168,48,73444,5,12
92,84,73551,1,0
92,168,73658,1,8
168,208,73765,1,8
240,168,73872,1,8
240,84,73979,1,8
168,48,74086,1,4

EvilElvis wrote:

Hello from E.E's modding queue!
Map from FavouritesA \:D/
@Suggestion@
[Level 6]
00:12:372 (1) - something like this? ahh its a good suggestion, i could possibly fix, but i want to keep the slider shape xD

SPOILER

00:23:729 (5) - ? no change?..

00:51:801 (1) - add circle after this no change, i don't want it to start too soon after the spinner

SPOILER

01:23:729 (3,4) - think sound better without first circle yea i had that at first xD i will think about it again then
01:45:694 (3) - ? ok i added a note to fix that space

SPOILER

01:56:944 (1) - add circle after this same as the first mod xD

SPOILER

[Origin]
03:02:515 (5) - add circle after this? no change sry, jump might be too large (or i just don't know where to put it lol)

SPOILER

03:04:658 (6,7) - ? fixed

SPOILER

[Saten]
Perfect.

Take my star! thanks a lot!
Good luck!

Chewin wrote:

Hi, from my queue and sorry for the late ç_ç np
To be correct with my queue's rule I will skip a diff sorry

[General]
Inconsistency in combo colour. I'd use the same colour for the saten's diff too. it's fine
What about to add:
Kiai #3: Starts on 02:58:658, ends on 03:04:979
Kiai #4: Starts on 03:05:515, ends on 03:26:086
In the Origin diff like saten's one? k i fixed for all diffs
Offset 2080 is better imho.hm...

[Level 3]
I think this SV is too high for the easiest diff of the mapset :\ I suggest you to decrease it a bit ok i think i will follow this, but its going to be in progress then. but i wonder if its okay for normal diff.
00:36:372 (1) - Finish on this slider's head would sound very well, since there is one in the music too. So, what about to add it?
00:51:801 (1) - ^
01:37:658 (4) - 2 grid right to improve the blanket
01:41:944 (1) - Reduce by 1/2. This 01:41:944 (1,2) is very hard for beginners since this is the easiest diff
01:56:944 (1) - Finish
02:38:836 (1) - This spinner should start at 02:38:944 and end to 02:41:515 removing this circle: 02:41:944 (1). It fits better
02:51:801 (1) - Whitle on this slider's end
02:52:658 (2) - ^
02:52:658 (2) - on repeat
02:55:229 (1) - ^ slider's end
02:56:086 (2) - ^ on repeat
02:57:372 (3,5) - Whistles and remove from 02:57:801 (4)
03:10:658 (4) - I'd use NC here
working on this diff. atm~~

[Level 6]
00:12:372 (1) - Reduce this slider by 1/1 and add a circle at 00:12:801 (2), it fits much better the music: ok fixed

00:14:944 (5) - I'd remove 2 repeats here and add a circle at 00:15:372 (6). Since this should be a "Normal" it's better: lol it's a hard diff.

00:29:086 (1) - Add finish on this slider's end fixed
00:42:801 (1) - You should to remove NC here for consistency fixed
00:48:801 (6) - Add NC fixed
01:35:515 (1) - Why NC here? Remove it fixed

[Saten]
280bpm streams god lol
00:26:836 (3) - Why don't you make this slider symmetric with 00:26:086 (1) since the slider 00:26:515 (2) is placed on the center? http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/368963
00:37:122 (4) - This slider touches HP bar. I suggest you to move it
00:43:229 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2) - OMG. These circles are very hard ouch but awesome
01:13:444 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - This circle isn't symmetric, ust use this code: http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/368969

168,48,73444,5,12
92,84,73551,1,0
92,168,73658,1,8
168,208,73765,1,8
240,168,73872,1,8
240,84,73979,1,8
168,48,74086,1,4

02:03:586 (1) - Move to x:220 y:208 to make a blanket
02:04:444 (2) - I don't think it's a good idea to overlap this slider with 02:03:586 (1)
02:08:408 (2) - ^ but this is unreadable at the first try.
02:47:944 (3,1) - too huge.
03:13:015 (1) - Overlap with 03:12:051 (5)?
03:18:158 (1) - Useless NC, remove it.
03:41:515 (1) - lol this spinner. Just end it at 03:44:086 with 5% volume
Meh map o.o D:

Good luck o/ thank u xD

Frostmourne wrote:

Hi Hi M4M here :3

Level 1
01:03:801 (1) - finish here for consistency with 02:10:658 (3) - :3 ok ^^
01:10:658 (1) - finish here ? ok
01:27:801 (1) - ^ ok
it's the start and end of the song , I feel it better with that louder sound
01:56:944 (3) - finish for consistency with 00:51:372 (4) - ok
02:10:658 (3) - I feel it fit more than before if you shorten this slider 1/2 (will end at 02:11:301) so it will follow vocal and end with finish correctly ok
02:12:372 (1) - if you did above ^ you should move this slider to x:256 y:164 kk
02:12:372 (1) - ^ same
02:15:801 (1) - ^
02:37:229 (4) - new combo here ? it follows guitar sound very nicely , if you choose to do , you should remove new combo here 02:38:944 (3) - ok
03:16:658 (4) - feel odd while playing,shorten this slider 1/2 back i understand for this one, but i don't want to add another note for that part, therefore destroying the slight symmetry xD ><
03:17:944 (5) - same as above ^ shorten slider 1/2 back and move to 03:17:515
these are intended to follow vocal as well , you can pass if you don't want to i see lol, sry i was kind of paying attention to instruments here

Level 3
03:12:372 (5) - new combo here since you used it in kiai 1 and 2 ok

Level 6
00:45:372 (9) - I feel it is not intuitive here , feel it should be on the 00:45:586 (10) - 's head and new combo should start 00:45:586 (10) - here hm..alright ill try it
00:46:015 (11) - remove new combo here if you new combo from above ^ ok
01:54:801 (2) - move this slider forward 1 beat (it will start at 01:55:015 (3) - ) and add single note here 01:54:801 (2) - instead and remove this repeat 01:55:336 (4) - and move 1/2 forward , I find it better here with vocal ok then ><

SPOILER

Origin
03:26:944 (6) - I think you should remove this note and make 1/2 slider at 03:26:729 (5) - instead and add repeat into it, will look like this
I think it plays and sounds better too ehh..ok ill try it

SPOILER

03:35:515 (4) - maybe start this slider 1/2 beat back ? and extend it 1/2 either so it will end at the same point but start at 03:35:408 (4) -
I think it sounds better than the current and flow better for me while playing im trying to keep the pattern the same with parts like this 00:09:801 (1,2,3,1) - at the beginning

Saten
This is Crazy Dx
01:08:515 (1,2,3,4) - these are unexpected note for me , I suggest you delete 01:08:622 (2,4) - , I feel it should be 1 beat note like this 01:07:658 (2,3,4,5) -
01:56:515 (3,4) - from vocal , this jump will do emphasize more than you used (louder vocal should be larger jump xD)

SPOILER

02:16:015 (4) - it's running good , why don't add note here ? , feel very empty here o_oa
02:51:801 (1,2) - from first sight, it's hard to read that it is 1 beat not 1/2. (the previous has been running for 1/2 beat throughout , I recommend you add note at 02:52:122 (2) - it gives time to prepare and prevent hitting early 02:52:229 (3) -
03:03:586 (1,2,3) - something like this is hard to look from under 03:03:051 (2) - 's hitburst , I think you can make it more clearly by move 2 and 3 out from under slider so it will notice that it's stream here

SPOILER

So crazy xD
Good Luck :3

Saten wrote:

Changes~ sorry for the delay
thanks
http://puu.sh/QD6n



Something even more crazy
http://puu.sh/QD7A

You probably want to remove it before you rank it and put it in the description, unless you can approve both

Frostmourne wrote:

Saten wrote:

Changes~ sorry for the delay
thanks
http://puu.sh/QD6n



Something even more crazy
http://puu.sh/QD7A

You probably want to remove it before you rank it and put it in the description, unless you can approve both

hey , approve it \:D/

zeroclover wrote:

my hands was broke because nyanten and saten diff = =

i think i just give some suggestion, not a mod

03:42:158 - u should finish your map until here , its for your easy, normal ,hard actually, i will lol, ill start when i talk with lunarsakuya

Nyanten

some note 80% overlap, hard to see it when playing :
02:05:086 (2) -
02:29:836 (2,3) -

other overlap sliders is fun,and its readable, but there were some overlap notes that very hard to read
try fix it

Saten

some stacked notes at the end slider are confusing...
i know its for anti jump, but... i always confuse..

~~
this map so challenging
2 stars

-Bakari- wrote:

sorry for 7 hours delay. busy irl :< its fine

i'll skip diffs for approval because i don't accept this kind of requests via queue

[General]
i'm sure that tick rate for all diffs is 1 not sure if it needs to be the same for all diffs., even in guest diffs. xD ill ask around

[Origin]
AR 8 because 2 diffs with AR 9 is not ok for me :/ i think 9 is appropriate because bpm and sv is fast
00:35:944 (5) - it's better to use 1/2 slider here fits with vocals, imo i see what u mean, but this is following instruments xD

seems clear

[Lvl 6]
nothing to say

[Lvl 3]
AR - 1 feels more balanced here, imo waiting for lunarsakuya

[Lvl 1]
nice diff

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

doesn't worth kd, obv.

Licnect wrote:

From Queue's M4M

First~! Sorry for my poor English

Lv1:
03:27:801 & 03:29:515 & 03:31:229 & 03:32:944 & 03:34:658 & 03:36:372 & 03:38:086 This timing point add finish I think is better
ok fixed some stuff
Lv3:
01:06:801 -(4) left 1 grid ? fixed
02:02:086 - NC? oops, forgot it
02:26:086 -(1) this slider is not good ok
03:27:801 & 03:29:515 & 03:31:229 & 03:32:944 & 03:34:658 & 03:36:372 & 03:38:086 This timing point add finish I think is better changed some

Lv6:
looks good
but 03:27:801 & 03:29:515 & 03:31:229 & 03:32:944 & 03:34:658 & 03:36:372 & 03:38:086 This timing point add finish I think is better ^

[Origin]:
01:13:336 -i changed note and place. you can reference it hm..i like the pattern as it is, i just fixed up the stream here

02:05:086 -(4.5.6.7) Note shape is distortion ? yes its supposed to be like that lol
02:40:658 - add break time? ok
02:45:801 -(1.4) left 2 grid? no b/c it stacks with 02:46:658 (4) -
03:04:658 -(1~8) Spacing? hm..

Nice map star~ ty <3

Laurier wrote:

mod4mod time

Level 1
(missing something here? o.o) same pattern as 00:08:944 (1) and 00:12:372 (1)
00:25:658 (3) - NC and remove next note fixed
00:29:086 (3) - NC fixed
00:50:086 (1,2,3,4) - Don't stack them It's hard to beginners fixed
01:46:658 (3) - I think 1/2 slider is better.. hm her voice stops at the end of the current slider i believe
02:07:229 (3) - make a curve ? fixed

Level 3

02:02:086 (5) - NC fixed in previous mod ~

good diff

Level 6

00:22:229 (1) - Slider end move x460y212 fixed
00:44:515 (5,6) - this spacing is not good imo try this? http://puu.sh/XQcH 00:44:086 (3,4,5) -
00:56:944 (3) - slider end stack on 00:55:229 (6)? 00:44:086 (3,4,5) -
01:00:372 (3) - ^ stack on same point if u mean stack on 00:55:229 (6) again then i dont think its a big deal xd, b/c they are far away
01:08:086 (5) - make curve fixed
01:41:086 (8) - 7th and 9th way point is really needed? oops
01:50:301 (6) - move to center of Y fixed
01:50:944 (1) - ^ and you can move some notes fixed
02:14:729 (3) - move to x36 fixed
02:30:158 (2) - move to center of Y fixed, nice catch
03:22:872 (2) - move to x292 y112 fixed
03:25:658 (4) - you can make way point on x128y124 ok ill try for now..
03:35:944 (4) - stack on 03:34:658 (1) im hoping to keep this slider curved perfectly with 03:36:372 (1) -

Origin
00:35:944 (5) - add waypint at first http://puu.sh/Y8uJ fixed
01:44:301 (4) - strange form ive liked it that way, but i made a bit better i suppose?
02:50:086 (1) - use soft hit sound fixed
03:41:515 (1) - NC fixed

That's all

jonathanlfj wrote:

Hi from my queue
srry for the delay orz

Black is suggestion
Blue is highly recommended
Red is unrankable

[General]
delete the .osb file if you dont plan on making a storyboard
that slider multiplier on level 1&3 look very funny...if you'd like change it to a whole number and resnap all notes

[Level 1]
AR+1? fixed
00:15:801 (1) - add finish to slider head fixed
00:19:229 (1) - ^ fixed
00:56:944 (1) - ^ fixed
01:00:372 (1) - ^ fixed
01:07:229 (1) - ^ fixed
for every kiai use finish on every 4th long white tick, like the 3 suggestions above + the finishes you already have. okay
01:27:801 (1,2) - make these parallel? i want to keep spacing, and also i think the sliders would kind of overlap if i did that
01:46:658 (3) - i see what you are trying to do here, but this doesnt fit the flow of easy imo, so extend it to the white ticks? ok i tried for now
01:56:515 (2,3) - move these out of stack like 00:50:944 (2,3) fixed
02:26:086 (1) - add finish to slider head fixed
03:16:658 (4) - make this perfectly straight fixed

[Level 6]
00:19:229 (1) - add finish to slider head okay
00:50:944 (5,6) - try adjusting so there two gets centered okay
01:10:872 (1) - make this spinner end at 01:12:319, silence it, and add a spinner at 01:12:372 till 01:14:086. fits the music better imo okay
01:34:229 (8) - add a note okay
02:58:658 (3,4,5,6) - add finish to slider head kk
03:40:444 (4) - one grid right fixed
03:42:158 (4) - one grid left fixed

[Origin]
00:48:801 (3,4,1) - center these hm..im not too worried about these
01:07:444 (5) - NC fixed
02:08:086 (4) - add finish to slider head fixed
02:18:372 (1) - take off NC fixed
02:45:801 (1) - move to center (and adjust 02:46:658 (4) accordingly) fixed
03:15:801 (5) - NC fixed
[/spoilerbox]

Epic stuff indeed. Hope to see this ranked (approved for real) soon <3

jonathanlfj wrote:

[Level 3]
same hitsound suggestions as lv 1, wont spam this time
00:35:944 (5) - raise this so it blankets 00:36:801 (1) better
01:46:229 (3) - add finish to slider tail
01:56:086 (4) - stack this perfectly with 01:53:944 (2)
02:26:086 (1) - make this more symmetrical?
03:35:944 (4,1) - this is like the only stack in this diff, at the end too...some newbies may go wtf here so consider moving it out of stack

Chewin wrote:

[Saten]

02:09:801 (1,2,3,4) - This pattern with these jumps is really confusing to play. At least I got this problem test playing the map.
03:01:229 (3,4) - If you see these 2 sliders in test mode the (4) isn't overlapped as it should with (3)'s end Yeah I know, did something different
03:03:747 (2) - You can avoid this circle, really. Remove it sure
03:07:872 (3) - Reduce this slider by 1/2? It should end on the long white tick 03:08:086 but I hear a solid beat on the red tick, and re-arranging that part will be hell D:
Crazy map s:

[Nyaten]

BPM 280 AR 10? No, just no. It's impossible. Reduce it till 9 :\ AR 9 doesn't fit this imo, and this isn't impossible D:
00:27:586 (3) - Unreadable slider. I don't think it's unreadable as I didn't make a complete overlap
00:32:086 (3) - New combo to make it rankable sure ok
00:56:944 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Why so huge jumps çç because I like these
00:58:658 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - ^ ^
Overmapped ._.

Chewin wrote:

Hi miikyuu, mod request from my modding queue here :3

[General]

I'd use the same combo colours to all diffs saten and nyaten are guest diffs. so it should be fine as it is (its up for saten to decide)

[Level 1]

00:38:086 (3) - Finish here would would emphasize the cymbals in the song fixed
00:39:801 (1) - ^ ^
00:41:515 (2) - ^ ^
00:47:086 (3) - ^ ^
01:31:229 (1) - ^ ^
01:38:086 (3) - ^ ^
02:10:658 (3) - ^ on repeat too ^
02:35:944 (3) - I'd move this slider 2/2 later using new combo and removing it from 02:37:229 (1): fixed

03:16:658 (4) - New combo fixed
03:39:801 (1) - This spinner should end on 03:41:301 because it's following the vocal oh, im following the background chorus part xD
Fine map, some suggestions about hitsonds

[Level 6]

I think this AR is too low. Increase it by 1 okay o.o..
About hitsounds the same of Level 1 diff ;3 ok~
00:15:586 (1) - You are following the vocal's rhythm so remove new combo here and add it on 00:14:729 (4) kk
00:43:229 (1,2) - ^ ill think about this
01:23:836 Since the 01:23:944 (5) should be snapped 1/4 earlier to fit the vocal sound what about to add a circle to make a triple here? hm im not entirely sure, 01:23:836 - sounds a bit silent so i didnt rly consider a triplet there ><
01:52:872 (5) - New combo fixed
02:31:229 (3) - Improve this curve to have a better blanket here (in the code I have fixed the next slider too): thanks a lot for the code ><!

SPOILER

124,316,151229,2,0,B|68:248|124:144|224:176,1,220
256,260,151872,1,8
305,171,152086,2,0,B|388:144|444:248|388:316,2,220,0|8|4

02:46:229 (1,2,3,4,5) - Make this pattern symmetric: fixed ^^

SPOILER

328,220,166229,5,0
340,120,166444,1,0
256,68,166658,1,0
172,120,166872,1,4
184,220,167086,1,0
251,288,167301,2,0,B|303:328|371:316,2,110,0|4|0

02:53:515 (3,4,5) - I don't like this pattern because the asymmetric slider 02:53:515 (3) breaks the map's flow. I can suggest you something like this: fixed

SPOILER

128,108,173515,2,0,B|144:152|116:192|116:192|140:228|128:280,2,176,4|10|0
48,144,174586,2,0,B|24:188|48:244,1,88
36,328,175015,1,0

02:58:229 (1) - This spacing is enough confusing, you should move it further from 02:56:944 (3)'s end never rly had trouble here, but i guess ill get more opinions on this

[Origin]

00:37:658 (5) - Remove a repeat from here okay
01:44:301 (4) - Make this blanket more flowing, it's ugly that shapes kind of there on purpose
02:34:658 (1) - You should use this rhythm instead, you actual one doesn't fit the song: i like it , thanks

02:36:372 (1) - Reduce this slider by 1/2 and add a circle on 02:36:694 to fill the empty. The rhythm flows better ok ill try..
03:05:836 (2) - Same of 01:44:301 (4) im going to keep this one actually b/c if i change all patterns like above, the max. score would go above 20 mil lol
03:19:229 (5) - New combo fixed

That's it, good luck (:

Chewin wrote:

Hi miikyuu, mod request from my modding queue here :3

[Level 3]

Add the same finishes I suggested you above if you liked it :3
00:49:229 (4) - New combo? okay
01:05:515 (3) - Reduce this slider by 1/2 to fit the vocal like you did for 01:04:658 (2) fine
01:10:658 (5) - New combo fixed
01:38:086 (5) - ^ ^
01:56:086 (4) - ^ ^
02:03:801 (3) - Same of 01:05:515 (3) keep since i sort of want to keep a symmetrical appearance with next red combo
02:08:944 (1) - Mh I don't like this slider's shape D: What about to make something like this? I think it'd flow better

SPOILER

276,204,128944,6,0,B|360:220|372:300|372:300|440:344|492:320|496:268,2,280.000002384186,4|0|4
404,160,131086,2,0,B|348:104|268:104,1,140.000001192093
168,80,131944,1,0

02:15:801 (5) - New combo and.. you could improve this slider, it's ugly like it is now imho. ok fixed

SPOILER

332,148,135801,6,0,B|300:88|204:88|172:148,2,192.500001639128,4|0|0

03:22:658 (5) - New combo okay
03:35:944 (4) - x:440 y:240 to have a better blanket
03:41:515 (1,2) - These 2 circles should be moved 1/4 earlier to fit the vocal hm, seems fine

spboxer3 wrote:

Saten

• 
  
  mapping
  (These are about your patterns.Mostly for the suggest, Just some unrankable issue I will use red color to highlight it.)
  

1. 00:20:301 (6,4) - those should be stack. but don't forget change 00:22:015 (6) - too
2. 01:05:194 (1,2,3,4) - [confuse rhythm] It's too cover by 01:04:658 (1) - and you used 1/6 rhythm (note) here. maybe use 1/6 slider will be fine. I moved it somewhere else to avoid confusion
   
   
3. 02:38:944 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - a kinda awkward stream shape for me. ((looks it's crooked shape. It's U shaped, i don't know how to make it better ;w;
   
   
4. 03:41:515 (1) - spinner it's too long~ perhaps end at 03:42:801 - will be better. Ended is at 03:44:086

overmapped... ;w;

Nyaten

• 
  
  mapping
  (These are about your patterns.Mostly for the suggest, Just some unrankable issue I will use red color to highlight it.)
  

1. 03:41:515 (1) - spinner it's too long~ perhaps end at 03:42:801 - will be better. ((same as Saten as Nyaten

still overmapped lol'd

spboxer3 wrote:

給跪 居然是看的懂中文的... 我之前還mod過...所以這算是recheck嗎lol lol

※ Notice

red is unrankable issue.
blue is recommended to fix.
Black is just suggestion.

general

• 
  Settings
  (For the setting/general issue.)
  

1. fine~

Level 1

• 
  Settings
  (For the setting. like Song Setup/timing or break time~)
  

1. duplicated timeline:
   02:58:658 - fixed

mapping
(These are about your patterns.Mostly for the suggest, Just some unrankable issue I will use red color to highlight it.)

1. 00:22:658 (1) - arc (curve) issue, it's not a good shape, make it more smooth flattened them out
   
   
2. 00:24:372 (2) - ^ fixed
   
   
3. 03:36:372 (1,2) - not a symmetrical pattern. you can used "Flip Horizontal" to check it fixed i think

雖然看起來是沒有問題的mapset 但是妳用了許多的直線note排法 e.g:00:55:229 (2,3,1) - 01:00:372 (1,2,3) - etc. 會導致map看起來比較死板 而且有些pattern有圖形的弧度問題 e.g:01:31:229 (1,2) - 你應該是想把這個pattern排成直線的 這些小細節需要自己注意一下...

Level 6

• 
  
  Overlaps
  (Some overlaps of notes/sliders in this diff don't look good. Here is a list of beats that overlap each other could space them farther apart. yep. It's just suggest and nazi. you can ignore this par)
  

1. 00:19:872 (2,4,5) - ok made spacing neater

Hitsound
(For my listened. Just some suggest for the hitsound.)

1. 01:12:372 (1) - you should add finish at this spinner (( level 1,level 3 has added finish at this spinner. why don't you add it too? oops i forgot xD
   
   
2. 03:42:158 - same as Level 3 fixed

mapping
(These are about your patterns.Mostly for the suggest, Just some unrankable issue I will use red color to highlight it.)

1. 00:22:229 (1) - last node move to x456,y220? it's make more pretty shape. sure
   
   
2. 01:44:515 (1) - unfit NC imo. It isn't on the phase also haven't slider velocity change. deleted
   
   
3. 02:15:801 (1) - Umm... not symmetrical slider shape? ok~I will give you this code fixed thanks!!
   
   code

   184,49,135801,6,0,B|97:96|89:192|121:303|256:358|390:303|422:192|414:96|327:49,1,660

Origin

• 
  
  Hitsound
  (For my listened. Just some suggest for the hitsound.)
  

1. 02:38:944 (1) - finish ((end for the sentence okay
2. 03:42:158 - same as Level 3okay

mapping
(These are about your patterns.Mostly for the suggest, Just some unrankable issue I will use red color to highlight it.)

1. 00:05:515 (2,3) - (?) I just confuse about this... the voice it's start at 00:05:461 - and end at 00:05:676 - the drum start at 00:05:515 - and end 00:05:729 - those are bundle. you should choose one and use it. It's supposed to follow vocals, but I don't think anybody will notice the subtle difference when playing..?
   
   
2. 01:25:444 (5) - looks awkward slider shape. you can make the layout better~ okay
   
   
3. 01:53:301 (8,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2) - 說實話這個pattern讓我有些無法理解 因為 就斷句而言01:54:372 - 才是斷句的地方 可是你卻在01:53:515 - 就開始使用對稱跳 而且跨小節使用 而且 01:55:658 (3,4) - 使用slider的時機比較微妙 就會變成10個散拍(note)的pattern. 然而一般來說我們再下節奏是4個一拍的 所以建議對稱跳從01:54:372 - 開始放就好了okay fixed, please check if it's okay

well~ good luck

spboxer3 wrote:

Level 3

• 
  Settings
  (For the setting. like Song Setup/timing or break time~)
  

1. duplicated timeline:
   02:58:658 - Fixed

Hitsound
(For my listened. Just some suggest for the hitsound.)

1. 03:42:158 - use 30% vol to make it blend ((well~ the mute slider end it's unrankable :/Fixed

mapping
(These are about your patterns.Mostly for the suggest, Just some unrankable issue I will use red color to highlight it.)

1. 00:28:551 (4) - It's a fit rhythm~ but it's too hard in "Normal" style. perhaps move it to 00:28:658 - it's a better solution Fixed, made a longer slider
   
   
2. 02:08:944 (1) - move to x344,y244? try to make symmetrical spacing for 02:08:515 (4) - Fixed

Baka Tenshi wrote:

I and Saten were talking about some stuff in Saten and Nyaten diffs, but however, wanted to take a look at Origin, and while I was looking through the map...
00:05:515 (2,3) - Unsnapped slider ends! They're on a blue tick! That's what I found at the first part, and that's the thing I wanted to point out.
Sorry but I'm only familiar with Saten and Nyaten diffs...orz Anyway, good luck there. If only I had kudos...

Stefan wrote:

Let me spam with Stars too.

Saten wrote:

One question meii

Why arent you using the preview on the chorus instead?
Have been wondering that for quite some time now lol

Somewhere 1/1 2/1 before it start would be nice otherwise~

Byakugan249 wrote:

lol 2 bubbles and 1 rank is all it takes i guess i need to read the rules more often >< wait wut

Bold: Unrankable/must fix.
Red: You should fix it, but it's up to you.
Italic: Suggestion. Feel free to ignore this if you don't like it.
Blue: Comment. I'll give you my opinion, advice, or if i'm curious about something.

[General]
CLEAR~!

[Level 1]
before i get to the map, increase the spacing to 0.8 and fix the spacing. the overlaps and blankets make the diff look bad during gameplay.
00:22:658 (1) - unstack this. beginners might find something like this hard since the bpm is high and the hitburst is covering the slider in this part. fixed
00:25:658 (1) - replace this for a circle at the downbeat(big white tick). it'll be consistent with the blue pattern in this part since there's a gap in the middle of it. hm..no ty sry ;;
01:00:372 (1) - add a finish at the end because there are cymbals at that part and it'll emphasize that part in the cymbals during gameplay. fixed
01:38:086 (3) - make this a NC. it'll be consistent with the previous pattern at the 1st verse since that note is a NC. fixed
01:46:658 (3) - i can hear the cymbals here, so add a finish at the beginning to emphasize it. fixed
01:56:944 (3) - and here. same reason as 01:38:086 about the consistency. fixed
02:32:944 (1,2) - same as 01:56:944, but at the end. fixed
03:00:372 (3) - same as 01:56:944. fixed
03:20:944 (3) - same as above, but to go along with the vocals for this. fixed

[Level 3]
00:12:372 (1,2,3,4) - the flow in this pattern doesn't fit with the song IMO. i suggest making these curved slider so that it'll flow smoother with the song during gameplay. you can use the code below if you want. fixed ty for code

SPOILER

332,156,12372,6,0,B|360:128|360:92,2,70.0000005960464,4|8|0
248,80,13229,2,0,B|192:44|108:40,1,140.000001192093
44,128,14086,2,0,B|24:168|44:208,2,70.0000005960464,0|8|0
152,164,14944,2,0,B|208:204|240:272,1,140.000001192093

00:27:801 (3) - i can hear the cymbals at the beginning of this slider, so add a finish at the beginning for emphasis, also make this slider look like (2) for a smoother transition during gameplay. added the finish but kept the slider b/c she want it to flow with 4
01:29:944 (3) -
01:31:658 (5) - NC here. this is where the lyrics change in this part of the song. fixed
01:41:944 (1) - if you can make this slider look like the previous once, the transition would look smoother during gameplay IMO. changed that previous slider instead
02:58:658 (1,2,3,4) - can you come up with another pattern without making the slider overlap each other? this might bother other players when they play this during gameplay IMO. think its fine, it's still pretty clear to look at
03:00:372 (3,4) - this is the only pattern in which 1/4 of the circle is being covered and that breaks the flow in this part of the song. still looks readable though, but will check it through again..
03:10:658 (3) - add a finish at the beginning. you can hear the cymbals in this part of the song. fixed
03:15:801 (1) - try to make these parallel by adjusting (1) so that the gap between (3,1) is evened out. its fine
03:20:944 (3) - same as 03:10:658. ^
03:22:658 (1) - can you make this wave slider look smoother? something like this should flow smoother to the map during gameplay IMO. fixed
03:32:944 (1,2,3,4) - can you re-arrange this pattern into a diamond? same reason as above about the flow, and it should look like this. understood but will like to keep for now, ty for code

SPOILER

248,236,212944,6,0,B|176:200|176:200|116:212,2,140.000001192093,4|0|0
304,140,214229,1,0
360,236,214658,2,0,B|432:200|432:200|492:212,2,140.000001192093,0|0|0
304,336,215944,1,0

[Level 6]
00:40:229 (4) - this repeat slider breaks the flow in the whole song. in the previous patterns, there were 1/1 slider and that made the flow continue, but this one breaks it and the mood of the song as well once the ball hits the repeat slider. reduce this slider by 1/2, in which the repeat slider end at the red tick and add a circle so that the flow will continue during gameplay. id like to keep it , sry
01:08:944 (8) - maybe a finish at the beginning for emphasis in the instrumental? sure, fixed
01:28:551 (3) - how about aligning this note like this so that the shape shows that it's a plus sign? i also think that doing this looks creative and flows a bit better during gameplay. i think i want to keep spacing there..
01:32:944 (5) - i can hear the cymbals here, so add a finish at the beginning of this slider. fixed
01:37:658 (8) - oh my so many points o_o. you can make a v-shaped slider by just using 5 points like this. fixed
01:46:229 (5) - for this one, you need 4 points to make a smoother curved slider, or you can make a straight slider so that the gap looks parallel during gameplay. fixed
01:52:872 (5) - NC here. this is where the lyrics "technically" change in the song. it's at the end of (4), but i think it'd be better here since the lyrics change at the next note and it's this one. fixed
02:07:229 (4) - same as 01:32:944. fixed
02:09:801 (3) - maybe like this for a smoother transition to the next note? fixed
02:17:515 (1) - same as 01:32:944, but on the spinner. sure
02:35:515 (6) - remove the finish at the repeat. there are no cymbals played in this part of the song. fixed
02:59:515 (4,5) - same as above, but add the finish at the beginning since there are cymbals being played in this part. fixed
03:03:265 (5) - same as 02:09:801. no because i need 6 to make a clear curve around it xD

[Origin]
00:05:515 (2) - NC here. the vocals loop again in this part. fixed
00:07:658 (2) - stack the end together so that it'd be consistent with the 1st combo. no change
00:17:301 (5) - nazi* go 1 grid right at the end point so that the gap looks parallel during gameplay[i] fixed
00:19:444 (2) - [i]ik you can do a better wave slider than this. right now the flow plays awkwardly during gameplay. ok fixed i guess
01:08:944 (1,2,3) - stack these notes perfectly. during gameplay, the transition plays oddly in this part IMO. fixed
01:26:944 (3) - [i]move this slider back 1/2 and add a circ;le so that it'd be consistent with the previous combos in this part of the song. im fine with how it is
01:44:301 (4) - make this slider flow smoother. the flow as it stands plays oddly and it made me feel uncomfortable during gameplay IMO. not here in particular, idk how to explain, its a wierder shape to empasize the 2 violin notes that appear
01:48:586 (2,3) - move this up a bit because that overlap on the red (3) bothers me and it might bother other people during gameplay. its fine lol
02:01:872 (4) - straighten this slider like the last 3 for a smoother transition during gameplay. the flow plays oddly during gameplay IMO. fixed
02:02:086 (5) - same as 00:05:515, but the lyrics change in this part of the song fixed
02:12:372 (5,6) - make these 2 sliders the same because the transition plays oddly and unfitting for other players during gameplay IMO fixed
02:27:372 (5) - space out this note to not only avoid the overlap, but to make the transition smoother during gameplay i just remapped that section
02:27:586 (6) - you can align this to (4) if you follow the suggestion above. same reason as above ^
03:00:158 (3) - stack this at the end of the previous slider so that it'd be consistent with the previous pattern during gameplay im good
03:05:836 (2) - same as 01:44:301 fixed
03:10:658 (6) - make this slider look like (5) for a smoother transition during gameplay fixed
03:14:408 (2) - same as 03:00:158 no change


and that's all.

wcx19911123 wrote:

rawr
[Saten]
00:32:301 (4) - I suggest not completely stack under (1), move it 1 gird out, better to read the pattern moved it
00:56:729 - here in music is 1/2, I suggest not use 1/3 here yeah this is 1/2, fixed
01:03:586 - ^, there're many same patterns in this diff, I can't point them all out from now on. if you want to fix them plz fix all same patterns this is actually 1/3 though

[Nyaten]
01:08:301 (2,3) - why not ctrl+g on them, flow better you're right! fixed
02:04:765 (2,3,1,2,3) - try ctrl+h? add a jump at 02:05:515 - fit the song better imo done
02:11:944 - streams are all 1/4 in this diff, why only here 1/3? better change to 1/4 imo in this part of the song, I use 1/3 in all chorus sections with a bit more spacing than the other streams. except in this part 03:05:086 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) -
02:22:015 (2,3) - ctrl+g? done
03:18:801 - same as before like I mentioned before
03:39:372 - ^ ^
03:41:301 (5) - put it in the middle? moved

let me know when this is done
osu! need more AR10 \:D/ \:D/

wcx19911123 wrote:

people post this map many times to my queue
let's get this done then

[General]
fine

[Level 1]
01:06:372 (2) - move this note to 01:06:158 - ? fit vocal here is better imo fixed
02:14:086 (3) - it's not symmetrical now, fix plz fixed i hope
02:48:372 (2) - meke it blanket (3)? looks better fixed
03:20:086 (2,3) - make (2) and (3)'s starting symmetrical? fixed

[Level 6]
00:50:729 (7,8,9) - make then symmetrical? fixed
01:12:372 - end the first spinner at here, and the second one start at 01:12:426 - , fit the song much better imo fixed
01:50:301 (6,1,2) - make them symmetrical better plz fixed
01:56:086 (6,7) - ^, also this ones should blanket better fixed

[Origin]
00:58:122 (4) - this one can blanket better fixed
02:04:765 - add a note here? sound better fixed

let me know when this is done
osu! need more AR10 \:D/ <3

wcx19911123 wrote:

people post this map many times to my queue
let's get this done then


[Level 3]
01:09:801 (4) - blanket (3)'s ending better?
02:15:801 (1) - make it symmetrical?

LunarSakuya wrote:

holy shitballs

wcx19911123 wrote:

rechecked and all fine now
ENHIXX :3

LunarSakuya wrote:

holy shitballs

1. 02:12:372 (1,2,3) - Make spacing consistent.

• 
  Increase HP and OD by 1? It fits the map better.

1. 00:39:158 (x) - Add a note as well as 00:25:444 (4).
2. 00:42:586 (x) - ^
3. 01:47:622 (x) - here and 01:47:729, why don't you add notes?
4. 02:51:801 (1) - A whistle sounds a bit noisy at the top of slider. Just remove?
5. 03:11:944 (1) - Remove a new combo.

1. 00:28:872 (x) - Let's add a note here too! I guess you followed the vocal but the guitar fits more.
2. 00:42:586 (x) - ^
3. 01:23:944 (5) - Move futher a bit from (4), so gameplay will get better.
4. 01:30:586 (x) - Same as 00:28:872.
5. 01:34:015 (x) - ^
6. 01:47:408 (7,8) - Hum...this seems kinda confusing. Use normal shape for (7) please.
7. 02:16:229 (3,4,5,6) - It's better not to stack a quad.
8. 02:39:854 (x) - Remove an unnecessary break.
9. 03:23:729 (5) - Spacing is a bit too close. You don't need to use the same spacing as you used on stream here. It also looks something weird when playing. Oh, I found a good one at 00:22:015 (3)!
10. 03:38:836 (3) - ^

• 
  To be honest, the note placement looks kinda random if compared with your other maps. Anyway still good though

1. 00:14:944 (5,6) - I know you put (5) at the center of (3,4), but the spaces between (4,5), and (6,1) are a bit too close so gameplay isn't that good here imo(other spacings you use around here are further as compared this). How about moving them above by some grids?
2. 00:35:729 (6,7) - As the similar reason as above, move them futher a bit or change them into a slider? I think a slider should be prefered to circles because there is a BPM280 stream next
3. 02:51:372 (1,2) - Good balanced noteplacement with 02:50:086 (1,2,3,4,1,2,1,2). However I recommend you to reduce spacing between them, so it makes easier to read the next SV change.
4. 03:04:551 (3) - I feel this note doesn't fit the music seriously. Just remove?
5. 03:39:586 (1,2,3,4) - Oh looks inconsistent :/

• 
  Oh...very difficult map although there is an enough difficult map(Saten) already...
  Frankly, I don't see the difference between Saten and Nyaten(difficulty of pattern and note placement, and something look similar). Just they seem to have different AR for me...
  A map is really good and creative. But...uum,,,

Suzully wrote:

[Saten]

• 
  To be honest, the note placement looks kinda random if compared with your other maps. Anyway still good though Slider-to-Slider jumps are random. This may be a habit of mine on high bpm songs when not making extremely difficult maps

1. 00:14:944 (5,6) - I know you put (5) at the center of (3,4), but the spaces between (4,5), and (6,1) are a bit too close so gameplay isn't that good here imo(other spacings you use around here are further as compared this). How about moving them above by some grids? moved up a bit
2. 00:35:729 (6,7) - As the similar reason as above, move them futher a bit or change them into a slider? I think a slider should be prefered to circles because there is a BPM280 stream next I guess you're right
3. 02:51:372 (1,2) - Good balanced noteplacement with 02:50:086 (1,2,3,4,1,2,1,2). However I recommend you to reduce spacing between them, so it makes easier to read the next SV change. Not sure about this, moving them closer to each-other will make it look like 1/2 imo
4. 03:04:551 (3) - I feel this note doesn't fit the music seriously. Just remove? I hear a beat there so I don't really wanna remove it
5. 03:39:586 (1,2,3,4) - Oh looks inconsistent :/ you mean the stream? fixed I think

[Nyaten]

• 
  Oh...very difficult map although there is an enough difficult map(Saten) already...
  Frankly, I don't see the difference between Saten and Nyaten(difficulty of pattern and note placement, and something look similar). Just they seem to have different AR for me...
  A map is really good and creative. But...uum,,, There are: Higher Slider Velocity, higher spacing, less sliders, more hitcircles, harsher jumps, less 1/3 streams (Saten only has 1/3 streams) and higher flow
  So therefore AR 10

It's supposed to be challenging

Suzully wrote:

Hello.

[Level1]

1. 02:12:372 (1,2,3) - Make spacing consistent. fixed

[Level6]

1. 00:39:158 (x) - Add a note as well as 00:25:444 (4). fixed
2. 00:42:586 (x) - ^ fixed
3. 01:47:622 (x) - here and 01:47:729, why don't you add notes? fixed
4. 02:51:801 (1) - A whistle sounds a bit noisy at the top of slider. Just remove? fixed
5. 03:11:944 (1) - Remove a new combo.fixed

[Origin]

1. 00:28:872 (x) - Let's add a note here too! I guess you followed the vocal but the guitar fits more. fixed
2. 00:42:586 (x) - ^ fixed
3. 01:23:944 (5) - Move futher a bit from (4), so gameplay will get better. fixed
4. 01:30:586 (x) - Same as 00:28:872. fixed
5. 01:34:015 (x) - ^ i actually want to keep the sudden silent pause at this part ><
6. 01:47:408 (7,8) - Hum...this seems kinda confusing. Use normal shape for (7) please. fine x.x
7. 02:16:229 (3,4,5,6) - It's better not to stack a quad. fixed, as well as a few notes around it
8. 02:39:854 (x) - Remove an unnecessary break. ok :<
9. 03:23:729 (5) - Spacing is a bit too close. You don't need to use the same spacing as you used on stream here. It also looks something weird when playing. Oh, I found a good one at 00:22:015 (3)! fixed ^^
10. 03:38:836 (3) - ^ ^

Let me know after you've done fix :3

Suzully wrote:

Hello.


[Level3]

• 
  Increase HP and OD by 1? It fits the map better.

Saten wrote:

AR 9 doesn't fit this at all imo, looks so crowdy most of the time due to the speed.

Saten wrote:

Don't chicken out just because it's AR 10 :/

Makar wrote:

basically Nyaten is deserving of AR10 because of density