1. Try to enable letterboxes, there's absolutely no reason to keep them disabled.
2. I guess you forgot to add tag reconnect.People may look for it, y'know
3. Try to use slider tick rate 2, sounds much better and fits with music quite good
4. Colours don't really fit with BG/ What's more bright colours may hurt players' eyes. Consider fading them a bit!
   
   colours

   
   

   [Colours]
   Combo1 : 132,226,234
   Combo2 : 230,155,163
   Combo3 : 173,222,165

5. Consult a BAT, this BG may be unacceptable for young players.

1. Try to use Distance Snap x1.2 to avoid overlaps. You use a lot of 1/2 patterns and they look much nerater with DS x1.2. You use a lot of 1/2s and it looks really messy because they're overlapped!
2. 00:09:273 (3) - nazi - consider changing your curvew a bit, so you'll make your flow smoother + it looks a bit neater. example
3. 00:28:533 (4,5,6) - nazi - straight line here looks a bit awkward after all these curvy sliders, just move (5) a little bit, so your flow will look more consistent! examplei
   Note: if you agree, curve 00:30:014 (1,2) - as well!
4. 01:08:533 (3) - that slider sounds a bit confusing because vocals appear in the middle of it. I understand that you wanty to keep it symmetrical, so here's tweo variants how to change it. variant one (slider's shape isn't changed)/ (variant two)better rhythm, but you'll have to change that symmetrical pattern
5. 01:17:422 (1) - consider avoiding loop sliders, because they may confuse beginners. This is the easiest diff, so you should think about beginners a bit!
6. 01:24:459 (2,4) - angle here looks kinda rough, that'd be great if you make shape smoother. example
7. 01:44:829 - drag your break here? Looks like a good idea + it will improve your map visually :V And then, drag end of your break to 01:51:496 -
8. 02:10:385 - you'd better not to ignore that sound, because it sounds really awkward if you ignore it. Sound becomes louser and stops at big white line. You can try to use slider like you did it at 00:58:903 (1) - . It will fiot with music much better, imo.
9. 02:43:348 - start spinner here and map previous part with curvy and tricky slider. example
10. 03:13:718 - 03:30:755 - drag start/end of your breaks top these ticks. It'll look really good!
11. 04:21:125 (1) - place a finish. It'd fit with music + it will make end of this map more enjoiyable for players!

1. Song is relaxing, but AR7 fitw with this diff much better. Anyway, AR7 will also help you to keep diff settings balanced! Try AR7 and if you don't like it -set AR6 back!
2. 01:44:829 - drag your break here? Looks like a good idea + it will improve your map visually :V And then, drag end of your break to 01:51:496 -
   Note: do it ONLY if you agree to do the same on [Normal].
3. 00:23:348 - end spinner here, please! That sounds and looks much better! + object after spinner appears too fast and players have no time to focus on it! Remember, SONG IS RELAXING< so we don't expect something that fast here!
4. 00:26:557 (6) - this slider should 1/6 later. It will sound MUCH, MUCH better!
   ~~
5. 00:35:940 (1,2) - it starts on music and ends on vocal. That sounds pretty bad to me, what about some mixing? that'd fit perfectly here, imo.
6. 00:55:199 (3) - I'm not sure, but I'd add a new combo here. It'll look awesome + fit with cute sound here.
7. 01:03:718 (3) - i guess it's easy to hear that beat at 01:04:088 - what if we'll try to emphasize it? Try to place a red dot on slider exactly at the place where beat appears, it'll look like this. (example is ugly, tho)
8. 01:12:236 (2,1) - nazi - try to stack them? Not a big deal, but it'll improve your flow a bit.
9. 01:58:533 - have you missed a circle here? Sounds quite empty without it. :< if you place it, it will improve your rhythm consistency!
10. 02:21:125 (4,5,6,7,1,2,3) - song is relaxing, so it may annoy players o click that much. Consider adding more sliders to this pattern? it won't hurt your rhythm,anyway.
11. 02:42:607 (1,1) - try to remove one of these NCs? SLooks like they're not really needed here!
12. 03:17:915 (5) - nazi - all your previous sliders in this combo were curved, consider curving this one as well. It'll fit with your flow better + looks cute! example

-Bakari- wrote:

yo

[General]

1. Try to enable letterboxes, there's absolutely no reason to keep them disabled. sure, why not.
2. I guess you forgot to add tag reconnect.People may look for it, y'know yep~
3. Try to use slider tick rate 2, sounds much better and fits with music quite good good idea!
4. Colours don't really fit with BG/ What's more bright colours may hurt players' eyes. Consider fading them a bit! nah, I don't agree here. The colors have a beautiful effect in my opinion.
   
   colours

   
   

   [Colours]
   Combo1 : 132,226,234
   Combo2 : 230,155,163
   Combo3 : 173,222,165

5. Consult a BAT, this BG may be unacceptable for young players. Asked a bunch of BATs and noone saw a problem.

[Normal]

1. Try to use Distance Snap x1.2 to avoid overlaps. You use a lot of 1/2 patterns and they look much nerater with DS x1.2. You use a lot of 1/2s and it looks really messy because they're overlapped! Many Easy/Normal diffs work like this, and I like it lol. I dont see a problem.
2. 00:09:273 (3) - nazi - consider changing your curvew a bit, so you'll make your flow smoother + it looks a bit neater. sure example
3. 00:28:533 (4,5,6) - nazi - straight line here looks a bit awkward after all these curvy sliders, just move (5) a little bit, so your flow will look more consistent! examplei good point, fixed.
   Note: if you agree, curve 00:30:014 (1,2) - as well! nah, not this one. It's a new combo, so here starts a new flow
4. 01:08:533 (3) - that slider sounds a bit confusing because vocals appear in the middle of it. I understand that you wanty to keep it symmetrical, so here's tweo variants how to change it. variant one (slider's shape isn't changed)/ (variant two)better rhythm, but you'll have to change that symmetrical pattern this pattern is focusing on the instruments, not on the vocals. I see your point but I somewhat like to keep it :c
5. 01:17:422 (1) - consider avoiding loop sliders, because they may confuse beginners. This is the easiest diff, so you should think about beginners a bit! hm yeah, but I'd like an awesome shape to start the KIAI.
6. 01:24:459 (2,4) - angle here looks kinda rough, that'd be great if you make shape smoother. example yup, changed.
7. 01:44:829 - drag your break here? Looks like a good idea + it will improve your map visually :V And then, drag end of your break to 01:51:496 - seems good, fixed~
8. 02:10:385 - you'd better not to ignore that sound, because it sounds really awkward if you ignore it. Sound becomes louser and stops at big white line. You can try to use slider like you did it at 00:58:903 (1) - . It will fiot with music much better, imo. hm, I find this sound is good to make a break, I wouldn't like mapping it :<
9. 02:43:348 - start spinner here and map previous part with curvy and tricky slider. example Spinner start is consistent with the previous one.
10. 03:13:718 - 03:30:755 - drag start/end of your breaks top these ticks. It'll look really good! yep~
11. 04:21:125 (1) - place a finish. It'd fit with music + it will make end of this map more enjoiyable for players! cool, added~

[Hard]

1. Song is relaxing, but AR7 fitw with this diff much better. Anyway, AR7 will also help you to keep diff settings balanced! Try AR7 and if you don't like it -set AR6 back! AR 7 is too fast for me ><
2. 01:44:829 - drag your break here? Looks like a good idea + it will improve your map visually :V And then, drag end of your break to 01:51:496 -
   Note: do it ONLY if you agree to do the same on [Normal].
3. 00:23:348 - end spinner here, please! That sounds and looks much better! + object after spinner appears too fast and players have no time to focus on it! Remember, SONG IS RELAXING< so we don't expect something that fast here!
4. 00:26:557 (6) - this slider should 1/6 later. It will sound MUCH, MUCH better! All fixed, and fixed some other vocal snapping.
   
   
   00:35:940 (1,2) - it starts on music and ends on vocal. That sounds pretty bad to me, what about some mixing? that'd fit perfectly here, imo. hmm, okay, changed in another way~
   00:55:199 (3) - I'm not sure, but I'd add a new combo here. It'll look awesome + fit with cute sound here. yea, but it'd break my consistency ><
   01:03:718 (3) - i guess it's easy to hear that beat at 01:04:088 - what if we'll try to emphasize it? Try to place a red dot on slider exactly at the place where beat appears, it'll look like this. (example is ugly, tho) there is a bunch of drum beats there, no point in emphasizing one imo :3
   01:12:236 (2,1) - nazi - try to stack them? Not a big deal, but it'll improve your flow a bit. nope, intentionally done so it's easier to read :>
   01:58:533 - have you missed a circle here? Sounds quite empty without it. :< if you place it, it will improve your rhythm consistency! added
   02:21:125 (4,5,6,7,1,2,3) - song is relaxing, so it may annoy players o click that much. Consider adding more sliders to this pattern? it won't hurt your rhythm,anyway. I think this flows awesome ~
   02:42:607 (1,1) - try to remove one of these NCs? SLooks like they're not really needed here! yep, right~
   03:17:915 (5) - nazi - all your previous sliders in this combo were curved, consider curving this one as well. It'll fit with your flow better + looks cute! example Fixed~

10crystalmask01 wrote:

I spotted a few errors I'd like to note:

Normal mode:
Slider at 00:03:348 and 00:04:829 are not snapped.

Hard mode
Sliders at 00:03:348 and 00:04:829 are also not snapped.
Slider at 00:09:273 and 00:10:755 sounds off.

Apart from this, it's a wonderful map!

Hope this helps~!

Irreversible wrote:

irc

20:58 Irreversible: schöne map
20:58 Konei: danke :<
20:59 Irreversible: lol
21:00 Konei: hngh
21:00 Irreversible: 00:25:570 (4,6) - die 2 slider sehen nicht so schön aus zsm
21:01 Konei: 5 ein bisschen gechanged~
21:01 Irreversible: 00:31:310 (3,4,5) -
21:01 Irreversible: 00:31:310 (3,4,5) - pass es aber ein wenig an, ist nur die grundidee
21:01 Konei: yep
21:01 Irreversible: 00:35:940 (1,2) - spacing change pls es ist zu weit weg (ist es nicht, aber würde besser aussehen)
21:02 Konei: fixed~
21:02 Irreversible: 01:13:224 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2) -
21:02 Irreversible: markier alles und verschieb es nach x: 112 y: 100
21:03 Irreversible: 01:18:409 (2) - move to x: x: 184 y: 104
21:03 Irreversible: 01:20:385 (1) - ein paar grids nach unten das ein schöner übergang eingeleitet wird
21:03 Irreversible: 01:27:422 (3) - ein wenig nach oben rechts, sodass ein schöner bogen mit 2 und 4 entsteht
21:04 Irreversible: 01:30:261 (2) - same sugestion as above, also ein wenig näher zum slider schieben
21:04 Irreversible: 01:53:718 (2) - NC
21:04 Irreversible: 01:58:533 (6) - whistle, wegen dem hintergrund
21:05 Irreversible: 02:05:817 (2) - spacing, näher zum slider
21:05 Irreversible: 02:14:829 (4) - vllt verschiebst du den so, dass alle circles + der anfangspunkt vom slider eine linie ergeben
21:05 Irreversible: 02:14:829 (4) - vllt sowas.http://puu.sh/3fGCH.jpg
21:07 Konei: all fixed
21:08 Irreversible: 02:42:607 (1) - schau mal ob das spacing hier gleich ist wie beim circle stream
21:08 Irreversible: 02:47:298 (2) - spacing wieder
21:08 Irreversible: 02:52:607 (2) - es würde noch gut zum song passen, wenn du den hier zu x: 472 y: 180 verschiebst
21:09 Irreversible: 03:02:977 (4) - ? wieso drum
21:09 Irreversible: 03:19:273 (3) - ein wenig nach unten
21:09 Irreversible: 03:21:125 (8) - nach rechts,
21:10 Irreversible: 03:50:385 (4) - hier auch wieder drum.. hier passts aber besser
21:10 Irreversible: 04:16:681 (4) - vielleicht dne so moven das es ein blanket gibt mit dem vorhin?
21:11 *Irreversible is editing [http://osu.ppy.sh/b/256249 Itou Kanako - At Last [Normal]]
21:11 Irreversible: 00:14:459 (3) - der wäre bei X: 296 Y: 304 iwie besser platziert, oder halt iwo da
21:11 Konei: kk
21:12 Irreversible: 01:29:273 (1) - symmetrisch pls
21:12 Konei: fixed
21:12 Irreversible: 02:31:866 (5) - wenn du nicht alles umplacen musst wäre der ein wenig weiter oben besser, wegen dem übergang auch
21:13 Konei: fixed~
21:13 Irreversible: that's it

gl

Andrea wrote:

I'll mod this tomorrow

• • Mind adding a "spinner-approachcircle.png" in order to complete your set?
  • I don't really like "Comboburst-0.png", this image is too much streched vertically imo.

• • 00:10:385 (4) - Use a ~ shape for a better flow:
  
  SPOILER

  
  • 00:16:310 (6,1) - I don't like the rhythm you used here, try this:
  
  SPOILER

  
  • 00:27:422 (3) - Rotate this slider 30° clockwise for a better flow.
  • 00:32:607 (3,4) - Select this circle and this slider and move them at x:326 y:308.
  • 00:38:903 (4) - Rotate this slider 30° clockwise.
  • 00:47:051 (1) - This new combo is useless, remove it.
  • 00:50:385 (4) - Rotate this slider 60° clockwise. (the end is not offscreen, don't worry)
  • 00:58:903 (1) - Remove this new combo.
  • 01:13:348 (1) - What about starting this spinner at 01:14:459 to better follow the music?
  • 01:17:422 (1) - This slider can be done better, look:
  
  SPOILER

  
  • 01:29:273 (1) - ^
  
  SPOILER

  
  • 01:40:014 (4) - Rotate this slider 30° clockwise.
  • 02:15:940 (1) - Remove this new combo.
  • 02:42:236 (1) - Start this spinner at 02:43:348.
  • 02:46:310 (1) - I don't like this slider, avoid using that red slider point:
  
  SPOILER

  
  • 02:56:681 (1) - Remove this new combo. (or add a new combo at 01:27:792 (6) to keep a consistency)
  • 03:33:718 (1,2) - Hmm... what about making a heart slider here?
  
  SPOILER

  

• • 00:18:162 (1) - End this slider at 00:18:533 and add a circle at 00:18:903.
  • 00:47:051 (1) - Remove this new combo.
  • 00:58:903 (1) - ^
  • 01:14:088 (1) - ^
  • 01:29:027 (5) - Delete this circle, this pattern sounds a lot better without it imo.
  • 01:30:261 (2) - Rotate this slider 15° clockwise.
  • 02:15:940 (1) - Remove this new combo.
  • 02:42:607 (1) - ^
  • 02:57:915 (5) - Delete this circle.
  • 03:27:792 (1) - Start this spinner at 03:30:755.
  • 04:01:372 (2) - I don't like how this slider sounds, delete it and add a circle at 04:01:496.
  • 04:09:027 (5) - Delete this circle.

1. ♥

1. 00:11:496 (5) - at first look this slider sounds a bit strange to me,why don't you try to finish it at 00:11:866 - sounds much better to me
2. 00:21:125 - a cirle before the spinner with a finish will sound good imo
3. 00:34:459 (5,6,1) - i don't really like how the whislte sound here i don't really understand if it don't fit here: 00:35:940 (1) - or 00:35:570 (6) - my main suggestion is to remove one of it, if it were for me i would remove it at 00:35:570 (6) - but if you try to put a really silet finish at 00:35:940 (1) - it will fit too,so try what is the best for you
4. 00:47:051 (6) - by this slider is the same thing that i mentioned before o3o try to finish it at 00:47:422 - it sound much better for me
5. 00:50:385 - to 00:55:940 - try to continue the clap pattern that you started it will sound better i think
6. 00:58:903 (8) - same again for this slider try to finish it at 00:59:273 -
7. 01:34:088 (4) - i don't think this drum whistle fit here
8. 01:58:903 (1) - i think a clap is better here
9. 01:59:644 (2) - try to replace the clap at slider-start with a whistle
10. 02:15:940 (4) - same again for this slider finish it at 02:16:310 -
11. 02:17:792 (2,3) - [nazi]spacing here[/nazi]
12. 02:46:310 (1) - this slider sound strange o.o try to finish it here: 02:47:792 -
13. 03:39:644 (1,2) - don't really like this little overlap
14. 04:13:718 (5) - the whistle on reversearrow don't fit really well

1. 00:09:150 - what about to add a circle here?
2. 00:21:125 - add a circle with a finish here before the spinner i think will give a better effect *3*
3. 01:24:459 (4) - uhm why don't you stack this one with 01:23:348 (1) - ?
4. 03:50:385 (4) - drum whistle :c whyy

Lally wrote:

hey <3

[General]

1. ♥

[Normal]

1. 00:11:496 (5) - at first look this slider sounds a bit strange to me,why don't you try to finish it at 00:11:866 - sounds much better to me nope the sound ends there.
2. 00:21:125 - a cirle before the spinner with a finish will sound good imo cool
3. 00:34:459 (5,6,1) - i don't really like how the whislte sound here i don't really understand if it don't fit here: 00:35:940 (1) - or 00:35:570 (6) - my main suggestion is to remove one of it, if it were for me i would remove it at 00:35:570 (6) - but if you try to put a really silet finish at 00:35:940 (1) - it will fit too,so try what is the best for you hm, okay~
4. 00:47:051 (6) - by this slider is the same thing that i mentioned before o3o try to finish it at 00:47:422 - it sound much better for me same
5. 00:50:385 - to 00:55:940 - try to continue the clap pattern that you started it will sound better i think I have all claps I need, lol.
6. 00:58:903 (8) - same again for this slider try to finish it at 00:59:273 - same
7. 01:34:088 (4) - i don't think this drum whistle fit here nope, it's in the song.
8. 01:58:903 (1) - i think a clap is better here nope, would be inconsistent.
9. 01:59:644 (2) - try to replace the clap at slider-start with a whistle would be inconsistent.
10. 02:15:940 (4) - same again for this slider finish it at 02:16:310 - same
11. 02:17:792 (2,3) - [nazi]spacing here[/nazi] hmhmh, it helps me to use the blanket and it's readable :c
12. 02:46:310 (1) - this slider sound strange o.o try to finish it here: 02:47:792 - HUE, fail. Fixed.
13. 03:39:644 (1,2) - don't really like this little overlap It's ok
14. 04:13:718 (5) - the whistle on reversearrow don't fit really well it's in the song.

[Hard]

1. 00:09:150 - what about to add a circle here? Sure
2. 00:21:125 - add a circle with a finish here before the spinner i think will give a better effect *3* Yep
3. 01:24:459 (4) - uhm why don't you stack this one with 01:23:348 (1) - ? because it's a jump xD
4. 03:50:385 (4) - drum whistle :c whyy because it's in the song :>

really relaxing mapset *.*)/ a staru-chan for you good luck :3

1. 00:21:125 (1) - remove this nc, make same with 00:12:236 (1) - (6)
2. 00:45:940 (5) - add whistle in end? in music the sound same w/ begin and 00:47:051 (6) - 's end
3. 00:54:088 (2,3) - maybe ctrl + g here? so can add clap in 00:54:459 -
4. 00:56:681 (5) - add nc, too long imo.. and make same with previous combo (1-4)
5. 01:08:533 (3) - remove clap in the end, sound strange w/ finish
6. 01:11:125 (4) - add drum sound like 01:08:533 (3) - 's reverse?
7. 01:33:718 (3,4,5,6) - more symmetry square like this -> http://puu.sh/3iiSc
   

   260,192,93718,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   240,124,94088,1,2,3:0:0:0:
   172,144,94459,1,8,0:0:0:0:
   192,212,94829,1,0,0:0:0:0:

8. 01:59:644 (2) - this slider shape seems random.. maybe try this? http://puu.sh/3ij0V.jpg
9. 02:12:977 (2) - add clap in end
10. 02:26:310 (5) - add whistle in begin and end? sound good imo
11. 02:37:422 (4) - why suddenly clap in end? change to whistle sound more fit o3o
12. 02:55:940 (5) - add nc?
13. 03:49:273 (3) - move 3 grid up
14. 04:21:125 (1) - remove nc for make same combo w/ 04:10:014 (1) - (5)

1. 00:11:866 (4) - I guess this note should at 00:11:743 - to follow piano
2. 00:35:940 (1) - remove whistle in start, the rhythm sounds more better without it
3. 00:53:718 (1) - move 1 grid up so that align w/ (4)
4. 01:10:385 (4) - maybe in reverse more fit finish instead clap..
5. 01:23:718 (2) - move 1 grid down just make triangle symmetry
6. 01:24:459 (4) - why not stack with (1)?
7. 01:34:088 (4) - add whistle
8. 01:53:718 (1) - remove this combo, make same w/ 01:56:310 (1) - (6)
9. 01:58:162 (5) - add clap
10. 02:04:829 (1) - spacing is too close imo. make same spacing like 02:04:088 (5) - to (6)
11. 02:27:422 (4) - move this into x:376 y:288 seems more good
12. 02:29:644 (2) - add whistle in beginning
13. 03:03:718 (6) - move 1 grid to right
14. 03:28:903 (2) - remove clap, weird with finish..
15. 04:04:459 (3) - make this more symmetry http://puu.sh/3ikbf.jpg
16. 04:21:125 (1) - remove this nc

eveless wrote:

[general]
add "yaoi""nitro+chiral""bl" in tags? added all~

[Hard]
01:10:014 (3,4) - Anti-flow for me, I'd like to do it like this

SPOILER

sure
01:32:236 (1) - ^Same,

SPOILER

yep
01:40:014 (2,3,4) - Too crowded imo, Can you make them a bit more far? yep
03:16:496 (2) - Incorrect position, use 1/4 or 1/12 then hear it carefully, you can found that it should be put in 03:16:496. oops, fixed~

eveless wrote:

So why didnt you believe me ;_;

/me back to play mmorpg

1. 00:41:681 (1) - This should actually be on the 1/12 snap according to the music, but since it is a repeat slider and is going to play the same regardless, I will let you choose what to do with it.
2. 01:14:582 (1) - It would be a nice touch to end this spinner here 01:16:866, to represent that powerful part of the music.
3. 01:18:903 - Adding a note here is crucial to establishing a solid rhythm for this section of the music. So, I would add a note. http://puu.sh/3lTR5.jpg Works well.
4. 01:30:755 - ^
5. 01:52:977 (1) - This should be on 1/8 snap according to the music.
6. 02:10:508 (1) - This is on 1/12 too, like my first suggestion.
7. 02:47:792 - Add a note here to establish a better rhythm, like the last kiai.
8. 02:59:644 - ^
9. 03:47:051 - ^
10. 04:10:755 - ^ and I recommend you use a slider like before, for consistency.

1. 00:14:829 (4) - Spacing from 3 to 4 is messed up. Move 4 out a little bit to fix it.