Xinely wrote:

Hi, m4m from my queue

• 
  General

1. hmm i don't find source which need < TV Size > here. i found http://vgmdb.net/album/44835 and still haven't " < > " altho it used on instrumental version. maybe you can remove the tv size on title and move it to tags first. try confirm it with japanese ppl >< Idk, don't want to keep changing back and forth, so I'll wait for official information before changing it again
2. i don't find you use normal-hitclap, i mean i saw but you change the addition. imo would be more pratical if you change normal-hitclap become soft-hitclap but I used soft-hitclap also

• 
  Normal

1. 00:00:855 - until 00:12:855 - please add whistle consistently on every 2nd whiteticks and 4th whiteticks. i don't find reason why on first part just use whistle on every 2nd whitetick and the hitsound pattern suddenly changed at 00:07:255 - while the vocals are same Fixed
2. 00:03:255 (2) - nazi, you can move the slider to 124,276 to make a blanket pattern here so the patern would be more structured OK
3. 00:04:855 (1,2) - they are have inconsistent spacing. they should be have 1,0x spacing each other, if i were you i would do something like https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1907222 for better flow too OK
4. 00:07:655 (2) - the slider has inconsistent spacing (1,16x) here. make sure to use 1,0x spacing here :< I'm sorry, I dont understand what you mean by the slider has inconsistent spacing? you mean to the previous and next notes or....
5. 00:11:655 (1) - since you're following vocal on this part, i would suggest to end the slider on 00:13:055 - since on that time has a vocalist's breathe OK sounds better
6. 00:19:335 (1) - there is a crash cymbal so please add finish here :3OK
7. 00:20:400 (3) - inconsistent spacing. move to 284,200 to avoid it OK
8. 00:20:400 - until 00:30:695 - the finishes are unncessary here. actually the music patterns are drums at 2nd whiteticks and 4th whiteticks so on that ticks (2nd and 4th) should use claps instead finishes. but you can keep 00:28:920 - finish on this time since the drum together with crash cymbal, also for this one 00:30:695 - (keep the finish) OK
9. 00:21:820 (1) - inconsistent spacing again. 1,0x Fixed
10. 00:23:240 (3,4,5) - ah here too. altho you're using inconsistent because of blankets. you should keep the spacing since this is Normal under 2 stars :< How to fix this without changing the whole part
11. 00:26:080 (3) - both inconsistent spacing for previous and next of this slider Fixed
12. 00:29:630 (4) - another inconsistency spacing. make sure placed it on 1,0x Fixed
13. 00:36:731 (1) - move to 408,296 to keep the spacing T_T OK
14. 00:38:151 (3) - here too, please keep the spacing 1,0x TwT OK
15. 00:40:282 (2) - yeah spacing please , 268,288 better for avoid the inconsistency OK
16. 00:42:056 (1,2) - imo the sliders are too curvy here. the shape being kinda bad. try make smoother slider instead http://puu.sh/aL1zu/dcc82a46fe.jpg Tried to fix as best as I can
17. 00:42:056 - 00:53:062 - the hitsounds so plain here. you should add claps on every 2nd whiteticks and 4th whiteticks because the drums Added soft claps from 00:42:056 to 00:50:222
18. 00:44:187 (5) - unfit flow since the tail of slider is on downward and you placed the next circle on upward, so yeah i would suggest https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1907270 for natural flow OK....
19. 00:45:252 (1) - the flow on this slider can improved as well too, i mean something like https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1907273 OK
20. 00:45:962 (2) - nazi, flow can be more natural if you move the tail to 148,232 , also 00:46:672 (3) - inconsistency spacing T_T Both fixed (I hope)
21. 00:47:737 (4) - another inconsistency spacing, move to 92,168 to keep the spacing OK
22. 00:49:157 (3) - the slider a little bit too curvy which make a little bit changed flow from the previous, i would suggest to make smoother slider like https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1907285 OK
23. 00:50:577 (1) - nazi, just say the flow will be easier to read when you move the circle to 288,148 OK
24. 00:51:998 (5,6) - the design could improve a lot here with using symmetrical instead, i mean like https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1907296 and 00:53:418 (1) - stack on (5)'s head OK
25. 00:56:258 (2,3,2) - i guess you should remove the whistle's body here. they are totally noisy when the part being calm ;3; , add whistle on heads instead Fixed
26. 00:58:743 (1) - remove whistle here. i know maybe this is ur style but 1/1 gap of whistle is enough noisy for me OK
27. 01:03:714 (1) - remove this note, after spinner Normal diff should have 2/1 gap of blank for rest after spinner.. Reluctant but OK
28. 01:04:068 (2,1) - i guess these ones are too curvy too. imo the (4)'s curve isn't fit with vocal since the vocal is calm, you should make smoother slider here. i guess like http://puu.sh/aL29J/5ae5fc95e0.jpg Yeah fixed
29. 01:05:844 (1,1) - if possible please avoid this overlap. it kinda showed bad altho just a short time but i would make it not touced together Um OK
30. 01:08:329 (2,3) - i don't find reason why finishes here. remove them and use clap (custom) 01:08:684 - in here instead OK
31. 01:09:394 - i don't find reason why finish too. use custom clap N:C1 instead OK
32. 01:10:104 (1) - flip the slider, i mean 2nd node from rightward go to leftward to has natural flow here, https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1907334 OK
33. 01:13:299 (1) - inconsistency spacing, i guess you know what should you do This part seems ok?
34. 01:15:784 (5) - add clap here since it has drum sound OK
35. 01:22:175 - until 01:21:820 (1) - you should remove all finish here. their musics are just a drum. so claps are fine. finish feels too loud you used the wrong timestamps, but I know what you mean. I like the finishes being here, different from the other parts. I doont thiink it's too loud since I already decreased the volume by quite abit
36. 01:27:855 - since the vocal is being dissapear here. volume 20% better imo Well ok
37. Well not bad but you must make the spacing consistently from start until end. also you need improve the hitsound to be more structured >_<

• 
  Hard

1. 00:00:855 (1) - just nazi, you can improve the flow by ctrl+G and move to 200,80 OK
2. 00:07:055 (5) - i don't find reason why finish on this calm part. remove it, totally noisy here TT OK....but I can't help but feel it sounds weird without.
3. 00:02:055 - until 00:11:655 - please add whistles on every 4th whitetick too, the hitsounds feel plain here OK
4. 00:04:855 (1,2) - since calm part, i guess the curved sliders here too curvy, try smoother slider instead http://puu.sh/aL329/a80559b3dd.jpg What does curvy have to do wwith clam part doe Fixed
5. 00:10:855 (2) - is the 1,11x spacing here intentional? i saw you're using 1,2x spacing as normal spacing here so it would be better if keep the spacing Fixed
6. 00:19:335 (1) - oh yeah finish on head coz cymbal
7. 00:20:755 (1) - nazi, flow can improved too here imo by move the tail to 168,304 OK
8. 00:26:613 - imo the sound of violin here is main music so please map this, you can change 00:26:435 (2) - with circle and 1/2 slider OK
9. 00:30:696 (5) - it would be awesome if you move the circle to 312,352 so the pattern could to see with easily as blanket Well that works
10. 00:31:761 (3) - the snare of the guitar's chord is easily to hear to you must map this time too, just use circle and 1/2 slider is fine
11. 00:35:311 (5) - nazi, actually the design could neater here with move the tail node 1 grid right, and move the slider to 316,312. the current one is too closer imo Yea that looks better
12. 00:36:731 (1,2) - because too curvy on these sliders, it looked kinda messy, how about https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1907462 instead? OK
13. 00:39:216 (1) - maybe kinda faint but it has a cymbal sound here so remove the drum sampleset to emphasize it OK
14. 00:43:122 (3) - make the flow be smoother? http://puu.sh/aL4QJ/f66e5f578d.jpg Fixed
15. 00:43:832 (5) - since the music still calm here. imo too many jumps and next of it are circles is kinda hard. how about ctrl+G this instead? OK but I still dont see what this haas to do with the music being calm
16. 00:56:258 (2,3,4,5,2) - remove whistle's body as i said on Normal OK
17. 00:58:743 (1) - perhaps unstack this? when the calm part, stacked is kinda hard to prediction imo >_< OK, I just stacked so it would follow DS
18. 01:07:441 (5) - just a taste, perhaps keep the blanketing here to make neater design http://puu.sh/aL533/8a6ae7c2db.jpg Actually I think there is no need at this part
19. 01:19:867 (2,3) - well from my taste, i prefer this flow actually since it has natural flow, i mean like https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1907487 OK, I just thought it might look boring
20. 01:20:932 (5) - shorten the slider to 01:21:287 - and add note here since 01:21:287 - has strong string sound here So do I add a note at 01:21:465 - ? I shortened it already
21. 01:22:530 (1,2,3) - avoid the triplet with jumps. it kinda hard to catch on Hard diff Sorry I fail to see how this is a jump
22. 01:25:725 (1) - remove whistle's body since it has noisy sound TwT OK
23. 01:27:855 - 20% volume if you agree with me before (on Normal) OK
24. repy my hitsound mod on Normal too (that you've fixed) to this Hard and next Insane diff. i'm totally lazy to write again

• 
  Insane

1. 00:00:655 (1) - overmap :< , remove it So many people aask me to remove, then put back then remove LOL. I think it starts there so I leave it
2. 00:05:655 (1) - move to 384,96 since the slider is too closer with previous slider :< OK
3. 00:06:955 (6) - i guess this is overmapped too. even has a sound the vocal is quite faint this is ok i'm pretty sure
4. 00:07:055 (7) - remove finish, no cymbal or hard music here OK...but again sounds abit off
5. 00:07:655 (3) - NC here so player can read it as anti jump has done OK, but should I remove NC from 00:07:255 (1) ?
6. 00:24:482 (4,5) - hmm i prefer to ctrl+G these circles to make zig zag flow but it just a taste owo it's still a zigzag now =w=
7. 00:27:500 (6) - move to 285,303 and ctrl+G the slider since it has cymbal sound at 00:27:500 - huh? this is confusing. I don't see how it would help
8. 00:39:749 (3) - what a nazi thing, 140|352 for natural circular flow OK
9. 00:44:187 (3) - give a little jump here because the vocal :3 , move to 224,152 OK jump, but moved to 294|140 to blanket 1
10. 00:53:417 (7) - you should give a jump here because the cymbal sound. move to 424,188 I like it where it is now
11. 00:56:258 (2) - wrong rhythm, since vocal at 00:56:790 - so extend the slider until that time and 00:57:323 (1) - remove repeat, start on 00:57:678 - OK
12. 01:05:311 (3) - i would like to see neutral flow instead here so the flow still keep natural as well http://puu.sh/aL5Vd/d218545ab3.jpg OK
13. 01:07:086 (3) - 108,220. keep the neat of the pattern >_< , i guess no need explain more OK
14. 01:12:766 (6) - ctrl+G has a better flow and more jumpy each others previous and next here That works
15. 01:27:855 - same as Hard OK
16. Don't forget reply hitsounds that you've fixed on Normal and Hard

not a bad map for mapper who hasn't any ranked map but it still can improve more, keep fight :3 Thank you :3

Good Luck ~ Thanks~ and thank you so much for using much of your time to give such a detailed mod. I really appreciate it

streeteelf wrote:

So as I said, M4M.

[Normal]

Fix the distance snap, it has to be nearly the same for all notes, because normal diff is for beginners to "learn how to play".

00:07:055 (1) - I think this slider is nonrhythmic, you can delete reverse and make it 1/2 later. I think this is fine because 00:07:055 has a heavy sound
00:41:701 - Note here I'll think about it
01:01:583 (2,3) - Don't cover notes in Normal diff, because Normal should have ~the same distance snap in whole map.
01:05:488 (2,1) - ^
01:26:790 (3,1) - ^ These should be OK because they're on top of the slider and are onlyy one red tick apart

[Hard]

00:10:055 (4,1,2,3,1) - This part is really confusing and hard to read. OK changed
Covering 1 note below slider and then moving to next one above next slider is hard to read like: 00:28:388 (2,3,4,1). Move the circles to make them visible, because on hidden is impossible w/o memorizing these parts. Do you play hard often? Pretty sure these are common
00:41:346 (3,4,5) - It's too hard for this diff. It can appear in Insane, but not in Hard. These appear in hard alot. Follows the rhythm the best
00:44:187 (6,7,8,9) - Hard to read w/o memorizing map. Not that hard but I changed it
00:55:903 - 01:04:778 - Make sliders slower, because the music is slower in his part, so it's nicer to play. It's already slower. But I made it even slower
The whole diff I could call Insane instead of Hard looking at the difficulty of the map. o_0 (Hope you will know what I mean ) Star diff says 3.03 stars, which is average/below-average for hards

[Insane]

01:12:766 (6) - Something is wrong for me with this slider. Maybe you could change it to note? That's the point XD supposed to be fast


I think that's everything I would change. Generally maps are nice, but try to use distance snap in Normal diff and covering circled below sliders, because it's hard to read. Good luck~ Thanks~

Celizavia wrote:

enju looks asdfghjkl omg

NM
Normal

• 
  lots of imperfect blankets, i believe u should fix it OK

1. 00:11:655(1) imo the sliders should ended at 00:12:855 , the voice stopped there Fixed
2. 00:41:701 add a note here? it makes a beat sound here OK fine
3. 01:03:713 add a here also Removed because too fast after the spinner ends for normal

Hard
no problems here i suppose

GL Thanks~

CelsiusLK wrote:

This gonna be my 3rd recheck since I have free time now

[General]

1. Your combo colour seem a bit too colorful try make it more light-tone
   

   [Colours]
   Combo1 : 255,224,130
   Combo2 : 176,255,255
   Combo3 : 128,128,255
   Combo4 : 255,94,94

   Instead of changing the combo colours, I used ur lighter colours during the softer parts of the song and kept the brighter ones for the chorus etc
2. At tags include Everflower translate of tokohana OK
3. At tags Delete ed because you already tagged ending ,no need to tag ed again OK I'll finally remove it, but I don't understand why ending and ED is the same, what would happen if someone searched ED?

[Insane]

1. 00:01:255 (3,4) - x=353 y=97 so 00:00:655 (1,2,3) - will line up perfectly
2. 00:06:855 (5,6,7,1) - Bad spacing here I think try to make it a bit more reasonable spacing try DS=1.0x
3. 00:07:655 (1) - No need to NC since it doesn't change anything in term of mapping
4. 00:13:455 (1,1,1) - 3 continous spinner is a bit meh you can try replace one of theses spinners with long slider I could have had 4 including the one long slider before the 3 spinners
5. 00:20:755 (1,2,3) - DS is a bit inconsistent here
6. 00:22:175 (1,2) - DS should be 1.7x I might say that you intend to do jump here but it still not a very good spacing for jump. A jump need a bit high difference in DS your is only 0.3x which is low and may consider to be called random spacing and you must know is music there suit for a jump for this one it just doesn't suit for a jump since it only a basic starter rhythm I didn't intend for it to be a jump. I'll change it to 1.4
7. 00:23:595 (1,2,3) - Should line up by move (3) to x=280 y=296 x=280 y=288
8. 00:25:548 - Weird rhythm here some notes are overmapped try this http://puu.sh/b3bmV/4e87b32cd4.jpg Changed, but differently
9. 00:28:654 (5) - Delete this no need because it create weird flow and weird rhythm
10. 00:35:311 (2) - Should place at lower-right since it destroy good viewing (overlap with previous notes) in editor I don't really understand what this means...?
11. 00:44:187 (3) - x=294 y=148 io line up 00:43:832 (2,3) - perfectly I think it's fine, no need to line up this one
12. 00:49:157 (1,2) - This rhythm weird since you intend to put slider tail at blue line you should decrease volume of 00:49:157 (1) - 's tail so for better sounding
13. 01:21:110 (4,5) - inconsistent flow you should copy-paste 01:20:755 (2,3) - and place it at x=183 y=80

Overall this isn't good insane for me you just need more ideas to make this diff special and attractive and aesthetic

[Hard]

1. 00:13:455 (1,1,1) - Same as insane
2. 00:04:855 (1,2) - I saw your laziness here xD you should copy-paste 00:04:855 (1) - this instead of creating a new one for perfect symmetry that's what i did I dont know why it became like that....
3. 00:09:255 (2,4) - Same as above should copy-paste (2) for perfect symmetry it is a copy paste
4. 00:37:796 (3,4,1) - Should line up for better flow
5. 00:44:187 (6) - Should Ctrl+G so the pattern will same as 00:43:122 (3,4) - Umm this is ok I think
6. 00:45:962 (2,3,4) - Should line up like this http://puu.sh/b3cNe/336550c093.jpg
7. 01:04:778 (2) - Should NC to emphasis the start of best part of the music
8. 01:09:039 - I don't hear finish sound here maybe it because my skin is acting weird xD It's because I accidentally made it a normal finish instead of soft XD changed back
9. 01:09:216 (4) - x=62 y=110 so this will stack perfectly with 01:08:861 (3) - 's tail They're not stacked anymore I changed it
10. 01:10:991 (3) - x=148 y=74 so 01:10:459 (2,3) - line up better
11. 01:15:074 (7,9) - Should line up so the flow will consistent with 01:14:542 (6,8) -
12. 01:16:139 (2) - Copy this and paste it here 01:17:204 - for perfect symmetry that's what I did

I can see your improvement in mapping skill here but some notes still need to fix placement and spacing

[Normal]

1. 00:08:255 (3,4) - Nazi DS=1.0x
2. 00:35:666 (4) - x=139 y=162 so this will stack with 00:34:601 (2) - perfectly
3. 00:46:672 (3,4) - Better blanket http://puu.sh/b3dLu/c22b1d41c8.jpg
4. 01:05:844 (1) - Delete NC , no need to NC for a new vocal
5. 01:07:619 (1) - Delete NC and NC then NC 01:08:329 (6) -
6. 01:08:329 (2,1) - Should stack for better flow Newer players might be confused
7. 01:20:400 (3,2) - Should stack perfectly

Overall the problem for this diff is that you abuse repeat slider like here 00:08:855 (4,1,2) - If you put repeat slider continuous like this newbie player will be confuse but to fix this problem it will be time consuming so I will just point out this one so that you will not do this again

HS for this map looks inconsistent well I think it better to change finish HS to whistle HS and add something that more suit for finish HS
Normal diff's HS is weird you just stop doing downbeat rhythm pattern( clap on 2nd and 4th white line ) for a moment
Insane's HS compare to Hard's HS I find Hard's HS better than Insane's one I fixed up the hitsounds abit with what you said

I know you put hardwork in this but honestly it still not good enough to get bubble, I think
Well you just need to call some BAT to check this since they can give you nice information about mapping

Gonna shoot a star to encourage you Thank you so much~

Good luck
One day this map will get ranked , I'm sure I'm gonna rank this even if it takes years XD

RandomEffect wrote:

From my queue~

[General]

1. 00:19:335- this timing point is correct? I prefer -15~-20 15~20 what?

[Normal]

1. 00:00:855 (1,2) - I prefer to conbine into 1 slider Nah it's ok
2. 00:42:056 (1,3) - avoid overlapping Fixed
3. 01:06:909 (4,1) - ^ ^
4. 01:23:240 (3,1) - ^ ^

[Hard]

1. 00:45:784- add a note OK
2. 01:18:092 (6) - I prefer normal slider OK
   

[Insane]

1. 00:00:655 (1) - delete No thanks

yanaginagi <3 <3
~Good Luck~ Thank you!

Alex Li wrote:

From modding team
sry too busy in real life

[Timing]
change bpm 150 part offset to 655
[Insane]
00:00:655 - 00:11:655 I think you can use sv 0.5 or a slower sv not 1.0. cause the music is not very strong at this part. also don't put jumps like 00:03:255 (2,3,4) and 00:04:855 (3,4,5) , its ok for 00:06:255 (2,3,4,5) cause the music is strong Used 0.8
00:13:455 (1,1,1) - 3 spinner is not relly good, u can try 2 sliders + 1 spinner, it fells better No thanks. Sliders will be too long
00:31:051 (1,4) - didn't stak well
00:22:707 (4) - y sv 1.25? if u change speed u need put nc on it
00:28:388 (4) - ^
01:04:068 (2,3) - i think slider is not fitting the music, 3 1/1 notes on ds0.1 maybe more fit the music
01:14:542 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - i cant hear drums here, but there is drum stream here on 01:15:429 (1,2) , if u want fit the volcal, make jumps

[Hard]
00:00:855 - 00:18:255 same as insane I think this is not necessary for hard
01:11:879 (2,3) - fix blanket
[Normal]
01:19:690 (2,3) - ds unranknable Whoops accident. fixed
[General]
Just the same when I start mapping, like many other place can improve well, but it maybe against your style so i didnt type on. I think the quality of the map is upon u.
If i say anything makes u unhappy, say it back It's OK thanks for the mod!

Flower wrote:

Hi

Red = Unrankable stuff. Must be fixed
Blue = Highly recommended stuff. Please take careful consideration. If you decide not to follow, please reply with your reason.
Black = Only suggestions

[General]
Please confirm the title is correct. If there is no official reference, please follow the convention and name it as Tokohana (TV Size) Currently working on it. I'm gonna remove the tv size and add it to tags for now

[Hitsound]
00:06:262 - 00:07:062 - In this part, it sounds better if 00:06:262 (2) - is soft sample. Also please consider using this sound example instead of normal-nitnormal: http://puu.sh/bbhRW/932cc41f2c.wav Wow this is nice thanks!
01:21:814 - 01:26:074 - Changing to normal samples should be better. OK but I lowered the volume cuz it's kinda loud
Also, please refrain form using excessive finish sounds. In my opinion, you can remove the finishes, and re-add soft finishes on the following times: 01:21:814 - 01:21:991 - 01:22:346 - 01:22:524 - 01:22:701 - 01:23:056 - 01:23:234 - 01:23:411 - 01:23:589 - 01:23:766 - 01:23:944 - 01:24:033 - 01:24:121 - 01:24:299 - 01:24:476 - .

[Insane]
00:00:651 (1) - Object not snapped
00:07:262 (1,2,3) - Please follow distance spacing. Turn the Grid Snap off, then use DS 0.4x to optimise it.
00:24:831 (6,1) - This skipped 1/4 beat sounds a bit weird. It's up to you, but if I was you, I'll add it (stacked under 00:25:009 (1) - ). OK I added the beat but I don't know how you would stack it under 1? do you mean move 6 to 1 too?
00:46:666 (1,3,4,5) - move to x:312,y:168. this can make the spacing with 00:46:133 (5) - less confusing. I'm guessing you didn't mean to highlight 4 and 5
00:56:252 (2) - move second node to x:276,y:256. this makes it more symmetric. did you mean 3rd? 2nd doesn't make much sense
01:15:246 (5) - same as above. I think moving to x:332,y:76 should be better.
01:21:370 - highly recommend adding a note.

[Hard]
A solid and remarkable diff. Good work! ~ thanks ~
00:34:950 (4,5) - blanket can be done better. turn off grid snap and adjust with ctrl+arrow. (moving it to x:318,y:312 is fine enough)
00:40:275 (4) - how about stacking with 00:38:323 (4) - ? this must be my OCD, but it looks a bit cooler.
00:50:571 - add finish

[Normal]
00:27:849 (1,2) - Recommend to adjust them so that 2 won't touch 00:29:624 (4) - and is on the centre line. If you like you can use my adjustments for 00:27:849 (1,2,3,4,5) -

304,44,27849,6,0,P|264:80|256:136,1,112,0|8,0:0|1:0,0:0:0:0:
256,252,28559,1,0,0:0:0:0:
367,243,28914,2,0,P|359:296|310:318,1,112,4|0,1:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
201,318,29624,2,0,P|152:296|144:243,1,112,8|0,1:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
256,196,30334,2,0,L|256:84,1,112,12|4,1:0|1:0,0:0:0:0:

SPOILER

00:41:695 - 00:50:216 - Obviously you forgot adding normal examples to claps. Please do it. It wasn't accidental, I did it on purpose. But would it sound better with normal?

That's as far as I can help. Call me back when you have fixed to the mod. Good luck!