1. Easy (1,59 stars, 283 notes)
2. Hard (3,28 stars, 734 notes)
3. Illusion (5,84 stars, 1043 notes)
4. Insane (4,58 stars, 908 notes)
5. Kalibe's Insane (4,81 stars, 889 notes)
6. Mir's Extra (5,48 stars, 1000 notes)
7. Normal (2,15 stars, 474 notes)

Shurelia wrote:

nic

1. i'll have to admit i can't follow how your NC'ing works but maybe switch the NC on 01:19:932 (2) - instead since it has the stronger hitsound and spacing emphasis
2. 01:22:160 (1,2) - switch the nc on (2) since i think you now went back to NC'ing one the last word/syllable of the line and (1) is still part of otogibanashi
3. 01:35:526 (1) - the drop in spacing feels weird even if it didn't have a rly impactful sound. mb either move 01:35:377 (2) - up a bit to where the slider curves or continue the stacking of 01:34:858 (2,1) -

1. random nitpicking but why are the pink nc'd triangles in the intro uneven
2. 04:28:100 (1,2,3,1,2,1,2) - also random nitpicking but do you think there's a better way you can express the bsnap aside from just NCs. i thought it was 1/3 start to end L(
3. and also along with this ^ actually you're the only one using 1/6 on the end and everyone at 1/8

1. 00:45:625 (1) - remove NC for nc pattern consistency but assuming you're nc'ing this to highlight "mirage" maybe you could nc 02:20:675 (4) - as well

Different priority on the artist is adopted depending on the existence of a vocalist for a doujin. Circle name / CD alias overrides the vocalist for songs with vocals while circle name / CD alias overrides the composer for instrumental songs. If one or more staff member(s) for the song does not belong to the same circle, prioritize vocalist and composer instead.

1. 03:31:962 - might be a bit dumb or picky but imo starting a break right after the circle is weird. maybe drag it and make it start later

1. 01:35:526 (1) - I can see the map is basically based on DS with various spacings, but the spacing is weird here. with the sv change the spacing got a little bit smaller, so i'd suggest you to make it larger. It might happen to some other points like 02:13:546 (1) - when the sv changed. It's minor, but somehow it affects the reading quite a bit.

1. 00:06:714 (2,1) - why did you suddenly blast the spacing here when everything before this looks so normal lol
2. 01:16:516 (1) - because this is the first 1/8 repeat slider, it should be better if it has more impact on hitsounds (esp. that repeat arrow). the current one feels a bit inaudible
3. 02:13:249 (1) - though you do have sv change here, I don't think it deserves NC at all. there are tons of NC around here and may lead to misreading.

1. 01:06:714 (2,1) - compare to the first time you use 1/6 for the song (00:42:952 (5,1) - ), the spacing feels quite out of place. maybe shrink it a bit and use bigger ones later, 01:16:219 (2,1) - like this feels quite good. (or do it in an opposite way, buff the first one more)
2. 03:19:486 (1,2,3,4) - lol what
3. 03:28:694 (6) - im actually expecting NC because it just switched into another circular pattern and the momentum becomes stronger here

1. consistency at the beginning :thinking:
2. 01:06:714 (2,3) - why didn't you NC on 1/6 and do spam them on more 1/4 stuff instead
3. 01:18:001 (1,1) - I know you didn't totally block the arrow but covering 80%+ is so lame
4. 01:34:783 (2,3,1) - though you made some consistency by that but what is this triangle for when it just suddenly comes out from nothing
5. 01:44:140 (1,2,3,1) - why did you completely stack the slider after aligning those circles, you didn't even do this at the beginning
6. 00:37:902 (1,2,3,4) - 02:03:447 (1,2,1,2) - 02:12:952 (1,2,1,2) - I feel like a typical NC error just happened on them
7. 02:52:457 (1,2) - unlike 01:17:407 (1,2) - , it doesn't gain much emphasizing on vocal with the same movement and similar spacing.

1. 00:24:239 (1,3) - potential reverse arrow block. might need some more opinions on that.
2. 00:30:774 (5) - from all the patterns before (e.g. 00:27:209 (3,4) - ) it looks like a 1/2. it might not be a problem with the reaction level of players around this stage, but ffs it's not legit at all - it didn't follow any rules which has appeared or ready to appear, just a random stuff.
3. 00:38:496 (1) - 00:40:873 (1) - 00:48:001 (1) - 00:50:377 (1) - can I have some explanation why are the usage of extended sliders so weird? it feels like you're just switching two different properties and doing nothing special with that
4. 00:53:793 (5,6) - what a misleading 1/1 LOL jk
5. 01:16:813 (1,1,1,1) - You just don't need that much ncs when the changes are so minor and no one will notice that, the current ones are so messy with the colors and more stuff. same to all the other patterns like this
6. 01:45:031 - slow part. you can just do something creative like the beginning. symmetry, intuitive repeating, etc.
7. 01:56:912 (1,2) - again.
8. 02:12:952 (4,5,6,7,1) - tbh the curve pattern itself deserves a single nc. it's up to you.
9. 03:12:952 (1,2) - under the auto stack this pattern looks so ruined for some reason. better check the other ones.
10. 03:31:962 - thank god someone finally did this break trick

• [illusion]

1. 01:02:556 (2,3,4) - shouldn't this be like https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/8795560 , since the current movement is snapping and that makes it inconsistent with the theme you're making; especially when placements like 01:00:179 (2,3,4) - this is very close by.
2. 01:11:615 (2,2,3) - something similar, probably.
3. 01:07:457 (3) - ctrl+g this? flow break here is a little awkward.
4. 01:16:813 (1,2,1,2,1) - movement is too intense for a considerable slow down, how about this https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/8795616 (swapping the second sliders such that it's like a 1/2 double instead of jumps)
5. 02:51:863 (1,2,1,2) - same thing
6. 01:33:892 (2) - I misread this all the time, maybe a placement like this? https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/8795645
7. 02:02:110 (3,2) - maybe a bit more curvature? 02:06:863 (3,2) - same idea but this one is way easier to read.
8. 03:19:486 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1) - this is such a huge spike that given this context it isn't really justified. 03:19:783 (1,2,3) - you could try ctrl+g this set, looks more intuitive and the jump to the next combo isn't so huge. 03:19:882 (2) - consider making this a slider as well, since the pitch of the drum drops and a bit more differentiation could be used to denote the change.
9. 03:30:477 (1,2) - have you considered spacing this differently? Since the violin's sharp change in pitch is very noticeable here. https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/8795711 just an example.
10. 03:05:526 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3) - this is cool but it gives a completely different vibe from similar parts of the song like 01:30:477 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3) - or 04:04:932 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3) - . Unifying this with the rest is probably worth the effort.
    
    [mirmir]
    
11. 00:42:358 (7,8) - 3/4 rhythm at a random place like this dilutes the emphasis of 3/4 rhythm on the vocals at downbeats. Consider making this a 1/1
12. 00:48:001 (1) - not sure what happens to the 3/4 rhythm here but then 00:49:486 (6,7) - 3/4 on a somewhat weaker vocal sound.
13. 01:08:348 (1,2) - such a huge jump on pretty weak sounds. Consider other ones too, I know you chose this design consistently throughout the map but I don't think they deserve that much spacing. Even a stack makes more sense to me.
14. 01:16:813 (1,1,1,1) - kinda big jump relative to the intensity of this slow down. Maybe this https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/8795843 ? adjacent beats are on the same side -> no jumps on slow down. Same thing for other kiais.
15. 03:19:783 (1) - give this one a nudge to the right lol it's overlapping with the previous circle
    
    [kalibe]
    
16. 00:09:684 (3,1) - should probably have a jump here to emphasise the woosh sound, and it makes sense to do that for the transition to a different section.
17. 00:36:566 (3,4) - ctrl+g for vocal rhythm? It also matches the piano line.
18. 01:16:962 (1,2,3,1) - these jumps are way too huge for a slow down, as if the other instruments never stopped. Have you tried something like this? https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/8795983 . Same thing for other kiais
19. 01:34:783 (2,3,1) - such a strange triple shape in a very clean structure. Same thing for other triples that have this shape.
20. 04:27:803 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,1) - this is a lot of spacing and actualy 1/4 beats aren't even clear. https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/8796056 this rhythm follows the actual beats more precisely.
    
    [insane]
    
21. 00:24:239 (1,4) - seems like a unique pattern, could use this for 00:31:368 (1,2,3,4) - as well
22. 00:38:199 (1,2,1) - and 00:47:704 (1,2,1) - have drastically different angles even though they are of somewhat similar sounds.
    
    [hard]
    
23. 00:57:506 (1,4) - kinda unexpected overlap and since you don't use it often enough in this kiai it's probably a bit unfair, https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/8800822 something like this instead?
24. 02:39:684 (1,2,1,2,1,2) - pattern looks too cluttered compared to the rest of the kiai I think, space them out a bit more might help.
25. 03:13:694 (3) - use visual spacing for this maybe?
    
    [normal]
    
26. 00:09:090 (4) - something more identical to 00:18:595 (4) - ? This one is not as standard as the second one.
    
    [easy]
    
    can't find anything worth mentioning

domSaur wrote:

i love this song and tried to map it some time ago.
tried.
[Mir's Extra]

1. random nitpicking but why are the pink nc'd triangles in the intro uneven - because im gay
2. 04:28:100 (1,2,3,1,2,1,2) - also random nitpicking but do you think there's a better way you can express the bsnap aside from just NCs. i thought it was 1/3 start to end L(
3. and also along with this ^ actually you're the only one using 1/6 on the end and everyone at 1/8 - fixed

Nerova Riuz GX wrote:

[mir]

1. 00:24:239 (1,3) - potential reverse arrow block. might need some more opinions on that. - this is fine, there's enough time to see it
2. 00:30:774 (5) - from all the patterns before (e.g. 00:27:209 (3,4) - ) it looks like a 1/2. it might not be a problem with the reaction level of players around this stage, but ffs it's not legit at all - it didn't follow any rules which has appeared or ready to appear, just a random stuff.
3. 00:38:496 (1) - 00:40:873 (1) - 00:48:001 (1) - 00:50:377 (1) - can I have some explanation why are the usage of extended sliders so weird? it feels like you're just switching two different properties and doing nothing special with that - im just trying to make more of the vocals clickable, I don't find it very weird it plays fine imo since it doesn't skip any beats o.o
4. 00:53:793 (5,6) - what a misleading 1/1 LOL jk
5. 01:16:813 (1,1,1,1) - You just don't need that much ncs when the changes are so minor and no one will notice that, the current ones are so messy with the colors and more stuff. same to all the other patterns like this - kill me but i find the aesthetic nice
6. 01:45:031 - slow part. you can just do something creative like the beginning. symmetry, intuitive repeating, etc. - did somethings
7. 01:56:912 (1,2) - again.
8. 02:12:952 (4,5,6,7,1) - tbh the curve pattern itself deserves a single nc. it's up to you.
9. 03:12:952 (1,2) - under the auto stack this pattern looks so ruined for some reason. better check the other ones. - wow ugly, i think this is the only one x.x
10. 03:31:962 - thank god someone finally did this break trick - \o/

LMT wrote:

• 
  [mirmir]

1. 00:42:358 (7,8) - 3/4 rhythm at a random place like this dilutes the emphasis of 3/4 rhythm on the vocals at downbeats. Consider making this a 1/1
2. 00:48:001 (1) - not sure what happens to the 3/4 rhythm here but then 00:49:486 (6,7) - 3/4 on a somewhat weaker vocal sound.
3. 01:08:348 (1,2) - such a huge jump on pretty weak sounds. Consider other ones too, I know you chose this design consistently throughout the map but I don't think they deserve that much spacing. Even a stack makes more sense to me.
4. 01:16:813 (1,1,1,1) - kinda big jump relative to the intensity of this slow down. Maybe this https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/8795843 ? adjacent beats are on the same side -> no jumps on slow down. Same thing for other kiais. - I nerfed that one but to me I think they deserve this spacing, it has more effect for the pause after than if it were just a stack, it would feel way too weak
5. 03:19:783 (1) - give this one a nudge to the right lol it's overlapping with the previous circle

nice map gl!!

Nerova Riuz GX wrote:

[kalibe]

1. consistency at the beginning :thinking: 👀
2. 01:06:714 (2,3) - why didn't you NC on 1/6 and do spam them on more 1/4 stuff instead did nc on all 1/6 parts
3. 01:18:001 (1,1) - I know you didn't totally block the arrow but covering 80%+ is so lame uwu changed
4. 01:34:783 (2,3,1) - though you made some consistency by that but what is this triangle for when it just suddenly comes out from nothing ok, fixed uh tho i actually liked it :c
5. 01:44:140 (1,2,3,1) - why did you completely stack the slider after aligning those circles, you didn't even do this at the beginning nice catch
6. 00:37:902 (1,2,3,4) - 02:03:447 (1,2,1,2) - 02:12:952 (1,2,1,2) - I feel like a typical NC error just happened on them yup
7. 02:52:457 (1,2) - unlike 01:17:407 (1,2) - , it doesn't gain much emphasizing on vocal with the same movement and similar spacing. did something in that way, hope it's good now

LMT wrote:

• 
  [kalibe]

1. 00:09:684 (3,1) - should probably have a jump here to emphasise the woosh sound, and it makes sense to do that for the transition to a different section. agree
2. 00:36:566 (3,4) - ctrl+g for vocal rhythm? It also matches the piano line. hm? i don't feel right doing this, also used the same rhythms at 00:27:061 (3,4) -
3. 01:16:962 (1,2,3,1) - these jumps are way too huge for a slow down, as if the other instruments never stopped. Have you tried something like this? https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/8795983 . Same thing for other kiais disagree, piano becomes pretty much intense comparing to music in chorus, so i emphasised it with more spacing ):
4. 01:34:783 (2,3,1) - such a strange triple shape in a very clean structure. Same thing for other triples that have this shape. ,
5. 04:27:803 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,1) - this is a lot of spacing and actualy 1/4 beats aren't even clear. https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/8796056 this rhythm follows the actual beats more precisely. gonna keep it, climax of this song should be mapped in specific way, so i'd like to use stream with bigger ds use

-Mo- wrote:

General
- 00:00:922 - This beat seems to be missing a whistle on every diff with it mapped. - added

Mir's Extra
- 00:24:239 (1,3) - It's probably better to avoid overlapping the reverse arrow.
- 00:37:902 (5) - Might be better if stacked beneath slider 4 so that the 1/2 gap is easier to recognise.
- 00:38:199 (7,8) - Reducing the spacing here also doesn't really make sense to me, it's way too sudden without it really emphasising anything.
- 00:45:996 - May be worth muting this slider end.
- 01:11:764 (1) - Not really a fan of this slider, it kinda looks unbalanced, and seems to be way out of place compared to the rest of the map. - made more boring
- 01:46:516 (1,2,3) - I'd say these may as well have the same spacing.- snare on 2
- 03:49:041 (2,3) - This stack is noticably off.

Nice. Can call me back.

-Mo- wrote:

Kalibe's Insane
- 00:05:229 (1,1) - I'm not sure what the reason is for switching to sliders here, I'd say you may as well keep these as circles instead of changing the note density half way through the section. i just feel like using sliders here :c
- 04:23:942 - I'd probably aim to make this clickable for the vocal beat, and to transition to the triple a little better. May 04:23:645 could be a slider, or you could replace 04:23:793 (4) with two circles. im focusing on drums here, not vocals thou

Lasse wrote:

iirc perfect overlaps refer to actually using the same slider, these are only partial and were never a problem before, examples would be:

https://osu.ppy.sh/b/1102760 -- 01:00:046 (1,2,3) - and basically the whole chorus
https://osu.ppy.sh/b/1327955 -- 01:03:686 (3,1) - and a lot of similar ones in each chorus
https://osu.ppy.sh/b/656312 -- 01:33:992 (1,1) - etc
https://osu.ppy.sh/b/1185036 -- 00:13:423 (3,2) -

and path itself is clear enough

1. 01:10:576 (1,2,3) - 03:04:635 (1,2,3) - i think these things doesn't accurately represent the music, the stacks are too plain because they don't contrast the beats. i'd rather separate the piano from the kicks
2. 03:19:486 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1) - i think this is kinda too hard for what the map offers in terms of difficulty, not like it wasn't justified but i'd recommend something easier (aka more circular) because it feels unexpected. how about using just a rotation change for 03:19:783 - and then higher spacing for 03:20:080 - ? something like this? or just ctrl+g 03:19:783 (1,3) - LOL

1. 01:36:566 (1) - spinner might be too short for this type of diff, even though it's only 110 bpm, i would extend it a bit more