1. Red-You must fix it.
2. Blue-You'd better to fix it.
3. Black-Suggestion only.

1. hit300g.png位置偏高了，微调一下? ._.
2. pause-back.png图片上写的是"back to meun"????? lol~~~

1. HD-2吧...不减分...至少-1吧喂..(恳求状
2. Try slider tick rate 2 ? ._. 到变速的地方会容易读些..
3. 00:06:478 (x) - 本来想吐槽礼花时间点的，结果发现效果不错呢..=//=
4. 00:20:128 (3) - Useless Timing Section.
5. 00:51:328 (3,4) - 这是要毁灭人类啊..
6. 00:58:828 (10,1) - 喏~这里用了STR2的话就会很容易读哦~ =。=
7. 01:44:128 (2) - 没叠好..
8. 04:03:178 (2,3) - .......

1. 01:01:828 (1) - 这里有2根线？删掉一根..
2. 02:57:028 (3,1,3,1) - 真心无法接受啊...
3. 03:06:928 (2,1) - 增大DS?

JoJo wrote:

沙了个发=A=

小莹妹妹赛高=A=//

EDIT:鬼畜图真不适合我这种叒B来mod啊...=//=

1. Red-You must fix it.
2. Blue-You'd better to fix it.
3. Black-Suggestion only.

[General]

1. hit300g.png位置偏高了，微调一下? ._.
2. pause-back.png图片上写的是"back to meun"????? lol~~~

這樣的._. skin我刪了...因為很花

[bakaying]

1. HD-2吧...不减分...至少-1吧喂..(恳求状 好
2. Try slider tick rate 2 ? ._. 到变速的地方会容易读些.. 好
3. 00:06:478 (x) - 本来想吐槽礼花时间点的，结果发现效果不错呢..=//=
4. 00:20:128 (3) - Useless Timing Section. deleted
5. 00:51:328 (3,4) - 这是要毁灭人类啊..哈哈哈哈哈
6. 00:58:828 (10,1) - 喏~这里用了STR2的话就会很容易读哦~ =。=
7. 01:44:128 (2) - 没叠好..ok~
8. 04:03:178 (2,3) - ....... XDDDD

做为一个叒B我有很多无法接受的DS想吐槽...嘛ds的存在也是為了讀圖,能讀就行了XD
算了..神组合神图无雾...=//= 再扔颗星..
逃..

1. 00:000:028~00:06:028 - 用white把整個畫面?如果在00:06:478才開是白色得話有點怪怪的.
2. 01:00:628 - 我覺得這裏太快變回正常..因為01:00:628 - 01:01:528 的音樂都很弱,所以我建議在01:01:528 - 才變回正常
3. 03:00:628 - 03:01:828 - 在每一個重音上都加上white的effect?

1. 03:07:378 (1) - (bad gameplay)間距!因為整張MAP都是跳來跳去的,而且在這裏也不適合突然縮短間距,所以造成了誤到的情況,強烈建議把間距放大.

1. 00:08:428 (6) - (design)把這個作成00:07:678 (4) - 這樣的slider?用2個折點,會好看一點.
2. 00:14:428 (4) - 這個沒和(1)-的尾重疊好!
3. 00:39:028 (1,2,3,4,5) - (design)感覺在這裏放一個和之前相似的星形會比較好?像下面的差不多
   
   Example

   
   code就不給你..星我自己也作不漂亮 :<
4. 00:51:328 (3,4) - (design)這個slider的形狀拉成(1.2)-的樣子?
5. 00:53:878 (5) - (design)因為你00:53:428 (4) - 是用2個折點的,所以我建議這個也用2個,看起來會平衡一點
6. 01:11:428 (4) - 換著是我,我寧願放一個正規的正方形也不要疊在01:10:828 (7) - 上面
7. 01:39:028 (1) - (design)噗,略醜了,直接用彎的/直的slider就好了
8. 02:00:328 (1) - 放在(124,116)? grid lv.4 那就剛好和(3.4)-成了個很好看的3角形 :3
9. 02:05:128 (x) - 為了平衡難度,在這裡加note?不要忘記在了note之後要加clap喔!
10. 03:11:203 (x) - 加note?為了和音樂對上

1. 00:52:678 (2) - 這裏加個whistle?在slider的開頭和結尾,千萬不要直接加在slider上面,不然會多加了一層噪音
2. 01:03:628 (2) - 加whistle?因為在高音位.
3. 01:06:328 (2) - ^同.
4. 02:15:928 (2) - 強烈建議刪了clap之後在加上whistle.不知道為甚麼加了clap有一股詭異感
5. 02:51:628 (3) - 加whistle.
6. 03:04:828 (1) - 在slider的中間加上whistle?
7. 03:07:978 (3,4,1,2,3,4,5,6) - 為甚麼不直接用Normal sound?反正你都是全用clap.而且normal clap也比較有爆發力
8. 04:03:178 (2) - 加whistle?

kanpakyin wrote:

僕のKaren >~< 哼=A=...笨蛋

[Storyboard]

1. 00:000:028~00:06:028 - 用white把整個畫面?如果在00:06:478才開是白色得話有點怪怪的. //不覺得._.
2. 01:00:628 - 我覺得這裏太快變回正常..因為01:00:628 - 01:01:528 的音樂都很弱,所以我建議在01:01:528 - 才變回正常//先保留
3. 03:00:628 - 03:01:828 - 在每一個重音上都加上white的effect?//閃死了

[collab]
Issue/unrankable stuff
(Something bad in gameplay or unrankable staff,you should take a look on it.)

1. 03:07:378 (1) - (bad gameplay)間距!因為整張MAP都是跳來跳去的,而且在這裏也不適合突然縮短間距,所以造成了誤到的情況,強烈建議把間距放大.// leave to baka

Beatmap design/suggestion
(These are totally suggestion only,you can ignore them if you disagree.)

1. 00:08:428 (6) - (design)把這個作成00:07:678 (4) - 這樣的slider?用2個折點,會好看一點.//不要
2. 00:14:428 (4) - 這個沒和(1)-的尾重疊好!好吧...雖然不重疊也沒什麼的
3. 00:39:028 (1,2,3,4,5) - (design)感覺在這裏放一個和之前相似的星形會比較好?像下面的差不多// leave to baka,不過我覺得原本的比較好
   
   Example

   
   code就不給你..星我自己也作不漂亮 :<
4. 00:51:328 (3,4) - (design)這個slider的形狀拉成(1.2)-的樣子?//不要
5. 00:53:878 (5) - (design)因為你00:53:428 (4) - 是用2個折點的,所以我建議這個也用2個,看起來會平衡一點//不要
6. 01:11:428 (4) - 換著是我,我寧願放一個正規的正方形也不要疊在01:10:828 (7) - 上面// leave to baka,btw我還是覺得原本的比較好
7. 01:39:028 (1) - (design)噗,略醜了,直接用彎的/直的slider就好了好吧fixed...雖然我不覺得醜
8. 02:00:328 (1) - 放在(124,116)? grid lv.4 那就剛好和(3.4)-成了個很好看的3角形 :3// leave to baka
9. 02:05:128 (x) - 為了平衡難度,在這裡加note?不要忘記在了note之後要加clap喔!// leave to baka,btw我覺得不加好
10. 03:11:203 (x) - 加note?為了和音樂對上//fixed

Hitsound
(These are totally my thought only,it base on my taste,feel free to ignore them)

1. 00:52:678 (2) - 這裏加個whistle?在slider的開頭和結尾,千萬不要直接加在slider上面,不然會多加了一層噪音頭加了,别當我笨蛋!
2. 01:03:628 (2) - 加whistle?因為在高音位.//fixed
3. 01:06:328 (2) - ^同.//不要
4. 02:15:928 (2) - 強烈建議刪了clap之後在加上whistle.不知道為甚麼加了clap有一股詭異感//fixed
5. 02:51:628 (3) - 加whistle.//fixed
6. 03:04:828 (1) - 在slider的中間加上whistle?//fixed
7. 03:07:978 (3,4,1,2,3,4,5,6) - 為甚麼不直接用Normal sound?反正你都是全用clap.而且normal clap也比較有爆發力//fixed
8. 04:03:178 (2) - 加whistle?//不要

Pretty good at all!Star'd

karenying wrote:

我是公主(喂

S h i o n wrote:

karenying 俺の嫁~~~ >///<


Collab
01:10:228 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - 这里的加速很棒! 但是给我的感觉是后面应该不再空出1/2的停顿的，01:12:628 (1,2,3) - 这里1/2补满?
01:15:628 (1,1) - 感觉这里不应该拖慢节奏 , vocal是明显加强的, 试试： 在01:15:478加个note 然后01:15:628这里开始来串连打~？
//lalala leave to baka
01:30:478 (1,2) - 休息过后的第一个音我个人总是很难找准的,后面倒可以多一些1/4的3连打，所以考虑下去掉这2个1/4 ?//好
01:52:153 (7) - 加一个note ?//好
02:29:278 (4) - 去掉这个 , 再在02:29:053加一个stack? 像原来那样最后来一下jump的话感觉有点不太适合//啦啦啦把JUMP改掉了
03:25:828 (10) - 这串10里面加个new combo ?//好好
瞎了 音效什么的完全不会mod 写了些没什么用的东西 T.T


你的选歌都超赞啊~!!
Good luck~~

XD

bubble #1
bubble #2
ranked
yay~!

lol~thanks~

wmfchris wrote:

bakaying + bakabaka = triple baka!
//you are 9999999999
- N:C1 is useless.
//added normal-sliderslide.wav

OD+1也可以
//no baka

Some SB sections are covered by the notes like 0:53. Considering there's only one diff here try to switch the position of SB?
//先保留

00:18:778 (1) - soft whistle here? //ok
00:47:428 (1,3) - stack properly //fixed
01:08:878 (7) - 考慮到前後 (7,1)中間都是空的 放(392,208)會更好看//不覺得
02:10:078 (5) - [Nazi] down 1 grid lv4 // leave to baka
02:24:478 (1,2,3,4) - odd spacing: (1,2) 0.8x, (3,4) 1.0x //fixed by shion's mod~
02:45:628 (1) - 向左移一點 使(1)正好在(2,3)中點 // leave to baka

nice already.
某狼可以含笑九泉了, star.我幫他完成遺願

• - BG大小大丈夫? 1000*700

• - 噢噢AR9好快好快

goodbye wrote:

title

白い雪のプリンセスは

Shiroi Yuki no Princess wa ... x

Shiroi Yuki no Princess ha... O

or Snow White is...?

嘛反正我以前做的时候使用了Snow White is lol 哭了这个好喜欢的 当初第一张正经作图坑这个的时候还想着以后要remap这个翻唱版本呢 哭了都这么久了TAT

超喜欢实谷奈奈的:3

(虽然本来想说要个gd...

Colin Hou wrote:

00:59:128 (1,2) - 这个(2)貌似丢歪了 XD fixed
02:14:128 (2,4) - ^ 不过是(4) fixed
03:03:028 (1,2) - 节奏这里跟前面有点不照了 考虑(2)移到前面红线然后后面加note?fixed by another way
04:13:078 (3,4) - 略违和 跟鼓点的话是5连而不是3 唔 這個嘛先保留

这里的きみ考虑是不是该间距再大点，毕竟是要盖到三个字头上的 XD 嗯~日後再改

baka找我测试来着 结果两秒死 ;w; 胡乱打点东西好了

Pokie wrote:

General

• - BG大小大丈夫? 1000*700 1024*768以內 & 4:3,大丈夫

baka&ying

• - 噢噢AR9好快好快

00:33:928 (4) - 建議 :http://puu.sh/8EdD 給baka~
01:45:628 (4) - new combo? 會按快 好
02:22:078 (5) - 好位置, 不移嗎? :http://puu.sh/8Eei 改了
02:24:478 (1) - 不移嗎?! 好靠近前一slider XD 改了


貌似只能挑挑細節的, 做的很好
手速不夠打啊 XD

• 02:29:428 (1,1) - 这个我觉得扭得不是很好看...虽然说是要跟着调子...然后试试这样吗
  

  336,104,141028,6,0,B|328:52|280:20|232:28,1,140,4|8

  03:13:828 (8) - 这里感觉漏拍...啥的 试着缩短两格格子然后在03:14:278加个note吗？
  03:17:428 (3) - ^ 然后在03:17:803 和 03:18:028加个Note吗？采用了的话给03:18:028 (5) - 加个whistle
  03:26:428 (2) - 建议缩短3格

224,124,62278,1,0
280,256,62428,2,0,B|272:212|292:172,1,70

NatsumeRin wrote:

gone with wind wrote:

哇，总算有一个能RANK/APP的白雪公主了，刚打OSU的时候就找过一次这歌啊有木有
bakaying GJ
我只会闲扯╮(╯_╰)╭

Breeze wrote:

Red : Unrankable/error staff
Blue : Important things that I think you'd better fix
Black : Just suggestions

General

1. Shouldn't title be "Shiroi Yuki no Princess wa ..."? "は" read to "wa" :/ According to other ranked maps

Only this
Send me a forum PM when you have reply then

goodbye wrote:

好又少一个债要还

karenying wrote:

goodbye wrote:

好又少一个债要还

卧槽原來你有做?

goodbye wrote:

(做了一半忘了

karenying wrote:

goodbye wrote:

(做了一半忘了

eeeee 求看e姐我喜歡你

karenying wrote:

e姐我喜歡你

ertyukjh010 wrote:

好奇問一下，歌名是不是 Shiroi Yuki no Princess wa ... 才對

ertyukjh010 wrote:

好奇問一下，歌名是不是 Shiroi Yuki no Princess wa ... 才對

karenying wrote:

ertyukjh010 wrote:

好奇問一下，歌名是不是 Shiroi Yuki no Princess wa ... 才對

I said in breeze mod
ha=O wa=X (but use wa is also OK
asked Japanese friend.

ykcarrot wrote:

I'm late. x_x
It's Hepburn romanization which ertyukjh010 said, it's correct title.
In Nihon-shiki romanization, 'は' always is written as 'ha'.
But point isn't that, if you follow Nihon-shiki, 'Shiroi' should be 'Siroi'.
I hope you don't make mistake at next time!

PS : How could you make same mistake again, goodbye.