consider moving 01:39:399 -> 01:38:751 to play more of the vocals, there is no notable sound where the note is currently. same for 01:36:805 which can just be deleted.
02:05:751 - no improv is really needed here, there isn't anything in the song to really play of it. removing 02:05:751 and adding a finisher at 02:05:832 for the cymbals would be more fitting.
I noticed u added some notes for the last kiai, but it kinda got diluted after #4867960 being applied. For progression you can add 03:40:85903:46:048 for the drums