03:33:327 (9,10,11,12,13,14,15,16) - i think for the stream starting here you definitely can space them out a bit more
02:43:649 (12) - can probably alternatively do a kickslider here and make it closer to 02:43:811 (1) - so you get the emphasis for both layers
02:13:004 (2,3,1,2) - imo this pattern doesnt work cause theres not really a need for you to make a pattern this linear cause even the song doesnt call for it
02:04:939 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - you can space these streams out more so then it'd be consistent with how big the jump is at least