1. Easy (1.37 stars, 40 notes)
2. Normal (1.8 stars, 70 notes)
3. Parade (3.05 stars, 110 notes)

1. 00:02:304 (1) - Remove NC
2. 00:05:782 (1) - ^
3. 00:11:869 (2,1,2) - It's not equal together try to make new pattern
4. 00:16:217 (1) - Remove NC
5. 00:15:347 (1,1) - Blanket
6. 00:19:695 (1) - Remove NC
7. 00:22:956 (1) - Increse a curve for more flow
8. 00:44:043 (1) - Remove and add finish instead

1. 00:14:478 (1) - Move to x:408 y:280
2. 00:33:608 (1,2) - Blanket
3. 00:43:825 (4) - Remove and add finish instead

1. 00:07:521 (1,1) - What is this?
2. 00:24:478 (1) - Remove NC
3. 00:30:130 (1) - Increse curve?
4. 00:31:869 (1,2) - Why it's too far?

BoatKrab wrote:

Hi! from my queue ~

[Easy]

1. 00:02:304 (1) - Remove NC
2. 00:05:782 (1) - ^ I use NC at every bar line
3. 00:11:869 (2,1,2) - It's not equal together try to make new pattern I think it's ok
4. 00:16:217 (1) - Remove NC
5. 00:15:347 (1,1) - Blanket not needed
6. 00:19:695 (1) - Remove NC
7. 00:22:956 (1) - Increse a curve for more flow not needed
8. 00:44:043 (1) - Remove and add finish instead ok

[Normal]

1. 00:14:478 (1) - Move to x:408 y:280 made some change here
2. 00:33:608 (1,2) - Blanket I think it's already
3. 00:43:825 (4) - Remove and add finish instead ok

[Parade]

1. 00:07:521 (1,1) - What is this? they are two sliders, I'm sure
2. 00:24:478 (1) - Remove NC NC can help player to read anti-jump
3. 00:30:130 (1) - Increse curve? ok
4. 00:31:869 (1,2) - Why it's too far? because it's the starting of vocal

Okay finish modding
GL

ecdonald wrote:

Hello, m4m from my queue~ I could find only slight issues;_;

[Easy]
00:16:217 (1) - remove NC? I understand your reason but this is apparently a bit weird considering……

[Normal]
00:19:695 (1) - why don't you make this pararell to 00:20:130 (2) - like 00:17:956 (1,2) - pair? no, but made some change
00:34:478 (2) - move to the sliderend point to x216 y:115? the current one is not perfectly vertical to 00:33:608 (1) - (and then adjust 00:36:217 (2) - , too) sure

[Parade]
00:08:391 (1) - remove NC? considering……
00:24:478 (1) - I think softwhistle fits better agree
00:27:086 (2) - This is touching HP bar so please avoid it ok
00:29:912 (5) - why the slight gap to 00:28:391 (1) - 's end? stacking will be more neat. I wanted to stack
00:31:869 (1) - looks a bit too apart from 00:32:086 (2,3,4) - . try to like this? ok
http://puu.sh/nrPkz/c81300de35.jpg

nice map! good luck

moonlightleaf wrote:

[General]

color 1 和 2 颜色略近 ,建议换换(衣服:灰色? 128,128,128 现在的几个颜色是这片4个主角的毛色……确实有点近，把黄色稍微调亮了点，也有手环颜色支持

[Easy]

一些blanket 可以搞好些(44s的曲子 弄起来挺快的 好

SPOILER

绿线 00:07:467 改到 00:07:521

00:00:999 我觉得可以加 Whistle ,音比00:01:434 要重好

00:02:739 ^

感觉 00:03:825 之前的白线都能加 Whistle 最后只在23加了

00:42:521 (3) - 试试

SPOILER

所有难度结尾部分我目前的节奏都是主跟鼓点次跟人声，不知道你有没有关音效听原曲，我觉得这几个难度现在的下法都是没问题的

[Normal]

00:04:477 (2) - 我觉得这个没必要强制blanket, 导致接3的flow不好, 不如右边(404,224)这类地方顺些

00:05:782 (1,2) - 我建议1在00:06:217结束,然后2做成类似00:04:912 (3,4)的俩滑条,参考

SPOILER

重做了这一段

00:17:086 (3) - 折返看上去你跟叮叮音,00:17:739却没跟,改成长滑条? 00:17:521刚好是歌长音的结束点 我比较喜欢现在的样子

00:42:521 (1,2,3) - 这单点略啥,你前面都跟唱,这里就有点怪,白线都没跟

[Hard]

00:06:652 (2) - 适合3个note或者1个折返 嗯，改折返

00:13:608 (3,4) - ctrl+g比较顺flow 有前面滑条2遮挡的关系，还有人声音高的关系，暂时不想改

00:17:521 (5) - 适合滑条 先这样

00:20:130 (3,4) - ctrl+g ?(前面类似,要保持和前面一样的话 可以不考虑ctrl+g 嗯，不改

00:31:217 (4,5) - ^ 音是往下降的,5比较适合在下面 好

00:36:652 (5) - ctrl+g+j 头和00:35:782 (2)头叠? 音高关系，不太想改

00:42:955 (2,3,4) - 这样的节奏比较好:全选234然后ctrl+g

1. NC好像有点多？比如拿歌词做NC试试看？
2. 00:01:869 00:03:608这个地方真的不要么

1. 00:11:869 (5,6) - 1.9x 00:12:739 (1,2) - 1.7x?

ceLy wrote:

混个kd
[Easy]

1. NC好像有点多？比如拿歌词做NC试试看？ 强迫症没得救……不在小节线上加不舒服……先这样……
2. 00:01:869 00:03:608这个地方真的不要么 EZ不用跟那么多吧……那两个地方没有钢琴音就空着吧

[Hard]

1. 00:11:869 (5,6) - 1.9x 00:12:739 (1,2) - 1.7x? 这个事，滑条的距离这种东西其实光看系统给出的前一个滑条尾到后一个滑条开头是不够的，如果你算两组开头到开头的距离，后面其实还更远呢，毕竟打的时候判定点只有开头，所以我觉得严格按照系统的ds并不合适

就这样吧 已经懒死了 2333我服

Pata-Mon wrote:

ceLy wrote:

就这样吧 已经懒死了 2333我服

1. 就主难度勾了widescreen

1. 整体上感觉全是偏直的滑条，改弯几个1/1的滑条会比较多样有趣，更有flow的感觉，还适合某些情况做blanket
   
   随便拉了一个

   
2. 00:03:173 (3) - 这个折返听上去比较勉强，直接改成1/1滑条比较合适

1. 可以两根长白线1NC，00:15:347 (1) - 像这种看着就很突兀。。
2. 00:11:869 (2) - 低难度前后ds不要超过0.05

vanillas wrote:

所以就是这样：

Garden wrote:

[General]

1. 就主难度勾了widescreen 噫 怎么有这么蠢的失误

[Parade]

1. 整体上感觉全是偏直的滑条，改弯几个1/1的滑条会比较多样有趣，更有flow的感觉，还适合某些情况做blanket 我再看看……
   
   随便拉了一个

   
2. 00:03:173 (3) - 这个折返听上去比较勉强，直接改成1/1滑条比较合适 原曲有三角铁音

[Easy]

1. 可以两根长白线1NC，00:15:347 (1) - 像这种看着就很突兀。。 治疗强迫症道阻且长……好几个人都说这个nc那我还是去掉吧……其他的就不管了
2. 00:11:869 (2) - 低难度前后ds不要超过0.05 嗯 摆歪了

good luck~

uuuget wrote:

[parade]
00:11:434 (3,4) - ctrl+g flow看上去好些（不改也可以） 不改
00:14:478 (1) - 和00:28:391 (1) - NC感觉应该后移（因为整体感觉NC是跟歌词的） 我全跟的小节线
00:37:086 (1,1) - 间距好小啊，不过低od问题应该也不大 note接转盘无所谓吧
00:42:521 可以考虑做一个音量递减，或者做一个下降的flow 不觉得这里有减弱的感觉

easy和normal没什么好说的 orz这摸有点水

Regraz wrote:

M4M on QQ requests.

[Easy]
00:32:304 (1) - Position too edgy, also the flow from its previous slider is quite poor. 移上了一点

00:36:652 Add a note here, there's a vocal need mapping out. 好

[Hard]

00:07:521 (1,1) - Not recommend such slider shapes, though you want to create such curve pattern to match the background music. 先这样

00:37:086 (1,1) - at least 1/4 space between note and the spinner after it. 好

00:37:141 (1) - Add a hisound on the end of the spinner to follow the drum. 好

00:41:651 (4,1) - Still needs further spacing for this to indicate this is not 1/2. 好
--------------------------------------------
00:30:782 (2,3) - such large spacing is beyond what can be tolerated in Hard, and it is quite abrupt.
Placing jumps is ok and also approved, yet dont let them exceed 2.3x because you need to take spread into consideration 改了一下，现在是2.36

00:24:912 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - Move these a little upward so that 4 wont touches to edge of the play area. 好

Nothing much to say, this map is a nice trial!
Good luck!

DreaM117er wrote:

m4m~

[General]

1. this song can make Insane, if you want. 强烈欢迎gd www
2. No problem.

[Easy]

• 
  00:22:956 (1) - I really think you can straight this slider, not use this slider 00:21:434 (1) - to blanket 好
  00:34:912 - add circle 但是我前面类似的地方也没跟
  00:42:521 (1) - no need this NC 唔……

[Normal]

• 
  00:00:999 (2) - use 1/2 slider to follow sound on red line 00:01:217 - 前面这段低难度不想跟那么紧
  00:25:782 (3,1) - you should try to avoid some stacking in Normal diff, seriously. remove 00:26:652 (1) - , 00:25:782 (3) - add reverse, then add a circle on 00:27:086 - 故意叠的。实际上在现在的rank图的nm难度里有很多这种例子，而且这里间隔也不算短
  00:35:347 (1) - avoid stacking. Rotate this slider to parallel with 00:32:521 (3) - . Then 00:36:217 (2) - this one remember to fix 也先保持

[Parade]

• 
  00:02:304 (1) - slider's tail on 1/3 don't fit sounds, try to use circle on white line 这种长音更适合用滑条跟，然后就是停在1/3和1/2的选择，前后同样位置都是1/3，所以先保持
  00:03:173 (3) - no reverse. Add a circle on 00:03:608 不改
  00:07:521 (1) - and 00:08:391 (1) - I know you follow long sound here. But still use 1/1 slider more better than now. Then seems very strange looks here. 1/1感觉还不如用两拍折返……我再考虑一下吧，实在不行就跟e和n一样
  00:10:999 - seems your notes follow vocal here, why don't you start on 00:09:695 - ?? 这个小节鼓点也没进来，空着比较有趣
  00:17:412 - you can add circle here, have a drum sound here. 感觉没有那么明显的声音
  00:17:739 - add circle?? if you want, 00:27:847 - here add circle too. 都先保持
  00:23:391 (2) - use DS, no sensce to increase space here 不改

1. that's all.

Good luck

1. Checked from the official website of the anime: http://mouiidesukara.com/bd/, I found that the CD picture of following.
   
   and the tv size of the song is not included in the CD, so we should follow it in the opening.
   
   due to the artist is so long with () so keep it the same as it in album, so:
   

   Romanised Artist: Earth Star Dream
   Title: 夢色トリドリパレード♫
   Romanised title: Yumeiro Toridori Parade

2. why no video?

1. 作为easy难度节奏都是比较简单的，所以没有必要一拍就换一个nc，nc换太多新手看不到following point会读图不清，可以两拍再换一个
2. 00:44:043 (1) - 改成一个从00:43:825 - 开始的1/2 slider？

1. 00:23:608 (3,1) - 这个挡在nm里面有点难读，换个地方吧

1. 00:07:521 (1,1) - 讲道理我觉得有点丑啊
2. 00:22:956 (1,2) - 最好保持和前者00:22:304 (4,5) - 同一ds

Minakami Yuki wrote:

1. Just some complaints.
2. My personal suggestions.
3. Highly recommended.
4. Unrankable, you have to fix it.

General

1. Checked from the official website of the anime: http://mouiidesukara.com/bd/, I found that the CD picture of following.
   ……
   已修正
2. why no video?
   已添加

Easy

1. 作为easy难度节奏都是比较简单的，所以没有必要一拍就换一个nc，nc换太多新手看不到following point会读图不清，可以两拍再换一个
   好
2. 00:44:043 (1) - 改成一个从00:43:825 - 开始的1/2 slider？
   虽然那样比较合曲，但因为整个难度所有滑条的长度都至少有一拍，我更倾向于保持

Normal

1. 00:23:608 (3,1) - 这个挡在nm里面有点难读，换个地方吧 好

Parade

1. 00:07:521 (1,1) - 讲道理我觉得有点丑啊 太多人吐槽这里了，那么就改成跟e和n一样的折返滑条吧
2. 00:22:956 (1,2) - 最好保持和前者00:22:304 (4,5) - 同一ds 好

改好叫我
最好还是把video加上

Minakami Yuki wrote:

Bubbled!

good luck with your 1st set. >.<

Regraz wrote:

Mark. Will check soon.
No Kudosu for this post!

[General]
No 192kbps MP3? 我所有图都用的128……唔，有点强迫症的感觉，希望尽量让文件更小
00:09:695 - Better snap your Preview Time here. 我觉得把预览点放提前一点会让预览的时候听起来更舒服一点点
Why placing the timing point with negative time value? You can put it at 565 actually. 移了

[Easy]
00:17:086 (3) - Position too edgy, overlapping with the hit-offset meter if the player enables. Move this somewhat upward. 好
00:28:391 (1) - The shape of the slider is still not satisfying, this is recommended: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4681187 感觉还可以，先保留一下
00:30:999 (4,1) - Flow here is really broken. 改了
00:40:782 (1,2,3,4) - You start these four sliders at red-lines, with 1/2 in between, so I'd recommend using this rhythm for the last one, so that the 1/2 spacing could be kept here regularly, which in turns makes this section easier for new players to catch. Additionally, the vocals here could be covered better. 修改了一下这里下的节奏

[Normal]
00:34:478 (2,1) - This overlap is not recommended. 改了

[Hard]
Spacings are still too high for me, better to reduce your spacing especially the square patterns. (to 2.0x or so would be nice imo)
这张图的cs3.5，圈比较大，相对来说ds远一点我想也还可以吧。还是稍微处理了一下
00:16:217 (1) - Also move this upward a little, it is touching the edge.
00:20:130 (3) - ^
00:21:760 (2) - ^
00:25:565 (4) - ^ 调整了这部分的位置

00:16:869 (2,3,4,5) - 00:30:782 (2,3,4,5) - Keep consistent spacing for them. Since they are literally the same. 先保留了
00:35:347 (1,2) - 2.52x is really beyong what can be tolerated, even if with the leniency of sliders. 改了

Well you can call me back when you think you are ready, and I guess I would re-bubble this so you could find Minakami Yuki or ByBy13 again for 2nd nomination (if possible).

Regraz wrote:

Fine for me now. Rebubbled!

Minakami Yuki wrote:

qualifed.

good luck <3

Irreversible wrote:

Hey Pata-Mon!

Just some small things that bothered me before this can go to the ranked section (from my point of view).

[Hard]

00:07:521 (1) - Well, this slider really looks kind of sloppy. There are many cool slider shapes you could choose from, so I recommend rethinking that one!
00:32:521 (4) - This slider as a repeatslider does not really fit. You've followed the vocals with the start which is fine, but 00:32:956 - this vocal just seems too essential to ignore, so please make it clickable. You have used it at other times where it fits, but reason why it does not fit here is because the vocals actually get heavier - that's why it creates an odd effect.

[Normal]

00:07:521 (1) - If you choose this slider form, then please make the curve nice Like you did in easy.

Good luck with requalifying, should not take too long!

ByBy13 wrote:

Since it got DQ'ed, maybe you can change the BG since the current one isn't really related to music.You can find one with this anime expressing happiness and fun.The current one is just a screenshot from an episode from this anime.
You can call me back for rebubble/requalify if you want. c:

ByBy13 wrote:

Made few changes like adding drum finish at the beginning,adding two sliderslides which are used and the bg has been changed to a bg which looks like a family portrait but it fits the song since the persons from the picture are smiling

IRC

12:14 *ByBy13 is editing [http://osu.ppy.sh/b/916696 Earth Star Dream - Yumeiro Toridori Parade [Normal]]
12:14 ByBy13: at first part
12:14 ByBy13: for all diffs
12:14 ByBy13: there are cymbal sounds like 00:00:565 -
12:15 ByBy13: 00:02:304 -
12:15 ByBy13: so adding drum finish would emphasize them since the cymbal are like strong drums noticeable in song
12:19 Pata-Mon: added
12:19 ByBy13: in all diffs?
12:20 Pata-Mon: yes
12:20 ByBy13: oki
12:21 *ByBy13 is editing [http://osu.ppy.sh/b/916696 Earth Star Dream - Yumeiro Toridori Parade [Normal]]
12:22 ByBy13: 00:34:478 (2)- This 1/2 slider with a reverse sounds a bit awful to the music bg because it doesn't fit anything here in my point of view.no drums,no vocals,it doesn't fit nothing really well here.I would like to remove the repeat and make it into a normal 1/2 slider plus adding a note on 00:34:912 - since there's is a noticeable beat
12:25 Pata-Mon: i think 00:34:695 - fit vocal
12:25 Pata-Mon: "de" of "i ka ke de"
12:26 ByBy13: 00:43:391 (3)- this note can be a 1/2 slider starting from 00:43:173 - to give some emphasis to that beat from that 1/1 tick.Moreover,you have to move 00:43:825 (4)- to 00:43:608 - to keep going the following of the instruments in properly way and you have to add a circle at 00:44:043 - to emphasize the final cymbal
12:26 ByBy13: oh wait
12:26 ByBy13: ah yeah
12:26 ByBy13: the beats
12:26 ByBy13: i forgot to check with slow down :(
12:29 Pata-Mon: and at the end, i want to follow the drum only so i want to persist
12:29 ByBy13: oki
12:34 *ByBy13 is editing [http://osu.ppy.sh/b/916788 Earth Star Dream - Yumeiro Toridori Parade [Parade]]
12:35 ByBy13: 00:28:174 (6,1)- maybe a little jump here? the vocals are stronger between these objects and adding a jump would emphasize them in my point of view
12:36 Pata-Mon: thers is, but 00:27:521 (3,4,5,6,1) - form a pentagon
12:36 Pata-Mon: maybe now is a bit more beautiful
12:36 ByBy13: oki
12:37 ByBy13: but i said between 6 and 1
12:37 ByBy13: =w=
12:37 Pata-Mon: yes
12:37 ByBy13: okay
12:37 Pata-Mon: the start of 00:28:391 (1) -  and00:27:521 (3,4,5,6) -
12:37 Pata-Mon: form a pentagon
12:37 ByBy13: yes
12:38 ByBy13: well just my opinion
12:38 ByBy13: since on (1) the vocals are like they're screaming ;o
12:38 Pata-Mon: a jump is fit for the music i agree
12:39 ByBy13: i know
12:39 Pata-Mon: but sometimes i consider about something other
12:39 ByBy13: oh ok ;o
12:41 ByBy13: also you can add sliderslide
12:41 ByBy13: to silence the sliderbodies
12:42 Pata-Mon: hmm
12:42 Pata-Mon: ok
12:43 Pata-Mon: added
12:43 ByBy13: ok
12:43 ByBy13: now update =w=
12:43 Pata-Mon: ing
12:43 ByBy13: oki
12:44 Pata-Mon: done
12:44 ByBy13: okie
12:47 ByBy13: set S and D all to S:C1 and D:C1
12:48 ByBy13: the sliderslides are unused
12:48 Pata-Mon: oh forgot
12:50 Pata-Mon: have updated
12:50 ByBy13: okay
12:54 ByBy13: all seems to be fine now

Rebubbled!

Regraz wrote:

Let's try again!

KaedekaShizuru wrote:

恭喜 1st~！

Garden wrote:

恭喜啦

Minakami Yuki wrote:

啊

Karen wrote:

难道就这样夺走了瓜子哥的处女泡和处女心，宝宝心里苦
恭喜恭喜

Asukasukisuki wrote:

恭喜rank！
爷爷实在是飞得太快了