This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on Thursday, September 01, 2011 at 12:28:18 PM

Artist: Sonitus Vir feat. N. Sato
Title: Grazing Gazelle Under The Moon
Source: Mungyodance
Tags: mgd3 the third rave world electronica world/electronica mnemonic renard
BPM: 115
Filesize: 3988kb
Play Time: 03:03
Difficulties Available:

1. Hard (4.9 stars, 316 notes)
2. Normal (2.8 stars, 179 notes)

Download: Sonitus Vir feat. N. Sato - Grazing Gazelle Under The Moon
Information: Scores/Beatmap Listing
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5th map ~ | REDOWNLOAD for new skin elements (:

From the album "Mnemonic"

Sonitus Vir = Renard
N. Sato = Not sure if this refers to Naoyuki Sato / Nekomata Master but this song sure feels a lot like Nekomata Master's songs~

Enjoy !

The downbeat isn't where it should be. I suggest removing the uninherited point at 00:48:231 and use an offset of 1025ms

Star and good luck

wa janji bakal mod ini tapi sebelumnya quick mod dulu~

[Hard]
00:48:243 - LOL
01:15:100 (7) - the repeat is touching the score bar, while it's probably not a big deal for some this is easily fixable so maybe fix it
01:28:144 (7) - ^
mod lengkapna nanti akan datang~

dah tuh aja, g nyangka kalo ini Renard :o
kalo butuh diff tambahan wa yang bikinin yo musiknya asik nih ;)

oh and pertamax~
dang di ninja :(

Thanks both, will check this after school ><

Fixed~

lanjutan yg di atas

[General]
- no kiai? maybe put a kiai for the last part of the music?
- 01:57:372 (4) - make the break after this into iNiS break, start the actual break on 01:57:894 looks good
- for the timing section on 02:31:285 and beyond it, I suggest to increase the volume around 10 or 15 %. There's nothing wrong with the current volume, it's just that I think having the same volume throughout the music is kinda plain. Try using different volume to emphasize some part

[Normal]
01:01:025 (2) - this should be clap following the pattern from before
02:32:851 (3) - I can slightly hear a clap sound from the music on the start of this slider. So I think it's more appropriate to put clap there instead of 02:33:894 (4)
02:35:981 (2) - almost the same as above but it's on the end of the slider
02:41:198 (2) - the custom clap break the flow of the previous hitsound. I suggest to replace it soft-clap
02:44:329 (1) - ^ replace the one on the end of the slider, the clap at the start is perfect
02:59:981 (5) - finish at the end?

[Hard]
Don't forget to re-snap, mas~
00:35:720 (3) - the double clap pattern is great, but I'd say to use more gap before using it again. For example, for this double clap pattern and the next one there are more gap (around 7 stanza) but for the next patterns there's only a little gap (3 stanza) and I honestly think it make the double clap pattern overused. This is my own preference I guess :3
00:52:404 (4,5,6) - delicious~
01:44:851 - the hitsound is too low, mind increasing it a bit more?
01:53:198 - ^
01:45:883 (2) - hmm maybe remove 1 repeat so it'll sync with the music?
01:54:230 (2) - I'm a bit confused as why this is using a 1/1 repeat instead of 1/3 repeats as the previous ones
02:17:981 (8) - whistle at the end?
02:34:938 - same as 01:44:851
02:43:285 - ^
02:56:329 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - bikin agak kaget :o
03:03:894 (3) - change into triple circles?

Yup sekian dari saya, sebisa mungkin tambahin satu diff lagi terserah mau GD atau bikin sendiri soalnya cuma 2 diff kurang seru dan lagi cuma 3 menitan kok
berhubung udah wa kasih star di atas wa tambahin kudosu di sini~
~STAR

02:56:329 = (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) need remake, i think :O

zeroclover wrote:

02:56:329 = (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) need remake, i think :O

Why, the rhythm fits perfectly here ><

@Sallad4Ever : Thanks kak untuk modnya, jujur gw emang agak confused sama hitsoundnya (:

EDIT : Waduh ada suggestion soal break yah, nggak lihat tadi, udah terlanjur upload ><
Nanti di-fix dengan mod selanjutnya deh

[General]
If it's possible, plz consider to map a diff between your 2 diffs, no matter the max score or the difficulty, there's still a small gap.

[Normal]
If you could increase your spacing a bit (make 1/2 notes don't have any part stacked with each other) it may look better?
00:52:155 (2) - just a suggestion here, what about make it a 3/4 slider and add a circle at 00:53:198? Because i think if the beat could have a little change here, the later notes sounds better to me.
02:35:459 (1) - better to clap here instead of (2)? because on the previous section your clap is at 02:31:285 (1) - , also the default clap on 02:35:981 (2)'s end should move 1/1 earlier imo.
02:47:459 (4) - remove the hitsounds on it. because the music itself comes with really strong sounds here and you don't need a finish, the pace would also be better (3 finish stackes together is not so good)
03:03:633 (3) - Try to draw it better...= =


[Hard]
00:17:720 (5) - remove clap? with clap together, the finish is not that strong. Also you could increase volume (to 60% maybe) on this note.
00:49:285 (5,7) - try to whistle on these 2 circles instead of (8)'s beginning?
01:04:025 (3) - touches HP bar.
01:15:111 (7) - ^
01:32:068 (7) - also add whistle to its beginning?
01:35:198 - add a note?
01:39:372 - ^
02:23:285 (2,3) - i believe it's something wrong here, it should be snapped to 1/3.
02:58:807 - add a note?

The song is so hard to map.... but you made it not bad.

So fast o.o

[Hard] isn't too Insane, it is enjoyable in DoubleTime, so I think I'll just create an Easy to balance the diff spread ><

Will fix together with Easy ~

i think the Normal is easy enough...= =, but little worry about your diff spread (blame the song, the beat changes too frequently). If you can have... let's say, a 2-star Easy and 3.5-star Normal it's also really nice, but need too much work imo.

maybe you could leave only 2diffs here unless a MAT/BAT specificly ask you to make another.

Edit: Deny the kud plz.

Oh, OK, thanks so much for your advices ~
(Kudosu'd also because I found the post helpful)
EDIT : Fixed the mods (:

...OAO kakak tularkanlah kedewaan mu dalam membuat map main delele padaku oTL

star untuk awesomeness kakak *u*d

mumpung nganggur

normal:

hard: (normal soft hitsoundnya kekna kurang sreg...)

cuman saran... ga dipake jg gapapa

Fixed some xD

Gw nggak pingin diff itu terlalu susah, soalnya memang itu targetnya "Hard" bukan "Insane" xD

Hey Nivalis

Everything is fine with the folder and map settings,the only suggestion is to set Audio Lead-In to 2000 via notepad,though it's up to you.

[Normal]
00:50:068 (3) - Clap perfectly fits here.
01:24:503 (1) - Even during test play it's almost out of play screen It's visible and readable,but I'd move it a bit higher from the screen border.
01:40:155 (4) - Again clap.
01:57:894 - It's okay to start a break using notepad,but I'd add a note here.
02:46:938 (3,4) - Why not to use soft C1 clap for (3) and finish for (4) again?

[Hard]
00:53:198 (5,6) - Nice pattern,but extending (5) to the next blue tick (00:53:590) sounds more interesting to me then simple 1/2 rhytm.
01:06:633 - I hear a note here,maybe add another repeat to previous slider?
01:20:590 (1) - Stack with (6)?
01:42:764 (4) - Repeat on blue tick sounds wrong to me :< Try to make something instead here,using more notes.
01:47:851 (1) - Not sure about this slider,I'd fill this part with notes instead,seems like 1/3 fit here,anyway I'd like to see a note at 01:47:981 at least.
01:57:894 - Add a note here if you followed this suggestion in Normal.
Awesome ending

Nice music and map,I enjoyed it.
My suggestions are really few,but that's the only that looked a bit wrong to me.Everything else is just flawless.

Good job again,starring~

@IceBeam : Fixed most, and sorry for late reply, my internet connection went down for the past 2 days...
Thx (:

Hi :3

[Hard]

00:03:372 (4) - This slider is under the score, (http://puu.sh/40rX) it's not a good idea so you should move it somewhere else.
01:48:155 - Use 1/3 like that : http://puu.sh/40sl It fit better to the song.

Useless mod is useless.
~Starz'd !

Fight69 wrote:

Hi :3

[Hard]

00:03:372 (4) - This slider is under the score, (http://puu.sh/40rX) it's not a good idea so you should move it somewhere else.
01:48:155 - Use 1/3 like that : http://puu.sh/40sl It fit better to the song.

Useless mod is useless.
~Starz'd !

Fixed that 1/3...
Thanks for star + mod xD

from my que

[General]
fine

[Normal]
fine

[Hard]
02:17:590 (7,8) - slider end at 02:17:981 , circle at 02:18:111 is better imo
02:36:111 - add circle?

awesome map
sorry I can't find anything more ;_;

wcx19911123 wrote:

[Hard]
02:17:590 (7,8) - slider end at 02:17:981 , circle at 02:18:111 is better imo I can't get a good pattern if I change this ><
02:36:111 - add circle? Added

Thanks for mod + double star (:

Hi Nivalis

Yeah no spinner

[hard]

00:45:111 - add a circle between (6) and (1)?
01:36:503 (5) - change it to an 1/4 snap slider? ( repeat the slider to 01:37:025 )
　　　　　　 or add a circle at 01:37:025?

BONUS 2000000!!!!!!!!!

Not changed anything (plus the second one is actually 1/6 rather than 1/4 ><)

Thanks for checking anyway Gomo Psivarh ~

A few beats are placed quite low. Not that much of a problem anyway.

[Hard]
00:04:155 (5) - Move the red slider pint right 1 grid, then move the entire slider left to the point is back i nthe middle. I should be more symmetrical now. (I used a ruler for this @_@)
00:16:677 (1,2,3,4,5) - All of them are correct, nice.
01:45:894 (2) - Not snapped to 1/3.
02:35:981 (1,2,3) - ^

I like the sliders, they really are smooth and fit with the map really well.

Starred.

JInxyjem wrote:

[Hard]
00:04:155 (5) - Move the red slider pint right 1 grid, then move the entire slider left to the point is back i nthe middle. I should be more symmetrical now. (I used a ruler for this @_@) I'm not really good at symmetry shaping, fixed though. I hope it's correct now ~
00:16:677 (1,2,3,4,5) - All of them are correct, nice. Thx xD
01:45:894 (2) - Not snapped to 1/3. It's 1/4 duh ><
02:35:981 (1,2,3) - ^ Also ^

Thanks for mod and star (:

hehe good map terusin niv, patut dicontoh ini s t a r

Very nice map you've got here

Only thing I'd suggest is a spinner to break the song up a little bit

Star'd

I prefer without spinner ><
Thanks for checking anyway ~

Pesan anda terlalu pendek,Tolong jangan mengirim pesan seperti "star" dan pastikan anda telah memberi konstribusi pada thread ini

loooool

Thanks for star ~

your message is too short

Yo, from my que

Hard:
Some inconsistencies with your custom hit-normal (clap on soft custom) , though IDK if intentional because you have whistle on them, but I'll point a few of them out. I think they sound better with the hit-normal on em.
- 00:34:416 (1) - Clap on beginning
- 00:35:198 (2) - Clap on end
- 00:35:720 (3) - Custom Clap on end
- 00:36:242 (4) - Clap on the end
- 00:37:285 (1) - Clap on the end

I'll stop there for now. was just curious why you didn't continue with the custom clap cause it sounds really good throughout the song. Just not sure if that was intentional or now.

- 02:56:329 (1,2,3,4) - I don't think this pattern fits.. its so.. awkward and i guess not as smooth like the rest of the map. Maybe just use regular streams, I don't think the map will be any harder using them compared of sliders. Infact, I think they'll be easier.
- 02:57:372 (1,2,3,4) - ^
- 03:03:894 (3) - 1/6?

Normal:
Same thing like i said about the hitsounds on hard, else its solid.

Really good map man. I think shits rank ready ez.

yeahyeahyeahhh wrote:

Yo, from my que (:

Hard:
Some inconsistencies with your custom hit-normal (clap on soft custom) , though IDK if intentional because you have whistle on them, but I'll point a few of them out. I think they sound better with the hit-normal on em. It's all intentional, but changed on in 00:34:416 though
- 00:34:416 (1) - Clap on beginning
- 00:35:198 (2) - Clap on end
- 00:35:720 (3) - Custom Clap on end
- 00:36:242 (4) - Clap on the end
- 00:37:285 (1) - Clap on the end

I'll stop there for now. was just curious why you didn't continue with the custom clap cause it sounds really good throughout the song. Just not sure if that was intentional or now.

- 02:56:329 (1,2,3,4) - I don't think this pattern fits.. its so.. awkward and i guess not as smooth like the rest of the map. Maybe just use regular streams, I don't think the map will be any harder using them compared of sliders. Infact, I think they'll be easier. Some modders in the past (notably IceBeam) liked this ending >< plus actually I was running out of patterns here. I tried randomly placing it like this and it sounds well (:
- 02:57:372 (1,2,3,4) - ^ ^
- 03:03:894 (3) - 1/6? Done

Normal:
Same thing like i said about the hitsounds on hard, else its solid.
Tweaked some hitsounds

Really good map man. I think shits rank ready ez.

Thanks!!

Hi there

[General]

1. Combo color looked similar IMO

[Normal]

1. 00:54:242 (5) - Add clap here seems better

[Hard]

1. 02:57:372 (1) - Spacing a bit far for me, at leaset when I test play, I will miss here. You could ask some of your friend to test it, if most of them say OK, I think it's fine enough

It's a neat map
osu needs more relax map like this
star

Breeze wrote:

Hi there

[General]

1. Combo color looked similar IMO I only used 2 combo colors now, I hope they don't blend much now

[Normal]

1. 00:54:242 (5) - Add clap here seems better Done

[Hard]

1. 02:57:372 (1) - Spacing a bit far for me, at leaset when I test play, I will miss here. You could ask some of your friend to test it, if most of them say OK, I think it's fine enough I've got my friends playtest this in the past (zeroclover etc.), and they can catch it, so I guess it's OK

It's a neat map
osu needs more relax map like this
star

Thanks Breeze ~

I saw your request in #modreqs

General:

-- In the intro I think the volume is too high (especially custom clap), maybe reduce the volume to 40%?
-- No spinners?
-- Only 5 maps? I hope you map more xD

Normal:

01:06:764 (5) - Add finish to the end?

Hard:

00:39:111 (4) - Remove whistle from the slider?
00:56:329 (4) - Add clap?
02:54:764 (1,2,3) - I think this looks bad (not bothered about the spacing lol) maybe use x1 distance snap on these notes then keep the rest as it is?
02:56:329 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - This is a sudden change in spacing, I managed it fine but you might want to consider tweaking it a bit.
02:58:807 (1) - Move to 02:58:677 ? I think it follows the song more.

Great maps, I love instrumentals. Star from me!

Shulin wrote:

General:

-- In the intro I think the volume is too high (especially custom clap), maybe reduce the volume to 40%? Done (:
-- No spinners? I want to map this without spinner xD
-- Only 5 maps? I hope you map more xD I'm having trouble in MAT/BAT hunting, I'm not really good at it ):

Normal:

01:06:764 (5) - Add finish to the end? Added

Hard:

00:39:111 (4) - Remove whistle from the slider? Done
00:56:329 (4) - Add clap? Done
02:54:764 (1,2,3) - I think this looks bad (not bothered about the spacing lol) maybe use x1 distance snap on these notes then keep the rest as it is? Done
02:56:329 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - This is a sudden change in spacing, I managed it fine but you might want to consider tweaking it a bit. :'D don't wanna change
02:58:807 (1) - Move to 02:58:677 ? I think it follows the song more. It broke the previous rhythm ><

Great maps, I love instrumentals. Star from me!

Thanks Shulin xD

SONITUS VIRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRR-
I approve this.

Verdisphena wrote:

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I approve this.

yay ^_^

General
"world/electronica" <= not sure in this tag, since you have "world" and "electronica"

Hard
01:01:546 (7) - looks bad, try to find another direction
01:08:851 (4) - i play in "window" mode. reverse of slider is too close to the border of window. I suggest to replace slider point a bit upper than now
01:36:503 (5) - this slider is very strange, i can't replace it :
I tried to make it because i'm pretty sure it's 1/4 with 1 reverse , not 1/6 with two reverses
01:37:025 (x) - add note
01:45:894 (2) - add reverse?
02:31:807 (3) - add clap to the start

Normal
00:54:764 (6) - remove clap from the reverse, add clap to the start
01:12:503 (1) - overlap with scorebar
01:33:894 (2) - very close to the border of window
02:39:111 (5) - ^
02:43:285 (4) - remove clap from the reverse, add clap to the start
02:44:329 (1) - touch border of window

star~

Thanks Aleks, fixed most~

btw World/Electronica is this song's genre, but I add "world" and "electronica" in the tags to let the beatmap searcher find this song with "world" or "electronica" only (:

just one thing
[Hard]

1. 02:57:372 (1) - I feel this jump is too far, since I've never seen such a far jump on other place in this diff., it's playable as a Hard diff., though

change it or not, let me know when you decide

EDIT: mapper decide to keep them, well, bubbled

renard <3

Blue Dragon wrote:

renard <3

Yes :3

Ranked.

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Congratulations~

Aaaaaaaaah thanks for the rank abalee :3

And thanks all~

Oh, finally it get ranked
Congratulations

CONGLATURATION!!!