Garven wrote:

[General]
Tick rate 2 fits this song best. Done.

[Insane]
I liked this better at AR 8.5 this i will need to play around with some. I am not used to decimal value ARs.
00:05:389 (5,6) - This jump doesn't make much sense in the context of the previous patterns. this is true, the jump should be on the following note with the finish. i changed the patterns here and at the end of the map to accommodate this.
00:08:308 (5) - New combo should be here (if following every white tick). Done.
00:08:633 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,4,1,2) - Things get really new combo spammy here too. I'm not a fan, and it really messes with HP Drain agreed, i changed the combos here so they are the same as the Hard diff.
00:26:470 - This is a drastic change in velocity. I'd recommend that you make it more gradual - maybe to .75 or so. I made the inital slow .655 instead of .5, I think .75 slider speed fits more at 00:31:660 (1) - when the music starts to pick up again, but not fully, and then back to 1.0 at 00:34:092 (1) -
00:40:741 (1,2,3,4) - So you start small then go large on this pattern, but then you do the opposite at 00:45:930 (1,2,3,4) - even though musically it's exactly the same I can very distinctly hear the increasing and decreasing sounds in the background for these parts..... am I just crazy?
00:57:119 (1,2) - I wasn't a fan of these 1/4 sliders. They don't really help the flow towards the new phrase since they are implying an upward/downward motion but the next object says otherwise. decided to just make these into a stream.
00:57:443 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - I really don't like the way this flows. Maybe try something like this to make it feel more similar to 01:07:822 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) -

SPOILER

I tried really hard to understand what you are suggesting here, but I honestly dont see what you mean... these parts are nearly identical, except flipped horizontally. I am probably missing something super obvious....
01:09:606 (2) - The way this is flowing, especially after the hexagon jump, I naturally want to progress to 4, 3, 5. true. I changed the patterns here so it is circular flow going int he direction you pointed out..
01:17:693 (2,3) - Increase the volume when you use the drum samples a bit around this part of the song. I can barely hear them. Done.
01:31:469 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - I'm not sure what kind of pattern this is supposed to be, but it's pretty ugly the way it is now. it is just a random jump pattern that accomodates a constant distance snap. I cant think of any 7 note jump patterns that would go well here but i changed it into some star jump pattern nonsense.

Number5 wrote:

[Normal]
00:16:092 (1) - Lower than last 00:15:606 (5) - . Fixed
00:36:849 (1,3) - Shape?... Or I mistake... not sure what you mean? this slider is copy paste of the next one.
01:00:849 (2) - Kinda weird... improved the flow here.
[Hard]
00:36:038 (3,4,5) - Kinda too hard? I think its fine.... but if more people think this should change, i am open to suggestions.

Lanturn wrote:

Source: Yuru Yuri♪♪ / ゆるゆり♪♪
One thing I'll suggest. Use the unicode. I've found different romanizations for Yuru Yuri/YuruYuri/Yuruyuri so it honestly would be best to use "ゆるゆり♪♪" as the source. Alright, I guess I will do this. the reason i used the romanized title in the source is because not everyone can read Japanese, and if people want to know where the song came form they'd have to search the song name or look at tags of the map which i think is silly.

Looking at the album located at: http://vgmdb.net/album/44955 & http://yuruyuri.com/2nd/music/bestalbum2.php

It's called "2nd series" or 2nd season, so this album is based on the second season of Yuru Yuri.

This also means you should remove "Happy Go Lily" or whatever you have in your tags as it isn't based on Season 1. Happy go lily is the English name for the show. Source from the Western publisher's store : http://store.nisamerica.com/Anime/YURUY ... -Bonus-Set

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BG:
1365x768. I took the 1920x1080 pic you probably used and converted it to the proper 1366x768

JPG (Quality10 425kb: Barely noticable quality loss since the original was a JPG file before) | http://puu.sh/adOVW.jpg
PNG: (1.74 MB: Not recommended since JPG -> PNG only ups the size, and not the quality.) | http://puu.sh/adOWP.png There is a problem with the BG you provided, this is the one I originally used, but as someone pointed out earlier in the thread (and I will use their image.) I will post it after the quote so it isn't so small.

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You don't have a SB, so you can disable Widescreen support! Done.

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Tags:
As mentioned before remove: "happy go lily" Read above.
Add: "Yuruyurizm" | Part of the soundtracks title (You went off the Single, so this isn't needed, but doesn't hurt to add since the song is also on this album)
Add: 赤座あかり | Akari's name in Japanese
Remove: Akariin | Her nickname I believe only consists of one "i" I don't really believe this is necessary. Done for these 3.

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Consider ending the spinners at 01:34:145 - where the final beat hits. Add an addition -> Drum -> Finish as well to emphasize on the final kick like sound. Maybe change volume to 30-40% as well. Done for my diffs. I will have to talk to no dap about it for his

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<3

Since this isn't a mod -> No KD please Good luck with your set.

SPOILER

Lapis Aoki wrote:

Chewin has been active for 11 days </3
Also.. I finally got Akaza Akari nendoroid ~ o3o


Good luck with rank ~ <33

Chewin wrote:

Hello!
Finally, I'm here! I'm really sorry you waited for a so long time. I really didn't have computer because I was not at home. But well, I didn't forget it. Here's my mod for you (: No problem, I was just happy enough knowing I would finally get a BAT mod, thank you very much for your time, I know the m4m I did with you wasnt too useful to you, so I really appreciate this.

General Stuff

1. 01:15:768 Remove this useless red line I am not sure about this, I had charles time the song for me ,and he suggested i should have that line there with the BPM change. He posted in the first page, if you need reference.
2. The Tag must be No_Dap, remove the "No Dap" Done.

Normal

1. 00:34:254 (1) - First of all you need to increase the volume of this green line till 50% at least. It's too silenced. Second this spinner is too long and actually the next element 00:36:849 (1) is placed too early after it and, being just a Normal diff, this is not really appriopriated. I'd suggest to apply this rhythm: http://puu.sh/b2a8S.jpg Done.
2. 00:56:146 (3) - This circle makes everything too hard. Just remove it pls and maybe add new combo on 00:56:308 (4) - new rhythm Done.

Hard

1. 00:01:660 (5) - New Combo, too long actually
2. 00:03:119 (11) - Add New Combo, and remove from 00:03:606 (1)
3. 00:04:254 (4) - New combo here
4. 00:51:119 (1) - To keep the same spacing of the previous elements move this circle a bit further from previous slider. It would make the flow better
5. 01:22:064 (4) - Do the same thing here and on the next elements as well like I have always said for the first part before
6. 01:32:766 (1) - This spinner should start 1/2 later on the white tick Done for everything in this diff.

Akariiin!

1. 00:02:795 (4) - Try to stack this better Done.
2. 00:07:660 (3,4) - These two sliders flow bad IMO. What about copying 00:07:011 (1,2) and pastying them in this way? https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1951592 More enjoyable to play in my honest opinion :3 Done.
3. 00:20:633 (3,4) - I think these two slider are actually bad readable. What about moving them in this other way? Would make it easier to read: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1951606 Much better, honestly >< Done, it plays better now actually, very good suggestion
4. 00:25:822 (3,4) - I'd fix this one as well, still for the same reason. Try to find a new way by yourself imitating the suggestion before :3 Done, did somehting similar following your previous suggestion.
5. 00:29:389 (2,4) - CTRL + G them for a better flow? https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1951615 Done.
6. 00:32:308 (3,4) - Change them in this way: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1951622 it would make have the 00:32:146 (2,3) the same flow of 00:33:443 (6,7) Done.
7. 00:33:930 (8,1) - Pls no, this jump is pretty confusing and bad to play. This big spacing is not needed imo, maybe yes for the faster rhyhm ok but please, reduce it a bit and place them with having a better gameplay flow. Ther next 00:55:011 (1) is much better with playing! Fun and flowing. Changed this whole section, I think it flows better now. hopefully.
8. 00:50:470 (3,4) - Still unnecessary jump Fixed.
9. 00:58:417 (6,7) - Switch them for a better gameplay: http://puu.sh/b2cxO.jpg I ended up changing this whole pattern entirely. I think this plays better, and isnt so so similar to the pattern after this when the music repeats.
10. 01:01:335 (1,2) - Still a suggestion for a better flow during gameplay: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1951642 Done.
11. 01:10:903 (2,3,4) - I'm not sure about this pattern. It has a bad flow in playing. Actually I don't have idea for it sorry çç but you can try to find something else by yourself ;3 I ended up just making regular circular flow here. got rid of the jump.
12. 01:14:795 (2) - Give this slider the same curve of previous ones This is already the case... 01:14:795 (2) - is a copy paste of 01:14:470 (1) -
13. 01:28:712 (5) - First of all set NC here. Still, bad slider there, move it: http://puu.sh/b2d9j.jpg copying the previous (3). Don't forget to remove nc from 01:29:037 (1) - Done.
14. 01:29:523 (1) - Applying previous you don't need new combo here Done.
15. 01:32:280 (6,7) - You could restart the star pattern here, stacking the (6) with (1) and (7) with (2) Done.
16. 01:32:766 (1) - 1/2 later Done.

Chewin wrote:

akarin:

00:32:308 (3) - you said fixed but you didn't Didn't realize you told me to ctrl+g the 3 as well ,sorry, fixed.
00:45:930 (1,3) - To have a better gameplay move the (1) some grid up and blanket the 00:46:578 (3) - with it: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1957074 much cooler Done.
00:50:470 (3,4) - you said fixed but you didn't, move them in this way: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1957077 (you need it because all this low part has been mapped with a costant spacing, I don't see reason to put that jump there) I thought you meant to get rid of the jump between 4 and 5. fixed now.

wow this map got a lot of improvements with those changes (: good job.

That's it. I hope my mod and this recheck have been helpful to you (: Send me PM when you have fixed.

1. 00:14:957 (8,9) - What do you think about Ctrl+G? Feels nicer to crisscross the square imo.
   
2. 00:23:876 (3) - After a second look there I thought you might enjoy the way this plays if you turn it 90 degrees. I like the flow line to change on the slider. Up to you, try it out.
   
   Example

   
   
3. 00:58:741 (1) - It flows better at (181,86) tbh since it continues in the pattern from 00:58:092 (4,5,6,7). Maybe you can try it.
   
   Example

   
4. 00:59:876 (1,2) - Switch NC's? Like 01:10:092 (4,5).
   
5. 01:11:714 (1) - Ctrl+G? So fun. ww
   
6. 01:16:890 - Triplet totally isn't overmapped. ;_; It works really well as a reflection of the 01:06:524 (1) pattern as well. I was surprised you didn't take that suggestion lol. But yea totally up to you.
   
7. 01:22:874 (3) - It needs moved down a bit so it's centered in between the other sliders. Maybe rotate it by -3 degrees as well.
   
   Nazi

   
   Placed at (215,314)

1. 01:20:123 (2,3,4) - Didn't mention this before, but repeating sliders beginning in 1/2 (red tick) can be confusing to play. Here you can try this rhythm instead:
   
   Example

   
   I think it might be nicer to play for the Hard diff since the melody streaming doesn't start until 01:20:284 and it makes it so all the repeating sliders have the same number of repeats.

1. 01:06:524 (5) - Seems like it would be better to have something hitting on the downbeat 01:06:687 since it's such an important beat, if it falls in the middle of the slider like this it can feel weak. Maybe you'd like to hit for the vocals at 01:06:524 but honestly the pattern can play better if you skip over that hit. Maybe try a more simple rhythm like this:
   
   Example

   
   This will have the weak beat 01:06:524 be in the middle of the slider instead of the strong downbeat.
   Maybe if you don't like that you can try:
   
2. 01:17:693 (1,2) - Switch NC is better here?

1. 00:48:524 (2,3) - Strange how there are no finishes on the heads of these slider when it's the exact same music as 00:27:768 (2,1). I guess I need an answer for that.
   
2. 01:26:118 (1) - 1 grid left or rotate a bit? The blanket is kinda funky.

UnitedWeSin wrote:

Hey.
Lots of improvement here. Just a few optional stuffs, no KD.

[Insane]

1. 00:14:957 (8,9) - What do you think about Ctrl+G? Feels nicer to crisscross the square imo. Done
   
2. 00:23:876 (3) - After a second look there I thought you might enjoy the way this plays if you turn it 90 degrees. I like the flow line to change on the slider. Up to you, try it out.
   
   Example

   
   
   Done.
   
3. 00:58:741 (1) - It flows better at (181,86) tbh since it continues in the pattern from 00:58:092 (4,5,6,7). Maybe you can try it.
   
   Example

   
   Done. I had to shift the following slider around some as a result, so please take a look at that and let me know if it is okay.
   
4. 00:59:876 (1,2) - Switch NC's? Like 01:10:092 (4,5). Done.
   
5. 01:11:714 (1) - Ctrl+G? So fun. ww Done
   
6. 01:16:890 - Triplet totally isn't overmapped. ;_; It works really well as a reflection of the 01:06:524 (1) pattern as well. I was surprised you didn't take that suggestion lol. But yea totally up to you. after listening to this part again, this suggestion actually makes sense, lol I am sorry about before. changed.
   
7. 01:22:874 (3) - It needs moved down a bit so it's centered in between the other sliders. Maybe rotate it by -3 degrees as well.
   
   Nazi

   
   Placed at (215,314)
   Done.

[Hard]

1. 01:20:123 (2,3,4) - Didn't mention this before, but repeating sliders beginning in 1/2 (red tick) can be confusing to play. Here you can try this rhythm instead:
   
   Example

   
   I think it might be nicer to play for the Hard diff since the melody streaming doesn't start until 01:20:284 and it makes it so all the repeating sliders have the same number of repeats.
   Done.

[Normal]

1. 01:06:524 (5) - Seems like it would be better to have something hitting on the downbeat 01:06:687 since it's such an important beat, if it falls in the middle of the slider like this it can feel weak. Maybe you'd like to hit for the vocals at 01:06:524 but honestly the pattern can play better if you skip over that hit. Maybe try a more simple rhythm like this:
   
   Example

   
   This will have the weak beat 01:06:524 be in the middle of the slider instead of the strong downbeat.
   Maybe if you don't like that you can try:
   
   Took the first suggestion.
   
2. 01:17:693 (1,2) - Switch NC is better here? Done.

The map is really fun to play.
Let me know when you're ready.

1. 00:59:552 (3,4,5,1) - Adjust a bit to maintain 00:59:227 (2,1) blanket? I thought it was important in the pattern:
   
   Example

   
   Don't worry about 00:59:714 (4) being stacked 01:00:524 (2) 's tail. Worry about flow first.

1. 01:20:284 (2,3,4) - I don't think you should do that. The way you did it is really difficult to read for a Hard diff since there is a large 1/4 jump between each slider, and it's not at all natural to click in 1/4(blue tick) at 01:20:526. Plays much more natural to have two 1/4 sliders with two repeats each, that way the player just clicks in 1/1(white ticks) and it's intuitive to play.

1. 01:06:362 (4) - Clap on the head?