Makar8000 wrote:

Hello.

[Secluded Child]
00:15:759 (2,3,4) - Inconsistent Spacing... Maybe shift 3-8 like this http://i.imgur.com/1rqiQ.png ?
00:27:392 (2) - I think you should stack with 00:28:820 (3)
00:33:310 (1,2,3,4,5) - Weird/Inconsistent Spacing
00:37:596 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Looks like you are trying to do accelerated spacing... I think this should be more noticeable/exaggerated. or just make the spacing equal.


~Star~

Louis Cyphre wrote:

[LRJ's Normal]

Suggesting to use tick rate 0.5 or 2, to avoid awkward sliderticks. Changed to 2
Suggesting to increase Approach rate by 1. Done + increased Overall Difficulty and HP Drain cause the settings is like a [Easy] diff ~

01:08:616 (4,5,1) - hard to read for middling players. Done and 01:09:025 (1,2) - switch new combos. Nope ~
01:12:494 (1,1) - do not use such stucks please Done, 01:12:494 (1) - remove new combo. Nope ~
01:19:025 (1,1) - ^ Done
01:15:555 (4,1) - switch new combo's Nope ~

Sakura Hana wrote:

[Pereira's Hard]
I'd say change the whole color set... all shades of purple are too similar with each other, and pure white hurts the eyes during kiai time.fix
01:06:167 (1,2) - These repeats are really unintuitive.fix
01:09:025 (7,8) - ^fix
I like what you did at 01:25:759 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2) more than the previous 2 ones.ok

Sakura Hana wrote:

Fixed MP3 and Preview Points

[General]
Would be nice if in your OP you said which diff is which, instead of using names totally different than the ones in the actual maps, going by SR i assume they are in order tho, so i'll mod based on that. Derp.. it says in the description which diffs are which lol
One of the things i love about this map is that it uses tick rate 2, good choice <3 <3
Yuyuuu.jpg Yuyubacky.png yuyuko lol.jpg <-- unused image files in the folder, please remove them. Done
You dont need Elly-chan in tags, since you're already the beatmap creator. Done

[Secluded Child]
Pretty awkward that this diff has a higher slider velocity than the Insane. im gonna fix that.
Try to not combine double stacks with singles in middle of a single stream. Fixed some streams so they are more flowy and no more double stacks
00:49:841 (5) - Unintuitive slider i'd recommend you drop a repeat or change it somehow. Made into a single slider
01:01:882 (4) - Slider doesnt fit the music. Made into two that do
You're pretty much mapping in a box mapping pattern, and i dont blame you because you're a new mapper and that's what new mappers tend to do, i would prefer if you would at least try to make some cool patterns that would make the map more fun to play. I tried to fix the boxes but oh well it is my first map I actually did complete . . . :3

[Easy]
And here my heart breaks </3 tick rate 2 please D: Done, I didnt notice it wasn't XD

Nevertheless good mapset, deserves an SP star, however it still needs some more work before star icon. Im even supprised you starred it thank you<3 ;-;

net45291 wrote:

:LRJ:

00:48:671 (3,1) - A new player just confuse with this slider , Suggest : Change it to normal note Nah , it looks goods
01:17:038 (4) - New combo Nope ~

winber1 wrote:

sorry for the late response Its fine <3

Secluded Child[/b]

00:14:181 (9) - new combo I had this previously and there has been a small debate about it being there so I'll fix it atm, I'll get another MAT/BAT to look at it and tell me if thats ok.
00:17:446 (9) - ^? done
00:22:752 (1) - remove combo? Done
00:23:977 (8) - new combo? ^
01:07:242 (1) - remove combo no
01:07:446 (2) - new combo no

All after ^ i didn't do. Soz<3

--lol sorry about all the combos, they are all suggestions, but i like it better like this. everything seems ok. k. personally I dont like this diff I made but yeah XD


[b]
Easy

00:40:303 (1,2,3,4,5) - having rhythm like this with all circles just feels like it could be hard for beginners if the solely have to pay attention to the spacing and AR No, soz
01:07:242 (2) - move 1/2 tick back and rearrange the spacing Done
01:19:691 (2) - why do you have a SV change? it doesn't make sense... you should delete the SV change imo.. Done, idunno why I did that anyway xD

Nice map! :3 Thank you ;~;

winber1 wrote:

00:51:936 (3) - new combo? Nope ~
01:17:038 (4,5) - space out a little more? WTF is that , i'm sure that i haven't map like this.. Anyway , fixed >.>

• 01:05:813 (1,3,4,6,7,2,3,5,1) -
  01:09:283 (1) - (end of that slider) plus 01:10:099 (3) -
  01:12:752 (3,4) - plus beginning of 01:13:568 (6) - plus 01:14:589 (3) -

TicClick wrote:

Okay, mod4mod.

Easy
00:46:222 (1) - how about to add whistle for slider's beginning? Yes
00:54:385 (1) - looks like this one should be upright. ?
01:08:671 - not sure, but what if you add note with clap? If so, then remove clap from 01:09:079 (5) - Nope.
01:19:691 (2,3,4) - dunno, maybe you should re-do (3) and (4) by turning (2) on 120 degrees; it would look more symmetrical. Nah, it looks OK as it is now.
00:16:834 (1) - move central point to (220;144). Same with 00:13:569 (1) - move it to (308;352). Both will look nicer IMO. Code or nothin', I tried but couldn't get the point right there.

Normal — haven't found anything confusing. Pro LRJ

Secluded child
00:18:466 (6) - add whistle? Done
00:20:711 (7) - I'd remove clap and add whistle ^
00:49:487 (5) - add whistle for end of that slider? (and so on, if this doesn't break rhythm you've made) Ye.
01:01:528 (4,5) - ^ Nu.

00:16:834 (1) - move central point to (220;144). Same with 00:13:569 (1) - move it to (308;352). Both will look nicer IMO. Code or nothin', I tried but couldn't get the point right there.

TicClick wrote:

Okay, mod4mod.

SPOILER

Hard
00:13:977 (2) - + 00:15:609 and so on — how about adding clap?
00:30:099 — I'd remove clap from that place (end of 00:29:691 (3) - )
00:30:711 — same as ^ (00:30:303 (4) - )
If you wanna keep this rhythm:
Remove clap from:

• 00:33:364 (3) -
  00:33:977 (3) -
  00:34:589 (3) -
  00:37:242 (3) - (beginning of it)

Add clap to:

• 00:33:568 (1) -
  00:34:385 (2) -
  00:36:017 (1) - (middle point of it, 00:36:222)
  00:36:630 (2) - (middle point of it, 00:36:834)

I hope I haven't been lost in these hitsounds ._.

One more rhythm to keep:
00:40:303 (2) - add whistle?
00:43:568 (4) - ^ for slider's beginning
00:46:222 (4) - ^
00:46:426 (5) - ^ for slider's end
00:49:487 (5) - ^
00:50:099 (7) - ^ for slider's beginning
00:52:752 (4) - ^
00:54:385 (2) - remove whistle from the whole slider and add it for beginning only
00:56:017 (1,3) - add whistle for slider's beginning

00:58:058 (1) - add clap
00:58:671 (4,2) - ^
00:59:283 (3) - dunno if needed.. Try to add whistle.

01:01:732 (2) - add clap
01:02:344 - add clap (3rd point of repeating slider)
01:02:548 - add whistle (5th point of ^)
01:03:160 (3) - try to add whistle
01:22:548 (3) - try to add clap

01:10:303 (1) - try to add whistle for end of this slider and for beginning of that > 01:11:528 (3) -
01:17:038 (4,5) - try to add whistle for beginning of these two
01:23:568 (8,9) - same thing as ^
01:30:099 (3) - add whistle for that slider
01:31:120 (4) - add whistle for beginning

all fix I hope hitsound is fine

Starred.

Dagonpater wrote:

Mod4mod, here we go~ c:

Suggestion
Should fix it
Must fix it

[Easy]

Some sliders are ugly :< like 00:32:344 (5) - or 00:35:609 (3) - , try to fix them. Kinda fixed them, not much I can do since such a low SV.
(This guide may help.)

- 01:08:262 (3,4,5) - Maybe something like this ? http://puu.sh/3HAr Could apply same rhythm method until 01:30:099 - Did a slider and added a note, otherwise I think the rest didnt need fixing. Derp.


[Secluded Child]

- 00:33:977 (5) - Was the slowdown really necessary ? It causes an ugly anti-jump, that even looks like a spacing error. Remove the slowdown and try something like this ? http://puu.sh/3HBl Done :3
- 01:01:528 (4,5,6,7) - Kinda ugly, try something like this : http://puu.sh/3HC7 Did something different but fixed<3

Good mapset, have dat star~

Sakura Hana wrote:

[Taikers Oni]

[Pereira's Hard]
Remove "stage" "1" "theme" "EllyTLS" "Copter-kun" from tags.fix
00:38:058 (1,2,3,4) - Hmm doesnt really fit the music imo.Fix
I find quite plain that almost the whole map is 1/2 spam =/ specially since most patterns with those 1/2s are squares and circles ._.I can't understand this... I didn't lot remove spam 1/2 because I followed drums but only 01:05:813 at 01:10:099 is little change Sorry my poor english

Sakura Hana wrote:

[Secluded Child]
00:13:569 (8,1) - This is a really bad anti-jump i must say, due to the main beat starting there i thought (1) was 1/1 away. Edit: Fix'd
00:33:569 (3,4,5) - Spacing error Done
00:38:875 (1) - Remove new combo. Done
01:17:038 (5,1) - This and similar spots before and after this really feel empty in between, i suggest if possible dont use the NC here, instead just start following the drums in the background or the main beat to fill this gap with something because it's really awkward then you can add a note with a finish at where you would usually have the lonely note, if you dont want to do this, then just remove the NC from this note for consistence. Removed NC's instead.

[Easy]
01:05:813 - Clapping sounds really bad from here on since it doesnt seem to be following any particular rythm, i sugges you use claps on the 2nd and 4th beats (regular clap pattern) works really well with any song. Fixed.

Dagonpater wrote:

[Taikers Oni]

In general, there are too much "void" in this diff, you're following the melody too much. You have to do what could be "overmapping" in Osu standard, just follow the drums, the rhythm, when there is no melody. Fill the void as much as possible.
Also, you must not put spinners right after 1/4's (same goes for sliders, just so you know) in Taiko, if I remember well. Confirmation required.

Otherwise, not bad.

Rikers wrote:

Edit: Wow so many guest diffs lol
Um wasnt there a new rule that stated that most of the diffs have to be yours?

1. Discussed about the background on [Easy] via irc. Changed to that new one~ Also, corrected the misspelling on Saigyouji on the tags.
2. About the difficulties' name: Having Easy, Normal and Hard, but then two difficulties with random names seems, well... random. And pointless. Perhaps you could try:
   
   1. Changing the name of "Secluded Child" to [Insane]
   2. Changing the name of "Eternal Wandering" to [Kite's Extreme]
   3. Also [Rikers' Taiko Oni] would work fine for the Taiko, I guess
   It's better that way.
3. There are like 25 unmapped seconds in every difficulty. Consider either cutting the mp3, or mapping til the end?
4. Everything else looks tidy :3

1. 00:07:462 (4) - Why is this so close to (3)? Try respecting the distance snap, this should be placed further from (3). Not a big deal though, it plays nicely anyway.
2. 00:44:385 (5) - (Nazi) move this one grid down so it's aligned with (3) and (4)
3. 01:30:099 (6) - Use a finish instead of a clap, it sounds better.

1. Just fine~

1. Your combo colours are too similar. Consider making them more distinguishable
2. 00:05:973 (3,5) - I don't think the claps at these are needed. Care to remove them?
3. Nothing apart from that. It plays quiet nicely.

1. 00:18:037 (2,3,4,5,6) - Could you please move this like 2 grids up? that way, it will be easier to understand the pattern.
2. 00:59:283 (4) - Nice!

1. Everything looks fine~

narakucrimson wrote:

Ok, let's take a look at this.

[General]

1. Discussed about the background on [Easy] via irc. Changed to that new one~ Also, corrected the misspelling on Saigyouji on the tags. Yup, I fixed them before you posted the mod~
2. About the difficulties' name: Having Easy, Normal and Hard, but then two difficulties with random names seems, well... random. And pointless. Perhaps you could try:
   
   1. Changing the name of "Secluded Child" to [Insane]
   2. Changing the name of "Eternal Wandering" to [Kite's Extreme]
   3. Also [Rikers' Taiko Oni] would work fine for the Taiko, I guess
   I Let The Guest Diff's mappers choose the difficulty's names, that's what they chose. I chose mine according to Kite's, and Secluded child and eternal wandering go with Yuyuko. ;P Mine is actually on her wiki page. xD Sakura didn't have a problem, but if another MAT/BAT does i'll fix mine at the least.
   It's better that way.
3. There are like 25 unmapped seconds in every difficulty. Consider either cutting the mp3, or mapping til the end? Sakura made it like this on purpose. xD 25 seconds is truely not a big deal. XD But yet again, if MAT/BAT complains I'll get someone to cut it for me..
4. Everything else looks tidy :3

Except for an extra taiko BG in the folder ;O *fixed*

[Easy]

1. 00:07:462 (4) - Why is this so close to (3)? Try respecting the distance snap, this should be placed further from (3). Not a big deal though, it plays nicely anyway. Yay for defying distance snap for once!! This is prolly the only map I used anti-jumps on except for Secluded child XD
2. 00:44:385 (5) - (Nazi) move this one grid down so it's aligned with (3) and (4) http://puu.sh/3Olj ; that's all I have to say on this subject.~
3. 01:30:099 (6) - Use a finish instead of a clap, it sounds better. Did whistle instead of clap.

[Secluded Child]

1. 00:18:037 (2,3,4,5,6) - Could you please move this like 2 grids up? that way, it will be easier to understand the pattern. Done
2. 00:59:283 (4) - Nice! Thankies !!

narakucrimson wrote:

The fact that a modder isn't a MAT doesn't mean that you don't do what they suggest, neither MATs nor BATs are magical dudes who see through everything. So for the future, keep that in mind: always evaluate a suggestion, and try it or imagine how things would be applying it, even if it doesn't come from a MAT/BAT.

narakucrimson wrote:

[Rikers' Taiko Oni] would work fine for the Taiko, I guess
It's better that way.

Sakura Hana wrote:

[Taikers Oni]
01:32:548 - What the... why does volume suddenly go 50%? if anything 70 or 80% but 50% is too low imo.

Elly-chan wrote:

Your right

Sakura Hana wrote:

[Taikers Oni]
01:32:548 - What the... why does volume suddenly go 50%? if anything 70 or 80% but 50% is too low imo. Fixed

[Secluded Child]
01:15:201 (5,6) - Spacing error. Fixed

[LRJ's Normal]
01:00:915 (2,3,4) - Spacing error. Not fixed.. _LRJ_ didn't wanna.

Fix and i'll bubble

Equivalent wrote:

Your mp3 is way too long than the map. I've cut the mp3 shorter, click this link

Sakura Hana wrote:

Also:
[Secluded Child] 01:15:201 (5,6) - Spacing is still longer than: 01:14:181 (1,2,3,4), is this intentional? Fixed, forgot to set it on 0.8

Rikers wrote:

Woo bubbled :3
And in only a few months too x3!

inb4rankedtakesthreeyears
I mean what

Muya wrote:

ZUN

Sakura Hana wrote:

Alright then, all timing issues have been resolved since all 3 red lines have a different movement (i think it was -4 -2 -6 from James suggestion?), removed an extra red line on taiko, fixed the spacing James mentioned and snapped some green lines.

Time for Rebubble~

Expect a James check shortly

Tenshi-nyan wrote:

Gotta love ZUN. Good to see more ZUN maps ranked.

/me returns to mapping Patchie's theme.