i feel like you got the offset wrong? 1380 seemed much more fitting, and then all the rhythms fit nicely into 1/8 patterns. i don't know how you got 1/12 snappings involved
surprisingly, i don't really have anything to say after 1 minute, most of it is a bit cleaner and very deliberate (and mostly not as confusing for my pea brain) so i don't see much to add, perhaps if anything that those last parts could be made a bit more similar to the beginning for example 02:02:269 - compared to 00:00:786 - but apart from that this is really solid, very poggie i approve
01:00:138 (60138|3,60184|2) - these could be made single notes since its pretty silent except for the vocal compared to the part right before
00:57:964 (57964|0,58054|3) - consider shortening these to like 1/12 for emphasis on the different instrument
i actually did this at first, but i was scared it was too inconsistent
if you think its a good idea i shall add it back