Skeuddy wrote:

Hello, Shiroi Hiroshi, from my queue : hello skeuddy , thanks a lots

Oni

1. 00:09:932 and 00:10:020 - Some note (kat's) ok
2. 00:12:049 and 00:12:137 - ^ (kat's) ok
3. 00:52:987 - ^ ok
4. 00:59:869 (199,205) - ^ (don's)
5. 01:26:163 - ^
6. 01:53:869 - ^
7. 02:13:105 - ^
8. 02:22:987 - ^
9. 02:24:487 - ^ (k) and 02:24:399 (172) - k
10. 02:32:340 - ^ (d) and 02:32:075 (225) - d
11. 02:49:987 - ^
12. 02:50:340 and 02:50:693 - ^
13. 00:24:222 (35,36) - Swap
14. 01:02:340 (209,210) - ^ and 01:03:399 (212) - k
15. 01:04:458 (215,217) - ^ and 01:04:810 (216) - k
16. 01:06:222 (220,221) - ^
17. 01:16:458 (252,253) - ^
18. 01:23:163 (273,274) - ^
19. 01:30:752 (304,306) - ^
20. 01:35:163 (327,328) - ^
21. 01:36:222 (333,335) - ^
22. 01:45:399 (9,10) - ^
23. 01:46:458 (12,13) - ^
24. 01:59:869 (64,65) - ^
25. 01:06:928 (222) - d
26. 01:07:987 (225) - ^
27. 01:08:869 (229) - ^
28. 01:17:340 (255,258) - ^
29. 01:37:105 (336,337,338) - ^
30. 01:43:281 (3) - ^
31. 01:52:810 (42) - ^
32. 01:09:752 (233) - k
33. 01:24:399 (277,278,280,281) - ^
34. 01:38:340 (341,342) - ^
35. 01:58:105 (55,61) - ^
36. 02:00:575 (66) - ^
37. 04:34:458 (10) - ^
38. 04:36:575 (16) - ^
39. 00:26:163 (44,46,48,50) - Delete
40. 02:38:693 (237,238) and 02:42:928 (246) - ^
41. 03:24:222 (442) - Remove finisher. Not rankable
42. 00:33:663 (79,80,81,82,83,84) - On one 1/4 tick to the right
43. 02:17:781 (139,140,141) - ^
44. 00:35:340 - 00:51:399 - Don's and kat's not feet on sounds. Sure, place their on song
45. 02:51:046 - 03:24:222 - ^
46. 03:24:928 - 04:14:693 - ^
47. 04:41:163 - 04:47:516 - ^
48. 01:41:340 - End of spin
49. 01:57:752 - End of slider
50. 04:26:075 (738) to 04:26:163

Good luck!

Surono wrote:

needs Improving mod? lel [2]

1. Nice TATOE previews
   
2. 
   
3. BG is fine, just do this

1. 00:00:000 - delete this
2. 00:16:958 (30) - remove finisher,, 2over4hit
3. 00:16:958 (30) - delete don and make this kat to finisher *wat de hell kd 1/8*
4. 00:16:958 (30) - have pitch, add don
5. 00:29:163 - move to 00:28:987 - and 00:29:163 - add this don
6. 00:30:310 - delete or change don
7. 00:33:663 - i see over on here
8. 00:35:693 - ~ 00:51:399 - wuw long 1/2, why not adding 1/4 patterns and rest? XD
9. 00:52:458 - give finisher, and 00:52:458 - ~ 01:07:987 - ^same issue, and now many 1/1 XD
10. 01:55:810 - wrong slider? vocal started 01:55:987 - on here

Surono wrote:

to lazy with reply on Skeudy mod, and lazy mapping? XD wuuehh > kinda ;_; , i had school to do so

>General

1. Nice TATOE previews > glad you like it and sorry not check aimod , i think fixed now ?
   
2. 
   
3. BG is fine, just do this

err what is that for ? ok fixed

>Tehaco Sepeda what ?

1. 00:00:000 - delete this done
2. 00:16:958 (30) - remove finisher,, 2over4hit k
3. 00:16:958 (30) - delete don and make this kat to finisher *wat de hell kd 1/8* k
4. 00:16:958 (30) - have pitch, add don already did , hope so
5. 00:29:163 - move to 00:28:987 - and 00:29:163 - add this don yep , sound make sense now , thanks mr.
6. 00:30:310 - delete or change don changed to D ?
7. 00:33:663 - i see over on here : then what should i do ? add d ? K ? or smash the screen
8. 00:35:693 - ~ 00:51:399 - wuw long 1/2, why not adding 1/4 patterns and rest? XD , i dont get it
9. 00:52:458 - give finisher, and 00:52:458 - ~ 01:07:987 - ^same issue, and now many 1/1 XD oh ok add pattern with ^ , im confused now
10. 01:55:810 - wrong slider? vocal started 01:55:987 - on here

i taught its right ? isnt it ?

sry just it, i am will looking to clock, dem frgt in laptop have clock *midnight modding intensilfelfsss*
your many 1/2.. i cant make long mod bcus.. lazy, afraid if map is destroy, and this map like WIP @_@ still need improve by Mapper, not modder :'D
Cya, Gluck

Shiroi Hiroshi wrote:

mr. your english is very good

lidahapi wrote:

need ctb GD? :3/

lidahapi wrote:

Thank you ;w;

I'll make it as soon as i can

With lyrics SB + Translation ;w;

1. OD5~6?
2. 00:35:340 -01:26:340 - 02:51:046 - 04:15:752 - x2!? too fast. how about 1.25~1.5
   ↓ is example.
3. 00:37:458 (99) - delete?
4. 00:45:222 (137) - delete?
5. 00:48:399 (155) - delete?
6. 00:50:516 - delete

ManP wrote:

yo! from my queue :3

First,I suggest that place more 1/4 notes
Second,please place over 1/4 rest in kiai time.
Third,1st red line have to be placed on 1st note.

[Oni]

1. OD5~6?
2. 00:35:340 -01:26:340 - 02:51:046 - 04:15:752 - x2!? too fast. how about 1.25~1.5
   ↓ is example.
3. 00:37:458 (99) - delete?
4. 00:45:222 (137) - delete?
5. 00:48:399 (155) - delete?
6. 00:50:516 - delete

nice song. ihope it gets ranked

lidahapi wrote:

oh no, incoming mods, i haven't finish the sb yet ;w;

-Sh1n1- wrote:

Sh1n1's M4M Taiko Queue~~

About

1. d is don note
2. k is kat note
3. D is finish don note
4. K is finish kat note

General

1. HP: 5 ok fine

Intense mod in comming :3 ayyy thanks

Oni

1. 00:13:285 (26) - should be d to keep consistency with 00:10:814 (18,19) - ok nice
2. if you applied my previous advice make sure to Hold Ctrl+G at 00:13:990 (27,28) - to contrast 00:12:932 (25,26) - ay fine
3. 00:15:547 (30) - high piano sound, change to d, same as 00:16:958 (32) - sure
4. 00:26:869 - did you miss a note here? ups don will be match ?
5. 00:27:752 (55) - should be d to add variation of these patterns: 00:23:163 (37,38,39) - 00:25:281 (46,47,48) -
6. 00:30:046 - you are skipping and important sound to make an overmapped stream, I suggest you to move 00:30:310 (66) - to 00:30:046 - and them delete 00:30:663 (70) - to cath a better rhythm. okay okay
7. 00:33:222 - missing note here, too. e you right don will be okay ?
8. 00:35:340 (87,88,89,90,91) - what the hell :O overmapped bro, really, I'll suggest one pattern, it's up to you: well someone suggest it but you right again , best modder i ever see mr.
   - 00:35:605 (90) - move to 00:34:987 -
   - add a note at 00:35:252 - and make sure that from 00:35:163 - to 00:35:516 - could be changed into this pattern: kkddk ok
9. Hold Ctrl+G at 00:35:693 (91,92) - because drum is at 00:35:869 -, furthermore following piano 00:35:869 (92,93) - such notes should be similar, 00:36:222 (94,95,96) - should be like your previous patterns, and 00:36:752 (97) - is not necessary, the song is intense indeed but you should add more breaks at certain places, for example, transitions. from 00:35:693 - to 00:37:281 - your pattern should be like dkkdkd ddk, after that, k could be added at 00:36:134 - sure
10. 00:37:810 (102) - 00:38:516 (106) - 00:38:869 (108) - are not necessary to follow song nicer, intensity is decreasing, your patterns should reflect that. eee no ?
11. 00:37:987 (103) - should be k following drums and 00:39:575 (112) - should be deleted to emphasize 00:39:752 (113,114,115,116,117,118,119) - great idea
12. from 00:40:105 - to 00:41:869 - you did calm part and then with the same sound you change your patterns from 00:42:222 - to 00:45:046 -, you should keep consistency with first pattern or make something similar, for example 00:42:399 (121) - and 00:43:105 (125) - could be deleted and 00:43:987 (130) - should be D to emphasize high pitch. ok deleted
13. 00:49:458 (159) - should be deleted, you need more breaks at certain places. ok deleted
14. 00:54:222 (175,176,177,178,179) - why stream at places like that? you are on the calmest part of the song, streams are not allowed imo, delete 00:54:310 (176,177,178) - sure deleted sorry im bad at streaming
15. 01:00:752 (194) - could be removed if you want to add more emphasis at 01:00:928 (195) - okay
16. 01:21:046 (253,254,255,256,257,258,259) - overmapped detected, 01:21:046 (253) - strong beat, 01:21:134 (254) - should be deleted. too much overmapped
17. I'm not sure about this: 01:24:222 (266,267,268,269,270,271,272) -, 01:24:222 (266) - strong beat here, so 01:24:399 (267) - should be removed, and 01:24:752 (269,270) - might sound nicer with k k okay
18. from 01:26:340 - we could start to add more triplets cuz Oni need more triplets, now is like an Hard Muzukashii, for example add d at 01:26:958 - and delete 01:28:634 - to keep balance with breaks hooo nice
19. add k at 01:31:193 - to add more triplets, it will more fun this diff :3 whoaaa nice such elite mapper
20. remenber that you should add more breaks as I said before, on this section: 01:31:810 (300) - and 01:32:869 (306) - should be deleted to add more variety keeping balance of breaks. okay~
21. I can hear a 5-plet from 01:34:458 - to 01:34:810 - try this pattern: kkddk whoa nice
22. a note should be added on 01:35:428 - d or k ?
23. Ok, 01:39:046 (1) - spin follow voice nicer but consider that you are mapping an Oni diff, should be replaced by notes imo, spin will be good from 01:42:222 - to 01:42:928 - okay okay T-T
24. if you applied my previous advice make sure to change 01:43:281 (5) - into [b]D, because I heared a cymbal sound. furthermore at 01:43:899 - a note should be added. okay
25. we need more breaks at kiai: 01:45:575 - 01:48:046 - i forget
26. 01:46:016 - 01:47:428 - you should add notes at these places too, furthemore at 01:50:252 - there is an important triplet that you can't ignore.
27. why you didn't add notes at 01:51:134 - 01:51:222 - 01:51:487 - 01:51:575 - bcause im newbie , okay added
28. 01:51:752 (49) - should be finish note, K will be good. you are evil
29. 01:52:722 - note here too and 01:53:516 (59,60,61,62,63) - works better at triplet than 5-plet, delete 01:53:605 (60) - okayyy
30. 01:54:222 (63,64,65,66,67) - song didn't decrease, keep consistency with previous patterns, add notes at 01:54:752 - 01:54:399 - 01:54:046 -
31. add notes at 01:58:193 - 01:58:546 - 01:58:899 - to follow piano. okay
32. 01:59:693 (77) - this note could be deleted to add one stream from 01:59:869 - to 02:00:222 -: kkkkd might sound nicer okay
33. add a note at 02:01:193 -
34. we need more breaks on kiai time as I said before, notes that should be deleted: 02:02:516 (94) - 02:04:987 - fine
35. a note could be added on 02:02:958 - 02:05:428 - 02:07:193 - 02:08:075 - 02:08:428 - 02:08:516 - okay
36. to avoid loooong mod try to keep consistency with my advices to the next part.

see you next time ?

Good Luck Shiroi :3

NlHIL wrote:

[Oni]
00:09:843 (14) - this is calm part and there are no sound... remove? y
00:11:961 (20) - ^ok

01:09:928 - why are you ignoring this kind of sounds? If ignore these...
remove 01:10:810 (216) - 01:11:869 (219) - 01:12:928 (222) - 01:13:987 (225) - 01:15:046 (227) - and many?
(ofcourse you can add 01:21:399 - 01:23:516 - 01:25:634 - 01:25:810 - 01:25:987 - and...) fix
01:40:987 - add here and start the slider from 01:41:163 - ?what if no .-. ?
01:55:987 (78) - end at 01:57:752 - ...bad isnt it ?
02:17:781 (186,187,188) - move 1/4 right and you can add 02:18:134 - as 02:20:252 (199) - fix and fix in other way

02:51:046 - to 03:23:869 - It has really little spacing... how about set it kiai time? hope qat not mad about alots kiai

03:41:869 - to 03:54:222 - what happened to you? remove some?okay okay

04:22:281 - 05:17:163 - add add what ?

Nanatsu wrote:

you should change source as beatmania IIDX 21 SPADA. not just beatmania IIDX.

and you can delete 21 on tag.

try to change 1365x768 BG size to 1366x768. according to this rule '1024x768 pixels for 4:3, 1366x768 pixels for 16:9'

Oni

* the diff has so many unsnapped notes. you can check them from AiMOD.

* 00:09:990 - it has sound. i think you can add here or kind of re-arrange

* 00:12:108 - ^

* 00:28:810 (56) - k

* 00:30:399 (64,65,66) - change them to d to give distinction on song pitch with 00:30:222 (63,67) - those d

* 00:33:928 (79) - d

* 00:36:928 (96) - k

* 00:37:634 - 00:39:752 - you can add 1/4 triplets such as previous pattern

* 00:43:281 - 00:48:222 - ^

* 00:50:869 (161) - d

* 00:52:987 (167) - d

* 01:07:987 (203) - change to k because it goes high pitch

* 01:13:105 (224) - d for consistency

* 01:20:516 (253) - ^

* 01:39:046 - 01:41:163 - try to make pattern such as 01:26:340 - 01:28:458 - this kind of for consistency

* 01:53:869 (70) - k

* 01:44:781 - add d

* 01:58:105 - 01:58:987 - make them all triplets. i believe this would be great to follow music sound

* 02:00:840 - add d

* 02:04:546 - add d

* 02:09:840 - add

* 02:10:546 (168) - i think you dont need 5 notes for here. delete it

* 02:11:163 - 02:16:105 - add some triplets on here too

* 02:32:693 - add d

* 03:01:634 (382) - change to k for pitch

* 03:04:899 - add d

* 03:06:928 - 03:07:810 - try to use some pattern here

* 03:15:840 - add and 03:16:105 (459) - k

* 03:20:252 (485) - k

* 03:33:222 (548,549) - swap dk

* 03:33:752 - 03:36:222 - try to match k sound to vocal sound

* 03:40:987 - 03:41:693 - use some k on here

* 04:05:252 - add

* 04:07:369 - add

* 04:12:663 - add

* 04:20:075 - add

* 04:21:134 - add

* 04:22:546 - add

* 04:30:928 - 04:31:458 - as i said on 02:11:163 - 02:16:105 - here

* 04:33:840 - add

* 04:37:193 - add

* 04:39:134 - add

* 04:42:310 - aadd

* 04:43:634 - 04:48:575 - try to put triplets

* 04:53:958 - add

* 04:56:075 - add

* 04:59:252 - add

* 05:00:222 - 05:02:252 - add some notes on here

* 05:04:546 - 05:05:428 - why didnt you put notes here? try to put more

* 05:07:458 - add k

* 05:10:899 - add

* 05:16:193 - add

* 05:19:634 - 05:23:340 - try to use some tripplets

kind of fast modding because i have working for today sorry T.T I must have many missed parts to suggest and detail things.

and you should use more various patterns if you want to remain it as 'Oni' diff. the basic element on map was good though.

therefore, i believe you can improve this map further good luck!

gokugohan12468 wrote:

Dragon hah?
This is BG for you~


I think this picture cover used sword :> (similiar adventure :v)

gameuse wrote:

Hello there! I don't have a lot of experience with taiko beatmap modding, but I will do whatever I can to help you!

First I will suggest adding sliders here:
02:35:163 (339) - Add slider that ends 02:36:046 uhh no
02:38:340 (343) - ^ that ends 02:38:869 no
02:39:399 (344) - ^ that ends 02:40:281no ._.
02:42:575 (350) - ^ that ends 02:43:281
02:43:634 (351) - ^ that ends 02:44:340 ^ slider doesnt make sense at taiko diff
03:56:693 (760) - should be a spinner which ends 03:57:840i will think about it .-.
04:58:281 (170,171,172,173) - delete these and replace with a slider no
04:58:987 (174,175,176,177,178) - ^no
05:19:458 add a note here? sure
05:28:105 (13) - replace note with a spinner which ends 05:29:340 handbreak

General:
03:50:693 (733,734,735,736,737,738,739,740,741,742,743,744,745,746,747,748,749,750,751) - This part sounds weird. I think you should leave the background music alone and just focus on the lyrics. few note if just follow lyric , follow bg music kinda fine

Timing:
03:23:869 please end the fourth kiai mode here .will think about it
04:30:399 5th kiai should end heresame as above , kinda fine i guess

I hope this mod will help! Thanks for doing an m4m

L1m3s wrote:

Hi, from my mod queue. hi lim3s

d = don, red note
k = kat, blue note
D = don finisher, big red note
K = kat finisher, big blue note

mod

General
There are bunch of finishers at the end of 1/4 patterns which I don't think are rankable because they aren't at the end of the pattern or they follow the same note:
e.g. ddD, kdD, Kdd aren't rankable I'm pretty sure.


Verflucht
Just pointing out finisher-related bits first:
00:35:516 (91) - ddD, finisher not preceded by different note.
01:43:281 (8) - ddD, finisher not preceded by different note.
02:59:516 (426) - kkddD, finisher not preceded by different note.
04:49:634 (118) - Ddd, finisher not at the end of 1/4.
05:06:575 (12) - Kdd, finisher not at the end of 1/4.
05:11:869 (47) - kkK, finisher not preceded by different note.
05:15:046 (61) - Kdd, finisher not at the end of 1/4. delete all finisher

Now for the rest... (mostly just pitch)
00:10:814 (17,18) - d k instead of k d fits better with how you're following the pitch in this first part. ok
00:12:932 (23,24) - ^sure
00:16:252 (29,30) - Same with the above point, due to pitch I think these two notes should be the same (either k k or d d). Maybe use d k d d nice idea for 00:14:873 (27,28,29,30)?
00:17:311 - You could add a short spinner here? Not really necessary though. no
00:22:773 (34) - This note is snapped weirdly, I think 00:22:811 is better. thanks for notice
00:24:134 - There is an audible sound here, you could add a k here to make a 1/4 kd double. sound weird .-.
00:26:252 - ^ ok make sense
00:53:163 (192,193) - Following the vocal pitch, I think these two should be the same (again either k k or d d). 00:53:163 huh?(192,193,194,195,196,197) could be d d d d k d? maybe
00:55:281 (196,197) - This is fundamentally the same as 01:03:752 (217,218), where I think it fits better as k d as you mapped it the second time.ok
01:01:634 (213,214,215,216) - Same idea with the above points, though I understand if your aim was to get a bit more variation. heh ?
02:06:046 - Add a d? add
02:21:399 - ^add
02:21:752 (271,272) - Matching the pitch again, this sounds better as k k imo. fine
02:22:810 (274,275,276) - Ctrl+g so k lands on the higher pitched note. Maybe use k k d too? changed diffrent way
02:28:987 (318,319) - ddk instead of k k? change diffrent way
02:30:840 - Add a d to make kdk or use a ddk? added d
02:31:193 - ^ except it'll just be ddk. kinda weird but ok
02:32:252 - ^ to make kdd. uh.. ok
02:40:810 (346) - Change to K? kay
04:34:987 - There is a drum beat here, add a d to make kdddd? huh ?

Hope it helps

Raiden wrote:

Message me when you finish applying these mods.

On a side note: I'd change diff name to Oni to avoid getting slapped by Ono.

S a n d wrote:

Taiko mod request from: Shiroi Hiroshi
Request Type: M4M
Request Diff: Oni
Modding Content: Oni
*Note: I mod map according to my style of mapping, so sorry if it is unpractical >_<*


- I don't think Ono allows custom difficulty name ;w;... I had to change mine from "The Undying Oni" to "Inner Oni" aha ok changed


- 00:10:814 (17,18) - Ctrl + G? The pitch fits more. ok
- 00:12:932 (23,24) - ^
- 00:22:773 - Miss snapped note. If it should be there, there probably is BPM change. i think its fine
- 00:35:340 - ddD or kkK is unrankable TwT (I know, I cry too ;w;). But you can make it kkD or ddK detelete bid don
- 01:37:546 - Add k here? Flows better. nice idea
- 01:41:340 ~ 01:42:222- Remove spinner and change to this? kinda diffrent added
- 01:43:105 - No ddD again ;w; delete finisher
- 02:00:222 - Change to D? ok nice
- 02:11:869 ~ 02:12:928 - Change to ? Flows and plays much better. changed kinda diffrent .-.
- 02:21:399 - Add d here? There's a sound here5 plet rankable ?
- 02:21:752 - Change to k? The pitch is real high here.ok
- 02:24:310 - Remove here and 02:24:840 also 02:25:016 add d? It fits the song much better fine
- 02:27:752 ~ 02:28:810 - Change to ? It fits the song better changed
- 02:28:987 - k k k k -> kdk kdk? It fits the song better o.o a
- 02:59:516 - kkddD is unrankable ;w; delete finisher
- 03:06:928 - Change to k? It sounds better. sure
- 03:23:869 - Finisher here?finish
- 03:41:163 - Change to d? There is a change in pitch. eew
- 03:49:634 - d d d d D -> ddd ddd D? Fits the triplet in the background. hoo sure
- 03:56:693 - Change to K? It's the same sounds as 03:57:752 its already Kat's
- 04:32:428 - Add d? Gives a better emphasize to k at 04:32:693deathstream
- 04:32:693 - Change to K? It kinda fits better lol yeah
- 04:35:075 - Add d? Sounds better with the kddd before yes
- 05:15:046 - Kdd is unrankable ;w;. dont blame me , someone suggest it and i taught is rakable

Nice song, GL ranking :3

Raiden wrote:

orz I was going to mod and I see this mod again haha. PM me when you apply it

newyams99 wrote:

Hi from queue~
Sorry I'm late x.x

Oni

00:05:343 (5,6) - Ctrl + G? I think this sounds better. haha yep

00:24:222 (39,40) - ^ sure

00:30:399 (68,69,70) - It's possible to make this into a 1/6 rhtyhm. uh.. i want keep it

00:27:399 (54,55,56) - Match to 00:23:163 (35,36,37)? I like to keep it consistent since it sounds very similar, and hits 35-37 sounded the best. ok

00:31:987 (76) - Change to k, for the same reason as above. You may have had a d d d rhythm here to contrast with the next hit, but I think the sound that you're contrasting to is present at 00:23:869 (38) as well. changed a bit diffrent

00:35:252 - You can add a d here. okay

00:37:458 - This break moment feels a bit weird imo. Add hits? h... okay

00:39:752 (122,123,124,125,126,127,128,129,130,131,132) - This is fine, but I personally wouldn't change from the melody to the background instrumentals in the middle of a section for this long. Just to let you know my intention was follow bg music all the time ._.

00:52:987 (192) - Remove. In the rest of this section up to 00:59:869, you have matched to the vocals only. huh ?

01:08:516 (230,231,232,233,234,235,236) - In a quiet section, I personally don't like adding hits that aren't already in the instrumentals. maybe remove hits 01:08:516 (230,231) and 01:09:134 (235,236)? i think its fine ... so no

01:10:281 - Add a hit of your choice here. It may be inconsistent with the rest of the rhythms, but there is a sound similar to that of the previous hit that would make it reasonable to have a hit here. ok

01:12:399 - ^ sure

01:16:634 - ^ y

01:20:869 - ^y

01:22:634 - Add a d to match the rhythms you had before. ok desu

01:58:105 (111,112,113,114,115,116) - kkd kdd? It sounds better imo. ok apllied

02:17:869 (241) - Change to k and add a d to match instrumentals. ok

02:24:752 (282,283) - You can make a 1/6 rhythm here between these hits. Just an fyi.
kinda
02:29:693 - Add a hit of your choice here for flow with the previous hits. k

03:12:928 (513) - Change to k? I think it sounds better. yep it tis

03:23:869 (590) - idk if a finisher on this hit is allowed, but just keep it for now. delete finisher

03:40:899 - Add a hit of your choice here. ok add , i didnt understand 3plet tbh

03:41:252 - ^ k

03:41:605 - ^ same as above ^

04:30:928 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - Match these with 01:58:458 (114,115,116,117,118,119). For consistency. maybe

04:40:193 (67) - I don't see the reasoning behind this rhythm. Change? uh no

What's with all these bookmarks at the end lol xD bookmark is life , so no reason

That's all for this map. Good luck on rank
Sorry I'm late again x.x

Raiden wrote:

Hello! M4M as requested
hello ?
00:30:752 (71) - k? Would give better flow and fits better the melody imo ok
00:32:516 (79) - According to the melody you're following, it would be nicer to delete this ok
00:35:516 (94) - This is hard to read the first time someone plays it. I would increase SV gradually from 00:34:810 - ok
00:39:752 - 00:42:575 - Why suddenly all 1/1s? I think that makes players lose momentum add more note
05:06:575 (12) - Oops, unrankable! Remove the finisher ok
05:11:869 (47) - ^ same as above

Hmmmm. I can't seem to follow your thought process behind many patterns in this map. It would be nonsense for me to suggest stuff without even knowing what was your initial intention. okay....

My thoughts

I liked some parts in which the mapping, even when improvised, seemed to fit the song well.

But mostly, I can't seem to find any base, any consistent structure in which you build the map around. Maybe that's my fault, but nonetheless I have to say it.

Anyway, here's my advice (I don't know if useless?): think about every pattern you make and how it fits the song, have a reason for using any pattern at any time. Have an intention, did you want to emphasize something, like a faster paced part of the song by adding more notes? Did you want to emphasize vocals by mapping just notes to them?

Sadly I can't help you much more without suggesting you a partial remap of this.

-Tenshi- wrote:

Hi! Here is your mod ._.
hi ?
[Oni]

1. 00:25:458 (45,46) - Ctrl + g? It's the same sound as here 00:27:399 (54,55,56) - for exemple. ok
2. 00:26:252 (48) - This is not really necessary, there's a sound here but it plays weird imo. delete
3. 00:36:222 (100) - Try to change this to k, there no sound to emphasize here. ty fornotice
4. 01:31:281 (343) - d here? no
5. 01:51:399 (64) - k here, same sound as 01:51:046 (61,62,63) - and this would make a better flow imo.
6. 02:02:163 (138,139,140) - 02:02:869 (144,145,146) - 02:03:222 (147,148,149) - k at the end of those 3 triplets, because they have the same sound as this one 02:02:516 (141,142,143) - change abit difrent
7. 02:51:046 (372) - k because of the higher pitch. ok
8. 02:59:516 (434) - For same reason as above ^. ok
9. 03:20:340 (576) - k here? ok
10. 04:12:663 (873) - Maybe you should move this note here 04:12:840 (874) - to be consistant with your pattern. changed difrently
11. 04:25:987 (958,959,960,961,962) - ddkkk sounds better here. nice desu
12. 04:40:281 (68) - Add a d? Why there is no note here? dunno
13. 05:25:281 (3) - This note should be here 05:25:458 (3) -

Paf! Hope my mod helped you~
Good luck for ranking~

tasuke912 wrote:

Hello.
すべて日本語で大丈夫とのことでしたのでその通りに書きます。

SPOILER

主な問題点：

一貫性の欠如
非常に細かいパートごとに見れば音取りにあまり問題が無いように感じるかもしれませんが、視野を広げて大きなパートで見ると土台となるリズムや、密度の変化の付け方が一貫していないのがわかります。改善が必要です。
例えば、
01:43:281 (8,9,10,11,12,13,14,15) -
01:45:399 (24,25,26,27,28,29,30,31) -
02:00:222 (124,125,126,127,128,129,130,131) -
02:02:340 (140,141,142,143,144,145,146,147,148) -
これらのパートでは音楽の音はほぼ似た構成になっているのに対し、譜面の構成はバラバラになっています。

02:21:399 (270,271,272,273) -
03:54:575 (774,775,776,777,778) -
このパターンでは曲の音の量が減っているわけでも無いのに対して、譜面の密度は急激に落ちています。
譜面の密度は音楽に忠実に従うべきです。
逆に急に密度を落としていいのは、02:34:105 (346) - からのような、静かなパートです。音楽自体の音が大きく減っているので、譜面の密度を落とすのは理にかなっています。

音の取捨選択
所々音の拾い方が中途半端で、プレイしていて多々違和感を感じました。
例えば、02:28:987 (321,322) - など。緩急の為に意図的に音を逃すという手法もありますが、それは密度の低いパートで用いる、もしくは他のドラムなどの音をより強調し、纏まりを付けるために用いる、などが適当であり、このような密度の高いパートで、他の特定の音に合わせているわけでも無く音を逃すのはただ曲の特徴を活かせていないだけのように感じざるをえません。もう少しよく音楽の音に耳を傾け、より忠実にノートを置いてみてください。これは上の一貫性の改善にもつながります。

まとめ：
曲の音を大切にし、密度やパターンなどの一貫性を向上させるために譜面をもう一度、一から見直してみてください。
少なくとも一貫性が欠如したままではRankedさせることは出来ないので、少し言いづらいのですがリマップも検討した方が良いかもしれません。
Raidenの言うように部分ごとに見れば良好なところもあるので、その部分を中心に他のパートのパターンを考えると良いと思います。頑張ってください。

guro wrote:

guro's modding queue coming through! hi?

Wow. I have been looking at this map for hours and there is nothing that really needs changing. The only stuff I found was minor and less important.
thanks even 2 bn said need lack of improvement and something i dont undestand (._.)

00:24:752 (42) - I would turn this into d because of lower pitch
00:29:163 (61) - k because of higher pitch?
00:34:458 (86) - ^
03:24:928 (603) - k feels more fitting
04:35:958 (42) - the dkk is kinda awkward there. Turn it into a ddk or kkd maybe
04:43:105 (85,86,87) - kdk maybe?
04:51:752 (145,146,147) - ^
04:52:810 (152,153,154) - kkd?
05:15:046 (61) - d?

Really a very great map Shiroi! Best of luck for getting it ranked

1. 00:15:547 - 赤線のオプションで"Omit first bar line"にチェックを入れてみましょう。すると白線が隠されて、見栄えがよくなります。参考：
2. 02:10:634 (197,198,199) - この3連もボーカル音をフォローしてはどうですか？kdkとか

1. 02:25:634 (296,297,298,299,300,301,302,303,304,305,306,307,308,309,310,311,312) - k ddd k ddkdk ddk k kdkdk
2. 02:52:105 (393,394,395,396,397,398,399,400,401) - k d kkd k ddk
3. 02:55:281 (417,418,419,420,421,422,423,424,425,426,427,428,429,430,431,432,433) - k d kkd k ddk d kkddk ddk