abraker wrote:
1 A thread but a string
2 how can it knot?
3 on and on and on
4 where does it stop?
5 one cuts the thread
6 why shit it now?
7 it was good, maybe
8 one thread it new?
9 quality thread again
10 wait, is it meta?
11 don't be mad now
12 how much it needs?
13 ok, see you later
14 how about it again?
Oh boy, it's poetry...where do I begin?
For proper analysis I have taken the liberty of numbering the lines.
The poem opens up to a few lines that I suspected would foreshadow the rest of the work, mainly the consistent and identical meter of Lines 2, 4, 6, and 8. However, this pattern of four syllables is broken by Line 10, which contains five syllables. In addition, Line 14 has six syllables. Inconsistent meter is not acceptable. Lines 2 and 4 also sort of rhyme, but that pattern is broken with Lines 6 and 8.
Moving on from structure, let's take a look at content. I quite like the use of the word "thread" as it can mean a literal thread or a forum thread. The homophone "knot" is also a good word in this context because it sounds like "not" but the subject is a "thread"; it's a nice play on words. I may just be dumb, but I can't seem to grasp the meaning of Line 1: "a thread but a string". One thing I
don't like about your word choice is the word "shit" in Line 6. It comes as a shock when the words around it are comparatively much tamer. It is inappropriate in this context.
Now, for my interpretation (this is entirely personal, it doesn't affect the grade): I see this poem as describing the story of a forum thread that never reaches its knot (i.e. never dies naturally). Instead, because someone "cut the thread" (i.e. locked it) it dies unnaturally. This in turn leads to the creation of a new thread, a meta thread, on the subject. The poster gets silenced in response but promises to come back again (Lines 13-14). On a deeper level, though, one can interpret it to mean an insane person trying to post a thread over and over again and expecting a different result. I only know of one person that this can be attributed to: Enetro and his "satire" threads. Overall, I quite like the story of this poem.
To give it a final grade, I would give it a 7/10. The word choice and effort level keep it from getting a low score, but the inconsistencies keep it from getting a high score. I would say it's an average post.