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Sound Horizon - Yoiyami no Uta

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Pizza Kun
This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on sabato 7 dicembre 2013 at 22.33.50

Artist: Sound Horizon
Title: Yoiyami no Uta
Tags: Revo Märchen German Linked Horizon Fantasie Impromptu Frederic Chopin Respect For Ludwig Van Beethoven Simphony No. 9 9th An die Freude
BPM: 182
Filesize: 16712kb
Play Time: 10:05
Difficulties Available:
  1. Hanashi (5 stars, 1982 notes)
Download: Sound Horizon - Yoiyami no Uta
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Last Full update: 15/09/13
Flowey
Still new to modding. ~

The combo colors look dull, and the green doesn't really match the background. Try this:
SPOILER
Combo1 : 128,128,128
Combo2 : 0,128,255
Combo3 : 0,64,128
Combo4 : 248,7,109
Combo5 : 128,0,64
Combo6 : 192,192,192

01:19:315 (4,5) - The start of the sliders don't have hitsounds, which feels weird when playing.

01:20:798 (1) - The syncopation is a little awkward. Maybe add a circle at 01:20:633.

01:22:611 (3,4) - The rhythm here is actually triplets, but you have sixteenth notes. Should be like this.

01:27:556 (6,7,1,2,3,4) - The new combo seems to start too early. (Maybe have it start at the stream.)

01:26:402 (1) - Consider increasing the speed of the slider here. Also 01:31:677 (1) - 01:42:227 (1) - 01:44:864 (1) - 01:47:501 (1) - 02:13:875 (1) - etc. (Essentially whenever you hear that stronger beat.)

01:28:216 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - Try removing the circle at 01:28:793.

01:38:765 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - The stream should start at 01:39:095. (Replace the slider in the beginning with 2 eigth notes.)

01:44:864 (1) - The shape looks weird.

01:48:820 (7,8,9,1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Should start the new combo at 01:48:820 (7).

02:20:963 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - I think these circles look better like this.

02:53:600 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - Consider making this section slower. Or maybe the previous section faster.

03:00:194 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - The big jumps don't really match this slow section, based on the jumps in the previous, more energetic section.

03:03:161 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12) - Move 03:03:902 (10,11,12) to improve the shape. Like this.

03:04:149 (1) - Seems like a good place to put kiai.

03:05:468 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - This arrangement seems better.

03:17:337 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Make the sliders progressively faster (maybe 1.2x, 1.3x, 1.4x) so that there's some transition to the 1.5x in the kiai.

03:19:974 (1,2,3,4) - The sliders in this kiai section have weirdly placed hitsounds. When you're listening to it, the hitsounds just seem to come later than they should.

03:28:216 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - This shape seems better.

03:48:655 (3,4,5) - These seem misplaced. A slider that goes with the voice seems to match the rest of the section better.

04:07:446 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - The two sliders should be replaced with circles that jump. 3 and 5 should be removed. Here's a reference.

04:12:721 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5) - Jumpy circles that go with the melody might be better here. Otherwise, the triple circles you have all start one sixteenth note too early. This rhythm goes with the drum in the background.

04:27:391 - Seems like something's missing.

04:35:798 - Consider putting four circles here that lead into the next slider.

04:48:326 (1) - Increasing the slider speed during kiai would probably make the map more interesting.

04:58:546 (9,10,1) - A good place for a small stream to lead into that slider.

05:12:062 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Try gradually increasing the jump distance and slider speed in order to match the progression in the music.

05:17:337 (1,2,3,4) - Some syncopation here would be nice. Try this.

05:31:677 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5) - The rhythm here is weird; definitely not just straight sixteenths though. This rhythm sounds a bit better. (Yeah, it's a bit weird...) The rest of the streams in this section is also weird... I went through it at 25% speed and these parts don't really match that well: 05:37:776 (5,6,7,8,9,10) - 05:38:930 (4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - 05:40:084 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - 05:42:062 (5,6,7,8) - 05:42:391 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - 05:43:710 (5,6) - 05:44:205 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - 05:45:029 (3,4,5,6,7) - 05:46:348 (3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - 05:47:172 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - 05:47:666 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - 05:48:490 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - 05:49:727 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8). Okay, that was a lot more than I expected... maybe I'm just too picky. (I don't know how to put those time things in a list with commas between them, so I'm using dashes instead.)

05:51:622 - Should stop kiai.

06:01:183 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12) - The stream shouldn't start until 06:01:306, and it should be faster than sixteenths.

06:16:512 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - Shape can be improved.

06:41:732 - Fantasie Impromptu is such a good place for a stream. (It starts with 2 measures of triplets, then the rest is sixteenths.) Though it would be pretty exhausting...

06:54:919 - Good place to start a gigantic stream too. And this one would be straight sixteenths.

07:22:282 - For some reason, I was expecting a stream here.

07:28:710 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Shouldn't really start until 3.

07:33:985 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Try turning 7 into a slider.

07:35:139 (1,2,3) - I don't understand these. Should be at 07:35:304, 07:35:633, and 07:35:963?

08:00:853 (1,1,1) - I don't think anyone likes consecutive spinners.

08:16:677 - It feels like there's a measure missing.

08:23:930 (1,2) - Sliders with weird hitsounds again.

08:32:832 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - The stream should start and end a beat earlier.

09:14:699 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - These circles sound weird. (Need hitsounds.)

09:22:611 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - The stream starts half a beat early. Also, rearrange 09:23:105 (7,8) to improve shape.

09:33:161 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - Half a beat early.

09:48:985 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Seems half a beat early again. Or maybe 09:48:820 (5) is placed in an awkward position.

09:50:304 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - The stream seems a bit unnecessary. (There's always that Fantasie Impromptu part that's great for streams...)

Well, that took a long time. I think some of the formatting broke too...
Sephibro
owowowowo

01:43:710 (1,2) - fai in modo che abbiano la stessa forma o una piu' simile
01:55:908 (5) - *te le segnalero' tutte perche' le odio, ti daro' consigli su come cambiarle solo per quelle che secondo me vanno tolte per forza
02:03:820 (2) - *
02:10:084 (5,6,7) - *
03:00:194 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - secondo me e' meglio se lasci il 5 in modo che la stella rimanga intatta, il 6 lo puoi lasciare dov'e'. cosi' sembra una stella mancamentata
03:34:315 (1) - io sposterei lo slider in avanti in modo che starti sul bianco e sul rosso metterei un cerchio http://puu.sh/42Ns8.jpg
03:39:260 (4) - ^
da 04:12:721 (1) fino a 04:15:194 (5) - sostituirei prima e ultima oppure seconda e quarta con uno slider corto con reverse
04:24:342 (5) - eviterei di farlo partire sul blu
04:24:919 (1) - * qua puoi cambiare in http://puu.sh/42NHt.jpg
04:36:128 (1) - parte un po' improvviso, lo accompagnerei da un trillo http://puu.sh/42NOc
06:03:161 (4) - questi stream a 1/3 sono assolutamente troppo spaziati (lo spacing di questi e' almeno 1.10x, contro il 1.00x degli altri, comunque secondo me anche 0.90 non guasterebbe)
06:15:606 (5) - questo lo toglierei
06:16:512 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - questi mi piacciono molto, ma li metterei proprio overlappati in orizzontale e simmetrici rispetto all'asse y
06:32:007 (4,5,6) - http://puu.sh/42Owg.jpg o qualcosa del genere
06:35:798 (7,8,9) - avvicina entrambi gli slider al cerchio, pure qua porterei il distance snap da entrambi a 1.00x
06:37:446 (5,6,7,8) - trovo quella croce un po' storta fuorviante, meglio un arco cosi': http://puu.sh/42OMi.jpg
06:41:732 - dio ti punira' per aver messo la pausa sulla fantasia improvviso
06:54:754 (2) - il salto e' abbastanza grande, anche qualcosa di questo tipo non verrebbe male http://puu.sh/42P1Q.jpg
08:43:051 (6,7,8) - * le tre sviolinate durato esattamente un mezzo ciascuna, a differenza degli altri casi, stavolta usare questo pattern e' una forzatura. porterei questi 3 slider ad un mezzo e li vedrei bene disposti a triangolo e che vanno verso l'esterno, qualcosa di questo tipo http://puu.sh/42PkX.jpg
09:03:326 (3,4) - mi inganna ogni volta e premo (4) in anticipo, probabilmente e' un problema mio, ma NC (4) per sicurezza
09:41:567 (8,9,10) - si legge male per via del 9 nascosto e dello spacing strano.. forse http://puu.sh/42PVs.jpg x:256 y:180
Topic Starter
Pizza Kun

Nephroid wrote:

Still new to modding. ~

The combo colors look dull, and the green doesn't really match the background. Try this:
SPOILER
Combo1 : 128,128,128
Combo2 : 0,128,255
Combo3 : 0,64,128
Combo4 : 248,7,109
Combo5 : 128,0,64
Combo6 : 192,192,192

No i prefer my colors

01:19:315 (4,5) - The start of the sliders don't have hitsounds, which feels weird when playing. I know but i like it

01:20:798 (1) - The syncopation is a little awkward. Maybe add a circle at 01:20:633. Yes

01:22:611 (3,4) - The rhythm here is actually triplets, but you have sixteenth notes. Should be like this. No

01:27:556 (6,7,1,2,3,4) - The new combo seems to start too early. (Maybe have it start at the stream.) Yes

01:26:402 (1) - Consider increasing the speed of the slider here. Also 01:31:677 (1) - 01:42:227 (1) - 01:44:864 (1) - 01:47:501 (1) - 02:13:875 (1) - etc. (Essentially whenever you hear that stronger beat.) Nope

01:28:216 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - Try removing the circle at 01:28:793. Nope but i've fixed the shape of stream

01:38:765 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - The stream should start at 01:39:095. (Replace the slider in the beginning with 2 eigth notes.) No

01:44:864 (1) - The shape looks weird. I like it ^^

01:48:820 (7,8,9,1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Should start the new combo at 01:48:820 (7). Yes

02:20:963 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - I think these circles look better like this. I like disorder in jumps

02:53:600 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - Consider making this section slower. Or maybe the previous section faster. No

03:00:194 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - The big jumps don't really match this slow section, based on the jumps in the previous, more energetic section. I prefer big jump with slow slider in this section

03:03:161 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12) - Move 03:03:902 (10,11,12) to improve the shape. Like this. Ok

03:04:149 (1) - Seems like a good place to put kiai. uhm ok

03:05:468 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - This arrangement seems better. Ok

03:17:337 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Make the sliders progressively faster (maybe 1.2x, 1.3x, 1.4x) so that there's some transition to the 1.5x in the kiai. Ok i like this think

03:19:974 (1,2,3,4) - The sliders in this kiai section have weirdly placed hitsounds. When you're listening to it, the hitsounds just seem to come later than they should. Uhm?

03:28:216 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - This shape seems better. Too big

03:48:655 (3,4,5) - These seem misplaced. A slider that goes with the voice seems to match the rest of the section better.

04:07:446 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - The two sliders should be replaced with circles that jump. 3 and 5 should be removed. Here's a reference.

04:12:721 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5) - Jumpy circles that go with the melody might be better here. Otherwise, the triple circles you have all start one sixteenth note too early. This rhythm goes with the drum in the background. No

04:27:391 - Seems like something's missing. Fixed

04:35:798 - Consider putting four circles here that lead into the next slider. Ok

04:48:326 (1) - Increasing the slider speed during kiai would probably make the map more interesting. Done

04:58:546 (9,10,1) - A good place for a small stream to lead into that slider. nope

05:12:062 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Try gradually increasing the jump distance and slider speed in order to match the progression in the music. No

05:17:337 (1,2,3,4) - Some syncopation here would be nice. Try this. No, low speed now is bad :<

05:31:677 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5) - The rhythm here is weird; definitely not just straight sixteenths though. This rhythm sounds a bit better. (Yeah, it's a bit weird...) The rest of the streams in this section is also weird... I went through it at 25% speed and these parts don't really match that well: 05:37:776 (5,6,7,8,9,10) - 05:38:930 (4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - 05:40:084 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - 05:42:062 (5,6,7,8) - 05:42:391 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - 05:43:710 (5,6) - 05:44:205 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - 05:45:029 (3,4,5,6,7) - 05:46:348 (3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - 05:47:172 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - 05:47:666 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - 05:48:490 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - 05:49:727 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8). Okay, that was a lot more than I expected... maybe I'm just too picky. (I don't know how to put those time things in a list with commas between them, so I'm using dashes instead.)

05:51:622 - Should stop kiai. Ok

06:01:183 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12) - The stream shouldn't start until 06:01:306, and it should be faster than sixteenths. I know but is unrankable with your speed, i prefer to use 1/4

06:16:512 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - Shape can be improved. How?

06:41:732 - Fantasie Impromptu is such a good place for a stream. (It starts with 2 measures of triplets, then the rest is sixteenths.) Though it would be pretty exhausting... I do not know how to create streams

06:54:919 - Good place to start a gigantic stream too. And this one would be straight sixteenths. Nope

07:22:282 - For some reason, I was expecting a stream here. 1/6 nope.

07:28:710 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Shouldn't really start until 3. I prefer in this way

07:33:985 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Try turning 7 into a slider. I don't like it

07:35:139 (1,2,3) - I don't understand these. Should be at 07:35:304, 07:35:633, and 07:35:963? Piano part

08:00:853 (1,1,1) - I don't think anyone likes consecutive spinners. 1 spinner is boring and i prefer follow voice

08:16:677 - It feels like there's a measure missing. I know, i did it on purpose

08:23:930 (1,2) - Sliders with weird hitsounds again. ^

08:32:832 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - The stream should start and end a beat earlier.

09:14:699 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - These circles sound weird. (Need hitsounds.) ?? they have hitsounds

09:22:611 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - The stream starts half a beat early. Also, rearrange 09:23:105 (7,8) to improve shape. Ok

09:33:161 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - Half a beat early.

09:48:985 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Seems half a beat early again. Or maybe 09:48:820 (5) is placed in an awkward position.

09:50:304 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - The stream seems a bit unnecessary. (There's always that Fantasie Impromptu part that's great for streams...)

Well, that took a long time. I think some of the formatting broke too...
Thanks

Sephibro wrote:

owowowowo

01:43:710 (1,2) - fai in modo che abbiano la stessa forma o una piu' simile Ok
01:55:908 (5) - *te le segnalero' tutte perche' le odio, ti daro' consigli su come cambiarle solo per quelle che secondo me vanno tolte per forza Ok
02:03:820 (2) - * No
02:10:084 (5,6,7) - * ^
03:00:194 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - secondo me e' meglio se lasci il 5 in modo che la stella rimanga intatta, il 6 lo puoi lasciare dov'e'. cosi' sembra una stella mancamentata Ok
03:34:315 (1) - io sposterei lo slider in avanti in modo che starti sul bianco e sul rosso metterei un cerchio http://puu.sh/42Ns8.jpg OK ma in modo un po diverso
03:39:260 (4) - ^ No
da 04:12:721 (1) fino a 04:15:194 (5) - sostituirei prima e ultima oppure seconda e quarta con uno slider corto con reverseNo
04:24:342 (5) - eviterei di farlo partire sul blu Fixato
04:24:919 (1) - * qua puoi cambiare in http://puu.sh/42NHt.jpg No
04:36:128 (1) - parte un po' improvviso, lo accompagnerei da un trillo http://puu.sh/42NOc No
06:03:161 (4) - questi stream a 1/3 sono assolutamente troppo spaziati (lo spacing di questi e' almeno 1.10x, contro il 1.00x degli altri, comunque secondo me anche 0.90 non guasterebbe) Non tutti ho solo corretto un errore di spacing
06:15:606 (5) - questo lo toglierei No
06:16:512 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - questi mi piacciono molto, ma li metterei proprio overlappati in orizzontale e simmetrici rispetto all'asse y Sarebbero troppo distanti e no nsarebbe bello da vedere :\
06:32:007 (4,5,6) - http://puu.sh/42Owg.jpg o qualcosa del genere Grazie va bene ^^
06:35:798 (7,8,9) - avvicina entrambi gli slider al cerchio, pure qua porterei il distance snap da entrambi a 1.00x Ok
06:37:446 (5,6,7,8) - trovo quella croce un po' storta fuorviante, meglio un arco cosi': http://puu.sh/42OMi.jpg Mi piace più la croce veloce con minijump ma la sistemo meglio
06:41:732 - dio ti punira' per aver messo la pausa sulla fantasia improvviso Non so se riempirla e come
06:54:754 (2) - il salto e' abbastanza grande, anche qualcosa di questo tipo non verrebbe male http://puu.sh/42P1Q.jpg Ho solo otlto la tripletta
08:43:051 (6,7,8) - * le tre sviolinate durato esattamente un mezzo ciascuna, a differenza degli altri casi, stavolta usare questo pattern e' una forzatura. Preferisco cosìporterei questi 3 slider ad un mezzo e li vedrei bene disposti a triangolo e che vanno verso l'esterno, qualcosa di questo tipo http://puu.sh/42PkX.jpg
09:03:326 (3,4) - mi inganna ogni volta e premo (4) in anticipo, probabilmente e' un problema mio, ma NC (4) per sicurezza Ok
09:41:567 (8,9,10) - si legge male per via del 9 nascosto e dello spacing strano.. forse http://puu.sh/42PVs.jpg x:256 y:180 Spostato



Grazie mille ^^
ts8zs
One reason:I feel this playing better
[._.]
01:19:315 (4,5) - don't do this
01:24:589 (4) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/934315
02:08:435 (9) - Ctrl+G
>02:09:095 (1) - Ctrl+G
02:17:337 (4) - not fit 3 well,move last point
02:19:150 (1,2,3) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/934319
>02:20:304 (4,5) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/934320
02:27:886 (3,4,5) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/934321
03:34:644 (2,3,4,5) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/934327
03:52:941 (6,7) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/934412
03:57:886 (4,5) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/934416
04:00:029 (3) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/934417
04:27:556 (5) - make this bow angle less
04:40:743 (6,7,8,9) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/934422
05:01:512 (1) - This can blanket more fits
05:11:732 (7) - Ctrl+G
05:33:161 (1) - 2nd point 340,240
06:25:908 (1) - move to center
Beethoven & miku makes me...lol
08:16:677 (8) - put at 7
08:23:930 (1,3) - I dont think bats will approve this._.
I think some sliders angel is too high,don't make sliders like 09:40:084 (2) - this, It is ugly XD
Topic Starter
Pizza Kun

ts8zs wrote:

One reason:I feel this playing better
[._.]
01:19:315 (4,5) - don't do this Ok
01:24:589 (4) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/934315 Ok
02:08:435 (9) - Ctrl+G Ok
>02:09:095 (1) - Ctrl+G Ok
02:17:337 (4) - not fit 3 well,move last point Ok
02:19:150 (1,2,3) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/934319 Ok
>02:20:304 (4,5) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/934320 Ok
02:27:886 (3,4,5) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/934321 Ok
03:34:644 (2,3,4,5) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/934327 Ok
03:52:941 (6,7) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/934412 With some changes
03:57:886 (4,5) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/934416 Ok
04:00:029 (3) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/934417 Ok
04:27:556 (5) - make this bow angle less Ok
04:40:743 (6,7,8,9) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/934422 Ok
05:01:512 (1) - This can blanket more fits Ok
05:11:732 (7) - Ctrl+G Ok
05:33:161 (1) - 2nd point 340,240 No
06:25:908 (1) - move to cent er Ok
Beethoven & miku makes me...lol xD
08:16:677 (8) - put at 7 No hard to read
08:23:930 (1,3) - I dont think bats will approve this._. :<
I think some sliders angel is too high,don't make sliders like 09:40:084 (2) - this, It is ugly XD
thanks ^^
Pagno
If it were me I'd rank it just because of the storyboard o/
And, nice job with hitsounds!

02:00:688 (6) - It's hard to get the tempo at this note, maybe try making it New Combo

02:55:578 (9) - I'll point out this one for the whole map: generally I feel uncomfortable with streams right after a slider if the slider ends on the white tick, if it were me I'd make every slider end on the blue tick and make the stream start on the white tick. However this is just my mapping style, feel free to ignore this

05:31:842 (3,1) - Just a suggestion, wouldn't it be better to make these sliders "follow" the stream instead of pointing at the top?

I've looked through the whole map and actually I couldn't find more things to fix, it looks a good mapped Marathon!
Good luck!
Topic Starter
Pizza Kun

Pagno wrote:

If it were me I'd rank it just because of the storyboard o/
And, nice job with hitsounds!

02:00:688 (6) - It's hard to get the tempo at this note, maybe try making it New Combo Ok

02:55:578 (9) - I'll point out this one for the whole map: generally I feel uncomfortable with streams right after a slider if the slider ends on the white tick, if it were me I'd make every slider end on the blue tick and make the stream start on the white tick. However this is just my mapping style, feel free to ignore this Uhm no i prefer this

05:31:842 (3,1) - Just a suggestion, wouldn't it be better to make these sliders "follow" the stream instead of pointing at the top? Oh thanks

I've looked through the whole map and actually I couldn't find more things to fix, it looks a good mapped Marathon!
Good luck!
^^
luxoDeh
Ciao! ecco il mod :)

MARATHON

01:52:941 (3,4) - prova a fare un blancket migliore con questi due

02:36:952 (7,8) - secondo me dovresti eliminare la nota ed allungare lo slider fino a 02:37:282 - così il ritmo sarà uguale a quello che hai usato prima ed inoltre penso che suoni anche meglio

02:47:501 (6) - non mi piace molto la forma di questo slider, io ti consiglierei di farla più in questo modo se ti va

03:07:611 (4,5,1,2,3,4,5) - quello che penserei di fare in questo punto è dare una forma più definita al tutto... potresti spostare questi 2 03:07:611 (4,3) - a x:340-y:312 (non penso sia un problema visto che lo spacing non viene rispettato, come è giusto che sia) in più poi spostando anche 03:08:765 (5) - a x:200 - y:312 si verrà a formare una forma a M ben definita tra tutti 03:07:611 (4,5,1,2,3,4,5) -

04:02:172 (4) - la forma di questo slider non è proprio il massimo, potresti provare a farla più simmetrica, magari ruotala temporaneamente al dritto così puoi capire bene che forma viene fuori.

04:52:117 (5) - forse è meglio se copi/incolli lo slider precedente così viene qualcosa di più simmetrico

06:36:128 (8,9) - hm... non mi convince molto come viene il ritmo qui... penso che il giusto ritmo verrebbe se cancelli questi due e metti al loro posto uno slider che va da 06:36:128 - a 06:36:457 - ... comunque penso che va bene anche così, perchè la pattern è buona, anche se il ritmo continua a suonarmi un po' strano...

08:36:128 (7) - secondo me è meglio se lo muovi una grid in basso

09:06:457 (6,7) - forse è meglio se c'è prima la note e poi lo slider... secondo me per il ritmo viene meglio

09:44:864 (1,3) - forse potresti evitare di farli toccare

oook! è tutto! la map è ben fatta, ed è anche epica direi! visto che non sono molto bravo con le insane mi sono concentrato più sul ritmo o sull'estetica, trascurando la giocabilità. comunque buona mappa! e buona fortuna per l'approval! ;)
Topic Starter
Pizza Kun

luxoDeh wrote:

Ciao! ecco il mod :)

MARATHON

01:52:941 (3,4) - prova a fare un blancket migliore con questi due Ok

02:36:952 (7,8) - secondo me dovresti eliminare la nota ed allungare lo slider fino a 02:37:282 - così il ritmo sarà uguale a quello che hai usato prima ed inoltre penso che suoni anche meglio Ok

02:47:501 (6) - non mi piace molto la forma di questo slider, io ti consiglierei di farla più in questo modo se ti va Ok

03:07:611 (4,5,1,2,3,4,5) - quello che penserei di fare in questo punto è dare una forma più definita al tutto... potresti spostare questi 2 03:07:611 (4,3) - a x:340-y:312 (non penso sia un problema visto che lo spacing non viene rispettato, come è giusto che sia) in più poi spostando anche 03:08:765 (5) - a x:200 - y:312 si verrà a formare una forma a M ben definita tra tutti 03:07:611 (4,5,1,2,3,4,5) - Ok

04:02:172 (4) - la forma di questo slider non è proprio il massimo, potresti provare a farla più simmetrica, magari ruotala temporaneamente al dritto così puoi capire bene che forma viene fuori. Ok

04:52:117 (5) - forse è meglio se copi/incolli lo slider precedente così viene qualcosa di più simmetrico Ok

06:36:128 (8,9) - hm... non mi convince molto come viene il ritmo qui... penso che il giusto ritmo verrebbe se cancelli questi due e metti al loro posto uno slider che va da 06:36:128 - a 06:36:457 - ... comunque penso che va bene anche così, perchè la pattern è buona, anche se il ritmo continua a suonarmi un po' strano... Seguo la batteria preferisco farlo in 1/3

08:36:128 (7) - secondo me è meglio se lo muovi una grid in basso Ok

09:06:457 (6,7) - forse è meglio se c'è prima la note e poi lo slider... secondo me per il ritmo viene meglio Preferisco finire con la nota

09:44:864 (1,3) - forse potresti evitare di farli toccare Ok

oook! è tutto! la map è ben fatta, ed è anche epica direi! visto che non sono molto bravo con le insane mi sono concentrato più sul ritmo o sull'estetica, trascurando la giocabilità. comunque buona mappa! e buona fortuna per l'approval! ;)
Grazie ^^
bigfrog
hi~ m4m
your mod is faster than mine x_x

[Marathon]
01:20:798(1) this
01:22:611(3,4) same angle?
02:43:710(3) not surround (2) perfect
03:17:337(1,3,5) yeah i like these :3
03:53:435(7) try to same as (6)
03:54:754(2) x308 y144 looks neat
04:15:853(3) less bending
04:25:249(2) this..? looks better i think
05:05:963(6) red point two grid right
05:34:397(5) i do not know why this note is not the same as the distance with other o.o
05:51:952(1) less bending?
06:09:095(2) 30 degrees counter-clockwise
07:37:776(4) do you like this ?
09:29:534(2) what about..
09:52:941(9) straight line plz

wow,what a long song :O
awesome map~! i only can give some suggestions

GL for ranking >w<
Topic Starter
Pizza Kun

bigfrog wrote:

hi~ m4m
your mod is faster than mine x_x

[Marathon]
01:20:798(1) this
01:22:611(3,4) same angle?
02:43:710(3) not surround (2) perfect
03:17:337(1,3,5) yeah i like these :3
03:53:435(7) try to same as (6)
03:54:754(2) x308 y144 looks neat
04:15:853(3) less bending
04:25:249(2) this..? looks better i think
05:05:963(6) red point two grid right
05:34:397(5) i do not know why this note is not the same as the distance with other o.o
05:51:952(1) less bending?
06:09:095(2) 30 degrees counter-clockwise
07:37:776(4) do you like this ?
09:29:534(2) what about..
09:52:941(9) straight line plz

wow,what a long song :O
awesome map~! i only can give some suggestions

GL for ranking >w<
Thanks! ^^
puncia
omg ~o.o~
Topic Starter
Pizza Kun

Puncia wrote:

omg ~o.o~ I think is better now ^^ thanks
ヾ(´・ω・`)
YunoFanatic
[Marathon]

for preventing my very loong mod consider fixing most of the jumps it makes weird if its too far its too weird if its too close so youll have to focus where you should place it correctly

01:18:655 make this slider into this http://puu.sh/47YK1.pngthis looks good better than the b4 slider besides this is making blanket
01:28:216 compress this slider or remapped the notes make new pattern this pattern is bad very,
01:39:754 place this (1) somewhere else because this note started the nc and it might feel weird for players
02:11:073 nc then delete nc on 02:11:402
02:11:732 then nc on this
02:54:260 not very fond of this slider bend this more so it can blanket 02:54:754
04:56:238 isnt there are more good sliders than this?
04:59:864 move to x:428 y:20 to get blanket
07:33:161 move to x:208 Y:96 cuz of blanket again
07:38:095 nc to remove the 10 and 11 and 12
07:57:721 follow this picture correctly your placing in here is bad http://puu.sh/47Zr7.png
08:15:194 no more sliders like this plz replace this

dun i like the streams only the jumps pls fix them imo.... you should not mapped itself you should perform collab with people this such good song..
Topic Starter
Pizza Kun

YunoFanatic wrote:

[Marathon]

for preventing my very loong mod consider fixing most of the jumps it makes weird if its too far its too weird if its too close so youll have to focus where you should place it correctly

01:18:655 make this slider into this http://puu.sh/47YK1.pngthis looks good better than the b4 slider besides this is making blanket Ok
01:28:216 compress this slider or remapped the notes make new pattern this pattern is bad very, Ok
01:39:754 place this (1) somewhere else because this note started the nc and it might feel weird for players Ok
02:11:073 nc then delete nc on 02:11:402 Ok
02:11:732 then nc on this Ok
02:54:260 not very fond of this slider bend this more so it can blanket 02:54:754 No
04:56:238 isnt there are more good sliders than this? No
04:59:864 move to x:428 y:20 to get blanket Ok
07:33:161 move to x:208 Y:96 cuz of blanket again Ok
07:38:095 nc to remove the 10 and 11 and 12 Ok
07:57:721 follow this picture correctly your placing in here is bad http://puu.sh/47Zr7.png Ok
08:15:194 no more sliders like this plz replace this Ok

dun i like the streams only the jumps pls fix them imo.... you should not mapped itself you should perform collab with people this such good song..
Thanks ^^
kelvinli
Ciao~ M4M via. pm request!

[General]
Capitalize uta --> Uta

[Marathon]
Try OD-1? Since that's a marathon, OD8 might be too harsh or players would just simply rage at dis map :D Furthermore there are some short spinners, so OD7 would be good
01:23:435 (6) - It might be too far. I did not expect it to be 1/2
01:34:315 (1) - I would move the second red point somewhere to the right to create notable difference with the upcoming note
01:41:073 (1) - I suggest you to make this mirrored from the previous slider, it'll look better
01:46:183 (5) - space this farther so it wouldn't break the flow
01:51:293 (3) - try reversing its direction of curve:
01:58:710 (5) - ^
02:15:359 (5) - it collides with other sliders. Move it further or make a new shape
02:20:304 (4,5) - I don't like this flow. Copy (2) and (3) and put it in the midway?
02:24:260 (9) - add a whistle sound at its tail?
02:47:996 (7) - put it like this for cursor flow:
02:50:633 (6) - love these two :3
03:07:117 (2) - instead of putting it behind (1), you could just put it next to (1), better flow I suppose
04:20:633 (1) - Ctrl+G for this one for flow?
04:47:666 (5,6) - I would make them straight instead, since the vocals is quite agitated
05:19:974 - add a note here?
06:17:996 (1) - add a whistle sound on every upbeat here, it sounds too bland currently
06:37:446 (5,6) - this spacing is not really doable
08:38:271 (6) - move the second anchor point to make a nice blanket with (5)
08:44:864 (3) - space farther for consistency
08:54:342 (6,7) - don't make this turn, it is too hard to follow
09:50:963 (2) - Ctrl+G. hardly catch from previous slider imo
09:52:941 (9) - remove the finish. the "AHHH" starts at 09:52:776 (7) - so add a finish on it instead
^ also NC this for consistency
09:55:578 (1) - ^


Good work on hitsounds, SB and combo colours. Pretty nice map too.
Deserves a star~good luck!
Topic Starter
Pizza Kun

kelvinli wrote:

Ciao~ M4M via. pm request!

[General]
Capitalize uta --> Uta

[Marathon]
Try OD-1? Since that's a marathon, OD8 might be too harsh or players would just simply rage at dis map :D Furthermore there are some short spinners, so OD7 would be good Ok thanks ^^
01:23:435 (6) - It might be too far. I did not expect it to be 1/2 No
01:34:315 (1) - I would move the second red point somewhere to the right to create notable difference with the upcoming note Yes
01:41:073 (1) - I suggest you to make this mirrored from the previous slider, it'll look better Yes
01:46:183 (5) - space this farther so it wouldn't break the flow Yes
01:51:293 (3) - try reversing its direction of curve: Yes
01:58:710 (5) - ^ Yes
02:15:359 (5) - it collides with other sliders. Move it further or make a new shape Yes
02:20:304 (4,5) - I don't like this flow. Copy (2) and (3) and put it in the midway? No
02:24:260 (9) - add a whistle sound at its tail? No
02:47:996 (7) - put it like this for cursor flow: Yes
02:50:633 (6) - love these two :3 :D
03:07:117 (2) - instead of putting it behind (1), you could just put it next to (1), better flow I suppose Yes
04:20:633 (1) - Ctrl+G for this one for flow? No
04:47:666 (5,6) - I would make them straight instead, since the vocals is quite agitated Yes
05:19:974 - add a note here? No
06:17:996 (1) - add a whistle sound on every upbeat here, it sounds too bland currently Yes Thanks
06:37:446 (5,6) - this spacing is not really doable I know but it's a minijump
08:38:271 (6) - move the second anchor point to make a nice blanket with (5) Yes
08:44:864 (3) - space farther for consistency No
08:54:342 (6,7) - don't make this turn, it is too hard to follow Yes
09:50:963 (2) - Ctrl+G. hardly catch from previous slider imo No
09:52:941 (9) - remove the finish. the "AHHH" starts at 09:52:776 (7) - so add a finish on it instead No
^ also NC this for consistency Yes
09:55:578 (1) - ^ No


Good work on hitsounds, SB and combo colours. Pretty nice map too.
Deserves a star~good luck!

Thanks :D
giO-
M4M richiesta tramite PM.

[Marathon]

01:22:446 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - Dato che nelle parti in cui l'SB è senza colori usi la combo grigia, perchè non la usi pure qui? E parte a colori da 01:23:765 (1) -

Consiglio per gli slider; quando fai qualsiasi tipo di slider fai in modo che l'ultimo punto finisce al centro http://puu.sh/4awUR.jpg , cosi la forma viene precisa e soprattutto ti viene più semplice fare degli slider in successione simili o uguali come in questo caso: 01:42:721 (2,3) - N.B: è solo un consiglio, per rendere tutto più consistente.
Nell'esempio che ti ho linkato sopra dovresti solo sistemare il (2).

01:43:710 (1,2) - Sposta il (2) con DS 1.6x in modo da eliminare l'overlap http://puu.sh/4ax7B.jpg - http://puu.sh/4ax7b.jpg

01:55:908 (4) - Farei finire questo slider su 01:56:073 - , a te la scelta.
02:03:820 (2) - Stessa cosa qui, 02:04:150 (3) - , non mi suona tanto bene con la fine sul tick blue.
02:22:776 (4) - Elimina l'overlap http://puu.sh/4axg4.jpg - http://puu.sh/4axgA.jpg
02:25:249 (2) - Anche qui come per gli altri due slider che finiscono sul tick blue, lo farei finire su 02:25:413 -
02:32:501 (1,2) - Non sono tanto belli da vedere messi cosi :P , decidi tu se tenerli o cambiare disposizione.
03:52:611 (4) - Spostalo su x:304 y:112 cosi la distanza è uguale agli altri seguenti: 03:52:776 (5) - 03:53:930 (8) -

08:33:573 (4) - Non so se sia voluto (ma non credo), sistemerei lo spacing esattamente come il resto dello stream, quindi sposta direttamente 08:33:573 (4,5,6,7) - con 1.0x DS http://puu.sh/4awsX.jpg

GL :D
Panino103
[Marathon]

_ 01:22:529 (2) - Lo sposterei verso> x:296 y:296
_ 01:22:611 (3) - ^> x:340 y:304
_ 01:28:216 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - Non so se per te sembra meglio, ma secondo me mettere [9] finire dove c'era [1] è meglio
_ 01:53:765 (6) - Lo sposterei verso> x:476 y:284

_ 02:44:699 (6) - ^ Più o meno> x:52 y:112
_ 02:49:150 (2) - ^> x:476 y:164

_ 03:48:655 (3) - ^> x:188 y:224
_ 03:52:941 (6) - Forse è meglio se lo capovolgi questo slider, capisco il jump, ma il flow ne risente troppo.

_ 05:00:194 (5) - Toglierei questo slider perchè non rappresenta una nota nella canzone
_ 05:38:023 (8,9,10,11,12) - Perchè qui cambi lo Spacing?

_ 06:08:435 (6) - Non sento tanta differenza nella musica tra questo e 06:08:765 (1) questo, quindi perchè lo devi fare 1/8?
_ 07:10:578 (3) - Perchè qui cambi lo Spacing?

_ 09:50:304 (1,2) - Avvicinerei i due slider siccome fanno parte della stessa stream. Uguale per 09:52:941 (1,2) and 09:55:578 (1,2) e 09:58:216 (1,2)
Topic Starter
Pizza Kun

giO- wrote:

M4M richiesta tramite PM.

[Marathon]

01:22:446 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - Dato che nelle parti in cui l'SB è senza colori usi la combo grigia, perchè non la usi pure qui? E parte a colori da 01:23:765 (1) -

Consiglio per gli slider; quando fai qualsiasi tipo di slider fai in modo che l'ultimo punto finisce al centro http://puu.sh/4awUR.jpg , cosi la forma viene precisa e soprattutto ti viene più semplice fare degli slider in successione simili o uguali come in questo caso: 01:42:721 (2,3) - N.B: è solo un consiglio, per rendere tutto più consistente.
Nell'esempio che ti ho linkato sopra dovresti solo sistemare il (2).

01:43:710 (1,2) - Sposta il (2) con DS 1.6x in modo da eliminare l'overlap http://puu.sh/4ax7B.jpg - http://puu.sh/4ax7b.jpg

01:55:908 (4) - Farei finire questo slider su 01:56:073 - , a te la scelta. No seguo il vocal ^^
02:03:820 (2) - Stessa cosa qui, 02:04:150 (3) - , non mi suona tanto bene con la fine sul tick blue. ^
02:22:776 (4) - Elimina l'overlap http://puu.sh/4axg4.jpg - http://puu.sh/4axgA.jpg
02:25:249 (2) - Anche qui come per gli altri due slider che finiscono sul tick blue, lo farei finire su 02:25:413 - ^
02:32:501 (1,2) - Non sono tanto belli da vedere messi cosi :P , decidi tu se tenerli o cambiare disposizione.
03:52:611 (4) - Spostalo su x:304 y:112 cosi la distanza è uguale agli altri seguenti: 03:52:776 (5) - 03:53:930 (8) -

08:33:573 (4) - Non so se sia voluto (ma non credo), sistemerei lo spacing esattamente come il resto dello stream, quindi sposta direttamente 08:33:573 (4,5,6,7) - con 1.0x DS http://puu.sh/4awsX.jpg

GL :D
Ho messo in rosso solo quello che non ho corretto ^^

Panino103 wrote:

[Marathon]

_ 01:22:529 (2) - Lo sposterei verso> x:296 y:296
_ 01:22:611 (3) - ^> x:340 y:304
_ 01:28:216 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - Non so se per te sembra meglio, ma secondo me mettere [9] finire dove c'era [1] è meglio Rovinerei il flow se lo faccio, lo stream deve partire dal basso
_ 01:53:765 (6) - Lo sposterei verso> x:476 y:284

_ 02:44:699 (6) - ^ Più o meno> x:52 y:112
_ 02:49:150 (2) - ^> x:476 y:164

_ 03:48:655 (3) - ^> x:188 y:224
_ 03:52:941 (6) - Forse è meglio se lo capovolgi questo slider, capisco il jump, ma il flow ne risente troppo.

_ 05:00:194 (5) - Toglierei questo slider perchè non rappresenta una nota nella canzone Segue il violino
_ 05:38:023 (8,9,10,11,12) - Perchè qui cambi lo Spacing? Perchè sono uno scemo :D

_ 06:08:435 (6) - Non sento tanta differenza nella musica tra questo e 06:08:765 (1) questo, quindi perchè lo devi fare 1/8? Segue la chitarra ma forse può confondere, per ora lo lascio così
_ 07:10:578 (3) - Perchè qui cambi lo Spacing?

_ 09:50:304 (1,2) - Avvicinerei i due slider siccome fanno parte della stessa stream. Uguale per 09:52:941 (1,2) and 09:55:578 (1,2) e 09:58:216 (1,2)
Idem per l'altra mod ^^

Grazie a tutti
rezoons
Hi :),

M4M from my queue:
06:17:996 (1) - WTF bethoveen is doing here? xD

[General]
  1. Please, use a Slider Tick Rate of 2 in order to show better the change of SV in place like 03:17:337 (1,3,5).
Difficulty
  1. HP drain rate of 5? I understand it's a marathon but i think you can raise it to 6~7.
[Novice]
  1. 02:42:227 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - I don't really understand these 1/4 because i hear
  2. 05:36:128 (3) - Why does this slider is longer than the other? It's 1/3 when other are 1/4, that's weird. They are normal at 05:37:117 (1,2,3,4).
Placement/Aesthetic
  1. 01:19:974 (5) - CTRL+G? In order to keep the symmetry of 01:19:315 (4,5,1).
  2. 01:25:249 (6) - Move it to x=440 y=192 for the symmetry with 01:23:765 (1). It will complete the symmetry of 01:24:260 (3,4,5).
  3. 01:26:402 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Here, the music is more and more intense so i think it would fits better if your jump were harder and harder. Currently
  4. 01:27:062 (3,4) is x2.13 01:27:391 (5,6) is x3.17 and 01:27:391 (5,6) is x2.41 so maybe you should try to make the jump 01:27:721 (7,8) harder than
  5. 01:27:391 (5,6).
  6. 01:49:315 (2,3,4,5) - Maybe you should rotate it a little bit more because this square is nearly straight and i think it will look beter if it's more inclined. Currently, the nearly symmetry make it looks like a broken pattern compared to the neat symmetry of the other pattern.
  7. 02:03:326 (10) - Move it to x=156 y=212 for a perfect square with 02:02:666 (8,9,10,1).
  8. 02:17:337 (4) - CTRL+G for a better flow?
  9. 02:21:293 (3,4) - Not exactly symmetrical.
  10. 02:30:688 (4) - It will look much better imo if you would put it at the center of 02:30:194 (1,2,3). I think it's x=116 y=232.
  11. 02:31:677 (8) - CTRL+G?
  12. 02:38:106 (1,2,3) - Since you're 3 sliders why rotating them by 90°? Why not 120°? It would look better imo.
  13. 02:59:370 (3) - Move it to x=344 y=216 for the parallelogram with 02:59:040 (1,2,3,4)?
  14. 03:03:408 (4,5) - The spacing here is WTF! I'm pretty sure it's UNRANKABLE!
  15. 03:22:117 (4,5) - CTRL+G? Because this part is supposed to be intense!
  16. 04:42:886 (5) - Move it to x=328 y=216 You'll have small symmetry with 04:42:391 (3,4,5) and 04:42:886 (5) will be less stuck to 04:43:381 (7).
  17. 05:17:337 (1,2,3,4) - Dafuq? During all the kiai you have only proper neat symetrical pattern and then at the end you have.... This..... I don't get it.
  18. 06:22:611 (4,1) - Try avoiding this overlap.
  19. 07:00:194 (1) - CTRL+G for a better flow? (And then CTRL+G on 07:00:523 (2))
  20. 07:20:139 (3,4,5) - This pattern is maybe a little bit hard considering we are in a "gray part" where the map is supposed to be "relatively" easy. Besides,
  21. 07:20:139 (3,5) isn't symetrical.
  22. 07:28:710 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Lower the spacing of this stream because this part isn't supposed to be difficult.
  23. 08:10:743 (1,2,3) - I think you overuse this pattern a little bit. With three notes tou can do well, three notes, slider+note,note+slider, slider with arrow. You always choose the 3 notes and always in triangle. Seeing how often this pattern is used here maybe you should try more diversity.
  24. 08:28:051 (2,3) - Bad stack.
  25. 08:37:117 (2) - CTRL+G?
  26. 08:56:238 (5,6,7,8) - Maybe you could avoid the overlap.
  27. 09:15:194 (3,4,5,6,7) - It looks like a broken star XD Maybe you didn't intend to do one but since it look like one why not doing a proper one?
NC
  1. 02:11:073 (1,2,3,4,5) - I would suggest to remove the NC at 02:11:073 (1) and put it on 02:11:402 (5) at the end of the stream. It fits much better imo.
  2. 03:17:996 (3,5) - NC here to show the change of SV.
  3. 03:46:018 (6) - NC?
  4. 07:13:381 (1,2,1,2,1,2) - NC everywhere? Like you did for 07:17:337 (1,1). It will compensate the loose of life.
  5. 08:27:062 (1) - The song start being intene here so why is it still grey? You should use your dark green combo i think.
  6. 08:28:381 (3) - NC?
  7. 09:08:765 (3,5) - Same as 03:17:996 (3,5).
  8. 09:11:402 (3,5) - ^
Hitsound
  1. 01:12:062 (1) - Actually, a finish here seems to fit the song better than a clap imo.
  2. 03:24:589 (3) - Why is there a finish at the end of the slider? I think it will fit much better if it is at the beggining.
  3. 03:35:139 (5) - ^
  4. 04:26:238 (1) - The finish here seems a little bit out of place.
  5. 05:31:677 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5,1) - Why the whistle here hasn't the same regularity as the one in the following death stream? (which start at
  6. 05:35:798 (1))
  7. 06:37:859 (1) - Whistle?
  8. 07:39:672 (1) - ^
  9. 10:00:935 (1) - Add a finish?
Whoah, i didn't thought that modding approval whas that exhausting! Hoenstly i can't judge the diff because i don't really know the approval criteria. All i can say is that it's fun to play even if the flow feels weird sometimes.
~Good Luck~
Topic Starter
Pizza Kun

rezoons wrote:

Hi :),

M4M from my queue:
06:17:996 (1) - WTF bethoveen is doing here? xD

[General]
  1. Please, use a Slider Tick Rate of 2 in order to show better the change of SV in place like 03:17:337 (1,3,5).
Difficulty
  1. HP drain rate of 5? I understand it's a marathon but i think you can raise it to 6~7.
[Novice]
  1. 02:42:227 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - I don't really understand these 1/4 because i hear
  2. 05:36:128 (3) - Why does this slider is longer than the other? It's 1/3 when other are 1/4, that's weird. They are normal at 05:37:117 (1,2,3,4).
Placement/Aesthetic
  1. 01:19:974 (5) - CTRL+G? In order to keep the symmetry of 01:19:315 (4,5,1).
  2. 01:25:249 (6) - Move it to x=440 y=192 for the symmetry with 01:23:765 (1). It will complete the symmetry of 01:24:260 (3,4,5).
  3. 01:26:402 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Here, the music is more and more intense so i think it would fits better if your jump were harder and harder. Currently
  4. 01:27:062 (3,4) is x2.13 01:27:391 (5,6) is x3.17 and 01:27:391 (5,6) is x2.41 so maybe you should try to make the jump 01:27:721 (7,8) harder than
  5. 01:27:391 (5,6).
  6. 01:49:315 (2,3,4,5) - Maybe you should rotate it a little bit more because this square is nearly straight and i think it will look beter if it's more inclined. Currently, the nearly symmetry make it looks like a broken pattern compared to the neat symmetry of the other pattern.
  7. 02:03:326 (10) - Move it to x=156 y=212 for a perfect square with 02:02:666 (8,9,10,1).
  8. 02:17:337 (4) - CTRL+G for a better flow?
  9. 02:21:293 (3,4) - Not exactly symmetrical.
  10. 02:30:688 (4) - It will look much better imo if you would put it at the center of 02:30:194 (1,2,3). I think it's x=116 y=232.
  11. 02:31:677 (8) - CTRL+G?
  12. 02:38:106 (1,2,3) - Since you're 3 sliders why rotating them by 90°? Why not 120°? It would look better imo.
  13. 02:59:370 (3) - Move it to x=344 y=216 for the parallelogram with 02:59:040 (1,2,3,4)?
  14. 03:03:408 (4,5) - The spacing here is WTF! I'm pretty sure it's UNRANKABLE!
  15. 03:22:117 (4,5) - CTRL+G? Because this part is supposed to be intense!
  16. 04:42:886 (5) - Move it to x=328 y=216 You'll have small symmetry with 04:42:391 (3,4,5) and 04:42:886 (5) will be less stuck to 04:43:381 (7).
  17. 05:17:337 (1,2,3,4) - Dafuq? During all the kiai you have only proper neat symetrical pattern and then at the end you have.... This..... I don't get it.
  18. 06:22:611 (4,1) - Try avoiding this overlap.
  19. 07:00:194 (1) - CTRL+G for a better flow? (And then CTRL+G on 07:00:523 (2))
  20. 07:20:139 (3,4,5) - This pattern is maybe a little bit hard considering we are in a "gray part" where the map is supposed to be "relatively" easy. Besides, No, The voice like dark xD
  21. 07:20:139 (3,5) isn't symetrical.
  22. 07:28:710 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Lower the spacing of this stream because this part isn't supposed to be difficult.
  23. 08:10:743 (1,2,3) - I think you overuse this pattern a little bit. With three notes tou can do well, three notes, slider+note,note+slider, slider with arrow. You always choose the 3 notes and always in triangle. Seeing how often this pattern is used here maybe you should try more diversity.
  24. 08:28:051 (2,3) - Bad stack.
  25. 08:37:117 (2) - CTRL+G?
  26. 08:56:238 (5,6,7,8) - Maybe you could avoid the overlap.
  27. 09:15:194 (3,4,5,6,7) - It looks like a broken star XD Maybe you didn't intend to do one but since it look like one why not doing a proper one?
NC
  1. 02:11:073 (1,2,3,4,5) - I would suggest to remove the NC at 02:11:073 (1) and put it on 02:11:402 (5) at the end of the stream. It fits much better imo.
  2. 03:17:996 (3,5) - NC here to show the change of SV.
  3. 03:46:018 (6) - NC?
  4. 07:13:381 (1,2,1,2,1,2) - NC everywhere? Like you did for 07:17:337 (1,1). It will compensate the loose of life.
  5. 08:27:062 (1) - The song start being intene here so why is it still grey? You should use your dark green combo i think.
  6. 08:28:381 (3) - NC? No
  7. 09:08:765 (3,5) - Same as 03:17:996 (3,5).
  8. 09:11:402 (3,5) - ^
Hitsound
  1. 01:12:062 (1) - Actually, a finish here seems to fit the song better than a clap imo. No Finish
  2. 03:24:589 (3) - Why is there a finish at the end of the slider? I think it will fit much better if it is at the beggining. No
  3. 03:35:139 (5) - ^
  4. 04:26:238 (1) - The finish here seems a little bit out of place. No
  5. 05:31:677 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5,1) - Why the whistle here hasn't the same regularity as the one in the following death stream? (which start at
  6. 05:35:798 (1)) No I prefert 1/2 rithm of whistle
  7. 06:37:859 (1) - Whistle?
  8. 07:39:672 (1) - ^
  9. 10:00:935 (1) - Add a finish? No
Whoah, i didn't thought that modding approval whas that exhausting! Hoenstly i can't judge the diff because i don't really know the approval criteria. All i can say is that it's fun to play even if the flow feels weird sometimes.
~Good Luck~

Fixed all except red letters Thanks ^^
RikiH_
mod. Scusa per il ritardo ENORME ma non ho proprio avuto tempo :C

Rosso=Unrankable
Blu=Should fix
Nero=Suggerimento

Marathon

Dunque, io cambierei il nome della diff in qualcos'altro perchè tutte le map hanno "Marathon" come nome della diff xD Io suggerirei qualcosa legato alla song... Oppure chiamala Pizza, per quanto io odi la gente che da il proprio nome alle diff

01:18:655 (3,4,5) - Metti dei whistle nelle code di questi tre sliders, suonano molto bene secondo me
01:29:205 (1) - Aggiungerei un finish qui
02:02:666 (8) - Io gli darei questa forma, mi ispira di più ed è più simmetrico:
02:11:732 (1) - Hai due NC... Io toglierei questa, perchè tanto prima o poi ti romperanno i coglioni e te la faranno togliere... Ti consiglio di aggiungere una nota a 02:11:567- così il ritmo non viene interrotto!
02:20:633 (5) - Io lo sposterei a 104|60, avrei un jump abbastanza estremo però almeno il pattern sarà più simmetrico!
02:24:260 (9) - Ok, capisco che volevi blankettarlo con lo slider precedente, però così facendo l'hai tutto "accartocciato" xD Ti consiglio di dargli un'altra forma, oppure prova a farlo bene e a blankettarlo nello stesso tempo!
02:29:205 (8,9) - Prova a selezionare queste due note e poi fai ctrl+g... Secondo me flowwa molto meglio siccome la mano deve fare degli angoli più piccoli e non deve deviare di molto, e poi hai anche un jump per far sclerare la gente lol
02:30:853 (5,6) - Ctrl+g prima sul 5 e poi sul 6, qua ti consiglio altamente di farlo, il flow migliorerà di brutto dato che il player dovrà fare degli ovali con la mano
02:33:326 - Aggiungerei una nota e la metterei in 344|112
02:40:413 (1) - Io farei una cosa del genere, mi ispira di più:
02:43:051 (1) - Toglierei il finish dalla coda, mi da fastidio a sentirlo
02:44:370 (5) - Forse proverei un ctrl+g
02:44:864 (7,8) - Migliora un po' il secondo slider per avere un blanket migliore
03:00:853 (5) - Metti un clap qui!
03:02:007 (3,5) - Allineali bene! Per farlo prova a copincollare lo slider 3, poi usi ctrl+g e lo sposti
03:11:238 (7) - Non mi piace molto la curva... Secondo me potresti migliorarla
03:13:381 (6) - Spostalo in 48|108, deve essere alla stessa altezza di quello precedente...
03:16:018 (3) - Un finish qua sopra ci sta da dio secondo me
03:21:952 (3,4,5,6) - Per enfatizzare la voce del cantante perchè non provi ad alzare il volume di queste quattro note a 70/75% Secondo me ci sta perfettamente
03:24:589 (3) - Perchè hai messo un finish sulla coda? Secondo me stona un po'...
03:24:589 (3,4) - Occhio perchè non sono simmetrici... E si vede purtroppo
03:27:556 (5,1) - Spostali un po' verso l'alto, così non toccano la nota 4
03:32:501 (3,4,5,6) - Lo stesso di 03:21:952 (3,4,5,6) - Comunque metti clap ovunque, dato che prima l'avevi fatto!
03:34:315 (1) - Dovresti spostare il finish sulla coda... Sulla testa è su un tick rosso e suona male
03:35:139 (5) - Invece questo finish lo leverei proprio... Non mi suona
03:47:666 (1) - Non mi piace molto xD Prova a farlo come ho suggerito per 02:40:413 (1)
03:48:820 (4,2,3,4) - Scusa se sono nazi ma se noti bene questi due blanket non sono perfetti...
03:51:622 (1) - Ctrl+g secondo me flowwa meglio
04:12:721 (1) - Niente di che, volevo solo dirti che questo pezzo è epico ahahahah
04:17:172 (7) - Io lo farei così per questioni di flow:
04:21:293 (3) - Questa flowwa male, prova a spostarla a 103|136, sulla coda dello slider 5
04:23:271 (1,2) - Dagli la stessa forma, così sono bruttini
04:24:424 (6,7) - Fai bene il blanket
04:25:661 (4,6) - Sposta il 4 in 392|248 e il 6 in 372|152
04:27:391 (4) - Sposta in 297|129 e poi curva i due slider in modo da fare un blanket
04:29:864 (5) - Ctrl+g per il flow
04:40:084 (4) - Sposta in 376|272 così il pattern lookka meglio
04:45:688 (1,2,3,4) - Questo pattern è epico, ma sarebbe ancora più epico se gli slider fossero simmetrici...
04:49:479 (5) - Fallo meglio, un po' come ho suggerito per 02:02:666 (8)
04:51:293 (2) - 177|235 per un blanket migliore
05:01:512 (1) - Fallo simmetrico!
05:40:743 (1) - Io aggiungerei un finish all'inizio
05:41:155 - Correggimi se sbaglio, ma mi pare che qui ci sia una linea verde non snappata
05:51:045 (1) - Questo mi sembra un po' cortino ma non ho voglia di controllare se l'auto prende i 1000 punti, quindi lascio verificare a te se non ti dispiace xD
06:00:523 (5,6,7) - Metti un clap sull'inizio di 5 e 6 e anche sulla nota 7
06:08:435 (6,7) - Secondo me mettere un solo slider da 1/6 in tutto lo stream non ha molto senso... Sostituisci queste due note con uno slider da 1/3 con un repeat. Ti dico questo per coerenza con quello che hai mappato prima, non è che sia sbagliato
06:15:606 (3,4) - Sempre per questioni di flow: Sposta la nota sulla coda dello slider, e poi fai ctrl+g sullo slider
06:52:364 (1,1) - La stessa cosa dello spinner precedente, forse sono un po' corti... Se comunque nello spinner precedente l'auto è riuscito a prendere 1000 punti, allora questi vanno bene
06:57:556 (1,2,3,4) - Falli simmetrici, dai!
07:05:139 (8) - Io copincollerei il 7 precedente e lo flipperei
07:06:787 (5,6,7,8) - Per avere un flow più figo, io userei un ctrl+g su ogni slider singolarmente, vedi se ti piace il risultato
07:08:435 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - ^ Ricordati di usarlo singolarmente, non di selezionarli tutti e poi pigiare ctrl+g...
Comunque in tutta la parte col piano, quella di Fantasie Impromptu, per intenderci, secondo me dovresti rifare molti degli slider a forma di V (tipo 07:08:435 (2,3) ) perchè sono asimmetrici...
07:10:413 (1,2,3) - Uniforma lo spacing qui
07:29:534 (2,3) - Questi si incastrano male... Prova a rifare il 3 con qualche blanket/robe simili
07:42:391 - Non sono un esperto di SB... Ma qui si scurisce all'improvviso ed è un po' bruttino, non riesci a fare in modo che lo sfondo si scurisca gradualmente a partire da qui? 07:39:754 -
07:55:908 (3) - Prova un ctrl+g
08:00:853 (1,1) - Silenzia la fine di questi due spinner... Il suono rompe alquanto i coglioni
08:26:732 (9) - Dagli la forma dello slider precedente...
08:27:556 (7,8,9,10) - Non mi piace come curve bruscamente questo stream, però missà che non puoi farci molto, dato che vuoi stackare l'1 con lo slider...
08:28:381 (3) - Finish all'inizio dello slider?
08:34:644 (3) - Ctrl+g per il flow, tanto il repeat non dovrebbe essere coperto dalla comboburst
08:53:106 (4,5) - Clap sulla fine del 4 e sul 5
09:04:150 (3,4) - Fai bene il blanket...
09:13:051 (4) - Finish qui!
09:15:359 (4,5,6,7) - Stesso suggerimento come prima, o almeno metti clap ovunque
09:20:304 (2) - Via il clap da inizio slider, missà che t'è scappato
09:25:908 (3,4,5,6) - Sai cosa fare
09:31:512 (4,5) - Spostale un po' verso l'alto così il 4 non tocca lo slider precedente
10:05:963 (1) - Nota troll (non toglierla, va benissimo dov'è, solo che è troll dato che l'ho missata xD)

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Nient'altro! Stai skillando un casino con il mapping, bravo
Topic Starter
Pizza Kun
SPOILER

RikiH_ wrote:

mod. Scusa per il ritardo ENORME ma non ho proprio avuto tempo :C

Rosso=Unrankable
Blu=Should fix
Nero=Suggerimento

Marathon

Dunque, io cambierei il nome della diff in qualcos'altro perchè tutte le map hanno "Marathon" come nome della diff xD Io suggerirei qualcosa legato alla song... Oppure chiamala Pizza, per quanto io odi la gente che da il proprio nome alle diff

01:18:655 (3,4,5) - Metti dei whistle nelle code di questi tre sliders, suonano molto bene secondo me
01:29:205 (1) - Aggiungerei un finish qui
02:02:666 (8) - Io gli darei questa forma, mi ispira di più ed è più simmetrico:
02:11:732 (1) - Hai due NC... Io toglierei questa, perchè tanto prima o poi ti romperanno i coglioni e te la faranno togliere... Ti consiglio di aggiungere una nota a 02:11:567- così il ritmo non viene interrotto!
02:20:633 (5) - Io lo sposterei a 104|60, avrei un jump abbastanza estremo però almeno il pattern sarà più simmetrico!
02:24:260 (9) - Ok, capisco che volevi blankettarlo con lo slider precedente, però così facendo l'hai tutto "accartocciato" xD Ti consiglio di dargli un'altra forma, oppure prova a farlo bene e a blankettarlo nello stesso tempo!
02:29:205 (8,9) - Prova a selezionare queste due note e poi fai ctrl+g... Secondo me flowwa molto meglio siccome la mano deve fare degli angoli più piccoli e non deve deviare di molto, e poi hai anche un jump per far sclerare la gente lol
02:30:853 (5,6) - Ctrl+g prima sul 5 e poi sul 6, qua ti consiglio altamente di farlo, il flow migliorerà di brutto dato che il player dovrà fare degli ovali con la mano
02:33:326 - Aggiungerei una nota e la metterei in 344|112
02:40:413 (1) - Io farei una cosa del genere, mi ispira di più:
02:43:051 (1) - Toglierei il finish dalla coda, mi da fastidio a sentirlo
02:44:370 (5) - Forse proverei un ctrl+g
02:44:864 (7,8) - Migliora un po' il secondo slider per avere un blanket migliore
03:00:853 (5) - Metti un clap qui!
03:02:007 (3,5) - Allineali bene! Per farlo prova a copincollare lo slider 3, poi usi ctrl+g e lo sposti
03:11:238 (7) - Non mi piace molto la curva... Secondo me potresti migliorarla
03:13:381 (6) - Spostalo in 48|108, deve essere alla stessa altezza di quello precedente...
03:16:018 (3) - Un finish qua sopra ci sta da dio secondo me
03:21:952 (3,4,5,6) - Per enfatizzare la voce del cantante perchè non provi ad alzare il volume di queste quattro note a 70/75% Secondo me ci sta perfettamente
03:24:589 (3) - Perchè hai messo un finish sulla coda? Secondo me stona un po'...
03:24:589 (3,4) - Occhio perchè non sono simmetrici... E si vede purtroppo
03:27:556 (5,1) - Spostali un po' verso l'alto, così non toccano la nota 4
03:32:501 (3,4,5,6) - Lo stesso di 03:21:952 (3,4,5,6) - Comunque metti clap ovunque, dato che prima l'avevi fatto!
03:34:315 (1) - Dovresti spostare il finish sulla coda... Sulla testa è su un tick rosso e suona male
03:35:139 (5) - Invece questo finish lo leverei proprio... Non mi suona
03:47:666 (1) - Non mi piace molto xD Prova a farlo come ho suggerito per 02:40:413 (1)
03:48:820 (4,2,3,4) - Scusa se sono nazi ma se noti bene questi due blanket non sono perfetti...
03:51:622 (1) - Ctrl+g secondo me flowwa meglio
04:12:721 (1) - Niente di che, volevo solo dirti che questo pezzo è epico ahahahah
04:17:172 (7) - Io lo farei così per questioni di flow:
04:21:293 (3) - Questa flowwa male, prova a spostarla a 103|136, sulla coda dello slider 5
04:23:271 (1,2) - Dagli la stessa forma, così sono bruttini
04:24:424 (6,7) - Fai bene il blanket
04:25:661 (4,6) - Sposta il 4 in 392|248 e il 6 in 372|152
04:27:391 (4) - Sposta in 297|129 e poi curva i due slider in modo da fare un blanket
04:29:864 (5) - Ctrl+g per il flow
04:40:084 (4) - Sposta in 376|272 così il pattern lookka meglio
04:45:688 (1,2,3,4) - Questo pattern è epico, ma sarebbe ancora più epico se gli slider fossero simmetrici...
04:49:479 (5) - Fallo meglio, un po' come ho suggerito per 02:02:666 (8)
04:51:293 (2) - 177|235 per un blanket migliore
05:01:512 (1) - Fallo simmetrico!
05:40:743 (1) - Io aggiungerei un finish all'inizio
05:41:155 - Correggimi se sbaglio, ma mi pare che qui ci sia una linea verde non snappata
05:51:045 (1) - Questo mi sembra un po' cortino ma non ho voglia di controllare se l'auto prende i 1000 punti, quindi lascio verificare a te se non ti dispiace xD
06:00:523 (5,6,7) - Metti un clap sull'inizio di 5 e 6 e anche sulla nota 7
06:08:435 (6,7) - Secondo me mettere un solo slider da 1/6 in tutto lo stream non ha molto senso... Sostituisci queste due note con uno slider da 1/3 con un repeat. Ti dico questo per coerenza con quello che hai mappato prima, non è che sia sbagliato
06:15:606 (3,4) - Sempre per questioni di flow: Sposta la nota sulla coda dello slider, e poi fai ctrl+g sullo slider
06:52:364 (1,1) - La stessa cosa dello spinner precedente, forse sono un po' corti... Se comunque nello spinner precedente l'auto è riuscito a prendere 1000 punti, allora questi vanno bene
06:57:556 (1,2,3,4) - Falli simmetrici, dai!
07:05:139 (8) - Io copincollerei il 7 precedente e lo flipperei
07:06:787 (5,6,7,8) - Per avere un flow più figo, io userei un ctrl+g su ogni slider singolarmente, vedi se ti piace il risultato
07:08:435 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - ^ Ricordati di usarlo singolarmente, non di selezionarli tutti e poi pigiare ctrl+g...
Comunque in tutta la parte col piano, quella di Fantasie Impromptu, per intenderci, secondo me dovresti rifare molti degli slider a forma di V (tipo 07:08:435 (2,3) ) perchè sono asimmetrici...
07:10:413 (1,2,3) - Uniforma lo spacing qui
07:29:534 (2,3) - Questi si incastrano male... Prova a rifare il 3 con qualche blanket/robe simili
07:42:391 - Non sono un esperto di SB... Ma qui si scurisce all'improvviso ed è un po' bruttino, non riesci a fare in modo che lo sfondo si scurisca gradualmente a partire da qui? 07:39:754 -
07:55:908 (3) - Prova un ctrl+g
08:00:853 (1,1) - Silenzia la fine di questi due spinner... Il suono rompe alquanto i coglioni
08:26:732 (9) - Dagli la forma dello slider precedente...
08:27:556 (7,8,9,10) - Non mi piace come curve bruscamente questo stream, però missà che non puoi farci molto, dato che vuoi stackare l'1 con lo slider...
08:28:381 (3) - Finish all'inizio dello slider?
08:34:644 (3) - Ctrl+g per il flow, tanto il repeat non dovrebbe essere coperto dalla comboburst
08:53:106 (4,5) - Clap sulla fine del 4 e sul 5
09:04:150 (3,4) - Fai bene il blanket...
09:13:051 (4) - Finish qui!
09:15:359 (4,5,6,7) - Stesso suggerimento come prima, o almeno metti clap ovunque
09:20:304 (2) - Via il clap da inizio slider, missà che t'è scappato
09:25:908 (3,4,5,6) - Sai cosa fare
09:31:512 (4,5) - Spostale un po' verso l'alto così il 4 non tocca lo slider precedente
10:05:963 (1) - Nota troll (non toglierla, va benissimo dov'è, solo che è troll dato che l'ho missata xD)

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Nient'altro! Stai skillando un casino con il mapping, bravo

I love you <3 è utilissima, appena finisco di moddare disco cosa non ho corretto ma sarà pochissimo
Kurokami
Hi, I'm here after you posted in my closed queue. \o/

[blahblah]

How About OD+1?

05:30:029 - unneeded green timing point
05:41:402 - ^
09:08:106 - ^

01:44:864 (1) - I don't know if this shape is wanted to look like this but this could be better.
01:52:941 (3,4) - Hmm, maybe if you start (3) 1/2 later with the delete of (4) will sounds better. I'm not sure if its really needs something at 01:52:941, but its up to you to place a note there after this or not.
01:55:413 (2) - Is this really necessary here? Because I'm not really sure about this.
02:06:128 (1) - Maybe just two single circle? It will break the symetry but for me it sounds much better.
02:13:710 - I really want to touch here something, but since there is not much what can be placed here, please at least put a circle here.
02:16:348 - Same goes for this as well, but maybe the tension isn't that high as before. Its up to you.
02:24:260 (9) - Move the last point by 4 to left, the 3rd one by 2 to the left and the second one by 1 to down. Or something like that.
02:55:990 (1,2,3,4) - I'm not sure about its fitting, but I like it.
03:15:359 - I think a note will be good here.
03:27:227 (3,4) - How about a slider instead of this two note?
03:55:826 - I'd like to place a note here. Consider it.
04:28:875 (2,3) - I think if you swap them in the timeline they will fit better
04:33:490 (8) - How about just two circle here?.
04:39:754 (3) - For me instead of this just place a single note where it starts now.
04:41:238 (7,8,9) - Delete (7,8), I think it will be better. Makes the rhythm more realistic.
04:47:666 (5,6) - Hmm, maybe just two single circle instead of these?
05:18:820 - How about a spinner here which is ends at 05:19:974?
05:29:205 - Add a note here. The break will end better.
05:30:029 (1) - This is okay for me, but how about to start it a bit earlier, like at 05:29:864?
05:33:655 (2,3,4) - Instead of this, How about to start a slider at 05:33:655 ends at 05:33:985 and just add a single note to 05:34:150?
05:40:743 (1) - I think either if you make this slider longer to ends at 05:41:238 or add there a single note will do it. For me the rhythm seems better with it.
05:55:249 (7,8,1,2) - - Add a repeat slider with a start at 05:55:249 end at 05:55:578 and another one to 05:55:743 - 05:56:073.
06:00:853 (6,7) - You have two choice here remove (7) and leave it empty or make (6) a bit longer to end at where the note is now.
06:07:117 (8,9,10) - Repeat slider instead of these?
06:12:391 (5,6) - I think a slider whould be better here. And the jump should be between 06:11:897 (4) - and the next one.
06:14:040 (3,1) - Why there is an empty space between them. Maybe an 1/2 repeat slider which ends at 06:14:864 and a note at 06:15:029 whould be good.
06:22:611 (4) - Maybe just two note at 06:22:611, 06:22:941, basically where the sliders ends are now, whould be better. It will make the rhythm better.
06:28:216 - How about add a note here?
06:33:820 (1) - I'm not sure about this. Maybe it would be better as removed after all there is nothing in the music which indicates this.
06:34:809 (4,5) - Maybe it would sounds better if (4) ends at 06:35:139 and just place a note to 06:35:304
06:34:150 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Your sliders (and notes) here are not snapped correctly, weird but AiMod says nothing about them. Please snap them.
06:35:798 (7,8,9) - Also I don't think this is fit here. I respect your symetry but still, for me if you ends (7) at 06:36:128 and place a single note to 06:36:457 sounds much better.
06:37:666 (7) - I think its better to remove it.
06:49:644 (1) - How about to start the first spinner here? I think it would be better.
06:49:727 (1,1,1,1) - Also, this will makes people rage, well its not my problem.
06:54:754 - For me if here is a circle the playability much better. Well ask about other players first before adding this, maybe it isn't the best choice considering the sudden jump after it.
06:57:227 (8) - I'm not sure about if this is really necessary. I think it would be better leave it blank.Or just using two note instead.
07:00:029 (8) - Same goes for this as well. I liked your pattern here but somehow I just don't feel like I want to catch this.
07:02:172 (7,8) - (7) I think sound better as 1/2 simple slider and (8) is just two single note.
07:05:139 (8) - How about just a simple note at 07:05:139? For me there is nothing at 07:05:304.
07:07:776 (8) - Same goes for this as well.
07:23:271 (7,8) - Add a repeat to (7) and place a note at 07:23:765
07:25:084 (5,6,7) - Delete (5), move (6) to there and delete (7) as well. I think it will fit better and makes it sound more realistic.
07:29:370 (1,2) - How about to swap them in the timeline?
07:31:512 - Add a note?
07:34:809 - ^
07:55:908 (3,4) - Place a note at 07:55:908, move (4) 1/2 earlier and add a note where it ends now.
08:02:584 (1) - How about ends it 1/2 earlier and add a note at 08:03:490?
08:06:622 (3,4) - Swap them in the timeline. It will fit better to the vocal.
08:07:611 (7,8) - same goes for this as well.
08:41:402 (8) - How about sorten it 1/2 and place a note to 08:41:732?
08:46:760 (6,7,8,9) - I'm not sure about this stream, it makes the flow better thats for sure, but I think if you just keep (9) and delete everything else would be better. Or your other choice is to delete (6). Decide which will fit better here. Maybe for the flow the second one is much better.
09:34:150 (5,6,7,8,9) - How about just using an 1/2 repeat slider here? It will fit better after all this stream is makes no sense here.
09:34:644 (10) - And I'm not sure about this either. Maybe you should just remove it.
09:38:435 (1,1) - Again an empty space. Well, after this a tiny break never bad, but still this is clearly mapable. My idea is: add a note to 09:38:600, 1/2 repeat slider at 09:38:765 wich ends at 09:39:095 and a simple slider to 09:39:260 - 09:39:589. Its up to you, but I think it makes the flow much better.
09:40:413 (3,4,5,6) - Remove (4,5) and move (6) earlier and make it to a repeat slider?
09:50:963 (2) - Start this at 09:50:798?
09:53:600 (2) - Start this 1/4 later?
10:05:963 (1) - Some people will rage about this, but who cares. \o/
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Sorry Ican't give you images since I modded this while I offline. I hope I able to write them in an understandable way, if not, please point that out and I provide an image about it. Its entirelly up to you to use them, but if not, then at least tell me why not. That way my mod will improve a lot. :3 Oh, and I like this song. *.*
Topic Starter
Pizza Kun
SPOILER

Kurokami wrote:

Hi, I'm here after you posted in my closed queue. \o/

[blahblah]

How About OD+1?

05:30:029 - unneeded green timing point
05:41:402 - ^
09:08:106 - ^

01:44:864 (1) - I don't know if this shape is wanted to look like this but this could be better.
01:52:941 (3,4) - Hmm, maybe if you start (3) 1/2 later with the delete of (4) will sounds better. I'm not sure if its really needs something at 01:52:941, but its up to you to place a note there after this or not.
01:55:413 (2) - Is this really necessary here? Because I'm not really sure about this.
02:06:128 (1) - Maybe just two single circle? It will break the symetry but for me it sounds much better.
02:13:710 - I really want to touch here something, but since there is not much what can be placed here, please at least put a circle here.
02:16:348 - Same goes for this as well, but maybe the tension isn't that high as before. Its up to you.
02:24:260 (9) - Move the last point by 4 to left, the 3rd one by 2 to the left and the second one by 1 to down. Or something like that.
02:55:990 (1,2,3,4) - I'm not sure about its fitting, but I like it.
03:15:359 - I think a note will be good here.
03:27:227 (3,4) - How about a slider instead of this two note?
03:55:826 - I'd like to place a note here. Consider it.
04:28:875 (2,3) - I think if you swap them in the timeline they will fit better
04:33:490 (8) - How about just two circle here?.
04:39:754 (3) - For me instead of this just place a single note where it starts now.
04:41:238 (7,8,9) - Delete (7,8), I think it will be better. Makes the rhythm more realistic.
04:47:666 (5,6) - Hmm, maybe just two single circle instead of these?
05:18:820 - How about a spinner here which is ends at 05:19:974?
05:29:205 - Add a note here. The break will end better.
05:30:029 (1) - This is okay for me, but how about to start it a bit earlier, like at 05:29:864?
05:33:655 (2,3,4) - Instead of this, How about to start a slider at 05:33:655 ends at 05:33:985 and just add a single note to 05:34:150?
05:40:743 (1) - I think either if you make this slider longer to ends at 05:41:238 or add there a single note will do it. For me the rhythm seems better with it.
05:55:249 (7,8,1,2) - - Add a repeat slider with a start at 05:55:249 end at 05:55:578 and another one to 05:55:743 - 05:56:073.
06:00:853 (6,7) - You have two choice here remove (7) and leave it empty or make (6) a bit longer to end at where the note is now.
06:07:117 (8,9,10) - Repeat slider instead of these?
06:12:391 (5,6) - I think a slider whould be better here. And the jump should be between 06:11:897 (4) - and the next one.
06:14:040 (3,1) - Why there is an empty space between them. Maybe an 1/2 repeat slider which ends at 06:14:864 and a note at 06:15:029 whould be good.
06:22:611 (4) - Maybe just two note at 06:22:611, 06:22:941, basically where the sliders ends are now, whould be better. It will make the rhythm better.
06:28:216 - How about add a note here?
06:33:820 (1) - I'm not sure about this. Maybe it would be better as removed after all there is nothing in the music which indicates this.
06:34:809 (4,5) - Maybe it would sounds better if (4) ends at 06:35:139 and just place a note to 06:35:304
06:34:150 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Your sliders (and notes) here are not snapped correctly, weird but AiMod says nothing about them. Please snap them.
06:35:798 (7,8,9) - Also I don't think this is fit here. I respect your symetry but still, for me if you ends (7) at 06:36:128 and place a single note to 06:36:457 sounds much better.
06:37:666 (7) - I think its better to remove it.
06:49:644 (1) - How about to start the first spinner here? I think it would be better.
06:49:727 (1,1,1,1) - Also, this will makes people rage, well its not my problem.
06:54:754 - For me if here is a circle the playability much better. Well ask about other players first before adding this, maybe it isn't the best choice considering the sudden jump after it.
06:57:227 (8) - I'm not sure about if this is really necessary. I think it would be better leave it blank.Or just using two note instead.
07:00:029 (8) - Same goes for this as well. I liked your pattern here but somehow I just don't feel like I want to catch this.
07:02:172 (7,8) - (7) I think sound better as 1/2 simple slider and (8) is just two single note.
07:05:139 (8) - How about just a simple note at 07:05:139? For me there is nothing at 07:05:304.
07:07:776 (8) - Same goes for this as well.
07:23:271 (7,8) - Add a repeat to (7) and place a note at 07:23:765
07:25:084 (5,6,7) - Delete (5), move (6) to there and delete (7) as well. I think it will fit better and makes it sound more realistic.
07:29:370 (1,2) - How about to swap them in the timeline?
07:31:512 - Add a note?
07:34:809 - ^
07:55:908 (3,4) - Place a note at 07:55:908, move (4) 1/2 earlier and add a note where it ends now.
08:02:584 (1) - How about ends it 1/2 earlier and add a note at 08:03:490?
08:06:622 (3,4) - Swap them in the timeline. It will fit better to the vocal.
08:07:611 (7,8) - same goes for this as well.
08:41:402 (8) - How about sorten it 1/2 and place a note to 08:41:732?
08:46:760 (6,7,8,9) - I'm not sure about this stream, it makes the flow better thats for sure, but I think if you just keep (9) and delete everything else would be better. Or your other choice is to delete (6). Decide which will fit better here. Maybe for the flow the second one is much better.
09:34:150 (5,6,7,8,9) - How about just using an 1/2 repeat slider here? It will fit better after all this stream is makes no sense here.
09:34:644 (10) - And I'm not sure about this either. Maybe you should just remove it.
09:38:435 (1,1) - Again an empty space. Well, after this a tiny break never bad, but still this is clearly mapable. My idea is: add a note to 09:38:600, 1/2 repeat slider at 09:38:765 wich ends at 09:39:095 and a simple slider to 09:39:260 - 09:39:589. Its up to you, but I think it makes the flow much better.
09:40:413 (3,4,5,6) - Remove (4,5) and move (6) earlier and make it to a repeat slider?
09:50:963 (2) - Start this at 09:50:798?
09:53:600 (2) - Start this 1/4 later?
10:05:963 (1) - Some people will rage about this, but who cares. \o/
[]
Sorry Ican't give you images since I modded this while I offline. I hope I able to write them in an understandable way, if not, please point that out and I provide an image about it. Its entirelly up to you to use them, but if not, then at least tell me why not. That way my mod will improve a lot. :3 Oh, and I like this song. *.*

Modded thanks ^^
HabiHolic
Hi Pizza Kun~



[Hanashi]

01:43:051 (3) - Ctrl + g?
01:44:864 (1) - Looks strange to look a little differently, we need to fix this
01:49:974 (6,7,8) - Personal suggestion is too far, but there is a sense of a little jump of reducing doing?
01:51:952 (5) - spacing
01:53:765 (6) - ^
02:31:677 (8) - suggestion Ctrl + g
02:34:809 (8) - Finish at the end Why do not you put a hit sound?
04:05:633 (3) - suggestion Ctrl + g
04:08:765 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - hmm.. Seems to put too selfish to jump right to the jump we need to rectify this
04:31:677 (2) - spacing
04:37:776 (6) - NC Here
06:29:205 (2) - suggestion Ctrl + g
06:54:919 (1) - Hey! spacing please!!

Nice Map~! Star! gogo!
Topic Starter
Pizza Kun

HabiHolic wrote:

Hi Pizza Kun~



[Hanashi]

01:43:051 (3) - Ctrl + g? Yes
01:44:864 (1) - Looks strange to look a little differently, we need to fix this Yes
01:49:974 (6,7,8) - Personal suggestion is too far, but there is a sense of a little jump of reducing doing?
01:51:952 (5) - spacing Yes
01:53:765 (6) - ^ Yes
02:31:677 (8) - suggestion Ctrl + g
02:34:809 (8) - Finish at the end Why do not you put a hit sound?
04:05:633 (3) - suggestion Ctrl + g Yes
04:08:765 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - hmm.. Seems to put too selfish to jump right to the jump we need to rectify this
04:31:677 (2) - spacing Yes
04:37:776 (6) - NC Here Yes
06:29:205 (2) - suggestion Ctrl + g Yes
06:54:919 (1) - Hey! spacing please!! xD ok

Nice Map~! Star! gogo!
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