S o r d a wrote:

[Hard]:

1. You can add more finish like mjw diff Fine; added a few of them, still mixed with Whistles sometimes.
2. 00:16:905 - sound like if you like use this Okay.
3. 01:22:801 (1) - beginning finish Will do.
4. 02:18:292 (7) - finish ^
5. 02:43:264 (1) - ^ ^
6. 02:48:813 (1) - ^ ^

those wrote:

You've got four minutes of a linear map. This isn't unrankable; it's just very uninteresting.

Makar8000 wrote:

Hello, from my queue

[General]

1. Fine~

[Easy]

1. 03:22:107 (1) - Finish at start?
2. 03:23:495 (3) - ^
3. Nice~ nothing to point out

[Normal]

1. 01:16:558 (1,2) - Swap NC
2. I really like this~ nothing to point out

[Insane]

1. 00:20:287 (5) - Remove this note please. It doesn't fit the music imo
2. 00:39:449 (5) - CTRL+R this for better flow
3. 01:26:876 (4) - Remove this note for the same reason I mentioned before
4. 01:37:975 (5) - ^
5. 03:53:928 (4) - ^

Makar8000 wrote:

[Hinsvar's Hard]
Okay, so I counted the number of curves in this map. This includes curvy sliders, mouse movements, patterns, etc. This number came out to be 3 (your small curve sliders at the end). There are no patterns in this map that have good flow. Everything is straight, linear, and has unpredictable repeat sliders. It just gets boring. Im sorry but I suggest going back over this and make this map more fun by using flowy patterns and curve sliders to make this more interesting. There is a subforum that helps mappers out with this, and you can see it here. If you would like assistance, I can help if I have time. Just send me a PM in-game.

-Bakari- wrote:

[Hard]
~~~~

-Bakari- wrote:

lol. call me when you finish remap if you want nazi-mod

-Bakari- wrote:

yo~

[General]
clear

[Insaane]
overall diff -2 (or -1)
00:22:454 (2,3) - just no
00:51:587 (4,3) - overlap
just avoid crossing sliders

[Easy]
00:25:229 (1) - spinner appears too fast
00:41:183 (2,1) -curve them in this way
00:47:772 (2,3) - overlap
01:15:171 (2) - end point 5-7 grids right to cover (4) (don't forget to chnge 01:17:252 (3) for avoiding overlap)
01:22:801 (1,1) - not ymmetrical
01:30:084 (3) - confusing for beginners
02:14:131 (3,2) - overlap
02:39:448 (3) - confusing for beginners
03:21:067 (2) - ^ or add reverse arrow ;_;
03:49:853 (1,2) - overlap? lol
03:58:870 (1) - appears too fast

[Normal]
00:24:535 (4) - make symmetrical! ;_;
00:54:362 - put something here
01:56:096 (1,2) - just add one reverse to (1)
02:24:535 (3,4) - try to cover less then 40% of start point :O
02:55:055 (1,3) - almost overlap. i don't like it
03:25:576 (3) - this for better looking
03:47:772 (2) - curve it a bit more
03:22:107 (1) - mhm

code for better slider

296,144,202107,6,0,B|312:72|244:36,2,110,6|8|0

03:54:015 (5) - almost overlap ;_;

gl~

mjw5150 wrote:

uploaded

-Bakari- wrote:

[Hard]
00:17:599 (6,2) - avoid overlap This is intentional.
00:18:986 (3,4,5,6,7,8) - to foloow your pattern try this Made something similar \:D/
00:21:761 (1,2,3,4) - http://puu.sh/vxgC (note! i'm using lower approach rate at all screenshots. it's just to show you what i want! don't worry ) Okay, but with 1.2x DS (which is far wider). Also, I think that AR8 will be the best thing for this diff.
00:51:934 (1,2,3,4) - stack them? Intentionally placed like this.
00:58:871 (2,3,4,5,6) - http://puu.sh/vxho (kinda jumpy) I wanna keep the current one.
01:20:894 (3,7) - stack them? Looks slightly overlapped, yes, but I think it looks nice for now.
01:42:223 (4) - http://puu.sh/vxi9 Will do.
02:07:194 (1,1) - stack them? Oh, okay.
02:21:761 (2,3) - http://puu.sh/vxiF (don't forget to fix stacks) Fine.
02:55:055 (1) - a bit not symmetrical ~_~ That one can't be helped. It's not really noticeable though, but I would like a code for a perfectly symmetrical slider \:D/
03:55:055 (6) - 1/2 earlier? Pretty good already.
04:00:951 (1,2,3,4) - stack? Nope, intentionally (yeah) placed like this.

Tenshi-nyan wrote:

Hard
AR is kinda high, but your mapping makes it hard to play WITHOUT AR8. At least lower OD by 1. OD -1'd.
Please add more claps. They are an important tool to keep a rythm, and will greatly improve your map. Later. My speaker (yeah, I use that) became weird and suddenly made an extremely annoying noise (I don't really think this is the correct term, though...), so I had to turn off my speaker. I will see where I can place the claps later.

00:47:079 (5) - add new combo Okay.
00:48:119 (1) - remove new combo ^
01:41:183 (6,1,2,3) - this doesn't look good and it plays bad. Changed the pattern for this and (4,5,6,7).
02:00:605 (1,2,3,4) - weird to have 4 stacked notes here when everywhere else you had 3 stacks. Yeah, weird, but I think it plays pretty fine.
02:30:778 - add a bunch of notes here in a jump pattern. I don't really think about changing the pattern (am I right?), but I'll consider it.
02:50:547 (4,5,6,7,8,9) - not a good idea, it's very hard to read. please change it something more readable. I... don't really think so. I remember the first time playing this spot and I got... all 300? I'm sure enough I didn't get any 50s or misses and got lots of 300s though, so I think it's fine. Still, I'll wait for the other modders to speak their opinion about this.
03:44:651 (3) - add clap Oh, okay.
03:46:039 (3) - ^ ^

Shoily wrote:

[Hinsvar's Hard]

01:41:165 (6,1,2,3,4,5,7) - This is playable but feels a little weird to play Changed the pattern (again).
02:12:459 (5,1) - Try this? Fine.
02:31:419 (7) - Add NC
02:32:209 (1) - Remove NC Not to this and above. Looks weird to have a new combo exactly before the kiai time, and it fits pretty well, IMO.

1. 00:23:842 (1) - remove the NC because the vocals is still going ></
2. 00:35:634 (2) - remove finish from the start, it's just dont fit here~
3. 00:39:795 (1) - remove finish in the middle ~ same reason as i said above~
4. 00:43:957 (3) - add finish at the start, sounds better~
5. 00:47:772 (2) - one grip up will look better imo~
6. 00:48:119 (1,3) - how about curving those slider a bit like this? it's looks much better to me while playing ><
   
   SPOILER

   
7. 00:51:934 (5) - add note here feels off really ;_;
8. 01:00:605 (5) - curve this slider a bit like this o.o? it looks much better like that tho, but it's up to you~
   
   SPOILER

   
9. 01:04:073 (1) - spacing error plz fix it~
10. 01:21:067 (4) - add a finish at the end, sounds better~
11. 01:30:084 (3) - make this slider revives then add a note after it like this it's sounds better tho ~ o.o
    
12. 02:04:420 (1) - this slider touches the 02:03:032 (3) - slider ends and it's looks bad to maybe you should fix it~
13. 02:09:622 (4) - NC here is better since she started new vocal~
14. 02:41:876 (3) - curve this slider more plz like i said here 01:00:605 (5) -
15. 02:48:813 (1,2) - like this looks much better to me :c
    
    SPOILER

    

1. 01:10:316 (3) - NC here and remove the NC from this 01:11:009 (1) -
2. 01:11:703 (4) - NC~
3. 03:29:044 (4) - ^

1. 00:40:662 (7) - fixed this curve plz it's dont look good~
2. 01:00:258 (6) - two grip down so it's lined up with the 00:59:564 (5) - :3
3. 01:02:686 (7) - add a finish here sounds better~
4. 01:18:292 (5) - stuck this on 01:17:252 (2) -
5. 02:09:622 (4) - fixed this slider like this o.o then do the same thing here 02:10:316 (5) -
   
   SPOILER

   
6. 02:12:223 (x) - how about adding a note here and let this weird space go away =3=/
7. 03:48:639 (x,x) - ^

-Sekai- wrote:

Hinsvar's Hard
OD+1 is better~ Nope, OD6 goes better, IMO.

1. 00:40:662 (7) - fixed this curve plz it's dont look good~ Eh... I guess I can make it a straight slider.
2. 01:00:258 (6) - two grip down so it's lined up with the 00:59:564 (5) - :3 I think it's already fine as is; I even copy-pasted (5) and Ctrl+H'd it, and it still looks fine.
3. 01:02:686 (7) - add a finish here sounds better~ It sounds a bit too... sudden, so no.
4. 01:18:292 (5) - stuck this on 01:17:252 (2) - I'm sure enough it was stacked... Anyway, fixed.
5. 02:09:622 (4) - fixed this slider like this o.o then do the same thing here 02:10:316 (5) - I'll stick with mine, I guess.
6. 02:12:223 (x) - how about adding a note here and let this weird space go away =3=/ Eh, okay.
7. 03:48:639 (x,x) - ^ Nope; I want to preserve my current pattern \:D/

1. 00:21:761 (1,1,2,3) - why its distance has changed? you should keep 0.54x, or you just need to arrange the 00:16:212 (1,2,3,4) -
2. 00:48:119 (1) - useless NC, to keep your combo thythm, remove this NC and add on 00:49:506 (3) -
3. 01:04:073 (1) - useless NC as well, remove it
4. 01:11:703 (1,2,3) - although you used sliders this rhythm is a bit hard for noob players, to make them to be played easier, maybe you can use this rhythm
   
   SPOILER

   
5. 01:22:108 - feels empty, you followed the mellody and stopping like this is weird, add a circle here
6. 01:35:980 (1,2,3) - how hard, i'd place them more soft with this sweet song, like this, also centering 01:38:755 (4) - from 01:36:674 (3) - plz
   
   SPOILER

   
7. 01:57:483 (1) - did you NC'd here to separate the long combo? if you did, remove this and add on 01:58:870 (3) -
8. 02:09:969 (5) - to separate the long combo, NC here
9. 02:31:472 - same as 01:22:108 -
10. 02:36:674 (3) - same as 01:35:980 (1,2,3) -
11. 02:41:876 (3) - move to (280,84) to avoid the annoying overlap
12. 02:44:651 (3) - 1 grid up to be symmetry with 02:43:264 (1) -
13. 03:26:963 (1) - same as 01:57:483 (1) - , NC on 03:28:003 (2) -
14. 03:32:859 (3) - same as 01:35:980 (1,2,3) -
15. 03:47:079 (1) - remove this useless NC
16. 03:52:281 (1,2) - switch NC due to down beat

1. 00:50:373 (2,3) - no, really looks not good at all, arrange them
2. 01:22:801 (3) - NC here due to starting kiai rhythm, like this 01:33:899 (1) -
3. 02:26:616 (2) - tbh, your NC rhythm is really random imo, if you want to follow the vocal, you'd better start the combo from here
4. 02:32:165 (3) - same as 01:22:801 (3) -
5. 03:02:685 (5) - NC?
6. 04:03:726 (4) - 1 grid right to be symmetry with 04:02:339 (2) -

1. 00:18:986 (3,4) - replace with a slider
2. 00:20:373 (6) - end point here 00:21:067 (7) -
3. 00:21:761 (1,2,3,4) - not fit at all, don't use arrow
4. 00:57:657 (6,7) - too hard to read, don't stack them
5. 01:11:703 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - you may thought the notes are looks clean, you should know that it's really hard to hit
6. 01:13:957 (1) - hard to read, don't overlap..
7. 01:32:686 (3,4,5,6) - too hard to read, don't stack them
8. 01:39:449 (1,2,3,4) - replace with 2 sliders
9. 02:15:518 - ~ 02:30:431 (4) - suddenly, too monotonous and boring, why, add some more notes
10. 02:50:547 (4,5,6,7,8,9) - too hard to play
11. 02:55:055 (1) - hidden arrow, find other way
12. 02:57:310 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - what, they can be hard to play even as Insane diff
13. 03:00:605 (2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - ^
    highly recommend to remap this diff

1. 00:24:535 (4) - NC due to changed melody?
2. try adding finish :
   01:39:449 -
   01:40:142 -
   01:40:836 -
   01:41:356 -
3. 02:12:570 (1,2,3) - this jump is not good to play, ctrl+h to make more soft movement
4. 02:48:813 - same as the finish sounds
5. 02:52:975 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - not fit with song, don't stream here
6. 03:02:339 (5) - NC
7. 03:15:865 (3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6) - too hard to read, arrange them plz
8. 03:36:674 (2) - Seven!

Star Stream wrote:

[Hard]

1. 00:18:986 (3,4) - replace with a slider Fine enough.
2. 00:20:373 (6) - end point here 00:21:067 (7) - Nope, I think this should be fine.
3. 00:21:761 (1,2,3,4) - not fit at all, don't use arrow Remapped this spot.
4. 00:57:657 (6,7) - too hard to read, don't stack them Oh, okay.
5. 01:11:703 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - you may thought the notes are looks clean, you should know that it's really hard to hit Remapped this part.
6. 01:13:957 (1) - hard to read, don't overlap.. ^
7. 01:32:686 (3,4,5,6) - too hard to read, don't stack them Eh, I wanted to make a back-and-forth pattern here, but I moved (4) anyway.
8. 01:39:449 (1,2,3,4) - replace with 2 sliders I think it's fine as is.
9. 02:15:518 - ~ 02:30:431 (4) - suddenly, too monotonous and boring, why, add some more notes Huh? I'm sure enough it's fine. I'll reconsider to remap this spot if needed, though.
10. 02:50:547 (4,5,6,7,8,9) - too hard to play Not for me; in fact, I think this is fun to play. Maybe a bit hard, but I'm sure enough not too hard.
11. 02:55:055 (1) - hidden arrow, find other way The arrow is still visible when I played this spot, so no.
12. 02:57:310 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - what, they can be hard to play even as Insane diff It's just a 1/2 stream of circles. Don't really think it's that hard. But I might consider changing this part, so wait for it.
13. 03:00:605 (2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - ^ ^
    highly recommend to remap this diff Already remapped a few spots; I WON'T fully remap this though, because this is actually a remapped version of my diff. It's going to be hard to make another one (I'll have an exam in one week, and even when in vacation, it'll still take 2-3 days to make a diff for me, so...), and from my experiences IRL, trying to fix something by retrying from scratch ends up making it WORSE anyways (this is an exception, miraculously), so I'll mod some spots, but not fully

backstep wrote:

Hinsvar's Hard

Fine for me xD

backstep wrote:

Relax song >3

General

- Cyan combo color it's similar, so I suggest you use other color. Maybe green like this ?

lol but i think they looks fine,no changed...

Easy

01:20:027 (3) - Add whistle to head of slider to follow lyrics. fixed
01:21:067 (4) - Change Whistle to clap. fixed
01:31:125 (1) - Add whistle at head of slider. fixed
01:33:899 (1) - Add whistle at reverse arrow. fixed
01:38:755 (4) - Whistle. no
02:12:743 (1) - Remove clap ;w; lol add finish instead

Normal

01:04:940 (4) - Tail of slider add finish. fixed
02:14:131 (4) - ^ fixed
02:31:818 (2) - Whistle fixed
03:48:986 (4) - Head of slider add finish. fixed

Hinsvar's Hard

Fine for me xD

Insane

01:08:668 (7,8) - Swap whistle of these note. i changed my mind to del the whistle in 7 so...
01:15:171 (6) - Head of slider add whistle. (Follow lyrics) fixed
01:16:558 (1) - ^ fixed
01:20:027 (3) - ^ fixed
01:23:668 (3) - ^ no
02:06:501 (3) - Add clap at reverse slider. no
02:24:535 (1) - Whistle. fixed
02:25:922 (1) - ^ no
02:29:391 (3) - Head of slider add whistle. fixed

That's all I can find good luck

1. 00:23:842(1) - 这里为什么加NC呢？
2. 01:04:766(5) - 感觉这个Slider在01:05:287结束更好一些?
3. 01:07:541(3) - 同上，在01:08:061结束
4. 01:30:084(3) - 建议不要在Easy里放1/2...
5. 01:32:859(2) - ^
6. 01:39:449(1) - 换成finish?
7. 02:16:905(3) - end at 02:17:425?
8. 03:23:148(2) - clap
9. 03:48:466(4) - end at 03:48:986?

1. 00:46:732(3) - Spacing
2. 04:00:951(1) - 即使是Normal，这个slider和spinner靠的也太近了吧...

1. 03:21:587(6) - Ctrl+R?

1. 01:25:576(2) - Ctrl+R?
2. 02:15:171(5) - 这跳略坑 送分图可不能这样
3. 02:26:443(6,7) - Spacing
4. 02:52:975(1) - whistle?

a3272509123 wrote:

[Hinsvar's Hard]

1. 03:21:587(6) - Ctrl+R? Nope; I rearranged the pattern here, instead.

Hi mjw5150

• General
  ● Good

• Easy
  
  >Settings
  
  ● Good
  
  >Mapping
  
  ● 00:16:212 (1,2,3,4) - maybe use distance 1.2 (or 1.0) and change form to triangle
  
  >Hitsounds
  
  ● Good
  ___________________
  So simple slider form...maybe change some slider form

• Normal
  
  >Settings
  
  ● Good
  
  >Mapping
  
  ● 00:16:212 (1,2,3,4) - some as Easy ^^
  ● 00:46:732 (3) - prev distance 1.0 maybe change to 0.8?
  ● 02:44:998 (4) - move to x:240 y:260 symmetry to 02:43:610 (2)
  ● 02:45:344 (1) - if you change ^ move to x:302 y:198 - distance 0.8 :3
  
  
  >Hitsounds
  
  ● Good
  ___________________
  Looks good

• Hinsvar's Hard
  
  >Settings
  
  ● Good
  
  >Mapping
  
  ● 02:03:379 (5) - grid snap and distance off...and move on x:169 y:203 - snap to 02:02:339 (3) :3
  ● 03:01:125 (3,4) - distance looks strange :3 maybe change it to 1.0?
  ● 03:27:310 (1,2,3,4,5) - please move it on center....like this http://puu.sh/yi6g
  
  >Hitsounds
  
  ● Good
  ___________________
  Really good diff :3 so symmetric, i like it

• Insane
  
  >Settings
  
  ● Good
  
  >Mapping
  
  ● Good
  
  >Hitsounds
  
  ● Good
  ___________________
  Interesting Insane looks good

Sorry for nazi mod, but I can't find more problems.
Starrrrr

IchiGUN wrote:

>Settings

● Good

>Mapping

● 02:03:379 (5) - grid snap and distance off...and move on x:169 y:203 - snap to 02:02:339 (3) :3 Oh, okay.
● 03:01:125 (3,4) - distance looks strange :3 maybe change it to 1.0? Fine.
● 03:27:310 (1,2,3,4,5) - please move it on center....like this http://puu.sh/yi6g Eh, I suppose that it should be fine for now. No changes.

>Hitsounds

● Good
___________________
Really good diff :3 so symmetric, i like it lol thx

a3272509123 wrote:

From the challenge queue~


[General]
Nothing found~


[Easy]

1. 00:23:842(1) - 这里为什么加NC呢？删掉了
2. 01:04:766(5) - 感觉这个Slider在01:05:287结束更好一些? 改了
3. 01:07:541(3) - 同上，在01:08:061结束 改了
4. 01:30:084(3) - 建议不要在Easy里放1/2... 唔 就先这样吧 暂时找不到更好的处理方式了lol
5. 01:32:859(2) - ^ 同上
6. 01:39:449(1) - 换成finish? 感觉finish音量大了 没改
7. 02:16:905(3) - end at 02:17:425? 改了
8. 03:23:148(2) - clap 改了
9. 03:48:466(4) - end at 03:48:986? 改了

[Normal]

1. 00:46:732(3) - Spacing 改了
2. 04:00:951(1) - 即使是Normal，这个slider和spinner靠的也太近了吧... 没改 感觉距离蛮合适

[Insane]

1. 01:25:576(2) - Ctrl+R? 改了 换了下排版
2. 02:15:171(5) - 这跳略坑 送分图可不能这样 233
3. 02:26:443(6,7) - Spacing 改了
4. 02:52:975(1) - whistle? 没加 感觉有点whistle不合

That's all!Really nice map~Good luck~

IchiGUN wrote:

Hi mjw5150

mod from Challenge Queue, so just suggestion ^^

• General
  ● Good

===========================

• Easy
  
  >Settings
  
  ● Good
  
  >Mapping
  
  ● 00:16:212 (1,2,3,4) - maybe use distance 1.2 (or 1.0) and change form to triangle
  i don't want to use 1.0x here since the spacing is too large lol
  >Hitsounds
  
  ● Good
  ___________________
  So simple slider form...maybe change some slider form

===========================

• Normal
  
  >Settings
  
  ● Good
  
  >Mapping
  
  ● 00:16:212 (1,2,3,4) - some as Easy ^^ same as easy
  ● 00:46:732 (3) - prev distance 1.0 maybe change to 0.8? fixed
  ● 02:44:998 (4) - move to x:240 y:260 symmetry to 02:43:610 (2) fixed
  ● 02:45:344 (1) - if you change ^ move to x:302 y:198 - distance 0.8 :3 fixed
  
  
  >Hitsounds
  
  ● Good
  ___________________
  Looks good

===========================

• Hinsvar's Hard
  
  >Settings
  
  ● Good
  
  >Mapping
  
  ● 02:03:379 (5) - grid snap and distance off...and move on x:169 y:203 - snap to 02:02:339 (3) :3
  ● 03:01:125 (3,4) - distance looks strange :3 maybe change it to 1.0?
  ● 03:27:310 (1,2,3,4,5) - please move it on center....like this http://puu.sh/yi6g
  
  >Hitsounds
  
  ● Good
  ___________________
  Really good diff :3 so symmetric, i like it

===========================

• Insane
  
  >Settings
  
  ● Good
  
  >Mapping
  
  ● Good
  
  >Hitsounds
  
  ● Good
  ___________________
  Interesting Insane looks good

Sorry for nazi mod, but I can't find more problems.
Starrrrr

Leorda wrote:

Oh hi there

[Easy]
00:51:587 (2) - Clap? fixed
01:04:073 (3) - New combo for your combo pattern? fixed
02:41:876 (3) - End at previous red tick for following vocal fixed
03:23:495 (3) - ^ fixed
04:01:645 (1) - Overlapped by spinner-osu. Sometimes, beginners are slowly to read this, so this possibly hidden for them sorry,but i think it is readable enough,no changed


[Normal]
00:39:102 (3) - Add clap at tail slider fixed
00:45:865 (2) - Add finish at head slider fixed
01:31:125 (1) - Add clap at repeating slider fixed
02:02:165 (2) - Extend this slider to next white tick for better rhythm? fixed
03:22:107 (1) - Add finish at repeating slider and end slider fixed


[Insane]
01:31:125 (3) - Add clap at tail slider fixed
02:05:807 (1,2) - Not stack correctly with head slider at gameplay fixed


Good luck