04:01:511 (2,3,4,5) - I think flipping this rhythm will be more fitting, circle on the red tick after 04:01:178 (1) - and follow with a triple kick here 04:01:844 -.
02:48:011 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5) - idk about this maybe use some sliders or maybe use this rhythm instead if want a shizo rhythm.
Example rhythm:
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01:34:844 (7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - I feel like this can shift to the right by 1/2 and delete 01:35:844 (8,9) - before shifting, so that the triples can land on the vocals which the vocals are more prominent in that part.
As for the empty space left by the 1/2 shift from the above suggestion, 01:34:678 (6) - can be a 3/4 slider and place close to 01:34:344 (4) - .
01:04:344 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - This section I feel like its better to follow the guitar?
01:03:678 (5,6,7,1) - This can be a 5 note burst thing (4 circle then follow-up with the 3/4 slider).
00:56:011 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - I feel like this section can chill out for a bit because to me this part feels too dense maybe reduce the density so that it does not feel too dense in the beginning but to let it introduce the kick sliders first and then the doubles and triples?
00:56:011 (1) - and 00:56:678 (1) - can change to a 3/4 slider and remove the following circle.
Changing those 2 sliders may tone down the density a bit.