This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on 2010年12月4日 at 20:52:13

Artist: YUI
Title: LIFE
Source: BLEACH
Tags: j-pop
BPM: 115
Filesize: 4152kb
Play Time: 03:34
Difficulties Available:

1. Dream (1.49 stars, 145 notes)
2. LIFE (4.97 stars, 597 notes)
3. Love (4.24 stars, 302 notes)

Download: YUI - LIFE
Information: Scores/Beatmap Listing
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My 1st beatmap!OH YEAH!!!
I wish it can be ranked and everybody will like it!

special thanks to:
banvi,yangzd88,eveless,deepsea,wanhyrzh,wmfchris,
Blazevoir,Breeze,xierbaliti,VanMoNky,Shinxyn,Derekku
thank you very much!

WTF?又是一个开1/8作图的mapper……

note不能放黄线上……

= =也就是说，需要调整BPM么？
请问具体要怎么做呢？
=================================================================
好了改好了
现在会不会好一点了呢？

Hello

mod

First ,fix spacing. Unless you don't fix spacing , modders will not be able to do mod
But rhythm is good.
star~
fight!

banvi wrote:

Hello

mod

SPOILER

General
I seem you are a bigineer mapper.
Spacing is bad Spacing is important.
You should use distance snap.
First , you should fix spacing :3

Example : http://osu.ppy.sh/p/faq#c3
This URL click please. → 10: Map design issue → Unintuitive Spacing

Breath(Easy)
Oh? Work in progress?
If you don't use second half , delete timing point of second half please.
Dream(Normal)
00:28:837 (3,4) You shouldn't add jump like this. I think , don't add jump in easy & normal LV.
01:03:010 (4) new combo
01:04:054 (1) remove new combo
01:11:367 (5) new combo
01:30:141 (5) ^
02:34:845 (7) ^(this combo is too long for normal)
02:53:106 (9) ^
Love(Hard)
Silder Velocity is same as all diff...
I recommend 1.60 this diff.
Circle Size -1
LIFE(Insane)
00:17:106 (1,2) I don't recommend this pattern. (2) circle is hiden by (1) silder.

And , in my experience, Rhythm Rookies usually don't know kudosu rule.
If mod is helpful , click Give kudos please.
But Don't give kudos to those who give you star only.
kudosu is like a thank you mod.

First ,fix spacing. Unless you don't fix spacing , modders will not be able to do mod
But rhythm is good.
star~
fight!

Okay,I'll try my best.
THX~

恩恩!现在好多了 星~
Mod

红色是确定(70%) 蓝色是建议(40%) 黑色只是自己的意见(10%)

[Insane]
作图必须要开distance snap
不过为什么你的spacing是0.8x(每个难度都是)
按住alt键调整一下吧
00:47:367 - 00:50:237 insert break time
00:55:454 (7,8,9) - 这个蛋疼的陷阱……(?)
01:12:150 (2) - 没用distance snap?
01:46:585 (7) - New combo
01:58:324 - 02:00:420 insert break time
02:13:715 - 02:17:376 这个串……怎么一直在中心连打?
03:20:759 (1,1,1) - 中间加 break time

[Hard]
Note大小调大一格
breaktime的问题呢……只要见到很大的间隔就最好加上吧

[Easy]
Easy不能有跳和串!

=================

LZ的图节奏下的很好(尤其是EZ和NM)
修改一下snapping会更好……时间不早了 明天继续mod

yangzd88 wrote:

恩恩!现在好多了 星~
Mod

红色是确定(70%) 蓝色是建议(40%) 黑色只是自己的意见(10%)

[Insane]
作图必须要开distance snap
不过为什么你的spacing是0.8x(每个难度都是)
按住alt键调整一下吧
00:47:367 - 00:50:237 insert break time
00:55:454 (7,8,9) - 这个蛋疼的陷阱……(?)
01:12:150 (2) - 没用distance snap?
01:46:585 (7) - New combo
01:58:324 - 02:00:420 insert break time
02:13:715 - 02:17:376 这个串……怎么一直在中心连打?
03:20:759 (1,1,1) - 中间加 break time

[Hard]
Note大小调大一格
breaktime的问题呢……只要见到很大的间隔就最好加上吧

[Easy]
Easy不能有跳和串!

=================

LZ的图节奏下的很好(尤其是EZ和NM)
修改一下snapping会更好……时间不早了 明天继续mod

3Q very much 我会尽我所能的

[General]
多开AIMOD自己看看吧，虽然说INSANE HARD可以不用在意它，但是EZ和NORMAL还是要确保没有各种SPACING问题的。
BG格式不正确，请把它改为800*600正确格式。
文件夹里的OSB文件请删除然后FULLSUBMIT，并确保它在每次上传前都没有，如果你不做SB的话。
全部的KIAI线都没在线上。

[Easy]
EZ各种SPACING混乱，嗯还是统一一下比较好
自己多仔细看一下SPACING吧，要改的太多了，不要关DS。我这里只是列举了一些SPACING问题。

00:11:628(4) 跟三的尾巴叠一起比较好
00:12:411(5,1) 不支持这种排法，特别是在EZ里
00:15:793(4,5) spacing
00:20:497(4,5) ^
00:26:489(3,4,5) ^
00:29:628 (1,2,3,4) ^
00:34:845 (2,3,4,5,6)这种奇妙的倾斜感是什么。。最好还是横竖对齐或者索性斜的明显点对称点对齐点
00:46：324(1,2,3)被前面的SLIDER挡住了
00:52:584(4,5) 对齐
01:25:976(7) 拿掉折返的中间的CLAP

[Normal]
和EZ基本一样。估计只是EZ的完成版吧？如果这样的话这个难度还不如删除或者把EZ删了。
依然是各种SPACING问题

[Hard]
好吧，HARD只是NOTE变小了。建议你NORMAL和EZ重做。这个HARD本身还是不错。不过SPACING问题。。。请往上看EZ部分
00:07:845(4) 往后放红线上 或者在红线加个NOTE
00:43:976(4) spacing
00:53:106(1,2,3) spacing 并且这部分跟后面的挤一起看着很难受
00:59:106(5)建议换SLIDER直到后面那根红线 然后SPIN再在之后的白线即00:59:889开始，结束时间不变。如果不改的话SPIN至少放在线上
01:08:498(5)这之后的SLIDER和NOTE都没叠好
后半部分基本和前面一样的问题

[Insane]
这还真是各种相似。

00:58:846(6,7) 位置反了


加油吧
STAR

eveless wrote:

[General]
多开AIMOD自己看看吧，虽然说INSANE HARD可以不用在意它，但是EZ和NORMAL还是要确保没有各种SPACING问题的。
BG格式不正确，请把它改为800*600正确格式。
文件夹里的OSB文件请删除然后FULLSUBMIT，并确保它在每次上传前都没有，如果你不做SB的话。
全部的KIAI线都没在线上。

[Easy]
EZ各种SPACING混乱，嗯还是统一一下比较好
自己多仔细看一下SPACING吧，要改的太多了，不要关DS。我这里只是列举了一些SPACING问题。

00:11:628(4) 跟三的尾巴叠一起比较好
00:12:411(5,1) 不支持这种排法，特别是在EZ里
00:15:793(4,5) spacing
00:20:497(4,5) ^
00:26:489(3,4,5) ^
00:29:628 (1,2,3,4) ^
00:34:845 (2,3,4,5,6)这种奇妙的倾斜感是什么。。最好还是横竖对齐或者索性斜的明显点对称点对齐点
00:46：324(1,2,3)被前面的SLIDER挡住了
00:52:584(4,5) 对齐
01:25:976(7) 拿掉折返的中间的CLAP

[Normal]
和EZ基本一样。估计只是EZ的完成版吧？如果这样的话这个难度还不如删除或者把EZ删了。
依然是各种SPACING问题

[Hard]
好吧，HARD只是NOTE变小了。建议你NORMAL和EZ重做。这个HARD本身还是不错。不过SPACING问题。。。请往上看EZ部分
00:07:845(4) 往后放红线上 或者在红线加个NOTE
00:43:976(4) spacing
00:53:106(1,2,3) spacing 并且这部分跟后面的挤一起看着很难受
00:59:106(5)建议换SLIDER直到后面那根红线 然后SPIN再在之后的白线即00:59:889开始，结束时间不变。如果不改的话SPIN至少放在线上
01:08:498(5)这之后的SLIDER和NOTE都没叠好
后半部分基本和前面一样的问题

[Insane]
这还真是各种相似。

00:58:846(6,7) 位置反了


加油吧
STAR

这样一来要改到头大了。。。
不过我还是会尽力的
THX

恩……改好了吗
为什么更新了之后后两个难度读不出来BG啊……

yangzd88 wrote:

恩……改好了吗
为什么更新了之后后两个难度读不出来BG啊……

= =因为我更新了BG
感觉要给有能力玩HARD和INSANE的玩家更大的杀必死啊
如有不便,敬请谅解...

General
kiai time 太长了。
没设置preview point

Breath
00:29:106 (3) - 不能在下一个slider上面。想办法改一下～
00:36:932 (6) - 不能在下一个slider上面。再往上弯一点～
00:45:280 (9) - 跟8没重叠好哦，按alt键，distance snap用 0.0x
01:07:193 (1,2,3,4) - 这里也是～跟上面一样解决～ 4的尾巴不要被3覆盖好看点
01:13:454 (1) - ^
01:20:758 (7,8,9) - ^
01:30:150 (5,6,7,8) - ^
没用到的timing删掉吧～

Dream
00:12:932 (1) - unrank要素，不能被覆盖～
00:17:106 (1) - 用0.0x对好～
00:29:628 (1) - 这里也想办法不跟4重叠吧
00:42:150 (6,7,8,9) - 用0.0x对好～
01:07:193 (1,2,3,4) - ^
01:17:628 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - 稍微没对上，用0.0x对好～
02:11:889 (1,2,3,4) - 用0.0x对好～
02:23:367 (2) - 这slider也差不多一半被盖住了
02:33:802 (6) - 用0.0x对好～
02:40:063 (2,3) - 太近了
02:56:758 (4,5) - 用0.0x对好～
03:05:106 (2) - ^
03:28:324 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1) - 稍微没对上，用0.0x对好～

Love
00:10:845 (6) - unrank要素，不能被覆盖～
这些问题，我不一一提了。
Overall Difficulty +2格
HP Drain rate +2格

Eternal LIFE
最好不要用比normal小的圈圈了。这会非常难玩
别用小的圈圈，用更高的 Slider Velocity就能做 Insane。insane的话，推荐1.8~2.0


rank第一个图很难，加油吧！我的第一个图还没rank呢…… 后来做的图rank的更快……

Sunny Holic wrote:

General
kiai time 太长了。
没设置preview point

Breath
00:29:106 (3) - 不能在下一个slider上面。想办法改一下～
00:36:932 (6) - 不能在下一个slider上面。再往上弯一点～
00:45:280 (9) - 跟8没重叠好哦，按alt键，distance snap用 0.0x
01:07:193 (1,2,3,4) - 这里也是～跟上面一样解决～ 4的尾巴不要被3覆盖好看点
01:13:454 (1) - ^
01:20:758 (7,8,9) - ^
01:30:150 (5,6,7,8) - ^
没用到的timing删掉吧～

Dream
00:12:932 (1) - unrank要素，不能被覆盖～
00:17:106 (1) - 用0.0x对好～
00:29:628 (1) - 这里也想办法不跟4重叠吧
00:42:150 (6,7,8,9) - 用0.0x对好～
01:07:193 (1,2,3,4) - ^
01:17:628 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - 稍微没对上，用0.0x对好～
02:11:889 (1,2,3,4) - 用0.0x对好～
02:23:367 (2) - 这slider也差不多一半被盖住了
02:33:802 (6) - 用0.0x对好～
02:40:063 (2,3) - 太近了
02:56:758 (4,5) - 用0.0x对好～
03:05:106 (2) - ^
03:28:324 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1) - 稍微没对上，用0.0x对好～

Love
00:10:845 (6) - unrank要素，不能被覆盖～
这些问题，我不一一提了。
Overall Difficulty +2格
HP Drain rate +2格

Eternal LIFE
最好不要用比normal小的圈圈了。这会非常难玩
别用小的圈圈，用更高的 Slider Velocity就能做 Insane。insane的话，推荐1.8~2.0


rank第一个图很难，加油吧！我的第一个图还没rank呢…… 后来做的图rank的更快……

3Q~
让我很欣慰的是这一次SPACING的问题明显少了
我会加油的

Hi~
Maybe important, In blue suggestions
[General]
-YUI - LIFE (JauiPlaY).osb delete it and full submit
-Set preview point in all diff at the same time (Timing -> Set Current Position...)

[Easy]
-If u are not going to map after 01:36:411 delete timing points

[Hard]
-02:18:932 new combo, try to use new combo in changes of spacing like this because is confusing when u are playing

Uhmm in general I think "this is hard of play" (Hard and Insane), so many changes in spacing and stack of circles try to make it more clear.
Well I like the song so a star for that ~

Astom wrote:

Hi~
Maybe important, In blue suggestions
[General]
-YUI - LIFE (JauiPlaY).osb delete it and full submit
-Set preview point in all diff at the same time (Timing -> Set Current Position...)

[Easy]
-If u are not going to map after 01:36:411 delete timing points

[Hard]
-02:18:932 new combo, try to use new combo in changes of spacing like this because is confusing when u are playing

Uhmm in general I think "this is hard of play" (Hard and Insane), so many changes in spacing and stack of circles try to make it more clear.
Well I like the song so a star for that ~

OH thanks!

Insane

00:55:97 (10)-(12) Sudden space change noooo

Hard

00:55:97 (10)-(12) Same as Insane

02:06:93(1) - (8) Another unreadable space change D:

02:17:88(1) - (11) ^

Normal

00:38:49 (1) - (6) Spacing change hmm not good in normal

deepsea wrote:

Insane

00:55:97 (10)-(12) Sudden space change noooo

Hard

00:55:97 (10)-(12) Same as Insane

02:06:93(1) - (8) Another unreadable space change D:

02:17:88(1) - (11) ^

Normal

00:38:49 (1) - (6) Spacing change hmm not good in normal

THX A LOT!
edited

Hi,

[easy]
unsnapped notes exist timing>resnap all notes
00:55:715 (2,3,4) - something about this seems wierd to me, but I have no idea, looks fine

[normal]
unsnapped notes exist timing>resnap all notes
maybe +1 to hp drain? your choice
01:46:584 (6) - new combo?

[hard]
unsnapped notes exist timing>resnap all notes

[insane]
unsnapped notes exist timing>resnap all notes
+1 to hp drain?

good job

roflninja wrote:

Hi,

[easy]
unsnapped notes exist timing>resnap all notes
00:55:715 (2,3,4) - something about this seems wierd to me, but I have no idea, looks fine

[normal]
unsnapped notes exist timing>resnap all notes
maybe +1 to hp drain? your choice
01:46:584 (6) - new combo?

[hard]
unsnapped notes exist timing>resnap all notes

[insane]
unsnapped notes exist timing>resnap all notes
+1 to hp drain?

good job

waoh the first "good job"! thanks!

Hi!
我的建议:

[General]

• Hitcircle边缘很模糊 Combo数字也不容易看清
  还有每个难度里都有许多Unsnapped Note

[Easy]

• 00:33:802(1):开头处+Finish
  00:50:497-01:03:019:这一段没有Hitsound?
  01:02:497(5):去掉Finish
  01:03:019(1):Finish
  01:19:715(5):new combo

[Normal]

• 00:17:106(1):Finish
  00:29:628(1):结尾处+Clap
  00:50:497(1):Finish
  00:50:497-01:03:019:同Easy
  00:58:845(2):Finish
  00:59:367(3,4,5,1):有点乱 建议把5后面的移开
  01:19:715(1):开头处+Finish
  02:00:411(1,2,3):距离
  02:16:063:+1 circle
  02:23:367:结尾处+Clap
  02:29:889(11):去掉Clap
  02:34:845(7):New combo
  02:54:411(14,1):距离太近了
  02:58:332(7,8):距离太远了
  03:08:237(8):New combo
  03:29:106(4):Finish并New combo
  03:29:367(1):去掉New combo

[Hard]

• 00:34:324(3,4,5,6):距离
  00:47:367-00:50:237:加Break Time
  00:55:976(10,11,12):距离太近
  01:29:889(6,7):距离太远
  02:26:498(3):开头处+Finish
  03:04:063(2):^
  03:28:324:+1 circle
  03:29:106(4):开头处+Finish

[Insane]

• 00:17:106(1):开头处+Finish
  00:33:280(4,5,6,7,1):重叠比较好
  00:41:637(12):Clap
  00:58:846(2):Finish
  00:59:628:转盘在这里开始
  01:03:019(1):Finish
  01:19:715(1):^
  02:30:641(1):^
  01:53:898(1,2,3,...,16,17):Combo数最好不要超过15
  02:44:497:转盘在这里开始
  03:09:811(7):Clap
  03:28:324:+1 circle

Good map!

~STAR~

impossiblexu wrote:

Hi!
我的建议:

[General]

• Hitcircle边缘很模糊 Combo数字也不容易看清
  还有每个难度里都有许多Unsnapped Note

[Easy]

• 00:33:802(1):开头处+Finish
  00:50:497-01:03:019:这一段没有Hitsound?
  01:02:497(5):去掉Finish
  01:03:019(1):Finish
  01:19:715(5):new combo

[Normal]

• 00:17:106(1):Finish
  00:29:628(1):结尾处+Clap
  00:50:497(1):Finish
  00:50:497-01:03:019:同Easy
  00:58:845(2):Finish
  00:59:367(3,4,5,1):有点乱 建议把5后面的移开
  01:19:715(1):开头处+Finish
  02:00:411(1,2,3):距离
  02:16:063:+1 circle
  02:23:367:结尾处+Clap
  02:29:889(11):去掉Clap
  02:34:845(7):New combo
  02:54:411(14,1):距离太近了
  02:58:332(7,8):距离太远了
  03:08:237(8):New combo
  03:29:106(4):Finish并New combo
  03:29:367(1):去掉New combo

[Hard]

• 00:34:324(3,4,5,6):距离
  00:47:367-00:50:237:加Break Time
  00:55:976(10,11,12):距离太近
  01:29:889(6,7):距离太远
  02:26:498(3):开头处+Finish
  03:04:063(2):^
  03:28:324:+1 circle
  03:29:106(4):开头处+Finish

[Insane]

• 00:17:106(1):开头处+Finish
  00:33:280(4,5,6,7,1):重叠比较好
  00:41:637(12):Clap
  00:58:846(2):Finish
  00:59:628:转盘在这里开始
  01:03:019(1):Finish
  01:19:715(1):^
  02:30:641(1):^
  01:53:898(1,2,3,...,16,17):Combo数最好不要超过15
  02:44:497:转盘在这里开始
  03:09:811(7):Clap
  03:28:324:+1 circle

Good map!

~STAR~

嘿嘿,谢谢~
我会尽量改好的

你好~下面是我的一些建议

General:

Easy:

Normal:

Hard

Insane

感觉这首歌不是很好做.....作为第一张图已经做得不错了~
特别是音效和节奏都下得很漂亮，不过在NOTE的排列上重复感太强了
可以考虑多种模式排列并且注意难度的区分。
加油~STAR!

Blue = suggestions/minor issues
Green = you might wanna fix this
Red = you MUST fix this

[General]
I really hate the custom hitcircle since it makes it harder to determine what note to hit next.

[Breath(Easy)]
00:54:671 (1) - Move this up once on the grid?
00:56:497 (5) - Incorrect spacing; move this closer to 4 (use distance snap).

[Dream(Normal)]
01:00:411 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - This whole entire section is too close to the last combo as well as the next combo.
01:50:236 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Incorrect spacing; line 3-7 up with 2 OR move 2 so that it lines up with 3-7 and then move 1 further away. Either way, fix 01:53:889 (1,2) afterwards as well.
02:52:584 (8,9,10) - This is too much of a jump, especially for this difficulty. Maybe make 8 a new combo?

[Love(Hard)]
00:07:976 (4) - I know this is a Hard difficulty, but I didn't even see this note the first time I played.
00:46:063 (6) - Add a break after this slider.
01:27:280 (1,2) - This part is confusing... Change it
01:58:324 (10) - Add a break after this note?
02:05:106 (7,8,9,1,1) - I don't like the fact that all of this is stacked at just one spot...
03:27:019 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,1) - Same as before...

Sorry, but I won't be modding any further.

[General]:

1. 关于难度名 觉得要么只用Easy Normal Hard Insane, 要不就把这些连同括号删掉, 现在看起来有点囧
2. 关于皮肤...hitcircle.png有点太花了 这么一来基本看不出数字
3. BG一样的难度把combo color也设置成一样的

[Easy]:

1. 00:54:671 (1,2,3,4,5) - spacing Easy难度建议按照一个固定的Distance Spacing来放

[Normal]:

1. 00:36:150 (6) - new combo
2. 00:43:193 (7) - ^
3. 00:59:889 (5,1) - 有点近了
4. 01:46:585 (6) - new combo
5. 02:53:628 (11) - ^
6. Overall Difficulty +2

[Hard]:

1. Overall DIfficulty +4
2. 01:27:280 (1,2,3) - 这一坨基本看不出怎么回事 -.-
3. 01:44:759 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - 3~4是跳 但后面7那里容易也以为是跳 - -
4. Slider Velocity有点低了 但是已经做完了再改就有点麻烦 下次注意点...

[Insane]:

1. 这个难度是用Hard改出来的么...那么就不看了 >_>

做的还不错 但是注意是要速度还是质量 :3 皮肤如果没有大问题就去掉吧...太不容易读了

wanhyrzh wrote:

你好~下面是我的一些建议

General:

SPOILER

1.整体节奏下得不错，HITSOUND也可圈可点，只是不同难度之间有种微妙的重复感...
2.SPACING的问题很多....一般的规则是，HARD以下的难度在一整首曲子中最好保持一种SPACING。不要有跳出现在EASY和NORMAL.（其实在有些比较直观的情况下，E和N也不一定每个地方都要保持一贯的SPACING。不过在还不熟悉作图规则之前建议最好还是严守SPACING的规则）
3.难度名称：保留括号内或外的其中之一。
4.有些问题是在老的RANK图中会经常出现的，譬如SPACING，譬如，某些障眼法。但是这些现在已经不允许了。
5.SV(SLIDER VELOCITY) 怎么除了INSANE每个难度都一样？在相同BPM情况下，SV越高，SLIDER滑动速度越快。如果每个难度都相等的话，就没那么容易区分出难度之间的难易程度差异了。不过改这个是个大工程啊...如果要改，我建议EASY用1.0或者1.2，NORMAL1.4没问题，HARD至少也要1.6吧
6.ST(SLIDER TICK)调成1。
7.每个难度的CIRCLE颜色要统一。
8.总体而言感觉难度的分布不均匀。每个难度之间都有很像甚至一模一样的地方。就我看来，一个能在EASY中出现的模式，就不应该出现在NORMAL里一模一样的地方。HARD、INSANE同理。除非你把HARD里面最难的模式摆在INSANE休闲的地方倒还说得过去..

Easy:

SPOILER

00:43:193(7,8,9) 这里7和6的末尾、8和7的末尾、9和8的末尾没有叠好。把DS开到0.0X然后关掉GS(GRID SNAP)，移动2就能自动对齐了。这样的问题很多，我以后就简称重叠问题了。
00:55:193(1,2,3,4,5) 作为EASY，SPACING突然做出大变动是不好的，请把它们的SPACING按照一贯的DS(DISTANCE SNAP)重新排列。另外，出于对新手的照顾，建议2、3、4、5叠在一起吧...
01:08:237(2,3,4) 重叠问题
01:14:497(2) 重叠问题
01:21:802(4,5) 重叠问题
01:24:411(2) 这个NOTE出现的时候被之前的SLIDER5挡了一下，似乎有点不是很好看，试着把它移开（不变动DS）。以后简称遮挡问题。
01:31:193(6,7,8) 重叠问题

Normal:

SPOILER

HP DRAIN RATE +1 OR 2
00:36:411(7,8,9,10,11,12) SPACING
00:43:193(7,8,9) 重叠问题
00:51:019(2) 遮挡问题
01:08:237(2,3,4) 重叠问题
01:14:497(2) 重叠问题
01:18:150(2,3,4) 重叠问题
01:20:758(2,3,4) 重叠问题
01:25:976(7) 把这个SLIDER形状弄成左右对称的弧形？以后简称对称问题。
01:30:150(5) 对称问题？
01:32:237(8) 对称问题？
01:33:280(9) 遮挡问题？
01:36:411(T) 把这里的结束KIAI的绿线移到01:34:324
01:50:758(2,3) SPACING
01:55:976(7) 对称问题？另外，这个折返太多了，考虑一下把它分割成两个折返SLIDER？
02:05:628(6) 对称问题？
02:12:932(2) 重叠问题
02:13:976(3) 建议把这个SLIDER分割一下。折返数太不够直观了。
02:24:411(3) 重叠问题
02:33:802(6) 重叠问题
02:42:671(9) 考虑把这长SLIDER做成圆形或者大半圆？
02:47:367(1) 同上
02:50:497(4) 出格了，移上一点。
02:51:541(5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13,14) SPACING？不过这里的问题稍微没那么严重，不改也没什么。
02:55:454(2) 出格了，移下一点。
02:56:758(4,5) 重叠问题
03:05:106(2) 重叠问题
03:06:671(5) 遮挡问题
03:14:497(4) 对称问题？
03:29:889(3,4,5,6,1) 重叠问题
03:31:454(1) 对称问题
03:33:019(3) 对称问题

Hard

SPOILER

总体来说这个难度太简单了，除了多了1/4连击，其他感觉和NORMAL没差别
Circle size +1
OD,HP +2
00:27:280(3) 分割一下
00:31:210(1) 遮挡问题
01:03:280(2,3,4,5,6) 重叠问题
01:09:802(7,8,9) 重叠问题
01:22:324(7) 重叠问题
01:27:671(2) 如果没有熟人的话这种障眼法在现在是UNRANKABLE
01:28:845(4,5) 重叠问题
01:36:411(T) 把这里的结束KIAI的绿线移到01:34:324
01:45:541(4) 老实说我觉得这里不适合做跳...
01:46:584(7) NC(NEW COMBO)....老实说我不喜欢7~16这样重复叠....不过不是大问题？
02:07:454(3) 同01:45:541...不过这里问题没那么大？
02:36:671(5) 重叠问题
02:41:367(6) 重叠问题
03:20:758~03:27:019 这整个部分……作为HARD最好考虑一下改变一下模式
03:29:889(2,3,4,5) 这一串好乱....重新排列一下？或者直接一个个叠好？

Insane

SPOILER

这一个难度有些地方和HARD一模一样？如01:44:758、02:07:193等等……建议考虑一下比较好？
HP +2~3
00:27:280(3) 分割一下？
01:03:280(2,3,4,5,6) 重叠问题
01:09:802(7,8,9) 重叠问题
01:27:671(2) 对称问题
01:36:411(T) 把这里的结束KIAI的绿线移到01:34:324
02:49:193(11) NC
03:14:758(7) NC
03:03:541(14) NC
03:03:802(1) 去掉NC
03:20:758~03:27:019 这整个部分……作为INSANE最好考虑一下改变一下模式

感觉这首歌不是很好做.....作为第一张图已经做得不错了~
特别是音效和节奏都下得很漂亮，不过在NOTE的排列上重复感太强了
可以考虑多种模式排列并且注意难度的区分。
加油~STAR!

谢谢~~~

Blazevoir wrote:

Blue = suggestions/minor issues
Green = you might wanna fix this
Red = you MUST fix this

[General]
I really hate the custom hitcircle since it makes it harder to determine what note to hit next.

[Breath(Easy)]
00:54:671 (1) - Move this up once on the grid?
00:56:497 (5) - Incorrect spacing; move this closer to 4 (use distance snap).

[Dream(Normal)]
01:00:411 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - This whole entire section is too close to the last combo as well as the next combo.
01:50:236 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Incorrect spacing; line 3-7 up with 2 OR move 2 so that it lines up with 3-7 and then move 1 further away. Either way, fix 01:53:889 (1,2) afterwards as well.
02:52:584 (8,9,10) - This is too much of a jump, especially for this difficulty. Maybe make 8 a new combo?

[Love(Hard)]
00:07:976 (4) - I know this is a Hard difficulty, but I didn't even see this note the first time I played.
00:46:063 (6) - Add a break after this slider.
01:27:280 (1,2) - This part is confusing... Change it
01:58:324 (10) - Add a break after this note?
02:05:106 (7,8,9,1,1) - I don't like the fact that all of this is stacked at just one spot...
03:27:019 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,1) - Same as before...

Sorry, but I won't be modding any further.

Thank for your suggestion! You made me realized that this map is not good enough...
But no matter, I will try my best to make it perfect

Colin Hou wrote:

[General]:

1. 关于难度名 觉得要么只用Easy Normal Hard Insane, 要不就把这些连同括号删掉, 现在看起来有点囧
2. 关于皮肤...hitcircle.png有点太花了 这么一来基本看不出数字
3. BG一样的难度把combo color也设置成一样的

[Easy]:

1. 00:54:671 (1,2,3,4,5) - spacing Easy难度建议按照一个固定的Distance Spacing来放

[Normal]:

1. 00:36:150 (6) - new combo
2. 00:43:193 (7) - ^
3. 00:59:889 (5,1) - 有点近了
4. 01:46:585 (6) - new combo
5. 02:53:628 (11) - ^
6. Overall Difficulty +2

[Hard]:

1. Overall DIfficulty +4
2. 01:27:280 (1,2,3) - 这一坨基本看不出怎么回事 -.-
3. 01:44:759 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - 3~4是跳 但后面7那里容易也以为是跳 - -
4. Slider Velocity有点低了 但是已经做完了再改就有点麻烦 下次注意点...

[Insane]:

1. 这个难度是用Hard改出来的么...那么就不看了 >_>

做的还不错 但是注意是要速度还是质量 :3 皮肤如果没有大问题就去掉吧...太不容易读了

必然质量= =
hitcircle已经成为一个非常严重的问题了...虽然我很不想换掉现在这个circle...
嘛,总之非常感谢你的建议

JauiPlaY wrote:

Thank for your suggestion! You made me realized that this map is not good enough...
But no matter, I will try my best to make it perfect

No problem By the way, when I said I wasn't going to mod any further, I meant that I wouldn't be modding the last difficulty. It's because of one of the rules on me and my friend's mod queue. Modding long songs gets tiring after a while

Anyway, good luck

[general]
~Can't see the numbers in the hitting circles clearly ;_;
~no need to say [eternal life(insane)] but just say [eternal life] is enough? Denote the difficulty in your thread, then others will know.

[Eternal life]insane so raise 2 drain rate?
0:19:324 (4) down 1 grid
0:43:454 (4) donw 1 grid
0:47:628 (x) raised drain rate so break?
1:58:584 (x) ^

[hard] no spacing problem, maybe raise OA and drain rate?

star~

压力大到.

Just a little remainder, no need kd.

~Denote the difficulty in this beatmap thread like:
Breath : Easy
Dream : Normal
Love : Hard
Eternal LIFE : Insane
~Delete "life" from tags since it's just the song name.

wmfchris wrote:

Just a little remainder, no need kd.

~Denote the difficulty in this beatmap thread like:
Breath : Easy
Dream : Normal
Love : Hard
Eternal LIFE : Insane
~Delete "life" from tags since it's just the song name.

Okay, thanks!

hi~

[easy]

00:42:150 (6) - new combo?
01:30:150 (5) - ^

[normal]

00:36:150 (6) - new combo
00:40:584 (3,4,5) - 1 grid left
01:25:976 (7) - may be more simmetrical?

[hard]

00:31:193 (1) - 1 grid down
01:31:715 (7,8) - may be 3 grid right

[insane]

03:06:941 (11) - 2 grids right?
03:21:046 03:23:106 03:25:193 (x) - may be it's need break time?

very nice map, like it
star~

Vass_Bass wrote:

hi~

[easy]

00:42:150 (6) - new combo?
01:30:150 (5) - ^

[normal]

00:36:150 (6) - new combo
00:40:584 (3,4,5) - 1 grid left
01:25:976 (7) - may be more simmetrical?

[hard]

00:31:193 (1) - 1 grid down
01:31:715 (7,8) - may be 3 grid right

[insane]

03:06:941 (11) - 2 grids right?
03:21:046 03:23:106 03:25:193 (x) - may be it's need break time?

very nice map, like it
star~

THX~

Okay, time for a recheck:

[Normal]
01:25:976 (7) - Make this symmetrical?
01:55:975 (7) - ^

[Hard]
02:44:563 (1) - Umm... Why does this start on a yellow tick? Shouldn't it start on a red?
03:20:758 (1,1,1) - Mind explaining these three spinners?

[Insane]
03:20:758 (1,1,1) - Same as Hard; mind explaining these?

This is definitely much better than the last time I modded this. ★ for you~

*Star*

kokoroanime wrote:

*Star*

THX!

Blazevoir wrote:

Okay, time for a recheck:

[Normal]
01:25:976 (7) - Make this symmetrical?
01:55:975 (7) - ^

[Hard]
02:44:563 (1) - Umm... Why does this start on a yellow tick? Shouldn't it start on a red?
03:20:758 (1,1,1) - Mind explaining these three spinners?

[Insane]
03:20:758 (1,1,1) - Same as Hard; mind explaining these?

This is definitely much better than the last time I modded this. ★ for you~

well many Chinese friends said i should add break time between 03:20:758 (1,1,1)
but i think it will be weird ...so i tried this new mode

I see. Well those spinners are fine for now I guess

NI HAO

[General]
1) Is the "LIFE" is an album? If yes, please delete it, because album name is not belong in Source
2) Delete "YUI" in tags, since that word in Artist

[Breath : Easy]
*) Please rename to "Breath"
*) Some AIMod detect 5 unsnapped notes "Object isn't snapped!" To snap it, click Timing -> Resnap all notes -> Yes

00:10:845 (3) - New combo?
00:15:019 (3) - ^
00:35:889 (4) - New combo, because it's too long for easy diff
00:42:150 (6) - ^
01:08:237 (2) - Not stacked with 1 at end
01:09:280 (3) - Not stacked with 2 at end
01:10:324 (4) - Not stacked with 3 at end
01:11:367 (5) - New combo, because it's too long for easy diff
01:15:541 (3) - New combo?
01:19:715 (1) - Finish?
01:20:758 (3) - Move 1 grid up?
01:21:802 (4) - Not stacked with 3 at end
01:22:845 (5) - Not stacked with 4 at end
01:30:150 (5) - New combo, because it's too long for easy diff
01:31:193 (6) - Not stacked with 5 at end
01:32:237 (7) - Not stacked with 6 at end
01:33:280 (8) - Not stacked with 7 at end

[Dream : Normal]
*) Please rename to "Dream"
*) Some AIMod detect 22 unsnapped notes "Object isn't snapped!" To snap it, click Timing -> Resnap all notes -> Yes

00:42:150 (6) - New combo?
00:43:193 (7) - Not stacked with 6 at end
00:44:237 (8) - Not stacked with 7 at end
00:45:280 (9) - Not stacked with 8 at end
01:08:237 (2) - Not stacked with 1 at end
01:09:280 (3) - Not stacked with 2 at end
01:10:324 (4) - Not stacked with 3 at end
01:14:497 (2) - Not stacked with 1 at end
01:20:758 (2) - ^
01:21:802 (3) - Not stacked with 2 at end
01:22:845 (4) - Not stacked with 3 at end
01:55:975 (7) - Make symetric?
02:12:933 (2,3,4) - Not stacked with 1 at end
02:47:367 (1) - A little too far from spinner
02:51:540 (5) - New combo?

[Love : Hard]
*) Please rename to "Love"
*) Stack Leniency lv.0 is unrankable
*) Some AIMod detect 30 unsnapped notes "Object isn't snapped!" To snap it, click Timing -> Resnap all notes -> Yes

[Eternal LIFE : Insane]
*) Please rename to "Eternall LIFE"
*) Stack Leniency lv.0 is unrankable
*) Some AIMod detect 74 unsnapped notes "Object isn't snapped!" To snap it, click Timing -> Resnap all notes -> Yes

Good song
STAR

[Mod Infos]

Azure: Suggestions.
Blue: You should fix this.
______________________________________________
______________________________________________
______________________________________________

[General]

• • Open all .osu files and change...
  
  SPOILER

  [Colours]
  Combo1 : 159,255,255
  Combo2 : 121,255,121
  Combo3 : 255,255,106
  SPOILER

  StackLeniency: 0.6
  
  • Remove "LIFE" from Source.
  • Remove "YUI" from Tags

[Breath : Easy] (rename this diff "Easy" or "Breath")

• • Overall Difficulty: 3
  • HP Drain Rate: 3
  • 01:11:367 (5) - New combo
  • 01:13:454 (1) - Remove New combo
  • 01:15:541 (3) - New combo
  • 01:17:628 (1) - Remove New combo

[Dream : Normal] (rename this diff "Normal" or "Dream")

• • HP Drain Rate: 4
  • 01:25:976 (7,1) - Spacing (keep "Distance Snap" active and fix it)

[Love : Hard] (rename this diff "Hard" or "Love")

• • HP Drain Rate: 6
  • 00:48:000 (break) - Is this break necessary? Delete it and add some circles/sliders
  • 01:11:367 (x) - Add a circle
  • 01:33:280 (x) - ^
  • 01:33:802 (x) - ^
  • 01:34:324 (x) - Start a spinner here and end it here 01:36:411

[Eternal LIFE : Insane] (rename this diff "Insane" or "Eternal LIFE")

• • HP Drain Rate: 7

Leorda wrote:

NI HAO

[General]
1) Is the "LIFE" is an album? If yes, please delete it, because album name is not belong in Source
2) Delete "YUI" in tags, since that word in Artist

[Breath : Easy]
*) Please rename to "Breath"
*) Some AIMod detect 5 unsnapped notes "Object isn't snapped!" To snap it, click Timing -> Resnap all notes -> Yes

00:10:845 (3) - New combo?
00:15:019 (3) - ^
00:35:889 (4) - New combo, because it's too long for easy diff
00:42:150 (6) - ^
01:08:237 (2) - Not stacked with 1 at end
01:09:280 (3) - Not stacked with 2 at end
01:10:324 (4) - Not stacked with 3 at end
01:11:367 (5) - New combo, because it's too long for easy diff
01:15:541 (3) - New combo?
01:19:715 (1) - Finish?
01:20:758 (3) - Move 1 grid up?
01:21:802 (4) - Not stacked with 3 at end
01:22:845 (5) - Not stacked with 4 at end
01:30:150 (5) - New combo, because it's too long for easy diff
01:31:193 (6) - Not stacked with 5 at end
01:32:237 (7) - Not stacked with 6 at end
01:33:280 (8) - Not stacked with 7 at end

[Dream : Normal]
*) Please rename to "Dream"
*) Some AIMod detect 22 unsnapped notes "Object isn't snapped!" To snap it, click Timing -> Resnap all notes -> Yes

00:42:150 (6) - New combo?
00:43:193 (7) - Not stacked with 6 at end
00:44:237 (8) - Not stacked with 7 at end
00:45:280 (9) - Not stacked with 8 at end
01:08:237 (2) - Not stacked with 1 at end
01:09:280 (3) - Not stacked with 2 at end
01:10:324 (4) - Not stacked with 3 at end
01:14:497 (2) - Not stacked with 1 at end
01:20:758 (2) - ^
01:21:802 (3) - Not stacked with 2 at end
01:22:845 (4) - Not stacked with 3 at end
01:55:975 (7) - Make symetric?
02:12:933 (2,3,4) - Not stacked with 1 at end
02:47:367 (1) - A little too far from spinner
02:51:540 (5) - New combo?

[Love : Hard]
*) Please rename to "Love"
*) Stack Leniency lv.0 is unrankable
*) Some AIMod detect 30 unsnapped notes "Object isn't snapped!" To snap it, click Timing -> Resnap all notes -> Yes

[Eternal LIFE : Insane]
*) Please rename to "Eternall LIFE"
*) Stack Leniency lv.0 is unrankable
*) Some AIMod detect 74 unsnapped notes "Object isn't snapped!" To snap it, click Timing -> Resnap all notes -> Yes

Good song
STAR

xie xie
thanks!

xxheroxx wrote:

[Mod Infos]

Azure: Suggestions.
Blue: You should fix this.
______________________________________________
______________________________________________
______________________________________________

[General]

• • Open all .osu files and change...
  
  SPOILER

  [Colours]
  Combo1 : 159,255,255
  Combo2 : 121,255,121
  Combo3 : 255,255,106
  SPOILER

  StackLeniency: 0.6
  
  • Remove "LIFE" from Source.
  • Remove "YUI" from Tags

[Breath : Easy] (rename this diff "Easy" or "Breath")

• • Overall Difficulty: 3
  • HP Drain Rate: 3
  • 01:11:367 (5) - New combo
  • 01:13:454 (1) - Remove New combo
  • 01:15:541 (3) - New combo
  • 01:17:628 (1) - Remove New combo

[Dream : Normal] (rename this diff "Normal" or "Dream")

• • HP Drain Rate: 4
  • 01:25:976 (7,1) - Spacing (keep "Distance Snap" active and fix it)

[Love : Hard] (rename this diff "Hard" or "Love")

• • HP Drain Rate: 6
  • 00:48:000 (break) - Is this break necessary? Delete it and add some circles/sliders
  • 01:11:367 (x) - Add a circle
  • 01:33:280 (x) - ^
  • 01:33:802 (x) - ^
  • 01:34:324 (x) - Start a spinner here and end it here 01:36:411

[Eternal LIFE : Insane] (rename this diff "Insane" or "Eternal LIFE")

• • HP Drain Rate: 7

thank you for your suggestion!

嗯....星星...

Sorry for the delay...

As per your request:

[General]
Oo, I haven't heard this song in a while. Good choice!

[Easy]
You didn't finish it. :/
00:42:150 (6,7,8,9) - These stacks may confuse new players a bit. I'd space them out. Applies to all iterations of this.
01:08:237 (2,3) - Although if you want to keep the stacked sliders, make sure these ones are stacked correctly.

[Dream]
You borrow a lot of patterns from your easy difficulty... I don't like that too much. Makes the map feel very samey and boring.
00:33:802 (1) - It's strange that you suddenly follow the vocals for a few measure, then go back to your hit-clap set. It kind of breaks up the flow that you have going.
01:32:237 (8) - New combo
01:55:976 (7) - Kind of boring.
02:33:802 (6,1,2,3) - So much stacked here. Try moving around a bit more. :/
02:52:063 (7,8) - This is kind of an extreme jump for a normal.
02:55:193 (1) - Move this to 02:54:932
02:58:324 (7,8) - Big jump again.
03:29:367 (2) - Kind of an odd beat to start doing the sliders. I'd do it on the beat before - it feels more natural.

[Love]
Once again you take patterns from the other difficulties. Try thinking up something new.
At this point in the difficulty increase, you really should increase the distance snap and slider speed. It also helps contribute to the samieness of the other difficulties.
00:27:280 (3) - zzz
01:27:280 (1,2,3) - The low OD and spacing make this hard to read on sight read.
02:24:410 (12) - This would probably be considered a hidden slider due to all the hit bursts and everything else covering it up. I'd make it more visible.
02:42:932 (11) - End this slider at 02:44:106
03:16:324 (12) - End this slider at 03:17:497

[Eternal LIFE]
Yay, faster slider speed. Still really close distance snap though. :/
01:15:019 - Add a beat here, then start the slider at 01:15:280
This is decent - just needs a lot of pattern polish and slider stuff done, but that'd make this post huge. ;p

Try to vary up the patterns a bit instead of reusing the same ones for all the difficulties.

abcde1234qaz wrote:

嗯....星星...

谢谢啦

Garven wrote:

Sorry for the delay...

As per your request:

[General]
Oo, I haven't heard this song in a while. Good choice!

[Easy]
You didn't finish it. :/
00:42:150 (6,7,8,9) - These stacks may confuse new players a bit. I'd space them out. Applies to all iterations of this.
01:08:237 (2,3) - Although if you want to keep the stacked sliders, make sure these ones are stacked correctly.

[Dream]
You borrow a lot of patterns from your easy difficulty... I don't like that too much. Makes the map feel very samey and boring.
00:33:802 (1) - It's strange that you suddenly follow the vocals for a few measure, then go back to your hit-clap set. It kind of breaks up the flow that you have going.
01:32:237 (8) - New combo
01:55:976 (7) - Kind of boring.
02:33:802 (6,1,2,3) - So much stacked here. Try moving around a bit more. :/
02:52:063 (7,8) - This is kind of an extreme jump for a normal.
02:55:193 (1) - Move this to 02:54:932
02:58:324 (7,8) - Big jump again.
03:29:367 (2) - Kind of an odd beat to start doing the sliders. I'd do it on the beat before - it feels more natural.

[Love]
Once again you take patterns from the other difficulties. Try thinking up something new.
At this point in the difficulty increase, you really should increase the distance snap and slider speed. It also helps contribute to the samieness of the other difficulties.
00:27:280 (3) - zzz
01:27:280 (1,2,3) - The low OD and spacing make this hard to read on sight read.
02:24:410 (12) - This would probably be considered a hidden slider due to all the hit bursts and everything else covering it up. I'd make it more visible.
02:42:932 (11) - End this slider at 02:44:106
03:16:324 (12) - End this slider at 03:17:497

[Eternal LIFE]
Yay, faster slider speed. Still really close distance snap though. :/
01:15:019 - Add a beat here, then start the slider at 01:15:280
This is decent - just needs a lot of pattern polish and slider stuff done, but that'd make this post huge. ;p

Try to vary up the patterns a bit instead of reusing the same ones for all the difficulties.

I see. Thanks!

[General]
No tags?
Incoherent difficulty lengths

[osz File Scan!]
Fine

[Breath]
Different preview point from the rest, use 62,628ms like on the other 3 diffs
The diff is too short =(

[Dream]
02:06:671 (7,8,9) - Theese feel off.
02:10:845 (4,5,6) - Theese feel off as well
02:33:802 (6,1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - This feels cramped.

[Love]
Looks very cramped, dont use so many stacks, also increase the OD.

[Eternal LIFE]
This also looks very cramped
00:35:628 (3) - The stack and the hit bursts make it hard to see this slider.
03:20:758 (1,1,1) - You could put a break here instead.

Your going to need to work more on this before i can give you a star.

Sakura301 wrote:

[General]
No tags?
Incoherent difficulty lengths

[osz File Scan!]
Fine

[Breath]
Different preview point from the rest, use 62,628ms like on the other 3 diffs
The diff is too short =(

[Dream]
02:06:671 (7,8,9) - Theese feel off.
02:10:845 (4,5,6) - Theese feel off as well
02:33:802 (6,1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - This feels cramped.

[Love]
Looks very cramped, dont use so many stacks, also increase the OD.

[Eternal LIFE]
This also looks very cramped
00:35:628 (3) - The stack and the hit bursts make it hard to see this slider.
03:20:758 (1,1,1) - You could put a break here instead.

Your going to need to work more on this before i can give you a star.

okay, time for work

先给星
改天来看看图好了> <

Breeze wrote:

先给星
改天来看看图好了> <

谢谢~

[General]

1. [Breath]难度的Preview Time是62633而其他三个难度是62628,请统一
2. source : BLEACH
3. tag就加点死神的人物名什么的吧

[Breath]

1. 没什么问题,我给你加了些音效,你可以参考看看
   喜欢就留下,不喜欢无视就好
   Download: YUI - LIFE (JauiPlaY) [Breath].osu

[Dream]

1. 前面部分也可以像我给你[Breath]里加的那样加音效,这个你自己决定好了
2. 00:33:802 (1) - 加finish
3. 01:28:063 (1) - Spacing稍微近了点
4. 02:00:411 (1,2,3,4,5) - 换用normal hitsound感觉是不是更好?
5. 02:28:845 (8,9,10,11) - ^
6. 02:47:367 (1) - 加finish
7. 02:54:932 (1) - no clap
8. 03:04:063 (1) - 加finish

[Love]

1. 前面部分一样的建议
2. 00:33:802 (1) - 加finish
3. 01:03:019 (1) - ^
4. 01:19:715 (1) - ^
5. 02:47:367 (4) - ^
6. 03:04:063 (2) - ^

[Eternal LIFE]

1. 给你加了些音效,有用到一个custom sound
   下载后放到map文件夹里就行了,我觉得比softclap要好些
   用不用还是看你自己了
   Download: soft-hitclap.rar
   Download: YUI - LIFE (JauiPlaY) [Eternal LIFE].osu

第一张map能做成这样相当不错
2 x star

Breeze wrote:

[General]

1. [Breath]难度的Preview Time是62633而其他三个难度是62628,请统一
2. source : BLEACH
3. tag就加点死神的人物名什么的吧

[Breath]

1. 没什么问题,我给你加了些音效,你可以参考看看
   喜欢就留下,不喜欢无视就好
   [attachment=2:14b1a]YUI - LIFE (JauiPlaY) [Breath].osu[/attachment:14b1a]

[Dream]

1. 前面部分也可以像我给你[Breath]里加的那样加音效,这个你自己决定好了
2. 00:33:802 (1) - 加finish
3. 01:28:063 (1) - Spacing稍微近了点
4. 02:00:411 (1,2,3,4,5) - 换用normal hitsound感觉是不是更好?
5. 02:28:845 (8,9,10,11) - ^
6. 02:47:367 (1) - 加finish
7. 02:54:932 (1) - no clap
8. 03:04:063 (1) - 加finish

[Love]

1. 前面部分一样的建议
2. 00:33:802 (1) - 加finish
3. 01:03:019 (1) - ^
4. 01:19:715 (1) - ^
5. 02:47:367 (4) - ^
6. 03:04:063 (2) - ^

[Eternal LIFE]

1. 给你加了些音效,有用到一个custom sound
   下载后放到map文件夹里就行了,我觉得比softclap要好些
   用不用还是看你自己了
   [attachment=0:14b1a]soft-hitclap.rar[/attachment:14b1a]
   [attachment=1:14b1a]YUI - LIFE (JauiPlaY) [Eternal LIFE].osu[/attachment:14b1a]

第一张map能做成这样相当不错
2 x star

但是其实是经过很多人的帮助很多次修改才做成这样的……
总之谢谢啦

Hi sorry for the delay :o

[General]
- in the song folder, I see a soft-hitclap file but I didn't see it being used on any diff. If you're not going to use it then delete the file and full-submit again
- combo color 1 and 3 is very similar, change one of them
- avoid so stacking sliders, it's not a big problem but if it used too many, it can make the map feel cramped
- it's kinda strange how Eternal diff is the only one with different SV :?

[Breath]
00:17:106 (1) - add finish
00:53:628 (6) - remove the whistle on the slider slide, not the slider's start or end
00:55:715 (2,3,4,5) - this pattern broke the 1/1 you follow so far can be very surprising for novice but seeing everyone is ok with this so I guess it's fine
01:17:628 (1) - add finish
01:18:150 (2,4) - add clap
01:19:715 (1) - add finish
01:28:063 (1) - ^

[Dream]
01:17:628 (1,2,3,4) - I recommend you to unstack these
01:17:628 (1) - add finish at the start of the slider
01:18:150 (2) - add clap at the start of the slider
01:19:193 (4) - ^
01:28:063 (1) - add finish
02:24:932 (5) - add clap
02:25:193 (6) - add finish
02:29:106 (9) - add clap
02:29:367 (10) - add finish
Combo mod
01:05:106 (1) - remove NC (new combo)

[Love]
01:02:758 (1) - add finish at the end of slider
02:30:410 (1) - ^
03:20:758 (1,1,1) - instead of 3 spinner, imo it'll be better if you used a 0.5x speed sliders and circles

[Eternal Life]
Hmm...OD 8 is to sudden for a song like this, I like 7 more better :3
Feel a little cramped, try increasing the DS (distance snap) to 0.8x or1x
03:20:758 (1,1,1) - same spinner problem as above

Keep working on it and I'm sure it'll be very good later :)
star