BLUE ARMY (Raytoly's Progressive Hardcore Sped Up Edit)

its fine but why do 00:15:232 (15232|3,15232|2,15232|0,15287|1,15343|3,15343|2) - , 00:17:009 (17009|3,17009|0,17065|1,17121|3,17121|2) - , etc flow in the same direction whilst the ones in the previews section dont?

00:18:009 (18009|1,18009|2) - you already have a jump for a louder sound, you will either have to put 1 instead of these jumps (subsequent ones on this sound) or make hands from these jumps (00:17:898 (17898|1,17898|0) - )

maybe change 00:27:954 (27954|3,28009|2,28009|1,28065|0) - to this https://media.discordapp.net/attachments/1012590150540333107/1124606891771838464/image.png?width=423&height=697 so that the anchor here explodes away 00:27:454 (27454|1,27565|1,27676|1,27787|1,27898|1,28009|1) -

00:28:565 (28565|3,28565|2,28676|3,28676|2,28787|3,28787|2,28898|3,28898|2,29009|3,29009|2,29121|3,29121|2,29232|3,29232|2,29343|3,29343|2,29454|3,29454|2) - overload on the right hand,

00:28:732 (28732|0,28954|1,29176|0,29398|1) - those transition are kinda weird for this long trill at this bpm imo

suggest to either fill the first 3 notes 00:28:732 (28732|0,28954|1,29176|0) - and just transform it into a spamm trill or maybe rearrange with something like this

https://cdn.discordapp.com/attachments/1108507087245422643/1112398181368598589/image.png

this sound starts in the blue lane 00:31:343 (31343|3) -

00:44:230 (44230|1,44230|0,44285|3,44341|0,44341|1,44396|2,44452|3,44452|1,44452|0) - I get it's a rising difficulty map but this is too intense compared to 00:27:563 - which is far more impactful.

00:47:343, 00:50:898 - The vocal vibration is pretty significant in these two places (at their highest for this segment), I think it'd be fitting to include a note for these to emphasize that, and instead remove the notes at 00:45:565 and 00:49:121 as the vocal vibration there is not as significant if you compare.

00:51:898 (51898|1) - Correct me if I'm wrong, but I don't hear any sound warranting this note. It's the only diff with this note as well so not sure if intentional.

00:52:232 - 00:52:454 - suggest to start from here to use doubles for the vocal, this is already the new section of the song

00:53:565 (53565|1,53676|1) - double i think for vocal in col1 and col2

00:54:232 (54232|1,54343|0) - Maybe stack these? They kinda sound like two vocals tbh

00:54:565 (54565|0,54565|2) - May just be me but the way this plays out with the chordjacks above it was a little awkward, since each iteration of this uses doubles that are similar to each other in a way (like how 00:52:121 (52121|1,52121|2,52232|0,52232|1,52343|3,52343|2) have notes next to each other), and here it starts with a split double then transitions to the notes after which was a little off-putting (also there's a lot of focus on col 1 before this). How about moving 00:54:565 (54565|0) to col 4?

maybe remove this jump as the vocal sound here isnt loud enough to warrant it 00:56:454

00:59:676 - only triplet? It doesnt hurt adding another note here

01:00:454 (60454|3,60454|2,60454|1,60509|0,60565|3,60565|2,60621|1,60676|3,60676|0,60732|2,60787|1,60787|0,60843|3,60898|1,60898|0,60954|2,61009|3,61009|0,61065|1,61121|3,61121|2,61176|0,61232|3,61232|2,61287|1,61343|2,61343|0) -
I really don't understand why your moment is the same.
01:01:398 (61398|3,61454|1,61454|0,61509|3,61565|1,61565|0,61621|2,61676|1,61676|0,61732|2,61787|3,61787|0,61843|1,61898|3,61898|2,61954|1,62009|3,62009|2,62065|0,62121|3,62121|2,62176|0,62232|3,62232|2,62232|1) -

01:02:343 - from this point the 1/4 rolls are way more noticeable compared to the earlier section , how about rearrange it with how you did here ? 00:28:565 -

01:02:343 maybe could be denser as the snares become more noticeable? that jumpstream is somewhat trily but i think it could be denser akin to the other "incomplete" jumptrills used throughout the map

jomp treel ? 01:29:898 (89898|3,89898|2,89898|0,89954|1,90009|3,90009|2,90065|0,90121|3,90121|2,90176|1,90232|3,90232|2,90287|0,90343|2,90343|1,90398|3,90454|1,90454|0,90509|2,90565|1,90565|0,90621|3,90676|1,90676|0,90732|2,90787|3,90787|1,90787|0) -

01:30:343 (90343|2,90343|3,90565|1,90565|0) - Why are these doubles on essentially no sound.. turn them into singles pls

01:30:565 (90565|1,90565|0,90676|0,90676|1,90787|0,90843|1,90898|0,90954|1) - The way this transitions to the kiai is a little awkward due to the already biased focus on the left hand from the vocal buildup, which makes the start of the kiai a little rough. How about just mirroring the doubles (or Ctrl + H) to have it play more smoothly?

01:31:343 (91343|3,91343|2,91454|1,91454|2) - ?

01:31:121 (91121|1,91121|0,91232|0,91232|1) - since you followed those sounds the next one is at the blue line 01:31:398 - suggest to delete the other 2 chords and add this double on the blu line

i feel like this stream (and anchor) is awkward to hit compared to how the rest of the kiai flows 01:32:121 (92121|1,92121|0,92176|2,92232|0,92232|3,92287|1,92343|2,92343|0,92343|3,92398|1,92454|0,92454|3,92509|2,92565|0,92565|1) - , maybe you can represent it differently or make the stream less anchory?

01:34:676 (94676|1,94676|0) - Vocal sounds really too subtle to have a double here, would turn into a single as it's barely noticeable on 100% speed while playing.

01:35:121 - 01:36:009 -> The streams here focus a lot on the left hand suddenly, which is really uncomfortable to play along with the triples at this speed, especially as it's a little repetitive considering the vocal changes at this moment as well.

How about rearranging it a little to something like this?

• This would also create a nice transition for the alternating handstreams for the 1/1 vocals.
• Apply to 02:17:787 as well

01:35:676 - is missing a note (because of the vocal)

01:36:121 - Why is there a 3-note anchor here but not at 01:43:232 - ?

01:37:565 (97565|1,97676|1,97787|1,97898|1,98009|1) - I think the anchor in this specific pattern plays out pretty uncomfortably, mainly due to the fact the left hand gets quite a bit of attention right after with the handstreams so this strain makes it really awkward to transition into that. How about moving 01:37:898 (97898|1) to col 4 to better emphasize the transition to the next verse and play more smoothly with the handstreams?

01:38:121 - is missing a note, like how u mapped at 01:52:343 -

01:38:121 (98121|2,98121|3), 01:52:343 (112343|1,112343|0) -> I read #3862591, but what are the doubles meant for anyways? I can't hear a vocal or a kick playing here at all, even when slowed down.

01:38:343 (98343|3,98343|2,98398|1,98454|0,98454|3,98509|2,98565|3,98565|0,98565|1,98621|2,98676|1,98676|0,98732|2,98787|0,98787|3,98787|1) - it will be more pleasant to play if you leave only the jacks ( they are very dominant at this moment )

is this anchor intentional? 01:38:454 (98454|0,98565|0,98676|0,98787|0,98898|0,99009|0) -

01:40:009 - should have one more note, like how u mapped at 01:32:898 -

01:41:787 - double note , consistensy with 01:34:676 -

01:42:787 - is missing a note too because of the vocals

01:43:787 (103787|3) - A double for this vocal wouldn't hurt as you've usually used doubles for similar instances too.

01:45:621 (105621|3) - i think after this loong stream i highly suggest to remove this note so it can emphatyze a lot better with the triple kick rolls

01:47:121 - is missing a note

01:47:454 jump?

01:49:898 - is missing a note

01:54:232 - is missing a note too (like at #3862578 and #3862585 )

01:56:898 (116898|3,116898|2) - Unintentional double? There's no vocal there, you haven't followed the background synth either so I do think it's unreasonable.

01:56:898 - need remove this double or make this 01:53:343 - too

p.s Also, to be honest, this voice is more suited to the blue line, like this 01:56:954 - and 01:53:398 -

01:57:009 - is missing a note (same vocals like at #3862588 and #3862584 )

01:59:843 (119843|0) - same suggestion as before

02:01:343 - is missing a note. but tbh this problem is getting repeated over and over again, so i am starting to think that the note at 01:32:898 - was a mistake, but my opinion is that it looks better if u'll just add these notes, it looks cooler. your choice.

02:01:565 (121565|3,121676|3,121787|3,121898|3,122009|3) - Unsure if intentional but the handstreams don't usually have anchors lasting this long throughout this segment, so this in particular causes some uncomfortable and unnatural strain on the right hand which can really mess up the flow of this segment. I think just moving 02:01:676 (121676|3) to col 1 would make this play out better.

02:04:121 - is missing a note

02:05:785 (125785|0,125785|1,125841|2,125896|0,125896|3,125952|1,126007|0,126007|2,126007|3,126063|1,126119|0,126119|3,126174|2,126230|0,126230|1,126230|3) - Why has this instance in particular those stacks on col 1 and 4? It's inconsistent based on your usual patterning for sections like that.

02:14:065 (134065|0) - same here too

02:25:343 - is missing a note (like how u mapped at 01:35:565 - , 01:42:676 - , 01:49:787 - etc.)

02:29:621 -
02:29:843 -
02:30:065 -

at this point since the adrenaline is already at max level i suggest to full those with doubles for a good trill spamm

02:30:454 (150454|1,150454|0) - The kickspam is still pretty subtle during the gradual rise here, so I think it'd be more fitting to leave this as a single, since it doesn't noticeably pick up until around 02:30:565

02:31:232 (151232|1,151287|2) - Would remove these, no evident build-up sounds.

something i noticed throughout the last section after the kiai, is that generally the jumptrills at sections like 02:32:009 (152009|1,152009|0,152065|2,152121|0,152121|1,152176|3,152176|2,152232|1,152232|0,152287|2,152343|0,152343|1,152343|3) - , 02:53:009 (173009|1,173009|0,173065|2,173121|0,173121|1,173176|2,173232|3,173232|0,173232|1,173287|2,173343|1,173343|0,173398|2,173454|3,173454|0,173454|1,173509|2,173565|0,173621|1,173676|3,173676|2,173676|0) - and 02:53:009 (173009|1,173009|0,173065|2,173121|0,173121|1,173176|2,173232|3,173232|0,173232|1,173287|2,173343|1,173343|0,173398|2,173454|3,173454|0,173454|1,173509|2,173565|0,173621|1,173676|3,173676|2,173676|0) -

02:32:121 - imo i would focus the triples of the crash instead of the 02:32:121 (152121|1,152121|0,152176|3,152176|2,152232|0,152232|1) - pattern you made for this sound, since the crash is way more impactful compared to the sound you mapped with those three double

02:32:176 (152176|3,152176|2,152232|1,152232|0,152287|2,152343|0,152343|3,152343|1) - i know there's a snare and a few kicks here but it makes it feel like the trill at the end of the kiai merges with the next section and i feel like it would make it contrast more if the kicks here weren't , welp, kicks, and instead 02:32:121 (152121|1,152121|0) - could be a hand

02:33:565 - 02:34:676, 02:42:454 - 02:43:565 -> The streams here get concerningly biased onto the right hand, which plays out pretty awkwardly when considering everything around it. How about moving 02:34:121 (154121|2) and 02:43:009 (163009|3) to col 1

02:47:787 - 02:49:676 -> Similar issue on the left hand here, which happens for two whole seconds. Move 02:48:343 (168343|1) to col 4?

02:38:232 (158232|0,158232|1,158287|2,158287|3,158343|1,158343|0) - These kinda get lost in the kickspam, mayb transition like this?

maybe u can do this instead to avoid unnecessary anchors 02:38:787 (158787|3,158787|2,158843|0,158898|2,158898|3,158954|1,159009|2,159009|3,159009|0,159065|1,159121|0,159121|3,159176|2) - https://cdn.discordapp.com/attachments/1012590150540333107/1124602486200750211/image.png

02:39:232 - same suggestion as before