ts8zs wrote:

[Easy]
End at 01:30:416 - 好

ts8zs wrote:

[Hard]
00:08:193 (1,2) - copy ._.
00:40:193 (2,3) - swap
01:27:971 (1) - End at 01:30:416 -

ritsu-tanaika wrote:

EASY

00:11:527 (3) - if you follow the vocal, this should end on the white tick at 00:12:416 0.0 actually both the start and the end follows the electric guitar ._.

00:47:082 (3) - The turn back point at 00:47:749 should have a whistle instead of a clap keep consistency with 00:44:193 - , and will see if both should be changed..

01:01:305 (2) - Suggesting you add a finish at the start of slider nope, the music and beat goes flat here, adding finish is a bit noisy.

[ Sana ] wrote:

Hi from your queue


[Insane]
00:19:305 (4) - 172||266 ∑( ° △ °|||) waht?
00:23:082 (3,4) - try tis shape ok

00:41:082 (5) - NC fixed
00:44:638 (7) - change into 3circles oh that's not a good idea imo :<
01:01:305 (1) - ctrl + g and change into slider-circle good~


I like this song and map >< >< thanks~

Good luck!

[ Sana ] wrote:

[Hard]
00:29:305 (1,3) - it can be hard to read this hidden note intention
00:49:527 (3) - make more perfectly ok
01:14:638 (4) -

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01:20:860 (1,2,3,4) - distance check I think it is ok
I surprised at your diff. A huge improve o.O
thanks xD

1. instead of orange, maybe go with a yellow instead for combo colours?
   just have a feeling it fits better with blue cause it's not that hard of a contrast, but still visible.
   and it matches the hair of the girl on the left more.. imo..! xD

1. 00:12:860 (4,1,2) - you could create a really nice triangle pattern here
   screen

   
   I love triangle patterns, sorry. x:
2. 00:16:860 (2) - use a flipped version of 00:15:082 (2) maybe? to create a more consistent feeling.
3. 00:25:305 (3) - move last anchor a bit up to get the same curve as 00:23:971 (2)? for the same reason as above.. x:
4. 01:11:082 (2,3,4) - you could create a niver curve by moving 3 a few grids to the right and adjust 4.
   looks more interesting imo

   
5. 01:15:527 (2) - if bend in the other direction it has nicer feeling
6. 01:27:082 (4) - go for a mirrowed movement of 01:24:860 (1) and rotate by 9° (Selection C.)?

1. that hitsound.. it's not really disturbing, but a bit too dominant for my taste.. you could decrease the volume of that specific file a bit?
   as long as no one else uses it, I didn't check.. x: ~ mentioned in Insane.
2. 00:08:638 (4) - match perfectly with 00:09:749 (1) and rotate by -10° (Selection)?
3. 00:09:749 (1) - you could rotate this a bit as well (around ~45° (Selection)), cause it looks abrupt with the next object being the exact same.
4. 00:13:749 (2) - move to 36|172 to create better symmetry with 00:12:416 (1).
5. 00:43:527 (2) - move to 376|156 to match with 00:42:193 (1)

1. 00:10:193 (3) - has a nicer flow from the previous object if reversed
2. 00:31:082 (1) - doesn't match with the other sliders so far, cause of the different shape. maybe you can find a shape more fitting?
3. 00:44:193 (5,6) - increase the curves by a minimum, they are barely noticeable
4. 01:25:860 (6) - use a curved slider that points towards the lower left corner instead? has a nicer feeling imo ><

Squirrel wrote:

[EmingK's Easy]
I like this diff, just some suggestions cause of personal taste.. .o. :

1. 00:12:860 (4,1,2) - you could create a really nice triangle pattern here
   screen

   
   I love triangle patterns, sorry. x:
2. 00:16:860 (2) - use a flipped version of 00:15:082 (2) maybe? to create a more consistent feeling.
3. 00:25:305 (3) - move last anchor a bit up to get the same curve as 00:23:971 (2)? for the same reason as above.. x:
4. 01:11:082 (2,3,4) - you could create a niver curve by moving 3 a few grids to the right and adjust 4.
   looks more interesting imo

   
5. 01:15:527 (2) - if bend in the other direction it has nicer feeling
6. 01:27:082 (4) - go for a mirrowed movement of 01:24:860 (1) and rotate by 9° (Selection C.)?

Squirrel wrote:

Hellow. mod from queue ~ c:

[General]

1. instead of orange, maybe go with a yellow instead for combo colours?
   just have a feeling it fits better with blue cause it's not that hard of a contrast, but still visible.
   and it matches the hair of the girl on the left more.. imo..! xD ok~

[Insane]
So here's the same hitsound as in Normal.. I think it's a bit too dominant, maybe if you decrease the volume of the file by a bit it sounds better? 50% is not high -.- I think it's fine~
everything else.. well, .. basically it's the same as Hard. x: just some things cause of personal taste:

1. 00:10:193 (3) - has a nicer flow from the previous object if reversed ok
2. 00:31:082 (1) - doesn't match with the other sliders so far, cause of the different shape. maybe you can find a shape more fitting? ok
3. 00:44:193 (5,6) - increase the curves by a minimum, they are barely noticeable ok
4. 01:25:860 (6) - use a curved slider that points towards the lower left corner instead? has a nicer feeling imo >< 9 feel good about it now ><

Guess I wasn't too helpful, but oh well. .o.
Good luck with this! ^__^/

1. 00:44:193 (5) - 这里我觉得1/2拍用得有点多, 听着有点蛋疼 这样放节奏怎么样 http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1060618
2. 00:59:527 (1,2) - 4-1和2-3的距离也太小了.. 放到1.2x左右?
3. 01:08:193 (3,4,1) - 这个梗往左边放一点, 然后把01:08:416 (1) - 滑条的尾巴往下转一点
4. 01:19:749 (3) - 试试这个形状? http://xiangce.baidu.com/picture/detail ... b724cbf961
5. 01:24:305 (9,1) - 9-1的间距不科学

1. 00:29:305 (1) - 这样摆怎么样.. http://xiangce.baidu.com/picture/detail ... 19de867af4

1. 00:06:194 (1) - 去掉头尾的clap o.o
2. 01:07:971 (2) - 这个的弯曲度小一些点比较好o.o
3. 感觉clap的声音大了点, 可以单独调一下clap的音量

1. 还好吧

Nymph wrote:

這番好不好看啊 想追又懶 愁人

[CSGA]Ar3sgice wrote:

我来送一分

这歌的音量怎么忽大忽小的 who knows that

Insane

1. 00:44:193 (5) - 这里我觉得1/2拍用得有点多, 听着有点蛋疼 这样放节奏怎么样 http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1060618 好
2. 00:59:527 (1,2) - 4-1和2-3的距离也太小了.. 放到1.2x左右? 我直接把1,2ctrl+g了
3. 01:08:193 (3,4,1) - 这个梗往左边放一点, 然后把01:08:416 (1) - 滑条的尾巴往下转一点 前面的123是正三角形所以不改了
4. 01:19:749 (3) - 试试这个形状? http://xiangce.baidu.com/picture/detail ... b724cbf961 好
5. 01:24:305 (9,1) - 9-1的间距不科学 2了因为这是后面改的

然后成为了脱宅神图 233

popner wrote:

00:08:638 (3,4,1,2) - 所有这种跳都感觉很奇怪啊，跳的后一个note应该是跟一个比较明显的音或是转折 把3,4,5改了
00:18:638 (1,2,3,4) - 建议挨到一起，具体你自己调整 好

SPOILER

00:19:971 (6,1) - 新起vocal通过改方向跟 fixed

SPOILER

00:21:749 (3,4,5,1,2,3,4) - 这几个跳的位置感觉不对，两个钢琴音比较明显，所以跳跟钢琴 fixed
00:23:082 (3,4,1) - 这一段有强烈到从屏幕左上直接到右下么。。。改了

SPOILER

00:51:971 (3) - 同00:19:971 (6,1) 改方向好一些 这里整段重新弄了下
00:53:305 (1,2) - ctrl+g一下，这样整体是随机跳的感觉，不然00:52:860 (3,4,1,2)这一串前后都有条，只有4到1没跳 好
00:55:082 (1) - 这一串：fixed

SPOILER

00:56:860 (3,1) - 为何不弄对称哦 =/=嘛，不弄了啦
00:59:082 (3,4,1,2) - 看不出这个梗是对应歌里的什么，一个梗分在两个combo里感觉违和 好，改了
00:59:527 (1,3) - spacing偏小了，blanket很明显 改了
01:01:305 (1,2,3) - 左下到右上，不合曲 fixed
01:06:638 (1,2,3,4,1) - 这里前面的连续跳会消耗玩家注意力，后面又是3/4需要注意力的，并且这个用法的3/4只出现过一次，建议改1/1 好
01:26:193 (1) - fixed

SPOILER

Amamiya Yuko wrote:

我操 WA2 来点个赞 (赞呢?

popner wrote:

上次忘了说一个非常重要的问题，就是直线滑条的作用。直线滑条可以起到骨架的作用，它本身很单调，但是大部分图里都是不可缺少的。每隔一段用一些直线滑条可以让图变得很整齐。你可以研究一下0108的图，他的滑条形状乱七八糟的，但有非常多的直滑条/或是部分是直线的滑条。学到了，谢谢泡泡><
00:27:971 (2,3,5,6) - 跳，前面改了这里没改 改了
00:33:749 (5,6) - 用3/4的话就所有类似地方都用，否则就不用 改了
00:34:638 (1,2,4,5) - 跳，前面改了这里没改 这里我想保留一下;w;不知道可以么
00:36:416 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - 这里flow不好吧 这里找人试过，人家没觉得卡手我自己打也没觉得有啥问题0.0
00:59:082 (3,4) - 应该是3这里跳，或者3 4都跳，然后之后的00:59:527 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - 反而可以不跳，用两个相同梗带过 嗯 好
01:02:638 (4,5,6,1) - 这种起新vocal的地反反而没什么表示啊 好我表示一下
01:07:305 (4,5,6,7,1) - 这里flow.. 谢谢泡泡 改了
01:10:193 (1,2,3,4) - 不要一会跳一会不跳啊，到底是跳还是不跳 2改了
01:23:749 (4,5,6,7,8,9,1) - 滑条和stream不在同一个圆弧上 改了
01:24:416 (1,2,3,4,5) - 这里flow也很奇怪 顺便一起改了

Mako Sakata wrote:

[EmingK's Easy]
00:39:971 (4,2) - that kind of overlaping not look so good, how about try this one

SPOILER

00:43:527 (3) - Ctrl+J and move to x:104 y:106, like this

SPOILER

00:45:305 (1) - Move to x:152 y:236
00:45:749 (2) - Move to x:232 y:192

Mako Sakata wrote:

[Yomi's Hard]
01:08:860 (3,4) - Why not stacked together? like this one 01:07:305 (4,1) -
This diff ok~
the 4 is the starting of vocal so i don't want to stack

Mako Sakata wrote:

[boat's Normal]
00:13:971 (3) - It would be good if it have a same shape like this one 00:13:305 (2) - ok

SPOILER

00:29:971 (6) - I would rather to put a circle here rather then a slider ok
00:39:971 (4) - Delete clap on tail of slider? ok
00:41:749 (7) - Delete clap? ok
I'm not sugest to have a diffrent slider velocity in normal diff like this one 00:41:860, because new player might be confuse but It's up to you I consider it
00:59:082 (6) - Move to x:244 y:44 ok
01:23:305 (5) - Add clap on tail of slider? ok

Nice song actually I like it XD
Good luck then~ Thanks

Mako Sakata wrote:

Hi M4M

[General]
Nothing.

[Insane]
A suggestion, maybe you can make a star or polygonal jump here 00:32:638 (4,1,2,3,4,5) - (/・ω・＼)
00:55:082 (1) - Change with circle stream? well, no idea how to make it beautiful so use this...
01:25:749 (6,7) - Why not stacked together? I like that~

Nice song actually I like it XD
Good luck then~

Zero__wind wrote:

Hard
00:26:860 (3) - 确定这里要双whistle么 先加着看看
00:37:305 (2) - 感觉不怎么适合原地空拍 猴
01:21:527 (4) - 这个不比前面的3的位置考上一些打起来不幸福 和前面的circle跳不衔接 http://puu.sh/56pmx.jpg 猴
01:27:082 (3) - finish略显突兀吧 那里本来就有

Zero__wind wrote:

看都看了 随便写两条儿
Insane
00:09:749 (1,2,3) - http://puu.sh/56p5v.jpg 一直往一个方向转有点抑郁 hao 这里稍微动了下
00:17:971 (3,4) - 为了叠起来弄得移动很别扭 虽然说是小间距并不怎么影响吧 随便参考一下http://puu.sh/56pa5.jpg 嗯还是保持吧
00:36:416 (1,2,3) - http://puu.sh/56pfm.jpg 波浪随便画的 想改的话你自己就画好些=。= =v= 好

低难度不看了 这么高sp了低难度再有问题我也不想说什么了 其实就是饿了想吃饭去了

[ Yuki ] wrote:

[EmingK's Easy]
00:13:305 (1) - tune 90' and x:300,y:140 <<00:15:082 (2) - Orientation?? (4,1,2) divides 360° and it's hard to do blanket if do so
00:19:971 (1) - x:316,y:192 <<Distance ok
00:31:082 (1) - x:148,y:132 <<Distance ok
00:45:749 (2) - x:232,y:192 <<Distance updated inb4

1. You have unused custom hitsound named "soft-slidertick2.wav", delete it & full submit
2. Since there are other other active player named boat i would recommend you to rename your guest diff to smallboat's Normal.

1. 00:09:749 (1,2,3) - This jump feels a bit unnatural here due to your previous patterns. I would recommend reduse spacing here to x1.60 to make it plays better and rotate (3) a bit. Something like this:
   
   
   SPOILER

   
   
   code:
   

   136,64,9749,5,4,0:0:0:0:
   105,188,9971,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   224,140,10193,2,0,P|262:131|295:108,1,80,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

2. 00:10:638 (4,5,6) - Hmm.. If you will apply my previous suggestion try to change placement here too. Current flow feels a bit weird while playing (just jumps feels too huge). Try something like this, imo it will works better.
   
   
   SPOILER

   
   
   

   372,56,10638,1,4,0:0:0:0:
   344,148,10860,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   432,200,11082,2,0,P|444:236|436:276,1,80,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

3. 00:11:527 (1,2,3) - I would recommend avoid big jumps on such calm songs like its and keeping smaller DS if possible (it will plays better, especially with DT). Try something like this here:
   
   
   SPOILER

   
4. 00:12:193 (4) - NC due to spacing change would be nice here
5. 00:19:527 (5) - Add whistle to the beginning of slider to emphazire vocals here. Also, add NC due to spacing change
6. 00:21:082 (2) - whistle to the beginning of slider
7. 00:23:971 (1) - Change form a bit maybe for better flow?
   
   
   SPOILER

   
8. 00:27:527 (1) - You forgot finish at the beginning of slider
9. 00:31:749 (2) - Add whistle to the beginning of slider
10. 00:34:638 (1) - add finish to emphazire vocals?
11. 00:39:971 (1,2,3,4) - Uh those jumps feels a bit too much. Try to reduse DS here to x2.75-2.50 - should plays better imo
12. 00:42:193 - 00:48:860 - Slowdown sections usually screw distance snap, so x1.00 spacing will looks too clamped. Raise DS here to 1.20 please :3
13. 00:42:638 (2) - Soft-sampleset instead of drum sounds better for me
14. 00:43:527 (4) - Try to curve it in other way - for better flow:
    
    SPOILER

    [img]
    http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1076663[/img]
15. 00:45:082 (7) - Finish to the end of slider
16. 00:52:416 (1,2,3,4) - I strongly recommend you reduse spacing at least between (2) and (3), it really feels too much here. I can give some examples for better jump, feel free to ask me in game for it (just because it will be too much to wrote here)
17. 00:53:749 (3,4,5) - Same ^
18. 00:55:082 (1) - Change to 1/8 instead follow piano here?
19. 01:07:082 (3,4) - Hm, i got your idea about stacking with slider's endpoint, but sudden spacing decrease feels uncomfortable here while playing. Try to keep same spacing between 01:06:638 (1,2,3,4) - (just change DS between previous notes to 1.90 if you want to keep your stack)
20. 01:11:082 (3) - Avoid having strong beats at the ends of sliders, it may feels weird while playing. Remove repeat & add note instead - somehow like this:
    
    
    SPOILER

    
21. 01:12:860 (3,4,1) - Feels a bit too linear for me, but up to you to change it
22. 01:14:860 (4,5) - Reduse DS to avois too cruel jump?
23. 01:24:860 (2,3,4,5) - Just as suggestion:
    
    
    SPOILER

    
24. 01:25:860 (7) - I strongly recommend you remove reverse-slider here and replace it with notes
25. 01:27:971 (1) - Begin it 1 tick earlier

1. 00:11:527 (1) - add whistle follow guitar?
2. 00:12:193 (2) - Hitfinish please
3. 00:16:860 (1) - Whistle to the head of sliders follow vocals?
4. 00:20:416 (1) - Finish to the beginning of sliders to emphazire vocals?
5. 00:23:971 (1) - Whistle to the head of sliders follow vocals?
6. 00:31:082 (1) - ^
7. 00:34:638 (1) - Finish to the beginning of sliders to emphazire vocals?
8. 00:38:193 (1) - Whistle to the head of sliders follow vocals?
9. 00:45:749 (2,3) - Forgot drum-additions here?
10. 00:47:082 (1,2,3) - Thought it plays well, i prersonally prefer keeping calm parts of song without sudden spacing changes. Just as suggestion, try to keep those notes with smaller spacing here
11. 00:48:860 (1,2) - Swap NC follow vocals?
12. 01:01:971 (2) - Remove whistle from tail & add to head - follow vocals
13. 01:02:638 (3) - forgot finish?
14. 01:27:305 (1,2,3) - Reduse spacing a bit please?

1. 00:12:416 (1) - Follow your previous hitsounds patter here should be finish too - at the beginning of slider
2. 00:25:082 (1,2,3,4) - I would not recommend to use stacks as you did at (3) and (4) since all those are 1/4 and such sudden spacing change may confuse beginners a lot. Try to unstack them here.
3. 01:27:971 (1) - Silence end of spinner

Kodora wrote:

;_; sorry for delay, was too busy

[General]

1. You have unused custom hitsound named "soft-slidertick2.wav", delete it & full submit deleted
2. Since there are other other active player named boat i would recommend you to rename your guest diff to smallboat's Normal. well, @smallboat

[Insane]

1. 00:09:749 (1,2,3) - This jump feels a bit unnatural here due to your previous patterns. I would recommend reduse spacing here to x1.60 to make it plays better and rotate (3) a bit. Something like this: fixed~
   
   
   SPOILER

   
   
   code:
   

   136,64,9749,5,4,0:0:0:0:
   105,188,9971,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   224,140,10193,2,0,P|262:131|295:108,1,80,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

2. 00:10:638 (4,5,6) - Hmm.. If you will apply my previous suggestion try to change placement here too. Current flow feels a bit weird while playing (just jumps feels too huge). Try something like this, imo it will works better. fixed~ make another style
   
   
   SPOILER

   
   
   

   372,56,10638,1,4,0:0:0:0:
   344,148,10860,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   432,200,11082,2,0,P|444:236|436:276,1,80,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

3. 00:11:527 (1,2,3) - I would recommend avoid big jumps on such calm songs like its and keeping smaller DS if possible (it will plays better, especially with DT). Try something like this here: nope~this ds is good imo :3
   
   
   SPOILER

   
4. 00:12:193 (4) - NC due to spacing change would be nice here fixed~
5. 00:19:527 (5) - Add whistle to the beginning of slider to emphazire vocals here. Also, add NC due to spacing change fixed~but nc is not necessary here
6. 00:21:082 (2) - whistle to the beginning of slider fixed~
7. 00:23:971 (1) - Change form a bit maybe for better flow? fixed~
   
   
   SPOILER

   
8. 00:27:527 (1) - You forgot finish at the beginning of slider Q.Q
9. 00:31:749 (2) - Add whistle to the beginning of slider fixed~
10. 00:34:638 (1) - add finish to emphazire vocals? fixed~
11. 00:39:971 (1,2,3,4) - Uh those jumps feels a bit too much. Try to reduse DS here to x2.75-2.50 - should plays better imo 2,3 I have ctrl+g ed~
12. 00:42:193 - 00:48:860 - Slowdown sections usually screw distance snap, so x1.00 spacing will looks too clamped. Raise DS here to 1.20 please :3 :3
13. 00:42:638 (2) - Soft-sampleset instead of drum sounds better for me ok
14. 00:43:527 (4) - Try to curve it in other way - for better flow: due to 1.2ds, change to another curve
    
    SPOILER

    [img]
    http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1076663[/img]
15. 00:45:082 (7) - Finish to the end of slider fixed~
16. 00:52:416 (1,2,3,4) - I strongly recommend you reduse spacing at least between (2) and (3), it really feels too much here. I can give some examples for better jump, feel free to ask me in game for it (just because it will be too much to wrote here) popner suggested me to use like this and I think it's good in insane :3 so no change
17. 00:53:749 (3,4,5) - Same ^ ^
18. 00:55:082 (1) - Change to 1/8 instead follow piano here? really it was, but most modders think that it may highly cause miss here, and I ask some players to play, really it's easy to miss (both none and dt), so it's here now……
19. 01:07:082 (3,4) - Hm, i got your idea about stacking with slider's endpoint, but sudden spacing decrease feels uncomfortable here while playing. Try to keep same spacing between 01:06:638 (1,2,3,4) - (just change DS between previous notes to 1.90 if you want to keep your stack) that's good imo.
20. 01:11:082 (3) - Avoid having strong beats at the ends of sliders, it may feels weird while playing. Remove repeat & add note instead - somehow like this: fixed~
    
    
    SPOILER

    
21. 01:12:860 (3,4,1) - Feels a bit too linear for me, but up to you to change it :D
22. 01:14:860 (4,5) - Reduse DS to avois too cruel jump? it's not cruel due to 135bpm, but changed the place
23. 01:24:860 (2,3,4,5) - Just as suggestion: I like it now
    
    
    SPOILER

    
24. 01:25:860 (7) - I strongly recommend you remove reverse-slider here and replace it with notes ok :,
25. 01:27:971 (1) - Begin it 1 tick earlier yeah

That's all. Guest diffs are pretty nice, thought Insane needs some more mods imo. Good luck with rank!

Kodora wrote:

[Easy]

*AR2 looks kinda slow here. Try to raise it by 1 tick

[boat's Normal]

1. 00:12:416 (1) - Follow your previous hitsounds patter here should be finish too - at the beginning of slider
2. 00:25:082 (1,2,3,4) - I would not recommend to use stacks as you did at (3) and (4) since all those are 1/4 and such sudden spacing change may confuse beginners a lot. Try to unstack them here.
3. 01:27:971 (1) - Silence end of spinner

lkx_Shore wrote:

恭喜rank

Tsukuyomi wrote:

计划通

popner wrote:

Did a short irc mod and ranked!
(no kd)

lkx_Shore wrote:

lkx_Shore wrote:

恭喜rank

lkx_Shore wrote:

lkx_Shore wrote:

恭喜rank

lkx_Shore wrote:

lkx_Shore wrote:

恭喜rank

1. 00:26:193 (2) - Missing clap on the start.
2. 00:29:750 (3) - Same for this circle.

Konei wrote:

[Insane]

1. 00:26:193 (2) - Missing clap on the start.
2. 00:29:750 (3) - Same for this circle.

Sighhhh, why are always hitsounds missing for some reason? ;_;

ykcarrot wrote:

There is something wrong with the MP3.
Uneven audio volume and very low quality for 128kbps.

[Minakami Yuki] wrote:

ykcarrot wrote:

There is something wrong with the MP3.
Uneven audio volume and very low quality for 128kbps.

what I get is this 128kbps originally and I can't find high quality of 192kbps.
I don't want to use other mapper's mp3, that's not mine

Irreversible wrote:

Well, I somehow don't understand that, I'm sure if you ask the mapper he'll agree that you can use it, so there's no need to feel bad, right? A better quality mp3 should be the case in all maps, in my opinion.

ykcarrot wrote:

There is something wrong with the MP3.
Uneven audio volume and very low quality for 128kbps.

lkx_Shore wrote:

lkx_Shore wrote:

恭喜rank

Meramipop wrote:

美丽