I agree with this.ikari_kyon wrote:
looks like you like it but you have a lot of work incoming
Also, sorry for not replying to your PM a few days ago.
Let's start this.
Oh, before I forgot, don't kudosu this.
Also, capitalize the 'o' on 'okite' @ Source, unless you have the proof that using all lowercase letters is indeed the right way to write that.
Oh, and as what i_k said, disable the letterbox. I DL'd this with no video when the mp3 changed, so I didn't realize that. If you don't know how, Song Setup > Storyboarding > Misc. Toggles > Uncheck "Letterbox during breaks".
>Easy
- 00:30:036 (2) - Remove the anchor point @ (352,256), and then move the one @ (384,256) to (384,304), AND then move that one at (224,288) to (256,304). Not sure if it looks perfect, but at least it seems to be far better now.
- 00:33:036 (5) - Remove the (160,144) point, then move the one at (176,208) to (144,208). Also, NC this. It should look like this.
- 00:36:464 - 00:37:107 - You know, you should map this part...
- 00:37:321 (1) - ...Feels awkward to have a slider placed here.
- 00:38:607 (2) - Place this at (208,80)?
- 00:39:893 (5) - ^ (448,208).
- 00:40:321 - 00:40:750 - Map this part.
- 00:41:179 (1,2,3,4,5) - Eh, this one looks randomly patterned. Go for File > Open .osu in Notepad, and then replace the exact same part with this one. Remember, find the one with 41179 on it, and then replace that line and the next four (and that makes five lines) with the code I provided below. Looks better right?
160,288,41179,5,0
80,240,41607,1,8
160,176,42036,1,0
80,128,42464,1,8
112,32,42893,2,0,B|208:32|208:32,1,110 - 00:46:321 (4) - Just make the second line straighter.
- 00:48:036 - You should really add a note here.
- 00:48:464 (1) - I don't understand why would you make a slider like this. A simple curved slider should do.
- 00:50:179 (3) - ^
- 00:52:321 (1) - ^
- 00:54:464 - Add a note here.
- 00:57:464 (1) - Remove the (384,224) anchor point and move the red one to (384,208) then move the first point to (384,112) and the last one to (320,336). Should look like this.
- 00:59:179 (3) - Not sure about this slider's shape. Also, shorten this to 01:00:036 and add a new circle at 01:00:464?
- 01:02:607 (6) - Remove the Clap?
- 01:03:464 (1,2,3) - Not sure about the rhythm here. You should remove (2) and (3), and make a 1/2 slider that repeats once (begin from (2)'s place), then another slider like the previous one beginning at 01:05:607, then make a 1/1 slider that begins at 01:06:464. If you can't understand, see this timeline (that double white line is at 01:04:750).
- 01:10:321 (7) - NC? Also, the Finish sounds too loud here. Either use a Clap or reduce the volume.
- 01:12:036 (3) - Move this slider to (192,272) and move the last anchor point to (288,112)?
- 01:13:321 - Add a note?
- 01:13:750 (1) - Not really sure about this slider's shape...
- 01:15:464 (3) - ^
- 01:17:179 (1) - Replace the Finish at the beginning with Clap?
- 01:24:036 (1) - ^
- 01:26:607 (1) - Shorten to 01:27:464 and add a circle at 01:27:893?
- 01:30:464 (1) - ...Eh, this one's pretty bad. You should really reform this slider.
- 01:44:607 (2) - Remove the Finish here.
- 01:49:536 (5) - Suddenly having a 1/2 note here? Eh, pretty weird, IMO...
- 01:50:607 (1) - Not sure about this slider...
- 01:50:607 (1) - Remove the (272,48) point and move the one at (336,48) to (336,32)?
- 01:57:464 (1) - Shape looks odd. Also, you should shorten this to 01:58:321 and add a note at 01:58:750.
- 02:02:607 - Add a note?
- 02:04:321 - ^
- 02:09:036 (1,2) - Weird shapes, IMO...
- 02:15:893 (1,2) - ^. For this, remove one of the two anchor points in the middle of the slider and move the remaining one to (256,272), remove and then replace (1) with the mirrored (Ctrl+H-and-Ctrl+J'd) (2) slider. Also, place that mirrored slider to (192,224).
- 02:24:036 (1) - End this spinner at 02:27:250?
Also, lots of reds right? But then again, you really need to fix lots of things.