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Toyosaki Aki - Shiawase Hiyori

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indyinyou
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indyinyou
This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on 20 ธันวาคม 2553 at 10:50:03

Artist: Toyosaki Aki
Title: Shiawase Hiyori
Source: K-ON!!
Tags: Hirasawa Yui
BPM: 166
Filesize: 5992kb
Play Time: 03:31
Difficulties Available:
  1. Easy (2.63 stars, 230 notes)
  2. Hard (4.97 stars, 503 notes)
  3. Normal (4.43 stars, 315 notes)
Download: Toyosaki Aki - Shiawase Hiyori
Information: Scores/Beatmap Listing
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My 2nd map

Yui cute ~ :3

skin by lovhin456 :3
Last edited by indyinyou , edited 91 times in total.
Cyril Scarlet
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Cyril Scarlet
1 get :!:
indyinyou
887 posts
Joined June 2009
Topic Starter
indyinyou
Bg sorry for bother you .can you check my bubbled map ?

http://konachan.com/post/show/72503/gla ... _yui-k-on-
http://konachan.com/post/show/83233/aki ... obuki_tsum
http://konachan.com/post/show/74401/hir ... o-k-on-sca
http://konachan.com/post/show/52873/hirasawa_yui-k-on-
http://konachan.com/post/show/52674/hirasawa_yui-k-on-
http://konachan.com/post/show/51247/hirasawa_yui-k-on-

Shiawase Hiyori
Vocal(s): by Hirasawa Yui (cv: Toyosaki Aki)
Description: K-ON!! – Character Image Song Series Vol. 1 Hirasawa Yui

Uraraka osanpo hiyori mune ippai shinkokyuu hiyori
Ichi jikan hayaku natta mezamashi ga kureta chiisai odekake taimu

Fukufuku koinu fuwafuwa na kumo purantaa no hana ni mo ne
Egao ga koborechau yo doushite ka na?
Wakannai demo ne… ufufu


Nikkori to ne « ohayou » shiranai hito ni mo « ohayou »
Ikiterutte ii na hayaokitte ii na ohirune mo ii kedo ne
Ranra

Ippo niho osanpo hiyori uta utatte hamingu hiyori
Dare to mo yakusoku shite nakutemo heiki jiyuu na odekake taimu

Sunaba no oshiro kankeri suberidai buranko wa junbanmachi
Miteta hazu ga sanka shiteru doushite ka na?
Wakannai yappashi… ufufu

Sakki no koinu… koinu na no ka naa
Moshikashite chiisai inu no, otona datta no kamo…
Haa~ kawaikatta naa.

Otona demo kodomo demo inu wa inu hito wa hito watashi wa watashi
Tanoshii wa tanoshii da ne itsudemo
Wakatteru yo chanto… ufufu

Uraraka osanpo hiyori mune ippai shinkokyuu hiyori
Ichi jikan hayaku natta mezamashi ga kureta ooki na shiawase taimu
Lanla

Toyosaki Aki - Shiawase Hiyori (+22) by indyinyou
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Download: Toyosaki Aki - Shiawase Hiyori (indyinyou) [jumping diff].osu
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Saten
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Saten
So basically, you need to get these set to 1024*768?
SPOILER

indyinyou wrote:

Bg

http://konachan.com/post/show/72503/gla ... _yui-k-on-
http://konachan.com/post/show/83233/aki ... obuki_tsum
http://konachan.com/post/show/74401/hir ... o-k-on-sca
http://konachan.com/post/show/52873/hirasawa_yui-k-on-
http://konachan.com/post/show/52674/hirasawa_yui-k-on-
http://konachan.com/post/show/51247/hirasawa_yui-k-on-
I could also help you re-encode the mp3 but since it uses VBR, (and it's mostly at 160 kbps (lowest), and 256 kbps at it's peak) the file size will become somewhat larger.
But if you still want me to re-encode it, then I'll be happy to~

I'll also star this while I'm here :3

Star~★
Saten
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Saten
I don't know if you received my pm or not, so I'll post here as well to make sure :3

SPOILER
02 - Shiawase Hiyori ←

indyinyou
887 posts
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Topic Starter
indyinyou
thx Saten-san you help me a lot ;)
Saten
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Saten
One more thing,
May I suggest that you decrease the OD with 2 ticks on Normal? :?
It's kinda much for a normal isn't it?

Current offset makes you get many 100's if you try to match the song-tempo
Offset 780 is close to perfect, so I would recommend that you this ;)


No Kudosu for this post~

Edit: Suprise!
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lovhin456
1,965 posts
Joined December 2008
lovhin456
You requested my mod and I'm here ~

General;
- Everything good here ~

Skin;
- Why not try the BG I put here http://puu.sh/xQ2 there are some skin elements too, I hope you like them.
Also if you change the BG, try these colors
Combo1 : 90,191,224
Combo2 : 247,50,45
Combo3 : 166,102,74

Easy;
- 00:06:362 >> Use less timing section, you can switch the first timing section (the red one) to soft so this becomes useless. I think this is for all diffs.
- 00:40:519 >> New combo then remove the new combo to the next note
- 00:43:049 >> It touches (2) a bit and I don't like that, change it like this
SPOILER
- 01:39:073 >> Remove new combo then new combo to the next note
- 01:58:591 >> New combo
- 01:59:675 >> If you do that ^ remove combo here
- 02:10:157 >> New combo
- 02:11:241 >> If you did that ^ remove combo here
- 02:39:796 >> Remove combo
- 02:41:964 >> New combo then remove new combo at 02:43:049
- 02:53:231 >> New combo then remove new combo at 02:54:615

Normal;
- Good

Hard;
- Umm ... maybe check AIMod

* Star ~
regenz
1,277 posts
Joined November 2009
regenz
Hard
02:32:205 (1,2,3,4) - newcombo at 4
***หลุดบ่อยนักโพสที่นี่เลย

you got star 1 ea.
wanhyrzh
376 posts
Joined December 2009
wanhyrzh
Hi~Here's my mod~
You may know that they're just suggestions, so feel free to do some changes or not~ :D
Now let's go!

SPOILER
General
Hard is much more interesting than Easy and Normal~But Easy and Normal can be interesting too. I suggest you to creat more patterns, or use more kind of rhythm(of the notes). You can have a look at impossibleXu's Easy diffs or Pokie's normal diffs, they just did good imo.

Easy:
00:25:880(4) this may bugs the new players, try to delete this note and lengthen slider 3 to make it ends here
00:26:241(5) ^
01:00:037(3,4) change them to a slider, or just stack them in the same place
01:12:145(3) same as 00:25:880(4)
01:12:506(4,5,6) change them to a slider with a reverse
02:27:506(5,6) same as 01:00:037(3,4)
02:33:290(5,6) ^
03:13:410(4,5) ^

Normal:
00:31:121(3) hmm...I suggest you to make this more symmetrical to 2
01:00:579(5,6,7) I suggest you to make them like this XD just like what you did at 01:06:362(5,6)

01:18:290(T) I suggest you to end the 0.5x bpm time here, then change the spacing of 1 and 2 back to the normal spacing
01:18:651(x) add note
01:38:892(5) I suggest you to change this note to a slider which starts here and ends at 01:39:253
01:46:844(4) ^
03:02:928(x) add note
03:08:711(x) ^

Hard:
00:07:808(x) add note?
00:09:253(x) ^
01:18:651(1) let the spinner begin at 01:18:832 then add a note here
00:35:278(T) add an green line here to increase the volume before the note (KIAI is on the note)
01:53:350(T) ^
Anyway, the map is nice~Have my star and good luck with it!
Dotsu
996 posts
Joined March 2009
Dotsu
Hi~

My suggestions:

[General]


  • Offset seems about +15 (775)
    The maximum Width of Comboburst.png is 400 Pixels.So please resize it~
[Easy]


  • 00:35:458 : There’s a volume change,so you should add a timing section earlier
    00:42:687 (3): Use finish instead of whistle
    01:12:506 (4,5,6): A bit hard for [Easy] I advice changing it into a repeat slider
    01:53:531 : Same as above
[Normal]


  • 00:20:458 (7): Repeat – 1 and add a note at 00:21:000
    00:35:458 : There’s a volume change,so you should add a timing section earlier
    00:54:253 (4): Use finish instead of whistle
    01:01:482 : Add a circle
    01:18:651 (1): Spinner starts here
    01:36:904 (2): The reverse arrow is a bit hard to see
    01:39:073 : Add a circle
    01:53:531 : Same as above
    02:00:759 (3): Use Finish here instead of whistle
    03:02:928 : Add a circle
    03:08:711 : ^
    03:20:097 : ^
[Hard]


  • 00:35:458 : There’s a volume change,so you should add a timing section earlier
    00:51:181 (5): Change this into a circle and add a slider at 00:51:362
    01:05:820 (6,7): Too close
    01:49:916 (3): Use Curved slider
    01:53:531 : Same as above
    02:11:964 (9): Symmetry
    02:32:567 (2,3): Change into a slider
    03:25:699 (7): Move this away from 6
    03:31:663 : Add a circle

Good map~ I like it~

☆ STAR ☆
+
☆ KUDOSU STAR ☆
wmfchris
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wmfchris
[Hard]
1:05:820 (6) SPACING
1:18:651 (s) add a note then spinner?
2:00:759 (1,2,3,4) stack (1) properly on last combo's (5), make (3,4) symmetrical to (1,2)

[Normal] and [easy] are nicely done. GJ~

-SB- resize your combobrust.

star~
roflninja
348 posts
Joined October 2009
roflninja
I'm a bit busy with things to mod right now, but i took a look through and it seems fine
remind me in 5-8 days and i should have time then, if you still need my modding

Good luck!
orioncomet
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orioncomet
For offset I got 769~772 777
James2250
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James2250
Maps look fine, folder looks fine

Fix ploys new timing (above here) and call me back
Fight69
1,639 posts
Joined January 2010
Fight69
Hello there o/

Everything are just some suggestions

[Hard]

02:32:215 (4) - New combo
02:32:396 (1) - No new combo
02:32:938 (4) - New combo
02:33:300 (1) - No new combo
(02:32:215 (4,1,2) have a higher spacing, that's why I think it's better to add a new combo here)

That's all I guess
Awesome !
~Starz'd !
orioncomet
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orioncomet
just rechecked, i edited my post with a new offset at 777ms, sorry for that

orioncomet wrote:

For offset I got 769~772 777
and dont forgot to resnap all notes and stuff. and call james back for rechecking a mapset.

เดี๋ยวเขาจะบับเบิ้ลให้ แต่แก้offsetก่อน
indyinyou
887 posts
Joined June 2009
Topic Starter
indyinyou
ok i fix offset Already :)
vincerio
687 posts
Joined April 2009
vincerio
congratz~ :P
banvi
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Joined June 2009
banvi
Sorry for delay...

Just suggestion.
[Easy]
fine ;)

[Normal]
fine ;)

Hard
02:10:174 (2,3) hmm , I'm anxious this spacing...
03:21:740 (6) Parallel to (7,8)??

Pretty nice map! :)
Sandpig
847 posts
Joined September 2010
Sandpig
hi :D

(>'(oo)')> my mod <('(oo)'<)


Hard

It's nice, but some of the triple notes seem unnecessary or start from improper time.

00:48:849 (7,8,9) - hear and play not good. you can put a note between 9 and 10 instead.
00:51:108 (4) - remove this note because this kind of notes you have 00:52:283 (2,3,4) and they seem too close to each other.
01:05:114 (3,4,5) - note between 5 and 6 instead of 3 and 5
01:31:138 (4,5,6) - same problem, note 5 1/2 later
01:32:042 (2) - I think it would be better if this slider is started from a white line. the arrangement here 01:32:042 (2,3,4) plays a little awkward
01:57:614 (8) - 1/2 earlier and put it together with the previous circle?
02:00:505 (9) - ^
02:07:825 - add a note?
02:40:987 (5) - 1/2 earlier?
02:48:126 (2,3,4) - 1/2 earlier and add a note on 02:48:307
02:52:554 (9) - 1/2 earlier?
02:54:361 (3) - remove this note?
03:29:511 (6,7) - recommand separating them because they are the only sliders that you stack in this map.


Normal

fine to me


Easy

00:16:319 (5) - maybe add new combo here instead of 00:16:680 (1)?
00:17:764 (3) - new combo instead of the next one?
00:22:102 (6,1,2,3) - same problem, new combos look a little random
02:34:752 (2) - reduce some repeats?


good job 8-)
Leorda
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Joined June 2009
Leorda
Sawasude~

Easy
00:16:319 (5) - New combo?
00:16:680 (1) - Remove new combo?
00:17:764 (3) - New combo?
00:18:126 (1) - Remove new combo?
00:22:102 (5) - New combo?
00:22:463 (1) - Remove new combo?
00:23:548 (3) - New combo?
00:23:909 (1) - Remove new combo?
00:31:138 (1) - ^
02:42:343 (2,3,4) - Perhaps, move it like this? http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/41349 To make a nice distance?
03:04:752 (3,4) - Move 5 grid right? To make a triangle pattern?
03:14:873 (1,2,3) - Try make like this to make a pretty pattern http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/41351
03:20:656 (1,2,3) - I think this pattern looks good for me if you change this http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/41355

Normal
00:32:584 (1) - New combo here to fix the spinner bug, seriously
00:37:644 (6,1,2) - Try make a moe pattern like this http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/41358 Also, if you already change this, try stack 00:39:813 (3) with 00:38:367 (1)
00:44:150 (1) - New combo here to fix the spinner bug, seriously
01:50:656 (1) - ^
02:02:222 (1) - ^
02:31:499 (5) - New combo?
02:32:584 (1) - Remove new combo?
02:45:596 (1) - New combo here to fix the spinner bug, seriously


Hard
00:32:584 (1) - New combo here to fix the spinner bug, seriously
00:44:150 (1) - ^

This song are reminds me since Yui are preschooler
Doomsday
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Doomsday
Hi :)

  1. Timing looks just fine to me
  2. sorry to be picky, but doesn't "K-ON!" just have 1 exclamation mark, not 2?
[EASY]

It's a pretty tough easy, but it's not too bad. Apart from maybe sticking to straight horizontal/vertical lines a bit too much with the beats, lookin' good.

[NORMAL]

Feels kinda like a mild hard, rather than a Normal, but either way, it's a nice difficulty. Pretty fun too.

01:17:403 (1) - Personally, I would just use 1xBPM for this slider. It's not a big issue, but it doesn't feel like a slowdown should be there to me. Also, it's only one slider before a spinner, so changing to 1xBPM won't hurt. :P

[HARD]

Like easy, perhaps it sticks to straight horizontal/vertical lines for the beats a bit too much (gets pretty repetitive after a while). It isn't too much of a problem in this, but experimenting more with different patterns can really help make a map great. It feels a little too overmapped too. Again, not much of an issue here since it isn't major, but it does feel a little crowded with the beats at times.

Nothing specific I can rag on here though. Looks clean.

This may not be the most groundbreaking map I've seen it certainly isn't bad. It plays pretty well and looks nice to boot. Nice work :)
pete2528
412 posts
Joined March 2009
pete2528
:)

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James2250
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James2250

Doomsday wrote:

sorry to be picky, but doesn't "K-ON!" just have 1 exclamation mark, not 2?
If the song is from season 1 it uses 1 !, if its from season 2 it uses 2 !. (info from kirby)
From what I can see on google this song is from the second season~
Double check and poke me later


EDIT:

Pretty simple but it all seems fine now

Bubbled~
Kurai
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Kurai
Ahah I guess I'm late xD
But I've found nothing important so I'll just star it :3
Astom
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Astom

KuraiPettan wrote:

Ahah I guess I'm late xD
But I've found nothing important so I'll just star it :3
Same here lol.
Andrea
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Joined August 2008
Andrea
[Hard]

00:10:716 (6) - New combo.
00:10:897 (1) - Remove new combo.
01:17:403 (1) - Add a finish at the end of this slider.
01:49:030 (1) - Remove new combo.
01:49:210 (2) - New combo.
03:18:849 (1) - Add a finish and remove the whistle.

Map is already perfect itself, but before ranking it I wanna leave you these suggestions for make it look more nicer. Your choice of what do you want to fix. Let me know when you're done with it and I'll rank.
indyinyou
887 posts
Joined June 2009
Topic Starter
indyinyou
ok ALL fix and thx ALL mod
DJPop
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Here since the beginning
DJPop
Star fix.


=P
Andrea
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Andrea
Ok it's fine now.

Ranked~
regenz
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