General

1. The main thing that bugs me is how the song abruptly ends. You should find a better mp3. Like the one I have on this link. Yeah I cut the original mp3 in half to fit with the length you chose and will include an good end to the song. Just right click it > "Save as..." and replace the old .mp3 with this one. You will need to change the Offset again, which should be 154 ms (if I'm wrong, just correct it).
   Do know that the following timestamps uses the old mp3 and offset (204 ms)!
2. The title should be "Fugitives Last Stand" and nothing else. "Run Away Remix" can be in the tags.
3. Speaking about tags, you should add "Arata Iiyoshi" and "Atsuhiro Ishizuna" since they were the original composers of this song. You should also remove every other word that appeared on any other field. This will include "mystery dungeon blue / red rescue team" and "fugitives last stand". Why not "Pokemon"? Well...
4. On the Source field, you should replace "Pokemon" with "Pokémon". Yes, with the accent. Just copy the word from here and paste it on the editor.
5. I think a countdown is unnecessary.
6. Maybe you should add a Kiai Time between 00:13:537 - and 00:34:870 - . You can find it on the Timing Setup Panel, "Style" tab.
7. You need to come up with hitsounds.
8. A bit unrelated, but I don't know if those difficulty names are rankable. Sure, it's the Pikachu evolution line so it can give an idea of the difficulty order, but I'm not sure about that.

Pichu

1. Try to get this difficulty below 1,50 stars.
2. 00:08:203 (2,3) - You should arrange the sliders like this : http://puu.sh/ofrO7/f0f619adc6.jpg
3. 00:12:203 (9) - This slider should end at the next white tick and not overlap with 00:14:037 (2) - Kind of looks ugly.
4. 00:21:037 (1) - This spinner should end on the previous white tick.
5. 00:24:204 (1,2,3) - I like those parallel sliders.
6. 00:32:203 (5) - I'm sure you can come up with a better shape for this. Also it should end on a white tick, like the next one. You should add a hit circle after this slider at 00:34:870 - . It's also too far from the previous object. All objets should be separated by 1.2x as chosen.
7. 00:36:203 (6) - Add NC here?
8. 00:42:870 (4) - This slider would be better if it ended on the next white tick. It should also not overlap with 00:45:370 (2) - even if it's for a brief moment.
9. 01:03:370 (4,5) - Those two should not overlap.
10. 01:04:037 (5) - The timing of this one is way too weird for me. Maybe make it like this: http://puu.sh/oftWn/0141640141.jpg ? The shape of this slider is weird too.
11. 01:06:787 (1) - You need to move this one on the next white tick (like pictured above).
12. 01:04:037 (5,1) - Overlaps I may be nitpicky with things like this, but it's not really beautiful and can make things sometimes unrankable.
13. 01:09:537 (1,2,3) - Were you trying to make something like this: http://puu.sh/ofuw3/e300dbac06.jpg ?
    
    If yes, please open this.

    Here is a list of the coordinates of each node to replicate it.

    1. 01:09:537 (1) - First slider
       1. x:240 y:200
       2. x:305 y:209
       3. x:339 y:248
    2. 01:10:870 (2) - Second slider
       1. x:170 y:246
       2. x:210 y:278
       3. x:262 y:280
    3. 01:12:203 (3) - Third slider
       1. x:170 y:162
       2. x:116 y:182
       3. x:88 y:233
14. 01:14:287 (1) - Move the spinner like this: http://puu.sh/ofvak/ab511dda7c.jpg . It needs to ends when the music ends on the new mp3. That new hit circle is in option.

Pikachu

1. The Circle Size is too small for a Normal! You need to make it between 3 and 4.
2. HP Drain Rate, Approach Rate and Overall Difficulty are too high. Their maximum for a Normal is 5.
3. The slider velocity seems slow in my opinion. Maybe speed it up to 1,00?
4. Check for distances. They need to be the same in a normal.
5. 00:10:370 (6) - Add NC here?
6. 00:12:203 (13) - This slider should end on the next white tick.
7. 00:13:787 (2,5,2) - No, no no. This is not good. Blue ticks should not be used like this. It could be too difficult for newer players. You should place them all on the next white tick.
8. Same thing as previous diff.
9. 00:24:203 (1,2,3) - Still like these sliders!
10. 00:32:203 (6) - Sorry, the shape is just weird for me. Try to improve it!
11. 00:32:203 (6,7,8,9) - You should avoid putting objets below sliders.
12. 00:37:537 (5,6,1,2,3,4) - Same as above.
13. 00:42:870 (4) - This should end on the next tick. Also, long straight sliders like these are not really good... Maybe change it to a curved slider?
14. 00:47:703 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - This part is weird. You should put some space between the notes instead of stacking them.
15. 00:56:203 (1,2,4,5,7,8,1,2,4,5) - You should avoid putting objects below sliders like this.
16. 01:03:787 (9,10,11) - You need to move these three to the next ticks.
17. 01:06:870 (1,2,4,5) - Avoid putting objets like this. Make some space between them.
18. 01:14:203 (1) - Same comment as in the Pichu difficulty.

Raichu

1. The gap between the Pikachu diff and the Raichu diff is too high! (>1,50 stars) You need to make it easier!
2. 00:12:120 (8,9) - You should move this to the next tick.
3. 00:14:870 (5,6,1,2,5,6) - Nice sliders!
4. 00:37:537 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - These could be improved. Try doing something similar to 00:36:204 (1,2,3,4) - (As it was nicely shaped) and use the "Rotate by..." function in the "Edit" menu.
5. 00:42:537 (3) - This slider is going too far! You need to put the end on the white tick!
6. 00:58:870 (3,4,6,7) - Nice sliders!
7. 01:06:870 (1,2) - Same comment as above.
8. 01:12:204 (1) - Why is this spinner longer than in the other diffs? It doesn't really make sense... Normally it's the other way around (long spinners for easier diffs and short spinners with some notes behind for harder diffs). Just sayin. You still need to end it a the same point as the others.
   I'm not really good with hards...