BeatofIke wrote:

My goodness CB. He's a new mapper lol. Be easy with him. He is still learning the process, so no need to overdo it. One step at a time. Don't get me wrong, you did the right thing and the bubble pop is valid.

Anyways yugijedi, don't expect a instant nomination as a new mapper (unless you're like a few talented mappers like RLC, which is quite rare). Remapping your first few maps is common for newer mappers so don't feel disappointed. Just remember to have fun mapping and have fun learning the process as well. Also, considering that this is a marathon map (which I don't recommend for newer mappers to aim for nomination), changes are you will need to remap a lot of times. This is just my opinion though and this is what I've learned from experience and observations.

BeatofIke wrote:

My goodness CB. He's a new mapper lol. Be easy with him. He is still learning the process, so no need to overdo it. One step at a time. Don't get me wrong, you did the right thing and the bubble pop is valid.

ByBy_ChAn wrote:

I checked the map and I totally agree with you CB. I saw some sliders which I don't like so much and I dislike some placement of the streams because those looks weird and I feel the movement of the cursor looks desoriented. My suggestion to mapper is to get some mods on patterns,blankets,stream placements,hitsounding and rhythms before bubble to improve the quality of the mapset to be ranked.

ByBy_ChAn wrote:

Sorry for I mentioned the blankets because I guess I saw some blankets there ;w;

Cherry Blossom wrote:

Hello, this map clearly lacks of quality.
Default volume is too loud and it sounds really odd to use default Normal hitsound for this kind of map, especially on the stream part. Poor Hitsounding and I really recommend you to add more improvements on them. At least, decrease the volume.
Well, let's talk about the playability of the map. Many patterns look untidy, and quite random. They do not really reflect the real impact of the song. They also look inconsistent, i mean, you make difficult things on parts which are supposed to be more calm than the kiai time which is the most powerful part of song, i have an example of this : 04:04:894 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2) - , It's clearly something you should avoid.
And the other way round.

Smoothness

1. 00:24:204 (1,2,3,4) - This is the first kiai part, there should be more distance between these objects to introduce the next patterns which are a little fast and surprising because the first pattern is quite slow and the player don't expect a speedup, the song is not faster here and more dense here, there is no reason for a speed change. remapped
2. 00:29:377 (5,6,1,2,3) - This is uncomfortable and difficult to handle these circles, the motion is like a "S" and the player needs much aim to be able to handle these circles, i recomend you to do something like a ctrl+g on 00:29:722 (1,2) - , or you can decrease the distance between each objects. fixed another way
3. 00:41:101 (3,4) - there should be more distance between these sliders, because on your previous patterns there is more distance between them and it should be better if you keep consistency to make these pattern more intuitive to play. Plus 00:41:618 - is a strong note, and make it more distanced will be nice for emphasis. yes
4. 00:52:308 (2) - i can't see any reason for using a reversed 1/4 slider. There is nothing audible on the blue tick, and following the blue tick does not really make sense. ok changed
5. 00:55:929 (1,2) - This is overmapping, useless difficulty. As i said for ^, there is nothing audible on blue ticks, and following them in order to make this map harder is not recommended to do, and you should avoid that.
6. 00:56:618 (5,6) - This is difficult to get, because 00:56:273 (3,6) - are overlapped, and you should make this pattern easier to read. Make it more airy and try to avoid overlaps like this : remapped this one and the previous one now I think it looks pretty cool
   
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7. 00:57:308 (1,1,2) - These objects are too close, for the sake of playability, there should be more distance between them. yes
8. 01:07:653 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - This stream is a little overdone. The distance between each circles is little high for what these circles follow. The notes on 1/4 are a little difficult to hear, you should reduce a little the distance between each circles. that is the first thing I don't agree with you. Every stream like this has something like a corner and the same spacing, the spacing is not extreme and the 1/4 are hearable as anywhere else. son no reason for me to change that.. I also don't see a quality issue here, the stream follows a clear path and then turns at a white tick.
9. 01:11:273 (2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5,6) - This is weird, the stronger notes are followed by 01:12:653 (2,3,4,5,6) - which are easier than the star pattern you made which follows something less powerful. you should increase the distance between 01:12:998 (3,4,5,6) - because the strongest beat is 01:13:170 (4) - and to emphasize it, you should use a jump. remapped anyways
10. 01:18:515 (3) - Here, you should not use a 1/4 slider, the stream starts here 01:18:687 - , not here 01:18:515 - . Same for 02:55:756 (10) - this is the next thing I don't understand. if you are so strict with 1/4 use, then why don't you listen to the song very closely.. there is something audible what is DIFFERENT to the tone which I can hear during the stream, so why shouldn't I use a DIFFERENT object at 01:18:515 (3) - which is 1/4 ? Something like this has high mapping quality in my opinion. the next thing is right, there is nothing there at 02:55:756 (10) - just an overmap
11. 01:51:101 (1) - When playing, this circles looks hidden by the previous objects, but it is not. For the sake of readability, it should be better if you don't overlap objects here, the stream is difficult, and you should make it as readable as possible. okay that's right. now it has "quality circularity flow"
12. 01:57:825 (4,5) - It is not really a good idea to stack these objects, because the strong beat here 01:57:998 - should be emphasized to give a better impression. For me, a stack is a way to emphasize something.. If you noticed it, in this map there aren't much stacks, JUST at places where something should be emphasized, as a BN who's reputation as an objective person predeces him, you should accept that.Plus, the NC should be here because the combo starts here, not here 01:58:342 - . Same for 03:37:136 (6,7) - and many more. my mistake, yes
13. 02:07:308 (7,1) - This is counter intuitive, the player expects that there is a 1/2 gap here, not a 1/1. There should be more distance between them. Or you can use a 1/2 slider instead of 02:07:308 (7) - That can work. distance increased
14. 02:27:825 (5,6,7) - These circles are a little overkill, because these previous sliders 02:25:584 (1,2,3) - are really close, and that plays really weird, and it is surprising too. There should be a higher distance between 02:25:584 (1,2,3) - and less distance between 02:27:825 (5,6,7) - . Make them a little more balanced. ok, your right they're are a bit too far but again, this has a purpose, to introduce the next increased SV so these circles aren't related to the previous patterns, they are something like a prelude for the next pattern. I changed it though, because it really was too high distance. I tell you my purpose at every suggestion of you because I want to show you that nothing is random here, and my map does not deserve something like the word RANDOM.
15. 02:36:101 (1,2,3,4) - This jump looks a little overdone, the distance between them is too high, you should reduce the distance between each circles on this triangle 02:36:101 (1,2,3) - this is the next thing I do not understand. this pattern causes so much energy, this is probably the best pattern in my map. The crowd of people I asked for testplay has one opinion, this pattern is fun. I understand people who are telling me that this jump is too big, but these people cannot play the rest of the map. your rank is better than #1000, and you don't think this jump makes fun? really..? the music is soo strong here and it fits perfect.
16. 02:48:687 (4,5) - same as ^, there is no reason for large jumps like this, especially after something which slowdowns when the current atmosphere is not changing. Try something like this instead : yes you're right.
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17. 02:53:170 (1,2) - The angle is a little clunky and that makes this pattern not really comfortable to play, I suggest you to increase the angle between these objects to make this pattern more comfortable to play, just see : yeah
    
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18. 03:02:825 (1,2) - The distance between these objects is low compared to the previous and next patterns. This is something weird which should be fixed, because there is no reason to reduce the distance here. yeah I noticed that you're absolutely right, I changed the order of the circles in a flowy way
19. 03:29:032 (1,2,3) - This plays on a close angle and, this current pattern is not really comfortable to play. You should make it more airy and increase the angle between these objects, you have enough space to do whatever you want, so you can do something like yes you are right. my purpose here was the kinda "swing" motion to the right and then back, but like you say, a more airy version works better.
    
    SPOILER

    
20. 04:02:136 (5,6,7) - There should be a larger angle between these objects, to make this pattern better concerning gameplay, try something which is smoother like :
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21. 04:04:549 (5,6) - This is "too much", there is nothing audible on blue ticks and using two 1/4 sliders is kind of overmapping and useless difficulty on something already difficult. You should avoid them. listen to the music. if you have good speakers (maybe a subwoofer here ) you can here the wobbling bass (I know it's a very low frequency, but it is audible). I also asked to creator of this song especially for this reason, "where his 1/4 basses end". You can't here it with hitsounds, yes, but I will probably hitsounds everything new..
22. 04:04:894 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2) - As i said above, this patterns looks out of place, it is also overdone. There is too much distance between each circles, you should at least reduce the distance between each circles. This pattern is way easier than 04:10:411 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - for example. They follow the same sounds. I will clearly remap this, until it has enough quality to hold on with the rest of my map.
23. 04:16:446 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2) - same as ^ etc. yes
24. 04:38:860 (4,5) - Make this beginning more noticeable, this pattern looks a bit messy because this overlap is werid and easily avoidable. See yes, I done like this.
    
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Fort wrote:

you need to improve your own mapping skill to make this ranked!

Yes he is right, i don't really think that someone that does not have any ranked maps and not experienced enough with modding could get a bubble after 1 month.
You got almost 20 mods and i think that for an average approval map, there are too many, it looks weird to see that a map really lacks of quality when it has received almost 20 mods. You should remap some parts, as an old chinese BAT said, remapping is better than 30 mods. And that shows that you have interests in being better at mapping and improving your own skills.
I've pointed out the most important things, you should also work on hitsounding.
For now, i'll leave a bubble pop icon. You can call me back when you finally feel ready for a rebubble but I won't recheck it unless there are improvements and enough quality to get rebubbled and considered as ready for approval.

Rakuen wrote:

As posted on the board by Cherry Blossom

Some mods here, hopefully would help

Legend

Default = Normal mods
Blue = Strongly recommended
Red = Unrankable issue
Pink = Will be discussed if not changed

General

• Just so, we all have different points of "ranking a map"
  
  For example, some mappers just want everyone else to play their maps (song), even it's crappy or anything, and some rank a very quality map and let everyone else to remember (ofcoz not just these). It's good to have an aim tho.
  
  Anyways, I'd suggest first ranked map with a lot more DS instead of jumps, which might help to make your map more neatly. Especially, when we don't have enough experience in mapping OR playing (so we know where to place jump and how far between each note by playing experience)

Hitsound

• I'd use claps at places like 00:25:239 - 00:25:929 - 00:26:618 (5) - and so on, can hear snare hit

Smoothness

• Basically the map looks fine to play, but maybe just not really neat

1. Din't get what diff name means by "Smoothness"
2. 00:11:877 (2) - Wrongly snapped, it's at 1/8 > 00:11:834 - fixed!
3. 00:15:584 (2) - Don't think it's necessary to use 2.9x spacing here, it's too far. The down beat is at 00:15:929 (3) - so I'd let (3) be more jumpy instead. I think it's ok they're 1/1! and at 174 bpm you can't call 1/1 "a jump".
4. 00:16:618 (5,6) - At this part, you can hear (6) is slightly louder than (5), so I'd make (6) a jump and (5) closer to previous note
5. 00:17:998 - Might wanna 5% slider tick as well, sounds unbalanced for just slider tail yeah
6. 00:18:687 (1,2,3,4) - Try not to randomly place them if you're aiming for pattern, look at the pics, you'll realize: right, fixed
   
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7. 00:32:136 (6,7,1) - Make them same distance would be more neater remapped anyways
8. 00:50:411 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - I'd not force stack them on previous note, such as 00:49:894 (3) - on slider head of 00:49:032 (1) - , remember the lighting is on slider tail. remapped
   ^ If you don't agree with this, why not make stacks at 00:38:860 (4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3) - more okay to read
9. 01:18:515 (3) - Overmapped, just make it a circle listen to the music, I will emphasize it later I'm working on hitsounding...
10. 01:21:963 - Inaudible slider tail could be unrankable, don't be afraid to sound them full volume??
11. 01:29:722 (2) - NC here for consistency with 01:28:342 (1) - (8 stream hits ea) yes
12. 01:30:411 - Next time you map parts like this, make it more densed. It basically sounds like the other parts with a lot covers and drums, just the instrument changed. Listen closely, drum is hitting non-stop. okay I know what you mean here I though it would be a bit varied if I map something WHICH FITS but is chilling here.. But I will remember that in the future.
    Rest is not a good option if you wanna map for approvals. Make sure the whole song is balanced in its difficulty (Extra, in this case)
13. 01:40:411 (7) - Remove this, and place a circle on 01:40:584 - , would it sound nicer? It matches with the instrument imo yes, mathces not good now I will map it another way
14. 01:50:411 (5,6,7,8) - A bit messy here, I'd suggest to decrease unnecessary stacks like 01:50:067 (3) - + 01:50:756 (7) - (number is covered), 01:50:411 (5) - + 01:50:756 (7) - + 01:51:101 (1) - remapped
15. 01:51:963 (3,4,5,6,7,8,1) - Is this a small flower shape? Wouldn't it be better like: yes, adjusted
    
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16. 02:07:480 - I'd place something here, the map itself is non-stop, so another circle wouldn't differ. Long slider like 02:10:239 (5) - is likely counted as small break cuz players don't have to keep tapping Increased distance
17. 02:35:411 - Dangerous part, try not to accelerate too much here. If you do, 02:35:584 - should be slowed down, it sounds like "down" part I'm sorry that I have to say something against a "red complaint"... but I think this is not a slow down tone it is a crazy electric melodic white sound.. and to have the next slider very slow is perfect I think... for me this pattern is really nice..
18. 02:36:101 (1,2,3,4) - Too big jump, even the end of KIAI which is 02:13:687 (2,3,1,2) - doesn't have that big jump yes I think that jump really has to be big but ok, I moved the (3) much more down. The sound really fits!!
19. 02:46:618 (1) - Remove slider whistle, it sounds better to listen to the music, not the whistle ok
20. 02:55:756 (10) - Overmapped fixed
21. 02:58:687 - Why clap here? fits, I think
22. 03:07:653 (2,1,2) - Don't try to create a rhythm yourself here, it doesn't sound great for me. Just fully stick to the music if you want safe rank ?? I'm mapping exactly with the music, but just the most audible tones here, that works fine I think.
23. 03:20:411 (3) - As mentioned before about slider tail. And there's a sound at 03:20:584 - if you remove the notes and listen carefully okay, I think I've done it a cool way
24. 04:53:786 (3,4) - I'd space them to let players realize there are gaps, not same rhythm. Pure reading sucks when the song is leading out no it is fun

Good luck!

1. About your hitsounds, i recommend you to use this kind of snare you used on this part 01:08:342 - with soft samplesets, Normal hitsounds sound a little noisy and this does not give the real impact of the song. Use soft hitsounds with it. Just rename it to soft-hitclap2 or something like this.
2. 01:18:515 (3,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - This is what i expected here concerning hitsounds, good job.
3. 01:27:653 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1) - try to use default soft-hitwhistle on this stream which should be hitsounded to give a better impression, just use a whistle every white tick
4. 01:30:411 - to 01:37:308 - This part should be remade, because there are inconsistencies between objects, and that may be misleading. You should keep consistency with spacing on this part.
5. 01:41:446 - to 01:52:480 - same things as 01:27:653 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1) - . And also 02:55:929 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5) - and all streams with the same sound followed.
6. 02:21:446 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - as i said last time, this is a little too much, you used too many circles for a part which is supposed to be a little easier than kiai part, i recommend you to use some sliders here, and it will be also better if you avoid high jumps. Same for 04:05:411 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - and many more ?
7. 02:35:411 (2,3,1) - I realized that this motion can be improved here, it is better to make a "S" motion instead of a "M" motion, try something like this instead
   
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1. present soft-hitnormal should be cutted till it got like 1.2 sec empty sound. New file. Old LordRaika's samples sometims got that problem.
2. 04:49:131 - can't find reason why you add so strange time lime. I think is much better move it to normall 04:49:118 - . Well i dont see any reason to do it, maybei am wrong.
3. mmm i think you need a bit more metadatta. At least "dnb" till it got so clear liquid beat. Btw, copy?
4. dont see any reason to use 9.2 ar cause you got slow intro and end parts, but well its your decidion.
5. in you storyboard add string in "//Background and Video events". It will remove useless bg which esist during all song. It will remove overload somewhere on 02:04:798 - . It wont remove overaod at start but i think its nvm but youc an try bns in case if rankability but normally dqs never happend cause of sb.
   

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Cherry Blossom wrote:

Hello.

It's better than last time, but this current version is not good enough yet. I'll give you things which can improve your map's quality.

1. About your hitsounds, i recommend you to use this kind of snare you used on this part 01:08:342 - with soft samplesets, Normal hitsounds sound a little noisy and this does not give the real impact of the song. Use soft hitsounds with it. Just rename it to soft-hitclap2 or something like this. rehitsounded
2. 01:18:515 (3,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - This is what i expected here concerning hitsounds, good job.
3. 01:27:653 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1) - try to use default soft-hitwhistle on this stream which should be hitsounded to give a better impression, just use a whistle every white tick ok
4. 01:30:411 - to 01:37:308 - This part should be remade, because there are inconsistencies between objects, and that may be misleading. You should keep consistency with spacing on this part. yes
5. 01:41:446 - to 01:52:480 - same things as 01:27:653 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1) - . And also 02:55:929 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5) - and all streams with the same sound followed. ok
6. 02:21:446 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - I don't know what is your problem here, no one complained about this and there aren't too many circles.. as i said last time, this is a little too much, you used too many circles for a part which is supposed to be a little easier than kiai part, i recommend you to use some sliders here, and it will be also better if you avoid high jumps. Same for 04:05:411 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - ok will add some sliders here and many more ? ?
7. 02:35:411 (2,3,1) - I realized that this motion can be improved here, it is better to make a "S" motion instead of a "M" motion, try something like this instead I think my cursor motion works better
   
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Things i really recommend to you :
- Try to get hitsounding mods. Hitsounds on a map are very important. got 3 hs mods, really helped me
- Ask some BNs for testplays, and ask them what plays well or not. everything plays well
- Try to keep consistency throughout your map, that means don't add sudden spikes to your map like these jumps part that are still overdone. I made the jump easier which created a "SPIKE" in starrating and there is really NO jump in my map now which is too far, there a just too many cricles.

You still can call me back.

1. When comparing with Normal samples, soft-hitnormal is quite...unaudible. Maybe you can change them to drum-hitnormal. Especially in your kiai times. Unaudible notes make players feel like they are clicking nothing.
2. In my opinion the sb is fine, but it still need to be checked by some professionals I guess.

1. 00:07:653 (4) - it will look much better if you could make it symmetrical.
   Simple way: move 4th grid to x276 y212.
2. 00:14:549 (1,2) - compared with former parts the spacing is a bit too big imo. I recommend you to move them closer.
   
   to somewhere like

   
3. 00:17:653 (8) - slider end sound weird because there's no sound in the song. add a green line at 00:18:601 - to mute it? as you did in 01:33:084 -
4. 00:29:032 (3) - as I said in Gerenal. Since the acute-angle flow emphasized this circle, adding some sound to it will make this part much better. (e.g. change it to Normal sample)
5. 00:40:067 (3) - ^. Also the song has a strong sound here. Add a Normal-addition clap?
6. 00:58:860 (2,5,8) - 8 feels too far to 01:00:067 (1) - imo. I recommend you to keep these notes in same spacing as 00:58:687 (1,4,7) - . It will also make this pattern looks better. (well, maybe, I guess, huh
   
   looks like

   
7. 01:06:101 (2) - a jump will emphasize the latter note of it. So here I recommend you to put 2 closer to 1 and make a jump between 2 & 3. It will make this part more logical and fit the song better.
   
   put it like this

   
8. 01:18:773 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - Normal-addition whistles fit quite well here. Try it? (just normal addition, samples should still be soft
9. 01:21:446 (4,5) - Actually in the song these two parts are same. So 1/2 slider is enough for 5 imo.
10. 01:29:722 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - The song is fading-out here, while you are using spaced streams and jumps...It doesn't fit the song imo. Using something gentler will be better.
    
    possible solution(used 0.9x sv in yellow combo)

    
11. 01:37:480 - ...nothing here? Sorry I don't understand it...
12. 01:50:756 (7) - The placement feels a bit sudden for me (it didn't follow former notes' regularity). Former short sliders can be divedid into 3 groups (left-right left-right left-right). So move 7 to the left side of 8 is better imo.
    
    example

    
13. 02:07:308 (7) - I suggest change it to a 1/2 slider because the rhythm is a bit empty here.
14. 02:15:239 (5,6) - players have to slow down here because smaller spacing. However slowing down doesn't fit the song because 02:14:549 (1,2,3,4) - are still jumps. Maybe you need to rearrange this pattern.
    Simple way: ctrl+g. So 4 & 5 will also become a jump.
15. 02:24:894 (5,6) - again. move 5 to x308 y160 could help.
16. 02:26:273 (3) - ctrl+g? just a suggestion
17. 02:35:411 (2,3) - Well, to be honest I got scared at first time. This fast slider is a bit too sudden.
    
    make it gentler

    
18. 02:57:998 (1,2,3,4,5) - same to 01:29:722 - . This spaced stream is really off.
19. 03:17:308 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4) - Nice idea.
20. 03:52:136 (6,1) - Not a good flow imo. I suggest move 1 to the down side. It will plays better.
    
    example

    
21. 04:03:171 (6,1) - ^, and same solution.
22. 04:10:239 (8,1) - Also odd flow imo. I suggest just copy 04:10:756 (2) - and ctrl+h, which gives better flow and looking.
23. 04:12:480 (5,6,7,8) -
    1. ctrl+g 5 & 6, then all jumps from 1 to 8 go anticlockwise. Logical jumps plays much better than totally random jumps.
    2. move 8 to the upside of 1. Current flow of 04:12:998 (8,1) - is quite odd to me.
    
    in the end this should be like

    
24. 04:29:894 (2,5) - looks too far from 3. Try move them closer?
    
    example

    
25. 04:48:342 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1) - ...well, third time. This spaced stream is really too off.
26. 04:58:786 (1,2,3,4) - I recommend you to separate them. I'm sure this will fit the song better.
    
    exapmle

    

imoutosan wrote:

I guess I should begin mod this now... I want this to be ranked ;w;

imoutosan wrote:

I guess I should begin mod this now... I want this to be ranked ;w; Then I got a cold. *cough
Ok. whatever.
[General]

1. When comparing with Normal samples, soft-hitnormal is quite...unaudible. Maybe you can change them to drum-hitnormal. Especially in your kiai times. Unaudible notes make players feel like they are clicking nothing. I think I will make it louder.. imo the soft-hitnormal gives the right dnb feeling, you know..
2. In my opinion the sb is fine, but it still need to be checked by some professionals I guess. ok

[Smoothness]
not that smooth imo just a joke, don't mind

Bold = please think it over carefully

1. 00:07:653 (4) - it will look much better if you could make it symmetrical. yes!!
   Simple way: move 4th grid to x276 y212.
2. 00:14:549 (1,2) - compared with former parts the spacing is a bit too big imo. I recommend you to move them closer. imo it is cool like this
   
   to somewhere like

   
3. 00:17:653 (8) - slider end sound weird because there's no sound in the song. add a green line at 00:18:601 - to mute it? as you did in 01:33:084 - I muted before the tick so there is also no sound at the end
4. 00:29:032 (3) - as I said in Gerenal. Since the acute-angle flow emphasized this circle, adding some sound to it will make this part much better. (e.g. change it to Normal sample) yeah I think that's right
5. 00:40:067 (3) - ^. Also the song has a strong sound here. Add a Normal-addition clap? as above, will change it.
6. 00:58:860 (2,5,8) - 8 feels too far to 01:00:067 (1) - imo. I recommend you to keep these notes in same spacing as 00:58:687 (1,4,7) - . It will also make this pattern looks better. (well, maybe, I guess, huh should be exactly like this, I want to train people who don't have a clear triangle movement.
   
   looks like

   
7. 01:06:101 (2) - a jump will emphasize the latter note of it. So here I recommend you to put 2 closer to 1 and make a jump between 2 & 3. It will make this part more logical and fit the song better. that's a good idea!
   
   put it like this

   
8. 01:18:773 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - Normal-addition whistles fit quite well here. Try it? (just normal addition, samples should still be soft yes
9. 01:21:446 (4,5) - Actually in the song these two parts are same. So 1/2 slider is enough for 5 imo. yes
10. 01:29:722 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - The song is fading-out here, while you are using spaced streams and jumps...It doesn't fit the song imo. Using something gentler will be better. I don't think so, it fits perfect for me, like a bridge to the next part of the song
    
    possible solution(used 0.9x sv in yellow combo)

    
11. 01:37:480 - ...nothing here? Sorry I don't understand it... I follow different synths here, listen to the type of tones
12. 01:50:756 (7) - The placement feels a bit sudden for me (it didn't follow former notes' regularity). Former short sliders can be divedid into 3 groups (left-right left-right left-right). So move 7 to the left side of 8 is better imo. right
    
    example

    
13. 02:07:308 (7) - I suggest change it to a 1/2 slider because the rhythm is a bit empty here. no I think it is good like this
14. 02:15:239 (5,6) - players have to slow down here because smaller spacing. However slowing down doesn't fit the song because 02:14:549 (1,2,3,4) - are still jumps. Maybe you need to rearrange this pattern. I want it like this
    Simple way: ctrl+g. So 4 & 5 will also become a jump.
15. 02:24:894 (5,6) - again. move 5 to x308 y160 could help. ^
16. 02:26:273 (3) - ctrl+g? just a suggestion wow nice
17. 02:35:411 (2,3) - Well, to be honest I got scared at first time. This fast slider is a bit too sudden. no it is ok
    
    make it gentler

    
18. 02:57:998 (1,2,3,4,5) - same to 01:29:722 - . This spaced stream is really off. I like to emphasize parts like this, and if I have a system, as you see, it is okay.
19. 03:17:308 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4) - Nice idea.
20. 03:52:136 (6,1) - Not a good flow imo. I suggest move 1 to the down side. It will plays better. I think it is good flow, did you play this part? Because the zigzag motion from the end of the slider to the circles works very nice for me..
    
    example

    
21. 04:03:171 (6,1) - ^, and same solution. ^
22. 04:10:239 (8,1) - Also odd flow imo. I suggest just copy 04:10:756 (2) - and ctrl+h, which gives better flow and looking. yeah that works better, you're right
23. 04:12:480 (5,6,7,8) -
    1. ctrl+g 5 & 6, then all jumps from 1 to 8 go anticlockwise. that's best!! thanks Logical jumps plays much better than totally random jumps.
    2. move 8 to the upside of 1. Current flow of 04:12:998 (8,1) - is quite odd to me.
    
    in the end this should be like

    
24. 04:29:894 (2,5) - looks too far from 3. Try move them closer? hm no
    
    example

    
25. 04:48:342 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1) - ...well, third time. This spaced stream is really too off. Again, I emphasize things like this and that is the system..
26. 04:58:786 (1,2,3,4) - I recommend you to separate them. I'm sure this will fit the song better. okay good I will do what sooo many modder said, seperate them haha
    
    exapmle

    

I guess that's all. Good luck!

1. 00:04:204 (3) - That actually ends on an 8th tick not a 4th Image
2. 00:11:791 (1,2) - Stacking those normally would be much better because It would be a better indicator to the player that those notes are an 8th apart
   especially because its a lot easier to tell how far each note is from the other because of the approach circles
3. 00:40:239 (4) - Stack the 4 under the 3 and stack the 00:40:584 (6) - under the 5? It's just a suggestion but I think the stacks put a nice emphasis on the drums.
4. 00:56:101 (2,5,6,7) - Ctrl+G the 5 & the 6 and stack the 7 under the 2. It flows a lot better that way.
5. 02:02:653 (4) - Ctrl+G that so it flows better
6. 03:07:653 (2) - There isn't anything in the music for that to be mapping it should be moved to 03:07:480
7. 03:07:998 - Add a note here stacked under the 1 and move 03:08:170 (3) - under the stack aswell like this. That combined with the mod for 03:07:653 (2) fits the music much nicer.
   04:06:618 (3,4) - Ctrl+G those. Unexpected changes don't make the map exciting or innovative they just make it confusing.