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Uehara Rena - Todokanai Koi '13 (TV Size)

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Koiyuki
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Koiyuki
This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on 2013年11月6日 at 0:27:18

Artist: Uehara Rena
Title: Todokanai Koi '13 (TV Size)
Source: White Album 2
Tags: opening leaf wa2 Tsukuyomi EmingK smallboat mtbbsben baldrace
BPM: 135
Filesize: 7711kb
Play Time: 01:30
Difficulties Available:
  1. EmingK's Easy (1.86 stars, 80 notes)
  2. Insane (4.97 stars, 251 notes)
  3. S.Boat's Normal (4.22 stars, 132 notes)
  4. Yomi's Hard (4.81 stars, 222 notes)
Download: Uehara Rena - Todokanai Koi '13 (TV Size)
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Please Redownload after 11/3
#1 My 1st ranked map.

by EmingK
by smallboat
by Tsukuyomi
by me

Feel very sorry for missing hitsounds again ;w; I was killed.

Thanks for modding
Kin
sjoy
Hollow Wings
Fycho
azuretwinight
_AI
kajiyatta
OniJAM
ts8zs
ritsu-tanaika
[ Sana ]
Squirrel
[CSGA]Ar3sgice
Mako Sakata
[ Yuki ]
Kodora
Konei (point out important missing hitsounds)
Nymph bubble~
popner √Really big thanks~and ranked~
Last edited by Koiyuki , edited 94 times in total.
Kinomi
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Joined August 2012
Kinomi
下完音效了
http://puu.sh/4S4N6.rar
有个地方要用特殊的clap
音效和改好的diff都在里面
Koiyuki
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Koiyuki

Tsukuyomi wrote:

下完音效了
http://puu.sh/4S4N6.rar
有个地方要用特殊的clap
音效和改好的diff都在里面
ok updated
Kin
2,618 posts
Joined August 2010
Kin
Hi M4M here ~

general :

for all diff :
- I highly recomend to use 30% S:C3 for this part 00:06:194 - 00:52:416 -
- I highly recommand to use 50% S:C:3 for kiai time

emingK's Easy :
the flow is good but hit sound, sound really strange to me
hit sound
00:07:082 - delete clap
00:08:193 - ^
00:09:749 (1) - add finish
00:10:638 - delete clap
00:11:082 (2) - add clap
00:13:971 - delete clap
00:14:638 - add clap
00:15:971 - delete clap
00:16:416 - add clap
00:17:749 - delete clap
00:18:193 - add clap
00:21:082 - delete clap
00:21:749 - add clap
00:23:082 - delete clap
00:23:527 (1) - add clap
00:24:860 - delete clap
00:25:305 (3) - add clap
00:28:193 - delete clap
00:28:860 (4) - add clap
00:29:527 - delete clap
00:31:749 - ^
00:32:416 - add clap
00:35:305 - delete clap
00:35:971 - add clap
00:39:305 - delete clap
00:43:082 - add clap
00:44:193 - add drum as sampleset
00:44:860 - add clap + finish
00:46:638 - add clap
00:47:749 - add drum as sampleset
00:48:416 - add clap
00:50:193 - ^
00:51:305 - add drum as sampleset
00:51:971 - add clap
00:56:638 - delete clap
00:57:305 - add clap
00:58:416 - delete clap
00:59:082 (3) - add clap
01:01:971 - delete clap
01:02:638 - add clap + finish
01:03:749 - delete clap
01:04:416 - add clap
01:05:527 - delete clap
01:06:193 (3) - add clap
01:10:860 - delete clap
01:11:527 - add clap
01:12:638 - delete clap
01:13:305 - add clap
01:16:193 - delete clap
01:16:860 (3) - add clap
01:18:416 - delete clap
01:19:749 - ^
01:20:416 (3) - add clap
01:21:527 - delete clap + add finish
01:22:193 - add clap
01:23:305 - delete clap + add finish
01:23:971 - add clap
01:25:082 (1) - delete clap

00:12:416 (1) - I prefer to move it a lil more on the top, the flow will be better. If you done this don't forget to adjust spacing

boat's Normal :

hit sound
00:07:082 - delete clap
00:55:971 (1) - delete clap
00:56:416 - add clap
00:56:860 - delete clap
00:57:305 (2) - add clap
00:57:749 - delete clap
01:01:971 (4) - ^
01:10:193 (4) - delete clap + add finish

00:29:305 (4,5,6) - try to make some mouvement ? stack is kinda boring to play
00:43:527 (2,3) - try to make a curve for better flow ? something like this http://puu.sh/4UaSB.jpg
01:04:416 (3,4,5) - http://puu.sh/4Ubhe.jpg as you can see, flow is a lil broken, try to move 4 and 5 a lil down
01:07:082 (1,2) - almost same thing as ^, http://puu.sh/4UbIr.jpg then try to move 2 a lil higher to make a straigh line ?

Yomi's Hard :

hit sound
00:13:305 (1) - delete clap
01:06:193 (3) - add clap
01:07:971 (2) - ^
01:08:416 (1) - delete clap
01:17:305 (1) - delete finish

00:47:305 (2,3) - how about ctrl+g ? and make 00:47:527 (3,4) - same spacing as 1, 2 (something like this http://puu.sh/4UclV.jpg ) and ofc if you done this, don't forget to adjust spacing after this pattern
01:20:860 (1,2,3,4) - use same spacing, it feel strange to play

Yuki :

00:16:193 - We can clearly hear a drum sound here, so a blank feel kinda strange, add something
00:29:971 (2) - how about ctrl + g ? flow is better for me
00:47:971 (6) - if you tried to blanket, try to make it better http://puu.sh/4UcTq.jpg
01:04:416 (3,1) - it's just me but i'm not a big fan of this kind of pattern
00:55:971 (1,2) - 00:57:749 (1,2) - 01:10:193 (1,2) - yeah kinda nazi but I'm pretty sure blanket can be better

I think that all I can say \o

good luck ~
Kinomi
1,223 posts
Joined August 2012
Kinomi

Kin wrote:

Yomi's Hard :

hit sound
00:13:305 (1) - delete clap nope，there is clap in BGM
01:06:193 (3) - add clap ok
01:07:971 (2) - ^ ok
01:08:416 (1) - delete clap ok
01:17:305 (1) - delete finish no,there is finish in BGM

00:47:305 (2,3) - how about ctrl+g ? and make 00:47:527 (3,4) - same spacing as 1, 2 (something like this http://puu.sh/4UclV.jpg ) and ofc if you done this, don't forget to adjust spacing after this pattern nice,changed
01:20:860 (1,2,3,4) - use same spacing, it feel strange to play I think it is awesome to play now 0.0
thanks for mod

http://puu.sh/4UoRs.osu
EmingK
341 posts
Joined October 2012
EmingK

Kin wrote:

Hi M4M here ~

emingK's Easy :
the flow is good but hit sound, sound really strange to me you should have not need to write so much stuffs, just say that 24clap is better is OK XD so fixed to Yuki: QAQ以后再也不作死了
hit sound (no change will be pointed out)
00:07:082 - delete clap
00:08:193 - ^
00:09:749 (1) - add finish
00:10:638 - delete clap
00:11:082 (2) - add clap
00:13:971 - delete clap
00:14:638 - add clap
00:15:971 - delete clap
00:16:416 - add clap
00:17:749 - delete clap
00:18:193 - add clap
00:21:082 - delete clap
00:21:749 - add clap
00:23:082 - delete clap
00:23:527 (1) - add clap
00:24:860 - delete clap
00:25:305 (3) - add clap
00:28:193 - delete clap
00:28:860 (4) - add clap
00:29:527 - delete clap
00:31:749 - ^
00:32:416 - add clap
00:35:305 - delete clap
00:35:971 - add clap
00:39:305 - delete clap
00:43:082 - add clap
00:44:193 - add drum as sampleset
00:44:860 - add clap + finish finish added to next note
00:46:638 - add clap
00:47:749 - add drum as sampleset
00:48:416 - add clap
00:50:193 - ^
00:51:305 - add drum as sampleset
00:51:971 - add clap
00:56:638 - delete clap
00:57:305 - add clap
00:58:416 - delete clap
00:59:082 (3) - add clap
01:01:971 - delete clap
01:02:638 - add clap + finish
01:03:749 - delete clap
01:04:416 - add clap
01:05:527 - delete clap
01:06:193 (3) - add clap
01:10:860 - delete clap
01:11:527 - add clap
01:12:638 - delete clap
01:13:305 - add clap
01:16:193 - delete clap
01:16:860 (3) - add clap
01:18:416 - delete clap
01:19:749 - ^
01:20:416 (3) - add clap
01:21:527 - delete clap + add finish
01:22:193 - add clap
01:23:305 - delete clap + add finish
01:23:971 - add clap
01:25:082 (1) - delete clap

00:12:416 (1) - I prefer to move it a lil more on the top, the flow will be better. If you done this don't forget to adjust spacing OK
Thanks for modding :)

http://puu.sh/4UptC.osu
Koiyuki
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Topic Starter
Koiyuki

Kin wrote:

Hi M4M here ~

Yuki :

00:16:193 - We can clearly hear a drum sound here, so a blank feel kinda strange, add something make (3) a slider already
00:29:971 (2) - how about ctrl + g ? flow is better for me ok
00:47:971 (6) - if you tried to blanket, try to make it better http://puu.sh/4UcTq.jpg fixed
01:04:416 (3,1) - it's just me but i'm not a big fan of this kind of pattern ( ´ ▽ ` )ﾉ
00:55:971 (1,2) - 00:57:749 (1,2) - 01:10:193 (1,2) - yeah kinda nazi but I'm pretty sure blanket can be better fixed, I try my best to blanket best-.-

good luck ~
thx for modding~
Koiyuki
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Koiyuki
updated
sjoy
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Joined April 2012
sjoy
M4M
[E喵]
00:06:194 (1) - fin
00:39:749 (3) - 88 ,88 感觉更好如果移的话记得调整后面
[小船]
00:06:194 (1) - fin
00:16:860 (2) - 第三个白点移到 388,256
00:27:527 (2) - fin
00:29:305 (4,5,6) - 叠起来不好看
00:35:971 (3,4) - ^
01:10:193 (4) - 184,196后面记得调整
01:15:082 (1) - 88 312
01:23:971 (1) - 不必要NC
[烤肉]
00:23:971 (1) - whis
00:31:082 (1) - ^
00:34:638 (1) - ^
00:38:193 (1) - ^
00:57:749 (1) - ^
00:59:527 (1) - ^
其实就是每次NC之后开头重音都能加WIS不写了
01:14:193 (2) - 80,328？
[Yuki]
我跟你说自己的图用自己名字命名会被某些大BAT强烈指责的
开始唱的部分 WHIS可以参考HARD
00:35:749 (5) - 做个BLANKET
01:03:082 (1) - fin
01:25:749 (5,6) - 好奇怪的摆法

没了GOOD LUCK
EmingK
341 posts
Joined October 2012
EmingK

sjoy wrote:

[E喵]
00:06:194 (1) - fin 好
00:39:749 (3) - 88 ,88 感觉更好如果移的话记得调整后面 好 我猜你一定开了gridXD
Thx for modding!

http://puu.sh/4Uqjf.osu
Koiyuki
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Topic Starter
Koiyuki

sjoy wrote:

[Yuki]
我跟你说自己的图用自己名字命名会被某些大BAT强烈指责的 好吧我改惹
开始唱的部分 WHIS可以参考HARD 我去看看
00:35:749 (5) - 做个BLANKET 好
01:03:082 (1) - fin 好
01:25:749 (5,6) - 好奇怪的摆法 yeah I like it

没了GOOD LUCK
thx for modding
Hollow Wings
1,514 posts
Joined July 2010
Hollow Wings
from q

Insane

这太简单了，HP+1
  1. 00:23:528 (9) - 改成向左凸？尾指向右下感觉顺手点
  2. 00:28:416 (7) - ctrl+g （个人觉得顺手
  3. 00:29:971 (2) - ctrl+g （个人觉得这里的跳这样处理更好些，等于是1大跳分成2大跳
  4. 00:41:749 (6) - nc？
  5. 01:07:305 (4) - 虽然我打起来没问题不过如果把折返放在头的左上更顺手些
  6. 01:16:193 (2) - 其实改成向下凸更好，改的话如果尾巴依旧stack那么头的位置可能要拖到242,117的位置，而且跟你这个diff其他两个类似的梗也很像。改的话后面的3与之后的三连的flow稍微调整一下
  7. 01:20:860 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1) - 这一整片跳其实都很卡手，当然我打着是没问题，不改也无大碍。只是考虑顺手的问题的话我推荐：4反向，56换一下位置
挺好的

Yomi's Hard

  1. 00:40:416 (3,4) - 这很难，然而我在很多地方都看见有人摆并且都不是放在insane而是hard难度里，是因为跳很小的关系吗
  2. 01:14:638 (4) - 果然还是推荐反向，这跳的。。。
  3. 01:21:527 (4) - 反向吧，跳的也顺手点
做的很好呀我蛮喜欢里面的flow的

boat's Normal

  1. 00:18:638 (2,1) - blanket perfect（nazi
  2. 00:35:971 (3,4) - 换一下，注意音效
逆时针转啊转

EmingK's Easy

为什么kiai和别的diff不一样噗
传说此作还原度很高，不过我从来没玩过gal所以没看

good luck
Koiyuki
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Topic Starter
Koiyuki

Hollow Wings wrote:

from q

Insane

这太简单了，HP+1 呵呵后，好
  1. 00:23:528 (9) - 改成向左凸？尾指向右下感觉顺手点 觉得没差多少
  2. 00:28:416 (7) - ctrl+g （个人觉得顺手 不好
  3. 00:29:971 (2) - ctrl+g （个人觉得这里的跳这样处理更好些，等于是1大跳分成2大跳 前面那个要求ctrl+g，这个又要变回来，好我先变回来吧看看后面人怎么书
  4. 00:41:749 (6) - nc？ 好
  5. 01:07:305 (4) - 虽然我打起来没问题不过如果把折返放在头的左上更顺手些 打insane看到这种折返基本都不动光标的所以不改了
  6. 01:16:193 (2) - 其实改成向下凸更好，改的话如果尾巴依旧stack那么头的位置可能要拖到242,117的位置，而且跟你这个diff其他两个类似的梗也很像。改的话后面的3与之后的三连的flow稍微调整一下 那不改了
  7. 01:20:860 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1) - 这一整片跳其实都很卡手，当然我打着是没问题，不改也无大碍。只是考虑顺手的问题的话我推荐：4反向，56换一下位置 这个不错
挺好的
thx hw~
EmingK
341 posts
Joined October 2012
EmingK

Hollow Wings wrote:

EmingK's Easy

为什么kiai和别的diff不一样噗
M酱直接帮我调了吧XD
Fycho
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Fycho
Black: Suggestions
Blue: Importance.You might consider
Red:Unrank issues. You Must Fix

[General]
  • all diffs check this please:

    Title: 届かない恋 ’13，注意日文标题的标点符号应该是全角而罗马标题是半角
    Romanised Artist: Uehara Rena,日文歌手一般是姓前名后，极少数是反过来的，建议还是改正了
    没有更好的背景吗？1024x600而且有字真不怎么好
    Combo颜色貌似是defalut的？选个更好的颜色吧
    所有音效组滑条静音

[Insane]

  • 00:12:194 (4,5,6,7) –这个节奏? http://puu.sh/4UtTM.jpg，可以突出00:12:193 –的那个锣声，而且最好加上finish，三连这里别扭
    00:13:306 (1) –首whistle太弱，换finish
    00:19:972 (6,1) –这个3/4接1/1用的不好，3/4换成1/2或者把后面两个1/1缩短
    00:31:749 (2) –白线上有音，用切分节奏不好，改1/2合适
    00:41:082 (5) –这样？http://puu.sh/4Uu60.jpg，00:40:860 –这里也能加个note有乐器音
    00:52:416 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5) –good pattern，感觉00:54:193 (5) –还能往上摆远点，音更强
    00:55:082 (1,2,3,4) –之前的空拍突然来这个会措手不及的，其实可以试试先1/4的节奏再1/8的节奏有个过渡
    00:55:971 (1) –KIAI段音效严重太弱太轻，跟主歌比起来。强烈建议换音效
    00:56:638 (2) –间距这么小干嘛？为了blanket不值得而且flow也不好
    00:58:416 (2) –这个finish略吵，和前后听起来也不和谐
    01:03:082 (1,2) -01:04:416 (3,1,2) –长滑条看起来乱,排工整？
    01:07:305 (4) –这里听音明显是重音长拍的节奏啊http://puu.sh/4Uuoh.jpg
    01:07:305 –finish
    01:09:082 (3) –首漏finish
    01:07:305 -01:09:082 –这两个还能想更好的排列梗，这样略平淡
    01:15:527 (1,2) –flow猎奇
    01:21:527 (4) –首漏finish，其实这里也是长音
    01:23:305 (3) –finish啊亲
    01:26:193 (1,2,3,4) –最后这节奏也不好也许换成单点会好
这个diff很多地方节奏密度还没hard大，而且跳也不多，甚至感觉上没hard难

[Yomi's Hard]

  • Hp+1or2
    00:09:749 (1,2) –CTRL+G?我觉得flow更好因为这是hard
    00:12:193 (2,3,4,5) –因为你这00:12:193 –finish强拍，后面几个塞满打着不好，红线强拍段
    http://puu.sh/4UuOR.jpg
    00:54:294 (1) –转盘结束的不对，别扭，在这里00:54:294 (1) –结束又感觉太短，建议去掉
    01:08:402 (1) –finish instead of whistle？
    01:22:527 (7,1) –音效错了吧，这里，这么响？试着减少音量SC3的clap很吵
    01:23:305 (3) –中间白线上似乎有音，拆成1/2+note
    KIAI还可以加更多的soft whistle，现在很多空着太闷

[boat's Normal]

  • 00:12:416 (1) –这样http://puu.sh/4Uvl2.jpg，那个强音别漏，而人声很弱不必在意
    00:12:416 (1,2) –交换NC，一般是重音NC
    00:15:971 (2,1,2) –你这NC很混乱
    00:25:082 (1) –这样http://puu.sh/4Uvrl.jpg
    00:29:305 (4,5,6) –正三角？
    00:31:749 –为什么又不跟人声了？
    00:44:638 (4) –尾应该是finish
    00:48:860 (5) –漏finish
    00:51:082 (5,6,7) –蛋疼的节奏，新手更难抓。。。因为你前面00:50:638 (4,5) –这里都基于鼓点的节奏，别串轨,这样 http://puu.sh/4UvxV.jpg
    00:57:305 (2,3,4,5) –节奏密度分配不均，你看这00:55:971 (1) -，没有跟人声00:56:638 -，这是可以的因为你基于鼓点的音效，但是你把重音00:57:749 –放滑条尾，又在弱拍放note，而且00:58:416 (5) –又跟起人声来，很混乱，这块节奏密度就太大像hard
    01:00:860 (1,2,3) –不要所有人声都跟，not follow everything just fit the music，不要重音滑条尾
    01:03:082 (1,2) –这里又跟人声了。。。
    01:07:749 (2) –漏音…http://puu.sh/4UvHJ.jpg或者 http://puu.sh/4UvQc.jpg自己选择一个
    01:10:860 (1) –去掉finish
    01:16:193 –怎么不跟人声？你前后不都是么？你这里01:18:860 (3) –都跟了,跟起那么多
    01:17:749 (5,1,2,3,4,1,2) –这节奏密度。。。怎么吐槽？这是normal？和EZ跨距太大
    01:21:971 (1) –尾去掉clap
    01:26:193 (1,1) –NC spam

[EmingK's Easy]
只是一个GD的EASY而已这么另类干嘛？KIAI和其他diff统一，虽然是GD
这DIFF spread喷到爆，normal中圈，ez炒鸡大圈。。。
00:38:193 –这里可以插绿线调整音量啥的，不然主歌一路音效到底没有高低顿挫

  • 00:07:971 –重音在这aho，http://puu.sh/4UvXR.jpg, EZ就老实的基于鼓点下节奏别多轨互串了
    00:11:527 (3) –重音在这00:12:193 -，延长滑条，去掉后面的note
    00:13:305 (3) –Nc改到这
    00:27:527 (3) –鼓点在这00:28:416 -，别串人声里去
    00:28:860 (4) –又串钢琴去了。。
    00:38:193 (2,3) –这样http://puu.sh/4Uw54.jpg
    00:48:860 (1,2,3) –第三句别和前两句一样的节奏，很别扭，一般日系歌曲第二段主歌都是这样..换下00:50:638 (3) –增加节奏密度，作为KIAI过渡
    00:52:416 (1) –finish奇吵，要么把转盘停这00:54:193 –
    01:06:638 (1) –节奏太无聊，这样http://puu.sh/4Uwb6.jpg
    01:10:193 (1,2) –我倒觉得平铺段的节奏应该跟鼓点下正常的，而不是3/2滑条跟人声，这里00:55:971 (1,2,3) –也是，不过不是大问题
    01:15:527 (2) –缩短，跟鼓点，后面加note或者变折返
    01:17:971 (1,2) –人声跟的极其别扭,建议和开始那几个一样的
    01:25:971 (2) -^

我是比较担心diff spread的，主难度的音效花点功夫吧;w;hard不错
EmingK
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EmingK

Fycho wrote:

Black: Suggestions
Blue: Importance.You might consider
Red:Unrank issues. You Must Fix

[EmingK's Easy]
只是一个GD的EASY而已这么另类干嘛？KIAI和其他diff统一，虽然是GD QAQ老司机开始没带我，统一了
这DIFF spread喷到爆，normal中圈，ez炒鸡大圈。。。CS3

QQ Qun wrote:

( ´ ω ` Yuki | mtb<*******> 14:02:02
ez控制在2stars及以下吧，nm3~4就好
然后我就哭了
00:38:193 –这里可以插绿线调整音量啥的，不然主歌一路音效到底没有高低顿挫 好好好

  • 00:07:971 –重音在这aho，http://puu.sh/4UvXR.jpg, EZ就老实的基于鼓点下节奏别多轨互串了
    00:11:527 (3) –重音在这00:12:193 -，延长滑条，去掉后面的note
    00:13:305 (3) –Nc改到这
    00:27:527 (3) –鼓点在这00:28:416 -，别串人声里去
    00:28:860 (4) –又串钢琴去了。。
    00:38:193 (2,3) –这样http://puu.sh/4Uw54.jpg
    00:48:860 (1,2,3) –第三句别和前两句一样的节奏，很别扭，一般日系歌曲第二段主歌都是这样..换下00:50:638 (3) –增加节奏密度，作为KIAI过渡
    00:52:416 (1) –finish奇吵，要么把转盘停这00:54:193 –
    01:06:638 (1) –节奏太无聊，这样http://puu.sh/4Uwb6.jpg
    01:10:193 (1,2) –我倒觉得平铺段的节奏应该跟鼓点下正常的，而不是3/2滑条跟人声，这里00:55:971 (1,2,3) –也是，不过不是大问题
    01:15:527 (2) –缩短，跟鼓点，后面加note或者变折返
    01:17:971 (1,2) –人声跟的极其别扭,建议和开始那几个一样的
    01:25:971 (2) -^
好呀好呀全改了 1.8☆了
你为何这么屌

Thx 4 modding

http://puu.sh/4UyQh.osu

EDIT: 元信息啥的M酱直接帮改了吧
Kinomi
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Kinomi
SPOILER

Hollow Wings wrote:

Yomi's Hard

  1. 00:40:416 (3,4) - 这很难，然而我在很多地方都看见有人摆并且都不是放在insane而是hard难度里，是因为跳很小的关系吗
  2. 01:14:638 (4) - 果然还是推荐反向，这跳的。。。
  3. 01:21:527 (4) - 反向吧，跳的也顺手点
做的很好呀我蛮喜欢里面的flow的
没改，第一个确实有点难，不过先放着，第二个就是故意摆成那样的，第三个反向后面那个note太难了

SPOILER

Fycho wrote:

[Yomi's Hard]

  • Hp+1or2 猴
    00:09:749 (1,2) –CTRL+G?我觉得flow更好因为这是hard 好
    00:12:193 (2,3,4,5) –因为你这00:12:193 –finish强拍，后面几个塞满打着不好，红线强拍段
    http://puu.sh/4UuOR.jpg 改成了一个note加一个1/2
    00:54:294 (1) –转盘结束的不对，别扭，在这里00:54:294 (1) –结束又感觉太短，建议去掉 改了一下
    01:08:402 (1) –finish instead of whistle？感觉还是加着比较好
    01:22:527 (7,1) –音效错了吧，这里，这么响？试着减少音量SC3的clap很吵 降了点
    01:23:305 (3) –中间白线上似乎有音，拆成1/2+note 这没事啊
    KIAI还可以加更多的soft whistle，现在很多空着太闷 好


http://puu.sh/4UAVM.osu
Koiyuki
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Koiyuki

Fycho wrote:

Black: Suggestions
Blue: Importance.You might consider
Red:Unrank issues. You Must Fix

[General]
  • all diffs check this please:

    Title: 届かない恋 ’13，注意日文标题的标点符号应该是全角而罗马标题是半角 fixed，你再看看对不对？
    Romanised Artist: Uehara Rena,日文歌手一般是姓前名后，极少数是反过来的，建议还是改正了 fixed
    没有更好的背景吗？1024x600而且有字真不怎么好 BG可以再挑
    Combo颜色貌似是defalut的？选个更好的颜色吧 四暗刻
    所有音效组滑条静音 好

[Insane]

  • 00:12:194 (4,5,6,7) –这个节奏? http://puu.sh/4UtTM.jpg，可以突出00:12:193 –的那个锣声，而且最好加上finish，三连这里别扭 好
    00:13:306 (1) –首whistle太弱，换finish 好
    00:19:972 (6,1) –这个3/4接1/1用的不好，3/4换成1/2或者把后面两个1/1缩短 好
    00:31:749 (2) –白线上有音，用切分节奏不好，改1/2合适 好
    00:41:082 (5) –这样？http://puu.sh/4Uu60.jpg，00:40:860 –这里也能加个note有乐器音 好
    00:52:416 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5) –good pattern，感觉00:54:193 (5) –还能往上摆远点，音更强 移上去了
    00:55:082 (1,2,3,4) –之前的空拍突然来这个会措手不及的，其实可以试试先1/4的节奏再1/8的节奏有个过渡 前面四个是钢琴有1/8后面4个是鼓没1/8，先不改
    00:55:971 (1) –KIAI段音效严重太弱太轻，跟主歌比起来。强烈建议换音效 音效没找到特别合适的不过往上调了点音量先
    00:56:638 (2) –间距这么小干嘛？为了blanket不值得而且flow也不好 ctrl+g了
    00:58:416 (2) –这个finish略吵，和前后听起来也不和谐 fixed
    01:03:082 (1,2) -01:04:416 (3,1,2) –长滑条看起来乱,排工整？ 重新摆了下不太好整呢
    01:07:305 (4) –这里听音明显是重音长拍的节奏啊http://puu.sh/4Uuoh.jpg fixed
    01:07:305 –finish 好
    01:09:082 (3) –首漏finish 好
    01:07:305 -01:09:082 –这两个还能想更好的排列梗，这样略平淡 我再想
    01:15:527 (1,2) –flow猎奇 猎奇点就猎奇点了-.-
    01:21:527 (4) –首漏finish，其实这里也是长音 好
    01:23:305 (3) –finish啊亲 好
    01:26:193 (1,2,3,4) –最后这节奏也不好也许换成单点会好 看看人家怎么书的
这个diff很多地方节奏密度还没hard大，而且跳也不多，甚至感觉上没hard难

我是比较担心diff spread的，主难度的音效花点功夫吧;w;hard不错
好，THX FYCHO~
Koiyuki
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Atrue
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Atrue
hello~
M4M 请多指教了~
这里是我的建议（只是建议而已） 这里是我觉得需要修改的地方
General
= =好歌好图，零星需注意
EmingK's Easy
00:11:527 (3) - 觉得这里的finish不是很合适。。不过也无妨如果你觉得这里加了比较好
嗯。。音效clap在第四白线上会不会比较乱呢。。= =可能我还是见识的不是很多。。
boat's Normal
00:51:082 (5,6) - 个人感觉这个stack有点不是很适合，因为前面刚好有一个stack而且时间比这个快
01:10:638 - 感觉漏音，相对较重的鼓声没有note
前面的地方缺乏打击感，进入kiai之前都是这样的，建议加大一点音量
不过音效用的还是相当舒服的，好图！
Yomi's Hard
很有段落感，很有特点的节奏，不过有一点是音效的使用的问题。。
00:43:082 (4,5,6) - 这里似乎overmap
00:43:749 (2) - 这里缺乏打击感，建议可以与1用一样的音效，本身想法很好可惜总是有一种很闷的感觉。。
00:49:527 (3) - 感觉这个滑条用这种音效不大好，还是用soft好些？
00:51:082 (2) - 滑条2音效想法比较不错可是我觉得不够规整会有一种比较闷的感觉
01:09:749 (5) - 声音减小的有点多了
后面还有几个类似的地方声音减小的比较大了。。
Insane
嗯，风格和节奏好评，我想有几个值得争议的地方你自己应该也比较清楚，不过个人感觉有些梗有点突兀
00:42:193 (1,2) - 缺乏打击感，音量可以适当加大
00:47:749 (5) - ^
00:49:527 (2,3) - ^
00:55:082 (1,2,3,4) - 这个地方用串连打而不是这种短滑条组好些？前面一直走的是比较简单的beat这里突然用滑条加大了读图和节奏的复杂度。比较突然
01:04:416 (3,1) - 这里不是很美观额。。
个人意见，仅供参考。。 :)
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