[Inner Oni]
* 00:30:963 - 00:31:063 - Imo there should be notes here. As you did on 00:38:963 (86,87,88) - 00:43:763 (115,116,117) - 00:50:163 (155,156,157) - you filled out these gaps when there are more vocals present. That felt just a bit of inconsistent because 00:30:963 - was the only missing vocal beat.
* 01:04:113 (244,245,246,247,248,249,250) - I'd use kdkkddk here, mainly because 01:04:659 (250,251) - felt way different from each other, and 01:04:659 - is a very shrieking sound so imo k fits better.
* 01:08:536 - 01:14:022 - I doubt if putting notes here was a good choice. The drums are not like that but you made it seem like it's the case, and it's just same as 01:05:793 - 01:07:164 - etc. so I don't see why only these to be different. Same for the last part too.
* 01:15:736 - Might add a k here, because it's more intense than 01:09:993 (285,286,287,288) - so I think it needs more emphasis.
* 01:20:107 - would use a pattern with k here, as it has the highest pitch around it.
* 01:29:450 (465,466) - Sudden offbeat pattern? You didn't do this on any other places.
* 01:51:395 - It's quite a clear piano sound so filling it out seems better than just using same don 1/2s when they're clearly different.
* 02:50:109 (387,388,389,390,391,392,393,394) - They should all be in 1/6. 1/4s here don't fit with anything.
* 02:56:982 (441,442,443) - 03:01:089 (463,464,465) - 03:02:466 (470,471,472) - 03:06:574 (492,493,494) - 03:18:909 (528,529,530) - 03:19:595 (533,534,535) - 03:23:023 (561,562,563) - 03:24:395 (568,569,570) - 03:25:081 (573,574,575) - 03:28:509 (598,599,600) - 03:29:881 (605,606,607) - 03:35:366 (650,651,652) - Should be 1/6s too. I don't think 1/4s can work as a simplification of obvious 1/6 sounds. It's also inconsistent with things like 02:45:995 (352,353,354,355) - 02:46:680 (358,359,360,361) - 03:33:995 (642,643,644,645) - where you actually used 1/6s for same sounds.
* 03:23:881 - 03:23:966 - 03:34:852 - 03:34:938 - Any reason to not map this and leave a big empty space?
* 03:26:281 - From here there are much more clear 1/4 beats but I don't see any density change from the previous part. Repeating same pattern 03:26:109 (581,582,583) - 03:26:452 (584,585,586) - over a different part doesn't make sense as well. Imo you should just fill all obvious 1/4s out here.
* 04:01:766 (145) - You could remove this note to show that the music actually has a stop there unlike 01:15:822 - . The current pattern feels too plain.
I can see how the notes for the streams on the first/last kiai are constructed but they looked a bit messy for me. Mainly because there are almost no 3 or more consecutive notes with same colors, the trains looked like more of a mix of random dons and kats rather than actually creating a solid pattern that focuses on specific sounds. Also the spots you disconnected the streams are so random that it makes me wonder how you're perceiving the music and where you wanted to emphasize more than others.
That's my 2 cents, good luck~
* 00:30:963 - 00:31:063 - Imo there should be notes here. As you did on 00:38:963 (86,87,88) - 00:43:763 (115,116,117) - 00:50:163 (155,156,157) - you filled out these gaps when there are more vocals present. That felt just a bit of inconsistent because 00:30:963 - was the only missing vocal beat.
* 01:04:113 (244,245,246,247,248,249,250) - I'd use kdkkddk here, mainly because 01:04:659 (250,251) - felt way different from each other, and 01:04:659 - is a very shrieking sound so imo k fits better.
* 01:08:536 - 01:14:022 - I doubt if putting notes here was a good choice. The drums are not like that but you made it seem like it's the case, and it's just same as 01:05:793 - 01:07:164 - etc. so I don't see why only these to be different. Same for the last part too.
* 01:15:736 - Might add a k here, because it's more intense than 01:09:993 (285,286,287,288) - so I think it needs more emphasis.
* 01:20:107 - would use a pattern with k here, as it has the highest pitch around it.
* 01:29:450 (465,466) - Sudden offbeat pattern? You didn't do this on any other places.
* 01:51:395 - It's quite a clear piano sound so filling it out seems better than just using same don 1/2s when they're clearly different.
* 02:50:109 (387,388,389,390,391,392,393,394) - They should all be in 1/6. 1/4s here don't fit with anything.
* 02:56:982 (441,442,443) - 03:01:089 (463,464,465) - 03:02:466 (470,471,472) - 03:06:574 (492,493,494) - 03:18:909 (528,529,530) - 03:19:595 (533,534,535) - 03:23:023 (561,562,563) - 03:24:395 (568,569,570) - 03:25:081 (573,574,575) - 03:28:509 (598,599,600) - 03:29:881 (605,606,607) - 03:35:366 (650,651,652) - Should be 1/6s too. I don't think 1/4s can work as a simplification of obvious 1/6 sounds. It's also inconsistent with things like 02:45:995 (352,353,354,355) - 02:46:680 (358,359,360,361) - 03:33:995 (642,643,644,645) - where you actually used 1/6s for same sounds.
* 03:23:881 - 03:23:966 - 03:34:852 - 03:34:938 - Any reason to not map this and leave a big empty space?
* 03:26:281 - From here there are much more clear 1/4 beats but I don't see any density change from the previous part. Repeating same pattern 03:26:109 (581,582,583) - 03:26:452 (584,585,586) - over a different part doesn't make sense as well. Imo you should just fill all obvious 1/4s out here.
* 04:01:766 (145) - You could remove this note to show that the music actually has a stop there unlike 01:15:822 - . The current pattern feels too plain.
I can see how the notes for the streams on the first/last kiai are constructed but they looked a bit messy for me. Mainly because there are almost no 3 or more consecutive notes with same colors, the trains looked like more of a mix of random dons and kats rather than actually creating a solid pattern that focuses on specific sounds. Also the spots you disconnected the streams are so random that it makes me wonder how you're perceiving the music and where you wanted to emphasize more than others.
That's my 2 cents, good luck~