I recommend turning this pattern 00:09:782 (14,15,16,17,18) into dkdkk to make the final kk follow the vocals
rather keep the break since the kiai is quite active so it would be awkward to force a break in the kiai
In order to emphasize this note 00:37:699 (102), I recommend removing this note 00:37:490 (101) and these two notes 00:37:803 (103,104)
Same thing here 00:50:198 (157,158,159,160,161,162,163,164) -
Add a kat here 00:53:115 and switch those two notes 00:53:323 (172,173) to imitate the same part of the song that is here 00:39:365