1. feast (4.5 stars, 1481 notes)

1. 00:00:000 - Maybe add background blur for the first section of the map same as you did 02:22:772 - here?
2. 00:14:889 (1,2,3,1) - This thing is surprisingly pretty hard to read.
3. 03:08:429 (1) - Maybe silence the sliderend
4. 03:09:634 - Try to make the white background starting at this point, so the screen will be white when the "curtain" goes up, and that white will slowly fadeout until 03:11:823 - . I think that would be nicer than it is now, because currently this white flash seems outta place
5. 05:45:874 (4,1,2) - These things are very hard to read correctly. It doesnt work very well here. Id suggest stacking 05:46:203 (2) - under a circle before it, then it must be fine

1. The offset seems better at ~865 for me.
2. There may be problems because of storyboard explicity. I can't really tell what to do better in this situation, but just in case, if you're going to cut some elements, save the full storyboard and put it in map's description or smth.

den0saur wrote:

1. 00:00:000 - Maybe add background blur for the first section of the map same as you did 02:22:772 - here? i did it there because that section are very calm and quiet and beginning are different from that
2. 00:14:889 (1,2,3,1) - This thing is surprisingly pretty hard to read. it depends of the person, i suppose
3. 03:08:429 (1) - Maybe silence the sliderend sure, i wanted to do it already but you was faster w
4. 03:09:634 - Try to make the white background starting at this point, so the screen will be white when the "curtain" goes up, and that white will slowly fadeout until 03:11:823 - . I think that would be nicer than it is now, because currently this white flash seems outta place yea, sounds nice
5. 05:45:874 (4,1,2) - These things are very hard to read correctly. It doesnt work very well here. Id suggest stacking 05:46:203 (2) - under a circle before it, then it must be fine fix fix

1. The offset seems better at ~865 for me. 870 are good enough for me
2. There may be problems because of storyboard explicity. I can't really tell what to do better in this situation, but just in case, if you're going to cut some elements, save the full storyboard and put it in map's description or smth. fix fix

Amazing beatmap, great work tokiko-chan thanks den0saur-kun~~~

Hollow Wings wrote:

nm

feast

1. the drum hs at quiet part (at the beginning or part start from 02:15:760 (1) - ) sounds too loud, low down the volume a bit. fix fix
2. normal-hitnormal: this hs emphasis a so strong emotional sound like every other kind of beats are weaker than it. so this should only used at some special part, but not usually use them like a common hs (just like crash in drum track won't be a common hit by usual as well). consider remove some of them and let other ticks you wanna emphasize take more power of expressing the music. i will look what i can do and maybe will ask someone to help me with that
3. 01:39:848 (1,2,1,2) - i highly recommend you use big jumps among these notes, for this is like one of the most heated parts of the whole song. sure!
4. 02:37:658 (5,6,7) - these objs can have less distance for their jumps, even overlap them for this part. 04:31:526 (1,2,1,2) - and 04:59:556 (1,2,1,2) - and etc. as well. did it only for sliders since i applied your another suggestion about these notes
5. 05:25:176 (2) - a long slider instead? pause are more fitting here imo. just imagine a real TV without a signal and you'll understand what i mean~
6. 05:30:650 (1,2,3) - spread them, such heated part deserve jumps. 05:37:658 (1,2,3) - and etc. as well. little overlaps are so cute uwu
7. 06:18:385 timing line here is 1/4 gap off. 378385 → 378276 and remove timing line at 380027. you may consider beat at 06:18:385 (1) - 's head tick is a downbeat or white (1/1) tick, but actually it's a back clap at blue (1/4) tick.
   but seems like this map's timing is regular and consistent, for same song's part appeared at 03:11:818 (1) - as well, maybe the timing should not that tricky at that part as well. remove these two timing line directly is also an option, for that error is not quite obvious.
   so i highly recommend you find some guy check your timing of this song.
   this is some kind of must fix and must check. oops, my bad. i forgot to remove these lines after finishing the actual mapping uuuuuh..

i got phobia cuz this map... gj ww

good luck! thank you!

1. 00:22:767 (1,2,3) - 03:14:446 (1,2,3) - 06:22:657 (1,2,3) - i suggest using https://puu.sh/xRhKH/c067b214c1.png rhythm instead cuz there are no sounds at 00:23:151 - and it's a bit unintuitive to properly read current rhythm pattern
2. 00:26:271 (1) - 00:33:278 (1) - unnecessary new combo imo, check 06:26:161 (3) - 06:33:168 (3) -
3. 01:47:074 (2,3) - 02:01:088 (2,3) - etc. maybe add whistle for more feedback on the spaced triplet
4. 01:54:081 (2) - 04:45:760 (2) - 05:13:789 (2) - 05:29:993 (5) - 05:35:249 (2) - nc like you did to all similar patterns in kiai? different colors made the stack more intuitive to read
5. 02:02:183 (2,4) - a bit minor but consider avoiding the overlap to keep visual consistency with 02:05:687 (2,3,4) - 02:09:191 (2,3,4) - etc.
6. 02:15:760 - to 02:50:797 - i suggest raising all volumes in this section by 5% for proper feedback, 10% is really low to me
7. 06:19:701 (1) - https://puu.sh/xRiqA/50ee538a7e.png better switch to vocal maybe?

Garden wrote:

any metadata reference? something here and here maybe

General:
rc wrote: "Storyboard images must not exceed a width of 1920 pixels and a height of 1200 pixels. "z
so you'll have to scale the image below:
sb\black.jpg (2000x2000)
sb\grey.jpg (2000x2000) fix fix

feast

1. 00:22:767 (1,2,3) - 03:14:446 (1,2,3) - 06:22:657 (1,2,3) - i suggest using https://puu.sh/xRhKH/c067b214c1.png rhythm instead cuz there are no sounds at 00:23:151 - and it's a bit unintuitive to properly read current rhythm pattern yeah, sounds better
2. 00:26:271 (1) - 00:33:278 (1) - unnecessary new combo imo, check 06:26:161 (3) - 06:33:168 (3) - forgot to remove it before, fixed now! 03:15:322 - in that part too
3. 01:47:074 (2,3) - 02:01:088 (2,3) - etc. maybe add whistle for more feedback on the spaced triplet sure
4. 01:54:081 (2) - 04:45:760 (2) - 05:13:789 (2) - 05:29:993 (5) - 05:35:249 (2) - nc like you did to all similar patterns in kiai? different colors made the stack more intuitive to read fix fix
5. 02:02:183 (2,4) - a bit minor but consider avoiding the overlap to keep visual consistency with 02:05:687 (2,3,4) - 02:09:191 (2,3,4) - etc. okay!
6. 02:15:760 - to 02:50:797 - i suggest raising all volumes in this section by 5% for proper feedback, 10% is really low to me fix fix
7. 06:19:701 (1) - https://puu.sh/xRiqA/50ee538a7e.png better switch to vocal maybe? mhmm

Naxess wrote:

some of your sb elements are too large

"Storyboard images must not exceed a width of 1920 pixels and a height of 1200 pixels." - Ranking Criteria, Storyboarding
black.jpg and grey.jpg are 1920x1920
rumia-chan.jpg is 850x1201 orz orz orz orz

Lama Poluna wrote:

also,

Artist: 凋叶棕 feat. めらみぽっぷ or RD-Sounds feat. めらみぽっぷ

https://twitter.com/rdwithleaf/status/9 ... 2339969025

I recommend to use 凋叶棕 feat. めらみぽっぷ. Because it is more captures the essence of the game and the direction of the author.