this is some complex movement for a non chorus section. after some flow aim 00:11:377 (4,5,6,1,2) it requires you to snap back to 00:12:140 (3) which is under 00:11:886 (1)
readability aspect is probably fine (this section is kinda smushed spacing-wise, but it's alright i guess), but movement-wise it's pretty hard
could try stacking both of 00:11:886 (1,2) like you did with 00:11:632 (5,6)