00:41:218 と 01:23:296 が目盛りにあってないのでunsnap.

そして、少しEasyにしてはノーツが多い気がします。

SVを1.80ぐらいにしましょう。早いです。

hmmnn.. I think I should give you some general thoughts and advices instead of going in-depth, so here we go!
- first of all I would consider mapping the whole song, so the beginning from 00:00:700 - to 00:13:167 - can be mapped nicely and is a good intro
- what i care the most about is flow related things. Your map has a lot of flow errors which can be fixed in an easy way. I give you a couple a examples so you may understand what i exactly mean: 00:13:167 (1,2) - besides the fact that the sliders are too fast in general and are a bit too strongly shaped, you can make basic flow patterns like http://puu.sh/pMN5c/cb48163266.jpg (also as you can see i made a blanket with the single note and the 2nd slider, looks always nice too!). Related to flow you have to keep an eye on the most pleasant movement of your cursor after a slider. So use the slidershape to decide where the next note shall be in the most pleasant way (sorry for noob english i hope you understand). heres an example for that: http://puu.sh/pMNkk/331be8ff66.jpg (thats the way you did it which doesnt flow well!!) and http://puu.sh/pMNp7/c7bd0bd45f.jpg (flows well, because its the most pleasant way for your cursor to move to the 2nd slider)
- another thing are your random overlaps (or sometimes more like neither overlap nor decent space between objects: a "middle thingy"). heres an example: 00:16:868 (3,5,6) - these 3 objects look ugly together because there is no space between those. just look at my solution and you'll see that it can look more pretty!! http://puu.sh/pMNI5/816ca7908b.jpg (Do you notice how it has more structure? Keep an eye on how objects look together, make sure they are in common (thats the thing about pattern))
- uhmmm... add hitsounds please ^-^

Well yeah, thats everything for now. If you have any questions about my mod dont hesitate to message me, feel free to ask me (:

Edit: As i read my text again I pointed out that i was very direct and strict, dont feel offended please i just want to help you