01:28:769 (5) - could be interesting to have these as 2 circles to emphasize the increasing voice pitch on this sound
02:09:004 (7,8) - make this a kick on vocal so 02:08:827 (6,7,8,9) - can be a bit more differenciated from 01:57:533 (6,7,8,9) - ?
On the same note 02:01:239 (1,2,3,1,2,3) - could be made to try and follow vocals so not all 3 are mapped with same rhythm.
04:08:298 (1,2,3,1,2,3) - 04:16:063 (7,8) -
07:47:827 (7,8) - if you decide to change then change this one too for consistency ?
10:12:549 (1,2,3,1,2,3) - 10:20:314 (7,8) -
10:35:138 (1,2,3,1,2,3) - 10:42:902 (7,8) -
applied your suggestion from 02:09:004 (7,8) - to other similar suggestion but ill turn down the other suggestion for this post.
03:22:416 (2,3) - would reduce spacing on these to give more importance to this one 03:22:769 (1) -
03:28:416 (1) - could get some emphasis too as it's on the same sound (like ctrl+j and move down left a bit ?)
05:00:710 (3,1) - this jump might be a bit straining for this section cld find a way to reduce the spacing here just a little bit
06:09:533 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,1) - it's just a subjective whetever you're doing this rhythm, but would be really cool to see that
13 note burst
06:18:533 (2) - mayb increase spacing cuz of 1/1 gap u cld also space 06:18:886 (3) - a bit more for the same reason
08:34:785 (1,2) - could space these out a bit more would give more emphasis to the crashes i think kinda like what u do here 08:22:079 (1,2) - with the spacing
10:24:902 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - Currently feel like this is not emphasizing the current pitch of the guitare, I see that you want to show that guitare's pitch increasing by starting on low spacing but here it's already adding something to song so starting on a spacing like this feels underwhelming.
A 1.2 maybe 1.3 spacing seems to fit the pitch way better.
11:52:496 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - you mapped it the same way as 11:54:303 (2,3,4,5,6,7) despite the big difference in intensity. I think you could just replace 11:52:496 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) with a few sliders for example something like this:
https://imgur.com/a/Jssnfeq
which also goes better with the vocals and gives following 11:54:303 (2,3,4,5,6,7) a bigger impact