Snepif wrote:

Hello! M4M here~~

Lets see.

[General]

Offset 26348 (+5 on current) sounds much better to me.
Remember to resnap all lines and notes after doing this.

[Easy]

00:30:093 (3) - New combo here, kind of a must.

*try to keep your combos under 5-ish in easy diffs. Also I don't really suggest to use NC on pattern shape changes, but in MUSIC changes, for example, using NCs in big white ticks. But now it's already done though, just remember this for the future.

00:41:811 (1,2) - make this blanket better:

SPOILER

00:46:030 (2) - Then stack this slider's end to the previous long slider's end.
00:46:968 (3) - This shape is too sharp and doesn't fit with the previous curved stuff, maybe make it more curved and less sharp (and the next slider too)
01:08:530 (1) - This should be more centered, because in easier diffs, every note after a spinner must be close to the center so the player doesn't screw up (beginners use to screw up if you don't do this)
01:22:129 (1) - Clap here, for consistency with the previous notes.
01:40:874 (1) - Move the middle point a bit up so it isn't so sharp (http://puu.sh/1kfaP)
01:42:749 (4) - ^
01:48:374 (1) - http://puu.sh/1kfch?
02:23:530 (1) - Maybe move a bit closer to the center for the same reason

[Normal]

00:30:093 (x) - - Start the map here as Easy diff for concistency... you waste a lot of the mp3 otherwise.
00:45:561 (2) - Make it not overlap (4)
01:09:936 (5) - This looks ugly, make these 2 sliders touch a little less with each other.
02:07:593 (1) - Same as I said on easy, move this more to the centre of the playfield
02:12:280 (2) - NC here and remove NC from the last slider

[Hard]

00:41:577 (1) - These sliders should start on WHITE ticks. That is where the upbeat is. Move all of them 1 tick backwards so they start at white ticks and remove 00:41:343 (6) -
01:17:202 (4) - Why such a weird shape? Make a simple curve instead
01:18:139 (1) - Make it not touch 01:17:671 (5) -
All updated XD

[Insane]

00:30:327 (2) - I don't understeand why did you put so many random triplets here. Better put nice and catchy streams like hard... this doesn't fit Not fixed
01:14:389 (1) - Very unnecessary and unfitting jump. Use jumps only when the music sounds like there should be a jump. Also this is too huge, decrease its distance. Fixed
01:24:936 (6) - BANANA SLIDERRRRRRR make this better: BANANA FIXEEEEED

SPOILER

02:18:843 (3) - BANANA SLIDERRRRR fix it, make it perfect >:C BANANA FIXEEEEED XD

That is all, but I didn't like this diff that much. It's too linear and sharp idk.. like so symmetryc and straight and squares and asdifjaisdjfasf xDDD but now it's to late though D: try to make it a bit more curve in your next maps.. more... like with more flow. Thanks :3 It's only my "first" map I have done much better works XD

Good luck!! :3

1. Inconsistent TitleUnicode & ArtistUnicode, you must make them same as Title/Artist if your title/artist is English or other alphabetical language.
2. Tags: Capitalize first letter
3. About slider tick rate: 2 in Easy but 1 in Normal is ... weird.. you know, and then also 2 in Hard but 1 in Insane.... i'd like to suggest a better spread like STR1 to E/N and 2 to N/I, or all 1 or all 2 .. etc.
4. About Kiai Time: from 01:37:598 - to 01:52:598 - is much better than 01:22:598 - imo, i'd like to choose only a fountain at 01:22:598 - , and move first kiai to 01:37:598 -

1. 01:10:639 (6) - suggest a NC here to avoid long combo.
2. 01:14:389 (5) - ^
3. 01:18:374 (5) - ^
4. 01:21:889 (6) - ^. Generally, it is better to make the combo length of E/N no more than 6 :>
5. 02:11:343 (6) - Move next NC to here
6. 02:30:561 (2,3,4) - the right angles are looks odd... try to make it more smooth? e.g. add an extra node like this:
   
   SPOILER

   

1. 00:34:199 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - I suppose this kinda stream is too hard for a hard diff. Also 00:36:074 (2,3,4,5,6) - etc. Perhaps, kick slider is a good choice to instead?
2. 00:51:660 (5) - clap at end is unnecessary imo
3. 01:19:316 (4) - add a whistle here?
4. 01:34:316 (6) - ^ at head?

1. Stack Leniency: I can understand why you choose such a low value, but it require a leniency if the interval of two note at same position no more than 1/1 beat. So i think you must choose 7.
2. 00:30:098 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13) - ugly shapes... to be honest it's a bad placement, i think you have lots of better choices. Compare with the other patterns following, it's looked worse...
3. 00:32:676 (2) - here's a hidden reverse arrow due to the scoreburst. Anyway, it could be resolved easily if you choose to remake prev pattern :>
4. 01:36:660 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - maybe you can make an increasing volumn here
5. 02:13:691 (5,6) - ctrl+g for better flow?
6. 02:16:035 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - i'd like to make a Star shape here

Scorpiour wrote:

Hi there~~ mod from queue~~

red - must be fixed
blue - highly recommend to consider
black - only suggestions

[General]

1. Inconsistent TitleUnicode & ArtistUnicode, you must make them same as Title/Artist if your title/artist is English or other alphabetical language. Fixed
2. Tags: Capitalize first letter Fixed
3. About slider tick rate: 2 in Easy but 1 in Normal is ... weird.. you know, and then also 2 in Hard but 1 in Insane.... i'd like to suggest a better spread like STR1 to E/N and 2 to N/I, or all 1 or all 2 .. etc. Fixed
4. About Kiai Time: from 01:37:598 - to 01:52:598 - is much better than 01:22:598 - imo, i'd like to choose only a fountain at 01:22:598 - , and move first kiai to 01:37:598 - Fixed

[Revy's Normal]

1. 01:10:639 (6) - suggest a NC here to avoid long combo. Fixed
2. 01:14:389 (5) - ^ Fixed
3. 01:18:374 (5) - ^ Fixed
4. 01:21:889 (6) - ^. Generally, it is better to make the combo length of E/N no more than 6 :> Fixed
5. 02:11:343 (6) - Move next NC to here Fixed
6. 02:30:561 (2,3,4) - the right angles are looks odd... try to make it more smooth? e.g. add an extra node like this: Fixed
   
   SPOILER

   

[Hard]

1. 00:34:199 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - I suppose this kinda stream is too hard for a hard diff. Also 00:36:074 (2,3,4,5,6) - etc. Perhaps, kick slider is a good choice to instead? Fixed
2. 00:51:660 (5) - clap at end is unnecessary imo Fixed
3. 01:19:316 (4) - add a whistle here? Not fixed sorry
4. 01:34:316 (6) - ^ at head? Not fixed sorry

[Insane]

1. Stack Leniency: I can understand why you choose such a low value, but it require a leniency if the interval of two note at same position no more than 1/1 beat. So i think you must choose 7. Fixed
2. 00:30:098 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13) - ugly shapes... to be honest it's a bad placement, i think you have lots of better choices. Compare with the other patterns following, it's looked worse... Fixed
3. 00:32:676 (2) - here's a hidden reverse arrow due to the scoreburst. Anyway, it could be resolved easily if you choose to remake prev pattern :> Fixed
4. 01:36:660 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - maybe you can make an increasing volumn here Fixed
5. 02:13:691 (5,6) - ctrl+g for better flow? Fixed
6. 02:16:035 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - i'd like to make a Star shape here Fixed

That's all.

Generally the quality is okay, so i'd like to give you a chance in spite of those issues. Give me a call when you're ready :>

Kiosk14 wrote:

AMAZING, RANK THIS SONG NAO

But seriously, great job.

Kiyro wrote:

PFF CHE MERDA, MEGLIO LA MIA LEVELS. Sucamelo pls.

[Revy's Normal]
02:07:124 - Add a beat No

[Hard]
01:17:202 (4) - Metti un reverse e togli il beat che c'è dopo No
01:24:936 (6,7) - Sono difficili da leggere, secondo me meglio mettere tipo uno slider con reverse al posto del 5 oppure semplicemente spostare i beat Taci vanno bene così <3
01:30:093 (4) - Metti un reverse e togli il beat che c'è dopo Fixato
02:08:061 (2) - Non è stackato con la fine dello slider, stackalo. Diopor-- nooberror thanks

[Insane]
02:03:144 (1,2,3) - Più distanziati Mai sentito parlare di antijumps? <3

HellDawn wrote:

General

01:21:894- New preview point ? this is the part of the song that's supposed to be the most memorable. Not fixed


Revy's Normal

01:08:769- If you add note here, rhytm is gonna fit Fixed
02:30:098- finish Fixed

Hard

01:06:660- Why put break drag here ? Fixed
01:21:894- oh no way. remove finish. put whistle Fixed
01:22:129- ^ and remove finish at the end Fixed
01:22:598- finish should be here Not fixed
01:37:598- finish Not fixed
02:02:910- same question Fixed

Insane

01:37:598- finish Fixed
02:30:098- ^ Fixed

Nice song and diffs
Goodluck.

Saten wrote:

Hello~

[Insane]
00:26:348 (1) - clap Fixed
00:41:465 (1) - ^ Fixed
01:07:598 (1) - finish on start Fixed
01:10:644 (1,2,3) - I think finish hitsound like this are kinda unnecessary. I don't hear any resemblance in the actual music really. Well, it's just my opinion though I think finish reinforces the notes
02:31:738 (3) - I'd prefer this being a hitcircle instead Not fixed

[Hard]
00:30:098 (1) - finish Fixed
01:07:598 (1) - finish on start Fixed
01:40:176 (6,1) - I actually don't like this anti-jump even if it's a quite obvious pattern Fixed
02:07:598 (1) - finish on start Fixed
02:13:457 (4,1) - same with this spacing Fixed
02:22:598 (2,1) - I'd use 0,6x spacing instead here Fixed

[Revy]
00:26:348 (1) - finish Fixed
00:39:473 (3,1) - this looks quite awkward imo Not fixed
00:44:160 (4,2) - avoid overlapping? Fixed
00:57:285 (1) - finish Fixed
01:46:504 (3,4,5) - why this spacing? it's really weird Fixed
02:10:410 (5,1) - bid space change, but readable imo and doesn't look too bad either
02:22:129 (6,1,2) - I actually don't like that you mix different spacings so often Not fixed

That's all~
Good luck

Katty Pie wrote:

Thanks for mod guys some fixed~

http://puu.sh/1poIG

1. 00:33:848 (5) - Move next NC to here for consistent?
2. 00:37:598 (4) - ^
3. 00:41:348 (4) - ^

1. the Sliders before first break are looked weird due to SliderTickRate 2, since it's unnecessary imo, i'd like to suggest 1 but not 2
2. 01:33:848 (6) - Move next NC to here?
3. 01:37:598 (5) - also NC suggest for kiai
4. 01:41:348 (6) - Move next NC to here
5. 01:45:098 (6) - ^
6. 01:48:848 (7) - ^

1. 00:31:269 (8,9,10,11,12,13) - how about rotate the by 180 for better flow?
   
   SPOILER

   
2. 00:32:207 (1,2,3,4) - if you apply above one, it is better to change the order of these four:
   (1): bottom-right => (2) bottom-left => (3) top-left => (4) top-right
   
   SPOILER

   
3. 01:24:473 (5) - ctrl+g for better flow?
4. 01:30:098 (2) - ^
5. 01:38:301 - i'd like to make a triplet here to 01:38:535 (1) - for transition
   
6. 01:51:191 (4) - ctrl+g for better flow?

Scorpiour wrote:

[Revy's Normal]

1. the Sliders before first break are looked weird due to SliderTickRate 2, since it's unnecessary imo, i'd like to suggest 1 but not 2
2. 01:33:848 (6) - Move next NC to here?
3. 01:37:598 (5) - also NC suggest for kiai
4. 01:41:348 (6) - Move next NC to here
5. 01:45:098 (6) - ^
6. 01:48:848 (7) - ^

Generally, it suggests to place NC at downbeat (long-white tick) for better gradation. All fixed

[Insane]

1. 00:31:269 (8,9,10,11,12,13) - how about rotate the by 180 for better flow?
   
   SPOILER

   
2. 00:32:207 (1,2,3,4) - if you apply above one, it is better to change the order of these four:
   (1): bottom-right => (2) bottom-left => (3) top-left => (4) top-right
   
   SPOILER

   
3. 01:24:473 (5) - ctrl+g for better flow?
4. 01:30:098 (2) - ^
5. 01:38:301 - i'd like to make a triplet here to 01:38:535 (1) - for transition All fixed except this, I don't like :C
   
6. 01:51:191 (4) - ctrl+g for better flow?

Scorpiour wrote:

make an irc check with mapper, fix inconsistent epilepsy warning.

i think the map is ready~~~enjoy your first bubble here and good luck with the rank :>

RikiH_ wrote:

VAI ROCSAS WOOOOOH

Dammi fuoco.

Aleks719 wrote:

General
Set offset 98. It's for menu strobes and flashes.No affect for notes

Skin
Your skin Digits are too "wide". Look :

It shouldn't overlap, fix please.

Hard
00:34:785 (4,5,6) - 1/4 instead of 1/2 suddenly. but same spacing. eh?
I stumbled there 3 or 4 times, unreadable
00:36:660 (4,5,6) - same
00:38:535 (5,6,7) - same
00:40:410 (5,6,7) - same
01:52:832 - Inis break? unsnapped? why? remove this blue zone~

Revy's Normal
01:18:144 - add note, keep use this 1/2 pattern.
01:36:894 - add note for same reason, 3/2 free place sounds strange when you use 1/1. Make it more rhythmical!
02:21:894 - same

Aleks719 wrote:

Easy
01:52:832 - remove inis break

Normal
01:36:894 (5,6) -Add nc to (5)
01:37:598 (1) - remove this nc

small recheck, do not reply, do not kd. fix, poke me in game

Ranked!~

Ayu wrote:

Yeah, let's rank more of these maps.

Yet again, osu! is not the game you're looking for if you're looking for creativity, feelings and quality.

Ayu wrote:

Yeah, let's rank more of these maps.

Yet again, osu! is not the game you're looking for if you're looking for creativity, feelings and quality.

Ayu wrote:

Yeah, let's rank more of these maps.

Yet again, osu! is not the game you're looking for if you're looking for creativity, feelings and quality.

Moway wrote:

Go to hell, honestly.

Congrats on your first ranked beatmap! ^^

-kevincela- wrote:

If by this sentence you mean this map isn't creative and other things like this,then please go away from here.

Scorpiour wrote:

i expect what you can create.

it is always easy to commend others' work

Roxas wrote:

Mancusojuanmattos: really thanks I'm glad you like it

Baby Strawberry: thanks *-* <3

Gabe: Finally rankeeed \o/

Ayu wrote:

yes let's not make shitty maps and show how much creativity I have by copy and pasting the same fucking patterns everytime over and over again.
let's not forget that the patterns should be just easy and so fucking simple that a 2 year old could do the laundry.

I seriously don't get why people even like this. It just shows that you have no feeling for the song and that you can't come up with anything better than using your ctrl+c and ctrl+v. Seems that I'm one of these few people that actually do care about the quality of maps.

/edit: Don't get me wrong, I'm not hating on you.

Ayu wrote:

yes let's not make shitty maps and show how much creativity I have by copy and pasting the same fucking patterns everytime over and over again.
let's not forget that the patterns should be just easy and so fucking simple that a 2 year old could do the laundry.

I seriously don't get why people even like this. It just shows that you have no feeling for the song and that you can't come up with anything better than using your ctrl+c and ctrl+v. Seems that I'm one of these few people that actually do care about the quality of maps.

/edit: Don't get me wrong, I'm not hating on you.

Andrea wrote:

The map is good enough, stop complaining already guys, thanks.

GladiOol wrote:

complaining =/= criticizing.

Ayu wrote:

Yeah, let's rank more of these maps.

Yet again, osu! is not the game you're looking for if you're looking for creativity, feelings and quality.

Roxas wrote:

GladiOol wrote:

complaining =/= criticizing.

Ayu wrote:

Yeah, let's rank more of these maps.

Yet again, osu! is not the game you're looking for if you're looking for creativity, feelings and quality.

For me this is a complain

GladiOol wrote:

I was defending myself, not Ayu.

-zer0- wrote:

your are crazy lml

ThoomyyxD wrote:

Congratz for you first rank :3