00:42:863 (160,161,162,163,164) - how about making this pattern [kkddk k] as this part is very overwhelmed with dons here
00:10:258, 03:16:568. Pretty subjective. Since these sounds feel like echoes of the main sound, their emphasis feels a bit strange and I feel like removing them would make the moment clearer and create a deeper sense of spacing. I also feel like removing 03:27:863 and 03:28:215 would make the ending clearer and put a clear dot in the map.
01:35:980 - 01:47:274. This moment is absolutely identical in density with 00:00:553 - 00:10:435. Although there is an additional drum sound for every 1/1 in the music. I think you should highlight this drum sound every 1/1 to increase the density of this moment. You will have a rhythm with 5 notes out of 1/2. You can also increase the density of this moment in a way that you like better.