Duca - Ashita Tenki ni Naare (Short Ver.)

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Topic Starter
Mythol
wow.. i was joking :p
but thx!! :D
YTYuyu
alright i'm gonna take a gamble on this since it's late D:...bad idea to mod late at night :(

Bold: Unrankable/must fix.
Red: You should fix it, but it's up to you.
Italic: Suggestion. Feel free to ignore this if you don't like it.
Blue: Comment. I'll give you my opinions, advice, or if i'm curious about something.

[General]
remove the lead in for all diffs since the start of the song starts at around 1-2 seconds.

[Easy]
00:02:628 (1) - add a whistle at the end. it'll be consistent with your next pattern since it acts as another 2/1 slider in this part. having no whistle at the end sounds odd and that the hitsound pattern suddenly stopped and it keeps going again.
00:05:468 (1) - ^
00:08:308 (1,2) - ^. but not with the next, but with the 2 circles at the beginning.
00:13:989 - how about a circle with a finish to give off a nice effect to the song? it's like the introduction to the song. the beginning of the map is like the prologue of this song. or you can add a spinner and end it till 00:16:829 to follow the long pause in the vocals.
00:27:835 (3) - the clap fits with this part, but it's too loud and a bit unfitting for me. reduce the volume no 10 or 50% so that it'd match the sound of the drums.
00:29:255 (2) - ^
00:40:971 (3) - replace this for 2 circles. since the previous combo is sliders, players might expect that this is a combo with just circles.
00:46:296 - how about adding notes here to follow the guitar and then the vocals for this? i always feell that something is missing here, as if the rhythm wants to keep going.
00:48:071 (1) - add a whistle at the end. it'll follow the guitar riff in the song since you have a whistle at the beginning of (2) which matches the guitar, why don't you do the same thing here since the guitar riff sounds the same?
00:50:912 (1) - ^
01:40:616 - how about adding a spinner here and ending it at 01:42:302 since it follows the guitar in the song? i think it'll be great to add a spinner as a last chance to pass or to get bonus points in this spinner.

[kosiga's Normal]
00:04:048 (2) - add a whistle at the beginning. it'll keep the consistency pattern going from the slider, and the vocals tone is still the same from the 1st note.
00:13:989 - same as easy.
00:22:509 - how about adding a spinner here? it'll be consistent with the easy and insane diff, and it goes along with the guitar for this part.
00:38:131 (3) - hmm how about making this a curved slider? if you do, then this note would blanket the next slider in this combo, and i think that would flow smoother during gameplay.
00:41:681 (1) - add a clap at the beginning. it matches the drums in the song. it just sounds empty without that clap to cover it up.
00:56:947 (2) - try making a curved slider here. it'll blanket the 1st half of that wave slider which would be nicer and for flow to the next note.
01:02:983 (6) - you forgot to add a whistle at the beginning. add it there to keep the whistle pattern going because it suddenly stops and it keeps going.
01:04:758 (4) - this repeat slider sounds unfitting because it shows no flow in the vocals. to make it flow to the vocals a lot accurate, do this. if you ignore this, then you can do something similar to this.
01:07:953 (2) - the whistle isn't loud enough to match the cymbals, so replace it for a finish.
01:16:119 (4) - same as 01:04:758.
01:27:835 (1) - same as 01:07:953 but at the repeat arrow.
01:40:616 (1) - extend this spinner by 1/4 because that's where the guitar really ends.

[S o r d a-sama~]
00:13:989 - same as easy.
00:22:509 - ^
00:24:994 - if you follow the suggestion above, then add a circle here to test the player's timing and reaction for this part.
00:29:432 (4) - remove the whistle at the end. you're following the start of the guitar to match the whistles. there's no change in the guitar at the end of this part. just a long pause in the guitar.
00:35:113 (2) - remove the clap at the end. it ruins the consistency pattern in the claps.
01:10:083 (2,3) - how about replacing this for a 1/2 slider to follow the vocals in this part since there's a hold in vocals in this part.
01:16:474 (1) - add a finish at the beginning. it'll be consistent with the other diffs.
01:16:474 (1,2,3,1,2,3) - add the remaining claps at the missing white ticks because the drums play at every 1/1 line. it'll cover up the sound of the drums in the song.
01:23:219 - add a circle here. the guitar is still going from this part.
01:40:616 - same as easy. if you do this, replace the 1st spinner for notes to match the cymbal clash in the song.

[Insane]
00:13:989 - same as easy.
01:03:693 (1,2,3,4) - how about making curved sliders for flow to the next note and flow throughout this combo?
01:07:953 (1) - you forgot to add a finish at the beginning. it matches the cymbals in the song. add it there to match the cymbals in the song.
01:17:006 (3) - add a clap here. it'll keep that 1/1 clap pattern going. i don't like now it suddenly stops and keeps going again.
01:19:314 (1) - add a whistle at the beginning. you did it on easy, so why don't you do it here?
01:40:616 - same as easy.
omg i can't do it at this rate. i'm way too tired to mod :(. do "not" apply any of these suggestions, and don't give me kd since i'm not done with the full mod. i'll try to do it tomorrow...if i have the time...

I guess that's it. since Roddie gave you a star icon, that tells me it's almost ready for a MAT check. just get a few more mods and then ask a MAT. anyways star and GL :D
S o r d a
update~ thanks for mod Byakugan-sama!
http://puu.sh/Ized

@Mythol if you change spinner end you can change my diff spinner
also break time too :3
Topic Starter
Mythol
>Byak fixed the loud claps in easy (if you notice I'm consistent with my whistle pattern, you shouldn't try to break it :() and fixed the clap in red writing on insane
thx for mod+star~ :)

oh and removed the lead-in nice catch!
kosiga

alacat wrote:

[kosiga's Normal]
●AR -1? Easyとの差があり、少し早いと思います。 このまま様子を見ます:3
●00:04:048 (2) - 終点にwhistle追加 fixed
●00:48:071 (1) - 折り返しにwhistle追加 ^
●00:58:012 (4) - 始点のwhistleをFinishに変更?サビの前なのでfinishの方がいいと思います sorry, no change ><
●01:34:225 (2,3) - spacingは (0.90x)と一定ですが狭くかんじました。少しだけ間をあけてみてはどうでしょうか change it~ http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/367625

Roddie wrote:

kosiga's Normal
  1. 00:53:752 (1)-A finish on the beginning sounds better than a clap. You can replace that clap with a finish or have both! change to finish

Byakugan249 wrote:

[kosiga's Normal]
00:04:048 (2) - add a whistle at the beginning. it'll keep the consistency pattern going from the slider, and the vocals tone is still the same from the 1st note. I put a whistle for the sound effects. so put whistle to end of the slider :D
00:13:989 - same as easy. sorry, no change ><
00:22:509 - how about adding a spinner here? it'll be consistent with the easy and insane diff, and it goes along with the guitar for this part. ok~ added
00:38:131 (3) - hmm how about making this a curved slider? if you do, then this note would blanket the next slider in this combo, and i think that would flow smoother during gameplay. sorry, no change ==
00:41:681 (1) - add a clap at the beginning. it matches the drums in the song. it just sounds empty without that clap to cover it up. I did not put this intentionally. because anteroposterior volume is different. but I put clap different in volume here~
00:56:947 (2) - try making a curved slider here. it'll blanket the 1st half of that wave slider which would be nicer and for flow to the next note. sorry, no change ==
01:02:983 (6) - you forgot to add a whistle at the beginning. add it there to keep the whistle pattern going because it suddenly stops and it keeps going. This is intentional. Because I put a whistle for the sound effects, I think it is not necessary :D
01:04:758 (4) - this repeat slider sounds unfitting because it shows no flow in the vocals. to make it flow to the vocals a lot accurate, do this. if you ignore this, then you can do something similar to this. I think this is not a problem x.x
01:07:953 (2) - the whistle isn't loud enough to match the cymbals, so replace it for a finish. ok. fixed~
01:16:119 (4) - same as 01:04:758.
01:27:835 (1) - same as 01:07:953 but at the repeat arrow. no change.
01:40:616 (1) - extend this spinner by 1/4 because that's where the guitar really ends. I felt that now was correct ><!
thank you~ :)

and I'm sorry to be late Mythol :( PC is still broken ...orz

http://puu.sh/ISff
Frostmourne
overall checking from my queue :P

Easy
00:43:101 (1) - I think this start and end should be pure clap :? , and the repeat should be finish , it will sound better :D
01:19:314 (1) - this is going to end. add finish instead because it sounds more epic \:D/

kosiga's Normal
01:16:119 (4) - if you did the rhythm like this. It would be better a lot because it does exactly follow the vocal :D and doesn't sound odd :P
01:20:912 (2) - add clap both start and tail , I think it sounds better than only tail..
01:37:953 (3) - add clap at the end , it will be combined with next note and will sound better a lot too

S o r d a's Hard
01:27:480 (2) - move above to x:480 y:24 :D because I think it will show more obviously that it's 1 beat not 1/2 beat (the current one you use made me get missed =.=)

Insane
00:11:148 (4) - new combo here since the distance is changed and vocal also :3
00:31:740 (2) - clap should be here instead of 00:32:095 (5) - , sounds strange :(
00:32:095 (5) - add clap at the tail instead I think. at head is weird :(
00:52:509 (5,6,7) - these need jump !
01:05:113 (1) - where is finish o.o//??
01:07:953 (1) - ^
01:09:906 (2) - clap at the end ? I think it sounds better
01:18:781 (6,7,8) - these should be jump also ! , and add new combo at (6) might be very well
01:19:314 (1) - finish
01:20:024 (4) - clap+finish because the music sounds it..

that's all my nazi suggestion HAHAHA

Good luck for Ranking :D
kosiga

Frostmourne wrote:

kosiga's Normal
01:16:119 (4) - if you did the rhythm like this. It would be better a lot because it does exactly follow the vocal :D and doesn't sound odd :PIt is a very good idea. but sorry, no change =x= I think that even the present rhythm matches  :P
01:20:912 (2) - add clap both start and tail , I think it sounds better than only tail..  ok~ fixed
01:37:953 (3) - add clap at the end , it will be combined with next note and will sound better a lot too ^
thanks~ :33

http://puu.sh/Mifi
Topic Starter
Mythol
most fixed ^^
thx frost~ <3
S o r d a
wmfchris
(I wonder why "short" in the tags?)

- two of the diffs are short of lead-in time.

[Insane]
00:11:148 (4,5,6) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/392128 if you intend to make a pentagon just consider this
00:13:989 - end the break here exactly?
00:43:456 - use triplet here instead of the 1/2 later to stress the vocal accent? Stack the triplet on (4) looks better too.

[Hard]
00:13:989 - again start the break exactly here
00:26:060 (3,4,5,6) - the turning point at (3) looks odd. Consider placing them like this? http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/392139
00:38:486 (5) - Again some minor fix to let the slider looks better (and fit the spacing)
144,108,38486,2,0,B|172:72|160:20,1,80,8|0
00:45:054 (2) - ^
344,264,45054,2,0,B|423:235|460:160,1,160,0|0
01:09:906 (1) - finish might sounds a bit loud to me as you can find that in the music the first chamber (this one) is softer than the second one (01:10:793 - ) so make this softer?
01:24:107 (3,4,5,6) - again try something like this http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/392145 ?
01:26:770 (2) - not very expected in a hard. Just stack on ending of (1)?

some good idea, but details can be improved =P

[Easy]
00:13:989 - same as the rest of the diff
Topic Starter
Mythol
"short" was there for short ver but it looks kinda stupid so removed~

01:26:770 (2) - not very expected in a hard. Just stack on ending of (1)? fixed everything but this.. seemed unnecessary

thx for mod wmf~ ^^
frost-b-spec
thx reqs~

little things..

[Easy,Insane]
nice.

[kosiga]
01:40:616 (1) - 消した方が良いかも?他の難易度では作られていないようなので。

[sorda]
00.:38:315 ~ 00:34:225- 少しやり辛く感じます(00:33:693 (5,1)等)。1.2のDSに統一した方が良いかと思います。
S o r d a
すみません、問題ないと思うのでNot fixで
Miya
Hi Mythol and others. Sorry for very late mod ><

General
  1. Maybe you can add 'Tomorrow Looks Like a Fine Day' in tags since it's the english name of this song.


Easy
  1. 00:13:279-00:13:989 - Please map this part by mapping the vocal part. It's just weird to see the rythim ended so suddenly at 00:12:923-
  2. 00:29:610 (3) - Sorry nazi, but i think it will be good if you put this slider linear with end point of slider 1.
  3. 00:40:793 (3) - This slider should start 1/2 earlier because you follow high pitch of vocal at 00:40:261 (2) - People might feel weird because you switch from following vocal and beat so suddenly.
  4. 01:10:793 (1,2) - Nazi, but i think it will be good to see if you just make this slider and circle blanket like this > http://puu.sh/YzJX. Current pattern is awkward to me.
  5. 01:13:634 (1) - Please add a whistle at this slider repeat. Sudden gap between whistle is not good to hear.
  6. 01:27:835 (1,2,3) - Hmm, i think without whistle at this part, the part of this diff is just empty. Try following this little mod to improve your hitsounding at this part :
    1. 01:27:835 (1) - Whistle at the slider end.
    2. 01:29:077 (2) - Add whistle at slider end too
    3. 01:29:965 (3) - Move your whistle from slider start to slider end.
    4. 01:31:918 (2) - Following this mod, then you should have another whistle at this slider end.
  7. 01:34:758 (2) - I think the hitsound at this slider start should be finish, not whistle, since finish can cover up the cymbal sounds from music more good.


kosiga's Normal
  1. 00:04:048 (2) - According to your whistle pattern, i think you should add whistle at this slider start to make it more consistant.
  2. 00:05:468 (4) - ^ but at the slider end.
  3. 00:13:279-00:13:989 - Same as easy, i think you should map this part.
  4. 01:19:314 (2) - The finish sounds should be on start point instead. The finish will be more epic at start point rather than end point. And the end point should be clap, not finish.
  5. 01:20:379 (1) - Following previous mod, you should add another clap at this slider end.
  6. 01:26:592 (3) - Same, also clap here.
  7. 01:27:835 (1) - This one too, the repeat should be finish not whistle. I can hear the cymbal sounds clearly at this point.
  8. 01:39:196 (1,2,3,4) - This overlap patterni is kinda confusing to me. It will not good for normal player. I think you should use another pattern at this part.


S o r d a's Hard
  1. 00:13:279-00:13:989 - Same, i think this part can be mapped.
  2. 00:26:592 (6) - Please add new combo here to make it consistant to your other combo.
  3. 00:30:142 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5) - Add whistle rythim at this part please. You suddenly not using whistle at this part. It's not good to hear imo and unbalance.
  4. 00:34:580 (1) - Combo haxing this note to blue please. Orange color is quite blend with the video, so it can confuse some player.
  5. 00:43:634 (4) - Please add a finish at this slider start. Without it, this part is quite silent and not good to hear.
  6. 00:46:651 (1) - I think you should add another whistle at this slider start to create ending for your whistle rythim at this part.
  7. 01:09:373 (6) - Whistle here is out of place imo. It should be finish instead. Finish can cover up more epic part at this point.
  8. 01:15:054 (1,2) - 1/4 here is kind of overmapped imo. Better replace it with 1/1 or 1/2.
  9. 01:24:107 (3) - I can't see the slider body properly because this slider hitburst 01:22:864 (3) - is covering the slider body. Please use another pattern here so it will not confuse some player.
  10. 01:36:355 (1,2,3,4,1,2) - I think it's more good to have more distance spacing like 1.4 here since this part have more high pitch and will create more epic ending.
  11. 01:36:888 (2) - Also, this slider start hitsounds should be finish instead of clap. The finish rythim will be more consistant with this.


Insane
  1. 00:02:628 (1) - I think it will be good if you add another whistle here at this slider start for the opening of the song.
  2. 00:13:279-00:13:989 - Same, i think you should map this part with spinner or something.
  3. 00:38:308 (2,3,4,5) - I suggest you make this pattern jump like this part 00:26:592 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - for consistencies.
  4. 01:09:373 (1) - I think you should change whistle at this slider start into finish, since whistle sounds is too noisy here and too sudden.
  5. 01:19:314 (1) - Hmm, i suggest you add a finish at this slider start to create more epic feeling for closing the song.
  6. 01:20:557 (1) - ^
  7. 01:24:994 (1) - ^


Nice map :)
But i think you still can make another improvement on this map.
Good luck~
kosiga

Miya wrote:

kosiga's Normal
  1. 00:04:048 (2) - According to your whistle pattern, i think you should add whistle at this slider start to make it more consistant. ok. fixed~
  2. 00:05:468 (4) - ^ but at the slider end.  sorry, I thought that did not match for me a little :(
  3. 00:13:279-00:13:989 - Same as easy, i think you should map this part. I leave it to other diff. I change diff accept it if other diff
  4. 01:19:314 (2) - The finish sounds should be on start point instead. The finish will be more epic at start point rather than end point. And the end point should be clap, not finish. It is not bad. but I prefer this pattern..orz
  5. 01:20:379 (1) - Following previous mod, you should add another clap at this slider end. another clap o.o? already put clap there
  6. 01:26:592 (3) - Same, also clap here. yea.added
  7. 01:27:835 (1) - This one too, the repeat should be finish not whistle. I can hear the cymbal sounds clearly at this point. ok. fixed
  8. 01:39:196 (1,2,3,4) - This overlap patterni is kinda confusing to me. It will not good for normal player. I think you should use another pattern at this part. I think there is no problem. Let's think a little :?
thank you~ :)

http://puu.sh/ZgYG
S o r d a

Miya wrote:

S o r d a's Hard
  1. 00:13:279-00:13:989 - Same, i think this part can be mapped.Mythol said 00:13:989 - same part again break fine imo
  2. 00:26:592 (6) - Please add new combo here to make it consistant to your other combo.
  3. 00:30:142 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5) - Add whistle rythim at this part please. You suddenly not using whistle at this part. It's not good to hear imo and unbalance.
  4. 00:34:580 (1) - Combo haxing this note to blue please. Orange color is quite blend with the video, so it can confuse some player.
  5. 00:43:634 (4) - Please add a finish at this slider start. Without it, this part is quite silent and not good to hear.
  6. 00:46:651 (1) - I think you should add another whistle at this slider start to create ending for your whistle rythim at this part.
  7. 01:09:373 (6) - Whistle here is out of place imo. It should be finish instead. Finish can cover up more epic part at this point.
  8. 01:15:054 (1,2) - 1/4 here is kind of overmapped imo. Better replace it with 1/1 or 1/2.
  9. 01:24:107 (3) - I can't see the slider body properly because this slider hitburst 01:22:864 (3) - is covering the slider body. Please use another pattern here so it will not confuse some player.
  10. 01:36:355 (1,2,3,4,1,2) - I think it's more good to have more distance spacing like 1.4 here since this part have more high pitch and will create more epic ending.
  11. 01:36:888 (2) - Also, this slider start hitsounds should be finish instead of clap. The finish rythim will be more consistant with this.
other fixed thanks for mod Miya chan~

file here http://puu.sh/1dPoX
Rare
go go ~
Topic Starter
Mythol

R a r e wrote:

go go ~
going!!
Chewin
Hi Mythol :3
Here's my mod from my bubble queue (:

[General]

  1. Add Title's and Artist's name in the Normal and Insane diff.


[Easy]

  1. 00:04:758 (3) - Remove whistle to keep consistency
  2. 00:07:598 (3) - ^
  3. 00:42:391 (2) - (nazi) Make it more curved to blanket it with the next slider: http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/461716
  4. 00:55:172 (2) - (really nazi) improve the blanket with 00:53:397 (3) using grid snap
  5. 01:16:119 (3) - Make the same thing you did for 01:04:758 (3) about the hitsound?
  6. 01:39:196 (1) - Try to center it? You could move the previous elements together with it to keep a consistent spacing


[kosiga's Normal]

  1. Hi kosiga, again here, OD and HP -1 please
  2. 00:05:468 (4) - It seems there is a missed sound on the tail. What about to add whistle on it? I think it sounds perfectly
  3. 00:12:746 (2,3) - Mh, I suggest you to use an 1/2 slider here because we are still on the calmer part of the song ;3
  4. 00:31:740 (4,5,6) - I totally disagree about using this rhythm, it's odd and pretty confusing to play, really. Use this one instead like you did for 00:32:805 (1,2,3) and 00:30:320 (1,2):
  5. 00:43:101 (3,4) - Unlike of 00:43:101 (3,4) these 2 circles are good here but I suggest you to use an 1/2 slider instead
  6. 01:02:983 (6) - I guess you forgot whistle on the slider's head
  7. 01:04:758 (4) - There should be a circle here while this slider should be on the next long white tick, follow this rhythm:
  8. 01:10:616 (4) - Remove circle?
  9. 01:14:344 (6) - Same of 01:02:983 (6)
  10. 01:16:119 (4) - Same of 01:04:758 (4)
  11. 01:39:551 (2) - Remove circle.


[S o r d a's Hard]

  1. 00:08:308 (3) - I'd use new combo here
  2. Rhythm is good, but I think the flow is ugly :\ You have to improve it, please.


Insane is really fine, good job.
Please read my MP mythol.
kosiga

Chewin wrote:

[kosiga's Normal]

  1. Hi kosiga, again here, OD and HP -1 please hmm... I think there is no need to change this. It has good balance to use difficulty 4 and because I think this diff is not difficult to there. but if you want to change,I tried it :?
  2. 00:05:468 (4) - It seems there is a missed sound on the tail. What about to add whistle on it? I think it sounds perfectly It is a slight difference in the sound. did not match me a little x.x
  3. 00:12:746 (2,3) - Mh, I suggest you to use an 1/2 slider here because we are still on the calmer part of the song ;3 ok~ fixed
  4. 00:31:740 (4,5,6) - I totally disagree about using this rhythm, it's odd and pretty confusing to play, really. Use this one instead like you did for 00:32:805 (1,2,3) and 00:30:320 (1,2): I think that this rhythm is not wrong. 00:31:918. 00:32:273. - here I would like to have the sound should be emphasized. but 00:12:746 (2,3) - It is changed by a slider to simplify it :P
  5. 00:43:101 (3,4) - Unlike of 00:43:101 (3,4) these 2 circles are good here but I suggest you to use an 1/2 slider instead chaned to slider~
  6. 01:02:983 (6) - I guess you forgot whistle on the slider's head not fogot. I do not put it intentionally here. :D
  7. 01:04:758 (4) - There should be a circle here while this slider should be on the next long white tick, follow this rhythm: 01:04:758 - I use a slider to respond by this finish sound. When I put a circle, I feel some sense of incongruity in next note :(
  8. 01:10:616 (4) - Remove circle? this note is strengthen the momentum. I think that I do not have any problem even if I use this rhythm in normal :P
  9. 01:14:344 (6) - Same of 01:02:983 (6) same
  10. 01:16:119 (4) - Same of 01:04:758 (4) same
  11. 01:39:551 (2) - Remove circle. It is a constant rhythm. so no changed =x=
oh Chewin. thank you again~ ;)

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