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Kawayi Rika
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Kawayi Rika
Hi ~ Karen 姐姐 ~ :)

MAP不能做的太好，会遭天神罚 ~_~

[Collab]

OD+1
AR9我也在做APP的时候用过，可是被好多人喷T_T.
01:28:228 - 第1个Break time 这里开始放NOTE怎么样？
02:01:528 (5,1) - 试下这样的节奏.
SPOILER
02:05:128 (2) - 我觉得这是多余的，建议删掉.
02:55:828 (3) - 这里应该加NC，后面删掉.
03:10:528 - 这里可以加1/2 NOTE 啊 为什么空掉呢？
03:53:578 (2) - 这个重叠到(3).
04:14:803 (1) - 加几条绿线降低音量吧,会好听 >_<


APP GO GO ~

送姐姐星星 >///<
Kotone
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Kotone
OD+1了 AR9沒問題因為BPM高
我的部分沒東西要改 谢mod谢star~
Nymph
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Nymph
BAKA莹俺の馬鹿 =A=

BG不弄成1024 768么
……代码里面有空着的we.png代码……但是没那个文件 虽然感觉没什么大问题 不过还是删了好？

00:11:728 (2) - finish有点多余
01:05:128 (3) - newcombo一个？跳满大的
01:10:378 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - 玩起来感觉太近了 总感觉jump更好
01:36:478 (1) - nc同上
02:18:628 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - jump同上
02:42:328 (3,4) - 这里叠起来我1pc觉得超不爽 4往左放玩起来就舒服的多 2pc又没所谓了 囧……
04:09:928 (5) - nc？

都是1PC的感想=A= 不NAZI了（话说不删SB完全没法打……SB又杯具了
safawu
61 posts
Joined September 2009
safawu
好图,AR9 200bpm打起来很带感,赞一个O(∩_∩)O

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一些note的建议(原来的已经很好了)

[karenying part]
00:47:053 (5) - 这个去掉可能比较好?
00:58:528 (9,10,11) - AR9中这里会不会有点难读
00:59:728 - 从这开始垫3拍怎么样?感觉有点空
01:32:278 (3) - 3改成单向,在01:32:728放个circle,然后在1:32:878放个2分拍slider试试看? 原来那个也挺好的就是下句话的第一个词落在那个slider上面有那么点不适应..大概是个人的关系,无视吧...._.
01:35:428 - 垫个circle怎么样?
01:43:828 (1,2) - 合成一个slider呢?
02:25:828 (1) - 去掉NC改在后面的2或者3?
03:17:428 (3,4,5) - 3长度减小1/3,到3:18:028,在原来的4上面叠上一个circle(3:18:478)试试看?
03:12:628 (6,7) - 6,7之间,7之后各垫一拍?
03:13:828 (8) - 这里感觉没必要拉1.5拍,前后都没呼应的样子..
03:20:428 (1) - 同样,剪短到3:20:428然后在21478和21628还有22078放上circle怎么样?同前面呼应 :3

[bakabaka part]
00:22:228 (1) - 变成折返slider试试?
00:27:853 (3) - 这个去掉可能比较好?
01:06:628 (1,2,3) - 2感觉放上来点比较好,前面慢后面突然跳会被坑大概...._.
01:08:503 (4) - 同27853手感打起来可能有点别..
01:58:078 (4) - 为什么不在这起个NC?
02:04:828 (1,2) - 同上面的1:43:828,这个后面还有跳,感觉略别扭
02:42:778 (1,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13,14) - (纯吐槽)好恐怖/.\
02:47:428 (stream) - (纯吐槽)爽,瞬挂._.
03:07:228 - 垫个circle怎么样,和后面的蓝3呼应?
03:10:528 - 垫2个一分拍circle怎么样?
03:49:678 (4) - NC提到这儿试试
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ps:有些跳突然DS差的很多的感觉容易被坑,跳起来略有些不适,总体来说跳的还是很爽
ps2:有些note藏得好坑爹,不过挺好玩:3
ps3:连打好鬼畜/.\
psp:三连五连连续出手会断掉的 QAQ
psv:好图一只,作为新人表示KD只有一个射不起星星 :(
ps998(好吃吗?):没有了._.
Kotone
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Kotone
fixed some
Updated
JauiPlaY
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Joined April 2010
JauiPlaY
HI~ :)
一些建議:

[General]
Perfect for me~

[Collab]
00:10:978 (2) - clap.
00:22:678 (2) - 尾加clap.
00:58:528 (9,10,11) - 有點太吵了...
01:20:128 (2) - 頭finish?
01:20:878 (4) - 換成spinner比較好,在01:20:878結束.
01:39:778 (x) - 加個帶clap的note在01:40:528 (2)的尾巴上?
01:39:928 (x) - ^
01:50:428 (3) - 沒被覆蓋好,挺難看的...
02:08:578 (6) - clap.
02:24:028 (4) - 頭finish.
02:59:428 (1) - 誒...在02:59:878結束不好嗎?

我的Bakaying不可能這麼鬼畜
Nice map, good luck! :lol:
Kotone
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Kotone
fixed some
thank you JPY~love you ♥
NatsumeRin
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NatsumeRin
00:20:353 - 加音?
00:37:528 (2) - 这里我还是觉得把slider后放1/2然后补个circle?
00:41:578 (2) - 这里因为歌词速度加快,我觉得是不是节奏略微变一下,这拍删掉/后挪1/4如何?
01:31:228 (3,4) - 重叠到开头会不会略单调,无良一点的话...这样?

01:39:028 (1) - 好像不太平滑?
02:13:078 - 加拍?和前后比略空
02:55:828 (3) - 这里弄成这样?(4给clap)

03:09:028 (1,2) - 索性弄成1/3怎样

Kotone
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Kotone
fixed some~Thanks moe Rin
hoLysoup
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hoLysoup
吃掉karenying+bakabaka
吃掉的話, 我也可以變成神麻婆嗎?

以下都是建議~
00:44:578 (6) - NC?
00:53:428 (4) - 　要不要再圓一點? http://puu.sh/8AZo
00:57:778 (6) - NC? 覺得有點長
01:09:478 (2) - 因為jump在這裡 所以NC?
01:14:878 (1) - 要不要變成slider? 像這樣 http://puu.sh/8B5n
02:09:928 (8) - 這裡再NC
02:10:228 (1) - remove NC
02:10:828 (1) - ^
02:27:628 - 再加一個beat? 有個洞感覺有點.. 奇怪?
03:03:028 (1,2,3) - 我覺得這裡的節奏這樣打比較好 http://puu.sh/8B5F
03:09:028 (1,2) - 這兩個.. 有點奇怪? 好像沒跟甚麼.. (是我而已嗎?)

沒了~ 神圖跟曲子
第2顆星!!
越來越窮
Kotone
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Kotone
謝謝萌萌holysoup~我的部分基本上都改了~ :>
還有我不是神麻婆:< 不過baka是:>
bakabaka
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bakabaka
fix :)

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eveless
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eveless
title

白い雪のプリンセスは

Shiroi Yuki no Princess wa ... x

Shiroi Yuki no Princess ha... O

or Snow White is...?

嘛反正我以前做的时候使用了Snow White is lol 哭了这个好喜欢的 当初第一张正经作图坑这个的时候还想着以后要remap这个翻唱版本呢 哭了都这么久了TAT

超喜欢实谷奈奈的:3

(虽然本来想说要个gd...
Colin Hou
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00:59:128 (1,2) - 这个(2)貌似丢歪了 XD
02:14:128 (2,4) - ^ 不过是(4)
03:03:028 (1,2) - 节奏这里跟前面有点不照了 考虑(2)移到前面红线然后后面加note?
04:13:078 (3,4) - 略违和 跟鼓点的话是5连而不是3

这里的きみ考虑是不是该间距再大点，毕竟是要盖到三个字头上的 XD

baka找我测试来着 结果两秒死 ;w; 胡乱打点东西好了
NatsumeRin
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NatsumeRin


蛤蛤蛤
Cyril Scarlet
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Cyril Scarlet
Ｐｒｅｔｔｙ　Ｎｉｃｅ　 Ｃｏｌｌａｂ
bakabaka
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bakabaka
lol
Pokie
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Pokie
General
  • - BG大小大丈夫? 1000*700


baka&ying
  • - 噢噢AR9好快好快
00:33:928 (4) - 建議 :http://puu.sh/8EdD
01:45:628 (4) - new combo? 會按快
02:22:078 (5) - 好位置, 不移嗎? :http://puu.sh/8Eei
02:24:478 (1) - 不移嗎?! 好靠近前一slider XD


貌似只能挑挑細節的, 做的很好
手速不夠打啊 XD
Kotone
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Kotone

goodbye wrote:

title

白い雪のプリンセスは

Shiroi Yuki no Princess wa ... x

Shiroi Yuki no Princess ha... O

or Snow White is...?

嘛反正我以前做的时候使用了Snow White is lol 哭了这个好喜欢的 当初第一张正经作图坑这个的时候还想着以后要remap这个翻唱版本呢 哭了都这么久了TAT

超喜欢实谷奈奈的:3

(虽然本来想说要个gd...
嗯title改了:> 謝謝e姐~ 我也超喜歡实谷奈奈~
gd的話~可以的 反正我SB沒做好~要的話就pm我吧 ;)

Colin Hou wrote:

00:59:128 (1,2) - 这个(2)貌似丢歪了 XD fixed
02:14:128 (2,4) - ^ 不过是(4) fixed
03:03:028 (1,2) - 节奏这里跟前面有点不照了 考虑(2)移到前面红线然后后面加note?fixed by another way
04:13:078 (3,4) - 略违和 跟鼓点的话是5连而不是3 唔 這個嘛先保留

这里的きみ考虑是不是该间距再大点，毕竟是要盖到三个字头上的 XD 嗯~日後再改

baka找我测试来着 结果两秒死 ;w; 胡乱打点东西好了
謝謝科林 :D

Pokie wrote:

General
  • - BG大小大丈夫? 1000*700 1024*768以內 & 4:3,大丈夫


baka&ying
  • - 噢噢AR9好快好快
00:33:928 (4) - 建議 :http://puu.sh/8EdD 給baka~
01:45:628 (4) - new combo? 會按快 好
02:22:078 (5) - 好位置, 不移嗎? :http://puu.sh/8Eei 改了
02:24:478 (1) - 不移嗎?! 好靠近前一slider XD 改了


貌似只能挑挑細節的, 做的很好
手速不夠打啊 XD
謝謝Pokie姐 :D

And Thank you RuRu~xD
Anshi_old
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Anshi_old
:) I love Mitani Nana

就做个有点脸疼的建议好了...
[Collab]
  • 02:29:428 (1,1) - 这个我觉得扭得不是很好看...虽然说是要跟着调子...然后试试这样吗
    336,104,141028,6,0,B|328:52|280:20|232:28,1,140,4|8
    03:13:828 (8) - 这里感觉漏拍...啥的 试着缩短两格格子然后在03:14:278加个note吗？
    03:17:428 (3) - ^ 然后在03:17:803 和 03:18:028加个Note吗？采用了的话给03:18:028 (5) - 加个whistle
    03:26:428 (2) - 建议缩短3格
Kotone
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Kotone
nothing change...thanks anyway
wcx19911123
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wcx19911123
from in-game pm

[General]
OD-1
HD+1
stack leniency不知道会不会太小了0.0

[sb]
苹果跟miku直接出来跟消失就好我觉得，没必要渐入渐出的感觉
标题感觉可以在16078加个放大+消失的效果
最后不加个thanks for playing之类的么0.0

[Collab]
00:14:428 (4) - 这个可以试试ctrl+r，flow好点
00:16:978 (2) - 这节奏有点违和，这个移到00:16:828 - ，然后加个slider从00:16:978 - 到00:17:278 - ，感觉好很多
00:19:678 (2) - 加个NC？
00:37:528 (2) - 换成折返slider？00:37:678 - 这地方有个vocal音
00:55:228 (2,3) - 我感觉这里spacing要小点，不然有点难读出是1/4，毕竟SV不高但是DS比较大
01:02:728 (1) - 试试这个节奏，感觉好很多 http://puu.sh/a2GA http://puu.sh/a2Gu
224,124,62278,1,0
280,256,62428,2,0,B|272:212|292:172,1,70
01:07:228 (4) - 试试ctrl+r，flow好点而且多点跳更好玩
01:18:628 (4) - 用点红色锚点拉个拉风的shape出来吧。。这个太软了orz
01:43:828 (1) - 这个对准下一个circle逆时针 rotate 90°试试，感觉这地方弄个跳好点
02:05:278 (3) - 这个往左下移点？感觉跳有点大了
02:12:328 (4) - 跟01:02:728 (1) - 一样的建议
02:47:278 (4) - 我感觉吧这个移动到02:46:378 - x:312 y:280，然后02:46:378 (1,2,3) - 往后挪1/2，打起来顺手点
03:17:428 (3) - 结束在03:17:728 - ，然后03:18:028 (4) - 移动到03:17:878 - 试试？
03:38:803 (5) - 这个删掉好点，我感觉这里三连的话有点违和

神图QAQ
edit：之前忘了射星了orz
bakabaka
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fixed :)

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Roddie
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Roddie
Requested by kanpakyin to mod your map~

And also, hi.

Well, it looks like I couldn't find anything wrong with this map.

Very nice work.

Good luck getting your map approved.
SapphireGhost
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SapphireGhost

NatsumeRin wrote:

This changes everything.

[Collab]
- I suppose some people might complain that the Stack Leniency is too low and makes the map harder to play on Hidden, but it's your choice as to whether you'd like to raise it or not.
00:43:828 (4) - This wave would probably look better if it was a bit smoother.
02:29:428 (1,2) - These aren't really unrankable, but they don't look very good and are sort of out of place. As in, there aren't any other sliders like this in the rest of the map. So perhaps choose a simpler curve shape.
04:07:228 (3,4) - Possibly adjust this so the end of (4) doesn't touch the body of (3)?

Map is pretty solid, should be an easy bubble after fixes.
Kotone
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All fixed~:> Thank you
EDIT : Change the source to Noboru-P and tag noboru~since some one tell me that's true
SapphireGhost
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Alright then, things are fixed. Sorry for being late. This will be MAT bubble #1 for approval.
Bubbled!
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gone with wind
哇，总算有一个能RANK/APP的白雪公主了，刚打OSU的时候就找过一次这歌啊有木有
bakaying GJ
我只会闲扯╮(╯_╰)╭
Kotone
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gone with wind wrote:

哇，总算有一个能RANK/APP的白雪公主了，刚打OSU的时候就找过一次这歌啊有木有
bakaying GJ
我只会闲扯╮(╯_╰)╭
哎呀 隨公公,最近和水娘娘可好？
Breeze
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Red : Unrankable/error staff
Blue : Important things that I think you'd better fix
Black : Just suggestions

General

  1. Shouldn't title be "Shiroi Yuki no Princess wa ..."? "は" read to "wa" :/ According to other ranked maps

Only this
Send me a forum PM when you have reply then
Kotone
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Breeze wrote:

Red : Unrankable/error staff
Blue : Important things that I think you'd better fix
Black : Just suggestions

General

  1. Shouldn't title be "Shiroi Yuki no Princess wa ..."? "は" read to "wa" :/ According to other ranked maps

Only this
Send me a forum PM when you have reply then
I asked my Japanese friend,she said wa=X ha = O desu!
btw wa or ha is also ok
So no change~Thank you Breeze
Breeze
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OK, then, bubble#2
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awesome
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wa
Kotone
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thank you Sorda
and wa tsundere shion
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好圖
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快點approve
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Approved! ... ?
Last edited by Gonzvlo , edited 2 times in total.
Kotone
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Ee?? Oh thanks!
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哇baka莹！ 抱
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恭喜:D
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哇 ~ APP 祝贺 papapa ~ :)
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gratz~~~
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恭喜!~
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congrats~
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哇:O
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congratz~ <3 I love this song & map >_<
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快ban了
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yeeeey nice!!!!!!!!
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喔喔喔!!!
bakaying!!
真的隔天就approve了~
:D
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yeah~

princess wa Karen . ,.
Kotone
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Thanks all >.<
Tsundere wa Shion desu!
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Yeahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh

Kotone
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haha bakaru's big heart
ertyukjh010
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GJ

白雪公主><
eveless
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eveless
好又少一个债要还
Kotone
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goodbye wrote:

好又少一个债要还
卧槽原來你有做?
eveless
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eveless

karenying wrote:

goodbye wrote:

好又少一个债要还
卧槽原來你有做?
(做了一半忘了
Kotone
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goodbye wrote:

(做了一半忘了
eeeee 求看e姐我喜歡你
eveless
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eveless

karenying wrote:

goodbye wrote:

(做了一半忘了
eeeee 求看e姐我喜歡你
.

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Pokie
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karenying wrote:

e姐我喜歡你
:) 恭喜
ertyukjh010
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好奇問一下，歌名是不是 Shiroi Yuki no Princess wa ... 才對
Kotone
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ertyukjh010 wrote:

好奇問一下，歌名是不是 Shiroi Yuki no Princess wa ... 才對
I said in breeze mod
ha=O wa=X (but use wa is also OK
asked Japanese friend.
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nice collab! congrats
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ertyukjh010 wrote:

好奇問一下，歌名是不是 Shiroi Yuki no Princess wa ... 才對

这个问题不想多说...硬要说的话都是对的，日本人的习惯是ha wa的话是拟音的
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congratulations this map is awesome :)
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app了，恭喜恭喜
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karenying wrote:

ertyukjh010 wrote:

好奇問一下，歌名是不是 Shiroi Yuki no Princess wa ... 才對
I said in breeze mod
ha=O wa=X (but use wa is also OK
asked Japanese friend.
I'm late. x_x
It's Hepburn romanization which ertyukjh010 said, it's correct title.
In Nihon-shiki romanization, 'は' always is written as 'ha'.
But point isn't that, if you follow Nihon-shiki, 'Shiroi' should be 'Siroi'.
I hope you don't make mistake at next time!

PS : How could you make same mistake again, goodbye. :(
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ykcarrot wrote:

I'm late. x_x
It's Hepburn romanization which ertyukjh010 said, it's correct title.
In Nihon-shiki romanization, 'は' always is written as 'ha'.
But point isn't that, if you follow Nihon-shiki, 'Shiroi' should be 'Siroi'.
I hope you don't make mistake at next time!

PS : How could you make same mistake again, goodbye. :(
wow,thank you carrot for point out my error lol
You are very pro of Japanese :P
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no fail @@
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My mistaken :o
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Beautful song~~~
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good map~
cute voiceXD
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Love this map <3
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白色彈幕超傷眼的啊=.=
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i love this map~
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Love this map :)
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no anyone make normal and hard ?
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