00:07:739 (2,3) - I think you shouldnt keep distance like 00:07:242 (1,2) - because 00:07:904 (3) - have violin so you should emphasize more. that's already you did for almost violin parts.
if you didnt purpose, pls adjust 00:07:905 (3,1) - because It's not clear that 00:07:905 (3,1) - is overlapped each other or not.
00:58:131 (2,3) - in my opinion, you can emphasize more at noticeable melody. usually good maps have some highlight parts and some simplified parts, to makes map fun more.
00:32:348 (2) - in my opinion, you shouldnt go with this because 00:32:510 ignored although there is vocal.
00:16:294 (4) - when you wanna emphasize this, It'll make sense more if you take distance 00:16:131 (3,4) - longer.
01:09:285 (3,4) - 노래자체에 많이 반복되는 보컬 리듬을 표현한거라 일관성을 깰 이유가 없다고 생각해요. (00:48:221 (3,4) - 00:58:434 (4,5) - 01:11:838 (4,5) - )