Loli Cjj wrote:

=Normal=
1. 00:57:749 (5) - How about moving this up to make a diamond pattern? then the flow between 00:57:749 (5,1) - doesnt look good to me
2. 01:22:593 (4,5) - Either it's ugly or what, I don't like the flow. Remake, perhaps? well i was just lazy, done
3. 03:04:781 - From this part I think it's not good to follow the vocal, try simpler note pattern.ok

=Insane=
1. 00:47:671 (7,8) - You may delete (8) and put (7) stacked with the notes before this. it's empty w/o 00:47:906 (8) -
2. 00:48:140 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,4) - How about triangle pattern? http://puu.sh/KA7T this will cause bad flow between 00:49:312 (3) - and 00:49:546 (4) - =/
3. 01:19:312 (5) - Make the end near each other so it'll looks more like triangle pattern. hmm fixed

Will continue later. That's all for now, good luck. and i'll have to upload again? :<

KersiTyan wrote:

Hi~ from my queue~

Insane

00:23:531 - add whistle? ok
00:29:156 (5) - ^ whistle here is inappropriate imo
00:46:031 (1) - maybe add finish? nah
00:53:531 (1) - ^ hmm the rhythm doesnt sound like that
02:17:437 (4) - x:146 y:225 oh come on... it's just 2 lvl 4 grids +_+
02:18:257 (2) - ^
02:18:374 - add note here hmm no
02:46:031 - x:277 y:222 fine
02:46:968 (2,5) - ^

1. 00:50:132 - There is another beat in the music here, I suggest adding a note like this http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/378974
2. 01:01:148 - add spinner? break is pretty long, a spinner fits the vocal fade-out here.
3. 01:22:593 (3) - put here plays better imo http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/378969 then move (4) out a little
4. 01:44:156 (5) - move 3rd sliderpoint to about (388,184)? looks better if curve a litle
5. 02:57:749 (1,2) - symmetry._.
6. great map! like the jumps

1. 00:15:796 (6) - I think it's better if this slider is smoother o.o
2. 00:17:671 (4) - ^
3. 00:50:718 (1) - move last point 1grid up?
4. 02:02:906 (1) - ^ down
5. 01:29:624 (6) - 3grids up

1. 00:19:781 (3) - this goes out of the grids?

1. 00:18:843 (1,2) - blanket
2. 00:35:249 (4) - move right 1grid
3. 03:04:781 (1,1,1,1,1) - o.o

[CSGA]Ar3sgice wrote:

Pie's Hard

1. 00:15:796 (6) - I think it's better if this slider is smoother o.o <--- no
2. 00:17:671 (4) - ^ <--- fixed
3. 00:50:718 (1) - move last point 1grid up? <--- fixed
4. 02:02:906 (1) - ^ down <--- fixed
5. 01:29:624 (6) - 3grids up <--- fixed

[CSGA]Ar3sgice wrote:

from my queue


Insane

1. 00:50:132 - There is another beat in the music here, I suggest adding a note like this http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/378974 hmm i'll add note if there's 1 more mod tell me to
2. 01:01:148 - add spinner? break is pretty long, a spinner fits the vocal fade-out here. then it gotta end at 01:01:968 - o_O this spinner's too short and a bit reluctant imo
3. 01:22:593 (3) - put here plays better imo http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/378969 then move (4) out a little kk
4. 01:44:156 (5) - move 3rd sliderpoint to about (388,184)? looks better if curve a litle hmm k
5. 02:57:749 (1,2) - symmetry._. k ._.
6. great map! like the jumps

Normal

1. 00:19:781 (3) - this goes out of the grids? fixed

Good luck~

thx for modding

Loli Cjj wrote:

>Use approach circle to make a neat slider. Not neat, but more blanket. Take an example from first slider on easy diff. You can move 2 dots to make a neater one. http://puu.sh/KygK

=Zej's Easy=
1. 00:16:031 (1) - I think I've explained this ^

list of something similiar like this

00:18:843 (1) -
00:23:531 (1) -
00:26:343 (1,1) -
00:38:999 (1) -
00:42:749 (1) -
00:46:968 (3) - A neater one this time, you can use 00:48:374 (4) - , copypasta, scale 2x and remove repeat. Last, but not least, move to the proper place.
00:53:531 (3) -
00:59:624 (4) -
01:28:218 (3) -
01:32:906 (1) -
01:40:406 (1,3) -
02:03:843 (3) -
02:10:406 (3) -
02:16:499 (4) -
02:45:093 (3) -
02:57:281 (1,3) -
03:01:968 (5) -
03:14:156 (1) - This one, should be a symmetric.

2. 00:23:062 (4) - clap?
3. 00:37:124 (5) - Make this opposite with 00:35:249 (4) - , ctrl+ j, and move to the proper place. http://puu.sh/Kz3Z

KersiTyan wrote:

[Zej's Easy]
00:23:062 (4) - clap

KiyoshiX101 wrote:

[Zej's Easy]
01:20:718 (3) - Fix the shape of the slider so it fixed the Distance as well(Prev: 1.01 Next: 1.01) http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/377495
02:52:593 (3) - ^ - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/377498

[CSGA]Ar3sgice wrote:

Zej's Easy

1. 00:18:843 (1,2) - blanket
2. 00:35:249 (4) - move right 1grid
3. 03:04:781 (1,1,1,1,1) - o.o

Sandpig wrote:

Hard

00:32:437 - clap? <--- added
00:34:312 - ^ clap? <--- added
00:49:781 - it sounds better to me if you remove this clap and add it on 00:50:132 (mb also a clap on 00:50:484 if you follow this one) clap? <--- added
01:17:906 ~ 01:47:906 - I don't know why you only added clap on 2nd white tick. In general the 4th white tick should be with a clap if you add on the 2nd. but it's not a big problem... <--- bcz this claps follow the claps in music.
02:34:781 ~ 03:04:312 - ^ <--- ^

Sandpig wrote:

hi

Insane

00:42:046 (4,5,6) - this triplet plays weird...I'd recommand not using triplet from white tick in this part (triplet from red tick sounds much better) fixed
00:34:312 (4) - ^ mb change this, too? ^
01:25:406 (11) - new combo instead of 01:26:109 (1)? k
01:33:140 (6) - nc instead of 01:33:609 (1)? hmm i think it's fine here
01:40:406 (5) - nc instead of 01:41:109 (1)?^
02:12:281 (1) - mb remove this note? because there is no note on 02:04:781 or 02:08:531. hmm im having some troubles rearranging 02:12:515 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - well i'll change this if there's 1 more tell me to
02:16:031 (4) - ^ deleted
03:06:538 (1) - I think it should be started from 03:06:656. mb make it like 03:14:038 (1,2) fixed
02:42:281 (5) - nc instead of 02:42:984 (1)? nope
02:49:781 (3) - nc instead of 02:50:484 (1)?then combo 02:48:609 (1,2) - will be too short =o
02:57:281 (4) - nc instead of 02:57:749 (1)?same reason^

Normal

02:54:468 (5,6) - this part plays a little weird. I think it would be better not skip these claps - 02:54:937 and 02:55:874. I mean circle insteand of slidertick.hm i just.. didnt wanna use too many 1/1 sliders u_u well.. fixed
03:08:531 (1) - end it 1/2 earlier? the unique red tick in this part is odd to me. k

nice map

thx for ur help

Easy

03:10:406 - add a circle?


nice map

• Circle Size to 5.
  
  00:38:413 - add note?
  00:49:077 (1) - move on one grid left.
  00:49:312 (3) - move on one grid right.
  01:42:515 (5) - NC?
  02:20:132 (7) - ^

• AR 7.
  
  00:16:499 (7) - Old combo.
  00:16:734 (1) - NC.
  00:18:374 (5) - move to x:348, y:104.
  01:16:265 (1) - start spin
  01:17:906 - end spin.
  02:33:140 (1) - start spin.
  02:34:781 - end spin.
  02:57:984 (1,2,3) - try this
  03:01:031 (4) -
  SPOILER

  
  Еще бы чуть-чуть и получился бы инс) но мне понравилось.

• Circle Size to 3.
  
  00:40:406 (4) - oh my goodness.. what i see.. it's a jump in Normal? Please change this. (i understand , you done this with distance snap, but i recommending you change this moment)
  00:48:843 (4) - ^
  00:55:874 (1,2,3,4,5) - try this
  SPOILER

  
  01:39:468 (1) - move to x:312, y:340.

• 01:01:230 - The break here is 15236 ms long, which is longer than the recommended 15000 ms.
  02:18:105 - ^

Yoru-SAN wrote:

[Hard]

• AR 7.
  
  00:16:499 (7) - Old combo. <--- nope
  00:16:734 (1) - NC. <--- nope
  00:18:374 (5) - move to x:348, y:104. <--- nope
  01:16:265 (1) - start spin <--- nope
  01:17:906 - end spin.
  02:33:140 (1) - start spin. <--- nope
  02:34:781 - end spin.
  02:57:984 (1,2,3) - try this <--- nope
  03:01:031 (4) - <--- fixed
  SPOILER

  
  Еще бы чуть-чуть и получился бы инс) но мне понравилось. Thx ^.^

Yoru-SAN wrote:

[Easy]

• 01:01:230 - The break here is 15236 ms long, which is longer than the recommended 15000 ms.
  02:18:105 - ^

Good Luck!

Yoru-SAN wrote:

HI! from my modding queue~

[Insane]

• Circle Size to 5. u mean small circle? o_o sorry but no
  
  00:38:413 - add note? nah
  00:49:077 (1) - move on one grid left. nope
  00:49:312 (3) - move on one grid right.^
  01:42:515 (5) - NC? hmm ok
  02:20:132 (7) - ^ k

[Normal]

• Circle Size to 3. nah i think it's fine
  
  00:40:406 (4) - oh my goodness.. what i see.. it's a jump in Normal? Please change this. (i understand , you done this with distance snap, but i recommending you change this moment) how can it be a jump when i've done it with distance snap (as u said)? @@ it's just a normal circle, with normal spacing that's all O_o
  00:48:843 (4) - ^
  00:55:874 (1,2,3,4,5) - try this
  SPOILER

  
  hmm i dont really understand ur idea but i'll try to fix this
  01:39:468 (1) - move to x:312, y:340. then im afraid the reverse will be hidden under 01:39:468 (1) - D:

Soror wrote:

<3

kazumikos wrote:

Soror wrote:

<3

=D

Zej's Easy

1. 00:42:749 (1) - Move last point to right 1 grid
2. 01:37:593 (5) - Make to this be beautiful.
   
   SPOILER

   

   256,320,97593,2,0,B|304:384|392:384|448:336|456:256,1,270,0|8

3. 02:41:812 (6) - Add clap here
4. 03:03:843 (1) - Remove NC (Same as 01:46:968 (6) -)
5. 03:10:406 - Add a note?

nich95 wrote:

Hi, kazumikos

My mod from your request

Red = Unrankable
Biue = You should modified
Black = My suggestion

General

1. Fine

Normal

1. 00:21:421 (6,2) - Stack it. forgot :<
2. 02:02:906 (1,2) - Trying don't overlap, Maybe making new player is strange. fixed
3. 02:06:656 (5) - Add NC k
4. 02:56:812 (2) - Move 2nd point to down 4 grids? why?
5. 03:10:874 (2) - Add clap here? i forgot :< and it should be whistle
6. 03:11:812 (4) - ^

Insane

1. 00:19:781 (6) - Slider end at 00:20:132, then move (7) to 00:20:249. uhmmm ok
2. 00:37:359 (2,3) - It's overlap little. Trying don't overlap, would be better.fixed
3. 00:43:452 (3) - Making the slider like 00:42:984 (2) - ok..

That's all that I can find them.
nice map and song, give a star

Good luck~

-Baby Strawberry- wrote:

Pie's Hard
00:28:921 add a circle maybe? <--- make slider double
00:32:437 (4) - adjust the shape? it's not that perfect right now. and don't forget your copied one~! <--- fixed
03:10:406 (1) - i don't think its a symmetrical shape <--- it's symmetric
well i really like the pauses and the way you put the spinner~! <--- Thanks ^^

-Baby Strawberry- wrote:

Hello~! sry for my late mod~!

Hard

SPOILER

this is pretty much an insane diff, you may consider to change the name of this diff
sry couldn't find anything... hey it was [Insane] from the start o3o

Normal

SPOILER

still couldn't find anything........

Zej's Easy

SPOILER

00:23:062 (4) - clap
03:17:671 (1) - start at 03:17:906?

ezek wrote:

From my modding queue.

Zej's Easy
00:28:218 (1) - Remove NC?
00:46:968 (3) - Move the third grid 2 grids to the left, it looks better.
01:45:093 (5) - Add NC?
01:46:968 (6,7) - Maybe do this:

SPOILER

02:03:843 (3) - Just like 00:46:968 (3)

ezek wrote:

Normal
Looks fine to me.

Insane
00:16:499 (4) - Do not touch with 00:16:031 (3) these are 1/4 notes o_O
00:47:671 (7,801:44:156 (7) - ) - ^ with 00:46:968 (6) k
01:44:156 (7) - Maybe like this?

SPOILER

hmm..k
03:18:140 (1,2,3) - Separate them to make the diff more hard. i'll think abt this

ezek wrote:

Pie's Hard
00:40:874 (1) - It's better like this:

SPOILER

00:41:812 (3) - ^ Just flip vertically..

Sorry but I'd like my forms~ Thx for mod~

Leorda wrote:

Hi kazu-chan

[Zej's Easy]
00:20:718 (3) - New combo for your combo pattern?
00:35:249 (4) - ^

Good luck

Leorda wrote:

[Pie's Hard]
* Your hitsounds during kiai time is monotonus, due there is no clap at 4th white tick. Consider to add clap at 4th white tick for following snare sound <--- I'm not love many hitsounds. I think now it's good follow the claps in song~~

00:41:577 (2,3) - Move 1 grid left for making a symetrical pattern (nazi) <--- fixed
Good luck

Leorda wrote:

Hi kazu-chan

[General]
* Snap the preview time to 01:16:734 or 01:17:906? mm ok

[Normal]
00:23:531 (4,1) - Swap new combo for your combo pattern? ok
00:40:406 (4) - Overlapped by hitbursts from previous object (look at test mode for proof). It could be hidden for beginners for some cases (sometimes, beginners are slow to read this) fixed
00:49:312 (5) - ^ k
01:01:031 (3) - Stack under slider can confuse beginners, because some beginners are didn't notice there is a circle under the slider k
02:12:046 (2) - ^ fixed
02:27:281 (1) - Add clap at repeating slider for your hitsound pattern k

Good luck

Nemis wrote:

[Normal]
02:48:843 (1) - Remove new combo k
02:49:781 (3) - Add new combo
03:09:937 (2,1,2,3,4) - What about change these beats' positions? ok.. can you suggest smth? o3o

[Insane]
00:18:374 (1) - Remove new combo done
00:18:843 (2) - Add new combo ^
01:20:718 (3,4,1,2,3,4,5,6) - Too many sliders! Use them to create funny jumps D: i ran out of idea D:

Nice map, i like some movements in Insane, good luck

Nemis wrote:

[Pie's Hard]
00:32:437 (4) - Fix this slider's form <--- nope~
00:33:843 (4) - same ^ <--- nope~
01:31:968 (1) - Remove new combo and <---fixed
01:32:906 (3) - Add new combo (i'm not sure) <---fixed
02:19:781 (1,1,1,1,1,1) - This sliders are boring, like the others before these <--- nope~

1. kiai time Inconsistency in Normal diff, you forget to close the kiai on 03:04:312 -

1. 00:26:343 (1) - copy 00:28:218 (1) - and opposite it (or 00:28:218 (1) - copy 00:26:343 (1) - )
2. 00:35:249 (1) - Spacing
3. 00:48:374 (4) - move the last tick up 1 gird (gird level4)
4. 02:39:468 (5) - Try this
   
   SPOILER

   
   

   247,132,159468,2,0,B|263:90|315:45|413:69|443:139|411:198,1,270,0|8

5. 02:41:812 (6) - ^ if except this, spacing problem here orz
   I love your slider and blanket !!!!!

1. HP-2 AR-1 OD-1
2. 01:01:031 (3) - finish?
   well made!

1. 00:40:874 (6,7,8) - Try this?
   
   SPOILER

   http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/439562
   

   324,69,40874,2,0,B|334:23|383:4|440:24|442:85,1,160
   386,128,41577,1,0
   443,184,41812,2,0,B|433:230|384:249|327:229|325:168,1,160

   So great o.o!!!!

1. 01:44:156 (7,1) - Do a blanket like this?
   
   SPOILER

   

Flask wrote:

wa kazu-chan :O!

[General]

1. kiai time Inconsistency in Normal diff, you forget to close the kiai on 03:04:312 - ah sure

[Normal]

1. HP-2 AR-1 OD-1 fixed, im keeping this AR though :v
2. 01:01:031 (3) - finish? mm i dont hear finish here o_o
   well made!

[Insane]

1. 01:44:156 (7,1) - Do a blanket like this? k
   
   SPOILER

   

Flask wrote:

wa kazu-chan :O!

[General]

1. kiai time Inconsistency in Normal diff, you forget to close the kiai on 03:04:312 -

[Zej's Easy]

1. 00:26:343 (1) - copy 00:28:218 (1) - and opposite it (or 00:28:218 (1) - copy 00:26:343 (1) - )
2. 00:35:249 (1) - Spacing
3. 00:48:374 (4) - move the last tick up 1 gird (gird level4)
4. 02:39:468 (5) - Try this
   
   SPOILER

   
   

   247,132,159468,2,0,B|263:90|315:45|413:69|443:139|411:198,1,270,0|8

5. 02:41:812 (6) - ^ if except this, spacing problem here orz
   I love your slider and blanket !!!!!

Pink Agate wrote:

MOD form CLANNAD Modding Queue
sorry ,just mod Zej's Easy

00:59:624 (4) - new combo?
01:29:624 (4) - new combo,I think is important
01:44:624 (4) - ^
02:16:499 (4) - new combo?
02:46:499 (4) - new combo
03:01:499 (4) - ^

good map ,good luck

Garven wrote:

[Hard]
AR -1 <--- FIXED
OD +1 <--- FIXED
03:12:749 (2) - This was kind of obscured by the hitburst from 03:10:406 (1) - <--- Not think what I will be change it~ In game It's looks ok~~~

Garven wrote:

[Normal]
00:31:499 (1) - Too soon after a spinner for a Normal. Give around 2 beats for this BPM.
02:33:843 (1) - This is iffy. (soon after a spinner)
03:05:249 (1) - Too soon
fixed :v
[Insane]
00:46:031 (1,2,3,4,5) - I'm not really understanding all these little 5-hit streams riddled throughout. Feel odd to play considering the held vocal.
Otherwise this is nice.
k
Be careful when updating the maps. They're all version 9, and sometimes when moving to version 10 the green lines will be moved around. Make backups and make sure everything is ok after uploading.

Garven wrote:

Sorry, lost my tabs and forgot about this >_>

[Easy]
Tick rate 2 fits this song best.
00:48:374 (4) - I don't recommend having a short repeat slider with more than one repeat in an Easy - especially when you have another hit object so soon afterward.
00:55:874 (1) -
02:05:249 (4) - ^
02:12:749 (1) - ^
01:48:140 - Break, okay. 02:02:906 - playing, cool. 02:18:140 - A break again? Feels way too soon, and you're sitting around for another 10 seconds. zzz
New combo usage is a little weird. I like what you did with the kiais. Think you could apply that same new combo pattern to the rest of the map? At least reduce the usage at the end of the map.

1. Confirmed the artist and stuff just in case and blah blah blah everything is fine!
   I'm worried about the hitsounds' volume - I believe it's a bit too low, and I can't hear them in some sections. But this is up to you, it isn't so much that it disrupts the gameplay or something like that.

1. The slidertick. Can you use 1? I mean, I can't almost hear them and they could represent a problem for a player that doesn't yet fully understand how sliders work, since you would combo break a lot if you can't follow properly.

1. 00:36:890 (3) - This feels so odd considering the rythm you've been following... I really recommend moving this to 00:36:656 (3) - and adding something at 00:37:124. That's much more intuitive. Keep hitsounds consistent, careful with that.
2. 00:51:421 (3) - This is ULTRA nazi but can you move the middle sliderpoint 1 grid up so that the blanketing looks a bit better?
3. 00:52:124 (1) - It seems pretty pointless to have such a short combo here, I suggest removing the new combo.
4. 00:55:874 (1) - Likewise, I suggest the following: Remove the new combo here, then add a new combo at 00:57:281 (4) -, and then remove the one at 00:58:218 (1) -.
5. 02:14:156 (1) - To keep it consistent with the new combo pattern, why not adding a new combo here?
   
   Maybe I'm being too exquisite with the new combos, you should evaluate how much you're willing to change of that and tell me, I'll act consequently.

1. Ha, the end is fantastic!

Garven wrote:

The tick rate should be set according to the music. The players will figure out how sliders work quickly enough.

narakucrimson wrote:

Oh hi there!

General

1. Confirmed the artist and stuff just in case and blah blah blah everything is fine! oh..i really dont know what to add :< sweet love is just a single
   I'm worried about the hitsounds' volume - I believe it's a bit too low, and I can't hear them in some sections. But this is up to you, it isn't so much that it disrupts the gameplay or something like that. (both) hitclap sound a bit too loud for me actually ._. that's why i decreased the volume..

Normal

1. 00:36:890 (3) - This feels so odd considering the rythm you've been following... I really recommend moving this to 00:36:656 (3) - and adding something at 00:37:124. That's much more intuitive. Keep hitsounds consistent, careful with that. sound good
2. 00:51:421 (3) - This is ULTRA nazi but can you move the middle sliderpoint 1 grid up so that the blanketing looks a bit better? ok o3o
3. 00:52:124 (1) - It seems pretty pointless to have such a short combo here, I suggest removing the new combo. done
4. 00:55:874 (1) - Likewise, I suggest the following: Remove the new combo here, then add a new combo at 00:57:281 (4) -, and then remove the one at 00:58:218 (1) -. ok
5. 02:14:156 (1) - To keep it consistent with the new combo pattern, why not adding a new combo here? k
   
   Maybe I'm being too exquisite with the new combos, you should evaluate how much you're willing to change of that and tell me, I'll act consequently. well im very flexible about combo stuff.. o3o

Insane

1. Ha, the end is fantastic!

Ok, that's all! Call me back! (won't pop for now)

narakucrimson wrote:

Garven wrote:

The tick rate should be set according to the music. The players will figure out how sliders work quickly enough.

It still goes according with the music if it is 1, and I'd say even more because of the hitsounds he added to the ticks.

Zejky wrote:

update
http://puu.sh/1x0Lg