aesopl19193 wrote:

[小鈴]
01:13:792 (1,2,3) - too close fixed
01:37:609(x) fixed
01:37:710(x) - add notes ( suggestion only) fixed
01:39:433~01:40:447 ( suggestion only)
[attachment=2:66c5c]11.png[/attachment:66c5c]
01:56:866~01:58:082 ( suggestion only)
[attachment=1:66c5c]12.png[/attachment:66c5c]
02:05:379(x) - add notes fixed
02:53:623~03:08:217 - I don't think x0.5bpm is suitable for there
02:55:447(6) - change into note , it look like 2 notes already
02:57:677(5) - add a return fixed
03:01:933(4) - change into slider, end at the long white line fixed
03:09:231(3) - too close fixed
03:19:974(5) - end at 03:20:582 , then 03:20:785 add a note fixed
03:28:082(1,2,3) -[attachment=0:66c5c]13.png[/attachment:66c5c]
03:57:575(1,2,3)- too close fixed
03:59:906(x) - add note (suggestion only) fixed

Roddie wrote:

Hi :3

Blue: Suggestions.
Violet: Should be fixed in my opinion.
Red: Muse be fixed.

00:41:055 (3)-Make this more symmetrical?
Something like...

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[attachment=1:4b131]screenshot026.jpg[/attachment:4b131]

00:49:163 (1)-Move on grid down.
02:30:514 (4)-Stack this on fading 2 properly.
03:44:298 (1, 2)-Make 1 more symmetrical. And 2 as well.

hujune's Hard:

00:12:677 (1)-Remove new combo?
00:57:271 (1)-Stack this?
00:58:893 (1)-^
01:44;298 (4, 1, 1, 1, 1)-Make something like this?

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Taiko Collab:

Don't have modding experience yet. =(

Kana:

IRC modding:

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11:20 <Roddie> : *pokes*
11:20  *Roddie is editing (Sekirei Cast - Sekirei (Full ver.))[http://osu.ppy.sh/s/20371]
11:20 <Roddie> : 00:11:866 -
11:21 <Roddie> : makes sliders better =/
11:21 <KanaRin> : Ok.
11:21 <Roddie> : do better curves
11:22 <Roddie> : 00:43:487 -
11:22 <Roddie> : add a note
11:23 <Roddie> : 00:57:271 -
11:23 <Roddie> : start Kiai time here
11:24 <Roddie> : 01:04:771 -
11:24 <Roddie> : remove new combo?
11:24 <Roddie> : 01:15:717 -
11:24 <Roddie> : same
11:26 <KanaRin> : all fixed
11:26 <Roddie> : im not done yet
11:26 <KanaRin> : Ok =w= i
11:28 <Roddie> : 03:12:271 (1, 1, 1) -
11:28 <Roddie> : remove new combos on those 3
11:30 <Roddie> : 03:36:596 (1, 2, 3, 4) -
11:30 <Roddie> : spacing
11:31 <Roddie> : move 1 one grid left
11:31 <Roddie> : samething with 2 and 3
11:31 <KanaRin> : 03:36:596 (1,2,3,4) -  ?
11:31 <Roddie> :  and 4
11:31 <Roddie> : i just said that now xD
11:32 <KanaRin> : yes , ok :3

Nice job.

Good luck getting this ranked!

Star!

Roddie wrote:

You don't have to double post, dude. xD

You can put two different quotes in one single post.

Remember next time in the future.

S i R i R u wrote:

Yume miru ashita e ~ (ﾉﾟωﾟ)ﾉ

aabc271 wrote:

Fixed after changing the offset~
( Resnapped the notes and timing points, also changed a bit at the end )
Please check~

NatsumeRin wrote:

[hujune's Hard]
HP-1 ok
00:28:690 (7) - move it up a bit so it curves better... 2 grids maybe. no
00:42:069 - add a note? ok
00:49:366 (2) - new combo since here's a BPM change. no
02:00:109 (1,2,3,4) - say no to the spacing! it's obvious that players will read them as 1/4 but 4 is 1/2.... hmm...
02:07:204 (1,2,3) - suggest you to use a reverse slider instead. also because of BPM change. hmm...
02:24:028 (6) - add repeat? ok
03:19:163 (2,3) - whistle. ok
04:05:075 (2) - remove. ok

NatsumeRin wrote:

Red: You must fix this.
Blue: You'd better do sth with this imo.
Green: Just suggestions.

[General]
BG 尺寸现在是1024*784，不合规范，请改至1024*768. Fixed :3
需要倒计时吗。。我是觉得很吵。。不需要的话就去掉吧

[Taiko]
fine.

[Kana]
00:04:569 (1,2,3,4) - 把间距稍微扩大一点 或/且 角度转一点，这样明显会更美观。
00:19:771 (1,2,3) - 建议这之间维持基本等距，把12下拉一点可能比较好。 Fixed
00:25:650 (8) - whistle. Fixed
00:30:514 (4,5) - 不要完全重合而是稍微错开一些（4向左下5向右下，例如）
00:47:542 (1,2,3,4) - 不招人喜欢的。 Fixed
00:50:379 (1,2,1) - 跳的太过了。 Fixed
00:57:271 (5,6,7) - 比较明显的spacing. Fixed
01:08:825 (3,4) - 错开。 Fixed
01:15:717 (5,6) - 拉开而不是叠着，我只是建议，如果和后面是成套考虑的当我没说。 Fixed
01:16:325 (2,1) - spacing错误。 Fixed
01:18:352 (8,1) - new combo换位置，排列最好也换，重音明显从现在的8开始，这个排列把它放在前面一串的最后就有些滑稽。 Fixed
02:02:035 - 加拍。 Fixed
02:19:163 (4,5,6,7) - 只是叠感觉只是偷懒。 Fixed -
02:38:419 (7,1) - 没有理由的话这种过远的跳请避免。 Fixed
02:56:460 (1,2,3) - 为什么要一直叠着而最后要和4错开。。。 Fixed
03:31:731 (4) - spacing错误，至少new combo. Fixed

重叠太多了，对称太多了，会感到乏味和偷懒。
嗯 =w= 謝謝你 我會努力改正的

James wrote:

kana:
03:08:623 (1,2,3) - patterns like this... intentional? im assuming it is.
too many finish sounds that doesnt fit.. FIXED

hujune/ying:
not seeing any problems.. cool.
well, it should be. *looks at a 7-page modposts*


too many random jumps(kana).. for a first time mapper you should learn how to map properly first...
this just looks like the same for every 2010 mapper's maps being submitted... so sad..

minyeob wrote:

[Kana]
03:48:150 (2,3,4) - Spacing is not good. I think you must fix this. Fixed
Well I won't say much about your diff since it's your 1st map lol

Fight69 wrote:

Heya o/

Don't forget : Everthing are just suggestions

[ying's Easy]

02:02:947 (2) - New combo ?Fixed

[hujune's Hard]

02:28:487 (4) - Add a reverse arrow Fixed
02:30:109 (4) - ^ Fixed


[Kana]

00:57:27 : There is two Inherited timing section here with different Volume : Delete one of them
03:09:028 (2) - Move this circle at 03:08:927 ? (Don't forget to fix spacing !) Fixed
03:10:650 (2) - Move this circle at 03:10:548 ? (Don't forget to fix spacing !) Fixed

Everything else should be ok

Good job !
~Star !