1. 01:19:974 (5,6) - This overlap doesnt looks pretty, also 01:20:798 (6) - not symmetrial with 01:19:315 (4,5) -
2. 01:31:677 (1) - Remove last red anchorpoint to make form of this slider more pretty
3. 01:32:172 (2,3,4) - They doesnt flows well, i also believe 01:32:501 (3) - can be symmetrial with 01:32:172 (2,4) -
4. 01:33:655 (4,5,6) - Doesnt pretty at all. You can make a little triangle here for better slow using (4). Example:
   
   
   SPOILER

   
5. 01:39:754 (10,11,1) - Please keep same spacing between those notes for better playability
6. 01:40:084 (1,2,3) - I believe you can make them flows better:
   
   
   SPOILER

   
7. 01:40:743 (4,1,2) - broken symmetry again
8. 01:41:402 (2,3) - This antijump also feels bad. To make it more friendly try to use ctrl+g at 01:41:402 (2) -
   
9. 02:00:029 (4) - Missed finish at the beginning of slider
10. 02:00:688 (2) - Even if you want to keep symmethry you must always check spacing. This also bugged me a lot while playing - use x2.0 DS between 02:00:359 (1,2) - like you did it before
11. 02:04:479 (4,5) - Linear jumps looks pretty bad here. Try something like this:
    
    
    SPOILER

    
12. 02:20:222 (4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6) - this is very overdone. Jumps must reflect the music; for this case its only mirroed symmethry. Below 2.80 is enough, seriously
13. 02:32:007 (1,2) - Like in previous one, this looks like spacing issue. For this case you can just stack them manually
14. 02:36:128 (3,4) - Again: bad flow. To fix it, try this: move 02:36:128 (3) - to x396 y216, then move 02:36:293 (4) - to x344 y112 and move 02:36:457 (5) - to x252 y44 - for consistent spacing
15. 02:39:589 (5,7) - Linear curving estetically looks bad, remove red anchorpoints please
16. 02:46:677 (3,4) - swap them on timeline for better flow
17. 02:51:952 (4,1) - This overlap looks pretty bad, fix it please
18. 02:56:402 (5,6,7) - Flows pretty bad. Try something like this instead:
    
    
    SPOILER

    
19. 03:00:853 (5,6) - Kind of spacing issue again
20. 03:02:007 (3,5) - Hmm, maybe make them overlap a bit? :>
    
    
    SPOILER

    
21. 03:06:128 (5,6) - Spacing issue all over again.
22. 03:09:424 (1,2,3,4) - those jumps are VERY overdone. Fullscreen jumps is something really too much imo
23. 03:17:337 (1,1,1) - Estetical thing, but it looks really bad here. To prevent it you may change for of slider and make progressive raising speed of them (for example x0.75 - x1.00 - x1.25)
24. 03:21:293 (1,2) - This fullscreen jump is really bad, reduse spacing please
25. 03:37:117 (1) - Try something like this here?
    
    
    SPOILER

    
26. 03:46:018 (6,1) - Swap NC follow new part of music
27. 04:17:996 (1) - Try to change your overlap to something like this:
    
    
    SPOILER

    
28. 05:02:666 (4) - this jump plays bad and actually very forced. Try something like this instead?
    
    
    SPOILER

    
29. 05:15:359 (3) - NC due to jump
30. 05:16:018 (5) - ^
31. 05:16:677 (7) - ^
32. 05:33:161 (1,2,3) - Keep consistent spacing between those notes please
33. 05:40:413 (6,7) - Spacing issue on stream
34. 05:53:271 (5,6,7,8) - try something like this instead?
    
    
    SPOILER

    
35. 05:57:886 (6) - ctrl+G for better flow?
36. 06:01:348 (1) - It's 1/6 actually, not 1/8
37. 06:12:391 (5,6) - Plays enough bad, reduse spacing please
38. 06:22:611 (4) - ctrl+H?
39. 06:37:859 (1) - Finish instead of whistle sounds better for me
40. 07:04:150 (5,6,7,8) - Those jumps are very overdone IMO
41. 07:06:128 (3,4) - ^
42. 07:13:381 (1,2,3,4,1,2) - Corner placed notes are usually boring, try more variable placement
43. 07:31:842 (1) - Estetical thing, but form of this slider looks very, very bad.
44. 07:35:798 (3,4) - When there is no point to stack better dont do it
45. 07:39:754 (1) - Finish instead of whistle
46. 08:12:391 (4) - Hide it under the end of slider instead of beginning to make it plays better
47. 08:12:556 (1) - This form is really, really bad. Also it makes all next jumps feels wrong. Try to change it here, please.
48. 08:39:424 (1) - Try Ctrl+G for better flow - and rework next slider placement, please
49. 08:40:413 (5,1) - Stack them perfectly please
50. 08:56:567 (7,8) - This is VERY overdone, reduse spacing here please
51. 09:01:842 (7,8) - Spacing issue
52. 09:08:765 (1,1,1,1,1) - Pretty much same estetical thing, it looks very bad.
53. 09:37:776 (3) - NC due to jump please
54. 09:55:578 (1,2) - Sliders snapped wrong: 09:55:578 (1) - should ends 2 ticks earlier and 09:56:402 (2) - should starts 2 ticks earlier
55. 10:00:935 (1) - Add finish

Kodora wrote:

From LKs' queue~

[General]

1. You dont need "marathon" in tags, just remove it
2. Add "German" to tags
3. Why "linked horizon" tagged here? Linked horizon is the same composer of Sound horizon, he use 2 different name for type of project compose
4. You can add silent sliderside here - it will works good at calm parts
5. I'd suggest you use tickrate 1 since you have 1/6 parts - tickrate 2 sounds very wrong on them since it always snaps by 1/4

[Hanashi]

1. 01:19:974 (5,6) - This overlap doesnt looks pretty, also 01:20:798 (6) - not symmetrial with 01:19:315 (4,5) -
2. 01:31:677 (1) - Remove last red anchorpoint to make form of this slider more pretty I prefer with it
3. 01:32:172 (2,3,4) - They doesnt flows well, i also believe 01:32:501 (3) - can be symmetrial with 01:32:172 (2,4) -
4. 01:33:655 (4,5,6) - Doesnt pretty at all. You can make a little triangle here for better slow using (4). Example:
   
   
   SPOILER

   
5. 01:39:754 (10,11,1) - Please keep same spacing between those notes for better playability
6. 01:40:084 (1,2,3) - I believe you can make them flows better: Change some
   
   
   SPOILER

   
7. 01:40:743 (4,1,2) - broken symmetry again ??
8. 01:41:402 (2,3) - This antijump also feels bad. To make it more friendly try to use ctrl+g at 01:41:402 (2) - Fixed in another way
   
9. 02:00:029 (4) - Missed finish at the beginning of slider
10. 02:00:688 (2) - Even if you want to keep symmethry you must always check spacing. This also bugged me a lot while playing - use x2.0 DS between 02:00:359 (1,2) - like you did it before
11. 02:04:479 (4,5) - Linear jumps looks pretty bad here. Try something like this:
    
    
    SPOILER

    
12. 02:20:222 (4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6) - this is very overdone. Jumps must reflect the music; for this case its only mirroed symmethry. Below 2.80 is enough, seriously I like this spacing but i've fixed simmetry
13. 02:32:007 (1,2) - Like in previous one, this looks like spacing issue. For this case you can just stack them manually
14. 02:36:128 (3,4) - Again: bad flow. To fix it, try this: move 02:36:128 (3) - to x396 y216, then move 02:36:293 (4) - to x344 y112 and move 02:36:457 (5) - to x252 y44 - for consistent spacing
15. 02:39:589 (5,7) - Linear curving estetically looks bad, remove red anchorpoints please
16. 02:46:677 (3,4) - swap them on timeline for better flow
17. 02:51:952 (4,1) - This overlap looks pretty bad, fix it please
18. 02:56:402 (5,6,7) - Flows pretty bad. Try something like this instead:
    
    
    SPOILER

    
19. 03:00:853 (5,6) - Kind of spacing issue again
20. 03:02:007 (3,5) - Hmm, maybe make them overlap a bit? :>
    
    
    SPOILER

    
21. 03:06:128 (5,6) - Spacing issue all over again.
22. 03:09:424 (1,2,3,4) - those jumps are VERY overdone. Fullscreen jumps is something really too much imo
23. 03:17:337 (1,1,1) - Estetical thing, but it looks really bad here. To prevent it you may change for of slider and make progressive raising speed of them (for example x0.75 - x1.00 - x1.25)
24. 03:21:293 (1,2) - This fullscreen jump is really bad, reduse spacing please
25. 03:37:117 (1) - Try something like this here?
    
    
    SPOILER

    
26. 03:46:018 (6,1) - Swap NC follow new part of music
27. 04:17:996 (1) - Try to change your overlap to something like this: No
    
    
    SPOILER

    
28. 05:02:666 (4) - this jump plays bad and actually very forced. Try something like this instead?
    
    
    SPOILER

    
29. 05:15:359 (3) - NC due to jump
30. 05:16:018 (5) - ^
31. 05:16:677 (7) - ^
32. 05:33:161 (1,2,3) - Keep consistent spacing between those notes please
33. 05:40:413 (6,7) - Spacing issue on stream
34. 05:53:271 (5,6,7,8) - try something like this instead? No prefer Jump -> low spacing -> jump
    
    
    SPOILER

    
35. 05:57:886 (6) - ctrl+G for better flow?
36. 06:01:348 (1) - It's 1/6 actually, not 1/8
37. 06:12:391 (5,6) - Plays enough bad, reduse spacing please No
38. 06:22:611 (4) - ctrl+H?
39. 06:37:859 (1) - Finish instead of whistle sounds better for me
40. 07:04:150 (5,6,7,8) - Those jumps are very overdone IMO Not in my opinion ^^
41. 07:06:128 (3,4) - ^ ^
42. 07:13:381 (1,2,3,4,1,2) - Corner placed notes are usually boring, try more variable placement
43. 07:31:842 (1) - Estetical thing, but form of this slider looks very, very bad.
44. 07:35:798 (3,4) - When there is no point to stack better dont do it
45. 07:39:754 (1) - Finish instead of whistle
46. 08:12:391 (4) - Hide it under the end of slider instead of beginning to make it plays better
47. 08:12:556 (1) - This form is really, really bad. Also it makes all next jumps feels wrong. Try to change it here, please. I like this shape
48. 08:39:424 (1) - Try Ctrl+G for better flow - and rework next slider placement, please Fix in another way
49. 08:40:413 (5,1) - Stack them perfectly please
50. 08:56:567 (7,8) - This is VERY overdone, reduse spacing here please
51. 09:01:842 (7,8) - Spacing issue
52. 09:08:765 (1,1,1,1,1) - Pretty much same estetical thing, it looks very bad. Not for me
53. 09:37:776 (3) - NC due to jump please
54. 09:55:578 (1,2) - Sliders snapped wrong: 09:55:578 (1) - should ends 2 ticks earlier and 09:56:402 (2) - should starts 2 ticks earlier
55. 10:00:935 (1) - Add finish I like without

Overral not bad, but flow needs some improvements.

Good luck~

P A N wrote:

no kds, recheck

09:10:413 (3,4) - move to 232|228 and 240|136 and move 09:11:402 (1) to stack with (4) (240|136) for better star symmetry.
09:15:359 (4) - move to 460|116

1. 01:51:622 (4) - muovi un paio di grid in basso per allinearlo e muovi leggermente anche 01:51:952 (5) di conseguenza
2. 02:00:029 (4) - ti consiglio di spostarlo un po' più avanti (magari x:212 - y:180), se ascolti la musica rimane sempre tranquilla, non c'è bisogno di fare quel jump
3. 02:11:567 (2) - questo non mi piace tanto, mantieni sempre la ritmica dello stream a 1/4 ma lo fai alla fine con spacing differente
4. 02:26:567 (7,8,9) - flowa un po' male, fai Ctrl + G tra questi magari 02:26:567 (7,8), e se lo fai riposiziona 02:26:567 (7) bene rispetto allo slider
5. 02:29:370 (4) - spostalo un po' più a sinistra così crea una diagonale dritta con l'altro circle e la testa dello slider
6. 02:42:886 (7) - metti la y a 60 per farlo bene in linea con la testa della prima tripletta
7. 03:24:589 (3,4) - la parte in cui ci sono tutti questi slider è un po' ripetiva, usi i circle solo per i jump. Rimpiazza quei due slider ad esempio con due circle (sostituendoli a testa e coda degli slider). È solo un'idea, perché troppi slider possono annoiare
8. 04:15:359 (1) - questa dovrebbe essere una new combo, inizia una nuova serie di patterns e la song cambia
9. 04:34:150 (1,2,3) - sistema lo spacing tra i tre
10. 04:35:633 (7) - va spostato poco poco più a destra se vuoi una cosa simmetrica
11. 04:45:194 (4,5,6,1) - un po' scomodo da giocare, fai un triangolo regolare tra questi 04:45:194 (4,5,6)
    
    
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12. 04:46:183 (2) - questa serie di slider hanno la punta un po' storta, se l'hai fatto apposta lascia perdere
13. 05:33:655 (2) - mettilo un po' più sotto la coda dello slider, per il flow
14. 05:38:930 (4) - questo è troppo distante dagli altri >_<
15. 05:40:084 (2,3,4,5) - fai fare una curva un po' migliore a tutta questa parte di stream uscente dallo slider
16. o fai questo 05:56:567 (5,6,7,8,9) stream meno spaced oppure aggiusti 05:57:062 (1,2,3) facendolo più ampio. È scomodo fare uno stream del genere e poi fermarsi all'interno per fare un pattern così piccolo. Tralaltro mi sembra che sia troppo distante da 05:57:556 (4,5) e che faccia poco flow così
17. 06:06:128 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - l'hai fatto troppo incasinato, tieni conto che è lento ed è anche spaced. Puoi fare una cosa carina però: se ascolti, questi tre 06:06:128 (1,2,3) sono con la chitarra che cala, mentre gli altri tre 06:06:457 (4,5,6) sale. Puoi fare così:
    
    
    
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    almeno sono ordinati

1. 07:52:941 (1,2,3) - non so se l'hai fatto apposta ma questo triangolo è un po' più stretto (l'hai fatto anche dopo ma forse stai seguendo la voce che diventa più bassa)