BakaHuang wrote:

噗 这个我还准备做的
哈哈哈> <我也喜欢shion啊
^^ 我也是上海的诶 做基友吧!!哦也 今天又新增一个基友.. ><

[Insane]
00:34:128(6)-add whisok

[Kiiwa's Hard]
>~<kiiwa chan~
add soft-sliderslide.wav ？
00:15:378(2)-silder ends in 00:16:211-
00:20:170(4,1)-strange rhythm ?
my style : delete (3) and use silder ends in 00:20:378- ; add silder starts from 00:20:795- ; 00:21:211-make a silder back
00:22:045(1)-delete silder use note

[Normal]
00:15:795(3)-whisok
00:52:461(1,2)-(1) use whis? (2) use finish?sorry,no. --> from 00:47:461 (3) I put finish to foloow piano.

nice map
bg很有爱

Aleks719 wrote:

General
Meta Data of your mp3 says about "Suzuki Keiichi" I guess it's a real name of artist, maybe somebody know her not as "Aimer". So i think you can add it to the tags too oh,thanks! you're so kind~ Let me investigate this songer...
There are 2 "spaces" between "ending" and "Kiiwa". Remove one in every difffixed
As far as i remember, you don't need to enable letterboxes if your map contains video, so, disable letterboxes in all diffs?fixed
You have a normal-hitfinish.wav in a folder, but you don't use it nowhere. remove it and make full submiti used it now ><

Insane
00:28:920 (3) - add whistleyes~
fine diff~

Kiiwa's Hard
00:21:628 (1,2) - you made it specially? looks bad, really
00:42:878 (1,2,3) - ^
00:49:545 (1) - hard to read, make sliderways a bit easier -__-
00:52:045 (2,1) - not stacked perfectly
00:56:211 (1) - unsnapped reverse and end of slider
also 00:55:795 (1,1,1) - 1.0x, 1,25x, 0,5x oh, u mad? oO absolutely mpossible to read
01:24:128 (1) - end of spinner sounds good, but maybe you can make end of diff like in other diffs? 01:27:461 ?i think so

Normal
Some parts sounds a bit boring, but it's fine i guess
00:22:045 (5) - this white border looks ugly, fix your sliderpoints a bitok,but i use silcer sliderborder.

360,48,2045,2,0,B|403:64|483:83|480:-8|394:-9|409:114,1,218,2|2

133,240,6420,2,0,B|35:233|53:170|111:194|67:274,1,163.5,2|2

Shiki wrote:

你好~ From #modreq.

[General]
add tag "bl" XD tag words 要至少3个字母才能搜索到~

[Normal]
我想说hitsound声音太小了 /.\ 比如说00:44:128 (3)的finish...几乎听不到耶
我感觉一开始的音量用50%左右会好点. 30%真的很难听见 一开始我希望安静一点... 还有这几个finish是想跟着钢琴重音稍稍加重一下,太响的话会被突然吓到的= =
00:20:795 (4) - 我感觉后面可以放一个whistle done
00:22:045 (5) - ^ done
00:41:420 (2) - 尾巴的那个finish用20%的音效跟没有一样... 用30%~40%吧
00:44:128 (3) - ^
00:51:628 (4) - 这里可以加个whistle fixed
01:23:294 (2) - ^ ^

[Hard]
我感觉音量再大一点点就好
00:00:795 (1,2,3) - 其实我想说这三个摆得真扭曲 /.\ 位置不够可以换个地方再摆嘛...
00:02:045 (3) - 这个形状弄得很差耶...如果不介意的话用下面的代码吧 我感觉好看了一些

360,48,2045,2,0,B|403:64|483:83|480:-8|394:-9|409:114,1,218,2|2

00:06:420 (5) - 这个也是... 最起码弄个对称点的形状吧 orz~

133,240,6420,2,0,B|35:233|53:170|111:194|67:274,1,163.5,2|2

00:19:961 (3,4) - 删掉(3) 然后(4)延长1/2 然后移到(3)的位置
00:27:461 (1) - 尾巴加whistle?
00:29:128 (3) - 加whistle??
00:48:711 (3) - 前移1/2 前面跟着vocal,突然不跟会让人感觉奇怪
01:02:461 (3,4) - Spacing.
01:24:128 (1) - 延长1/4 在白线上结束

[Insane]
hitsound声音还是太小了 /.\
00:16:419 (4) - 头部whistle? fixed
00:37:461 (1) - 头部whistle?? fixed
00:38:295 (2) - ^ 顺便把尾巴那个去掉 fixed
00:39:128 (3,4) - ^
01:02:461 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - 我想说这间距是不是变得太快了 0.0 remapped here
01:12:253 (3) - 关掉grid sna p排一下 我感觉间距有点参差不齐 ^

就是这些了~ 加油!!

wcx19911123 wrote:

from my que

[General]
StackLeniency in Kiiwa's Hard is different from other diffs , I suggest all diff use 0.5
others fine

[Normal]
00:17:461 - whistle
00:19:961 - ^
00:22:045 (5) - I like this kind of slider , but I'm sure some MATs and BATs hate this , be careful
00:29:961 - whistle
00:30:795 - ^ ok I ignored same suggestions from now on , please pay attention to following heavy beats , I'll say "whistle"
00:52:461 - too loud
01:01:628 - you missed a clap here
01:24:544 (1) - seems it start 01:24:683 is better , and end the same time as Hard ? all fixed except this one

[Kiiwa's Hard]
StackLeniency in this diff is different from other diffs , I suggest all diff use 0.5
AudioLeadIn in this diff is tooooo huge , 1500 is enough
I really like the sliders in this diff , but be careful , same reason as 00:22:045 (5) in Normal diff
00:14:545 (1,2) - stack better ?
00:44:753 (3) - move to x:384 y:224 ? or it is kinda confusing stack with (4)
00:56:211 (1,1) - this is very confusing , even you add newcombo on this
01:02:461 (3,4) - spaicng
01:10:170 - add a 0.63x speed timing section here and a 1.25x one at 01:10:795 ? sounds better

[Insane]
same hitsound suggestions as Normal
00:19:753 - add note yes, good idea!
00:42:044 (3,1) - kinda confusing spacing here , I click (1) too early when playing , maybe just me.. maybe..
01:24:128 (1) - end same time as Hard ?

good map

L_P wrote:

hihi, from mod que~

english?

general
wow you didnt use distance snap in hard?!
and no big problems, so as usual i give only suggestion
nice hit-sound


insane
00:19:961 (4) - also rhythm suggestion...like the one in hard Mapped by different people,so different ideas.
01:18:086 (4) - add something?
00:49:544 (1,3) - i dont like straight one... Sorry,but I'm afraid I will keep it.
there are unused inherit point at the last spinner Where ?
.......cant find anything ><

nice mapset! need a star? Yes! I would appreciate it very much if you could.

artpiggo wrote:

Insane
00:33:086 (4) - reverse selection What you mean?
00:38:295 (2) - copy (1) and flip vertical instead no
00:52:461 (8) - move up a little bit ok
00:54:128 (3) - same position as 00:54:544 (1) no,I dun wanna jump here.
00:59:544 (6) - move to (344,312) Good idea!


normal
fine and simply good too

8/10 good luck

Neptunus wrote:

Hey Shion~

Normal:
Excellent diff but the only thing may cause missread may be this : 01:16:628 (1) - since this is the only 1/4 in this diff, beginners may lost themselves in music rather pay enough attention to this This has been pointed out for more than once T.T If a MAT/BAT complains about,I will change. Thank you


Kiiwa's Hard:
Beautiful shaped sliders! Excellent! Maaaaaany people complain about shapes of those sliders.However,I have the same opinion as yours.
And without any errors nor controversial snaps!

Insane:
Excellent!

Well, Shion, my only suggestion would be: this map is now compelete and utter matchs all rules of a ranked map, you should call a MAT now!
I can definately see this get ranked soon!!thank you.As you know,current video seems not to be the right place where has been mapped in Kiiwa's Hard.So i'm waiting for some further SB fixes and changes.
And here is a kudosu star for you~

RobotoRaccoon wrote:

.Mod

Normal
00:22:045 (5) - Come on, that's overlapping and ugly
01:15:378 (5) - Looks bad being the only slider with a red waypoint.


Insane
00:33:920 (5,6) - Make both directly under the slider's end? (Top left should say: Prev: 0.00x)
00:44:753 (7) - The overlapping makes me sad. Yeah.
00:54:128 (3) - ^
01:23:295 (5) - Looks, kinda, bad? Overlapping and what-not

artpiggo wrote:

Insane
00:33:086 (4) - reverse selection What you mean?
00:38:295 (2) - copy (1) and flip vertical instead no
00:52:461 (8) - move up a little bit ok
00:54:128 (3) - same position as 00:54:544 (1) no,I dun wanna jump here.
00:59:544 (6) - move to (344,312) Good idea!


normal
fine and simply good too

8/10 good luck

Miya wrote:

Hello S h i o n.. I see your map has been modded by our team twice.. But i'll try to mod your map again.. Maybe this time our mod will not be detailed..honour to your great team~
I hope this will help..

General
I think you should remove 'ending, voice, original, soundtrack' from the tags..bcuz this tv-size is collected in Original Soundtrack I and also the singer is famous for her 'husky voice' in Japan now.

Normal
00:58:989 (3) - change to beat snap divisor 1/4 and move this note to 00:58:920. @@ I can't find those time line,what you mean?
01:12:461 (5) - move this note to 01:12:253 Really sounds better, but I will avoid to use 1/4 snap in normal.

Hard Kiiwa's Hard
HP drain -1
01:02:045 (1,2,3,4) - I think this note can be tricky to some people.. I must try 4 times to get 300 combo all of them.. Maybe the cause of the problem is you stack 1 in bottom of the end of the slider before.. maybe you should move this note somewhere.. I can't agree with you more,let's wait Kiiwa's reply.
01:08:920 (5) - i think you should delete this circle because it doesn't follow anything.
01:10:795 (1) - remove new combo?
01:24:128 (1) - extends this spinner length to 01:27:461 with minimum sound like in the normal map I think so.

Insane
I don't see any problem in difficulty..

Ok, that's all for the mod.. Good on ranking S h i o n..

• Music Track Lead-in 调大一点，比如1.5秒，现在这样有点快
  offset - 29

• 00:05:795 (6) - new combo
  00:18:711 (1,2) - 距离不对
  00:22:045 (5) - new combo
  00:56:628 (5) - EZ难度中不推荐短+多repeat的slider
  01:24:544 (1) - 彻底静音

• 00:08:711 (2,3) - These notes aren't stacked well
  00:14:545 (1,2) - These notes aren't stacked well
  00:42:878 (1,2) - These notes aren't stacked well
  00:58:295 (2) - use normal-hitnormal on the first circle?
  01:02:461 (3) - move to (104, 192)?
  01:08:295 (4) - Add finish on the last circle
  01:24:128 (1) - this spinner should ends at 01:26:975 (using 1/6 beat snap)
  Many stack here =0= maybe kinda diff for normal player
  tutuhaha said that you could speak Chinese ,that's right?

• 01:24:128 (1) - 彻底静音

0sync wrote:

General:
Hard to mod because it's so good.

Insane:
01:23:920 (6) - Add a hit circle Nah

Kiiwa's Hard:
00:01:836 (2) - Placement looks ugly
00:20:170 (4) - Looks nice, but doesn't feel or sound nice. Delete it.
00:20:378 (4) - Add a slider here and make it last until the next white tick.
00:52:045 (2) - You have such nice sliders, why ruin it here?

Normal:
00:02:878 (4) - Add a hit circle here
00:03:295 (5) - Move this back one tick and shorten it by one tick
00:04:128 (6) - Add a hit circle here Thank you for this new idea but sorry to keep what it looks like...

I hope this helped.

KRZY wrote:

SPOILER

[Normal]
Very good =w=b

[Kiiwa's Hard]
00:02:045 (3) - The path of this slider is very hard to read, try fixing it like this?
[spoilerbox]

00:08:711 (2) - Not sure if this is rankable...consult an MAT or a BAT about this, the current rule says:



00:06:420 (5) - Same as 00:02:045 (3)
00:15:378 (2) - ^
00:22:461 (2) - Same as 00:08:711 (2)
00:52:045 (2) - This would be better if you placed it like

SPOILER

00:56:211 (1) - I think it's better to not modify the SV, to make this more readable.
01:01:211 (3) - This is not as un-readable as some of the sliders I pointed out above, but just as ugly. Basically you want to try to avoid sliders from ending somewhere in the midst of its path.

Overall, try to make the sliders overlap less with themselves to avoid ugliness and un-readablility.


[Insane]
Overall spacing is very inconsistent, which leads to:
00:56:211 (1,2,3,4,5) - This pattern being very difficult to read if it is 1/3 or not at your first try. I suggest keeping the overall distance snap uniform throughout the map (at least until this pattern comes up) so that players will be able to read this pattern as 1/3 by looking at the spacing. By your spacing being inconsistent, I mean cases like:
00:49:544 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Notice how the spacing between 1 2 3 and 4 5 6 7 8 are different even though they are the same 1/2s. These kind of spacing inconsistencies could be removed I think. That spacing is the same as 00:43:086 (1,2,3,4,5) and I want to keep them closer because this is such slow song~
01:23:920 (X) - Add a note Nah


Make sure to get more mods~

Good luck!

f-INVERSE wrote:

Green -optional
Orange - recommended
Red - Fatal error.

[General]
Pretty fun. I enjoy this map. I hope this gets ranked, after fixing those ugly sliders!

[Normal]
full of win. 'nuff said.

[Kiiwa's Hard] Kiiwa's words:

SPOILER

I am both upset and confused about multiple peoples comments about my sliders shapes.
Please refrain from here onwards to post about how you find my sliders ugly/strange/messy as all this does is make me feel like ive wasted my time trying to make my map unquie.
If there is somthing unrankable, say so, don't try and force your 'perfect' style onto my map.
I have style too, you know.
Thanks for any who modded/will further mod,

x Kiiwa

00:02:143 - loop is very crappy. see spoiler.

SPOILER

RandomJibberish wrote:

Loops



The things to remember when forming loops is that the points go up a lot further than the loop does: The further each point is from the ends, the further away it needs to be from the slider.

The biggest issue I see with people's loops are the hole. You're looking for an open, rounded teardrop shape like the above slider.
If the hole of the loop looks like any of these, your loop isn't as awesome as the above screenshot:

00:06:388 - super ugly. redo?
00:15:387 - ^
00:21:610 - shorten this. sounds very awkward.
00:29:978 - look at spoiler or use another slider pattern.
00:49:515 - lol, very ugly slider. redo this. see this for your slider needs. viewtopic.php?f=56&t=37194
01:01:261 - ^
Aside from the ugly sliders, it's a good map. Placement of the notes could be better though.

[Insane]
00:44:805 - again ugly slider. can be accepted though.
01:23:339 - ^ Nah
fun as hell.

/endmod

merchat7 wrote:

Very late mod,

As requested

[General]

Don't see a problem and other modders probably have caught everything that is unrankable. Mod will be "nazi" stuff as the map seems fine.

[Normal]

00:03:295 (4) - Move the slider more down, and spread the anchor points a little more. http://puu.sh/6Zt2. It gives a nicer flow. Nah
00:05:795 (2) - Why did you put a red point for this slider? Make it a white instead. My suggestion is to move it a bit more to the right and use 3 anchor points like this http://puu.sh/6Ztw so that it points to the next note. This gives better flow. fixed
00:10:795 (4) - Look a lot nicer if you put it here http://puu.sh/6ZtN. yes!
00:16:628 (3) - Please change to a short slider (start at 00:16:420 and end at 00:16:628). It feel really weird since I can hear vocal and you didn't map it. I understand you're following the piano so, a short slider will make it feel less weird, while letting you still follow the piano. If you need a suggestion on where to put it... http://puu.sh/6Zu9. I use this
00:19:961 (2) - ^ Start at 00:19:753 and end at 00:19:961. http://puu.sh/6Zuz. I use this :
00:20:795 (4.5) - I'm sure you can make these two sliders better. fixed
00:55:795 (4.5) - (5) is touching end of slider (4) a bit, try to place it so they don't touch, will look cleaner. fixed
01:01:628 (4) - Rotate 90 degree clockwise, then ctrl + H. Then place at x:280 y:96 http://puu.sh/6Zv8. I keep thinking this slider was going to be a kick slider. Nah. but seems good ?
01:07:878 (4) - This slider can be better. fixed
01:17:461 (2.3) - If you change these sliders to something else. It would be more interesting. One suggestion is to just curve them.
01:19:961 (3) - ^ Nah . keep what it looks like

Everything seem good, some part at the beginning felt weird since you're following the instrument and not the vocal. I make some change and hope it is better now They can easily be fix by following my suggestion. One thing I suggest you do if you want this difficulty to be perfect is to self-mod and work on the sliders a bit more as some sliders doesn't look that great. You don't have to, but it will make this difficulty "perfect." thank you~

[Kiiwa's Hard]

- Why does this diff have sv 1.09? Guess you can keep it since it doesn't make much of a difference.
- Try a higher stack leniency so stack looks a bit better.

01:02:045 (1.2.3.4) - (1) was annoying to play. I would prefer if you space it out instead. I suggest double stacking like this http://puu.sh/6Zy9.

I was a bit worried about some overlapping like at 00:01:836 as I thought it would be covered by the default skin hit burst. However, everything seem to play fine and this difficulty is quite nice actually.

[Insane]

00:34:961 (2.3.4) - Maybe place like this, http://puu.sh/6ZA6 and http://puu.sh/6ZAb sorry
00:49:544 (1.3) - Maybe add a red point to these two sliders? http://puu.sh/6ZAy Tweak it a bit. Play a bit nicer and more interesting. Nah

Not much to say, only the two things above annoyed me.

This beatmap looks good enough for rank. No star since this beatmap doesn't need it, but good luck on rank. haha ,could you please leave this star for my next map~~?

1. You use silenced notes in your map (Volume 5%). It's unrankable because it is very confusing !
2. They are parts where the hitsound volume is 15% and 20%, they are very hard to hear, consider increasing them to atleast 25% ?
3. As you put "Original soundtrack" in tags, add "OST" too ?
4. Why Kiiwa's Hard has a different audio lead-in than Normal and Hard ? As all the difficulties start at the same spot, the audio lead-in has to be the same in all difficulties. So use 2000ms in each difficulty please.

1. 00:21:628 (4) - This circle is late, It should be 1/2 earlier.
2. 00:53:920 - Something is missed here, maybe make a slider which ends at 00:54:128 (1). Else it's confusing.
3. 01:23:711 (3) - This slider ends later than it should. Consider reducing it by 1/2 ?

1. 00:01:836 (2,3) - This pattern is hard to read, because (2) is hidden by the previous slider's track and because it's hard to understand what (3) will do.
2. 00:20:170 (4) - This slider doesn't start at the right spot, it should start 1/2 to follow the song. You should have something like :
   
3. 00:21:628 (1) - This slider doesn't follow the music, you should move it 1/2 earlier.
   
4. 00:48:711 (3) - This slider doesn't follow the music, you should move it 1/2 earlier.
5. 00:56:211 (1) - The reverse and the end of this slider are not correctly snapped !
6. 00:56:628 - In my opinion, you shouldn't use a 0.5x slider speed change here, but a 0.75x, it feels really better.
7. 01:24:128 (1) - The end of this spinner is not correctly snapped

1. 00:46:628 (2) - This slider should end at 00:46:940.
2. 01:10:378 (3) - I think this slider should be snapped in1/3

KuraiPettan wrote:

General :

1. You use silenced notes in your map (Volume 5%). It's unrankable because it is very confusing ! fixed
2. They are parts where the hitsound volume is 15% and 20%, they are very hard to hear, consider increasing them to atleast 25% ? ok
3. As you put "Original soundtrack" in tags, add "OST" too ? ok
4. Why Kiiwa's Hard has a different audio lead-in than Normal and Hard ? As all the difficulties start at the same spot, the audio lead-in has to be the same in all difficulties. So use 2000ms in each difficulty please. fixed

Normal :

1. 00:21:628 (4) - This circle is late, It should be 1/2 earlier. It is hard to follow both vocal and music, so i use all slider instead.
2. 00:53:920 - Something is missed here, maybe make a slider which ends at 00:54:128 (1). Else it's confusing.
3. 01:23:711 (3) - This slider ends later than it should. Consider reducing it by 1/2 ?

yes,fixed

Kiiwa's Hard :

1. 00:01:836 (2,3) - This pattern is hard to read, because (2) is hidden by the previous slider's track and because it's hard to understand what (3) will do. I mean, I agree with you,I will call Kiiwa fix it.
2. 00:20:170 (4) - This slider doesn't start at the right spot, it should start 1/2 to follow the song. You should have something like : ^
   
3. 00:21:628 (1) - This slider doesn't follow the music, you should move it 1/2 earlier.
   yes
4. 00:48:711 (3) - This slider doesn't follow the music, you should move it 1/2 earlier. don think so
5. 00:56:211 (1) - The reverse and the end of this slider are not correctly snapped ! hmm.. what has happened ?
6. 00:56:628 - In my opinion, you shouldn't use a 0.5x slider speed change here, but a 0.75x, it feels really better. i think so
7. 01:24:128 (1) - The end of this spinner is not correctly snapped

now,it is the same as the other two diffs


Insane :

1. 00:46:628 (2) - This slider should end at 00:46:940. I don think so.. The end of this slider 、(3) and the beginning of (4) follow the vocal well IMO
2. 01:10:378 (3) - I think this slider should be snapped in1/3

yes..fixed

I think that's all, but I may have missed something because I'm a bit fever ;~:Have a rest poor Kurai~~
Good luck ~

KuraiPettan wrote:

Kiiwa's Hard :

1. 00:01:836 (2,3) - This pattern is hard to read, because (2) is hidden by the previous slider's track and because it's hard to understand what (3) will do. I mean,Changed
2. 00:20:170 (4) - This slider doesn't start at the right spot, it should start 1/2 to follow the song. Changed
3. 00:21:628 (1) - This slider doesn't follow the music, you should move it 1/2 earlier.Changed
4. 00:48:711 (3) - This slider doesn't follow the music, you should move it 1/2 earlier.Changed
5. 00:56:211 (1) - The reverse and the end of this slider are not correctly snapped ! Changed
6. 00:56:628 - In my opinion, you shouldn't use a 0.5x slider speed change here, but a 0.75x, it feels really better.
7. 01:24:128 (1) - The end of this spinner is not correctly snappedChanged