in 00:24:830 (24830|6,25175|5,25519|6,25864|5,26209|7,26554|4,26899|8,27244|3,27588|9,27933|2) - part, I think the progression is slightly weird;
No doubt making 00:23:450 (23450|11,23795|5,24140|6,24485|5) - with thumb trill but 00:24:830 (24830|6,25175|5,25519|6,25864|5) - is making also same trill, which you didn't make same pattern in Normal.
This results making inconsistent trill progression like 00:26:209 (26209|7,26554|4,26899|8,27244|3,27588|9,27933|2) - .
For my opinion, split 00:23:450 - 00:24:830 - 00:26:209 - 00:27:588 parts that is clearly different musical progression and make them all differently. Below one is my suggestion.
...or copypasta 00:29:313 (29313|6,29657|5,30002|6,30347|3,30692|8,31037|3,31382|8,31726|1,32071|10,32416|1,32761|10) - this pattern that you made it.