from M4M queue.
suggestion, only change if you feel like it
should fixunrankable00:10:309 (2) - add whistle? seems you added it on similar notes like 00:27:924 (2) , 00:16:227 (2,3,1)
00:23:658 (1,2,1) - imo, your back-and-forth pattern (from 00:22:144 (3,4,5,6) and similar) could be suitable to here.
00:31:777 (1,2,3,1) - ^
00:31:777 (1,2,3) - alternately, maybe repeat slider could emphasize the descending piano pitch more.
http://puu.sh/lUNmn/4d258d6518.jpg00:35:355 (3) - what do you think about 0.75x here?
00:37:557 (3) - ^
00:40:034 (3,4) - i think this would be really fun if you emphasized the stop in the music here:
http://puu.sh/lUNFO/85afce4ac2.jpg (could stack (4) on (1))
00:41:135 (3,4) - 00:42:374 (3) - ^
00:48:979 (4,5,6) - flow here is kind of odd for me. what do you think about this pattern...
http://puu.sh/lUOIo/da947b9d0e.jpg instead?
01:46:364 (6,1,2,3,4) - the angle of this pattern makes it difficult to hit for me. place it like this...
http://puu.sh/lUOAx/d39d09f381.jpg make it more natural to hit imo. (if you accept it might be good to move (4) and (5) after)
02:08:107 (1,2,1,2,1,2) - pattern here is lovely, but i miss here a lot bc in all the other jumps (1) was closer to (2) and the jump was in between (2) and (1). imo, it'd be more intuitive to modify this to make the spacing more similar to 02:03:704 (4,5,6,7) , etc.
02:21:869 (1) - if i'm understanding your whistle pattern correctly, shouldn't there be whistle on head?
02:47:603 (2,3,4,5) - i am wondering about this pattern, since until now, you used it in the slow parts only (ex: 01:12:374 (6,7,8,9) ). it's a beautiful pattern, but really low spacing feel out of place for a faster part of the song, imo. why not just use back-and-forth for piano here?
02:57:098 (3,4,5,6) - just an idea, what do you think of this rhythm...
http://puu.sh/lUK0y/5599a5a8e2.jpg ? kukuku
03:14:713 (1,2,3) - 04:22:970 (3,4,5) - 04:40:585 (1,2,3) - ^
03:46:089 (1,2,3) - i am pretty sure this is actually 1/3... up to you whether you want to change it or not
04:10:860 (1,2) - ctrl+G on both is more intuitive leading into 04:11:410 (3,4,5,6) , imo.
04:53:933 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - this part i think could use some more emphasis... more similar to 02:37:282 (1,2,3,4,1,2,1,2,1) or 02:39:484 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) , to match the decrease in pace in the song.
05:15:539 (7,8) - imo angle of this jump should be sharper, to fit with the strong feeling at the end.
http://puu.sh/lULwX/664c00d4c2.jpg this also fits the pitch of the song imo since (8) is "higher".
this map = sex
even though i can't pass iti hope something in here was useful ~