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bj.HaLo - Ende [OsuMania]

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Topic Starter
Loctav
This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on Dienstag, 17. September 2013 at 15:20:35

Artist: bj.HaLo
Title: Ende
Source: BMS
Tags: Trance Core BOF 2010 mania
BPM: 200
Filesize: 3656kb
Play Time: 02:03
Difficulties Available:
  1. EZ - 7Key (1,55 stars, 368 notes)
  2. HD - 7Key (3,5 stars, 821 notes)
  3. IN - 7Key (5 stars, 1211 notes)
  4. NM - 7Key (2,34 stars, 544 notes)
  5. SHD - 7Key (5 stars, 1834 notes)
Download: bj.HaLo - Ende
Information: Scores/Beatmap Listing
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Und die Lichter tanzten hell,
als Ruinen jener Welt,
nur von Asche war bedeckt,
und als der allerletzt' Gesang,
vom Anlitz dieser Erd' verschwand.

Als das Ende ward vollbracht,
fuhr der Engel weit herab,
um das Unheil zu beenden,
um den Mensch vom Sein zu tilgen.

Thanks to galvenize for music file and timing signature.
Special thanks to Hanyuu and ljqandylee for support~
lolcubes
lol first
Frostmourne
wow \o/
Makar
wow /o\
HeatKai
wow /o/
Entozer
wow \o\
Xakyrie
wow |o|
woc2006
wow /o
Low
whoops
Aurele
wo-

Jacob!! D:
Haruka_old
ignoring the last two posts...

wow o\
chonicle
Really well-designed map. Nice one! Please finish it and go for rank! :D
Topic Starter
Loctav
Weeheee, Pending~
ExPew
Hello loctav, here short mod.

[EZ]

HP5
OD5

00:03:576 (3576|3) - hold should end on 00:04:476
00:16:476 (16476|4) - move 2
00:16:776 (16776|2,17076|4,17376|1,17676|5) - flip (ctrl +H)
00:19:176 (19176|4) - move 2
00:19:476 (19476|2) - move 6
00:21:276 (21276|2) - ^
00:21:576 (21576|4,21876|2,22176|5,22476|1) - flip (ctrl +H)
00:23:976 (23976|2) - move 6
00:24:276 (24276|4) - move 2
00:26:376 (26376|0) - ^
00:26:976 (26976|6) - move 6
00:28:776 (28776|1,29076|0,29376|5,29676|6) - repeat part make player too bored, how about this? http://puu.sh/3wdlC.png
00:31:176 (31176|4,31476|5,31776|2,32076|1) - ^ same reason
00:33:576 (33576|0) - move 2
00:34:176 (34176|6) - move 6
00:35:376 - if like this? http://puu.sh/3wdqd.png
00:37:476 - ^ http://puu.sh/3wdri.png
00:38:676 (38676|2,38976|4) - move left
00:40:101 (40101|5) - this note should here 00:40:026
00:40:476 (40476|1) - same here 00:40:326
00:40:626 - add note whistle on 4
00:44:976 - this same reason with 00:35:376
00:47:076 - ^
00:49:476 - add note whistle on 2
00:59:076 (59076|3) - move 6
01:00:576 (60576|1) - move 1
01:07:326 - add a note finish on 7
01:16:926 - ^
01:18:876 - add a note clap on 6
01:20:076 - ^
01:21:276 - ^
01:22:476 - ^

[NM]

OD5

00:03:576 (3576|3) - hold should end on 00:04:476
00:05:976 (5976|1,6576|1,7176|1,7776|1) - after end hold, add a note
00:08:076 (8076|2) - remove and 00:08:226 - add a note
00:08:376 (8376|2,8976|2,9576|2) - same reason
00:10:776 (10776|6,11376|6,11976|6,12576|6) - ^
00:13:176 (13176|5,13776|5,14376|5) - ^
00:14:976 (14976|5,15126|4) - make them normal notes
00:35:376 to 00:36:576 - prevent use 1/1 that part, how about this? http://puu.sh/3wdRL.png
00:37:176 to 00:39:576 - ^ same reason ( try use your own pattern)
00:44:976 to 00:46:176 - ^
00:46:776 to 00:49:176 - ^
01:02:076 (62076|1) - move 5
01:08:376 (68376|0,68676|6,68976|1,69276|5,69576|3,69876|4,70176|5,70476|2,70776|4,71076|5,71376|6,71676|1) - aaaaaa,this hold T_T like autogen std map, try make like (1 2 1 2 1 2 1 2) example : http://puu.sh/3we2G.png
01:13:176 (73176|6,73476|0,73776|5,74076|1,74376|3,74676|2,74976|1,75276|4,75576|2,75876|1,76176|0,76476|5) - same ^
01:25:176 (85176|0,85476|6,85776|1,86076|5,86376|3,86676|4,86976|5,87276|2,87576|4,87876|5,88176|6,88476|1) - repeat part, you can use all normal or you can add a note like this bit harder http://puu.sh/3we5K.png
01:29:976 (89976|6,90276|0,90576|5,90876|1,91176|3,91476|2,91776|1,92076|4,92376|2,92676|1,92976|0,93276|5) - ^
01:35:376 - add a note?
01:36:576 - ^
01:37:776 - ^
01:40:176 - ^
01:41:376 - ^
01:42:576 - ^
01:44:676 (104676|1,105276|5,105876|2,106476|4) - 1/1 hold
01:49:476 (109476|5,110076|1,110676|6,111276|0) - ^
01:54:276 (114276|5,114876|1,115476|4,116076|2) - ^
01:59:076 (119076|1,119676|5,120276|0,120876|6) - ^
02:02:976 (122976|4,123126|3,123276|2,123426|1) - remove
02:02:826 - make note like this http://puu.sh/3wedW.png (this example)

[HD]

OD6

00:04:776 (4776|1,5076|1) - move 6
00:06:276 (6276|3,6276|5,6576|3,6876|3,6876|5,7176|3,7476|5,7476|3,7776|3) - boring pattern here, try spread more like this http://puu.sh/3wei4.png
00:08:676 (8676|1,8676|5,8976|1,9276|5,9276|1,9576|1,9876|5,9876|1) - same here, ^ try use your own pattern (more creativity :P)
00:11:076 (11076|6,11076|5,11376|6,11676|5,11676|6,11976|6,12276|6,12276|5,12576|6,12876|5,12876|6) - ^
00:13:476 (13476|5,13476|4,13776|4,14076|4,14076|5,14376|4,14676|5,14676|4) - ^
00:15:126 (15126|4) - remove and add normal note
00:15:276 - add a note
00:34:776 (34776|3) - remove
01:07:926 (67926|2,67926|4,68076|1,68076|5,68226|2,68226|4) - make like this http://puu.sh/3weoi.png
01:14:376 (74376|6,74376|4,74526|5,74676|5) - move left
01:14:976 (74976|0,74976|2,75126|1,75276|1) - move right
01:15:576 (75576|2,75576|4) - move 1 and 7
01:31:176 (91176|2,91176|0,91326|1,91476|1,91776|6,91776|1,91776|4,91926|5,92076|5,92376|5,92376|2,92376|4) - same explain with previous part,
02:01:176 (121176|0,121251|1,121326|2,121401|3,121476|4,121551|5,121626|6,121701|5,121776|4,121851|3,121926|2,122001|1,122076|0,122151|1,122226|2,122301|3) - drumnote looks no good on ladder pattern, how about this http://puu.sh/3wewd.png or you can make another, but dont use ladder over 5 ex: 12345 12345 if 1234 1234 can
02:03:576 (123576|4,123576|2) - move 1 and 7

[IN]

OD7

00:04:776 (4776|1,5076|1) - move 6
00:06:126 (6126|4,6276|3,6276|5,6426|2,6576|3,6726|4,6876|5,6876|3,7026|2,7176|3,7326|4,7476|5,7476|3,7626|2,7776|3,7926|4) - dont keep same position, try use 6 or 7 lines
00:08:526 (8526|2,8676|1,8676|5,8826|0,8976|1,9126|2,9276|5,9276|1,9426|0,9576|1,9726|2,9876|1,9876|5,10026|0) - ^
00:10:926 (10926|4,11076|5,11076|6,11226|4,11376|6,11526|4,11676|5,11676|6,11826|4,11976|6,12126|4,12276|5,12276|6,12426|4,12576|6,12726|4,12876|5,12876|6) - ^
00:13:326 (13326|2,13476|4,13476|5,13626|2,13776|4,13926|2,14076|5,14076|4,14226|2,14376|4,14526|2,14676|4,14676|5,14826|2) - ^
00:57:576 (57576|0,57651|1,57726|2,57801|3,57876|4,57951|5,58026|6,58101|5,58176|4,58251|3,58326|2,58401|1,58476|0,58551|1,58626|2,58701|3) - no drum ladder plz, rearrange again
00:58:776 to 01:02:376 - add more notes...this is Insane
01:07:926 (67926|4,67926|2,68076|1,68076|5,68226|2,68226|4) - http://puu.sh/3weFt.png
01:08:376 to 01:11:976 - add more notes...this too EZZZZZZ for insane
01:13:176 to 01:16:776 - ^

note: i will remod this after you fix this first some pattern get messed

[SHD]

WHAT???? o2jam style lol

okay i think this is fun, do you want make it rank or for fun ver?

if for rank
-fix unrankable stuffs 7K press
-remove SV changes its messy and use SV changes for Bumps/Gimmicks
-Overnote??? hell no, overnote is FUN! add more note plz...SHD xD

note: after fix this i going to remod again
Mystyk
omg so not easy :(
Topic Starter
Loctav

ExPew wrote:

Hello loctav, here short mod.

[EZ]

OD5 I actually want this EZ to be more forgiveable due to high BPM and the playerbase it aims for. Leaving OD4 for now, maybe I'll change it depending on other opinions.

00:35:376 - if like this? http://puu.sh/3wdqd.png II highly dislike this syncopic mapping, it feels invented and forced. yet I added the note at the hold end
00:37:476 - ^ http://puu.sh/3wdri.png ^
00:38:676 (38676|2,38976|4) - move left did it differently
00:40:101 (40101|5) - this note should here 00:40:026 it actually should be on the white tick, lol
00:40:476 (40476|1) - same here 00:40:326 what
00:40:626 - add note whistle on 4 breaks the map design, which is basically "avoid 1/2 by all means"
00:44:976 - this same reason with 00:35:376 same here
00:47:076 - ^ ^

[NM]

01:08:376 (68376|0,68676|6,68976|1,69276|5,69576|3,69876|4,70176|5,70476|2,70776|4,71076|5,71376|6,71676|1) - aaaaaa,this hold T_T like autogen std map, try make like (1 2 1 2 1 2 1 2) example : http://puu.sh/3we2G.png wow, that's way too hard. sorry. Placing notes on all 1/2 is random, also the holds fit due to the fadeout sound of the "melody instrument"
01:13:176 (73176|6,73476|0,73776|5,74076|1,74376|3,74676|2,74976|1,75276|4,75576|2,75876|1,76176|0,76476|5) - same ^ read above
01:25:176 (85176|0,85476|6,85776|1,86076|5,86376|3,86676|4,86976|5,87276|2,87576|4,87876|5,88176|6,88476|1) - repeat part, you can use all normal or you can add a note like this bit harder http://puu.sh/3we5K.png did it differently, repeat is no issue, since it's an quite easy diff. and should stay as it.
01:29:976 (89976|6,90276|0,90576|5,90876|1,91176|3,91476|2,91776|1,92076|4,92376|2,92676|1,92976|0,93276|5) - ^ ^

[HD]

00:06:276 (6276|3,6276|5,6576|3,6876|3,6876|5,7176|3,7476|5,7476|3,7776|3) - boring pattern here, try spread more like this http://puu.sh/3wei4.png music is constant,so is the pattern
00:08:676 (8676|1,8676|5,8976|1,9276|5,9276|1,9576|1,9876|5,9876|1) - same here, ^ try use your own pattern (more creativity :P) read above.
00:11:076 (11076|6,11076|5,11376|6,11676|5,11676|6,11976|6,12276|6,12276|5,12576|6,12876|5,12876|6) - ^ ^
00:13:476 (13476|5,13476|4,13776|4,14076|4,14076|5,14376|4,14676|5,14676|4) - ^ ^
00:15:126 (15126|4) - remove and add normal note listen to the music, please.
00:15:276 - add a note ^
01:07:926 (67926|2,67926|4,68076|1,68076|5,68226|2,68226|4) - make like this http://puu.sh/3weoi.png breaks pitch relevancy
(121176|0,121251|1,121326|2,121401|3,121476|4,121551|5,121626|6,121701|5,121776|4,121851|3,121926|2,122001|1,122076|0,122151|1,122226|2,122301|3) - drumnote looks no good on ladder pattern, how about this http://puu.sh/3wewd.png or you can make another, but dont use ladder over 5 ex: 12345 12345 if 1234 1234 can did it differently.
02:03:576 (123576|4,123576|2) - move 1 and 7 considering the previous change, this one is denied.

[IN]

OD7 wait, really? why?

00:04:776 (4776|1,5076|1) - move 6
00:06:126 (6126|4,6276|3,6276|5,6426|2,6576|3,6726|4,6876|5,6876|3,7026|2,7176|3,7326|4,7476|5,7476|3,7626|2,7776|3,7926|4) - dont keep same position, try use 6 or 7 lines same reason as in hard
00:08:526 (8526|2,8676|1,8676|5,8826|0,8976|1,9126|2,9276|5,9276|1,9426|0,9576|1,9726|2,9876|1,9876|5,10026|0) - ^ ^
00:10:926 (10926|4,11076|5,11076|6,11226|4,11376|6,11526|4,11676|5,11676|6,11826|4,11976|6,12126|4,12276|5,12276|6,12426|4,12576|6,12726|4,12876|5,12876|6) - ^ ^
00:13:326 (13326|2,13476|4,13476|5,13626|2,13776|4,13926|2,14076|5,14076|4,14226|2,14376|4,14526|2,14676|4,14676|5,14826|2) - ^ ^
00:58:776 to 01:02:376 - add more notes...this is Insane calm parts deverse less density

[SHD]

WHAT???? o2jam style lol that's the game I originally mapped for in the past.

okay i think this is fun, do you want make it rank or for fun ver? for rank for sure?

if for rank
-fix unrankable stuffs 7K press like? I don't think that holdend+holdhit count as 7K presses, since you "release" one button when you press the other.there were only one 7K press, which I removed now.
-remove SV changes its messy and use SV changes for Bumps/Gimmicks it's not messy. It's structured, yet a bit unexpected. Please specify.
-Overnote??? hell no, overnote is FUN! add more note plz...SHD xD this only affects the Kiai, and yes, the SHD is very hard, yet not unrankable.

note: after fix this i going to remod again dawww, thank you <3
Only replied to those I rejected.
Thank you <3
Agka
Let's do this. Um as always, it's all suggestions.

[EZ]
00:29:976 (29976|4,30276|5) - Switch hand of these notes. You did it with the previous ones and I liked it, so please switch them.
01:17:226 (77226|2,77526|1,77826|1) - Having these not be at the spacebar feels anticlimatic.
01:23:976 (83976|0,84276|2,84576|1,84876|1) - Change to http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/886886 to give some strength to the pattern.
02:02:472 - This section of long notes.. Hmm, I know it follows the background strings but it strikes me as rather odd- having a much more powerful pattern a newbie can follow this feels very weak, even more so considering you had things that can fit in that have already been used around the map.

[NM]
00:08:226 (8226|2) - Switch to 5. I know you have more later on, but this one early on is kind of offputting.
00:29:976 (29976|4) - Switch to 3
00:30:126 (30126|3) - Switch to 5
00:30:276 (30276|5) - Switch to 2
Nice kiai.
00:43:776 (43776|2) - Switch to 5 or
00:43:926 (43926|2) - Start at white tick, and switch to 5.

[HD]
01:33:957 - This kiai's jacks are a slightly bit annoying to play at this level.

[IN]
00:34:776 (34776|1,34851|2,34926|3,35001|4,35076|5,35151|4,35226|3,35301|2,35376|6,35376|3,35376|0) - This would be way sexier as a decreasing stair.
00:49:401 (49401|3) - If you're following the triplets, remove this.
01:34:176 (94176|6,94176|4,94326|3,94326|5,94476|2,94476|4,94626|3,94626|1) - Shift these two lanes left. The last one on this one can be left as [12], just because it feels sexier.
02:01:101 - Right hand load is high... I recommend moving the hold to 1 and distributing the stream over 2 3 and 4

[SHD]
Oh man.. this. You know there's some things that I will point out I know you know, but I have to point at them anyway.
00:01:251 - It'd be nice if you followed the piano's pitch.
00:14:382 - Borderline unrankable.
00:20:076 (20076|1) - Move to 4 for better distribution.
00:39:126 (39126|1,39126|2,39126|0,39201|2,39201|4,39201|3,39276|4,39276|5,39276|6) - This is eeeeeeeeeevil. Way evil.
00:39:576 (39576|0,39576|4,39576|2,39651|1,39651|3,39651|5,39726|6,39726|4,39726|2) - Pitch decreases so make it move from right to left instead of left to right.
00:39:801 (39801|1,39801|5,39801|3) - Remove.
00:41:376 (41376|1,41526|2,41526|1,41601|3,41601|2,41676|4,41676|3,41751|5,41751|4) - I have no legitime reasons to remove this. However, I hate it. Only removing the 1 and changing the doubles to singles is way more fun.
00:44:976 - Borderline unrankable
00:46:176 (46176|0,46176|2,46251|3,46251|1,46326|2,46326|4,46401|5,46401|3,46476|4,46476|6,46551|5,46551|3,46626|4,46626|2,46701|3,46701|1,46776|2,46776|0) - It'd be a lot more fun as a 12376541 stream.
00:51:051 (51051|1,51051|2) - Remove, if you're following the stream.
00:53:976 - Check your pitch relevancy, hopefully /literally/ copypasting the first piano.
00:58:326 - EVIL. Really. Same as before, except instead of a stream an alternated chord or doubles, like [1357][246] or [23][56]


And that's that.

There's something to say that some of the patterns are not my cup of tea, but there's really no reason to change them. I only pointed out what I would *really* like to see changed.
Agka
Also.
Charles on the jackstairholds
12:25 Charles445: what do i do here
12:25 Charles445: do I hold
12:25 Charles445: or d I jack
12:27 Charles445: i feel shd wasn't... tested thoroughly
12:27 Charles445: insane has like huge potential and a lot of it plays well, but the holds mixed with jacks are nothing but pain
Topic Starter
Loctav
Fixed almost everything. I only somewhat disagree with some pattern suggestions and also disagree withthe jackholdstairs to be weird, but I will try to get more opinions on them, so your opinion isnot disregarded for now.
Thanks a lot.

Also I removed the 0,5 speedowns and the 1,2 on the final kiai on the SHD accordingly to Hanyuus suggestion.
Lieselotte
EZ

OD→6

00:40:026 - Use long note here

00:40:326 - ^

00:40:626 - add a note

00:40:926 - ^

00:41:076 - ^

00:41:226 - ^

00:41:526 - long note here

00:42:126 - add a note

00:43:926 - long note

01:23:676 - ^

NM


OD→6

00:06:276 (6276|2,6876|2,7476|2,8076|2,8226|2) - move to 5 column

00:08:676 (8676|3,9276|3,9876|3) - move to 6 column

00:11:076 (11076|5,11676|5,12276|5,12876|5) - move to 3 or 4 column

00:13:476 (13476|4,14076|4,14676|4) - move to 2 column

01:08:526 (68526|1) - move to 5 column

01:09:126 (69126|0) - move to 4 column

01:09:726 (69726|4) - move to 2 column

01:10:326 (70326|4) - move to 1 column

01:10:926 (70926|5) - move to 2 column

01:11:526 (71526|5) - move to 5 column

01:14:526 (74526|2) - move to 5 column

01:15:126 (75126|2) - ^

01:15:726 (75726|1) - ^

01:31:326 (91326|2) - ^

01:31:926 (91926|0) - move to 7 column

HD

OD→7

00:11:076 (11076|5,11676|5,12276|5,12876|5) - move to 5 or 2 column

00:13:176 (13176|4,13476|4,13776|4,14076|4,14376|4,14676|4) - move to 3 column

00:14:976 (14976|4) - move to 4

01:08:976 (68976|1) - move to 1

01:09:126 (69126|2) - move to 2

01:10:776 (70776|4) - move to 6

01:10:926 (70926|3) - move to 5

01:11:376 (71376|1) - move to 6

01:11:526 (71526|2) - move to 5

IN

HD→8

OD→7

00:11:076 (11076|5,11076|6) - move to 2 and 3 column

00:11:676 (11676|6,11676|5,12276|6,12276|5,12876|6,12876|5) - ^

01:23:076 - lone note here

SHD

OD→8

lol,so hard

I can't play this diff
Rumia-
[EZ]
-
[NM]
-
[HD]
01:02:826 (62826|3) - move to 6th
01:02:976 (62976|1,63126|2,63276|3,63426|4) - reverse pattern
[IN]
00:15:287 - add at 6th
00:15:426 (15426|4) - move to 6th
00:16:776 (16776|3) - 3rd collumn
00:19:776 - add
00:24:426 - same as 00:15:287
00:29:376 - add
00:34:176 - add hold till the new measure
00:38:676 (38676|2,38676|3) - to 6th and 7th
00:39:276 (39276|4,39276|3) - to 1st and 2nd
00:52:776 - add at 1st
00:52:926 - ^
00:59:226 until here 01:02:226 - add at the red line of 1/4
01:02:376 until 01:03:576 -add at 7th on the white lines of 1/4
01:07:176 - add at 1st
01:07:326 - ^
[SHD]
oh yes this diff kills my brain xD
change to 2 circles
00:13:326 (13326|6) - move to here? 00:13:476
00:14:676 - add
00:24:726 - add at 4th
00:31:026 - add 1/1 hold
i wonder why you ignored the piano sounds starts here 00:35:376 until here 00:36:576
00:34:326 (34326|5,34476|5,34626|5) - am i misheard this? all this 3 notes should be dropped by 1/2
00:37:101 (37101|5) - move to 4th?
00:37:326 (37326|1,37326|3,37326|2,37476|2,37476|4,37476|3,37626|0,37626|2,37626|1,37776|1,37776|3,37776|2,37926|3,37926|4,37926|2,38076|5,38076|0,38076|6,38076|1,38226|3,38226|4,38226|2) - idk wat to say its too dense x.x
00:39:576 (39576|6,39576|4,39576|2,39651|3,39651|5,39651|1,39726|2,39726|0,39726|4,39876|4,39876|0,39876|2) - ^ sounds of piano shouldn't use 3 notes
simultaneuosly tho~
00:47:976 (47976|4,47976|3,47976|2,48126|1,48126|2,48126|0,48276|3,48276|2,48276|4,48426|6,48426|5,48426|4) - ^
00:43:438 - add
00:44:826 - add
00:44:901 - add
00:52:251 (52251|2) - remove?
01:02:976 (62976|4,63126|5,63276|6) - reverse pattern
01:10:776 (70776|5,70776|6,71076|0,71076|1) - remove
01:16:926 (76926|5,76926|1) - the density is same as this
01:16:776 (76776|6,76776|3,76776|4,76776|0,76776|2) - add 2 more notes
01:43:326 (103326|5,103326|1) - ^
01:27:576 (87576|6,87576|5,87876|0,87876|1,88776|6,88776|1) - remove
01:29:526 (89526|1,89526|0) - move to 3rd and 4th collumn
dun prefer this jacks + it doesnt match the music, should be stairs or sumthin
02:02:151 (122151|4,122226|5,122301|4) - constant this with the streams lol
02:02:376 (122376|1) - move to 5th

- comments
you should really learn note density , its affect the map ,the fun, the feels , think about players who will play this map , not mapper to judge this , no offense on your style of mapping but sure advice will do ^^, gl on ranking this~
Topic Starter
Loctav

Lieselotte wrote:

EZ

OD→6

00:40:026 - Use long note here

00:40:326 - ^

00:40:626 - add a note

00:40:926 - ^

00:41:076 - ^

00:41:226 - ^

00:41:526 - long note here

00:42:126 - add a note

00:43:926 - long note

01:23:676 - ^

since I didn't get the point of many suggestions or didn't like the way it breaks the concept of the EZ, I didn't apply any of these. Yet I increased the OD.

NM


OD→6

00:06:276 (6276|2,6876|2,7476|2,8076|2,8226|2) - move to 5 column

00:08:676 (8676|3,9276|3,9876|3) - move to 6 column

00:11:076 (11076|5,11676|5,12276|5,12876|5) - move to 3 or 4 column

00:13:476 (13476|4,14076|4,14676|4) - move to 2 column

01:08:526 (68526|1) - move to 5 column

01:09:126 (69126|0) - move to 4 column

01:09:726 (69726|4) - move to 2 column

01:10:326 (70326|4) - move to 1 column

01:10:926 (70926|5) - move to 2 column

01:11:526 (71526|5) - move to 5 column

01:14:526 (74526|2) - move to 5 column

01:15:126 (75126|2) - ^

01:15:726 (75726|1) - ^

01:31:326 (91326|2) - ^

01:31:926 (91926|0) - move to 7 column

applied everything, nice one. Yet, I changed some other parts to stay consistent with your suggestions

HD

OD→7

00:11:076 (11076|5,11676|5,12276|5,12876|5) - move to 5 or 2 column

00:13:176 (13176|4,13476|4,13776|4,14076|4,14376|4,14676|4) - move to 3 column

00:14:976 (14976|4) - move to 4

01:08:976 (68976|1) - move to 1

01:09:126 (69126|2) - move to 2

01:10:776 (70776|4) - move to 6

01:10:926 (70926|3) - move to 5

01:11:376 (71376|1) - move to 6

01:11:526 (71526|2) - move to 5

applied everything.
IN

HD→8

OD→7

00:11:076 (11076|5,11076|6) - move to 2 and 3 column

00:11:676 (11676|6,11676|5,12276|6,12276|5,12876|6,12876|5) - ^

01:23:076 - lone note here

applied everything.

SHD

OD→8 well, changed for now. Let's see what others say.

lol,so hard

I can't play this diff D:
Thanks!

Will check Rumia's mod later. I am so slow
Mystyk
useless first mania mod o/

EZ:
00:19:926 (19926|2,20076|3,20226|4) - I think this is too hard for an Easy, hitting space with 2 other notes, so I would rather play something like:
http://puu.sh/4d3ti.png
or
http://puu.sh/4d3ua.png
you did it similarly to my example here: 00:05:526 (5526|6,5676|5,5826|4) -
00:24:726 (24726|4,24876|3,25026|2) - same as above ^
00:34:776 (34776|3,35376|4) - I think the slider ending would be enough to emphasize the higher voice, because it's hard to hit a note and end a slider at the same time, so remove 00:35:376 (35376|4) -
00:36:576 (36576|0,36576|3,37176|1) - same applies here, however this one doesn't even sound nice so remove 00:36:576 (36576|0,37176|1) -

NM:
00:35:526 (35526|0,35676|1,35826|2,35976|6,36126|5,36276|4) - I feel like you mapped too much here, it would be better if you only followed the "main melody" http://puu.sh/4d4Av.png so remove 00:35:526 (35526|0,35976|6) - this is only a normal so no need to map so much
00:37:626 (37626|4) - remove, same reason as above
00:45:126 (45126|5,45576|2,46026|1) - remove these too
00:53:676 (53676|6) - there is no big beat here that you used to follow before, so i think you should remove this
01:08:076 (68076|6) - ^
01:17:676 (77676|1) - ^
Topic Starter
Loctav

- R u m i a - wrote:

[HD]
01:02:826 (62826|3) - move to 6th breaks the patterns idea, also not working with the pitch relevancy
01:02:976 (62976|1,63126|2,63276|3,63426|4) - reverse pattern ^
[IN]
00:15:287 - add at 6th why?
00:15:426 (15426|4) - move to 6th pitch doesnt change.
00:16:776 (16776|3) - 3rd collumn the pattern is pasted from the beginning, therefore pitch relevancy is still the same.
00:19:776 - add there is no piano
00:24:426 - same as 00:15:287 this doesnt follow the background drums
00:29:376 - add ^
00:34:176 - add hold till the new measure k
00:38:676 (38676|2,38676|3) - to 6th and 7th k
00:39:276 (39276|4,39276|3) - to 1st and 2nd k
00:52:776 - add at 1st why?
00:52:926 - ^ ^
00:59:226 until here 01:02:226 - add at the red line of 1/4 I don't get this.
01:02:376 until 01:03:576 -add at 7th on the white lines of 1/4 ^
01:07:176 - add at 1st still why?
01:07:326 - ^ ^
[SHD]
oh yes this diff kills my brain xD
change to 2 circles eh?
00:13:326 (13326|6) - move to here? 00:13:476 k
00:14:676 - add k
00:24:726 - add at 4th k
00:31:026 - add 1/1 hold k
i wonder why you ignored the piano sounds starts here 00:35:376 until here 00:36:576 Because the piano is like not even really noticeable
00:34:326 (34326|5,34476|5,34626|5) - am i misheard this? all this 3 notes should be dropped by 1/2 well, I can't see, how it is wrong here.
00:37:101 (37101|5) - move to 4th? k
00:37:326 (37326|1,37326|3,37326|2,37476|2,37476|4,37476|3,37626|0,37626|2,37626|1,37776|1,37776|3,37776|2,37926|3,37926|4,37926|2,38076|5,38076|0,38076|6,38076|1,38226|3,38226|4,38226|2) - idk wat to say its too dense x.x yeh
00:39:576 (39576|6,39576|4,39576|2,39651|3,39651|5,39651|1,39726|2,39726|0,39726|4,39876|4,39876|0,39876|2) - ^ sounds of piano shouldn't use 3 notes
simultaneuosly tho~ k
00:47:976 (47976|4,47976|3,47976|2,48126|1,48126|2,48126|0,48276|3,48276|2,48276|4,48426|6,48426|5,48426|4) - ^ k
00:43:438 - add why?
00:44:826 - add why?
00:44:901 - add why?
00:52:251 (52251|2) - remove? k
01:02:976 (62976|4,63126|5,63276|6) - reverse pattern breaks pitch relevancy and pattern
01:10:776 (70776|5,70776|6,71076|0,71076|1) - remove k
01:16:926 (76926|5,76926|1) - the density is same as this hm?
01:16:776 (76776|6,76776|3,76776|4,76776|0,76776|2) - add 2 more notes made this pattern consistent with all others
01:43:326 (103326|5,103326|1) - ^ ^
01:27:576 (87576|6,87576|5,87876|0,87876|1,88776|6,88776|1) - remove k
01:29:526 (89526|1,89526|0) - move to 3rd and 4th collumn adjusted this and similiar
dun prefer this jacks + it doesnt match the music, should be stairs or sumthin
02:02:151 (122151|4,122226|5,122301|4) - constant this with the streams lol k
02:02:376 (122376|1) - move to 5th k

- comments
you should really learn note density , its affect the map ,the fun, the feels , think about players who will play this map , not mapper to judge this , no offense on your style of mapping but sure advice will do ^^, gl on ranking this~ thanks for your advise.
After this mod, I tweaked the SHD further and removed the jackholdstairs and replaced them. Also some other changes (mostly made the SHD a bit easier on certain cluttery parts)

Mystyk wrote:

useless first mania mod o/ lol

EZ:
00:19:926 (19926|2,20076|3,20226|4) - I think this is too hard for an Easy, hitting space with 2 other notes, so I would rather play something like:
http://puu.sh/4d3ti.png
or
http://puu.sh/4d3ua.png
you did it similarly to my example here: 00:05:526 (5526|6,5676|5,5826|4) - k
00:24:726 (24726|4,24876|3,25026|2) - same as above ^ k
00:34:776 (34776|3,35376|4) - I think the slider ending would be enough to emphasize the higher voice, because it's hard to hit a note and end a slider at the same time, so remove 00:35:376 (35376|4) - it's easier to release if you alternate to the other key. Also the stressing works better then.
00:36:576 (36576|0,36576|3,37176|1) - same applies here, however this one doesn't even sound nice so remove 00:36:576 (36576|0,37176|1) - ^

NM:
00:35:526 (35526|0,35676|1,35826|2,35976|6,36126|5,36276|4) - I feel like you mapped too much here, it would be better if you only followed the "main melody" http://puu.sh/4d4Av.png so remove 00:35:526 (35526|0,35976|6) - this is only a normal so no need to map so much unfortunately, the melody doesn't provide such syncopes.
00:37:626 (37626|4) - remove, same reason as above ^
00:45:126 (45126|5,45576|2,46026|1) - remove these too ^
00:53:676 (53676|6) - there is no big beat here that you used to follow before, so i think you should remove this changed position, removed finisher.
01:08:076 (68076|6) - ^ ^
01:17:676 (77676|1) - ^ ^
Just some minor changes, thanks anyways!
Hanyuu
EZ:

00:41:376 (41376|3) - change it to a hold?
00:50:976 (50976|1) - ^
01:10:776 - I would just reverse the last measure here since previously in the map it was just going alternating between hands over and over and this is something other for a change for once.
01:23:976 - Heres a similar thing if you put the 2 notes here 01:24:276 (84276|2,84576|5) - in a simple stair like order from the right to the left it will look very normal and in the next measure when the song changes its pace the notes will have a better impact.

NM:

00:08:226 (8226|2) - i think this note shouldnt be put on this column. Since you hitsound it, it looks kind of confusing with the next holds. It could just stay at the 5th column in my opinion and that is easier to play aswell anyways.
00:27:576 - this looks a bit too hard. http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/954206 ?
00:43:776 - Here it sounds like a little jack so maybe move the note there to the third column
00:45:576 - Too much a jump. http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/954208
00:53:526 - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/954212 ?
00:56:076 - Think the notes were a bit too weird apart from each other again. http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/954218 ?
01:44:376 (104376|0,104526|0) - This better on column 3 since it is alot easier and intuitive. Otherwise its too big of a suprise


HD:

00:55:176 - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/954224 ? Looked a bit all too cramped together and this seems to play nice
01:05:376 (65376|0) - Move to 6th column 01:06:576 (66576|0) - to 3rd?
01:28:476 (88476|1) - This should not be a hold
01:34:176 - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/954228

IN:

00:29:076 (29076|4) - Move to column 7
00:33:876 (33876|2) - Move to column 1
00:37:326 (37326|4) - This one should be on column 6 and this one 00:37:476 (37476|5) - on 5. It will break the symmetry of it but i think its alot better this way, well try it
00:43:476 (43476|0,43476|1) - Move it to 5 and 6 for a bit of a change?
01:12:576 (72576|5,72576|4,72726|4,72726|3,72876|3,72876|2,73026|2,73026|1) - uhm i think you should better mirror those notes so its like this http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/954239
01:16:776 - Need more notes here

SHD:

00:49:926 (49926|1,49926|3,50001|2,50001|4,50076|3,50076|5) - I think all of those notes should move 1 column to the right for a better pitch relevancy and this one 00:51:126 (51126|2) - better to the 6th column
00:57:576 - This looks really too easy. I think there was this cool hold stream before but now its gone. Maybe scramble the notes around a bit or something.
01:16:176 (76176|1,76326|1,76476|1,76626|1) - those notes look really awfull to play for no reason, move them somewhere else?
01:47:901 (107901|6) - lol
01:53:901 (113901|1) - ^ Better remove those 2. They seem more a pain than anything good to the map :?
02:02:676 - I think you should add here a note aswell
02:02:976 - ^
Topic Starter
Loctav

Hanyuu wrote:

EZ:

00:41:376 (41376|3) - change it to a hold?
00:50:976 (50976|1) - ^
01:10:776 - I would just reverse the last measure here since previously in the map it was just going alternating between hands over and over and this is something other for a change for once.
01:23:976 - Heres a similar thing if you put the 2 notes here 01:24:276 (84276|2,84576|5) - in a simple stair like order from the right to the left it will look very normal and in the next measure when the song changes its pace the notes will have a better impact.

fixed everything

NM:

00:08:226 (8226|2) - i think this note shouldnt be put on this column. Since you hitsound it, it looks kind of confusing with the next holds. It could just stay at the 5th column in my opinion and that is easier to play aswell anyways.
00:27:576 - this looks a bit too hard. http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/954206 ?
00:43:776 - Here it sounds like a little jack so maybe move the note there to the third column
00:45:576 - Too much a jump. http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/954208
00:53:526 - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/954212 ?
00:56:076 - Think the notes were a bit too weird apart from each other again. http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/954218 ?
01:44:376 (104376|0,104526|0) - This better on column 3 since it is alot easier and intuitive. Otherwise its too big of a suprise

fixed everything

HD:

00:55:176 - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/954224 ? Looked a bit all too cramped together and this seems to play nice
01:05:376 (65376|0) - Move to 6th column 01:06:576 (66576|0) - to 3rd?
01:28:476 (88476|1) - This should not be a hold
01:34:176 - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/954228

fixed everything

IN:

00:29:076 (29076|4) - Move to column 7
00:33:876 (33876|2) - Move to column 1
00:37:326 (37326|4) - This one should be on column 6 and this one 00:37:476 (37476|5) - on 5. It will break the symmetry of it but i think its alot better this way, well try it
00:43:476 (43476|0,43476|1) - Move it to 5 and 6 for a bit of a change? looks like a stair. and shouldn't look like a stair actually.
01:12:576 (72576|5,72576|4,72726|4,72726|3,72876|3,72876|2,73026|2,73026|1) - uhm i think you should better mirror those notes so its like this http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/954239
01:16:776 - Need more notes here consistent speedup pattern shall stay consistent

fixed everything else

SHD:

00:49:926 (49926|1,49926|3,50001|2,50001|4,50076|3,50076|5) - I think all of those notes should move 1 column to the right for a better pitch relevancy and this one 00:51:126 (51126|2) - better to the 6th column
00:57:576 - This looks really too easy. I think there was this cool hold stream before but now its gone. Maybe scramble the notes around a bit or something.
01:16:176 (76176|1,76326|1,76476|1,76626|1) - those notes look really awfull to play for no reason, move them somewhere else?
01:47:901 (107901|6) - lol
01:53:901 (113901|1) - ^ Better remove those 2. They seem more a pain than anything good to the map :?
02:02:676 - I think you should add here a note aswell speedup pattern shall stay as it is
02:02:976 - ^ ^

fixed everything else
Thank you <3
Entozer
Hello \o/

Mod/suggestions
EZ
00:19:476 (19476|5) - Add whistle?
00:24:276 (24276|1) - ^

@00:35:376 - ~ 00:36:576 - Change to http://puu.sh/4hY8P.jpg ? I think it's better that way, (also keeping consistent with one note to press at a time)
Same for 00:44:976 - ~ 00:46:176 -

00:39:876 (39876|1) - Missing note? (see: 00:49:476 (49476|1) - )

comment: 01:34:776 - I love how this part is noted. I have one suggestion, I'm not sure if you'll like it though: Maybe you can put the second claps in the same column as the previous one? Like this one: http://puu.sh/4hYfM.png

NM
00:15:126 (15126|4) - I think this is bad flow from the previous notes. Change to single notes instead? (eg: http://puu.sh/4hYlA.jpg )

00:36:576 (36576|5) - remove?
00:46:176 (46176|4) - ^

----for this set of notes----
00:56:376 (56376|5) - remove
00:56:676 (56676|0) - ^
00:56:976 (56976|5) - ^
00:57:276 (57276|1) - ^

00:56:526 - add
00:56:826 - add
00:57:126 - add
00:57:276 - add

I think it feels better to play that way
---------------------------------

HD
00:08:076 (8076|5) - add note? It feels weird to play when there was always 2 notes whenever the addition sound occurs
00:08:226 (8226|5) - ^

00:08:226 (8226|3) - Maybe you can also delete this if you did that ^

00:10:476 (10476|5) - add?
00:10:626 (10626|5) - ^

00:10:626 (10626|2) - delete?

-----
00:25:776 (25776|2) - move to lane 3
00:25:926 (25926|3) - move to lane 4
00:26:076 (26076|2) - move to lane 3
00:26:226 (26226|1) - move to lane 2

00:26:526 (26526|4) - move to lane 5

Personally, patterns like this are better (or rather, more fitting for normal/easy) when there's no note placed between the isolated one + the melody.

00:30:576 (30576|4) - move to lane 3
00:30:726 (30726|3) - move to lane 2
00:30:876 (30876|4) - move to lane 3
00:31:026 (31026|5) - move to lane 4

00:31:326 (31326|2) - move to lane 1
-----

00:43:926 (43926|3) - delete

00:43:926 (43926|3) - add
00:44:076 (44076|3) - ^
00:44:226 (44226|3) - ^ (Change the long notes to single note instead -- change focus to beat)

01:27:576 (87576|2) - from this part to 01:28:476 (88476|1) - change to http://puu.sh/4hZlh.jpg ?

From 01:37:176 (97176|4) - to 01:38:076 (98076|5) - change to same pattern as above

IN
00:12:876 (12876|2) - the double tap at this part, it feels so different :x I'm not sure how to change it, but maybe you can move the notes to avoid this

01:23:526 (83526|3) - remove?

01:23:676 (83676|2) - Maybe you can add a note here instead

01:46:626 (106626|6) - wrong starting position?

SHD
I'm tempted not to mod this since my stance on all SHD is "its good as long as it looks fun and playable for me", but I still took a quick view on it, and found none that needs to be changed \o/
Topic Starter
Loctav
Only replying to refused suggestions

Entozer wrote:

Hello \o/ hi <3

NM
00:15:126 (15126|4) - I think this is bad flow from the previous notes. Change to single notes instead? (eg: http://puu.sh/4hYlA.jpg ) single notes do not represent this noise sufficiently.


HD
00:25:776 (25776|2) - move to lane 3 is already there?
00:25:926 (25926|3) - move to lane 4 ^
00:26:076 (26076|2) - move to lane 3 ^
00:26:226 (26226|1) - move to lane 2 ^
Thank you so much. Excellent suggestions!
Roxas
[HD]

00:40:176 - Add circle in 1
00:40:476 - Add circle in 2
00:52:776 - Those finishes are really loud, try to lower the volume xD
01:07:176 - Same
01:16:776 - Same

[IN]

IN = insane? I'd rename in MX xD

00:37:326 (37326|1) - Move 3
00:52:926 - Hum, I don't like that speed-up... I'd like to put SV changes like this:
SPOILER
52776,-66.6666666666667,4,2,1,40,0,1
52851,-100,4,2,1,40,0,1
52926,-66.6666666666667,4,2,1,40,0,1
53001,-100,4,2,1,40,0,1
53226,-66.6666666666667,4,2,1,40,0,1
53301,-100,4,2,1,40,0,1
53526,-66.6666666666667,4,2,1,40,0,1
53601,-100,4,2,1,40,0,1
53676,-66.6666666666667,4,2,1,40,0,1
53751,-100,4,2,1,40,0,1
53826,-66.6666666666667,4,2,1,40,0,1
53901,-100,4,2,1,40,0,1
01:07:176 - Finish too loud and same thing for SV changes, try to add again like I did
01:16:776 - Same
01:43:176 - HS are okay here, but try to change SV here too
02:02:376 - Here you can choose if you want to keep those SV changes, I like the speed-up in the end :P

[SHD]
HP and OD 7 maybe?
For me patterns are okay, just try to change the SV as suggested in IN diff :v

Good luck, have my star <3
Topic Starter
Loctav

Roxas wrote:

[HD]

00:40:176 - Add circle in 1
00:40:476 - Add circle in 2
00:52:776 - Those finishes are really loud, try to lower the volume xD
01:07:176 - Same
01:16:776 - Same

[IN]

IN = insane? I'd rename in MX xD

00:37:326 (37326|1) - Move 3
00:52:926 - Hum, I don't like that speed-up... I'd like to put SV changes like this:
SPOILER
52776,-66.6666666666667,4,2,1,40,0,1
52851,-100,4,2,1,40,0,1
52926,-66.6666666666667,4,2,1,40,0,1
53001,-100,4,2,1,40,0,1
53226,-66.6666666666667,4,2,1,40,0,1
53301,-100,4,2,1,40,0,1
53526,-66.6666666666667,4,2,1,40,0,1
53601,-100,4,2,1,40,0,1
53676,-66.6666666666667,4,2,1,40,0,1
53751,-100,4,2,1,40,0,1
53826,-66.6666666666667,4,2,1,40,0,1
53901,-100,4,2,1,40,0,1
01:07:176 - Finish too loud and same thing for SV changes, try to add again like I did
01:16:776 - Same
01:43:176 - HS are okay here, but try to change SV here too
02:02:376 - Here you can choose if you want to keep those SV changes, I like the speed-up in the end :P

[SHD]
HP and OD 7 maybe?
For me patterns are okay, just try to change the SV as suggested in IN diff :v

Good luck, have my star <3
Fixed everything but changing the diff settings in the SHD. Applied the SV changes with a more advanced, smoother but more complicated method.
Thanks <3
ljqandylee
Hi Loctav~ sry for my late, my work in real life got very busy now ;w;
[SHD]
00:03:876 (3876|0,4026|1) - Move 1 column right?
00:05:901 (5901|3) - Strange and no sound to apply for, letting it start from 00:05:751 or 00:05:826 would be better imo
00:08:076 (8076|0,8076|3) - Change to http://puu.sh/4oDOU.png ? and then making 00:08:076 (8076|3,8226|3) Drum+Whistle.
00:40:026 (40026|6) - Move to 3
00:40:176 (40176|2) - Move to 7
00:40:476 (40476|3) - Delete, no need to put a small-jack here imo
00:56:676 (56676|0,56826|1) - Move 1 column right?
01:19:776 (79776|1) - Start from 01:19:626, and then add a new LN from 01:19:776 to 01:22:176, at 3rd column.
01:37:101 - Strong beat, try add a note at 3rd column, or 3+4, or even make a small-jack here if you're aggresive lol (/me runs
01:44:676 (104676|2,104826|2) - Move to 2
01:44:976 (104976|1,105126|1) - Move to 1
01:45:876 (105876|3,106026|3) - Move to 5
01:46:176 (106176|4,106326|4) - Move to 4
01:47:076 (107076|1,107226|1) - Move to 3
01:53:976 (113976|2) - Move to 01:53:901, missed a strong beat there
01:56:826 (116826|3) - Delete, the strong beat doesn't exist here so remain 1 individual note is enough, also it would be better if you move 01:56:826 (116826|5) to 7th column.

Sad to find that I haven't enough time today to completely mod this map :( , so I'll continue to mod other diffs according to your reply on SHD, for I can know your thought and then avoid some repeating suggestions in other diffs.
Topic Starter
Loctav

ljqandylee wrote:

Hi Loctav~ sry for my late, my work in real life got very busy now ;w;
[SHD]
00:03:876 (3876|0,4026|1) - Move 1 column right? excellent!
00:05:901 (5901|3) - Strange and no sound to apply for, letting it start from 00:05:751 or 00:05:826 would be better imo removed it entirely
00:08:076 (8076|0,8076|3) - Change to http://puu.sh/4oDOU.png ? and then making 00:08:076 (8076|3,8226|3) Drum+Whistle. okay
00:40:026 (40026|6) - Move to 3 k
00:40:176 (40176|2) - Move to 7 k
00:40:476 (40476|3) - Delete, no need to put a small-jack here imo k
00:56:676 (56676|0,56826|1) - Move 1 column right? yes!
01:19:776 (79776|1) - Start from 01:19:626, and then add a new LN from 01:19:776 to 01:22:176, at 3rd column. seems reasonable
01:37:101 - Strong beat, try add a note at 3rd column, or 3+4, or even make a small-jack here if you're aggresive lol (/me runs I am aggressive, lol
01:44:676 (104676|2,104826|2) - Move to 2 k
01:44:976 (104976|1,105126|1) - Move to 1 k
01:45:876 (105876|3,106026|3) - Move to 5 k
01:46:176 (106176|4,106326|4) - Move to 4 k
01:47:076 (107076|1,107226|1) - Move to 3 k
01:53:976 (113976|2) - Move to 01:53:901, missed a strong beat there k
01:56:826 (116826|3) - Delete, the strong beat doesn't exist here so remain 1 individual note is enough, also it would be better if you move 01:56:826 (116826|5) to 7th column. seems reasonable

Sad to find that I haven't enough time today to completely mod this map :( , so I'll continue to mod other diffs according to your reply on SHD, for I can know your thought and then avoid some repeating suggestions in other diffs. Looking forward to it!
Thanks a lot. Awaiting your further modding.
(Adjusted lead-in time to be automatically determined by osu!)
ljqandylee
Further mod, hope it can help you as well~
[IN]
OD should not be lower than HD
00:15:276 - Here's a strong beat, I do not recommend just putting a slider's end here. Maybe you can try this: http://puu.sh/4rTDG.jpg
00:19:476 (19476|4,19626|5) - Move 1 column left
00:39:801 (39801|3) - Delete
00:44:301 - Add a note at 4th column
01:00:576 (60576|3,60876|4,60876|2) - Move 1 column left
01:33:576 ~ 01:34:776 - Try this: http://puu.sh/4rUdb.png
01:49:626 - Add a note at 4th column
01:50:226 - ^
01:53:901 - Add a note at 2nd column

[HD]
00:15:276 - Same as IN, try moving LN to 4th and add a note at 5th
00:19:476 (19476|4,19626|5) - Move 1 column left
00:29:826 - Since you also put clap sound here, it's better to add a note at 1st and set clap to it, leaving the 4th one only with whistle imo
00:31:176 (31176|3) - Move to 3rd
00:49:776 - Add a note, just as you did on 00:40:176 and 00:40:476
00:50:076 - ^
01:16:476 (76476|3) - Extend to 01:16:776, otherwise a bit strange...
01:47:976 (107976|3,108126|2,108276|1,108426|0) - Move 1 column right
01:53:376 (113376|3,113526|4,113676|5,113826|6) - Move 1 column left
01:55:176 (115176|6,115326|6) - Change to a LN, from 01:55:176 to 01:55:476

[NM]
OD should not be lower than EZ
00:10:176 (10176|2,10326|3) - Both move to 2nd, and 00:10:476 (10476|4) - Move to 4th, in order to fit your keysound better XD
00:15:276 - Add a note at 7th, for the same reason as IN
00:34:776 (34776|3) - Better not to put this LN on middle lane imo, bcz you've put 2 notes on middle lane just before it to fit drums, but the LN isn't for drum
01:08:376 ~ 01:16:776 - Extend every LN (or every two LNs as you did from 01:25:176 - 01:28:776) in this section to 1/1 long, bcz we'd better avoid using a LN's end with nothing else to express a rhythmical point
01:29:976 ~ 01:33:576 - ^

[EZ]
00:39:876 - Add a note
00:52:926 - Add a note at 1st, as you did on 01:07:326
01:44:376 ~ 02:03:576 - too empty, maybe you can add notes on 01:44:676 - 01:45:276 - 01:45:876 - 01:46:476 - 01:47:076 - 01:47:676 - 01:48:276 - 01:48:876 - etc.
Topic Starter
Loctav

ljqandylee wrote:

Further mod, hope it can help you as well~
[IN]
00:15:276 - Here's a strong beat, I do not recommend just putting a slider's end here. humbly disagreeing, since releasing the hold fits the fade in beat the most imo
[HD]
00:15:276 - Same as IN, try moving LN to 4th and add a note at 5th ^

[NM]
00:15:276 - Add a note at 7th, for the same reason as IN ^
Fixed everything else.
ljqandylee
Fine with me.

Bubbled :D
ExPew
yeah bubbled....

remod time

No Kudosu

[EZ]

-nthg

[NM]

00:59:076 (59076|3,59676|3,60276|3,60876|3,61476|3,62076|4) - remove whistle? ( if feel better )
01:03:876 (63876|3) - change to normal note? and then 01:04:176 (64176|6) - change to hold, feel bit consistent with other next hold?
01:04:476 (64476|3,65076|3,65676|3,66276|3,66876|5) - remove whistle? ( if feel better ) ^ fix them too if you accept this

[HD]

01:28:626 - add hold on 6?
01:38:226 - add hold on 2?

[IN]

01:48:576 (108576|2,108726|3,108876|4,109026|5) - i suggest move like this http://puu.sh/4tvI1.png , 01:49:176 (109176|3) - overlap note move on 6 (i think it will fit on this 01:50:376 (110376|5) - , and 01:46:776 (106776|6) - strings hold should end here 01:49:176 -
01:53:901 (113901|1,113976|1) - (combobreak) mini jack beside hold at end then got new hold on 1, thats so cruel.

[SHD]


as i promised , i will remod this SHD

rechange to OD7 - you made 31% holds of this diff and 1/2 most... and some note pattern feel like o2jam ( if OD8 make a bit hard to accuracy your 1/2 jack mixed holds )

-feel dont want to touch more pattern (will ruin your pitch maybe), but still....i want

00:15:276 - should add beat note here on 2 and move away at short hold other line
00:22:176 (22176|0,22326|1,22476|0,22626|1) - move on right side on 5 6 7? like this ? http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/988544 00:22:476 - add a note on 2 ( referred from this 00:20:676 (20676|1,21276|1,21876|1) - )
00:44:676 - add 1 more note here ? or 00:44:376 (44376|4) - delete? ( suddenly 3 notes here and then 00:44:676 - 2 notes here
Topic Starter
Loctav

ExPew wrote:

yeah bubbled....

remod time

No Kudosu

[EZ]

-nthg

[NM]

00:59:076 (59076|3,59676|3,60276|3,60876|3,61476|3,62076|4) - remove whistle? ( if feel better ) can't agree on this, feels better with current whistles
01:03:876 (63876|3) - change to normal note? and then 01:04:176 (64176|6) - change to hold, feel bit consistent with other next hold? the rhythm is following the song, especially regarding pitch relevancy
01:04:476 (64476|3,65076|3,65676|3,66276|3,66876|5) - remove whistle? ( if feel better ) ^ fix them too if you accept this ^

[HD]

01:28:626 - add hold on 6? doesn't fit the rest moment I wanted to create here
01:38:226 - add hold on 2? ^

[IN]

01:48:576 (108576|2,108726|3,108876|4,109026|5) - i suggest move like this http://puu.sh/4tvI1.png , 01:49:176 (109176|3) - overlap note move on 6 (i think it will fit on this 01:50:376 (110376|5) - , and 01:46:776 (106776|6) - strings hold should end here 01:49:176 - alright
01:53:901 (113901|1,113976|1) - (combobreak) mini jack beside hold at end then got new hold on 1, thats so cruel. made it alternate

[SHD]


as i promised , i will remod this SHD

rechange to OD7 - you made 31% holds of this diff and 1/2 most... and some note pattern feel like o2jam ( if OD8 make a bit hard to accuracy your 1/2 jack mixed holds ) since it's a challenging SHD, and the IN also works with OD8, I want to stay with OD8.

-feel dont want to touch more pattern (will ruin your pitch maybe), but still....i want

00:15:276 - should add beat note here on 2 and move away at short hold other line still disagreeing, incosnistent with other diffs then, also doesn't fit the song's fade noise
00:22:176 (22176|0,22326|1,22476|0,22626|1) - move on right side on 5 6 7? like this ? http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/988544 00:22:476 - add a note on 2 ( referred from this 00:20:676 (20676|1,21276|1,21876|1) - ) this doesn't work with the hand-alternating pattern
00:44:676 - add 1 more note here ? or 00:44:376 (44376|4) - delete? ( suddenly 3 notes here and then 00:44:676 - 2 notes here three notes work with the pattern-start stressing
ExPew
k i nothing to mod anymore xD

go rank rank yeh
ljqandylee
Nice change~

Re-bubbled
xxbidiao
I should not try SHD as my morning exercise XD
Anyway first slider sea map!

Some minor suggestions:
Overall - The 13-24-35-46 pattern should be used cautiously because different input method (Beatmania IIDX controller and keyboard) treat this pattern differently, result in very large gap in difficulty. It would be a relatively easy pattern in IIDX input but a nightmare for keyboarders. (This is why keyboard players love random in LR2, which their maps are originally designed for IIDX controllers)
00:44:376 (44376|4,44376|2,44376|0,44451|1,44451|3,44526|4,44526|2,44601|3,44601|5,44676|4,44676|6,44751|5,44751|3,44826|4,44826|2,44901|1,44901|3,44976|2,44976|4) - Maybe a single stair instrument(piano? I don't know how to say that) + drum is better? Try moving 00:44:601 (44601|5) - to 00:44:676 (44676|1) - and remove 00:44:901 (44901|3) - this one?
00:46:176 (46176|2,46176|0,46251|1,46251|3,46326|2,46326|4,46401|5,46401|3,46476|4,46476|6,46551|5,46551|3,46626|4,46626|2,46701|1,46701|3,46776|2,46776|0) - ^ Since this is not a linear part in pitch relevancy, I have a suggestion on this part:

Maybe not beautiful enough but is better fit in hand.
01:13:026 (73026|0,73026|1) - Regarding music, it seems that there should not be 2 notes here. (there are only 3 chain beats, however you made 4 doubles)
01:43:026 (103026|1,103026|0) - ^
02:05:001 (125001|5) - Add a slider here? (Representing vocal,like what you map in the middle of the map, the hand resting period)
Topic Starter
Loctav

xxbidiao wrote:

I should not try SHD as my morning exercise XD
Anyway first slider sea map!

Some minor suggestions:
Overall - The 13-24-35-46 pattern should be used cautiously because different input method (Beatmania IIDX controller and keyboard) treat this pattern differently, result in very large gap in difficulty. It would be a relatively easy pattern in IIDX input but a nightmare for keyboarders. (This is why keyboard players love random in LR2, which their maps are originally designed for IIDX controllers)
00:44:376 (44376|4,44376|2,44376|0,44451|1,44451|3,44526|4,44526|2,44601|3,44601|5,44676|4,44676|6,44751|5,44751|3,44826|4,44826|2,44901|1,44901|3,44976|2,44976|4) - Maybe a single stair instrument(piano? I don't know how to say that) + drum is better? Try moving 00:44:601 (44601|5) - to 00:44:676 (44676|1) - and remove 00:44:901 (44901|3) - this one? I see no problem with that pattern tbh
00:46:176 (46176|2,46176|0,46251|1,46251|3,46326|2,46326|4,46401|5,46401|3,46476|4,46476|6,46551|5,46551|3,46626|4,46626|2,46701|1,46701|3,46776|2,46776|0) - ^ Since this is not a linear part in pitch relevancy, I have a suggestion on this part:

Maybe not beautiful enough but is better fit in hand. disagreeing, the current pattern plays better and is waaaaay more readable than... this.
01:13:026 (73026|0,73026|1) - Regarding music, it seems that there should not be 2 notes here. (there are only 3 chain beats, however you made 4 doubles) what? the strong beat is consistent here
01:43:026 (103026|1,103026|0) - ^ ^
02:05:001 (125001|5) - Add a slider here? (Representing vocal,like what you map in the middle of the map, the hand resting period) no need to. The vocals are hard to follow and so minor that they don't deserve to be mapped.
No change. Thank you anyways.
woc2006
Ranked.
Timorisu
Gz on rank
Stefan
Nice! :D
OnosakiHito
Great! Finally this got ranked. Have to play it now for a while.
Congratulation :3
Maiz94
Congratz, loctav-sama. \:D/
Roxas
Congrats man! :D
Hanyuu
Congrats :)
Garygoh884
This is really awesome! Gonna put my hands to work.

17VA
Ranked!!@#$!$!@!
Aqo
oh, it actually happened

grats loctav! :3
Dark_Ai
glückwunsch
ExPew
yeh finally
Alumetorz
nicee, congrats!
Chewin
WAO
Remillion Cross
congrats \ :D /
Yuzeyun
I'm bad at 7K, but I must say I'm impressed. One day, I will pass HD. One day.
(pass = S for me)
Rumia-
a bit late anyways congrats /o/ Loctav the gay mapper \o\
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