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hoLysoup

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吃掉karenying+bakabaka
吃掉的話, 我也可以變成神麻婆嗎?

以下都是建議~
00:44:578 (6) - NC?
00:53:428 (4) - 　要不要再圓一點? http://puu.sh/8AZo
00:57:778 (6) - NC? 覺得有點長
01:09:478 (2) - 因為jump在這裡所以NC?
01:14:878 (1) - 要不要變成slider? 像這樣 http://puu.sh/8B5n
02:09:928 (8) - 這裡再NC
02:10:228 (1) - remove NC
02:10:828 (1) - ^
02:27:628 - 再加一個beat? 有個洞感覺有點.. 奇怪?
03:03:028 (1,2,3) - 我覺得這裡的節奏這樣打比較好 http://puu.sh/8B5F
03:09:028 (1,2) - 這兩個.. 有點奇怪? 好像沒跟甚麼.. (是我而已嗎?)

沒了~ 神圖跟曲子
第2顆星!!
越來越窮

Kotone

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Kotone 13 years ago

謝謝萌萌holysoup~我的部分基本上都改了~ :>
還有我不是神麻婆:< 不過baka是:>

bakabaka

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bakabaka 13 years ago

fix

Download: Mitani Nana - Shiroi Yuki no Princess wa ... (karenying) [Collab].rar

eveless

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eveless 13 years ago

title

白い雪のプリンセスは

Shiroi Yuki no Princess wa ... x

Shiroi Yuki no Princess ha... O

or Snow White is...?

嘛反正我以前做的时候使用了Snow White is lol 哭了这个好喜欢的当初第一张正经作图坑这个的时候还想着以后要remap这个翻唱版本呢哭了都这么久了TAT

超喜欢实谷奈奈的:3

(虽然本来想说要个gd...

Colin Hou

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Colin Hou 13 years ago

00:59:128 (1,2) - 这个(2)貌似丢歪了 XD
02:14:128 (2,4) - ^ 不过是(4)
03:03:028 (1,2) - 节奏这里跟前面有点不照了考虑(2)移到前面红线然后后面加note?
04:13:078 (3,4) - 略违和跟鼓点的话是5连而不是3

这里的きみ考虑是不是该间距再大点，毕竟是要盖到三个字头上的 XD

baka找我测试来着结果两秒死 ;w; 胡乱打点东西好了

NatsumeRin

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蛤蛤蛤

Cyril Scarlet

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Ｐｒｅｔｔｙ　Ｎｉｃｅ　Ｃｏｌｌａｂ

bakabaka

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bakabaka 13 years ago

lol

Pokie

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Pokie 13 years ago

General

- BG大小大丈夫? 1000*700

baka&ying

- 噢噢AR9好快好快

00:33:928 (4) - 建議 :http://puu.sh/8EdD
01:45:628 (4) - new combo? 會按快
02:22:078 (5) - 好位置, 不移嗎? :http://puu.sh/8Eei
02:24:478 (1) - 不移嗎?! 好靠近前一slider XD

貌似只能挑挑細節的, 做的很好
手速不夠打啊 XD

Kotone

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Kotone 13 years ago

goodbye wrote:
title

白い雪のプリンセスは

Shiroi Yuki no Princess wa ... x

Shiroi Yuki no Princess ha... O

or Snow White is...?

嘛反正我以前做的时候使用了Snow White is lol 哭了这个好喜欢的当初第一张正经作图坑这个的时候还想着以后要remap这个翻唱版本呢哭了都这么久了TAT

超喜欢实谷奈奈的:3

(虽然本来想说要个gd...

嗯title改了:> 謝謝e姐~ 我也超喜歡实谷奈奈~
gd的話~可以的反正我SB沒做好~要的話就pm我吧

Colin Hou wrote:
00:59:128 (1,2) - 这个(2)貌似丢歪了 XD fixed
02:14:128 (2,4) - ^ 不过是(4) fixed
03:03:028 (1,2) - 节奏这里跟前面有点不照了考虑(2)移到前面红线然后后面加note?fixed by another way
04:13:078 (3,4) - 略违和跟鼓点的话是5连而不是3 唔這個嘛先保留

这里的きみ考虑是不是该间距再大点，毕竟是要盖到三个字头上的 XD 嗯~日後再改

baka找我测试来着结果两秒死 ;w; 胡乱打点东西好了

謝謝科林

Pokie wrote:
General
- BG大小大丈夫? 1000*700 1024*768以內 & 4:3,大丈夫

baka&ying
- 噢噢AR9好快好快
00:33:928 (4) - 建議 :http://puu.sh/8EdD 給baka~
01:45:628 (4) - new combo? 會按快好
02:22:078 (5) - 好位置, 不移嗎? :http://puu.sh/8Eei 改了
02:24:478 (1) - 不移嗎?! 好靠近前一slider XD 改了

貌似只能挑挑細節的, 做的很好
手速不夠打啊 XD

謝謝Pokie姐

And Thank you RuRu~xD

Anshi_old

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Anshi_old 13 years ago

I love Mitani Nana

就做个有点脸疼的建议好了...
[Collab]

02:29:428 (1,1) - 这个我觉得扭得不是很好看...虽然说是要跟着调子...然后试试这样吗
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336,104,141028,6,0,B|328:52|280:20|232:28,1,140,4|8
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03:13:828 (8) - 这里感觉漏拍...啥的试着缩短两格格子然后在03:14:278加个note吗？
03:17:428 (3) - ^ 然后在03:17:803 和 03:18:028加个Note吗？采用了的话给03:18:028 (5) - 加个whistle
03:26:428 (2) - 建议缩短3格

Kotone

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Kotone 13 years ago

nothing change...thanks anyway

wcx19911123

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wcx19911123 13 years ago

from in-game pm

[General]
OD-1
HD+1
stack leniency不知道会不会太小了0.0

[sb]
苹果跟miku直接出来跟消失就好我觉得，没必要渐入渐出的感觉
标题感觉可以在16078加个放大+消失的效果
最后不加个thanks for playing之类的么0.0

[Collab]
00:14:428 (4) - 这个可以试试ctrl+r，flow好点
00:16:978 (2) - 这节奏有点违和，这个移到00:16:828 - ，然后加个slider从00:16:978 - 到00:17:278 - ，感觉好很多
00:19:678 (2) - 加个NC？
00:37:528 (2) - 换成折返slider？00:37:678 - 这地方有个vocal音
00:55:228 (2,3) - 我感觉这里spacing要小点，不然有点难读出是1/4，毕竟SV不高但是DS比较大
01:02:728 (1) - 试试这个节奏，感觉好很多 http://puu.sh/a2GA http://puu.sh/a2Gu

224,124,62278,1,0
280,256,62428,2,0,B|272:212|292:172,1,70

01:07:228 (4) - 试试ctrl+r，flow好点而且多点跳更好玩
01:18:628 (4) - 用点红色锚点拉个拉风的shape出来吧。。这个太软了orz
01:43:828 (1) - 这个对准下一个circle逆时针 rotate 90°试试，感觉这地方弄个跳好点
02:05:278 (3) - 这个往左下移点？感觉跳有点大了
02:12:328 (4) - 跟01:02:728 (1) - 一样的建议
02:47:278 (4) - 我感觉吧这个移动到02:46:378 - x:312 y:280，然后02:46:378 (1,2,3) - 往后挪1/2，打起来顺手点
03:17:428 (3) - 结束在03:17:728 - ，然后03:18:028 (4) - 移动到03:17:878 - 试试？
03:38:803 (5) - 这个删掉好点，我感觉这里三连的话有点违和

神图QAQ
edit：之前忘了射星了orz

bakabaka

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bakabaka 13 years ago

fixed

Download: Mitani Nana - Shiroi Yuki no Princess ha ... (karenying) [Collab].rar

Roddie

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Roddie 13 years ago

Requested by kanpakyin to mod your map~

And also, hi.

Well, it looks like I couldn't find anything wrong with this map.

Very nice work.

Good luck getting your map approved.

SapphireGhost

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SapphireGhost 13 years ago

NatsumeRin wrote:

This changes everything.

[Collab]
- I suppose some people might complain that the Stack Leniency is too low and makes the map harder to play on Hidden, but it's your choice as to whether you'd like to raise it or not.
00:43:828 (4) - This wave would probably look better if it was a bit smoother.
02:29:428 (1,2) - These aren't really unrankable, but they don't look very good and are sort of out of place. As in, there aren't any other sliders like this in the rest of the map. So perhaps choose a simpler curve shape.
04:07:228 (3,4) - Possibly adjust this so the end of (4) doesn't touch the body of (3)?

Map is pretty solid, should be an easy bubble after fixes.

Kotone

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Kotone 13 years ago

All fixed~:> Thank you
EDIT : Change the source to Noboru-P and tag noboru~since some one tell me that's true

SapphireGhost

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SapphireGhost 13 years ago

Alright then, things are fixed. Sorry for being late. This will be MAT bubble #1 for approval.
Bubbled!

gone with wind

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gone with wind 13 years ago

哇，总算有一个能RANK/APP的白雪公主了，刚打OSU的时候就找过一次这歌啊有木有
bakaying GJ
我只会闲扯╮(╯_╰)╭

Kotone

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gone with wind wrote:
哇，总算有一个能RANK/APP的白雪公主了，刚打OSU的时候就找过一次这歌啊有木有
bakaying GJ
我只会闲扯╮(╯_╰)╭

哎呀隨公公,最近和水娘娘可好？

Breeze

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Breeze 13 years ago

Red : Unrankable/error staff
Blue : Important things that I think you'd better fix
Black : Just suggestions

General

Shouldn't title be "Shiroi Yuki no Princess wa ..."? "は" read to "wa" :/ According to other ranked maps

Only this
Send me a forum PM when you have reply then

Kotone

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Kotone 13 years ago

Breeze wrote:
Red : Unrankable/error staff
Blue : Important things that I think you'd better fix
Black : Just suggestions

General
Shouldn't title be "Shiroi Yuki no Princess wa ..."? "は" read to "wa" :/ According to other ranked maps

Only this
Send me a forum PM when you have reply then

I asked my Japanese friend,she said wa=X ha = O desu!
btw wa or ha is also ok
So no change~Thank you Breeze

Breeze

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Breeze 13 years ago

OK, then, bubble#2

S o r d a

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S o r d a 13 years ago

awesome

S h i o n

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S h i o n 13 years ago

wa

Kotone

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Kotone 13 years ago

thank you Sorda
and wa tsundere shion

KanaRin

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KanaRin 13 years ago

好圖

hoLysoup

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hoLysoup 13 years ago

快點approve

SapphireGhost

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Approved! ... ?

Last edited by Gonzvlo 13 years ago, edited 2 times in total.

Kotone

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Kotone 13 years ago

Ee?? Oh thanks!

Nymph

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Nymph 13 years ago

哇baka莹！抱

Breeze

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Breeze 13 years ago

恭喜:D

Kawayi Rika

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哇 ~ APP 祝贺 papapa ~

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L_P 13 years ago

gratz~~~

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Snow Note 13 years ago

恭喜!~

[CSGA]Ar3sgice

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[CSGA]Ar3sgice 13 years ago

congrats~

bakabaka

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bakabaka 13 years ago

哇:O

Mikkuri

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Mikkuri 13 years ago

congratz~ <3 I love this song & map >_<

wcx19911123

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wcx19911123 13 years ago

快ban了

S o r d a

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S o r d a 13 years ago

yeeeey nice!!!!!!!!

hoLysoup

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hoLysoup 13 years ago

喔喔喔!!!
bakaying!!
真的隔天就approve了~

S h i o n

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S h i o n 13 years ago

yeah~

princess wa Karen . ,.

Kotone

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Kotone 13 years ago

Thanks all >.<
Tsundere wa Shion desu!

Cyril Scarlet

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Cyril Scarlet 13 years ago

Yeahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh

Kotone

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Kotone 13 years ago

haha bakaru's big heart

ertyukjh010

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ertyukjh010 13 years ago

GJ

白雪公主><

eveless

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eveless 13 years ago

好又少一个债要还

Kotone

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Kotone 13 years ago

goodbye wrote:
好又少一个债要还

卧槽原來你有做?

eveless

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eveless 13 years ago

karenying wrote:
goodbye wrote:
好又少一个债要还
卧槽原來你有做?

(做了一半忘了

Kotone

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Kotone 13 years ago

goodbye wrote:
(做了一半忘了

eeeee 求看e姐我喜歡你

eveless

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eveless 13 years ago

karenying wrote:
goodbye wrote:
(做了一半忘了
eeeee 求看e姐我喜歡你

.

Download: Mitani Nana - Shiroi Yuki no Princess ha ... (karenying) [eveless].osu

Pokie

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Pokie 13 years ago

karenying wrote:
e姐我喜歡你

恭喜

ertyukjh010

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ertyukjh010 13 years ago

好奇問一下，歌名是不是 Shiroi Yuki no Princess wa ... 才對

Kotone

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Kotone 13 years ago

ertyukjh010 wrote:
好奇問一下，歌名是不是 Shiroi Yuki no Princess wa ... 才對

I said in breeze mod
ha=O wa=X (but use wa is also OK
asked Japanese friend.

wule

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wule 13 years ago

nice collab! congrats

eveless

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eveless 13 years ago

ertyukjh010 wrote:
好奇問一下，歌名是不是 Shiroi Yuki no Princess wa ... 才對

这个问题不想多说...硬要说的话都是对的，日本人的习惯是ha wa的话是拟音的

Keichii

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Keichii 13 years ago

congratulations this map is awesome

gone with wind

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gone with wind 13 years ago

app了，恭喜恭喜

-Nanase-

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Good B

Sure

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Sure 13 years ago

karenying wrote:
ertyukjh010 wrote:
好奇問一下，歌名是不是 Shiroi Yuki no Princess wa ... 才對
I said in breeze mod
ha=O wa=X (but use wa is also OK
asked Japanese friend.

I'm late. x_x
It's Hepburn romanization which ertyukjh010 said, it's correct title.
In Nihon-shiki romanization, 'は' always is written as 'ha'.
But point isn't that, if you follow Nihon-shiki, 'Shiroi' should be 'Siroi'.
I hope you don't make mistake at next time!

PS : How could you make same mistake again, goodbye.

Kotone

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Kotone 13 years ago

ykcarrot wrote:
I'm late. x_x
It's Hepburn romanization which ertyukjh010 said, it's correct title.
In Nihon-shiki romanization, 'は' always is written as 'ha'.
But point isn't that, if you follow Nihon-shiki, 'Shiroi' should be 'Siroi'.
I hope you don't make mistake at next time!

PS : How could you make same mistake again, goodbye.

wow,thank you carrot for point out my error lol
You are very pro of Japanese