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路过

00:07:773 (4) - Ctrl+G
00:21:306 - 这不放个东西么
00:28:969 (5,6) - 分别ctrl+g
01:15:273 (4) - 这个放折返不太舒服啊,换个滑条+单点?
01:37:937 (4) - 如果是我的话我会往远了放。。然后后面接个转盘
01:42:991 (4,5) - 前面那么远怎么突然这个这么近。。建议放远点比如包01:42:013 (1) - 的滑条尾
02:08:100 (1,2,3) - 前面00:49:839 (1,2,3) - sv是1.0x这里怎么慢了。。
02:27:991 (2,3,4,5,6) - 真是反人类
02:29:295 (2) - 换成单点+3/2滑条?
02:48:045 (4,5,6,7,8) - 这个不包3么

od8 plz
顺便ar也可以高一点比如9.3
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Zweib wrote:

屁总你这换过MP3了?没有的话offset-50 (约224) 好像换过.现在的offset应该是没问题的

00:04:137 (1,2) - 不好看,把(1)旋转12°然后移到56,204?
00:07:397 (3,4) - 不好看,可以把(3)的红点去掉然后(4)移到比(2)高的位置
00:22:234 (6) - NC
00:13:104 (6,1,2) - 6跟1之间不跳而1跟2分开来是为什么 拉近了
00:15:223 (4) - 可以NC 可以的
00:19:300 (3) - 可以NC 可以的
00:22:234 (6) - NC
00:24:028 (3) - NC吧
00:25:006 (4) - 这个不NC
00:25:821 (10) - NC吧,你摆的这些图形,如果还是老实按长白线NC是没法看的,后面的NC觉得你可以尝试参考类似规律认真整曲重新加一遍,我就不指了 我日 我怕被说乱nc
00:31:365 (7,8,1) - 三连歪了点 jb歪了
00:30:876 (4) - NC ok
00:28:919 (5) - NC ok
00:32:180 (4) - NC ok
00:32:506 (6) - NC ok
00:49:789 (1) - snap错 加了两个note
00:36:664 (7) - 其实这里有个音keep

01:13:593 (2) - 前面都是折角滑条,你这里也不应该用弧线的

后面还好了,我也懒了233
04:37:071 (2,3) - 这种用复制对称比较好

串摆的挺漂亮。主要就是NC问题
感谢猪尾巴.

Euphoria wrote:

路过

00:07:773 (4) - Ctrl+G 我把4拉高了
00:21:306 - 这不放个东西么
00:28:969 (5,6) - 分别ctrl+g 可以
01:15:273 (4) - 这个放折返不太舒服啊,换个滑条+单点?还好吧
01:37:937 (4) - 如果是我的话我会往远了放。。然后后面接个转盘太短了不喜欢放转盘 感觉坑人
01:42:991 (4,5) - 前面那么远怎么突然这个这么近。。建议放远点比如包01:42:013 (1) - 的滑条尾
02:08:100 (1,2,3) - 前面00:49:839 (1,2,3) - sv是1.0x这里怎么慢了。。因为想让滑条短一点233
02:27:991 (2,3,4,5,6) - 真是反人类还好吧...
02:29:295 (2) - 换成单点+3/2滑条?和前面统一吧
02:48:045 (4,5,6,7,8) - 这个不包3么

od8 plz 7.8
顺便ar也可以高一点比如9.3
感谢h穴妹
:cry:
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cool
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Okoratu wrote:

cool
Okorachan /hug
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留名佔位 :D
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hi Lovely Pururutchan :oops:
View lightly、Mods

red: unrankable issue.
purple: maybe unrankable or Disqualification issue
blue: Highly recommended.
bold: should fix.

Knospe

  1. 00:06:795 (1,2,3) - not good flow here.On the opposite slope
  2. 00:07:447 (3,4) - Consistent with patterns,looks better imo
  3. 00:08:752 - 00:09:078 - Missing sample Drum sound here, ur adding00:06:795 (1,2,3,4,1) -
  4. 00:13:072 - 00:13:235 - add note here Hard read to rhythm
  5. 00:12:665 (1,2,3,4,5) - vol50% all points add whistle? fit sound for me
  6. 00:13:317 - 00:19:676 - In this section your hitsound use is very inconsistent. There seems to be no pattern as to where you use Normar-hitwhistle versus when you use soft-hitwhistle.Plese revise this to have more consistent hitsound pattern.
  7. 00:19:513 (2,3) - make a jump plz. I think fit sound, for example...00:19:513 (2) - 152/42 00:19:676 (3) - 382/208
  8. 00:30:110 (5,1) - This is probably readable, but it feels like bad spacing for the sake of bad spacing. Should probably be changed.
  9. 00:33:208 (2) - Ctrl+C to 00:32:719 (2) -
  10. 00:36:795 - Vol-20%? Strange NFinish
  11. 00:36:469 (1,3) - swap NC
  12. 00:37:937 (9) - Soft Finish here
  13. 00:37:937 (9,1) - Ctrl+G rhythm here? also 00:37:937 - 1/1slider、00:38:100 (1) - Remove 00:38:263 - add note
  14. 00:41:197 - Missing finish
  15. 00:43:317 (6) - NC ur adding 00:44:621 -
  16. 00:47:230 - I think soft finish fit
  17. 00:52:040 - add note here,fit drum sound
  18. 00:52:773 (2) - sample normal 00:52:937 - Soft Finish 00:53:426 - normal
  19. 00:54:567 (3,4) - Swap hitsound, I would 00:54:404 (2) - Remove whistle 00:54:241 (1,3,5) - add
  20. 01:08:589 - 01:09:241 (8) - add soft finish
  21. 00:55:056 - 01:30:110 - same as 00:13:317 - 00:19:676 - no need Normal Finish, 00:55:056 - S 01:10:708 - N 01:05:491 - N 01:21:143 - S
    I can not know the difference
  22. 01:15:926 - Misshing Finish?
  23. 01:20:409 - add note? fit to piano
  24. 01:24:730 (4) - add Clap
  25. 01:25:545 (1) - add whistle 01:25:871 (5,7,8,9) - sample Normal 01:25:952 (6) - sample Drum?
  26. 01:27:013 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1) - Very bad flow;; plz remake
  27. 01:31:578 - asame as 00:13:317 - 00:19:676 - , 01:37:937 (4) - soft finish here00:19:676 (3) -
  28. 01:39:404 - Missing Finish
  29. 01:54:078 - ^
  30. 01:55:056 - ^
  31. 01:58:806 (5,3) - ^
  32. 02:11:034 - sample Nprmal
  33. 02:11:197 - soft finish
  34. 02:11:605 - 02:11:768 - add note
  35. 02:11:850 - soft finish fit imo
  36. 02:26:850 - Soft finish
  37. 02:27:176 (4) - change to 2circle. 02:27:502 - 1/1slider?
  38. 02:27:502 - finish
  39. 02:42:583 - add note here
  40. 02:47:230 (1) - remove Clap add Finish
  41. 02:48:371 (8) - add soft finish
  42. 02:52:937 (3) - same as 00:30:110 (5,1) -
  43. 02:55:871 (5,6) - ^
  44. 03:41:197 (1) - missing whistle
  45. 03:45:110 - ^
  46. 03:56:687 (3,2) - ^
  47. 03:58:969 (1) - ^
  48. 03:59:703 (3,4) - remove whistle, Silent part here
  49. 04:00:273 - add
  50. 04:00:763 - ^
  51. 04:01:007 (4,5) - remove
  52. 04:02:067 (5) - add
  53. 04:05:491 - add
  54. 04:06:795 (1) - ^
  55. 04:12:502 (2) - more distance 269/336?
  56. 04:25:708 (1,2,3) - straight?
  57. 05:06:469 (1,2) - plz Light jump

good luck :)
mod time: 1.5hour
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P总快飞啊,sp早就够了(
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-Nanaka- wrote:

hi Lovely Pururutchan :oops:
View lightly、Mods

red: unrankable issue.
purple: maybe unrankable or Disqualification issue
blue: Highly recommended.
bold: should fix.

Knospe

  1. 00:06:795 (1,2,3) - not good flow here.On the opposite slope hmmm,maybe fine
  2. 00:07:447 (3,4) - Consistent with patterns,looks better imo ok
  3. 00:08:752 - 00:09:078 - Missing sample Drum sound here, ur adding00:06:795 (1,2,3,4,1) - fixed
  4. 00:13:072 - 00:13:235 - add note here Hard read to rhythm 00:13:072 added
  5. 00:12:665 (1,2,3,4,5) - vol50% all points add whistle? fit sound for me ok
  6. 00:13:317 - 00:19:676 - In this section your hitsound use is very inconsistent. There seems to be no pattern as to where you use Normar-hitwhistle versus when you use soft-hitwhistle.Plese revise this to have more consistent hitsound pattern. ok change all normal-hitwhistle to soft
  7. 00:19:513 (2,3) - make a jump plz. I think fit sound, for example...00:19:513 (2) - 152/42 00:19:676 (3) - 382/208 nice
  8. 00:30:110 (5,1) - This is probably readable, but it feels like bad spacing for the sake of bad spacing. Should probably be changed. hmm ok i made some changed
  9. 00:33:208 (2) - Ctrl+C to 00:32:719 (2) - ?
  10. 00:36:795 - Vol-20%? Strange NFinish ok
  11. 00:36:469 (1,3) - swap NC ok
  12. 00:37:937 (9) - Soft Finish here ok
  13. 00:37:937 (9,1) - Ctrl+G rhythm here? also 00:37:937 - 1/1slider、00:38:100 (1) - Remove 00:38:263 - add note hmmm
  14. 00:41:197 - Missing finish added
  15. 00:43:317 (6) - NC ur adding 00:44:621 - added
  16. 00:47:230 - I think soft finish fit added
  17. 00:52:040 - add note here,fit drum sound maybe 00:52:203 ?
  18. 00:52:773 (2) - sample normal 00:52:937 - Soft Finish 00:53:426 - normal ok
  19. 00:54:567 (3,4) - Swap hitsound, I would 00:54:404 (2) - Remove whistle 00:54:241 (1,3,5) - add ok,1,3,5 now
  20. 01:08:589 - 01:09:241 (8) - add soft finish added
  21. 00:55:056 - 01:30:110 - same as 00:13:317 - 00:19:676 - no need Normal Finish, 00:55:056 - S 01:10:708 - N 01:05:491 - N 01:21:143 - S
    I can not know the difference[/color]
  22. 01:15:926 - Misshing Finish? yea
  23. 01:20:409 - add note? fit to piano noo i think is fine
  24. 01:24:730 (4) - add Clap added
  25. 01:25:545 (1) - add whistle 01:25:871 (5,7,8,9) - sample Normal 01:25:952 (6) - sample Drum? awesome
  26. 01:27:013 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1) - Very bad flow;; plz remake ok
  27. 01:31:578 - asame as 00:13:317 - 00:19:676 - , 01:37:937 (4) - soft finish here00:19:676 (3) - ok
  28. 01:39:404 - Missing Finish added
  29. 01:54:078 - ^ ^
  30. 01:55:056 - ^ ^
  31. 01:58:806 (5,3) - ^ ^
  32. 02:11:034 - sample Nprmal added
  33. 02:11:197 - soft finish added
  34. 02:11:605 - 02:11:768 - add note added
  35. 02:11:850 - soft finish fit imo ok
  36. 02:26:850 - Soft finish ok
  37. 02:27:176 (4) - change to 2circle. 02:27:502 - 1/1slider? ok
  38. 02:27:502 - finish ok
  39. 02:42:583 - add note here ok
  40. 02:47:230 (1) - remove Clap add Finish ok
  41. 02:48:371 (8) - add soft finish ok
  42. 02:52:937 (3) - same as 00:30:110 (5,1) - ok
  43. 02:55:871 (5,6) - ^ ^
  44. 03:41:197 (1) - missing whistle added
  45. 03:45:110 - ^ ^
  46. 03:56:687 (3,2) - ^ ^
  47. 03:58:969 (1) - ^ ^
  48. 03:59:703 (3,4) - remove whistle, Silent part here removed
  49. 04:00:273 - add ok
  50. 04:00:763 - ^ ^
  51. 04:01:007 (4,5) - remove removed
  52. 04:02:067 (5) - add ok
  53. 04:05:491 - add ok
  54. 04:06:795 (1) - ^ ok
  55. 04:12:502 (2) - more distance 269/336? hmm ok
  56. 04:25:708 (1,2,3) - straight? yea for pander to Stack Leninency
  57. 05:06:469 (1,2) - plz Light jump ok


good luck :)
mod time: 1.5hour



thank you nanakasan :3
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好图
posted

imoutosan wrote:

好图
谢谢 imoutosan :3
posted
很棒 教练我要充钱
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00:19:350 (1) - 跳都差不多,这个为什么要nc
00:24:078 (1,2,3,4) - 并不是正四方,用多边形圆圈做正四方啊
00:27:502 (7) - 这里有个鼓,可以改成1/4滑条接下一个滑条
00:33:697 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2) - 全部都是同一个方向的不顺手啊,为什么不一组一个方向
01:10:708 (1) - 这个重音我觉得可以用个sv高一点的滑条接上kiai
01:20:980 (8) - 这个是1/4滑条为什么01:26:197 (9) - 这个不用,明明是一个尿性的vocal
02:50:002 (1) - 没必要nc啊
02:53:100 - 漏了重要的音
03:14:132 (3) - 卧槽,这个不算出界吗
03:21:795 (4,5,1,2,3) - 强烈建议换成note做梗
04:33:860 (9) - 你全程都没怎么粘连,这个也不要粘在一起吧
04:48:860 (9) - NTM的,这种真的没有出界吗,你眼睛瞎啊
04:52:610 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13) - 建议不要原地,明明是音渐渐高上去的部分

区区一个屁股也要app,吃我巨根,GL
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__Ag wrote:

00:19:350 (1) - 跳都差不多,这个为什么要nc 删了
00:24:078 (1,2,3,4) - 并不是正四方,用多边形圆圈做正四方啊 谁告诉你是四方了啊,我只是1.2ds摆了下.修了下
00:27:502 (7) - 这里有个鼓,可以改成1/4滑条接下一个滑条 1/4你哥哥 你是多喜欢1/4滑条
00:33:697 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2) - 全部都是同一个方向的不顺手啊,为什么不一组一个方向 还好吧,如果逆向高度差会很卡手
01:10:708 (1) - 这个重音我觉得可以用个sv高一点的滑条接上kiai 同04:28:643 (1,2,3,4,5) -
01:20:980 (8) - 这个是1/4滑条为什么01:26:197 (9) - 这个不用,明明是一个尿性的vocal 1/4太难了 并不想多放特别是连打
02:50:002 (1) - 没必要nc啊猪尾巴跟我说弧线连打不NC丑到爆炸
02:53:100 - 漏了重要的音 这里跟的鼓
03:14:132 (3) - 卧槽,这个不算出界吗 你眼睛瘸了
03:21:795 (4,5,1,2,3) - 强烈建议换成note做梗 1/3做梗太难了
04:33:860 (9) - 你全程都没怎么粘连,这个也不要粘在一起吧
04:48:860 (9) - NTM的,这种真的没有出界吗,你眼睛瞎啊 你眼睛瘸了
04:52:610 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13) - 建议不要原地,明明是音渐渐高上去的部分 挺好的啊

区区一个屁股也要app,吃我巨根,GL 吃我jb


thanks
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来个音效摸骗分好了
其实是因为之前叫我摸图不知道摸什么【。】毕竟p总神排列
  1. 00:09:404 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13,14,1) - 这个drum的音效在这里感觉有点闷,个人想推荐一下这个音效http://puu.sh/mPDKY/dd10a15e2d.wav
    顺便00:10:464 (14) - 就普通的soft就好的感觉
  2. 00:16:578 (6,7) - whistle 00:16:904 (8) - finish
    00:17:230 -finish
    00:17:882 (4,5,6,7,8,9,1,2) - 这里怎么这么空
    00:19:513 (4) - whistle
  3. 00:19:757 - 00:20:817 -加个转盘?
  4. 00:42:013 ——00:49:105 这一段的hitnormal用http://puu.sh/mPG81/19e17fb78e.wav 比较带感
    ps.00:45:600 (1,3,6,7) - whistle 跟下钢琴如何?
    02:03:860 - 02:04:261 - 02:04:676 (2,3) - whistle(同上)
  5. 00:54:241 (1,2,3,4,5) - 可以全whistle衬托下vocal
  6. 01:08:915 (6) - sampleset normal finish吧,不然drum有些听不出来,会感觉比较别扭
  7. 01:31:578 - 、01:33:534 (1) - 、01:35:491 (1) - 这三个地方finish衬托一下bgm?
  8. 01:37:937 (4) - 拉成个长滑条到01:39:078 -?
  9. 03:34:676 - 感觉softwhistle舒服一些
  10. 04:26:850 - 04:27:176 - 04:27:502 (5) - 加上finish,whistle可以不取消
  11. 04:27:665 (1,2,3,4,5) - normal?
  12. 04:59:947 (1) - finish
  13. 05:04:105 (1) - 在05:05:654 -结束
    然后05:05:817 - 05:06:062 - 05:06:143 - 加上节奏
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OblivioN wrote:

来个音效摸骗分好了
其实是因为之前叫我摸图不知道摸什么【。】毕竟p总神排列
  1. 00:09:404 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13,14,1) - 这个drum的音效在这里感觉有点闷,个人想推荐一下这个音效http://puu.sh/mPDKY/dd10a15e2d.wav
    顺便00:10:464 (14) - 就普通的soft就好的感觉
  2. 00:16:578 (6,7) - whistle 00:16:904 (8) - finish
    00:17:230 -finish
    00:17:882 (4,5,6,7,8,9,1,2) - 这里怎么这么空
    00:19:513 (4) - whistle 猴,空的地方补上了
  3. 00:19:757 - 00:20:817 -加个转盘?不猴
  4. 00:42:013 ——00:49:105 这一段的hitnormal用http://puu.sh/mPG81/19e17fb78e.wav 比较带感
    ps.00:45:600 (1,3,6,7) - whistle 跟下钢琴如何?不猴,这样挺好的啊
    02:03:860 - 02:04:261 - 02:04:676 (2,3) - whistle(同上)
  5. 00:54:241 (1,2,3,4,5) - 可以全whistle衬托下vocal
  6. 01:08:915 (6) - sampleset normal finish吧,不然drum有些听不出来,会感觉比较别扭
  7. 01:31:578 - 、01:33:534 (1) - 、01:35:491 (1) - 这三个地方finish衬托一下bgm?
  8. 01:37:937 (4) - 拉成个长滑条到01:39:078 -? 不猴
  9. 03:34:676 - 感觉softwhistle舒服一些 可以
  10. 04:26:850 - 04:27:176 - 04:27:502 (5) - 加上finish,whistle可以不取消 可以
  11. 04:27:665 (1,2,3,4,5) - normal? 猴 不过音量调低了点
  12. 04:59:947 (1) - finish
  13. 05:04:105 (1) - 在05:05:654 -结束
    然后05:05:817 - 05:06:062 - 05:06:143 - 加上节奏
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單指好難
排列放的很好玩
[Knospe]
00:32:556 (1,2,2) - 疊在00:31:904 (1,2) - 一起比較好? 強逼症 http://puu.sh/n1aox/8ba383e752.jpg
01:36:632 (6,7,8,1) - 同上 試試 http://puu.sh/n1cqS/137bd3779c.jpg
01:01:089 (5,6,7) - http://puu.sh/n1aFo/c9407d3911.jpg 個人意見
01:15:763 有意圖留空的嗎?加了音比較順?
04:46:089 同上
03:21:578 (2,3,4,5,1,2,3) - 乾脆全彎掉?半彎半直不爽
03:32:801 (6) - del了更好?
04:07:773 (1,1) - 難讀 建議分開點‘
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khy200610140 wrote:

單指好難
排列放的很好玩
[Knospe]
00:32:556 (1,2,2) - 疊在00:31:904 (1,2) - 一起比較好? 強逼症 http://puu.sh/n1aox/8ba383e752.jpg
01:36:632 (6,7,8,1) - 同上 試試 http://puu.sh/n1cqS/137bd3779c.jpg
01:01:089 (5,6,7) - http://puu.sh/n1aFo/c9407d3911.jpg 個人意見
01:15:763 有意圖留空的嗎?加了音比較順? 改成了个滑条
04:46:089 同上 这个不好
03:21:578 (2,3,4,5,1,2,3) - 乾脆全彎掉?半彎半直不爽 最后两个直的 第一个改成弯的了
03:32:801 (6) - del了更好?
04:07:773 (1,1) - 難讀 建議分開點‘


谢谢 :3
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[Knospe]
  1. 个人感觉ar9.3高了,spacing不突出的情况下这个bpm不超过9.2比较舒服
  2. 00:28:969 (5) - NC?
  3. 01:18:860 (1,2,3) - 01:19:513 (1,2,3) - 我觉得这两组间距逐渐增大来跟背景里明显上升的音调更有表现力,而且相较于前面类似感觉的梗好像这里整体间距忽然小了不少, 后面的kiai里同样的地方也是
  4. 02:07:937 (7,8,1) - 感觉弄成跟前面两组三连一样的形状比较有整体感
  5. 02:21:388 (2) - 全diff里这样加note的好像就这里没有stack在下一个物件上有点突兀,总觉得这里不合适这样的梗,不如直接删了,滑条之间加点间距
  6. 03:31:578 (3) - NC?
  7. 04:09:730 (2,3,4) - 2->3比起1->2间距明显变小,可能容易被当成1/4直接打快了?
  8. 04:34:187 (1) - 这滑条特征太鲜明第一遍打就感觉到好像前面差不多位置出现了个差不多的滑条,或许考虑换个形状角度什么的。。
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Garden wrote:

[Knospe]
  1. 个人感觉ar9.3高了,spacing不突出的情况下这个bpm不超过9.2比较舒服 可以
  2. 00:28:969 (5) - NC?
  3. 01:18:860 (1,2,3) - 01:19:513 (1,2,3) - 我觉得这两组间距逐渐增大来跟背景里明显上升的音调更有表现力,而且相较于前面类似感觉的梗好像这里整体间距忽然小了不少, 后面的kiai里同样的地方也是 我试了下 不过感觉不太好改.
  4. 02:07:937 (7,8,1) - 感觉弄成跟前面两组三连一样的形状比较有整体感
  5. 02:21:388 (2) - 全diff里这样加note的好像就这里没有stack在下一个物件上有点突兀,总觉得这里不合适这样的梗,不如直接删了,滑条之间加点间距 可以
  6. 03:31:578 (3) - NC?
  7. 04:09:730 (2,3,4) - 2->3比起1->2间距明显变小,可能容易被当成1/4直接打快了?改成和前面一样了
  8. 04:34:187 (1) - 这滑条特征太鲜明第一遍打就感觉到好像前面差不多位置出现了个差不多的滑条,或许考虑换个形状角度什么的。。这个感觉还好吧..我翻了下也没看到一样感觉的...


感谢mod :3
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[General]
  1. soft-hitnormal2 长度只有28ms,这个unrankable,最少100ms


[Knospe]
  1. 00:49:187 (5,6,7,8) - 这太近了根本读不懂
  2. 01:45:110 (3,4) - 这叠起来感觉不合适,第一个note是有vocal的但是叠起来的话是强调第二个note,不知道能不能解释清楚反正就这样啦啦啦水字数
  3. 01:49:513 (6,7) - 跟前面有点太远的样子,好歹让他们01:48:697 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - 看起来像一个整体
  4. 03:58:317 (2) - 这个。。有点丑

GL~~
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