jonathanlfj wrote:

Hi from my queue hi~
srry for the delay orz no problem~

Black is suggestion
Blue is highly recommended
Red is unrankable

[General]
how did you get slider multiplier of 1.15? just wondering. In case you did it manually, there is a rule in the ranking criteria "Do not manually edit anything in an .osu file that cannot be changed through the Editor." hmm.. just hold CTRL in the editor

[Easy]
00:51:014 (1) - take off the whistle
01:05:256 (1) - add a note here?
01:44:984 (1) - take off whistle
01:56:977 (3,4) - spacing
02:15:717 (3) - take off finish
02:26:211 (4) - clap here, and i recommend you not stack it under the slider because its hard for newbies to read
02:41:202 (1) - add a note
02:47:199 (4) - move out of stack, same reason as above

[Normal]
AR+1
Use AI mod to check spacing issues, won't point them out here
00:51:014 (1) - take off whistle
01:05:256 (1) - clap on slider head
01:40:861 (1) - add a note
01:44:984 (1) - take off whistle
01:59:226 (1) - clap on slider head
02:16:466 (4) - 1 grid down and left for perfect star
02:20:214 (4) - add finish on slider tail
02:30:708 (3) - make it so it blankets 02:31:458 (4) better

[Hard]
00:34:524 (2,3) - make it a slider to correspond with 00:35:086 (4) (or the reverse)
00:47:266 (2,3,4,5) - take whistle off the notes on red ticks, sounds better imo
01:05:256 (1,2,3,4) - make these flow downwards so it follows a smooth path to 01:06:006 (5)
01:28:868 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1) - make this combo perfectly symmetrical
01:59:226 (1,2,3,4) - make these go down too
02:13:281 (5) - if you use a red node for the center and adjust a bit, the slider would look much smoother
02:18:340 (1) - take the finish off and make it a repeat slider?
02:52:633 (2,3,4) - shift this so 2 comes out of stack and 4 is in stack with 02:53:196 (5), plays better imo

very nice mapset and storyboard! hope to see this ranked soon

384059043 wrote:

hmm.. just hold CTRL in the editor

jonathanlfj wrote:

384059043 wrote:

hmm.. just hold CTRL in the editor

OMG why do i not know these stuff?? anyways learned something new lol

Lizellota wrote:

Hard

[General]

remove all bookmarks please ><

-Mapping:

00:30:026 (6) - NC
01:41:986 (7) - ^
01:43:485 (1) - remove NC
02:31:458 (1) - ^
02:32:770 (6) - NC

- Hitsounds:

00:24:030 - maybe add normal finish? sounds nice, really :O
00:36:023 - ^
01:29:992 - ^
01:41:986 - ^
00:53:450 (2) - add clap, i hear him o.o
01:05:256 (1) - ^
01:47:607 (2) - ^
01:59:226 (1) - ^
02:41:202 (1) - ^
01:56:977 - finish?
02:26:960 (5) - ^
02:35:955 - ^
02:38:954 - ^
02:21:339 - remove finish
02:21:713 - ^
02:22:088 - ^

Normal

- Hitsounds:

01:15:001 - finish?
01:56:977 - ^

And about Normal finish(like in Insane) if you want fix it and other diffs :3
Good luck~ star~

Teru21 wrote:

Hi.. xD from Its just a tiny Modding Team

[Easy]
00:49:890 - add note (follow the vocals)
00:55:887 - ^
00:59:260 - delete and add slider reverse from 00:58:885 ~ 00:59:634
01:09:004 (2) - delete and add slider from 01:08:629 ~ 01:09:004
00:57:011 (3) - NC
01:16:500 (4) - ^
01:43:485 (2) - turn into slider reverse
01:44:984 (1) - end it 01:47:233?
01:53:979 (1) - x:288 y:296
01:56:228 (2) - stack with 01:53:229 (4) then, resnap (3)
02:18:715 (1) - not alined with (2)
oh.. this is a bit boring... Dx

[Normal]
00:36:772 (4,5) - (4) not well shaped with (5)

[Hard]
00:37:897 (4) - NC
00:39:021 (1) - RNC
00:41:082 (4) - NC
00:42:019 (1) - RNC
00:43:893 (7) - NC
01:15:938 (5) - x:136 y:272

hm... thats all xD Good Luck :3

Flower wrote:

Hi, mod from the queue~

Generally good. Nice map, and star.
Suggestion only.

点我看

.
[General]
Delete epilepsy warning. The SB has not got strobe like http://osu.ppy.sh/s/45791. No such warning is OK.

[Easy]
00:35:273 (1,2,3) - Rearrange. 3 is partly under the 300 of the previous slider 00:33:024 (6) . Hard for beginners to read.
00:42:019 (1) - Add Normal sections and finish like 00:36:023 (3) .
00:48:016 (3) - ^
00:51:014 (1) - Look at my signature. Silent spinner end is unrankable...
01:12:003 (2,3) - Does not listen good. Combine into one single slider.
01:38:987 (3) - A bit overlap.
01:46:389 - Unsnapped timing point. Will make the spinner sound weird. Also, spinner end should be able to be heard.

[Normal]
00:51:014 (1) - Silent spinner end is unrankable
02:12:344 (1) - Could be deleted, for a small tiny rest?
02:15:342 (1) - Change NC to 02:14:592 (4)
02:18:715 (1) - Change NC to 02:19:090 (2)
02:41:952 (3) - NC?

[Hard]
00:53:263 (1) - Change to softFinish.
01:47:233 (1,2) - Approach circle can't be seen.
02:08:783 (3) - Slider begin add finish.
02:14:967 (9) - Add finish.
02:16:279 (2,3) - 差评 这种重叠打乱节奏 还是小心些好

1. Looking clear!

1. Beatmap design/suggestion
   (These are totally suggestion only,you can ignore them if you disagree.)
   
   1. 00:36:023 (3) - 我覺得彎度略不自然, 建議直接弄成直線可能還比較好看.
   2. 00:51:014 (1) - I think the spinner should be started at 00:50:640 - because lyric: 'know' (vocal protraction) starts from 00:50:640 - , so the best way is to follow the vocal here.
   3. 01:44:984 (1) - ^
   4. 02:02:974 (3) - Some design nazi here. Could you make this slider to another shape because I have seen you use this shape few times already, changing it to another shape can give more feeling to player.
   5. 02:23:962 (3) - ^
   6. 02:44:950 (5) - ^
   7. 02:49:448 (1) - I don't think a spinner should present here because there are no any kind of musical protraction and the vocal is still singing at that point, thus I expect some notes and sliders here instead.
2. Hitsound
   (These are totally my thought only,it base on my taste,feel free to ignore them)
   
   1. 00:39:021 (6) - You could add a normal-finish hitsond here to fit your hitsound pattern.
   2. 01:00:009 (1) - I can't get the intention of decreasing volume here. 65% volume fits the music very well enough.
   3. 01:03:008 (1) - I would suggest changing the end of the slider to soft-hitsound because there are no vocal and drum sound.
   4. 01:46:296 (x) - I would turn it down to 5% volume here if I were you is due to very calm part.
   5. 02:28:366 (x) - ^

1. Difficulty setting
   (I suggest the difficulty setting for better gameplay.)
   
   1. HP-1 would be nice.
2. Issue/unrankable stuff
   (Something bad in gameplay or unrankable staff,you should take a look on it.)
   
   1. 00:54:013 - Speed change in normal probably is not a good idea because some recruit may play normal and they may not handle it, also, x1.0 to x1.5 is a big gap, it comes really abruptly. Removing it is highly suggested.
   2. 01:47:982 - ^
3. Beatmap design/suggestion
   (These are totally suggestion only,you can ignore them if you disagree.)
   
   1. 00:36:023 (3) - Probably make it more curve to consistent with 00:36:772 (4) - , you may need to adjust the spacing after change.
   2. 01:38:987 (1) - I would remove the spinner if I were you because I found that you make a slider in the same melody and for consistency.
   3. 01:48:732 (2) - ,01:50:231 (4) - Really! The 1/2 is really weird here, I don't think it fits the music. Just put a 1/1 here as you do it before.
   4. 02:11:781 (3,4) - How about aligning the note from the end of the slider? The intention of doing this is to make it more beautiful.
   5. 02:49:448 (1) - I don't think a spinner should present here because there are no any kind of musical protraction and the vocal is still singing at that point, thus I expect some notes and sliders here instead.
   6. 02:52:446 (1) - ^
4. Hitsound
   (These are totally my thought only,it base on my taste,feel free to ignore them)
   
   1. 02:26:960 (1) - Please remove the whistle at the end of the spinner and then slience the end of the spinner is due to no drums/vocals/instruments presence.
   2. 02:38:954 (1) - Remove the finish at the end of the spinner and then slience it. This sounds better for me.

1. Beatmap design/suggestion
   (These are totally suggestion only,you can ignore them if you disagree.)
   
   1. 00:31:525 (1) - This slider looks collapsed hence the streamline of the whole pattern is ruined. I would suggest remaking the slider.
   2. 00:37:709 (x) - I suggest adding a note here to follow the drums. (I have done this for you in the hitsound test file ._.)
   3. 01:05:256 (1,2,3,4,5) - ...Inconsistent spacing between these note and they isn't a straight line. Were you made it intentionally? Please fix it if not and please explain something here if yes because I can't see any reason to do it like this......
   4. 01:37:488 (4) - How about aligning this to 01:37:113 (2,3) - ?
   5. 02:49:448 (1) - I don't think a spinner should present here because there are no any kind of musical protraction and the vocal is still singing at that point, thus I expect some notes and sliders here instead.
2. Hitsound
   (These are totally my thought only,it base on my taste,feel free to ignore them)
   
   1. 我幫你做了一下hitsound, 我覺得這歌的hitsound可以做成這樣的, 你試試看? 我只做了一部分, 如果喜歡的話你可以跟著這規律做下去, 不懂的話可以隨時在game找我 link: http://puu.sh/139nm
   2. 01:44:703 (1) - Please remove the finish at the end of the spinner and then slience it because there is no accents present.
   3. 02:27:054 (1) - ^

kanpakyin wrote:

Hi! Request was taken from my queue.

[General]

1. Looking clear!

[Easy]

1. Beatmap design/suggestion
   (These are totally suggestion only,you can ignore them if you disagree.)
   
   1. 00:36:023 (3) - 我覺得彎度略不自然, 建議直接弄成直線可能還比較好看.
   2. 00:51:014 (1) - I think the spinner should be started at 00:50:640 - because lyric: 'know' (vocal protraction) starts from 00:50:640 - , so the best way is to follow the vocal here.
   3. 01:44:984 (1) - ^
   4. 02:02:974 (3) - Some design nazi here. Could you make this slider to another shape because I have seen you use this shape few times already, changing it to another shape can give more feeling to player.
   5. 02:23:962 (3) - ^
   6. 02:44:950 (5) - ^
   7. 02:49:448 (1) - I don't think a spinner should present here because there are no any kind of musical protraction and the vocal is still singing at that point, thus I expect some notes and sliders here instead.
2. Hitsound
   (These are totally my thought only,it base on my taste,feel free to ignore them)
   
   1. 00:39:021 (6) - You could add a normal-finish hitsond here to fit your hitsound pattern.
   2. 01:00:009 (1) - I can't get the intention of decreasing volume here. 65% volume fits the music very well enough.
   3. 01:03:008 (1) - I would suggest changing the end of the slider to soft-hitsound because there are no vocal and drum sound.
   4. 01:46:296 (x) - I would turn it down to 5% volume here if I were you is due to very calm part.
   5. 02:28:366 (x) - ^

[Normal]

1. Difficulty setting
   (I suggest the difficulty setting for better gameplay.)
   
   1. HP-1 would be nice.
2. Issue/unrankable stuff
   (Something bad in gameplay or unrankable staff,you should take a look on it.)
   
   1. 00:54:013 - Speed change in normal probably is not a good idea because some recruit may play normal and they may not handle it, also, x1.0 to x1.5 is a big gap, it comes really abruptly. Removing it is highly suggested.
   2. 01:47:982 - ^
3. Beatmap design/suggestion
   (These are totally suggestion only,you can ignore them if you disagree.)
   
   1. 00:36:023 (3) - Probably make it more curve to consistent with 00:36:772 (4) - , you may need to adjust the spacing after change.
   2. 01:38:987 (1) - I would remove the spinner if I were you because I found that you make a slider in the same melody and for consistency.
   3. 01:48:732 (2) - ,01:50:231 (4) - Really! The 1/2 is really weird here, I don't think it fits the music. Just put a 1/1 here as you do it before.
   4. 02:11:781 (3,4) - How about aligning the note from the end of the slider? The intention of doing this is to make it more beautiful.
   5. 02:49:448 (1) - I don't think a spinner should present here because there are no any kind of musical protraction and the vocal is still singing at that point, thus I expect some notes and sliders here instead.
   6. 02:52:446 (1) - ^
4. Hitsound
   (These are totally my thought only,it base on my taste,feel free to ignore them)
   
   1. 02:26:960 (1) - Please remove the whistle at the end of the spinner and then slience the end of the spinner is due to no drums/vocals/instruments presence.
   2. 02:38:954 (1) - Remove the finish at the end of the spinner and then slience it. This sounds better for me.

[Hard]

1. Beatmap design/suggestion
   (These are totally suggestion only,you can ignore them if you disagree.)
   
   1. 00:31:525 (1) - This slider looks collapsed hence the streamline of the whole pattern is ruined. I would suggest remaking the slider.
   2. 00:37:709 (x) - I suggest adding a note here to follow the drums. (I have done this for you in the hitsound test file ._.)
   3. 01:05:256 (1,2,3,4,5) - ...Inconsistent spacing between these note and they isn't a straight line. Were you made it intentionally? Please fix it if not and please explain something here if yes because I can't see any reason to do it like this......
   4. 01:37:488 (4) - How about aligning this to 01:37:113 (2,3) - ?
   5. 02:49:448 (1) - I don't think a spinner should present here because there are no any kind of musical protraction and the vocal is still singing at that point, thus I expect some notes and sliders here instead.
2. Hitsound
   (These are totally my thought only,it base on my taste,feel free to ignore them)
   
   1. 我幫你做了一下hitsound, 我覺得這歌的hitsound可以做成這樣的, 你試試看? 我只做了一部分, 如果喜歡的話你可以跟著這規律做下去, 不懂的話可以隨時在game找我 link: http://puu.sh/139nm
   2. 01:44:703 (1) - Please remove the finish at the end of the spinner and then slience it because there is no accents present.
   3. 02:27:054 (1) - ^

Really nice as a new mapper, I will bubble it.

1. 02:11:219 (2,3,4) - Please align it properly.

1. 01:44:703 (1) - Please change the end of the spinner to soft-hitsound please.
2. 02:20:964 (1,2,3,4) - Would you mind to increase the spacing a bit here for artistic reason? Here's the example, you can place it like this or in your way.
   
   suggestion

   

kanpakyin wrote:

Rechecking.

[Normal]

1. 02:11:219 (2,3,4) - Please align it properly.

[Hard]

1. 01:44:703 (1) - Please change the end of the spinner to soft-hitsound please.
2. 02:20:964 (1,2,3,4) - Would you mind to increase the spacing a bit here for artistic reason? Here's the example, you can place it like this or in your way.
   
   suggestion

   

kanpakyin wrote:

Bubbled.


To next BATs/MATs: Current timing was discussed by me and blissfulyoshi. However, please do a double check before ranking or popping.

a3272509123 wrote:

恭喜小虾虾first bubble~

Flask wrote:

哦哦哦泡了!

jesse7419 wrote:

Congratz for bubble ><

Andrea wrote:

Awesome map, have my babies.

Linkin Park <3

Andrea wrote:

Awesome map, have my babies.

Linkin Park <3

Armin wrote:

Ranked.

Stefan wrote:

twilight as tag... WHY??
Congrats

Shiny_skydragon wrote:

Hey, congrats! Nice map! It's really fun to play.

But, I hate to say this, there's a few problems with the lyrics in the storyboard. I know you just redid it...

Instead of "I can be who you are," I'm 99% sure it should be "I can't be who you are."

And, instead of "I've shared what I've made," "I've shed, but I'm me."

Source: http://lyrics.wikia.com/Gracenote:Linki ... l_The_Rest

Again, nice map and SB. Just wanted to point this out, if you feel like fixing it.

sunshy wrote:

卧槽
congrat~

Athena Tennos wrote:

偶去？！rank了？！~。。。。这神马情况。。。orz。。。就我一个在打酱油刷SP么;_;.....
恭喜>_<!~

384059043 wrote:

sunshy wrote:

卧槽
congrat~

正在全力思考中

sunshy wrote:

第一张图就RANK好羡慕Q_Q
喵喵喵
壮我大骗顶吧又添一正式麻婆

384059043 wrote:

sunshy wrote:

第一张图就RANK好羡慕Q_Q
喵喵喵
壮我大骗顶吧又添一正式麻婆

OAO这是第三张submit的